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Penname: twirl1 [ Contact]
Real name: Sucia Dawn
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Member Since: August 03, 2009
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Summary: 
Years have passed since Edward left Bella in the forest. She's finally worked through her heartbreak but has never moved on to another man. She treats her best friend, Jake, like a beloved pair of old jeans. Jake is not happy with this situation. When he takes matters into his own hands, Bella's resulting epiphany makes her realize she needs to learn how to seduce a werewolf.
I looked across the room in shock. My beautiful Jacob was smiling down into the eyes of that witch! He was giving MY smile to somebody else. MY smile! His hand was on her arm. How dare he?
 
 
Categories: New Moon, Post-Eclipse, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Brady, Charlie, Claire, Collin, Edward, Embry, Emily, Jacob, Leah, Other Character, Quil, Sam, Seth
Challenges: Series: The Bella and Jacob Chronicles
Chapters: 16 Completed: No
Word count: 140728
[Report This] Published: November 21, 2009 Updated: June 23, 2012
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 I Should Be Canonized
WOW...Steamy.... great chapter...I thk the title of the chapter fits so perfectly for Jake it is unbelievable...lol....Bella will probably have the worst hangover ever in the morning... with just the slightest bit of soreness.. hopefully she remembers some of what happened..and hopefully she won't tear Jacob a new one..from any assumption that are doomed to be broached in the morning...
PS. love the sneek peeks.. update soon :) Author's Response: Hey SD! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Did you get your sneak peek? If not, let me know.
Glad you enjoyed the chapter. I promise, Bella will NOT be mad at Jake. After all, she's the one who misbehaved!
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Unleashing the Guard Dog
OMG....LOL.....that has got to be terrible for poor poor Rick... damn...maybe he should change his identity....I mean DAMN!!!!! (Jake looked like a rabid wolf) little does he know...hahaha.... why would he even try knowing already that Jake was a presence to be reckoned with... silly silly Rick.... Great chapter.... update soon Author's Response: Hey SD! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Your sneak peek has been sent.
Yep, Rick is a silly, silly boy. Sometimes silly boys think with organs other than their brain and it gets them into lots of trouble! ;)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Operation Amy
Great chptr... It was good reading the chapter from Jakes POV..I was so wondering what the heck was going thru his mind when Bella was groping him... I wonder how much Bella will remember when she sobers.. can't wait to read what happens next.. :) Author's Response: Hey SD! Thanks for reading and reviewing! I just emailed you a pretty long sneak peek from Chapter 4. Hope you enjoy it.
Glad you enjoyed JPOV. I find it is the easiest for me to write. I think because he reminds me so much of my hubbie. :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 16, 2010
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 The Hair of the Dog That Bites
This was an awesome chapter...and It made me laugh when Bella was saying she raped her bestfriend..LOL...That was awesome... I am so glad that Bella has decided to take a stand on her feeling for Jacob...She was completely oblivious to all the comments he made after the whole shower conversation...she sure wasn't paying attention to everything Jake said..but its good to see that there thoughts are on the same page with something is going to have to change in there relationship and soon...I'm glad they're both ready to take that leap..I can't wait...:)
Author's Response: Hey SD! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Hope you got my email with your peek at Chapter 6.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter. I can't tell you how much I dreaded posting it! Yeah, I'm proud of Bella for girding her loins and deciding to take charge of the situation, no matter how wrong she is about Jake and Amy. You know, Jake never did really clear the air on that one. ;)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed 
Date: February 12, 2010
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 I'm Not Dear F*cking Abby
