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Summary:

 

Edward left Bella, forcing his family to stay away from her. Six years onwards, the Cullens are a mess without Bella and Emmett decides to get away from his angry, angst ridden family and let loose. What he finds in the meanest biker bar in Seatle will send shockwaves through his entire family.

 

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Categories: New Moon Characters: None
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Series: None
Chapters: 38 Completed: Yes Word count: 112765
[Report This] Published: April 07, 2009 Updated: December 04, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30:Stolen

Yep, definitely more confused and thrilled right now that I've been soo busy that I've got two chapters to read. I'd say more, but I'm rushing onward to the next one to see if it holds more answers cause I'm impatient like that. But this one was great and definitely had me in tears again. Alice and Rose especially!

 
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Date: September 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: Ashes to Ashes

Izzy's not dead! There is absolutely no way, especially with all the little clues in this chapter. Yay! It makes me a little (just a little though) less impatient for the the next chapter. I'm definintely curious how Tanya and them all fit into this scenario though.

You drive me absolutely crazy with the enigma, but I still love ya! Can't wait for those explanations!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32:Explanations

Wow. I seem to say that a lot with this story. But Wow.

If there is an award for Best Bella Vamp Transformation Chapter, you soooo deserve it. Before we really even get to the meat of this chapter (i.e. finding out what the hell happened at that hospital) I was enthralled with Izzy's account of her change. Talking to herself about how she was crazy for talking to herself, believing herself to be in purgatory and listing all of her sins, lol, especially about the speeding bit.   *frantically flipping through Bible to make sure speeding isn't mentioned*   :)

Then she wakes up with Tanya and the weird new vamp guy and we finally get our questions answered and oh holy crap what a plot twist. That was some seriously creative thinking to come up with that twisty shit!

And even though you have completely changed me into a Tanya lover (she was sooo sweet saving Iz like she did and taking that huge risk for her) for this story, I have to admit that it was pretty funny when Izzy was kicking her ass. But I'm glad they like each other now and that we've got some fun times coming between Iz and her new 'mom'.

I loved how her first thought when she found out about the Cullens not knowing about any of Tanya's activities, her first though is that Alice is gonna be pissed. I'm actually looking forward to the wrath of Alice, it should be quite interesting and humorous.

I adored Izzy's  ADD vamp disorder. And the whole little bit with Tanya getting the tree seat made and then Iz realizing she could do that do and wanting her own tree. She had decided not to be a vamp before this, but I think she's gonna make one hellofa great vampire. I cannnot wait to see her and Emmett together now!

And she refused to wait on Edward and made Tanya call him. Awww, I loved that. I'm really looking forward to their reunion as well and him realizing that she's alive....kinda.

You've fully earned the trust for all those whacked out, emotional, heartfail, chapters that you put us through. Yeah, completely forgiven for those now, lol.

If ya couldn't tell by now, I LOVED IT!



Author's Response:

This chapter totally kicked my ass...I was forever rewriting it. I really wanted to portray how painful the change is without being overdramatic...I think it worked out fine in the end but it damn near killed me.

The twisty shit just came to me when I hit plot holes. I was like "That ain't going to work...hey how but I just do this and mind fuck everyone," ~insert evil genius laugh here~

As for the Cullens you know I'm gonna make that shit awesome. I've always figured that vamps should be a bit ADD when they are newborn.

And I am truly sorry for those chapters...in my head I was thinking that this fic (when it started) would be 20 chapters long or so and then the shit with Victoria came to me and then her changing and Bammo we are here. You know that I revel in the comedy so those chappies were hard on me and I knew they would test my readership...needless to say you all passed amazingly. At least those chapters got us to where we are now...

As for Tanya...well she my girl and she will be pivitol in the coming chapters for Izzy!

Love ya babe oh and I gotta say 'Wow' I really look forward to your reviews sunshine!

JayJay

 

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33:Izzy Learns To Hunt

Okay, okay. I admit to being a little bummed that we didn't get the reunion scene here, but I promise to be patient for it. And it was still a great chapter. I loved getting introduced to the unique relationships between Iz and Tanya and Freddie and Iz getting to kick ass at hunting, which I knew she would. Izzy definitely rocks the awesome factor as a vamp, lol, and of course, she's not at all cocky about it either. ;) Favorite lines from this chapter had to be Izzy's talking about rocking the awesome factor as a human and vampire and her comment that she'd kill Edward if he killed himself. This chapter also very much rocked the awesome factor! :)

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34:New Life

Candy...yumm. Lol. See? I took a piece. Late, but still.

And mental confusion in a story? From JayJayHale? No...never expected that, lol.

