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Love Story by Alyssa Cullen Rated: NC-17

[Reviews - 87]

Summary:

Love Story

The absolute last thing in Bella Swan's mind is uprooting her life, mid-semester of her senior year of High School, let alone move to Forks, the rainy, dreary town her homely father resides in. Yet the move brings her a sort of peace and optimism; things were definitely changing, and falling into a simple, easy routine. Enter the mysterious stranger Edward Cullen, who sweeps her off of her feet, exciting in her feelings of passion, hatred, and more importantly, passionate hate.

Will life ever be simple again?

AU / AH OOC

Based extremely loosely on Taylor Swift's "Love Story".

RATED NC-17 FOR LANGUAGE, ADULT THEMES AND CONTENT, AND LATER LEMONS!!!

amazingly, beautiful & fantastical banner by Ms. Ambrosia

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Mike, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Completed: No Word count: 54448

[Report This] Published: February 03, 2010 Updated: January 09, 2011

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: April 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4: Nameless Faces

I don't hate your Edward at all. I think he is broken & the fact that his entire family has in essence given up on him doesn't help. Certainly, he's done things to deserve that but in my experience people act out like that in desperation. He certainly doesn't sound like he truly enjoys it even though he tries to convince himself that he does. The question is will Bella work her magic? And what happens when it's revealed that she's Charlie's daughter?

Can't wait for the next update.

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: April 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5- Day 1: Cafeteria

Geez could Edward be anymore hateful to her? How emotionally stunted is this boy? Of course, he makes interesting & typically inappropriate choices in every other situation. Why not when he's totally crushing on a girl, too? Although she took off running, Bella really did not back down from him. Can't wait to see what Edward does now that he knows she's the Chief's daughter. More rebellion?

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: April 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5- Day 1: Cafeteria

I can't believe that you've only gotten 43 reviews on this story. That's just wrong! I pimped you out on my Twitter a/c I just don't have tons of followers. Keep going with this. The story is good.

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: April 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6: Day 1: Eighth Period Biology

Wow - what a chapter! So much going on with both of them. Edward's conversation with Jasper shed a lot of light on Edward's thinking. I was honestly surprised that he was so forthcoming with Jasper. And so Bella...what are the skeletons in her closet??? Sounds like both E&B are damaged in some way....a match made in heaven!

On The Threshold: Robert's View by lostluggage Rated: NC-17

[Reviews - 1716]

Summary:

This is the Companion story for Need To Escape, told in Robert's point of view.

This story will make better sense if you read at least the first ten chapters of Need To Escape before starting this one.

The chapters of On the Threshold will parallel NTE.

What was Rob thinking? Now we'll know.

Categories: Other Characters: Robert Pattinson
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 49 Completed: No Word count: 396747

[Report This] Published: March 03, 2010 Updated: March 11, 2013

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: April 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6-Broken

I think I'm enjoying OTT more than NTE. Not sure why but I am.

Author's Response:
HAHA! i completely understand. I an enjoying writing it more in many ways! weird...

Thanks so much my dear!

more soon!

MWAH!

steph

Lightning in Winter by JavaMasta Rated: R

[Reviews - 43]

Summary:

The Cullens offered Bella a home and a normal life, away from her oppressive Uncle William Black and the military career he wanted for her. Normal, until she stumbled into a meeting between ex-Volturi Edward Masen and another Volturi agent. Could she trust Edward and this strange connection she felt with him, or was he merely using her as a Volturi pawn to eliminate the Cullens?

Lightning in Winter

(banner by JavaMasta)

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: No Word count: 44449

[Report This] Published: June 01, 2010 Updated: January 21, 2011

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: January 30, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Pimpernel

I think that Felix & Demetri are both evil. I am uneasy with Edward being on their turf. It was good to read the background on how Edward ended up switching sides but this situation feels really dangerous for him right now. It's not good that his feelings for Bella are so easily figured out.

Author's Response:
You'd think he'd be better at hiding them, wouldn't you? However, as Jasper pointed out, he's finally becoming more "human." Edward probably hasn't been forced to hide his emotions so much before now.

Yep, you SHOULD be uneasy :-)

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Trust

Lol...wow Edward sure didn't fight the "falling in love" feeling for long did he??? I'm intrigued to see how you develop his character as he already is a little aloof but very charismatic....but romantic too. The rest of the date could be very revealing.

