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Summary:

Edward Cullen is an Army brat, who has his entire life planned out perfectly, and can't wait to get out of this utterly dull town of Forks, WA. But then a whirlwind in the form of Bella Swan enters his life and before long, he can't imagine his life without her. Will he sacrifice his chance at what could be a beautiful life with her? And is Bella willing to make that same sacrifice... AU/AH, possibly some OOC

Rated for situations and lemons later on...

 

©2009 kyla713. All rights reserved worldwide.

ABC

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: Yes Word count: 121063
[Report This] Published: January 17, 2009 Updated: September 10, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - The Big Date

Thank you...thank you...thank you. That was the perfectly V-day date and I never even had to leave my computer, lol. You're gonna have to stop doing this though. Here I was thinking you couldn't possible improve on the last chapter and I think that you just did....and without any smut at all. Wow.

So no penalties for missing school...thanks for clearing that up. Those lucky kids, lol. Their little reunion there in the parking lot was too cute. Loved Rose's reaction and Alice's. I can't really blame Bella for not wanting to go to Spanish...I think I might have been a little scared of Alice myself. A pissed off pixie is definitely not a good thing...but an curious pixie is even worse. :) It was cute though that Edward was there to 'save' her after class.

And the thing with James...yeah, it had to happen. We all knew he was gonna be an ass about it. But while it may have been the one dim spot in an otherwise sunny chapter, it still at least gave us some angry, possessive Edward and really what's a V-Day without that? :P

I'm thinking Dawn has made it her mission to make the rest of us love Charlie as much as she does and it's working. That part with him was so cute and sweet. It was just did perfectly....the part with him looking at the picture and acting like he was gonna give Edward a hard time. Even though it was never said, you could implicitly tell that he knew that Edward was a good guy and didn't mind him...he's just worried cause he knows it's the first step of him losing his baby and his little girl growing up. It was hilarious though that his first reaction to her wanting to talk was thinking she was pregnant.

And that date. It was absolutely perfect. From him getting the whole place for just them to the picnic in the middle of the skating rink and the skating (him promising to not let her fall) and her kicking his butt in laser tag and the conversation. And the bendy straws....I'm getting tears in my eyes again just typing this and it was much worse when I was reading it, lol. I don't think I've ever had a better date on Valentine's Day than just reading that, lol. Yes..I know that's pathetic, but oh well...  Oh and I loved the line about the special forces; that one had me cracking up.

This one made me laugh, and cry, and giggle and made it hard to stop smiling. Thanks so much for this great V-Day present.  Terrific job ladies!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - Decisions

Another sweet and wonderful chapter as always. Though it doesn't seem quite fair that Christina is off playing with the Beautiful Bastard, and Dawn gets to write through these heavy issues, though there was that heavily sweet lemon tucked in the middle there! :) It was totally sweet that Em seemed nervous about announcing his and Rose's engagement. Then poor Edward's happy bubble burst just a bit as he made those difficult realizations. Then after that wonderful lemon, I about fell out of my chair when Bella said what she did and her and Edward were actually on the same page for once. Completely shocking...but her speech to him was so sweet. I liked that he went to Carlisle for advice and the advice was definitely good advice. I am so interested to see where you take the story next. And I almost think that ya'll don't deserve any time with Sweetward or the Beautiful Bastard for that evil cliffie....but then if ya'll don't get them neither do we....so write away!  :)

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Yep....definitely got a toothache after that one. Bella handled the news really well...especially after being woken up in the middle of the night with it. I think it was definitely an appropriate reaction and just what I expected from her. And that lemon....whew.....what a lemon, hehe. Bella may not have had to prove anything to Edward, but I'm glad she did. :D  And I love that Edward went all Sweetward there at the end. LOVED IT as always.....ABC is always worth the wait!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - Dinner at the Cullens