Seriously though, I though the Eddie and Izzy reunion was terrific! Little details that I totes loved were finding out that Alice went through a fur fetish, poor Tanya's horrible attempts at keeping Edward out of her head, Edward thinking Izzy would be wanting to piss him off even in Heaven, and the 'hey dickhead, she ain't breakable anymore' comment. :D

I was worried for a minute there though, I though you were gonna end up cockblocking us, lol. But that crisis was averted. ;)

Can't wait for Izzy vs. the Cullens, round 1!!!! Ding, ding...bring it on! 

Cuddles back to ya for another terrific chapter!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35:A Lil' Less Conversation

Super hot lemon for sure! Gah, I just love possessive Edward andt then add in the rough vampire sex and knocking trees down and shit....soooo hottt! The rest of the chapter was good too, lol.

I was kinda hoping that Freddie would turn out to be gay, actually. That would be cute, especially once he meets Emmett; I could just see how that interaction would go, lol.

I think I'm gonna have to go back and read the funeral chapter again, cause I imagine after these past few chapters it will probably be much funnier now. And of course I'm still looking forward to the big reunion!

As always, wonderful, wonderful wonderful chapter and smut! Can't wait for more!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38:Twilight

I'm not sure where to start with this one, lol. I'm sooo freaking happy that you ended with Emmett, especially him getting to use one of his signature DDwtDH lines. This chapter was honestly like the absolute perfect ending for this story. Absolutely perfect. And it is definitely official now that the Z girl and Eddie-boy pwn Bella and Edward! Totally. ;D

I loved getting in all the great Cullen family moments here at the end. I loved Carlisle getting to be a smartass, Esme getting to be angry, Rose being motherish to her husband, Alice getting visually scarred, Jasper getting horny (horny little empath, hehehe), and of course Emmett being.... Emmett!

As this story has been all along, this chapter was hilarious, kick-ass, but yet still kinda touching. I'm so going to miss it now!

Thanks for taking us all on this wonderful adventure with you! Good luck with your little bundle of joy that's on the way!



Author's Response:

You don't know where to start...well thats a first lol! I love ya! Yeah I think perfect justifies it.

I personally think we were not given too much of their personalities in the books....I don't believe Esme was just a mother or Carlisle was a compassionate doctor...they have sides that they don't want to show humans and I think I gave a little of that.

Thank you sooo much for your amazing reviews, for sticking with me like you have and for just being kick ass!

Cheers!

 
Off Limits by lexiecullen17 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3308]
Summary:

Womanizing Edward is in a cover band with his brother and best friend, who are pissed that Edward has managed to send their last three lead singers heading for the hills with his tendency to fool around carelessly.  Emmett and Jasper decide to create a "no intra-band dating" rule. 

But what happens when a gorgeous, talented brunette walks into the audition?  Will Edward adhere to his bandmates' new rule, or will he pursue what's now off limits?  OOC Edward/Bella.  Rated for DIRTY HUMOR and lots of future LEMONY GOODNESS. Canon pairings.

(thanks to Evilangel6714 for the banner!!!)

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
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Series: Always Human
Chapters: 34 Completed: Yes Word count: 171702
[Report This] Published: April 10, 2009 Updated: April 11, 2010


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

If there is one story out there that is absolutely guaranteed to make me giggle, it is definitely this one. This chapter was sooo good that I'm not even sure where to start.

But I guess I should begin with my personal favorite Off Limits character... Daddy C, MY secret boyfriend! ;) Loved B's ringtone for him and the fact that he called her phone instead of Edward's to let them know they were there. "She's more fun to talk to than you son"...hehehe. And of course an OL chapter would not be complete without at least one or two embarassing instances, usually involving Bella and/or Edward running off at the mouth. :D

Esme's comment about the evil combination of Alice and Emmett living together was cute and probably spot on.

Loved the story about Orlando dying.....a sad, tender moment amidst the chaos.

Loved even more when Edward is recounting the defiling of their new place...."we even had sex on the bed" Lol.

And Daddy C brought Edward the ring! OMG! YAY! I was sooo amused that he hid it in his sock draw and even more amused later when he comments that his thoughts were in his sock drawer. I'm not even sure why that struck me as sooo funny, but it just made me giggle so much.

Rose and Emmett's presents were sooo sweet. Who knew that those two had it in them to give such sweet, sentimental presents? And the to reverse roles even more than usual, the normally sensitive (at least in other stories, lol) Jasper chips in his two cents by giving them something to make car sex more enjoyable. God, I love this story!

LOVED Forks and the family there. Billy standing in for Charlie was terrific....even though I am sure Charlie would have given Edward much more heckling than that, but Billy was terrific in my book. And Bella never did fully explain what is up with Seth. I loved Seth and totally agree with him on the Orlando Bloom thing (especially Lord of the Rings, some of my favorite movies.....before Twilight, Legolas was totally my fictional boyfriend, lol) but I couldn't figure out from B's cryptic comments whether Seth is gay or not. Does he just like Orlando or does he like Orlando like I like Orlando? ;D

Edward's jaw dropping moment when he annouced that he was going to propose to Bella on New Years was fantastic. Definitely one of my favorite moments.

