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Hello, I'm a 34 English Teacher / Psychologist. Married, no children however two extreamly spoiled and adored goldenretrievers. Moka and Maya are my babies, both girls around 8 human years both of them.
I live in the city of Puebla in Mexico. It is a colonial city near the volcanoes. I give English lessons to children and adults.
I love reading since I was a little girl I read almost anything within my reach. I enjoy reading historic novels and biographies but adore a good novel and mystery. I would love to write, but I'm not good yet. I begin something and then have no idea how to finish it. So I have tons of little stories and things that go through my head in the computer and notebooks. I hope to one day make something out of all of it.
I got hooked in Fan Fiction thanks to the Twilight series which I loved. I enjoy reviewing stories and try to think my reviews and make them nice.
About my Favorite things.- Reading of course, both in English and Spanish. Favorite Authors, in Spanish, Gabriel García Marquez, Angeles Mastretta, Paulo Cohelo. In English, in no particular order Stephenie Meyer, J.K. Rowling, Michel Crichton, Agatha Christie. These are the ones I can think of now.
I also love cooking and I'm good at it, at least that's what family and friends tell me.
I also enjoy sewing, needle point, cross stich and such.
That's it for now I think. I hope that the authors whose stories I review enjoy them I try to make them good. Since I don't feel I can write a story yet at least I can try and write good reviews.
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Summary:
"In a moment’s time, I’d be his, entirely. The one thing I’d wanted more than anything itself. The pain, the pleasure- it was worth it knowing I’d be able to claim to be his…at long last.
"The silence in the room was deafening. The intimacy of this moment made the world hold its breath in anticipation. Time ceased to exist; the only fathomable concepts were Edward and me."
For all of us who read Breaking Dawn, closed the back cover and said; "Yeah...not what I expected..."
This is my version, my ending of the Twilight Saga. In short, it's purpose is to show how Edward and Bella meet the trials and tribulations of being newlyweds, Bella being a newborn as well as other things life has to offer. It's meant to highlight their love, devotion, the strengthening of their bond as well as how they grow together emotionally and physically.
Rated NC-17 for Mature themes, language and adult and sexual content.
WARNING: quite a few lemons here ;]
ON HIATUS!! LOOK FOR MY NEWEST WORK AND THE FOCUS OF MY ATTENTION, "Love Story" !!
Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Phil, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: The Beginning
Chapters: 20 Completed: No
Word count: 132794
[Report This] Published: October 30, 2008 Updated: November 15, 2009
Reviewer: mayams Signed  
Date: December 01, 2008
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4- Fire and Ice
very good, I liked it.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: December 01, 2008
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part II
Wow, it has been really amazing, can't wait for the next chapter, please, please hurry. Now as a review, it is hard but really, really good; feeling rejected is truly awful and the way you write it, it's amazing, you are a really good writer, so keep it coming please!!!!! p.s. last chapter I didn't review because i wanted to keep reading, yep Edward is being more than an asshole, his temper is his downfall.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: December 15, 2008
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1- Preparations
Wow, this was really, really good. I loved all the chapter. Edward finally letting go, Bella enjoying it. It was great, hot and sweet. You did a great job in this one, as in the rest of the story, so keep it coming Please
I also can't wait to see what carstereo will Edward have to get Emett and Rosalie. That will be fun.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: December 18, 2008
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 9- Warmed By the Fire
wow, for now just wow, it was incredible, keep it coming, it's getting sooo good.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: December 27, 2008
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 10- Decision
I hope you had very nice white Christmas. Thank you for this chapter it was incredible, wow, you can really write down emotions. I was almost crying, I must accept my eyes are kind of wet still. You really did an excellent job explaining why Bella was so sure of her decision, and how hard it was for Edward. Also how everyone else felt about it. it was very nice to see that Rosalie wasn't upset with Bella but there for here. The rest of the family of course was going to be there.
I can't wait to see how the changing goes and what happens next. So please update soon. And again congratulations on an excellent chapter.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: January 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 11- Burning
Wow, wow, wow, it was painful, filled with angst, love, tears, screams, fear, and this was just Bella's point of view, imagine if we could hear what Jasper went through.
Congratulations, you really did a great job here, I can't say it is my favorite chapter but it is very very good. Can't wait to what's coming next, how will she wake up to her new life and get used to it.
update soon please :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: January 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 12- Opening My Eyes To the Sun
Okay, no rock throwing, it was painful yes, put it's part of their history, the good has to come with the bad, and Bella has to remember it all. Just PLEASE help her remember soon. And also update sooner
excelent chapter even if it was sad and left us with a mayor cliffhanger.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: February 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 13- A Love Worth Fighting For
It's good they have started to work things out. And that someone decided to give Bella answers. The way her thoughts alone were going, it was going to take a long, long time. Okay they do have that time, but it's way better this way. Especially since it's Edward answering everything.
Can't wait for the next chapter, pleas update soon ;)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: February 23, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 14- 20 Questions
Finally Bella is begining to remeber, especially the good parts. It's nice she doesn't remember the time when Edward was away. It's painful and they don't need that now.