Uh-oh! Here we go again. Overreaction, misunderstanding, non-communication, lashing out......when will these two ever learn? Ugh! Hope we see some resolution from this little crazy argument soon! And he's leaving Saturday! Sorry Edward, but when really is relevant. I understand he needed Bella and it was a horrible time for her to pull away from him, but she was thinking she had more time to prepare herself and for it to be that quick it had to feel like a slap in the face for her. Also I think a little bit of his reaction was probably hurt and anger towards Esme that got taken out on Bella. But Bella should have fought harder as well to make him understand where she was coming from. What are we going to do with these two crazy teens! Lol.  PLEASE update again soon!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - Making up is hard to do

When I first read that you weren't going to be co-authoring The Office anymore, I admit to a moment of panic about this story, but then I read your profile and was able to calm down. It's awesome you're going to be writing a book, you'll have to let all of us know when you get published so we can run out and buy it! And I'm soooo freaking happy that you'll still be continuing ABC.

Anyways, awesome chapter here. Poor Edward freezing his ass off in the tree. I like that he was so persistent though. Annoying but if he hadn't have been so persistent, would his non-persistence have fed into Bella's insecurities? Besides that stubborn refusal to give up led to some pretty damn hot make-up sex, so for that reason alone I applaud it.

And then they fell asleep and almost got caught by Charlie. LMAO about Edward's boxers laying on the floor. So glad they're on their way to total reconciliation. Can't wait for more!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 - Heart To Heart

Tissue warning was definitely needed. So, so, so sad. I'm really glad that Esme talked to Bella. Loved the hopeful ending....can't wait for more.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 - Number 326

What did he get her for Christmas!? I'm dying to know, lol. Sweet chapter! Can't wait for more!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - Merry Christmas, Baby

Oh no! And just when Charlie had agreed to ease up about the boyfriend thing! That sucks, but it does stay true to real life because yes, the parents do always find out in real life and I think scenario is one that we have all went through in some way or another. But it still sucks for them.

I loved the father/daughter Christmas stuff with Charlie and Bella, but it all really made me want to decorate a tree and watch Christmas movies the rest of the night, lol.

And B & E's presents for each other were soooo sweet, especially that the engravings matched. Too perfect. Cliche, maybe, but still perfect! :D

I think Bella holding Alice's boob as she opened the door for Edward was just about my favorite moment in this chapter. Ah, what's boob grab between besties? ;p

Loved that you worked in the "You don't even say hi" line there....I really laughed about that. It was one of my favorite lines in the movie that wasn't in the book.

The cabin was awesome, even if it did end too soon, and I'm not just talking about Edward there! :D 

Wonderful chapter! Can't wait for more! :D

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Consequences

I always hate these type of chapters (even though it was spectacularly written) maybe because they hit close to home, probably for any female in the world that had a father or step-father during their teen years. I'm now old enough that I can see things from Charlie's pov, but young enough to still empathize with Bella, thus these situations always leave me confused, lol. But it was still good, and necessary.

And Alice thinks she's preggo? Oh my gosh. There's another one of those curveballs!

Can't wait to see what happens! Another great chappie!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - Building Up A Future

God, it's been such an amazing journey reading this story. Spectacular ending here. I'm in shock that Alice is actually pregnant, but I loved how Jasper is handling it, as well as BFF support from Bella. And Charlie....his response to it all seriously brought me to tears. He has been and remains one of my very favorite characters from this story.

The goodbye date (though they refused to acknowledge that's what it was) was wonderful, very fitting.

And the goodbye was heartwrenching but hopeful.

Thank you for posting this story and not giving up on it. It has absolutely been a wonderful read!

 
Summary:

After six months away from Bella, Edward finally breaks and returns to Forks. Will he get the warm welcome he's hoping for?


Categories: New Moon Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 24198
[Report This] Published: January 23, 2009 Updated: April 01, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Edward's Arrival

I just started reading and I'm really enjoying this story so far. You've got a really nice writing style and you're really good at getting Edward's angst. I'm glad you told us in the AN that the next chapter is already ready to go cause it would suck having to wait a long time on it. Can't wait for the reunion!

