Your donations help keep this site running,
thank you very much for the support!
Penname: lilyflower [Contact]
Real name: lily
Status: Member
Member Since: December 09, 2008
Website:
Beta-reader:

[Report This]
 
 
Reviews by lilyflower
 
Summary:

 

Bella Swan spent the first two years of her life in Forks developing a friendship with Jacob Black that finally turned into something more.  As she begins her senior year of high school, a new family moves to town and Bella slowly begins to question the path she thought her life would follow.  Sometimes there is a difference between what you think you need and what you never knew you wanted.  Takes place during the timeframe of New Moon and Eclipse.  J/B at first, but eventually E/B. 

 

IVO Banner

 


Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: No Word count: 170230
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2009


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: March 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 32: Hypocrisy

I loved this chapter Oxy! It really was amazing. I love how you showed us what Bella was feeling in such a realistic way. You made me understand and totally get Bella's feelings. I must admit that before I read this I was a little unsure about how I'd like it.

Because I've read stories in the past where characters are bitter, but its never really explained why and I always end up coming away from these chapters wishing that the character would just stop being bitter. I usually just read bitter chapters to get to the next chapter, knowing that they had to be bitter for a while but not really understanding their emotions.

But it I didn't feel that with this chapter, because I really understood why Bella felt bitter. I felt like I was right there with her.  It was realistic and made perfect sense. Because Bella wasn't just being bitter to hold a grudge and be revengeful. Mostly she had just been so hurt by Edward that she couldn't help it.

I liked her conversation with Renee. It's nice to see Renee having a chance to be a mom to Bella, because I think she really does care about Bella.  The part where Alice brought over an ABBA cd for Bella to torture Edward with was funny.  Thanks so much for writing this amazing chapter :)

 



Author's Response:

I love it when Renee shows up.  We don't see a lot of her in fanfic, and I think she's important to show why Bella is the way she is and to give Bella an outlet to vent, as Bella has very few friends outside the Cullens and Jake.  Also, the fact that you understood Bella's feeling is such a wonderful compliment; I worked very hard to try and make it clear why she was bitter and not just have her spend the entire chapter fuming at Edward instead of sorting through her feelings. 

 
Broken by alice_laughed Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 131]
Summary:

Claire's mom took their family away shortly after finding out about Quil.  The implications of a broken imprint are far reaching and can impact you - body and soul.  The bond is deeper than anyone ever realized.


Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Quil
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 39574
[Report This] Published: July 30, 2008 Updated: September 28, 2009


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: March 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Amazing chapter! You do such a good job of showing the reader how Claire is feeling. Poor Claire, you can't blame her for jumping to the conclusion that Quil doens't love her. I don't think Quil has put himself in her shoes. It's cute though that he was sleeping with her. I'm thinking he's been doing that every night so she won't be in pain.  I really liked this line "Some days went by in minutes.  Some minutes took hours." Thanks for the great chapter!

 
Summary:

Leah 

Leah Clearwater is someone who has always been left behind. Her father is gone, her Sam has moved on and her body has betrayed her. Where is her happily ever after? When dawn broke the Twilight world changed, but not for Leah. Thanks to the Cullens she is stuck in limbo between barely a woman and sort of a wolf. Will she ever find a way to live in peace with the vampires she has come to blame for her unhappiness? Will an unexpected friendship save her when she finally finds love in the most desperate of circumstances? Can you ever truly be fixed once you've been broken?


Categories: Post-Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jared, Jasper, Leah, Nessie, Other Character, Quil, Rosalie, Sam, Seth
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No Word count: 38177
[Report This] Published: October 26, 2008 Updated: May 04, 2009


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Sorry I Thought About Mauling Your Face

I really liked the chapter. Sam was definitely an arrogent jerk. But you can kind of understand why he reacted that way. I hope he comes around. The conversation with Jasper at the end was funny. Thanks for the great chapter!



Author's Response:

Welcome! Hope you keep reading!

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Can You Say Anaphylactic Shock?

So I've decided that Luke and Leah are officially cute together. And I pretty much love Luke. The crime fighting bit was funny. I'm excited for him to meet everyone. Thanks for the chapter!

 
Summary:

So, can men and women really be friends?  Edward Masen thinks so, and he's determined to prove it to the new woman in his life.  Edward Masen is a professor at the University of Oklahoma who is dedicated to his work and his family.  His niece, little Lilly Whitlock, is a first grader with a particularly pretty teacher named Isabella Swan.  Edward then struggles to keep his relationship with Isabella strictly on the friendship level, which proves to be difficult the more they get to know each other.

