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Hello, I'm a 34 English Teacher / Psychologist. Married, no children however two extreamly spoiled and adored goldenretrievers. Moka and Maya are my babies, both girls around 8 human years both of them.


I live in the city of Puebla in Mexico. It is a colonial city near the volcanoes. I give English lessons to children and adults.


I love reading since I was a little girl I read almost anything within my reach. I enjoy reading historic novels and biographies but adore a good novel and mystery. I would love to write, but I'm not good yet. I begin something and then have no idea how to finish it. So I have tons of little stories and things that go through my head in the computer and notebooks. I hope to one day make something out of all of it.


I got hooked in Fan Fiction thanks to the Twilight series which I loved. I enjoy reviewing stories and try to think my reviews and make them nice.


About my Favorite things.- Reading of course, both in English and Spanish. Favorite Authors, in Spanish, Gabriel García Marquez, Angeles Mastretta, Paulo Cohelo. In English, in no particular order Stephenie Meyer, J.K. Rowling, Michel Crichton, Agatha Christie. These are the ones I can think of now.


I also love cooking and I'm good at it, at least that's what family and friends tell me.


I also enjoy sewing, needle point, cross stich and such.


That's it for now I think. I hope that the authors whose stories I review enjoy them I try to make them good. Since I don't feel I can write a story yet at least I can try and write good reviews.


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Reviews by mayams
 
Summary: Feature

 

Bella had the perfect life.  She was married to her longtime best friend, had a great job and a beautiful son…until a careless driver stole her happiness.

Edward was fulfilling his dreams.  His residency was almost over, he had a gorgeous fiancé, and he was ready to move forward, starting a family…until a devastating break-up and a health scare in his family shake his foundation.

See, sometimes, life doesn’t go the way you want.  Sometimes, things can happen that change the course you choose.  And most of the time, it takes courage to walk down the new path.

What if that new path started with a tee ball team?

 

Big thanks to sigh-for-sigh for the banner!!

 

Play with me on the forum.  I now have a thread in the Alternate Human thread.  

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Billy, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie, Seth, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: No Word count: 116372
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2009 Updated: October 05, 2010


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: December 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 Home

Both Bella and Edward expected different reactions from the news of their moving together. Almost none was what they thought it would be. They were asked to consider things and put Seth first and before anything else. That was were everyone agreed, that Seth should be thought of at all times. What they didn't know is how much Seth wanted and needed this. His father will always be Jacob, but he needs someone there, present to do the everyday stuff with. Edward is more than happy to be his "dad" and Bella too.

As for Billy, his fear of loosing Seth is greater than anyone thought. He rather compromise and have Seth near him. Also he has seen how good Edward is with Seth and how much he cares for his grandson. His only request was simple and understandable, that Seth never forgets Jacob. I am sure Edward will be glad to help with that.



Author's Response:

They really weren't sure what reactions they would get.  They thought people would be happier, not so concerned.  Seth is everyone's focus, and that is good.  He will be happy!!  Edward will make a great father.  :D

This was always Billy's fear.  He knew where Edward had lived.  He was always afraid that they would move away and leave him alone.  He loves them.  He couldn't lose them right now.  He does want Bella and Seth to be happy.

Seth will never forget about Jake.  Edward knows how important it is for him to remember.

 

Thank you so much!!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 A Family

I loved it, recreating their first visit to the beach and including Seth in everything. It was really good, and Bella got scared for a moment when Edward said he didn't want to live together anymore, but all her nervousness went out the window when she saw Seth so calm and confident next to Edward. How can you not adore him when he says he wants them to marry Edward!!!!!!! That was just adorable and great.

It has been a great story, thanks for sharing it with us.

Good luck with your next project, we'll be waiting....



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you loved the way I crafted this!  Seth was too important to miss out on the proposal.  :) Seth is still the best!

Thank you so much!  I really appreciate all the support you've shown me!  So glad you've been along for the ride!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: February 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Epilogue: Life Goes On

I loved this chapter, it was a great ending to the story. A hectic day also. Seth, of course completely excited for his baseball game. Bella and Edward wanting to be there, even if Bella wasn't feeling too good. She is Bella and tried to down play it as long as possible, until it was time to go to the hospital to meet the new member of the family. I am glad it was a girl, that Seth chose the name and that Billy was there. He is part of the family and they all have made him feel that way.

Thanks for sharing your story with us, it has been truly amazing. 



Author's Response:

I'm so glad my story was a good thing at the end of a hectic day.  Yay!!

Seth - oh, he is so much fun to write. Such a great little boy.  Bella and Edward deserved their happy day.  And Billy, he needed to be assured that he would always be a part of their family. 

 

Thank you!