 
Summary:

Sequel to My Sacrifice.  Bella and Edward have made it through the confrontation with James alive and together.  How did all of the hell he put them through affect their lives?  This is Edward's story of coping, loving, and learning to live again.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: Yes Word count: 60763
[Report This] Published: February 01, 2009 Updated: August 18, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I loved My Sacrifice so much so this one will definitely be added to my list of favorited stories! I've seen the same concept that was in that story many times and I think it is a testament to your writing that it was so well received...i.e. you're a brilliant writer! This story is starting out great. I love the role reversal (Edward having nightmares and not Bella as is usual in most fics) and her dreams. I can't wait until he pops the question. I wasn't expecting the sequel to be posted so soon so it was a pleasant surprise to find this!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!  I'm so glad you liked My Sacrifice so much.  I debated for quite a while on doing this one in Bella or Edward's POV.  Birdee suggested Edward since he was the one struggling now.  Poor Bella needed a break from her drama.  It's time for Edward's story.

I have so many ideas floating in my head for this story that I just had to get them out.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

This chapter started off sooo sweet....Edward dreaming about his mom approving of Bella and then James had to ruin the dream, dang him. I'm super happy that Bella forced Edward to talk to her. And that he's going to talk to a therapist. I was actually thinking through the first part of this that a therapist was exactly what he needed. Honestly, I'm thinking a couple of joint sessions with him and Bella probably wouldn't be a bad thing either. Loved the little guy bonding time we had there in the middle. I'm definitely excited to find out more about Tommy's new girlfriend and to hear Edward's talk with Charlie! Thanks for the super long chapter; loved it!



Author's Response:

I loved his dream with his mom.  I didn't plan on James being there, he just popped in while I was writing.

Bella learned a lot with the whole ordeal with James.  The most importatnt thing is to stand up for what she wants.  Edward saw the benefits of therapy and wants to be the man Bella deserves.  They definitely need a few sessions together.  They have both been through so much seperately and together.

I really missed the guys and figured we all needed a little bit of sweaty guy bonding :)

I think the whole time in Forks is my favorite part of next chapter.  I hope you guys will like it as much as me.

Edward tends to make the chapters lengthy.  I have a feeling there will be a lot in the future.  Thanks so much for the awesome indepth review.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Sweet chapter! Other than Drew! I can't figure out what's going on with that... other than that she's definitely bad news and I have a sinking feeling that Tommy is headed for heartbreak, but how does Bitt fit in all this? Mmmmm, it's definitely going to be interesting finding out. And Edward asking Charlie's permission was a cute scene! I eat that lovey-dovey stuff up, lol. I'm so excited to see how you decide to have Edward propose! Great job so far!



Author's Response:

Yeah, Drew was giving off the creepy vibes.  There is nothing evil about Bitt.  She and Tommy have been friends since he moved to Forks.  She just wants to see her friend happy and thinks her new friend Drew is perfect for him.

It was so much fun writing Edward asking for Charlie's blessing.  I'm a sappy romantic too.  I think once this is done I might have to write a sickeningly sweet fluffy story.

I hope Edward's proposal will live up to everyone's expectations.

Thanks so much!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Oh, the proposal was so sweet! I loved it and I loved the Edward asked Esme for help planning for it. I have a horrible feeling that things are just too good right now and it just won't last. But it will still be worth it. I also enjoyed that Edward is so willingly going into the therapy and Bella will join some of the sessions. This chapter was mega-sweet and awesome!



Author's Response:

Im so glad you loved the proposal.  I was so nervous how it would turn out.  I love Esme and think she is way under used in the fanfiction world.

Things never stay easy for our happy couple for long.  Edward wants to be the man Bella deserves and understands his issues are keeping him from being that.

Thanks so much reading and reviewing!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Another terrific chapter. Loved the shopping with Esme....especially the fact that Edward had to have so many games. Boys will be boys I guess, but I have to admit I would love to be able to afford an X-Box 360, and PS3, and a Wii. Poor Edward's nightmares are still horrible. Loved the interaction between Bella and Charlie about her ring and engagement. It was definitely cute. And Emmett...only Emmett...would be crude about Bella in front of her father. You gotta love him, lol. I'm definitely intrigued about Tommy and Drew. It will be interesting to see what, if anything, comes back on her background report.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

I live in a house with three guys and trust me, they want everything when it comes to the video games.  I can totally see Edward being that way too.