And Jake's girlfriend was Leah! Fantastic.

I can't wait for the proposal now! And the reactions from Bella and everyone else to the proposal!

Thanks for another wonderful chapter!



Author's Response:

your essay sized reviews never fail to make me smile.  you are too sweet always (not that i'm complaining by any means, haha).  first of all, i'm so glad that you're still enjoying b's secret boyfriend...i feel like i keep trying to put him in the background, but it's just impossible--he wants to hang out, haha.  second, i'm glad you got "the bed" reference -- it seems like those two have sex everywhere except the bed, and ... now that it's THEIR bed, not just edward's or bella's, i think it holds a whole new meaning for them :)  and lastly, about seth...i'm pretty sure that he's gay.  i mean, he's always had this huge crush on edward in my mind, but...i'm leaving it undefined in the story.  and i guess i'll just let people think what they want to think -- seth is clearly the new dumbledore, haha.  and, i'm just going to take this moment to fully agree with you on legolas.  mmm.  my first car's name was actually orlando bc of my orlando obsession, so...i'm glad you appreciate ;)

thanks again for all the love!  hope you enjoy the proposal as much as i do...

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Yay! I wanna touch Edward's boner, lol. Just got started reading and I'm so in love with this story. I do know myself pretty well though so I'm not really surprised that I think sick pervert Edward is hot, lol. Another fic I was reading (Perspective by ekimmuh, a totally great story that really stays true to canon in an interesting way) Edward was surprised that Bella didn't mind the thought of oral sex and was thinking about the how differently men view sex than women. I laughed. I'll admit I guess I have the mind of a man-whore too, but then again so do  most of my friends, so at least I'm not lonely in my perverted little world, lol.

Anyway, the story is great. The band, the attraction between Bella and Edward, the rule, Edward's near-constant boner......ahhhh what a great story. And I totally love your Jasper, Emmett, Alice, and Rosalie as well. I hope Edward can prove his love to all of them. Can't wait for more of this! Keep the perviness coming! :D



Author's Response:

thank you, thank you, thank you! ...yeah, i'm reading perspective, too, and i was definitely thinking about how different men and women perceive sex...and i DEFINITELY have the mind of a guy, apparently :)  and, the supporting characters will definitely stick around--i love them too much to focus solely on e/b!

 

thanks again for reading!!!  i hope you continue to enjoy.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I'm actually really, really, really glad that you posted this. It was fantastic seeing Edward's explanations behind the songs and new impressions about the songs and reactions to the songs and Bella singing them. It will also be extremely interesting to watch how the play list evolves over time. Plus we still got a lot of pervy Edward and some really good stuff that goes with the more traditional chapter types. Like Jasper noticing some different Edward behavior....I'm smiling just imagining all their faces when Edward doesn't take home a girl from the audience after the gig. He doesnt, right? Please say he doesn't do something that stupid, lol. I also enjoyed Edward's being pussy-whipped and in love and Bella being a flirty, kickass, cocktease, hehe. Great chapter again! Can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

haha, no--edward's FAR too pussy-whipped now to even think about bringing another girl home...no worries.  and, well, the response from EVERYONE is pretty interesting ;)  glad you're enjoying the story!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

In the words of Edward, this chapter was abso-fucking-lutely marvelous, lol. This story is quickly becoming one of my favorites and while his inner monologue may annoy him, I fucking love Edward's inner monologue. His commentary and reactions are priceless. For some reason, I am wondering if Emmett may not mind if Edward and Bella hooked up. I mean if they are so set against Edward not running Bella off with his manwhoring ways, they really didn't do much to keep them apart. And I absolutely loved jealous, caveman Edward here. I'm seriously getting so excited everytime I see a new update on this story and reading the chapter through twice before reviewing. Can't wait for more of it!!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

okay, first of all...thank you!  i'm so glad you're enjoying the story...the fact that you're reading, re-reading, and reviewing makes my heart jump for joy, hahah.

and, along the lines of the story--everyone seems really into edward's inner monologue, which is funny because that's who i am.  my roommate always makes fun of me because i'll usually speak my inner monologue outloud (i gave edward a filter, unlike me). 

the second half of their night should be up shortly, and i hope it continues to live up to the high praise you've given me so far!!!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Okay, I guess I'll prove that my mind is in the gutter by admitting that my favorite part of the chapter was Bella almost catching Edward jacking off in his bed. I can't wait until some of that sexual tension brewing between them two is released, lol. I'm also excited to see how much Bella suspects about what he was doing before she walked in. As much as I will miss Edward's unique perspective, I can't wait to see where our girl's mind is at about everything.