Author's Response:
Yeah, no kidding! My only excuse is that, as an empath/sensitive, he responds to Bella's emotions more strongly than the average double agent. :-)

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: September 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Deja Vu

And the plot thickens! I know given the circumstances Bella still isn't entirely sure if she trusts Edward or not. She's going to have to decide on that soon or she is going to get one or both of them killed. If she believes nothing else, she need to understand that Edward will risk it all to protect her. Wander out into to woods alone was not a bright move on her part. After all that happened during the day, she know to be more careful. Nothing like a good intrigue & romance story. So now what does Carlisle have to say? How much is he in on all of this?

Story is progressing well. Love it. Pimped you out on Twitter today. Maybe you'll get a few new readers? Hope so.

Author's Response:
Aww, you are so sweet to mention me on Twitter! Thank you!

Yup, you've summarized it very well. As you see, Bella is quite headstrong, and doesn't always do the smartest things, particularly if Edward tells her NOT to do them! You'll see Carlisle's perspective in the next chapter. You'll also see, later on, exactly how true your "She's going to have to decide on that soon or she is going to get one or both of them killed. If she believes nothing else, she needs to understand that Edward will risk it all to protect her" comments are!

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: September 25, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Teamwork

I liked your little lemon! I personally don't think lemons need to be terribly graphic in order to be sexy and/or romantic. I also don't think you need to have one in every chapter, that can get boring quickly to be honest. You conveyed the tension & the strong emotions that they both are feeling. It was quite nice :)

Also, loved the bonding with the Cullens. It seems that Bella has chosen to trust Edward without implicitly stating it. It's obvious the rest of the family thinks very highly of him. I'm sure Bella isn't the only one who will be on edge until Edward returns safely. Now if only Bella herself can stay out of trouble...

Author's Response:
Thank you! I agree with you. Too many (especially graphic) lemons tend to ...er...sour the plot.

You're right about the trust. Bella is subconsciously starting to trust Edward. As for staying out of trouble, you really expect her to do that? ;-)

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 25, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Encounter

New reader here. I'm a big fan of your beta nowforruin & she rec'd your story. I like the premise & I'm intrigued. It's a very different plot line which is hard to find these day. I'll definitely keep reading. Hats off to you for taking the plunge & posting a story. I haven't gotten that brave yet myself.

Author's Response:
She did? Actually, I'm a big fan of nowforruin too. Wow, now I'm blushing. Thanks for the great review!

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 25, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Explanation

Empaths - now that is a completely different & very intelligent take on canon mind-reading abilities. Oooh poor Edward, give it up man you're already under Bella's spell. I'm looking forward to learning more of her story.

Author's Response:
What a lovely review! I was trying to mimic the canon "imprinting" or "mating" phenomenon, and it seemed that, because of the strong emotional perception of empaths (e.g., canon Jasper), a strong bond could form quickly there as well.

Yeah, Edward never had a chance! ;-)

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Identity

Sounds like Bella has trust issues beyond Edward? Why else would she still doubt that Jasper knows what he is doing in terms of his work with Edward? You would think she would have more confidence in Jasper's assessment of Edward's loyalties.

Author's Response:
Yes, she does. You'll find out a bit more about why she has such strong trust issues when she meets the infamous Aunt Susan. Her parents were killed by the Volturi, and she has essentially been kept hidden from them for most of her life because they "collect" empaths.

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Reality

Hmmm, so now I am confused. Edward is a double agent but who's side is he on? Originally, I thought he was working against the Volturi & helping the Cullens but now I'm not so sure...nicely done!

Author's Response:
I love reading your reviews! It's rather like a stream of consciousness as you read my story. You're actually helping me fine-tune future chapters, because you give me an indication of which points I need to elaborate on.

Yup, this chapter was intended to confuse you. :-)

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Crimes

Question that I've been meaning to ask in previous reviews....where does this story take place? What's the location? I've probably missed it & if so, I apologize.

Oh Edward, so conflicted....I like how Bella lifts his spirits so easily.

Author's Response:
I was rather vague about the location, wasn't I? It is meant to be somewhere in Washington state, but I think I only mentioned it briefly in Chapter 1 (" It was the middle of a Pacific Northwest winter"). The Altairian Guard base is supposedly somewhere in Arizona (hence the reference to "former desert home"). Volnostia (which is ironically based on the Russian word for "freedom") is intended to be a small dictatorship in Eastern Europe. I have relatives living in a similar small dictatorship, and the references to political prisoners, people disappearing, etc. are actually based on events that happened in my relatives' lives.