I still adore Charlie.  He and Emmett are both so much fun to write.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Wow, Drew is definitely confusing and even though she seems different now I'm inclined to agree with Edward though that something is still fishy there and her parents' absence seems remarkably well-timed. Whether Drew is Victoria or not, Victoria definitely seems to be getting closer to them. Glad they've got Charlie involved with what they know...and I, for one, loved the lemon! Can't wait for more...



Author's Response:

I love keeping you guys on your toes regarding Drew and Victoria.

Charlie will insist on being more involved in what is going on since James got so close to Bella.  He didn't like that at all.  He won't let anyone get that close to taking Bella away from him again.

I'm glad you loved the lemon.  Writing that from a guy's POV was very nerve wracking.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Nice chapter! Loved that the family dropped by to surprise (and embarass) Bella and Edward! I really hope the PI does a good job, it def. sounds promising. And I'm going crazy right along with Edward trying to figure out the Drew situation. Right now, I'm guessing that Carrie and Victoria are the same person. Can't wait to find out for sure what's going on!



Author's Response:

Emmett lives to embarass Bella and Edward.

Tyler is the best and you know its only the best for the Cullens.

Thanks so much for reviewing.  They always make me smile.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Uh-oh! What did Portland PD find? Ugh, I really hate cliffies like that, lol. The shifting dynamics of the mystery that is Drew in this chapter were interesting. I'm still hanging with my theory that Carrie is Victoria, and Drew was initially in on the plan with her, but she'd fallen for Tommy and found that she actually likes Bella and Edward as well and wants out but is afraid of Carrie/Victoria. Yeah, I've put some thought into this.

Love the running joke with the vegetables and Edward's confusion about why Emmett keeps bringing them up and why Bella blushes everytime, lol. Definitely incentive for anyone that hasn't read Oral Lessons to run over and read it.

And speaking of outtakes, I'm thinking Edward's erotic dreams may make some pretty damn good outtakes as well, especially if they were enough to make him blush of front of the doc, lol.

Silly, happy Bella made me happy as well and I love them being scared of the wrath of the pixie at the beginning.

Hated to hear that you were sick, but glad you're better now (hopefully) and thanks for getting us this new chapter!!!



Author's Response:

I like that you have put so much thought into this. A lot of questions will be answered in the next chapter.  I'm working hard to get out pretty fast.

Yeah, couldn't resist the Emmett teasing.  So much fun to write.

Hmm, I might just have to do an outtake of one of Edward's erotic dreams.

Yeah, Bella needed to cut loose and have some fun.  The wrath of the pixie scares me.

Thanks.  I am feeling much better.  You are very welcome.

Thanks so much for such an awesome review.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Wow, I'm so glad that they had a chance to talk to Drew/Bayleigh at the end there cause the beginning of this chapter had me confused as hell! And I was definitely proved wrong on most of my musings, haha. But I am glad that I was right in suspecting that Drew/Bayleigh wasn't a willing participant in the scheme anymore. Tommy doesn't get his heart broken, yay! And they've got some leads on getting Victoria! I really hope they also get a chance to help the real Drew Sinclair as well. Finally, some answers! I'm so happy I could dance, lol. Thanks for the super quick update! Loved it!!!!



Author's Response:

LOL, I was confused writing it at points.  After the last cliffy I couldn't finish this chapter without confronting Bayleigh.

A lot of people were wrong about Bayleigh.  Everyone was dead set that she was Victoria.  I planned for her to be Victoria until I wrote the first chapter.  I couldn't do that to Tommy.  I love him to much to break his heart that way.

A lot of questions have been answered, so now we can concentrate on the mess that is Edward and getting Victoria.

Thanks so much for reviewing.  Yours always make me smile.

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Things are looking up, yay! and the hunter has become the hunted, lol. Srsly, though Victoria and James are some sick, sick people. It's so sad to think that there are actually real people out there that are like them.

And OMG I cannot believe that Em actually came clean about his time inside the closet, and that definitely sounds kinda weird, but you know what I mean. Sometimes I gotta wonder if that boy has a death wish of some sort, lol. I was kinda surprised by Edward's lack of reaction, though looking back it may have just been that he was too scared of Bella to really react much to Emmett's tale. His interest in the activity is cute though.....Edward may develop a vegetable fetish with Bella, lol.

