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Penname: twirl1 [Contact]
Real name: Sucia Dawn
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Member Since: August 03, 2009
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Summary:

During the kiss Bella and Jacob have right before the fight with the newborns, something happens and because of an untold legend, Bella's life is changed forever. No one is prepared for just how much change will come and why.



"It was the last thing I could have ever imagined happening. It was the last thing I thought was possible. Here I had been worried about what I would turn her into; never in all my years would I have ever thought he would turn her into a monster too." ~ Edward


 


Categories: Eclipse, AU Characters: Bella, Jacob
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 34 Completed: Yes Word count: 95916
[Report This] Published: December 22, 2009 Updated: June 23, 2010


Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Bella was able to escape...but now they have to figure out a way to rescue Edward....update soon... awesome chapter

 
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Date: April 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

OH MAN... did Bella just have a vision... I totally cracked up at Charlie in this chapter...but truly it is understandable.... update soon...looking forward to the next chapter...



Author's Response:

It wasn't really a vision so much as her brain putting the pieces together. Kind of like the way she dreamt about Jacob in New Moon when she remembered what he was. Something she should have known, but she never really thought about. That's sort of what I was going for, something like that anyways.

 

Thank you for the review!

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Bella's first patrol went off without a hitch...lol....update soon



Author's Response:

Will do. =)

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

OMG...who is at the window??? update soon

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Gold star for Charlie.... awesome chapter...



Author's Response:

Thank you!

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

Oh man.... who's there...update update update....very suspenseful

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Go head Bella...I totally understand her reasoning for wanting to save Edward...but she has to understand she's part of the pack now....and they have to work as a team.... looking forward to the next update...

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Awesome chapter.... I loved how Bella was the key link to keeping the Pack in the battle without harm...I am curious to find out what Aro is going to think of all this....It can't be all that bad I think Alice would have seen something if it was going to turn out for the worst...but then too maybe not since she is blind when the wolves are involved... going to the next chapter

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

WOW.... Bella killed Aro.... and Edward is dead.... that can't be.... we can't loose Edward....Update soon....

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Great chapter... update soon...

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

Awh...such a sweet chapter...

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

I'm sure nothing has gotten past Charlie... awesome chapter... update soon..



Author's Response:

Thank you for all the awesome reviews!

=)

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Totally did not see that coming....update soon

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Awesome... so sad to see it come to an end...

 
Summary:

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I love Jacob Black.  He is a good man, a good husband.  It's wrong for me to be here, wrong for me to want this...but with those eyes stabbing into mine, it doesn't matter. 

How could wrong feel so right?

AH (my first attempt) and rated for more than the shmexin!

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No Word count: 16481
[Report This] Published: December 22, 2009 Updated: April 30, 2010


Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Great beginning.. I am very curious to see where you take the story.. looking forward to future updates.. :)



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading.  Next chapter is slow going but almost finished.  Hopefully I'll be posting for validation this weekend. 

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Mating Rituals of the Eternally Damned

Great chapter.. I don't hate Bella... I just think so where between her marriage with Jake and her desire for Edward she lost herself.... I'm curious to see what will happen next...I'm just glad Jacob isn't hitting her like Mike.... so at least she has something to work with... this thing with Edward wow... update I need  to know what happens next... hopefully Jacob will give and not do the party at there place.. or Bella should take the kids and leave him to it.. don't come back for about 2 wks..give him time to clean up the mess they make...Give him time to understand he needs to respect her feelings...I understand her totally on that front and can completely relate...LOL... update soon....:)



Author's Response:

Bella is lost in this story.  More than that, though, she just makes bad decisions...I mean, not that Edward Cullen could ever be seen as a "bad decision" but she does a lot of stupid stuff...The thing with Edward is like the icing on the cake.  More to come soon!!

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: The Curse of the Silver Chain

Wow.. It good to see that Jake decided to compromise... I'm not sure where you are taking this story..but I am definately along for the ride...Great chapter..its good to see Bellla trying slowly to make some sense of her life.. update soon :P



Author's Response:

To be honest with you, I'm not sure exactly the direction this will take from here.  I know how it ends, just not how it'll get there.  ;)  Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave your thoughts!  You have no idea how appreciated it is!

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: January 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Slipping

OMG.. what is she doing.... this can't be good..although I'm sure it feels fantastic!!!!! She is definately playing with fire... Great chapter.. update soon..:P



Author's Response:

No, this is a very, very bad thing...Thanks for reading.  Stay with me on this!

 
Summary:

Everyone makes mistakes and Bella is about to make the biggest mistake of her life. Will Edward be able to resist the temptation of Bella’s blood much longer? Will Jacob be able to save her in time? (Post New Moon, Bella still saves Edward, Edward and the Cullens still return to Forks but this story is completely AU after the end of New Moon.) Rating is set for graphic images, sexual content and some violence in later chapters.

 

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Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jared, Jasper, Paul, Quil, Renee, Rosalie, Sam
Challenges:
Series: The Bella and Jacob Chronicles
Chapters: 15 Completed: Yes Word count: 36926
[Report This] Published: December 23, 2009 Updated: December 02, 2010


Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Epilogue: The Prom (il_suo_cantante)

Awesome chapter... can't wait to read the out takes...

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Beautiful Nightmare

Great beginning... there's nothing lacking and your story has just the right amount of angst in it to keep readers wanting more... I am curious to see where you will take.. looking forward to the next update... :)



Author's Response:

I'll update ASAP. Promise.

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Long Lost Friends

Great chapter... you can totally get a since of the story building which is great.. there's not thing lacking...I love the pack interaction.. there just wasn't enough of it in the books... I always feel you can write an entire set of books just around the pack and have a wonderful.. update soon... I still wanna know where this is going so far..I'm loving it... lol....:P

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Where There's Smoke There's Fire

OMG..for almost all of the Cullens to be be leaving Bella a message..that is alittle bit obsessive... my goodness... I was starting to get irratated at how many voicemails and texts Bella was getting... I sure hope Bella does throw caution to the wind and just enjoy herself..great chapter... update soon..



Author's Response:

I'm glad you were able to feel the irriation, I was hoping someone would!

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Reaction

OMG...OMG...OMG.... :O... OMG...Great chapter...I need to know what happened... how can you just leave it there?????? Oh gosh so is the scream the Jacob heard coming from Bella's room her screaming because Edward bit her and she is going through the change.... omg.... this is just too cruel leaving us on this terrible cliff....I just might fall off.... please please please please please please... update soooooooooonnn....

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: After the Fall (from Grace) ((il_suo_cantante))

Whoa....Jake got there just in a nic of time.....I really hope the Pack doesn't hurt Edward... How is Bella going to feel if the Pack hurts him...So now Charlie knows everything... well I guess we'll have to wait and see what Billy has told him... but thinking he knows everything wow....I am curious to see how this conversation is going to go as well...update soon..

 
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Static

OH Man this is getting outrageously good.... I can almost see Edward trying to get to Bella to apologize...update update update...

 




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