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Penname: TeamJasper13 [ Contact]
Real name: Lisa
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Summary: Bella and Edward were secret best friends during one of the best periods of Bella's life. Their friendship has waned. When they are forced back together, untold secrets are revealed. When the truth is out there, will anyone feel lucky?

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Jessica, Lauren, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: Yes
Word count: 78205
[Report This] Published: December 30, 2008 Updated: April 12, 2009
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: March 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Three Little Birds
Finally! :D So glad that Bella seems to be coming to her senses now...even if it took three different people to push her in the right direction. Loved it!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: March 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: After The Storm
You're totally forgiven for the miscount on the chapters cause it's awesome that we've still got more than just the epilogue to look forward to. The toothbrush was spectacular and loved that Bella (with help from Rosalie and Esme) switched things around on Edward....i.e. getting the apt. ready for them. Loved how sweet, yet awkward everything was between E & B in this chapter. And Esme was awesome when he called to ask her about the restaurant, hehe. Can't wait for the big date!!!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: April 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Love is All Around
Hehe, lemons are always a great way to end things, or begin things, or to just throw in the middle of things, lol. Very nice ending! It was kinda funny to me how they neither one seemed to be able to say sex, it was all "you know". It was cute and awkward and very true to the nature of the story. It was really fit the premise of the story that they made love on just an ordinary Tuesday, making Tuesday lucky. I'd definitely love to see an epilogue! I've really enjoyed reading this story!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: April 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 20: Epilogue
What a beautiful and unique wedding and perfect for Bella and Edward. I loved what they'd done with thier lives. Wonderful ending to an amazing story! And I'm so excited that you'll be concentrating on BAT! And a new story coming soon from HM? YAY! Good news all around!
Summary: Bella and Edward's relationship is frowned upon by both sets of parents. They find themselves separated without the means to find each other. With the help of Alice and her infatuation with the personal ads will Bella be able to find her long lost boyfriend?
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No
Word count: 64331
[Report This] Published: January 03, 2009 Updated: October 15, 2009
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: January 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
This story is really good. It's a neat idea and fits what I would think Bella and Edward's human sides to be. I'm really interested to see what the ad actually says and I can't wait for Bella and Edward to find each other again!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
This story is definitely original and terrific. You're right too, even though I haven't seen it done before I could definitely see Alice as working for a newspaper, which is cool cause most fics just put her in fashion or something like that. I'm really excited to read more of this!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 08, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Thanks for the EPOV. I was definitely wondering why the ads had stopped running for a while and why the message had changed to him fearing he'd lost her. Can't wait for the reunion!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
OMG! I loved it. The reunion was just what I though it should be! Squeal! I'm so happy. Great chapter....I loved how the gang all supported Bella and the build-up to the reunion was soo intense and then when she ran to Edward and they were both crying and holding each other. Ahhh, perfect! :) I can't wait to find out what happens for our couple next, but I'd also like to see this chapter from Edward's pov too! Awesome job here!
Summary: Edward is a lonely vampire who has been waiting for over eighty years to find his soul mate. His sister Alice has never been able to see his true love, but for good reason--she hadn't been born yet. When Alice finally sees her, plans are made to finally make Edward's dream come true.
This is a different version of Twilight, and it's told from Edward's point of view.
A little lemony, but not too graphic. Rated NC-17 for mature themes and language, and possibly for violence in later chapters.

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Categories: Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Eric, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Laurent, Mike, Renee, Rosalie, Tanya, Tyler
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 38 Completed: Yes
Word count: 157222
[Report This] Published: January 06, 2009 Updated: May 21, 2009
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: January 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Thwarting Mike
I really enjoyed this chapter- it was definitely nice to see the teenager side of Edward. And Alice and Rose are both terrific...Edward's lucky to have such good sisters, lol. Thanks for the update and I'll be hoping for another one soon! Author's Response: Thank you. I like thinking of them as teens too. It's gotta' be weird for them, to have all this world experience and yet be trapped in a teenage body. Lots of playing to be done with that. I also like making Rose nicer. Chapter 4 is already to my beta. Thanks for reading, and check out my other 4 stories. Come play with us on forums!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Truth or Dare
I loved the chapter, but please, please tell me she didn't faint right there in front of everyone! That would be so humiliating for poor Bella! I really enjoyed it all, especially the sweetness from Edward, but I had kind of imagined their first kiss being more private. Anyways, I can't wait for more! Author's Response: Yes. Bella fainted before everybody and their dog! But she wasn't as humiliated as you might expect...