Another great chapter! Can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

Yes, Victoria and James are both very sick.  It's scary that there are people in the real world like that.

Yeah, Em needed to get everything out in the open.  He can still tease Bella.  Now he can irritate Edward while he does it.  Edward wasn't upset with Emmett for spying on the girls.  He would've been right beside Emmett in the closet if he had been home and known what was going on.  Edward is still a typical guy and would kill to get a video of that little lesson.  LOL, we'll have to see how Edward reacts to vegetables now.

Thanks so much for the great review as usual.

 
Lucid Dreams by verlore Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 233]
Summary:

 

 

 "Bella smiled warmly at me then, unaware of my secrets and the silent threats they made on her life..."

 

 

Lucid Dreams

 

 

Bella Swan is a highly eccentric art student in Seattle.

 

Edward Cullen is a mind-reading vampire, who is instantly drawn to her creative and colorful thoughts. (Yes, he can read her mind! Sort of.)

 

When devious little Alice catches a glimpse of their future, she'll do anything to get them together, including moving Bella in behind Edward's back!

 


Come play in the forums!

http://www.twilighted.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=33&t=2677

 

Rated NC-17 for swearing, drinking, violence, & later chapters.Totally AU.

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: None
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Completed: No Word count: 30602
[Report This] Published: February 10, 2009 Updated: May 21, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Six

OMG! Did Edward see Tiny Voice there towards the end? And let me just say that Tiny Voice rocked this chapter! Thanks to Tiny Voice my new goal in life is to kiss Jackson Rathbone....all for the sake of science, of course....hehe. I so completely love this story. Bella's actions and her thoughts and the way she reacts to stuff is just priceless. I love it! And Edward is great too. I loved the bit of excited Edward we got there towards the end and his happiness when remarked that Bella hadn't run. I loved when Bella kinda called Edward beautiful even though she didn't mean to say it out loud and all of their reactions to that. I'm really hoping that you'll give us a glimpse into Bella's mind when Alice and Edward confessed to her that they're vampires....I imagine her thought processes on that were all kinds of interesting. This story has quickly risen to become one of my top, all-time favorite stories and we're only on chapter 6.  It seriously just makes me smile soooo much. Thank you for sharing it with us.



Author's Response:

Oh yes he did :D   Jackson Rathbone *dreamy sigh* hehe

I just might write the later half of the chapter six in BPOV after I'm done with chapter 7, and add it in there.  We shall see :) 

I'm seriously thrilled that you're enjoying this story so much, thank you for your review!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Seven - Part One

AWESOME! Normally lengthy waits for new chapters irriate me but I love this story so much that I can't even find it within myself to be irritated about waiting. It's so worth the wait! Besides, we readers do understand that writers have lives besides writing yummy new chapters for us, lol. And to be completely fair to you the wait wasn't too awful long, so don't worry about it! Of course though I do have to confess that when I got the email saying this story had been updated, I totally squealed with happiness.

The beginning of this chapter was incredible! It was soooo intimate and quite steamy without anything really steamy having to occur. Bella's insecurity and Edward's reassurance was just fantastic. And when goes "My Bella"----Eeeee!! The moment between them was great and then enters Alice! LOL! Loved that Bella was going to barricade the door against her.

"Oh, you’re a vampire?  Well I’m insane, so it’s all gravy, baby."   Totally my favorite line ever! I was laughing my ass off at that one. Too perfect!

And it was sweet when Bella's thoughts went all Hallmark cardy.....and even better when Tiny Voice called her on that shit, but secretly liked it too. Tiny Voice is officially my new hero, by the way. I've even pictured her entering into the story with a little blue cape and a nice little theme song. See, I told you I identify with Bella in this story.

Loved that Alice tripped Edward out the window and the reasons behind her doing so. Funny as hell! It was sweet that Bella got all concerned about him. And I loved it when she and Alice cracked up after Alice explained what had happened.

