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Real name: Lisa
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Summary:

 

When Charlie catches Bella and Edward in a compromising position how will he react?

What tactics will Edward and Bella have to resort to in order to get time alone together again?

 

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Categories: Twilight Characters: Bella, Charlie, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 43 Completed: Yes Word count: 134267
[Report This] Published: November 16, 2008 Updated: December 07, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 25: Things to Remember When Playing Scrabble

Ohh, poor Charlie. And poor Edward. And Poor Bella. This chapter made me feel bad for all of them, hehe, but it was funny and I'll never look at playing Scrabble the same way again. :D  

 
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Date: March 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 26: I-A-M-S-O-R-R-Y

You have to love it when someone gives Emmett a little shit back, lol. That card was brilliant, but Bella's response was even better! :D  And the chapter started out pretty darn nice too! ;)

 
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Date: March 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 27: What Could Happen While Driving

Sex-crazed Bella, haha. Yeah Edward will definitely have a problem when Bella is actually stronger than him. Loved Emmett's new found respect for Bella and the appearance of PossessiveWard is always welcome! Can't wait for more in the chronicles of the sex-obsessed Edward and Bella!

 
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Date: March 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 28: Who Was I Kidding?

This story, and especially Charlie's pov, always has me ROTFLMAO. Women chasing him, wanting Bella to become a nun, that little part about him wanting to marry Edward himself, sneaking into the house and expecting them to be playing "Scrabble" on the kitchen table. All sooo hilarious. Normally I love Edward pov more than anything in stories, but with you Charlie's pov is quickly becoming my fav! Of course though the EPOV was great here too. Him confirming his intentions to Emmett and making Bella feel better....mmmm love that Sweetward! Great chapter!

 
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Date: April 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 29: Do Re Mi

Well, that talk with Charlie wasn't near as bad as what I was imagining, but the visit to get birth control definitely was, lol. Totally understand them being uncomfortable....it always made me uncomfortable to have to go for an exam. And Edward singing to try to distract himself was hilarious. Loved that he started off with Christmas songs and then analyzed every line of do, re, mi. Too funny as always! Looking forward to more of this!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 30: Charlie's Dream

Too funny, lol. Poor Charlie. Thanks for posting and hope you and your family feels better soon! We had the round of the flu here a few months ago, so I know how much it sucks!

 
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Date: April 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 31: Forever

Great chapter. I'm so happy that Edward told Bella he wanted to change her at some point and time. I really can't think of one pov in particular that I really want. Maybe Rosalie being bitchy to someone cause of all the Cullen attention, lol.

 
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Date: May 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 32: Random Observations

I am so thrilled that this update was placed right after Render to Sender. It was definitely nice to have this story and this chapter full of love, happiness, and humor after reading that update. Not that it's not a totally awesome story, but yeah I needed this fun stuff after that, lol. It was a terrific chapter and so funny. I think EmPov was probably my favorite. It definitely made me laugh a lot. Although so did Lunch Lady Linda and the deluded minds of Mike and Jessica. I also enjoyed the little bit of horndog coming out of Carlisle, lol. Great chapter. Can't wait for more Charlie!

 
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Date: May 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 33: Vampires Don't Get Nervous Part II (V to the J)

Agh! That definitely wasn't the nicest place to leave it! I wish I could be as sure as Charlie of Bella's response, but I'm actually expecting the worst. It may have been better for Charlie to refuse to give his blessing and tell Bella so she'd get all defiant and marry Edward anyway, lol. J/K. But I seriously hope you deviate from canon on her response to the proposal.

And this chapter was, as always, freaking hilarious. Vampires don't get nervous, lol. I still love that and Charlie's pov was marvelous as usual. Leave a bowl of condoms by the phone! LMAO! Love, love, love, love it! Please update soon with the proposal!!!