I also loved Edward's jealously (I concur about Jake=asshole, but that's just my opinion), and them getting to know each other better and how Edward was totally honest with Bella even about the not-so-good stuff about him. I loved that she was the first girl (other than Alice) to even sit on his bed and that she said his name in her sleep and he heard. I think our poor lovesick boy needed that little bit of hope for the future with Bella. It was too sweet (if that's possible) that he wanted to stay awake all night just to enjoy being near her.

And it may just be my immature teenager boy emerging again here, but Bella finding a used condom in Emmett's bed would be fucking hilarious. My friend actually had that happen to her once....except it was her bed after she let another friend stay there for a weekend while she was gone. Yep I laughed then too. I'm still absolutely loving this story and you definitely keep me excited for more of it!



Author's Response:

that was a fabulous and detailed review--thank you so much for your high praise!  ...my mind is for sure in the gutter, so, i'm glad you're enjoying that aspect of the story.  yes, the sexual tension is escalating....let me tell you, the release will be explosive (pun intended).

bella's pov is going to be interesting--she has a LOT to say, haha.  yes, jake is an asshole -- i'm totally not into jake, so, that will definitely show through my writing, haha.

and yes, the used condom story is real.  it happened.  and it was gross.  ....i laughed then, too...too.

thanks for reviewing again :)

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Are you crazy? Of course we want more! Lol. And for the record, longer chapters are never a bad thing with a story this good! This chapter was definitely "smile and butterfly inducing"!  It made me all giggly and happy and smiley! :D

I loved the dream lemon at the beginning. I'm not sure how I knew, but I figured it was a dream, but it was still HOT and yeah we needed a lemon and it was still a little soon for a real one. So this was the perfect solution! Plus it left Edward all kinds of flustered hearing Bella have a sex dream. I was wondering if she had said his name or not as well, but then her little comment later (“If I thought about you like a brother, my dream last night would be illegal.”) kinda proved that a moot question since he definitely knows who was in her dream now! BTW- I totally loved that she told Edward that and his reaction to it was too cute!!! Edward being all flustered and sweet and fresh from the shower is totally win!

I guess my guess about Emmett not minding a relationship between Edward and Bella was way, way off base, lol. Maybe I was giving him too much credit, lol. It was kinda cute how Bella saw him being a big brother and their little moment in the kitchen and all. But I'm still so happy that Bella got him to stop punching Edward's beautiful face! And the way the boys apologize to each other was great. In fact that entire little scene was terrific.

Then Bella and Edward working on the set list together was more terrific. I love the changes in it and in Edward. I can imagine how shocked they are all gonna be about him so willingly changing so much of the list.

Absolutely loved Bella/Alice time as well. “Jesus titty fucking Christ, Bella!  Did you sleep in his bed?”- Hands down, my favorite line in this chapter! I loved the whole thing with Alice not believing they hadn't slept together and Bella proving to her that they had just talked and Alice crying and hugging Bella and being not on an "Edward/Bella friendship high", but an "Edward finally found the right girl and is changing for the better" high.

I adored that just as Bella was wondering what Edward was doing and feeling a little jealous, he texted her and then invited her over and did it all so sweetly too. Too funny that he asked Em's permission and then how Em escorted Bella to the bedroom and opened the door and acted all chaperone-ish, I was LMAO! That smiles and butterflys thing definitely came into play when Edward was sitting on his bed all happy and excited about Bella being there and telling her it was how he wanted to spend every night!

Wonderful, amazing chapter! I'm so excited for more of this story!



Author's Response:

um--thank you so much for that amazing review!  not that i didn't believe that people were reading the story, but reading your reaction to every scene is just so gratifying--you have no idea!  i think you may even deserve a little shout out for the length/depth of that review :)  much love in return, dear.  the next chapter should be up shortly!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Wow-my wordiness has finally paid off...lol....a shout-out and two chapters! Yay me! :D Okay, on to business.... I love, love, love, love that Bella and Edward have become inseparable. One of my two favorite lines in this chapter has got to be about Alice and Jasper coming out of the closet they'd been fucking in. Hilarious.

Poor clueless Emmett thinking that Edward and Bella share a brother/sister relationship, lol. And when Bella had the flashback of walking in on Em and Rose....ugh! I was hoping Day 13 would hold something good since 13 is my lucky number, but it apparently not Bella's lucky number, lol.

23 on the other hand....not that bad. Lucky girl. But she must have pretty strong willpower because I'd have had to have offered him the real thing after seeing that, lol. Showerward ALWAYS a good image to have!