This chapter wasn't as long as your usual chapters, but it was what was needed.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 30, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 15- Rapture
Nice to have you back!!!
It was as it should, loving, tender, filled with emotions. just great.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: June 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 16 - Vile
This was intense and hard and difficult for all of them. But as they said, they all have been there, unfortunately when we feel overwhelmed we tend to not listen to what others have to say. That was what happened to Bella, along with the understandable frustration of the little changes in her everyday life that turn out to be bigger than she expected them to be.
She does have an amazingly loving family who will be by her side every step of the way. CArlisle showed how much faith he has in her and all of his family. He truly is a great leader for them.
About the hunting tirp, I'm sure it will be fine, Alice will see anything coming their way and everyone will be there for her. As they always have and always will.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: November 30, 2009
Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 17 - God and Sinners Reconciled
So sad to hear you had such a rough time. but glad to know you are now doing better. You've been missed.
This was huge, long, steamy, sweet, well thought, and at the end, heartbreaking. Has Bella's voice changed so much she can't even talk to her parents? Can't someone answer and give them an explanation?
I hope there is a way to put both Charlie and Renee at peace, so Bella will be at peace and so will everyone else. ;)
Summary: Music can be quite the aphrodisiac, even for vampires. When Edward shares his passion for classical music with Bella, they discover a whole new world together just weeks before their nuptials. Set at the beginning of Breaking Dawn.
Winner of "Best use of Music as Inspiration - Complete" at the Twilight Indie Awards!
Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Word count: 78097
[Report This] Published: November 02, 2008 Updated: April 14, 2009
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: December 16, 2008
Title: Chapter 16: Tchaikovsky Pt. 2
This was amazing, really sweet. I love this piece also, and to imagine it being played along with fireworks, it was a great idea. The tenderness between Edward and Bella was very good. Yes holidays make things slower, but try to keep on writting. Author's Response: Thank you - I'll try and get another chapter up as soon as possible!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: January 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Offenbach
Cooking isn't a bad idea, a food fight is a great idea and frosting is really good. This was a good one, sorry no one else got to participate.
Thank you for this extras they have been great, can't wait for the next one :) Author's Response: Ha - glad you enjoyed it! Yes, Edward and frosting are always a good idea, and I don't even like frosting that much (but I do like the visual)! Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: January 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: Bernstein
Thank you again so much for keeping this story going it's great. I didn't think this chapter was a filler, it is more like the setting for the following chapter(s) which must be amazing since this one was so great. Update soon please!!!! :) Author's Response: Thank you very much - yes, it was a "set up" chapter more than filler, but still - I felt bad because it didn't have as many of the squeal components in it that I like to include! But, it was necessary to set up a lot of things that will happen in the next chapters (no set number has been determined yet....but it'll be at least a few). I will update as soon as possible! Thanks again! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: January 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Debussy Pt. 2
Bella's competitive side, that's something we don't get to see very often, let hope she's a good competitor so they can win, too bad they didn't have the chance to put money on that bet, because I'm sure they will win.
All the detail Edward puts into everything just for Bella to be comfortable, he really is amazing. And all Bella wants is to make him happy, I think deep inside her another reason for staying on the boat is also Edward's peace of mind, the quiet that will bring him. This looks to be such a wonderful trip, lets hope they have peaceful seas in front of them so they can enjoy.
Thanks for extending this story it has been so wonderful and knowing it isn't over yet, well it makes me very happy :) Author's Response: Thank you! Even if she doesn't always show it, Bella does have a competitive side, especially when she's got Edward on her team! The two of them will go to great lengths to outsmart Alice on this trip...the games have just begun.
You're absolutely right - Bella is always thinking about Edward first, which is why she suggested they not leave the boat for their trip. But as for calm seas - well, you never know what could happen! Though I do promise no cataclysmic events! :)
Thank you very much for the review - there's still plenty more to come!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: February 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 20: Brahms & Liszt
Defintetly starting the week with a dentist appointment is not the best way. But you get to read your favoirte stories, we get to read this one and review along with wishes for you feeling better.
I really like how you get inside Edward's head how you describe his feelings for Bella and what he feels every moment, it really makes a girl's heart want an Edward just for herself :(.
Alice and her perfect timing, really she is something, I just hope she won't be calling again during the night, or worse, decide to join them. :)
I hope you really feel better soon. Author's Response: Thank you - the week's getting better each day, so I think I'll live! :)
I'm convinced everyone needs an Edward. Though if there were that many Edwards in the world, then he wouldn't be special, right?
As for Alice's calls/visits.....you'll get the answer to that question in the next chapter! Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: February 17, 2009
Title: Chapter 21: Liszt Pt. 2
I can only imagine what could be going on at the Cullen's house. Alice having all those visions worring about Bella and her safety and their crazy hormones, Jasper trying to calm her down as Emmett sees what happens, gets excited and makes Jasper's job more difficult. Then of course Rosalie wanting some peace. Then Alice gets the vision of no Bella and Edward until the wedding and goes completely crazy. Poor Jasper trying to calm her then. She calls the boat only to be hung up on again, calls again and Emmett begins to tease so she gets hung up again. Imagine how angry she must have been by then and Jasper probably can't take it anymore. Lets hope Carlisle or Esmee were there to calm the children and still be able to keep an eye on the two out on a boat with ideas, desirees and of course a strong will to bet against Alice and win.