So imagine my cheesy grin upon seeing my name being used in your story and I’m a model with impeccable taste in wardrobe…way too cool…. I must have re-read it several times saying to myself no way she didn’t.. OMG she did!!! (squeee) How awesome is that!!!!… Feel free to use me however you deem necessary in your story..I totally loved it!!.. I loved Leah’s advice for Bella…that was like so on the money and what Bella needed… I always pictured Leah to be a bit like Alice once you got around her hardcore exterior… With sheer confidence and some swagger to go along with it.. Which is the character that you have created and I like her.. Now to take Bella from being “Martha Stewart” to “Catwoman” if anybody is up for the task it would definitely be Leah. I love the way Leah keeps Bella focused on the task at hand by continuously throwing Amy in her face… I can’t wait to see Bella put into action the tools she’s been given… ROTFL…I must have almost fallen out of my chair cracking up at the advice Sam was giving Jacob..”the whole make her a card”…hahaha….and singing “I will always love you”…that was priceless…LOL…I did however think Sam was on to something with the being romantic… but Jake can do that without the whole standing at the door with roses and a box of candies… simple suggestions like leaving a small note saying he’s think about her and a single rose on her bed…speaks volumes… without being corny…I can’t wait to see what Jacob tries.. and going to Italy opens up the door to be overtly romantic in a very cavalier kind of way. It’s going to be interesting either way Italy… Florence at night is said to be dazzling and magical.. sounds perfect for a stroll after having experienced the wonder cuisines and wine..Touring Rome also is supposed to be a must...so many sites to take in... the Foutains for one is supposed to be impeccable.. I totally can’t wait.... update soon…:) Author's Response: Thanks, love, for your terrific review and rating! I appreciate it sooo much. Did you get your sneak peek? Let me know if not. Thank you for being a gorgeous model with impeccable taste in my story. I loved your little black suit you donated to Bella. That was so generous of you!
I agree, Leah needed to push Bella a little. About time she becomes a grown up. And although Sam's suggestions were cheesy, you are right, being romantic is always a good idea. Jake just needs to figure out the right way to go about it!
As for Italy, they are going to Milan to work, but I'm not telling what's going to happen next. Needless to say, they aren't spending the whole time in Milan. (Btw, Rome is fabulous but Venice is even better. :p)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: March 24, 2010
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 American Werewolves in Italy
Awesome chapter... I think all this that Bella is doing is following the advice of Leah... which is fabulous... in the grand scheme of things Jacob will nolonger be confused when she's done...LOL...wow...I totally can't wait to see how Jake handles a sleeping Bella in the midst of a sex dream...lol..
I never get your sneek peeks...usually I don't mind but I am way to curious to know this time... hers my email.. sumadon@att.net Author's Response: SD, tell me you got your peek and pic or I'm going to feel sooo guilty. I can't believe you never received one before now. :( I swear, I've dutifully emailed you one every chapter. I feel terrible you've never gotten it. Don't know about the peek, but girl, you do NOT want to miss out on the pic! Thanks so much for the review and the rating. You are the best, gf!
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: April 26, 2010
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 To Ride a Wild Wolf
Awesome chapter...I knew you had pure genius in you.... I think Bella and Jacob need to seriously stop skirting around the issue and tell each other how they feel...but of course to do it that way would be less adventurous...and I simply love the way your mind work... I was almost upset with Jacob for yelling at Bella but I thought better of it and felt it was well warranted... loved it...looking forward to the next chapter... Author's Response: Hey SD! How are the girls doing? Thanks so much for reviewing and rating, sweet pea. You got it; if they come right out and say exactly what they feel, the story would be much shorter and less interesting! We gotta have some tension, you know. Glad you didn't get pissed at Jake for being mad at Bella. I think everything he told her was richly deserved, myself.
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: July 13, 2010
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 Il Mostro di Milano (The Monster of Milan)
OMG..... :O.. I can just imagine the look on Jakes face....and the look on Bella's when she saw Jakes face... I am going to totally have no nails waiting for the next chapter to be updated.... you have left on heck of a cliff...Leah is give Val a death wish.... I am so sure Jake saw Val with his hands all over Bella... I have got to say that Leah's heart is in the right place but her tactics... OMG.... hopefully doesn't get anyone hurt...namely Val...and Seth...LOL... awesome chapter lady...u totally out did yourself with this one....I am so looking forward to the sneek peek... and am dying to see the dress that Bella was wearing...