Actually, I wondered if Edward was a bit too emotionally flighty. My only excuse is that he, being a "sensitive" (a less-talented empath), his mood is more strongly influenced by Bella's.

Sorry for my garbled response to your other review. I forgot to hit the little "W" clipboard to paste a quote from MS Word!

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Crimes

Question that I've been meaning to ask in previous reviews....where does this story take place? What's the location? I've probably missed it & if so, I apologize.

Oh Edward, so conflicted....I like how Bella lifts his spirits so easily.

Author's Response:
I was rather vague about the location, wasn't I? It is meant to be somewhere in Washington state, but I think I only mentioned it briefly in Chapter 1 ("  It was the middle of a Pacific Northwest winter"). The Altairian Guard base is supposedly somewhere in Arizona (hence the reference to "former desert home"). Volnostia (which is ironically based on the Russian word for "freedom") is intended to be a small dictatorship in Eastern Europe. I have relatives living in a similar small dictatorship, and the references to political prisoners, people disappearing, etc. are actually based on events that happened in my relatives' lives.

I also wondered if I made Edward too emotionally flighty. My only excuse is that, being a sensitive (a less-talented empath), he is more prone to respond to the moods of others, particularly Bella's.

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Shadowing

What a mysterious collection of characters. Why would the girl at the mall hate either E or B? I'm not surprised that she was shadowing Bella but why the intense emotions towards our couple? Hope to read an update soon.

Author's Response:
That's a very good question. She hates Edward for what he is...one of the Volturi. She is a "gifted" individual of the type that the Volturi "collected" over several years. Think Nazis and their experiments on twins, or Aro in the Twilight novels and his desire to collect gifted vampires for his Guard. Furthermore, she seems to be with the Altairian Elite Guard officer, who would naturally be an enemy of the Volturi (comparable to the CIA and the KGB during the Cold War).

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: August 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Car Search

It was good to have a chapter where E & B got to spend some quality time together. Really like the fic. Do you have a Twitter account?

Author's Response:
Thank you! No, unfortunately I don't have a Twitter account ... yet!

Of Mustangs & Men by Carson1 Rated: NC-17

[Reviews - 694]

Summary:

A perfect life is never what it seems. A broken Mustang, a small town, a failing farm, expensive clothes, and one cheating husband. Will Edward help Bella discover who she really is or will she leave him heartbroken?

Many thanks to the multi-talented xrxdanixrx for the fantastic banner & to RobManiPorn for the Manip.

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 127940

[Report This] Published: August 05, 2010 Updated: June 27, 2011

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: October 31, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Stangward better rest up because he's gonna get hit with lot of heavy stuff all at once! As if Bella didn't already have his head spinning!

Not a huge surprise that Newton's been catting around but with Tanya? Ewww. I can't wait until all of that mess gets revealed. I wonder if Tanya's made the connection yet? I'm guessing not or she would have been first in line to tell Edward.

*whispers* I think I love your Jasper almost as much as Stangward. He's just perfect.

Author's Response:
Hi there!

Thanks for readding and reviewing!

*Whispers... we love him too!* *Mini swoon*

Lots more of the Stang on the way.

XO

Mandy and Les

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: October 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I vote that a permanent restraining order be put on Jake Black & Mike Newton to stay away from E&B...in ALL fics. Those two are nothing but a pain in the ass.

Please tell me E&B get to have a serious conversation about their feelings for each other soon. Bella needs to grow a pair & tell Mikey that she ain't coming back. I think she's going to need something significant from Edward to help her make that decision.

I'm really enjoying reading about a normal working class Edward as opposed to uber-wealthy guy that usually shows up in fan fic. The best fantasies are based on reality...

Author's Response:
Hi there,

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

hehehe-restraining order! You're right, these two need to talk. She's overwhelmed right now. Trying to sort out her feelings and decide what to do.

So glad you love the Stang-we do too-greasy fingers and all!

Lots more of the Stang on the way.

XO

Mandy and Les

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: September 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Mike Newton does not stand a chance against Stangward! Glad to see Bella already in the mindset that things need to change in her life - regardless of Edward. I'm really not a fan of fics where she vacillates back & forth & strings both of them along. If you're already contemplating being with someone besides your husband then it's time to move on - so just do it already! Doesn't look like that will be a problem here. She knows all is not well in her life.

