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Penname: twirl1 [ Contact]
Real name: Sucia Dawn
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Member Since: August 03, 2009
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Summary: 
Bella secretly deals with abandonment issues after her mother and father both die. She goes to live with Billy Black on the reservation and has to learn to live with his rules, and she falls for the last person she thought she could love. AU-Human
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Billy, Charlie, Edward, Jacob, Sam
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 16 Completed: Yes
Word count: 53199
[Report This] Published: November 03, 2009 Updated: March 06, 2010
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: November 23, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5 - Making Amends
AAWWWHHH.. such a sweet perfect chapter... I love the role that Sue plays in this chapter and how she is able to check Billy even over the phone.. Its nice to see Bella and Jacob make so head way on there budding relationship... I can only assume where there are ups, there are also some downs... can't wait for the next update..this should be very interesting.. :) Author's Response: Thanks. Sue is a huge help later on too.
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: November 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6 - The Camping Trip
I am so glad Jacob and Bella finally have a few people they can share there relationship with... great chapter..I can't wait to find out whats gonna happen next. I almost feel like Billy won't be all that mad when he does find out.
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: November 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4 - The Greatest Loss
OMG..I just started following your story and I love it....Its sad that Bella has to deal with so much lost.. but if anyone can help her thru it it's gotta be Jacob.... it also seems as though they both have some issues that they are dealing with. I can't wait to see where you go with the story... I love Jacob in this story...you are completely staying true to his character.. I like your Bella better also..she's not a complete push over.. love it... update soon.. Author's Response: Thank you so much! I like Bella's character in this story too. I purposely made her a stronger individual!
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Seeing the Light
Great chptr... so glad Bella told Angela about her and Jacob and that Angela was so understanding and encouraging... I still think Billy won't be too harsh, but I completely understand why he would have an issue with anything poppin off under his roof (LOL) ...but I am looking forward to the next chapter..:)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7 - All The Right Words
Great chapter... I'm so glad to see that Bella and Jacob are growing in there relationship..and that it bothers them both to keep this from Billy.. but oddly I kinda feel like Billy wouldn't be as angry as they think he will.. but I guess time will tell.. I love the fact the Sue is so mothering to both of them and is even willing to help them spend time together..I love the way how Jacob is was jealous of the fact that Edward asked Bella out..hahaha I thought that was cute... everything is progressing....I only hope this charade doesn't go on too long things could start to get confusing. Update soon :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Mornings
Shoots who doesn't want great sex in the morning to start the day?? Great chapter..its so heart warming that Jacob and Bella's relationship is on a steady growth pattern...I really want to see it workout..I hope they figure out something fast to tell Billy, cuz if he finds out and Jacob has to leave Bella is going to be seriously hurt.. considering her abandonment issues...upate soon... :) Happy New Year
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 04, 2010
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - Out of Control
Damn that Sam... lol...:)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 20, 2010
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
That was a great chptr... I can only imagine Billy is going to be livid.... I hope that Jake stays put... otherwise this could totally backfire and they end up missing each other... It's pretty amazing how her friends are helping her... update soon...I love it!!!! :P
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed  
Date: January 26, 2010
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
Awesome chapter..I guess they have more planning to do..I like the way Paul said it would be totally romantic for Bella to come there and whisk Jacob away..LOL.. Whoa what is Billy gonna say about all this?? Update soon...:P
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 30, 2010
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
OMG...great chapter...I think Carlisle will be able to persuade Billy to let Jake and Bella continue there relationship...I am looking forward to the sequel...this story has grown right along with Bella's and Jake's relationship.
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: February 12, 2010
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
OMG.. she's moving in with the Cullens... I can almost see Jacob about to go through the roof over this one...LOL... update..update..sooon... Author's Response: I had to respond to at least one of the comments about this chapter. Yes she is moving in with the Cullens, you'll see that in a bit, however, I had to do it to open up for a sequel. As soon as my dead laptop comes back to life, the sequel: Reclaimed, will begin.
Enjoy ladies and thanks so much for sending comments. You guys officially rock!
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: March 01, 2010
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
Great story coming to an awesome ending... So happy for Jake and Bella...I am curious to read this epilogue in Edwards POV...hummmm..the sequel is called Reclaimed....you already have me on pins and needles... looking forward to it..