Yes, the kiss was public, but several good things came out of that. Edward stakes his claim, sending Mike a message. Instead of it being a humiliating situation, most of the girls in the room are either swooning over Edward's hotness or jealous that it wasn't them that Edward was kissing. Hope that clarifies some things. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Seventeen
Okay, you were right...it wasn't too bad for Bella afterwards, lol, especially with Jessica being so jealous. And that backseat private moments more than made up for it anyway. Sweet chapter. I'm loving wonderful, horny, seventeen year old Edward! Author's Response: I'm glad you believed in me. Mike and Jessica getting an eyeful of E/B was a good thing. And the whole backseat scene was fun to write. Thanks for reading, TJ!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Afterglow
Awwww....Edward in love is so cute. I'm glad they're official and can't wait to see the reactions at school. Horny, seventeen Edward and Bella in this chapter were great, but it was nice to get a glimpse of our familiar conflicted Edward as well. I'm glad Alice called him and put a stop to his nonsense though. I was so excited to see two new chapters of this story! I can't wait for more!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Making Out 101
Hmmm, I wonder how the werewolves are going to play into this story. I'm glad that Bella seemed repulsed by Jacob...poor Edward not being able to go rescue her! I know that had to be tough for him. I think it's nice that Bella's mom is pregnant. I hope maybe B & E will be able to visit them.
My absolulte favorite part of this story had to be the note from the All-Seeing Pixie! Definitely cute and very Alice! I also enjoyed all the sweetness though and the teasing from A & J after B & E spent the morning kissing in the car. Saucy Bella is great...I love it. I am so happy you post really quick chapter updates soo I get to find out right after I leave this review what happened to Bella! Awesome!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Accident Magnet
Poor Edward...I felt so bad for him at the beginning of this chapter. I loved the family's interaction with Bella. Can't wait to find out what happens during her week with the Cullens. Thanks so much for not leaving us with a cliffhanger! Author's Response: I'm glad you felt sorry for Edward--I really wanted you all to feel for him. And I like all the Cullens, so I like to include all of them in my stories. Thanks for reading TJ!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Bella Moves In
Well, all I've got to say is bring on the fluff and the horny Teenward any day. This chapter was so enjoyable and soo cute. I loved the sweet and steamy scenes between Edward and Bella....and the sibling stuff, especially the conversation between the brothers at the end there. Mmmmm, I do wonder what Rose and Alice had to talk to Bella about though. You've got me wondering about the foreshadowing in the chapter now.....I can't wait to find out if any of my thoughts will be right on that. Great chapter here! Author's Response: Oh T.J.! Come to forums and tell me what your thinking of the foreshadowing. I'm dying to know! We are in the Twilight section of fanfic. Glad you like my little bits o' fluff. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Testing Limits
Thanks for the super quick update! Awesome chapter here. I loved how Bella turned the whole seduction thing around on Edward, hehe. I have a feeling that we'll have a vampire conversation coming up soon. Also loved Emmett's crude comments, lol. And I absolutely loved the cute little bantering between Bella and Edward. Perv-ward....I like it.
Also, I'm so sorry for your loss. I know I don't really know you, but you'll be in my thoughts and prayers tomorrow. Author's Response: Thanks for the sympathy TJ. I appreciate the thoughts and prayers.