Eclipse: Was a total bummer for me... They really didn't do a good job of capitalizing on how torn Bella really was with making a choice between Edward and Jacob... and I think that her intent in the movie was darn right cruel.... loved the battle scene.... mad credits to that.... I'm still die hard Team Jacob all the way... Author's Response: Hey SD! You did get your peek, right? Don't want you chewing off your nails waiting. Of course, it may not keep your nails in better shape. Sorry. Ehhh, no I'm not. I love giving you all a heart attack. I wouldn't want to be Val OR Seth for the next 24 hours. ;)
I think you are right on target with your analysis of Eclipse. There really was NO feeling whatsoever that Bella wanted Jake and wasn't sure what she was going to do. That was a real loss for the movie, but the battle scene WAS fabulous.
Thanks so much for reading, reviewing, and rating my chapter. You are the bomb. How are the girls doing?
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: August 27, 2010
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Hungry Like the Wolf
OMG...Lee......It took me like 3 days to come up with a fitting review for this chapter.... When I say that you totally out did yourself....I hv no idea how you’re ever going to top this....but I knw that with your writing skills you definitely will....talk about claiming your territory…. I am pretty sure they both know what’s whose… Jake in the restaurant with Val… wow….you painted the picture so vividly clear…I could totally imagine it… I just knw after he left the pack boys and Carmen that he was going to all but tear poor Val-erie apart… and to approach the situation the way he did…was totally genius…like Bella said…he made it seem like that were an old married couple with several children… I so loved that…. Jacob was the epitome of composure… on not phasing….I totally think he scared the shizz out of Val… and I don’t see Val ever being in the vicinity of Bella or Jacob for that matter… And that bedroom argument was heat served with a side of I don’t think I could word it any better “Fuck me running”… LOL…anyone that has read this chapter totally understand the whole Best Panty Soaker award…congrats by the way… totally love the new banner…. And I don’t thk you will be able to update soon enough…. Just in case I didn’t say it already…. AWESOME… AWESOME… AWESOME… chapter….. waiting for the next update….
Summary: Never take for granted those that stand by your side. I never thought that anything could convince me that life without Edward was possible, but suddenly, I needed to live.
"Absence makes the heart grow fonder."
Not true, if Jake is any indication. Even after a year he won't talk to me willingly, and when he's forced to, it's bitter and angry.
His pack looks at me like they're waiting for something, and I have to wonder if he's hiding something from me. I just want another chance to be in his life. I know I've hurt him, broken him, but I won't do that again.
I'm here for him, and only him. Singing a song just for him.
Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Billy, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Jacob, Leah, Paul, Phil, Quil, Renee, Sam, Seth
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: No
Word count: 11052
[Report This] Published: November 23, 2009 Updated: August 06, 2010
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 07, 2010
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Two: Hello
Wow... I am totally heads over heels in love with your story... I just came across it today.. and totally can't wait for the next update...I love the direction you're taking the story in.. update soon:) Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying it. Every time I hear that, it makes me giggle like a fangirl...which I guess I sort of am, huh?
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: August 07, 2010
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Three: Letters to You
Its been a long wait...for this one....I am so glad you didn't abandon the story...but this chapter was well worth the wait...AWESOME!!!!...looking forward to the next chapter....
Summary: For three years they've been apart. Last he saw, she was happily in love, he was dying by slow degrees and the vampire was smug. Not now. They meet somewhere between the cold food section and aisle three. But why is her ring finger bare and who is the rosy cheeked child on her hip?
Bella has some explaining to do.
"Jake’s looking at her again, like she always disregarded and always secretly wanted.
Like he never stopped."
Primarily BxJ, with mentions of BxE and BxOC.
Categories: Post-Eclipse, AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No
Word count: 14497
[Report This] Published: November 28, 2009 Updated: April 26, 2010
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: To Try and Remember
Great beginning.. your writing has me both intrigued and curious as to see where this will go... I wonder what happened between Bella and Edward.. I will be patient and wait for the next chptr.. :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: To Try and Remember
This was a nice beginning.. I'm curious to see where it goes.. :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: To Leave with a Kiss...