Photobucket 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Completed: No Word count: 66524
[Report This] Published: October 29, 2008 Updated: November 30, 2009


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: December 09, 2008 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Baby Fish Mouth

I just had to let you know I really like your story. I really like how you're portraying edward and bella. I just seem to connect with them. The thing I've loved the most so far is Edward's POV in this chapter. I love love love how you had him feel socially ackward. It always seems to be Bella is feels socially ackward and never Edward. But that has never made sense to me. Edward feels ackwardness too! Anyway, it was very refreshing to see Edward shown this way.

I can't wait for the next chapter on this. And thanks for getting this chapter out so soon after chapter 4 :)

 

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 : Why Not?

Fun chapter! Alice's grudge against store bought halloween costumes was funny. That is so Alice. It's nice to see Bella and Edward actually be friends before they go right into a relationship. But I still want to lock them in a closet together until they figure it out :)



Author's Response:

hmmm locking them in a closet.  i like it! 

 
Summary:

The trauma suffered by Bella for three years has left lasting mental scars.  Esme and Carlisle are finally offered the chance to be true parents to a teenager that needs them.  Surrounded by the support and love of the Cullen family, Bella begins to grow and finds out there is more to life than simply surviving.

 sots banner 2


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 91654
[Report This] Published: November 04, 2008 Updated: August 19, 2009


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: April 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Oh, poor Bella! I totally get why she's scared. But I'm sad that she's back to being so scared. I wonder if the Denali's will leave soon, I'm not sure if Bella will ever be comfortable around Laurent. I loved all the parts where Edward was all protective :) I especially loved when he caught her.  I was smiling at that part along with Alice :) Thanks for the great chapter Lady Saffir!



Author's Response:

You always seem to know how to ask the questions that I can't answer until the next chapter, at the earliest. :)  Just wait till you see where Edward is.  *giggle*  Thanks!

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: April 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Great chapter! I liked seeing Tanya trying to figure out Edward and Bella's relationship. I thought it was a good way to introduce the suspicion to the Cullens that Edward and Bella might get together. It makes sense that it'd come from an outsider. I really liked seeing Bella blow up at Tanya. Good sign that she did that and cool 'cause Tanya deserved it.

I also liked how Edward stayed watching over Bella as she slept. I loved his line when he said it was 'just in case'. Cute to see him being protective and caring over Bella. Thanks for the great chapter!



Author's Response:

*snicker*  Just wait a few chapters.  At least, I think it will be in a few chapters.  Esme's had her suspicions, but I'd love to see the look on Carlisle's face when Tanya brought up the possibility. :)  Thanks!

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: June 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Good chapter! I like the way you had Bella react to the news that she was going to have to be changed. It is much more realistic for her to be upset about it at this point. I'm glad that you didn't just have her be okay with it.

I was kind of hoping that Edward would be the one to comfort her here. But it does make sense that Carlisle and Esme would be the ones to talk to her. I like how you've made them into real parent figures in this story.  And hopefully there will be some good Edward/Bella scenes soon : Thanks for the great chapter!

 



Author's Response:

Nope, Bella isn't okay with it, regardless of how she reacts afterward.  And I love getting to show Carlisle and Esme in true parenting form.  They need the love, and someone who truly needs it.  I swear, SWEAR that there will be ExB.  We just need to get there.  Thanks!

 
Summary:

Bella Swan is about to embark on the biggest tour of her musical career, but all that is put at risk after a night at a New Year's Party in London. And once the press finds out her secret, all hell will break lose. Follow Bella and Edward as they try to make sense of everything when it all falls apart.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Completed: No Word count: 36420
[Report This] Published: November 23, 2008 Updated: June 02, 2009


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: When It All Falls Apart

I really love your story. It's really nice to read something original, I haven't seen a story like this before. I'm really anxious to see if the press has found out. Thanks for writing!

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: March 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Just Dance

I really liked this chapter. I'm glad that they're not going to let the tabloids win. It really makes more sense for them to give the story to someone else. I liked the giggling scene. Thanks for writing!