So all that stuff was really good and then we get Jake. Ugh! :(   Yeah, I'm just not a Jacob fan at all. And it sucked and Bella not being clear about cutting off Jake because of Edward sucked and Edward getting jealous was kinda hot (gotta love Jealousward!) but still sucked that he had so much to get jealous over. Of course though this part did spawn the second of my two favorite lines in this chapter " Just take them out and measure already!" LMAO at that one, but we all know now that Edward would win! :D

I also enjoyed Alice being a good friend but I kinda think it's gonna be interesting when Jake finds out that Bella has pretty much moved in with Edward and for some reason I don't think he'll buy that brother/sister relationship crap.

Okay so even though I really didn't like some things that happened in this chapter and I wanted to bitch-slap Bella for half of the chapter, I still loved reading it cause no story is complete without some good drama. And it was still awesomely written.

Final note- Congrats on all the good stuff lately! Love the new banner...it's so pretty! :D And thanks for letting us know the new Star Trek is cool. I've never been a Star Trek fan but the trailer for this new one looks so cool so I've kinda been wanting to go see it especially since it's got Zachary Quinto in it so I guess I really need to now, lol. Off to read and review the next chapter now!



Author's Response:

haha, of course your wordiness paid off!  i love your reviews!  seriously, i can't even tell you how nice it is to have someone pay such close attention to my writing :)  and, yes, definitely go see the new star trek, zachary quinto is AMAZING!  and, i'm a jj abrams groupie, so...everything he does is immediately worth my time!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I'm now soooo even happier that these two chapters posted together because this one definitely ended much better than the last one. I loved Edward being all cheesy (You complete me <3 ) and girly and HSMish. One of my favorite scenes in this chapter was Edward's interaction with Emmett and Rose after he returned to the apt from Bella's. Rose definitely knows somethings up, lol.

I liked Edward's song choice and his method for getting his point across to Bella and I absolutely love Alice. She was terrific here.

And Jake's an asshole! I knew he was! :) I enjoy being right. Yeah, I know I'm probably being too harsh on him, but oh well... :D

And the end made up for it. I loved the end of this one, even though I couldn't help being all girly and wanting them to talk about things too. But that just leaves me anticipating the next chapter even more!

Awesome, amazing, wonderful set of chapters here! Thanks so much for two at once! Can't wait for more! 

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Good luck with finals and graduation! It will suck not getting my fix of Off Limits this week, but on the bright side after all the school stuff is over, you'll have even more time to write, right? Lol. :D

I have to say that one of the best things about your writing is how you manage to keep things so funny, but yet so emotionally gripping as well. I've noticed so many fics that have a tough time being either too serious or too funny, but you've definitely got the perfect balance. Such as...Bella's thoughts about waking up with Edward and how he had turned her night into something beautiful was so sweet, but then we get "WHOA, hey there, Edward" and I'm cracking up.

I loved the make-out session and Bella confessing that she had been a witness to Edward's morning shower routine, but to be fair to Edward she really should tell him about her little happy times in the shower as well, lol. And I was so fucking proud of Edward when he stopped (even though it felt a little like cockblocking) to talk about things before the physical stuff went further. It's just another measure of his change and how much he loves Bella that he delayed any satisfactory action to make sure everything was okay with her.

Edward's internal monologues continue to make me laugh so hard I almost piss myself. I really love EPOV, lol.

"He had asked her to be his girlfriend and she ran to my bed? Fuck yeah.  Nice work, Cullen."     Totally LMAO at that one.

Glad that Jake being an asshole actually led to something good, but I still think Edward should enlist Emmett and Jasper and go kick Jake's ass, lol. And Edward really handled Bella's confession and worries well. His reassuring that she's not a whore was so sweet. Yeah, that sounds weird, but it was still sweet, lol.

Edward's conversation with himself after Bella asked about the rule still existing was priceless! :D  And I really liked that Bella kinda confronted him about being worried that he wanted to keep it secret in case he got tired of her. But thankfully Edward recovered from that one quite well. Plus, who doesn't think some sneaking around is hot? Lol.

The shower lemon was HOT and pretty funny too...Edward's cock talks, yay! :p  It was definitely, definitely, good. I can't wait for more lemons and for Edward to return the favor, lol.

I REALLY, REALLY, REALLY, REALLY  luh...lo....like your story! :D



Author's Response:

per usual, your review has me laughing, crying, every emotion in between.  i lu, lo, like your reviews, too :)  thanks for all your hilarious responses!!!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

I have decided that guilt is a wonderful emotion, hehe. Updates and loving from Edward.....two of my favorite things, lol. And I must be honest I have adored Sweetward in the past chapters, but I'm absolutely thrilled to see Pervward returning...."and if that makes me a perv, then so be it." :D  I really love how you write the lemons.....all sexy and loving, but yet kinda snarky at the same time. Your chapters always make me smile so much.

Loved the whole "we should put clothes on"......."two hours later" thing. And Edward being a panty thief and Bella liking it is totally win. Pervs rule, lol.