 
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Date: May 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 34: What's Behind The Door

You go Edward! That's how you propose to a woman!!!! Wooo-hooo! Yeah, I liked the proposal just a little bit, can't you tell? Different from usual and very, very, very romantic and heartwarming. And THANK GOD she just said yes! I'm beyond thrilled about that, but honestly I don't know how anyone could have said anything other than yes to that proposal, lol. Perfect scene. So fluffy and gooey sweet it makes me want to start crying happy tears. Great job!

 
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Date: May 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 35: Good News Travels Fast

I enjoyed getting back to the funnier aspects of the story in this chapter. Edward continually spacing out and Bella rambling on and on was quite funny. I also enjoyed Charlie (as always) and his gruff acceptance of their engagement, as well as him telling everyone proudly about it. Can't wait for them to get to school! LOVED IT!

 
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Date: June 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 36: Mmm...zebras (V to the J)

I completely understand about writers block and RL and stuff, but I do have to say that I was extremely happy to see an update on this story again since it never fails to make me smile! I was all out laughing when Mr. Banner had called Ms. Cope to inform her about the engagement. And I was torn in my feelings towards Lauren, Mike, and Jessica. It was a little bit pity, a little bit angry, and a good bite just laughing at their stupid asses! :D Loved Emmett as always! Someday someone really needs to let Emmett plan an entire wedding and write it all down so I can read it! :D Loved it and looking forward to more! :D



Author's Response:

Yeah, I think that I don't want this to end so I was putting it off but now that that chapter is done I have no problem with the rest of it. 

Yes, the teachers have their own gossip chain too.  It's a small town and this was big news.  It was only natural that they got in on the action too.

You have to feel a little sorry for Jessica, Mike and Lauren.  Well maybe not Lauren so much.  They just are so self involved that they don't see how happy they really are.  All they see is that they aren't getting what they want.

You are the second person to mention an Emmett planned wedding and the more I think of it the more I like it so I shall write it one day.  I will send it your way first so  you can give some input so keep an eye on the inbox.

Thank you for the wonderful review and more is coming soon.

Jaime

 
Finding the Key by eibbil Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 571]
Summary:

Bella woke up in the Phoenix hospital and couldn't remember how she got there. A year later, she's living in Jacksonville with her mother, but she still has no memory of her four months in Forks. Can she recover what she lost by returning?


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: Yes Word count: 49326
[Report This] Published: November 25, 2008 Updated: March 18, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

I absolutely love your story! It's so awesome. I just got finished with all the chapters you have posted and I'm practically drooling for more. Please, please update again soon!



Author's Response:

Chapter 7 is going into queue tonight!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7

I'm so happy that you updated quickly, but I'm so upset that it's a cliffhanger! You're cruel, lol! Seriously, though, awesome chapter! The beginning with Edward and Alice was great. I've always loved the teasing, gentle good humor that is between them, and Alice's smugness! I'm so happy that Bella remembered vegetarian, but I kind of wished she would have told Edward. I also love the little interludes into Edward's mind that you give us, but even from Bella's pov you can tell Edward is fighting with himself, torn between joy at Bella remembering things and still loving him and grief because of those same things because he wants to keep her safe. The sweetness and conversation between the two of them in this chapter was awesome as well! And then you had to end it with that darn cliffie! Oh well, I guess I'll just be checking my email everyday, hoping for another quick update! :)  Terrific chapter!

 
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Date: February 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9

I'm glad the writer's block is over and even though quick updates are loved...this chapter was definitely worth the wait. I'm really hoping Alice goes home and gives Edward hell! I know they went through all this in the books but it seems even worse right here after she'd done been through so much and you think he'd be able to see the reasonableness of her request. The first part of the chapter was definitely extrememly sweet though. And Charlie....how can you not love Charlie, especially right here! I'll keep my finges crossed that the writer's block stays away and hope for another update soon, lol! You and the story are definitely awesomesauce to use your own words!

 
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Date: March 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11

I think an epilogue would be terrific. I was actually really looking forward to vampire Bella meeting her family for the first time and it was a little disappointing that you didn't include that here. I can just imagine the terrific scene between her and Emmett, lol. Plus I just don't want this story to end yet! It's too good! I absolutely love your vamp Bella and the carefree Edward you portray. Like I said, I really hope you add just one more chapter or two, but whatever you decide I have truly enjoyed reading this story! It's been terrific the whole way through! Even if you don't prolong this one, I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for any future stories from you!