 
Summary:

Bella Swan works at a child care center and Edward Cullen is the single dad she falls in love with.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: Yes Word count: 190579
[Report This] Published: July 19, 2009 Updated: March 02, 2011


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Bella got a new friend in Alexis, and it seems Alexis won't let go of Bella easily. Maybe it was because she was the one there when she woke up and held her while she slept. And maybe she just liked Bella.

And Bella felt a connection to the little girl with the hot dad.

 
The Bunny Tale by jakeward Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 205]
Summary:

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A sexy and sweet romp in the city of sin where a bunny brings a businessman to his knees. Are they willing to let it ride or will they fold and let the house win?


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: No Word count: 45874
[Report This] Published: July 21, 2009 Updated: December 14, 2011


Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Viva Las Vegas

It's said, when in Rome do as the Romans, so if in Vegas, do what you're expected to do there, go to clubs, gamble and ... Edward isn't very happy with his stay there and doing the "regular Vegas things". Of all the places he could end at, he ended where he thinks women are not being considered correctly (trying to put it politically correct). That is until he hears a voice that gets to his core and stares at eyes that hook him. And the sentiments don't feel one-way only. 

Sadly it will be a week before he can prove if it was real or a dream. A long week indeed.

I liked Edward's train of thoughts in the chapter, I'm interested in seeing how he behaves and thinks from here on.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: It's Now or Never

Before Vegas, Bella's life had just gone along, not perfect but not terrible either. She went there as an exit to a life she simply didn't find purpose in. Then ended in a job she never imagined herself in.It paid for bills and school and it wasn't that terrible. At least until a man she just saw made her want to go down the road she seems to never had before, braking the rules and following gut feelings. He did something to her. However she is aware this is Vegas and he can be there as easily as never see him again. 

What will it be? As in Vegas a gamble, only one we may know the answer too ;)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Elvis has left the building . . .

He is back!!!! Back with lots of dark thoughts, that hadn't crossed his mind all week, but back there they did. Fortunately he was told she was there and he even got some help to have her wait on them all night.

Then of course we can't forget Busty Bunny, the nickname is cute, I don't know how much she is going to like it but it's cute. And Emmett is falling hard and has no idea she already knows, lucky guy.

So she's off for the night and he is going after her, lucky for him there was more help waiting. However something was asked in exchange, something thankfully really easy, it will just take some time for the message to reach its destination.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Bewitched, Bothered, & Bewildered

So the rules have some room to them... it's good to know that.

Rose and Heather both noticed Edward looking at Bella, did someone else did too?

She feels she is dreaming and in a way I understand her hesitancy in taking the chance, it would be a big risk. Also, she feels she isn't good enough. Not everyone has the same taste or likings, that is something she isn't considering.

So she is off for the night. Something I didn't understand. At first she said she was leaving early bcause the next day she would close, but then it sounded as if she wasn't working the next 3 days or just 3 days from today? 

What ever that is, she may find a surprise waiting for her by her car ;)

 
Summary:

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Bella Swan has a cataclysmic experience in a bar with a complete stranger.  He abandons her just after, but left her with much more of himself than she bargained for.  Some people don’t believe in destiny. They believe that we are the pilots of our own fates through our choices and actions.  What happens when forces of nature are stronger than our beliefs?  Can destiny trump volition?


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: No Word count: 8166
[Report This] Published: July 25, 2009 Updated: September 14, 2009


Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: I Can't Do This

Good, really good. As if labor wasn't hard enough, painful enough, the feelings of fear and nervousness going through Bella who had decided to keep the baby weren't big enough. She has to face the one person she had probably resigned never to see again.

He has to be good at what he does, if he recognized her, his shock must be big, bigger than hers.

They now don't have time to think about what may come next, too much going on in the present.  But when they get there... then what?

Really well written, looking forward to reading more.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Overexposed (vjgm)

Poor Bella, she was right, it was her moment and "he" had to be there. One of the most difficult things for a woman to go through, labor, were you are exposed, weak, vulnerable, emotional and to get such kind of surprise visit. I'm impressed she was controling her emotions so well, considering everything.

Rose is being too intuitive that as soon as Edward came in something changed in Bella and him. Will she question either later?

What will both of them do now? Bella has to stay in the hospital at least for a day, and he works there.

About the name... up to you I guess...

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: September 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Throttled (vjgm)

It's hard to separate the parts of Edward's guilt. He feels bad because he has a daughter now? Because he "used" Bella? Becasue he dissappeared? He said he had a rough day at work, but that doesn't make it okay for him to act as he did.

Then the other part, he is upset because he acted not as himself, because all the control he usally has in his life was lost that night. Because the one night he wasn't careful apparently had HUGE tiny consequences now trying to sleep in a bassinet. 