Edward making French toast in his t-shirt and boxers is enough to send anyone into a happyplace lala land state. I can completely understand Bella's future fantasies starring Edward after seeing him in that pretty little domestic setting.

"Although the plowing was DEFINITELY going to have to happen soon"  hehe....can't wait for that. I might be as excited for the plowing as B and E! lol.

Loved that Em almost caught them making out. I definitely agree with Bella that this sneaking around is going to be quite difficult for them. I'm wondering who will be the first out of the group to catch them. Imagining it will probably be Alice...since Alice knows everything, lol....but that won't be too bad cause I'd think Alice probably would just help them along with their scheme.

Brunch was definitely interesting. It was so sweet that Em was ready to kick Jake's ass for Bella as well, even though he really liked Jacob. And the phone ringing like a bad sitcom was too funny.

That hot kiss was even hotter with Em just in the other room. Why, oh why, does sneaking around have to be so damn sexy? Lol.  "Game on" and I can't wait! Absolutely LOVED it as always!!!!!



Author's Response:

no, seriously--every time i looked at my computer this past week, i'd have pangs of guilt.  so...yeah, updates galore soon, hopefully :)  and definitely pervward--he's just my favorite...i've missed him, too...hence, panty stealing (why i think that's hot, i don't know...i just do).

hence, sneaking around will be difficult, but not completely impossible (apparently emmett is the most oblivious character in my story)...and secrets are hot, right? hahah.

thanks for reviewing, as always.  they make me smile, too :)

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

I swear this story just keeps getting better and better. The stuff with Rose at the beginning was fantastic. I may just take back my guess about Alice figuring stuff out first....I think Rosalie may be the first to realize Bella and Edward's dirty little secret, lol. It was mega-funny though, her teasing Edward. Why is it that torturing Edward is so fun? Lol. Not to mention poor Emmett....fifteen minutes is not enough to mess up my hair and make-up!

And while the thought of Edward in those jeans is wonderful, I must say that Jasper wins my vote for favorite outfit. Jasper in nothing but a white button-up shirt and socks and shades.....mmmmmmm. Way to transfer sexual frustration to your readers, lol.

Also loved Edward's commentary on Bella's clothing. "shhh, I listen to Alice when she talks, okay?" Too funny. And it was so sweet that Em got all big brother "you're not wearing that in public" on Bella. Awwww for Emmett.

While we're at, may as well go ahead and add an awww for Alice too. I loved her conversation with Edward and her being concerned over Bella. It was also sweet that Edward was touched that Alice cares so much about Bella. I definitely enjoyed Alice describing Bella returning to the apt on "Cloud Nine" though. Oh, if only Alice knew what put Bella on that cloud, lol.

Their little "game" was definitely hot as hell. I loved Edward's "Nice, Bella.  Really nice.  Cause blue balls even before we get out on stage.  Point 1 goes to Swan."   Yeah, their little teasing and touching is definitely amping up my frustration level, lol.

LOVED Edward's set list thoughts as always. I actually think the set list commentary is one of my favorite parts of this story. Perverted Edward + great music= Win!

I also really enjoy the switching povs. I know that there are some that don't like it, but for me personally I love getting both sides of the story. And I really enjoyed the last Bella pov here. Such a bad girl faking sick and worrying poor little Alice, but "my desire to get Edward naked and alone FAR outweighed any guilt"....I can completely understand that, lol.

Can't wait for Edward to make Bella all better. Alice will be asking what her miracle cure is tomorrow, lol. AWESOME, FANTASTIC chapter as always!!!!!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Hot! Sweet! and still humorous! This chapter definitely had it all. And the lemon was fantastic....definitely cold-shower-inducing! So no worries, you can definitely do lemons! And hopefully that won't be your last one either! :D

Bella being a horny, devilish little vixen was totally kick-ass. Her putting Edward's hand on her panties was totally hot. And his reaction was priceless. The making out on the hood of the Porsche was very HOT as well. Gah, that's a wonderful scene to have in your mind....beautiful car and beautiful man together! :D

"Yeah, Bella—those aren’t my keys. Fuck. Inside NOW!"----ROFLMAO! And that happened again when Bella informed Edward that he wasn't a fucking Jonas brother, lol. Note to self....don't cockblock Bella, she gets pissy.

But Edward may just deserve sainthood status for not only stopping himself from taking what he wanted, but also potentially incurring the wrath of Bella as he stopped her from taking what she wanted....all to make sure she knew he loved her and that it wasn't just fucking for him, which was totally sweet.

The "I love you"s were almost as good as the lemon. ;)  They were sweet and yet totally true to the characters of Edward and Bella in this chapter. And I might have mention that I enjoyed the lemon, hmm?