This story is great...it pulls you in completely.. You can just feel the emotion that is coming from each thought that Bella has..I love the character you have created in Amelia..she's so sweet.. and its amazing how children can sense the goodness of a persons soul....If only Bella could have seen that Jacob and her were perfect.... alot of the heartache could have been avoided.. update soon looking forward to reading the next chptr.. :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Parting is Such Sweet Sorrow
Why do you keep doing that?????You are torturously killing us slowly... OMG..I am so hooked into your story..I am biting my nails... The way you write it just sneeks upon you and before you know it your like...WHAT???? YOU DID NOT JUST LEAVE IT THERE!!!!!!! AAAAHHH..LOL...I can not wait til the next chptr is up...update soon:) Author's Response: Haha. I love reading your reviews. They always conjure a smile! I don't mean to be torturous, it just happens. The next update will be pretty quick, so the torture should be ceased soon.
Thank you for your support.
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 16, 2010
Title: Chapter 5: The Days Lost Between Broken Hearts and Delusion
Great chapter.. although you are torturing us very slowly..... I love the way you bring up memories of Bella's past and her final goodbye to the Cullens... I hope she doesn't hurt Jacob again...but its clear to see that the two of them are very much in love with each other.., I can't wait to see Bella finally take a step out on faith and go all in and take Jacob..because he is definately trying to give himself to her..Update soon... please!!!.. I am totally loving this story and can't wait to read what happens next..:) Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kindness and reviews!!! I'm amazed and humbled that you like my writing and hope you continue to enjoy it!
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 27, 2010
Title: Chapter 6: Waking Up in the Breakdown
Another awesome chapter... wow..that was so intimate... I really hope Bella gives in and let Jake love her...and she love him in return... can't wait for the next chapter...update soon...:P
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 29, 2010
Title: Chapter 7: When All You Seem to Feel is Light
Awwh.. so adorable..I love Amelia..she is just the sweetest... I am so glad Bella finally confessed to Jake that she was in love with him that was amazing... I so love this story.. Amelia fits perfectly into Jakes life.. awesome.... I can't wait for the next update...:-)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: February 16, 2010
Title: Chapter 8: Between the Past and the Present
This is such a beautiful story...I completely love it..I'm waiting for the day that Jacob finally asks Bella to marry him.... They are all so perfect together... Bella, Amelia, and Jake.
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: March 01, 2010
Title: Chapter 8: The Heartbreak of an Enigma
Awesome chapter.. so is Jake and Bella married??? I so love this story..it just gets better and better.... I thought the ending was awesome... after all this time "Finally"... I'm so happy for them... update soon...
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: March 24, 2010
Title: Chapter 9: Wishing I Had Let You Sign
Wow...that was heartbreaking and sad... I wonder how the kids took Bella's passing...great chapter... :( update soon...
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: April 09, 2010
Title: Chapter 10: Life in Greyscale
You're completely tearing my heart out hera.... lovely chapter...update soon..
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: April 27, 2010
Title: Chapter 11: To Keep This All But A Memory
That was beautiful....
Summary: Bella and Edward are "buddies" and while Bella wants more, Edward pulls away every time she tries to make things more official. Then one evening, she meets a tall, dark, handsome man out in a club, and he promises her everything she always wanted. Will Bella take it, even if it's not with the person she thought it would be with? And what will Edward do when his friend is suddenly no longer available?
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes
Word count: 36646
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2009 Updated: February 11, 2010
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 23, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Ch 5: Conversations and Promises
Great chapter...I sure hope Bella listens to both Emmett and Rosalie and give Jake a chance... I am curious to see how Edward will deal with the situation...I know its complicated for Bella but hopefully she will start to realize that she deserves so much more then just being someones as Emmet so eloquently put it (fuck buddy).... :)
Happy Holidays.. and looking forward to the next chapter
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 03, 2010
Title: Chapter 10: Ch 9: History Repeats...
OH Wow!!! That explains alot... doesn't change the fact that Edward could have went about the Bella situation differently... Even without being such a ass in the process... I'm glad to see that Bella is slowly starting to realize that she still deserves to be happy even if its not with Edward...Great chapter..looking forward to the next update.. Is Bella gonna ask Jake out???? hummm... Update soon :)
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