I'm having more fun than should humanly (or inhumanly--lol!) be allowed writing this. I'm really glad you all like my writing. I'm truly humbled by all the nice comments. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Officially a Cullen
Awesome chapter. I loved Carlisle and Esme giving Bella a cell phone and especially her own Cullen Crest...making her an official Cullen...awww. And Alice, hehe....."does she have to love me so early in the morning"...how can you not love Alice? :) The part where Esme walked in on them in the garage was also really cute and then where Esme hit Emmett for Edward, lol. Loved it all! Author's Response: Thanks, TJ. I'm so glad that you liked all the little elements. I wanted to promote tooth decay with the sweetness--lol! Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Bella's Party
Yeah....that so wasn't what I was expecting. Wow...just wow. I'm as speechless as Edward was after he saw Bella's b-day dress. I'm dying to know what was going through Bella's head on this one. Wow. I really never saw this chapter coming. I'm definitely excited to see where you're taking this, lol. BTW- I just have to thank you for all the super quick updates! Seriously...you're like the queen of updates now in my book...and I'm loving it! And no hating here...I'm gonna trust that things get better; you're definitely right that any good story needs some angst. Author's Response: Thanks for the love, TJ. I've heard so many different emotions on reviews.
Updates are quick because I have so much of this already written. Also, my beta is a vampire and uses her super human speed to validate my stories--lol! Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Truth
You totally deserved the trust you asked for in the last chapter. Even though the first part of the chapter was filled with tension, it was good. Loved when Bella slapped Mike, lol. That poor boy really does end up being the punching bag for fan fiction though...I think he's usually slapped/punched/verbally abused more than anyone else in fics, lol...not that I mind. Then the dramatic forest scene as you called it was awesome. I don't care that it was dramatic...it was probably my favorite scene in this entire story so far. I could just see that scene playing out in my mind...awesome. Can't wait for more! Thanks for the super-quick updates as always! Author's Response: Credit for the fast updates needs to be shared with my incredible beta, shabbyapple.
Mike is the punching bag of Twilight fanfic, isn't he? Poor guy. But in my story, he totally deserves it.
Glad you liked the forest scene. I could see it play out in my head too. I felt that scene. It was great to write. Thanks for reading, TJ!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
Loved the fluff and humor! And in my opinion angst is always welcome too...so long as it is properly resolved eventually! And props to shabbyapple...definitely one of the fastest betas I've ever seen. You guys make a great duo! Author's Response: Thanks TJ. Yeah--shabby's the best! Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 16, 2009
Title: I've Been Waiting for You for Forever
Way to go Bella! She stood up for herself and then got a little bit of action too, lol. Great chapter as usual!
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: February 23, 2009
Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Snow Angel
I just caught up and I love the direction things are going in. Poor Edward--he was kinda giving me whiplash with his mood swings there for a while. And I'm glad that they're working things out slowly. It wouldn't seem right for Bella just to be able to forgive and forget just like that here. I'm definitely curious as to what is wrong with Bella. I was leaning toward's bulimic, but that was ruled out in this chapter. We were so close to finding out...you're such a tease, lol. I enjoyed the snow angel and fluffiness and the Assmett comment! Author's Response: Glad you like it where I'm going. Next chapter will tell us all what is going on with Bella. I haven't written it yet, and I have a horribly busy week, so I'm not sure when I'll get to it. I'm a musician, and I have a gig to play this week.
And yes, I'm a tease. But it keeps you all coming back for more--lol! Thanks for reading, TJ.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: March 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Changes
Wow. That was really a twist, but you definitely explained it well and it's a very unique way of having Bella changed into a vampire. I was totally way off on where I thought it was going with her sickness....I was thinking of all kinds of different human diseases. Definitely interesting. And I'm really glad Jasper had that conversation with Edward; he definitely needed it. Overall, loved it! Author's Response: Thanks TJ. Glad you liked it and that I surprised you. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: March 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Resolutions
Loved it. Definitely cute and fluffy and a nice insight into Edward's mind.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed    
Date: March 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Telling
Wow. The first half of this one was incredibly difficult. The whole thing with Charlie....wow. That's so tough. Poor Bella. But the last part totally rocked! That part where Edward told Lauren off and then the rest of the Cullens backed him up was FABULOUS! I really loved Rosalie's line! Just so awesome! Totally loved it and I'm sooo excited to see what other surprises you have in store for us and how things work out with Charlie and the wolves! Author's Response: Thank you for the review, TJ. I plan to resolve things with Charlie in the next chapter. And there will be some sort of meeting with the wolves. I enjoyed writing the whole "Lauren gets told off" speech. I'm glad you like what I'm doing. I hope I can keep surprising you.
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