From what I can tell, he loves control, he enjoys controling as much as he can. He prides himself for his ethics, until this last delivery where most of the things he holds to value were shattered. He tried to think that Bella might have been with other guys around that time, but something inside him didn't buy that story. And it seems the baby in the nursery is proof that it wasn't like that.

There was a lot of confussion and anger in this chapter, lots of questions to think about. The answer should be interesting...

 
Summary:

 

“Our eyes met constantly; mine behind crossed arms raised on bended knees, his across his third glass, swirling the remnants of a toxic, golden drink. The stranger that sings with an accent. Even in the dark, smokey light, even despite all his flaws, he was beautiful.”


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No Word count: 2762
[Report This] Published: July 26, 2009 Updated: August 20, 2009


Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue & Chapter One: How The World Saw Them

Candid descriptions of two people who happen to be at the same place, at the same time, every night, but apparently no one has noticed it. They seem to be the kind of people you kind of remember to have seen but didn't really see.

I really  liked the way you make them so similar and different. How without a single name or word spoken, people in the bar can be identified. 

I can't wait to see what comes next...

 
Stripped by reagan Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 83]
Summary:

Bella finds herself trapped in a bad relationship and takes off to start a new life. She finds work as an exotic dancer, and finds she must overcome many issues in order to build a new relationship with a new man, Edward Cullen. Contains adult themes.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, James, Laurent, Mike, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 29458
[Report This] Published: July 28, 2009 Updated: June 04, 2010


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wrong impressions, wrong choices have consequences and costs. But as Bella said, there are more important things than a deposit. 

She is trying to be on her own, starting a bit late, but she is trying, that should count, hopefully. 

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Curiosity takes you places you never imagined you would go to in a regular circumstance. But life changes and your ideas change along with it. Will she be able to do it? To work in the club? She went to watch a show so there is some interest on her part. We'll have to see if she is convinced enough and by whom.

 
Summary:

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With medical bills, school bills, not to mention rent, piling up, Bella looks for a way to dig herself out of debt.  Rose tells her about a new business she’s gotten into.  Bella tries her hand at the business, and ends up paired with Dr. Edward Cullen.  But can she separate business and pleasure?

 

Here's a link to the thread.  We'd love to hear your thoughts! http://www.twilighted.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=44&t=5822


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Eric, Jacob, Jasper, Mike, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: No Word count: 43549
[Report This] Published: July 29, 2009 Updated: March 21, 2010


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

All of them broke and suddenly Rose is doing more than well. Her roommates have no clue and no guesses? Rosalie must be an amazing actess to have got them to not get too suspicious.

And of course now come the obligatory, how? when? where? etc that Bella will begin to ask, and then how will Rosalie get her friend into it?

 
Summary:

Bella Swan has moved home to Forks. It's only a matter of time until she crosses paths with Edward Cullen, her former best friend and first love. They parted on bad terms years ago, and both thought that they had moved on... All-human, LEMONS.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 36 Completed: No Word count: 132849
[Report This] Published: August 04, 2009 Updated: April 11, 2010


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue / Carlisle's News

First week of school and things aren't looking good for the guys, Emmett is in trouble, Jasper isn't too happy with him and Edward seems to be close to a very uncomfortable and difficult situation with his girlfriend?

And yes, someone from the past is back along with a migrane...

What could come next?

 
Summary:

Bella is a 20 year old single mother. She left her boyfriend after he repeatedly abused her, to move in with her dad, Charlie and his girlfriend, Sue. With the help of her dad and the support of Alice and Rosalie, Bella gets back her feet by working at the local grocery store. Her life takes another spin when she drops a bottle of orange juice after seeing Edward Cullen for the first time. An amazing friendship, and possible romance starts. But will Edward stay, or duck and run when he notices her stomach starting to grow?


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: No Word count: 5097
[Report This] Published: August 04, 2009 Updated: September 04, 2009


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Edward was also taken with Bella, so much that his friends caught it as soon as he got home. And they both seem happy to see Edward thinking about someone. The same goes for Bella and the girls.

So... how soon will Edward need to go grocery shopping again? Perhaps for pickles ;)

Lets hope Jake doesn't cause too much trouble for Bella tomorrow.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Going Home

It usually takes time to realize you have to stop and change things yourself, sadly at times it's late, others too late. For Bella it was starting to get late, but she did get out on time.

She's feeling terrible at the moment and it's understandable. However she is lucky; she has people around willing to help her. Her father and of course her friends who decided to stick by her and move along. 

Things won't be easy, at least for a while, but with a support group, it won't be that bad.



Author's Response:

she did get out in time absolutley.... but keeping herself from sinking back in... thats the problem

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

For someone who just got soaked on picke juice he was extreamly kind and forgiving, and sweet and good looking.

Bella's day had gone well, but it definetely eded much better.