 
Summary:

 

Let's pretend that Jane Austen had the idea for Twilight first...

janeportrait2.jpg Austen's Twilight Banner picture by Jaxidy


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Mike, Rosalie, Tyler
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Completed: No Word count: 16200
[Report This] Published: December 04, 2008 Updated: August 18, 2010


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Posts & Preconceived Notions

I absolutely adore your story. You do an amazing job of mixing Jane Austen and Twilight. It sounds like something out of a Jane Austen book, but it still is the basic twilight story that we all love. Thanks for writing this amazing story!

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: March 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Pride & Prejudice

Great chapter! I loved the nod to the truck-on-ice scene from the book.  I like how you kept the same intensity of feeling that the book had even though it is in a different time period.  I loved the parts where Bella was talking about her stubborn horse, those made me laugh.

And I think that I say this every time that I review (sorry...). But every chapter I'm continually amazed at how well you use austen-language. You really make me feel like I'm in that time period. I've read historical fics before, but usually more modern language is used. So it ends up not really feeling like the right time period. But you do an amazing job of transporting me right through time.  Thanks for writing this great story :)

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: April 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: In The Garden

Another great chapter! I really liked Edward and Bella's conversation at the end. Very intense, it had the same feeling that the similar scene from the book had. I also liked how you had Bella describe how embarrased she was that everyone made such a fuss. That is never something Bella would enjoy, I felt sorry for her. I would've hated that too :) Anyway, thanks for writing this great chapter!

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: May 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: The Determined Charms of Mr. Crowley

Well I'd definitely rather have a shorter chapter than nothing at all. So thanks for giving us this chapter :) The part where Bella describes Tyler's attentions made me smile.  I like how the emotions Bella is feeling are similar to what she felt in the book at this point. I like that she is feeling similar emotions even though time is different. Thanks for writing!

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: August 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: The First Two Dances

I was really excited to see this chapter. I thought we weren't going to get any more of this story. But I was really happy to see more, especially because I've just been reading Jane Austen.

I liked how you had all the boys ask Bella to the dance. And I liked that you had Edward obviously overhearing each exchange- and how much that annoyed Bella. I'm excited for Edward and Bella to actually have a good conversation.  Thanks for the great chapter!

 
Summary:

Bella Swan has had a tragic and abusive childhood; everyone knew it. But not everyone knew of the bronze-haired boy who visited her in her dreams. He was the only one who knew the true Bella. But Edward wasn't real, was he?

Thank Anne Cullen for the banner :)


Categories: AU, AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Renee
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 29613
[Report This] Published: February 01, 2009 Updated: January 22, 2010


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: It's Downhill from Here

I really liked this chapter. It was sweet when Edward was taking her pain for her. And I gotta tell you that I love dreamward. I'm hoping that Bella will eventually meet up with him, because that just sounds wonderful. And that was a mean cliffhanger, how sad if Bella has to be taken from Esme and Alice. Can't wait for more :)



Author's Response:

Cliffhangers call me. I can't help it. It's like I'm drawn to write them :( I think it's a disease....

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Just Keep Digging, I Can't Feel

Good chapter! Poor Bella really does have to move alot. I was a little confused, is Esme married? Because I guess I thought before this chapter that she was married to Carlise. I really love your Edward. Thanks for the chapter!



Author's Response:

I thought I'd made it clear that Esme wasn't married to Carlisle because I hadn't mentioned him before then, but I guess I should have been a little more clear. Remember, Dreamward it mine :)

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: March 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: The Ugly Duckling

Alice's voices are interesting, does she realize that they are visions of the future? I liked the chapter even though it was sad. I feel very sorry for both Alice and Bella. It sounds like they've both been alone for years.  They need happier times :) I'm curious to find out what Bella thinks of Edward. By that I mean, does she think that he's a figment of her imagination? or does she think he's real? I'm excited for more :)

 



Author's Response:

Well, if you put yourself in her situation, what would you think? Would you automatically go the the assumption that he was real? Most unlikely. You'd probably think that he was, indeed, a figment of your imagination and not question it.

Alice doesn't think they are visions of the future, it's a bit like she can hear the sounds that she would usually see in her visions, but without the visual...

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: March 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Time Means Nothing

Good chapter :)  I love that Alice and Bella are roommates, they both really needed a friend. I'm interested to find out what Alice's vision was about. I like that you had her have a vision that was scary. Sometimes in fics Alice only seems to have happy, everyday visions. And she nevers experiences any discomfort, when really seeing the future would be a scary thing. Thanks for writing !  and I liked the pirate impression :)



Author's Response:

The pirate impression would've been cool, if it didn't come naturally *shifts gaze*.