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: March 09, 2010
Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
Hummmm..role reversal for Edward and Jacob very interesting... great chapter...Its sad to see it come to an end...but I am looking forward to the sequel "Reclaim" I am already extremely curious to find out why that's the title... You did a fabulous job writing Abandon..
Summary:
Bella moves to Forks in hopes of a new life, trying to escape her past and forget her former life. A relationship with Jacob Black might be enough to help Bella heal, but what will happen when he leaves in search of his own life? AH
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Charlie, Edward, Jacob, Jasper
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No
Word count: 25073
[Report This] Published: November 05, 2009 Updated: January 09, 2010
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 05, 2010
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Wounds
I am totally in love with your story.... That was totally unexpected of Edward to confess he has feelings for Bella after just the one kiss and knowing she just told him the other day about Jacob leaving.. poor timing..he should have waited...but I'm glad he didn't cuz that completely opened Bella's eyes to fight for Jacob..(awesome)...I can't wait to see what Jake has to say about her confession..... update soon :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 09, 2010
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Atonement
NOOOOOOOO..how just gonna stop right there??? OMG for how long???? Great chapter!!!! I have to definately give you that...leaving us on an upbeat note was awesome...just really how long is this hiatus going to be??? I am so glad Bella told Jake how she felt..I was about ready to drop kick him when he was like "you shouldn't have come" (say what now!!) but he came to his sense... very wise...LOL... I love this story.. I will attempt to be patient while waiting for an update and I will check out your other stories.. :)
Summary: 
Three years have passed since the events of Eclipse, and Bella Swan may be Bella Cullen now, but she is still unwillingly, woefully human. Her reunion with Jacob Black is bittersweet. Her reunion with old foes is just bitter. And Rosalie Hale is far more important to her than she knows.
Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No
Word count: 23792
[Report This] Published: November 20, 2009 Updated: March 07, 2010
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Hummmmm???? What in the world is really going on? What did Edward need to talk to Jacob about? Why is Edward keeping so many secrets from Bella? (Ah! Its his nature). It is apparent that Edward doesn't want Bella changed...but why not??? Is Edwards concerned if they don't win that Bella would be alone and with Jake she could still have a life? Which wouldhave made sense if he wasn't iliciting help. And then I can't really see that cuz the Volturi would probably kill Bella anyway? And now what is with this dream shes having? This story has my brain scattered and working very hard to figure out what is going on...Ok so they are an hour for LA is Rose taking her back to Jacob?? Bella has to be crazy mad out of her mind for thinking of going to Italy she may be killed on the spot... Update soon... my thoughts and questions are all over the place...LOL ..:P Great chapter!!! Author's Response: Edward thought that Jacob and the wolves might be interested in a "joint venture" - ie. that they might do again what they did in Eclipse and fight with the Cullens to protect Bella. As for Edward not wanting Bella to be changed... it's for the same reasons he didn't want it in canon - sure, in Breaking Dawn everything magically turned out great. But there's no reason for Edward or anybody to think it will be that easy. He rightly anticipates the possibility of Bella "slipping up" and murdering somebody, possibly multiple somebodies. And on a more general level he has concerns for her soul and the freedom to pursue a normal life if she changes her mind about him. But I'm getting ahead of myself, lol. And yeah, Bella is pretty crazy... Thanks so much for your thoughts, I love that you are so kind and enthusiastic :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Wow I have just come across this story and I am completely fascinated to see where its going... Why is Bella still human? What is she meeting up with Jake? Gosh there's so much going on here.. am I wrong to suspect that Bella is still harboring some strong feelings for Jacob? Its good to see that Jacob has completely come to terms with Bella being married to Edward, but it just seems like I am picking up a lot of Chemistry between the two of them?????? Can't wait for the next update.... I'm hooked alread...:) Author's Response: Thank you so very much! I'm so glad you're into the story and having theories and such. As for Jake and Bella... I think, realistically, the feelings would never completely go away. In terms of this fic, Jacob came to terms with Bella being married to Edward some time ago. But that doesn't mean he has to like it...
I hope you continue to enjoy the story :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Great chapter...I am still trying to figure everything out... but your doing a fantastic job at keeping us interested... update soon :) Author's Response: Thank you :) I hope you continue to enjoy it, even if it's a bit confusing for a while.