And if that wasn't enough to make you jealous of Bella...she also gets the other Cullen man comforting her and telling her that he loves her. It was kinda cute when she remarked as to how both of them had confessed their love for her, even though one was in a brotherly manner and one totally wasn't brotherly.

And the message from Jacob....he's definitely an ass and yet his rambling apology almost made me feel sorry for him. Almost, lol, but not quite. Although it was all better when Emmett comforted her! I want Brother Bear too!  :p

Besides, Thanksgiving with the Cullen family is sooo much better than her going to Billy and Jacob's for Thanksgiving. I cannot wait for that little trip. I have a feeling that Bella and Edward will find it even more difficult to hide stuff from Esme. After all, as the old saying goes "A mother always knows". So it should definitely be interesting. I'm also looking forward to the progression of Bella and Edward's relationship since they've declared their feelings for each other and made love. I'm sure there are lots of interesting things to come for these two!

I continue to be amazed at how well you combine the love, lust, and humor in your chapters. This chapter especially was HOT and yet still made me laugh and made me go "awwww".  You're a very gifted writer to be able to go from hot lemon, to sweet words, to a funny line as seamlessy as you do...I've seen many stories that just haven't been able to manage that transition.

So...no more concerns! You're fabulous and the story is fabulous! Just keep the chapters coming for us! Please? :D

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Totally loved this chapter...especially how considerate Edward was being and trying his very best not to show Bella what a perv he really is. Too bad he hasn't yet realized that Bella is just as big a perv as he is and that's one reason why the fit together so well and why I enjoy reading about them so much, lol. It was cute when he didn't want to wake her up to help with his morning problem and then when he was freaking out about her seeing the playlist. Insecure Edward can definitely be too cute.

Alice is acting weird and Rosalie is acting weird...what is going on with those two? Have they figured it out? I keep changing my mind too about who will figure it out first out of them. But it's really fun guessing.

Shower sex with Edward.....mmmmmm :D :D :D :D  Always a wonderful scene to envision, especially now that we all know for sure just how yummy RPattz looks without a shirt. Mmmmm, what a visual. And your lemons continue to be hot, spicy, and just fucking fabulous! That shower scene especially just had me tingling all over.

The car sex was great too, but I couldn't help but be thinking about Alice during that a little bit, lol. Poor Alice....they'd better hope she doesn't find out about their activities in her baby. Although I really can't say I would blame her for any action she may take, I'd definitely not want my friends or siblings doing that in my car, especially if it was a Porsche.

Loved that Bella had the condom for the car sex, though. Smart, smart girl. I'd give her a standing ovation for that little stroke of brilliance. Okay, well not really brilliance but just realization of how horny Edward makes her, lol.

The lunch was definitely fun once they made it there as well. Glad that Edward didn't mind that Bella went to Emmett about the Jake thing. Halloween costumes....hehe that should def. be interesting. I can't wait to find out what you have in mind for them for that.

Your story continues to be a delightful mix of humor, love, and lust in just the right combination. Like sex with Edward, I really can't get enough of it! :D Thanks for the quick update!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Firstly, sorry my review is so much later than usual....real life combined with Sookie Stackhouse and the MTV Movie awards actually managed to drag me away from my stories for a few days, lol. Anyways, so sorry to hear about you getting vandalized. That totally sucks, but I glad all your reviews were able to make you feel some better. :P

Amazing chapter as always. I was really surprised that Bella and Edward went dressed as Pocahontas and John Smith....or excuse me, Captain John Smith. Captain, hehe.....all I could think of was "Do you got a little Captain in you?" and replying to myself, "No, Bella's got a LOT of Captain in her! Lucky Bitch!"  Yeah, I need to stop reviewing at 3 and 4 in the morning, lol.

I was totally cracking up when the all started quoting the lines from their respective movies, especially Em being dressed as Woody and using Buzz's line and Bella's tentative Pocahontas quote said like a question. Also loved that Edward liked getting to have a sword. All I could think of was that cute teenage guy in Never Been Kissed that has the sword and when he and Drew Barrymore are dancing and she's spouting some philosophically deep shit and then asks what he's thinking about and his reply: "My sword". I could totally picture Edward doing that here, but with Bella having a smartass comeback about it.

Now first of all I have to say that I am completely hetero, but it was really fucking hot when Bella and Rose started making out on the dance floor. Poor Edward never stood a chance. Bella should definitely thank Rose, lol.