I don't think Alice knows that they're visions, though. I think she thinks that they're just really scary dreams. I'll have to go ask her. I may get back to you on that...

 

(still needing therapy)

 
Summary:

 

It’s a secret that has been kept securely for millions of years: the existence of vampires.

Bella finds herself torn between keeping the secret from her ever-wondering father, and coming clean on who she really is. Charlie’s not stupid; he is the Chief of Police after all. But how will she tell him, if given the chance? Will she be able to protect him from the Volturi if he does find out?

Bella has also been noticing slight differences in her shield, what could that mean? Does she have a new power that is just now forming? If so, what is it, and could it help protect for family, and her father?

 

>


Categories: Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Benjamin, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Eleazar, Emmett, Esme, Garrett, Jacob, Jasper, Kate, Other Character, Quil, Renesmee, Rosalie, Tanya, Zafrina
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes Word count: 67148
[Report This] Published: February 09, 2009 Updated: November 12, 2010


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Memories

I really like what you have so far. It's interesting to think about the possiblity of Charlie learnign the truth. I'm excited for more!



Author's Response:

Thank you! That's what this story is ultimately about, it's jsut taking a while to get there! When I started writting the first chapter, this story took on a life of its own, but it will become what I originally had planned for it!

Patience ... more is on the way! This is only the beginning!

 
Summary:

Secret Admirer Banner

Every year she got a valentine and she's always wondered who sent them.  Will it turn out to be the one she least expected?  BPOV, AH/AU fluff.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 4360
[Report This] Published: February 14, 2009 Updated: February 14, 2009


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: February 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Secret Admirer

Very cute story. I really enjoyed reading this. Very sweet. I love that line at the end where Edward tells Bella "Good thing you'll never have to" Thanks for the great story!



Author's Response:

You're welcome.  Thank you very much for reading.  :D

 
Stages by bellabeth222 Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 425]
Summary:

As a college senior, Edward can't wait to graduate.  He's made some great friends but that's all.  That is until he starts paying attention to the girl down the hall, Bella.  Something terrible happened to her and he finds himself watching over her and the downward spiral that is becoming her life.  Can he help her?  Can he save her when she can't even see she needs saving.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No Word count: 56056
[Report This] Published: February 23, 2009 Updated: October 31, 2009


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: March 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I like what you have so far. I thought you did a good job of showing the pain that Bella was in. It seemed very realistic to me. Thanks for writing :)

 
Summary: Feature

 

While hunting one afternoon, Emmett, Jasper and Carlisle stumble upon what appears to be a corpse.  When they learn it's a severely broken vampire, they take him home to do what they can to help.  But of course, fate has plans for this man.  Canon Couples.  AU.  DARK Themes.


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Completed: Yes Word count: 158872
[Report This] Published: February 26, 2009 Updated: October 31, 2011


Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: May 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: The Dance

Great chapter Michelle! I love the hints of romance actually starting. So sweet when Edward told Bella that she was perfect. And I love how you had that remark make Bella fully realize her feeling for Edward.

The sort-of-dance scene at the end was lovely. I hadn't really thought that a dance scene with them would work, but the way you wrote it made it seem very real and natural for where Bella and Edward are at right now.

I also liked that you have Alice agree at the end that Bella doesn't have to go to Homecoming. Sometimes Alice can be written as a nazi type character who never gives up her idea of fashion/men Bella should date/ places Bella should go. And it always bothers me when Alice is shown this way in fics. But I love that your Alice isn't this way.

Thanks for the amazing chapter!

 
Reviewer: lilyflower Signed
Date: March 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: The Pillow

I liked this chapter! It was incredibly sweet that Bella is helping Edward even if she thinks that he will kill her later. It shows a lot about her and about her connection to Edward.  I'm glad that Bella's actions are comforting him and I love that Bella is now the expert on Edward. I'm curious now to find out why a phone ringing would cause Edward to freak out. But I'm sure I"ll find out eventually :) Thanks for writing!

 




Share/Save/Bookmark


© 2008, 2009 Twilighted Enterprises, LLC. All Rights Reserved.
Unauthorized duplication is a violation of applicable laws.
Privacy Policy | Terms of Service

All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the intellectual property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of Stephenie Meyer. No copyright infringement is intended.