I love your characterization of Jessica. I could totally see that scene playing out in my head. That was too funny. Edward's own discomfort with being such a tool was really good too. I'm really liking the story.

Author's Response:
Hi there!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Oh, Newton! Lots more to be revealed there! Bella does know that her life has been essentially empty for quite some time. More on her relationship with Mike... if that's what you want to call it, will be revealed in the chapters to come.

Lots more of the Stang on the way.

XO

Mandy and Les

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: September 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Fic is off to a good start. I'm interested to see where you take the E&B relationship. I'm not a big fan of cheating scenarios regardless of how bad a shape a marriage is in. I'll trust that you will try get that settled before they progress to much farther. Nothing sexier than a dirty, greasy Edward...sigh

Author's Response:
Hi there,

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

More about Bella's marriage...or lack thereof will be revealed. The 'Stang is hard to resist.

XO

Mandy and Les

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: November 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

I honestly can't believe that your fic only has 265 reviews. It's so good. I like the way you played this chapter out. The back & forth - not knowing if she's really gonna tell him, not knowing if he's gonna forgive her - and then in the end - they're good. It worked really well.

So Bella the clueless attempting to change a tire in the rain...this should be fun. Edward may never recover!

Author's Response:
Hi there!

Thank you so much for reading and revieiwng and for your kind words!

We're just happy if anyone reads it!

Hmmm-Bella changing a tire in the rain--yes, lets see how the Stang handles that.

XO

Les & Mandy

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: December 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

oh Stang don't worry yourself about the puppy. Bella has no interest in him. I do find it curious, however, that Jake knows so much about Bella's personal life. How & why does he have this info?

I love the UST in this fic. It's just off the charts & so much fun! Not sure Edward could be any hotter...but it's ok if you can get him there ;>

Author's Response:
Hi there!

LOL-the puppy... yeah, he crops up at the worst times, doesn't he?

Glad you are enjoying the Stang. *sigh*

XO

Les & Mandy

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: January 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Sigh...I'll cut you slack because you used a Cheap Trick song....major points for cool. But now on to the story...I'm hoping the next update doesn't go down the road of Edward fucking everything with a pulse to get over Bella - like most fic does. How about Bella grows a pair & turns the car around instead? Tell Edward what happened & deal with it together. I'm pretty disappointed in her. She knows Mike's methods & yet she let him suck her in again. He'll probably go after the farm regardless of what she does. Here's hoping that Charlie will see thru the bullshit & intervene.

Yeah I've got a real problem with weak ass Bella's....

Author's Response:
Hi there,

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Ah, Cheap Trick... takes you back, doesn't it?

Now, what would make you think the Stang would do that... and who is to say that Bella doesn't already have a plan? Yes, right now, she's acting on instinct and pure adrenaline with the confrontation with Mike...who wouldnt be? That doesn't mean she's a weak ass... it means she's human.

More on the way.

Les & Mandy

Cascade Effect by JavaMasta Rated: R

[Reviews - 143]

Summary:

Vampire Edward, having abstained from human blood for so long that he is almost densensitized to it, moves to Seattle as a 1st year pediatric resident. What happens when he foils James' lunch plans by saving Bella, a strangely intriguing human grad student?

Cascade Effect

Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward, James
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: No Word count: 47256

[Report This] Published: September 25, 2010 Updated: August 27, 2012

Reviewer: gbasjw Signed
Date: October 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Encounter

I liked the first chapter! I'm also a reader of Lightning in Winter which I like a lot too. Are you going continue with that one as well?

I liked the easy flow between Edward & Bella here. I'm surprised that she's figured out that he's a not a normal human already.

I'm intrigued by the text messages. Is that James taunting Edward?

Author's Response:
Thanks! I recognized your username, and really appreciate that you're following my stories. Yes, Lightning in Winter will also be updated soon. As you probably know, we are allowed only one chapter in the queue at a time (one chapter, not one chapter per story), and the queues have been long!

There is actually a reason why Bella knows about Edward, and why she seems so calm around him. You may also notice that they are meeting approximately 7 years after canon Bella and Edward did, and Edward's bloodlust is more under control.

As for the text messages... you'll see ;-)

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