 
Feeling Better by skeptiik Rated: PG starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 58]
Summary:

Edward's POV during the attempted suicide and the following nights, as he and Bella rebuild their relationship. A companion scene to the last few chapters of NM.

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Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella, Charlie, Edward, Jacob
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Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes Word count: 18253
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2008 Updated: January 02, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 26, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, you said you wanted honest reviews and honestly I thought it was great. You really captured Edward's grief and pain and then his amazement and happiness very well. Very nice job!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 26, 2008 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I really liked this one as well. I kinda wish you hadn't skipped around a bit....I'd like to read the whole story, but I imagine it is probably pretty hard to write from Edward's pov....having to include the thoughts of all the other characters as well as his. But I still loved it!

 
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Date: December 26, 2008 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

PLEASE PLEASE continue this! I love it! So please, please, please, please continue it!

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Thanks for finishing this up. I loved the first few chapters and this one was not disappointing at all. It was absolutely terrific!

 
The Cutting of Cords by lofi Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 404]
Summary:

 

I stepped back to the table, and grasped her prone hand. It was already measurably cooler, defeating the swirling heat of her dying heart. The coolness subsumed the scar on her hand. I cringed inwardly. Ironically, where James had failed, I would succeed, leeching all heat from her bones...

What she'd begged me for, what I'd refused, was nevertheless happening.

Edward's point of view, beginning on page 351 of Breaking Dawn, from Renesmee's birth, currently up to Bella's arrival home from her first hunt.

 

the cutting of cords

 

 


Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renesmee, Rosalie
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Series: None
Chapters: 14 Completed: No Word count: 38506
[Report This] Published: November 30, 2008 Updated: August 01, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Falling to Fly

I love this story! Some of my favorite chapters from the entire series were the ones detailing Bella's first days as a vampire and it's really satisfying to hear them described from Edward's pov. Can't wait for more; you're doing a suberb job!



Author's Response:

Those were really luscious, weren't they? Sexy specks of dust... hehe.

 
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Date: February 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: First Hunt

Don't really know what to say....other than I loved it! Can't wait for more, especially Jasper's reaction (what Edward hears him thinking) when he finds out that Bella didn't hunt the humans! Brilliant chapter!



Author's Response:

Poor Jasper... It's a good thing vampires don't get aneurysms. ;)

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: The Smallest Problem

Not what I was expecting this chapter to be, but still nice. Favorite part has to be the little bit from Seth there at the end. I definitely think he is a character that is often overlooked, but one of the best parts of BD. Good chapter...looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

Seth is good fun. One of the things that I find refreshing about Twilight, honestly, is characters that try to do the right thing. I'm a bit burnt out on antiheroes, I suppose...

 
Love Story by Katikittie Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 363]
Summary:

 

Bella spent the last 5 years after high school with her abusive boyfriend, James. Finally she can't take it anymore and leaves. Will she ever heal? Will her family want her back? When she is reunited with her high school crush will she fall all over again, or will she be too broken to let herself?

Banner by Mrs.C! Thank you very much!!

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, James, Jasper, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: No Word count: 39979
[Report This] Published: November 30, 2008 Updated: November 21, 2009


Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13

I just started reading and I'm really enjoying this story. Poor Bella...but it does make sense that it will take time for her heal completely. I'm just so happy her and Edward finally got their heads straight. Personally, I can't wait for more fluff, lol, but the angst is also nice. I'm really looking forward to reading more!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate it! I'll try and bring in more fluff! ^_^

 
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15

Poor Bella still has a lot of crap to work through, but I'm glad she's taking steps to help herself. Plus we get Sweetward helping her along and we can always use more Sweetward in our lives! Nice chapter! Almost as good as waking up next to Edward....almost. :D



Author's Response:

Yes, Sweetward is very nice ^_^

Almost as good huh...i guess i'm better than i thought!

 




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