And then the mental visions....Edward without his shirt, all wet in the shower... *shudders*  I'm totally with Tiny Voice again....do whatever the hell it takes to trap him in the bathroom. Go in and barricade that door! Loved that Tiny V had her tool belt on ready to take care of that.

The little EPOV in the middle there was nice. Always great to hear from Edward! And he's smitten! Hehe! How cute. Write fluff anytime you feel like it, seriously, you're great at it!

And the last of it was honestly every bit as good as the beginning. Edward getting a little embarassed? Awww!!!! And them having a bet and Edward owing Alice a car. Loved Alice's reaction to that and Bella's suggestion of making it a yellow one! But that girl seriously needs to learn how to knock before she upsets Tiny V!   The ending was fab- I could just hear it now- No Alice, don't throw me out the window, too!...lol.

I really like the idea of really long chapters broke down into two or three updates so we get quicker updates. More Lucid Dreams is always a good thing! You've definitely become one of my top three fav ff authors! LOVED THIS CHAPTER AND LOVE THE STORY!!!!!!



Author's Response:

O_O Oh my gosh.  Thank you so much for taking the time to tell me this!  I do apologize for the lengthy update time - I'm doing my best to prevent such things in the future.  I'm glad that you're enjoying my crazy little tale, I'm sorry for taking so long to respond!  Totally made my day with this review,  thank you thank you!  :D

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Seven - Part Two

I think this is the only Twilight story I've ever read that I actually prefer Bella's pov to Edward's....including Twilight/MS cause I loved the dozen MS chapters more than the whole Twilight book, but even though this one was all Edward it was simply fantastic! The lust, the love, the anger, the Tanya hating.....TERRIFIC! This story makes me want to scream and shout and jump up and down. I was sooooo happy when Alice punched Tanya for Bella! God bless that tiny pixie vampire! LOL! 

Also totally adored Jasper's commentaries in his thoughts on the emotions throughout the chapter and Bella figuring out a way to talk to Edward in her head. Last chapter had the funniest line ever, this one though held one of the most profound lines ever “It’s all about perspective, Edward.  How else would you expect to freshen your views of the world, if you’re always looking at it the same way?”

LOVED THAT! Awesome line and completely Bella! I love how she makes Edward want to experience things again. And the steamy dancing was fan-freaking-tastic! Amazing, amazing, amazing chapter! Please update soon? Pretty please with Tiny Voice on top?  :D

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Seven - Part Three

When I saw this story had been updated again, I totally squealed in delight. I have missed Tiny Voice sooo sooo sooo much. It was just wonderful to hear from Tiny Voice once again....oh yeah, and the other characters too, I guess. ;D   And please don't apologize for the fluffiness cause I totally loved it. They need some nice fluffiness to counteract Bella's craziness and Edward's emoness, lol.

I loved Bella's childlike behavior at the beginning of the story. I think that innocent quality to her mind is probably one of the best things about it. Plus who doesn't love to stick your fingers in your ears and dance around singing loudly? Lol.

I also discovered just how wonderful it is that in this story Edward can get mental pictures from Bella. "Edward growled in response to my mental image." Hehe....she can get him all hot and bothered without moving or saying a word. You've got to appreciate that.

And painting on Edward Cullen...yum! Lucky Bella. There's just something hot about painting someone too....that'd be a great date idea actually. At least to me it would be, lol.

"Tiny Voice stood at my side, making lewd squeezy-hand gestures towards him. I don’t know what it is about him that turns me into some lust-ridden – Bella and Tiny Voice scoping out Edward's ass while he worked in the kitchen was definitely one of the highlights of this chapter and him knowing that Bella was looking at his ass just made it all that much better. Tiny Voice is still definitely my hero!

" I’d rather have Edward slathered in syrup any day-Edward dropped the fork as a low growl rumbled deep in his chest."  hehe...more benefits to Edward's mind-reading. Of course though who wouldn't want Edward slathered in syrup....yum again! :D

I'm so thrilled that Emmett is finally there. Rosalie not so much, but I love Emmett and his crazy antics. Him keeping the car from moving was really cute, as was his method for winning the race against Rose. I have a feeling that he and Bella will really get along.

Forks should be quite interesting. Can't wait for more! Terrific as always!

 




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