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
Great chptr..and even more frustrated and confused that I haven't figured out what is really going on....argh.... just so you know u are a very good writing..u r definately keeping me on edge...LOL :) update soon pleeeaaasssee!!!! Author's Response: Next chapter is in the queue. I love you for your enthusiasm! :) Sorry the story is being kind of cryptic atm
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: December 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
WOW!!!! still really confused here.... ok so the Volturi is after Bella and why won't Edward change her already??? Still trying to figure out what is going on.. ur writing is great..it is keeping me on edge... I still can't make heads or tails of you're taking this story..but I'm along for the ride... update soon..Happy New Year :) Author's Response: Well, in canon, Edward was never exactly eager to get her vamped up... Thanks so much for your thoughts, i appreciate them. Hope you enjoy the rest of the story and happy new year to you too! :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 16, 2010
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
OMG...this is getting so good...applause to Bella for being able to ditch Rosalie..that was priceless..lol....what in the world is going on.. I hope Jake finds her.... I can't wait for the next chapter...:) Author's Response: haha, Bella can be pretty reckless when she wants to be... I guess sometimes you get lucky and it pays off. Thanks so much for reading, hope you enjoy the next chapter - it'll be in the queue shortly :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: January 24, 2010
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
OMG.... still not sure what is going on... But I'm was actually glad Rosalie and Jacob both caught up to Bella..I really want to know why Edward hasn't changed her... I understand his concern...but now Jacob has been dragged into this also..and it bothers me slightly that Bella is all concerned about the Cullens but failed to the let that concern reach to her best friend...of course I'm sure she doesn't want anything to happen to Jake either... and when this is all over I hope she gives Edward a serious piece of her mind... for keeping her in the dark about everything... way to treat her like an equal... update soon...:P Author's Response: ah... I think Bella is concerned for Jacob... I was about to quote you a line as evidence... but then I realized it's actually in the next chapter ;) I just think she has a bit of trouble reconciling her worry for Jacob with her commitment to Edward - it's hard for her to compartmentalize her relationship with Jacob and just see him as her best friend, especially when the stakes are this high. As for Edward getting a piece of Bella's mind... we shall see. I agree with you that she absolutely should tell him it's not on. As much as I personally sympathize with hiim and the impossible situation he's in... their relationship is never going to work if he can't let go a bit and treat her like an equal regardless.
ANYWAY. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing as always <3 Hope you enjoy the next chapter!
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: February 04, 2010
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
I am so curious to see what is going on... update...update...update.. Author's Response: Sorry for the delay! Next chapter will be up shortly :)
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: March 08, 2010
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
OMG... so Rose is gone.... oh Bella if only you had listened.... and Emmett is pissed.... I am so curious to see how this fairs out.....this story is just too good... I want to keep reading on and on and on and on... update soon....
Summary: 
Years have passed since Edward left Bella in the forest. She's finally worked through her heartbreak but has never moved on to another man. She treats her best friend, Jake, like a beloved pair of old jeans. Jake is not happy with this situation. When he takes matters into his own hands, Bella's resulting epiphany makes her realize she needs to learn how to seduce a werewolf.
I looked across the room in shock. My beautiful Jacob was smiling down into the eyes of that witch! He was giving MY smile to somebody else. MY smile! His hand was on her arm. How dare he?
 
 
Categories: New Moon, Post-Eclipse, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Brady, Charlie, Claire, Collin, Edward, Embry, Emily, Jacob, Leah, Other Character, Quil, Sam, Seth
Challenges: Series: The Bella and Jacob Chronicles
Chapters: 16 Completed: No
Word count: 140728
[Report This] Published: November 21, 2009 Updated: June 23, 2012
Reviewer: twirl1 Signed
Date: November 23, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 He's with Amy
Please by all means continue writing.... This was a great chapter..I always thought it was amazing how drinking always make people be brutally honest even when they don't want to... Hopefully Bella doesn't have any regrets after she sobers... :) update soon.... Author's Response: Yep, alcohol can always let you say exactly what you think, whether you want to or not. "In vino veritas" isn't it? In wine is truth. Bella picked a pretty critical night to start being completely unfiltered. I'm afraid she may have a few regrets when she sobers up. But she's a few hours from being sober and not finished embarrassing herself yet. ;) Thanks so much for taking the time to review, twirl!
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