And Alice caught them! Yay! My first guess was right, I think, lol. Can't wait to see what happens next, and hopefully we should be finding out soon since you've hit over a 1000 reviews, right? Lol. :D

Congrats on getting to that mark though. I know it's got to be a milestone in reviews that any writer can be proud of. Hope your weeks gotten better and thanks for such an amazing, wonderful chapter! :D



Author's Response:

haha, no apology necessary -- i know exactly what it's like to get sucked into the world of true blood, so i can't exactly argue with you -- also, yes, the mtv movie awards were hilarious...i'm pretty sure i've watched the clip of kristen dropping her award....i'm going to guess about 15 times, haha. best moment ever?

and, yay, i have hit over 1000 reviews which is damn amazing, so, yes--more to come VERY soon (i just need to finish editing the chapter, and i swear it'll be posted!)...let's just say that more fun is on the way, haha.

thanks, as always, for your review -- my week has been getting better, and hopefully it will continue in that direction when i head home to new york tomorrow (fingers crossed for running into rob?).  haha, okay, that's all :)

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Well, this chapter was definitely action-packed, lol. Loved that Alice and Rosalie were betting (and so complexly betting at that) on Edward and Bella's relationship and Rose's reaction to them being in love ("I thought you were just fucking") was priceless!

I was quite happy to hear Edward talking to his dick again. They have terrific conversations. ;D  It was also sweet how romantic Edward was being in front of Rose and Alice and how he wants to tell everyone that he loves Bella. I was amazed a bit though that I never heard Alice or Rose comment on the "Bunny" nickname.

And I was soo soo happy that Bella wasn't pregnant. I would have kept reading regardless because I love this story but I really, really, really didn't want her to be pregnant.

It was super sweet that Rose was going to cover for Bella about the pregnancy test thing. Now, that's definitely a true friend, lol. You're getting horrible at these little WTF type cliffies though, lol. As always, loved it and can't wait for more!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Wow, it was a little weird seeing Emmett being the responsible adult type person here, lol. Not his usual role, lecturing on being smart. Although it did go along very well with his normal big brother role. It kinda got me that he was so hurt by their actions....I mean I've loved the secret and sneaking around and all, but poor Emmett! 

I loved, loved, loved, loved the phone conversation with Esme and Carlisle, especially a swearing Carlisle! Again not something that you see too often, lol, but very fun to hear. I can't wait for the gang to get there.

I was really wondering too why it took so long for Edward to declare his feelings for Bella and why Em and Jazz didn't call him out on that. Bella tells them several times that she's in love with Edward, but he really didn't say the same until almost the end, unless Em and Jazz just were able to see that Edward loves Bella or inferred that he must when he didn't react unpleasantly to her calling him bunny. Either way though, I am glad that he did finally declare his love for her as he's been wanting to know and I did enjoy them being all lovey-dovey.

Loved, loved, loved, loved it as always and I'm so looking foward to Thanksgiving! :D

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

I just knew the evolution of the set list would be very interesting and that prediction has definitely proven to be true. It's changed quite a bit since that earlier chapter, lol.

I think my favorite change would have to be the Kelly Clarkson song just because it shows how much Edward is "owned" as Emmett said. And who doesn't love owning Edward? :D  I also really liked the song by The Doors and Bella singing it to Edward and Jasper, not just because jealous Edward is always cute, but because I'm such a perv that I love the thought of being between Edward and Jasper and being loved twice. ;p 

The backstage sex was hot even if it was quick. I'm kinda glad that it didn't happen before they were outed because I just knew somebody would walk in on that shit and of course Jasper did, but thankfully it was before it progressed too far, lol.

And I'm so glad that big brother is back! Things just don't seem right if Em isn't happy and teasing "bunny". Wonderful chapter as always!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Ohmygosh, you and your friend sound just like me and my friends, lol. It is pretty horrible when you think of talking dirty and flashback to a scene with Edward from FF, lol.  Thanks for sharing that story with us!

I think your version of Carlisle may just be my favorite version of him ever! Emmettx20 indeed! Him and Em running to meet each other in slow motion and then him checking Bella out and flirting with...lol.  And poor Bunny getting all jealous of his dear old Dad was priceless. :D

It really made me feel better about my Edward and Jasper fantasies from last chapter when Bella started having some ideas of her own about Edward and Carlisle, lol. I love pervs, really I do; they make me feel much more normal.

Esme was also super cool here and Edward better get Alice a crown for being the best sister ever. I mean seriously, she helped him get washing machine sex!  I loved Bella's comment on how only they would have their most romantic moment in that situation.

And I have to admit that I was thinking that DVD was going to be something totally different than what it was, with Bella keeping it as a surprise and Edward being all excited about her bringing it to a family holiday and her dismay about watching it with a HUGE screen and surround sound....well, I guess you can probably imagine what type of DVD I thought it was, lol. Hey, I already admitted to being a perv. :D

Loved that Em and Eddie finally reconciled completely and that Em was able to see how much Edward loves Bella. That big teddy bear! *sighs happily*

With this bunch, I can't wait to see what happens at Thanksgiving dinner! :D Amazing chapter as always!

 




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