Can't wait for the next phone call, and Bella wanting, probably to throw the phone overboard. Author's Response: Awesome guess - but you're not quite right. However, you're on the right track....you'll find out in the next chapter what's going on back at the house, and trust me, it's quite scandalous (and funny as hell, in my humble opinion!)
Thank you very much for your hysterical review.....I really appreciate it! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: February 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 22: Hovhaness
This little bet is turning into a Las Vegas showdown, How much money is on the tables? Rosalie is in it too so it must be a lot of fun at the Cullen house right now.
What does Bella have planned for the day? it will be fun? lets hope it's "safe fun" Author's Response: Hell yes, it's a Vegas showdown! Maybe if I get really ambitious, I'll do a one-shot about what's going on at the Cullen household while B&E are off on their little excursion.... :)
I'm not exactly sure how much money has been wagered, but knowing the Cullens, it's not pocket-change. Probably a few cars, stocks, high-end toys, that sort of thing.
I actually just finished drafting the next chapter which will get us to about noonish the next day. Bella's definitely busy...but you'll have to wait to see what she's up to. Hopefully you'll like it!
Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 23: Smetana
Good that the rain stopped for a while. Not so good, even if they are trying for one of them to be in control at all times, it seems Alice will be calling soon :). As usual, great work. I love how you describe Edward's feelings, I can't find the words for it, when you always find them, that amazes me with every chapter.
Can't wait for Shubert, Bella and Edward Author's Response: Thank you! The rain may have stopped for now, but it'll be back......in a big way! :)
I appreciate the review, and I think you'll like the next chapter!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 24: Schubert
Now I want a foot massage too!!! Wow that was incredebly erotic. They are behaving so well and enjoying it so much. And up until the end, things still looked well for them on the bet front, Alice hasn't called yet. There are so many loving gestures to make you feel good, and foot massages are in the top of the list definetely.
But at the end Edward was begining to loose control, will he? There is too much money at stake here!!! along with other much more important things of course, but still. :) Author's Response: At the end Edward said "To hell with the wager back home". That might insinuate that at least part of him wants to lose all control, but wanting to and actually doing it are two different things....
No, Alice hasn't called...YET. But the phone is still on. Don't worry, it'll all work out.....have faith! :)
Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 25: Beethoven
A late but happy St. Patty's day to you too. I hope you enjoyed it.
This was an incredebly erotic chapter. The feeding with the meat and the strawberries. The storm moving the boat and lets not forget the phone that Edward suddenly didn't feel or hear. He was really somewhere else.
I guess Alice didn't call again because she was either letting them know about the storm or the phones aren't working because of the storm.
Edward is begining to like berries as long as they're mixed with Bella. I would have to kind of agree, berries with Edward must be just amazing. Author's Response: Thank you very much!
I know steak and strawberries are not normally paired together for a meal, but I've had this mental image of him feeding her both for so long that I had to use it! I know some people thought Edward was feeding her like a parent would feed a child with the steak, but as a person with no kids and no experience feeding kids, I see it way differently. If someone like Edward wanted to cut up my food and feed me that way, bring it on!
Regarding the phone - we actually don't know yet if that was Alice or not calling, or if it was a text or a call. Edward was too... preoccupied...to really notice. But it did ring/vibrate. And maybe we'll find out why in the next chapter.... ;) But I can clarify this - the storm isn't affecting the ability of the cell phone to operate. I suppose it would be possible, but that's not the case here. Just to give you something to think about....
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 23, 2009
Title: Chapter 26: Grieg
Thank you, thank you Bella for telling Alice of and sending that little phone to its watery well deserved grave. Unfortunatelly in all of Bella's moves some are still not orchestrated enough to move around a wet deck, so she had to fall. Maybe it was this that Alice saw and was trying to comunicate to them, or maybe it was their strong determination to do what they feel and want.
Amazing chapter, really one of the best, even with the cliffhanger at the end. Just don't make us wait too long for what will happen now. With this two at their present state, it's clear anything can!!! Author's Response: Thank you very much!
That's an interesting take on why Alice would call - unfortunately, that will never get answered in this story - but it will in a future out-take that will come when the story is finished. Until then we'll never know....
Bella was bound to injure herself at some point. The odds were simply not in her favor to make it the entire trip without some sort of mishap! But more important than her actual fall is how Edward reacts....chances are it won't be pretty.
Thank you for your kind words - they mean so much to me! I'm trying really hard to weave the known canon of Breaking Dawn into the end so everything marries up, and some of Edward's fanaticism on the honeymoon makes sense. Hopefully everyone can make the connection that I see play out in my mind.
Thanks!
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