Author's Response:

and we will find out why he was so kind and forgiving next chapter!

 
The TA by wuogkat Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 322]
Summary:

The three black and white photographs that hang on Bell's apartment wall.  The lights from a police cruiser, a flower, and a man cliff diving.  These represent the three men she loves.

Bella Swan has spent the past four years excelling at school as a way to insulate herself from her past.  She finished her bachelor's degree early and is about to start her first semmester as a TA in the literature department of a small heavily wooded school in the northeast when her past finds her.  Bella finds herself thrust back into the world of vampires and werewolves and she has to decide which path her life will take, if she can survive that long.


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Brady, Carlisle, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Quil, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: Yes Word count: 65421
[Report This] Published: August 07, 2009 Updated: February 21, 2011


Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 The TA

I like the way Bella is now. She isn't perfect but she has certainly changed. She is ridding a bike, knows she looks good on it and that people somehow admire her for it. She shouts to cars, she is less shy, but not less clumsy.

She still hears 'him' and seems to see that as part of her life. It was fine, until a last name in a roster changed everything once again. Could she really take it out on him?



Author's Response:

;-)

Thank you.

Hang in there.  She's taking it out on him for a reason, not necessarily a good one, but she's not being rational at the moment.

-Kat

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Bedtime

Everything is the same and so different at the same time. She still needs him as much as she needs air. He needs her in the same way. He wants to drop everything and take her away, she knows things aren't that simple anymore. They know they need time, and even if they have all the time in the world, it runs fast and Bella eventually won't be able to keep up. Then what? She has seen a newborn and is very much aware of what that future could hold. At the same time, she knows her life moves ahead with her on tow while Edward remains the same. 

It's a decision that is not easily made and it has only been a day. Can they still share their love with a changed Bella? What about the world around them? 



Author's Response:

Ohhhh you think it's complicated now?  Um... just wait a couple of chapters.  I have issues with making the path easy. 

;-)

Glad you're enjoying it!

Thank you!

-Kat

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 What Happens to Nice Girls Who Hang Out With Vampires

You shocked me!!!! I never imagined something like this happening. Seth? And Jacob? Poor Billy. No wonder Bella hadn't mentioned any of them, or Charlie. It had to be so terrible. Seeing so many people risk so much for one girl, a girl who felt broken and undeserving of all of this. Her guilt has to be so deep. How to move on? No wonder her bike is a part of her. 

 



Author's Response:

I hate to say it, but Bella edited that.  There are details that she left out. 

This is where I generally start getting hate mail. ;-)

Thank you!

-Kat

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: May 31, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 Nobody's Fault

NOt her fault, they can all say it hundreds of times, and Bella will still have a hard time believing it. But as Quil said, life has risks and dangers and sadly, but true, this would happen sooner or later.

The first concern was to take Bella to safety, and it seemed as if they had accomplished it, but Adrianna, isn't fool, and she figured something like this might happen. So she went after Carlisle, who was, along with Esme, worried about Bella.

So what now? Can Bella be saved? Changed? By whom? What happened?



Author's Response:

Adrianna is quite devious.  I really can't answer any of that without spoilers.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Ride With Me

In the first chapter I really thought Bella would be tougher with Edward and the rest of them. That her anger would be bigger than anything else. I was wrong and it seems that what ever happened in Forks back then was huge, painful, terrifying and changed Bella in so many ways. She gave into her love for Edward really fast. She has needed him, even if she didn't like it, and now she isn't going to spend time being angry. But she knows her story will be painful and wants to avoid it, until he is ready. 

I never thought she would tell him to ride with her and that he would accept. But then again, he wouldn't have felt comfortable if she rode by herself.

I have a question, where are they? it isn't Florida, for sure, but where?



Author's Response:

Hey babe,

Bella is a ball of interesting emotions that she herself doesn''t even fully understand.  It's a lot for her to process and she's shoved it all down for so long that she hasn't contemplated how she actually feels.  We're going to explore this later.

I blame Jasper for the motorcycle ride.

They are in New Jersey.  There's a college there that I based the setting on.  However, they don't offer the coureses of study that I needed for the story.  So, I've fictionalized it a bit. 

Thank you!

-Kat

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Lunch

The Cullens thought Bella had died. And it seems there was evidence of it at Forks. What did they find? It had to be rough for them, but not as it has been for Bella. 

There's a lot she needs to say, and I guess there's a group of vampires who can't wait to listen to what she has to say. However, it seems that might not be happening tonight for what Alice said.

Bella always had a soft spot for Alice and time hasn't changed it, she is still going along with what she is saying.

So a shopping trip on the first day of class. Who else will go?



Author's Response:

The evidence in Forks was pretty gruesome.  You'll get Bella's story in ch 5, and a bit more information from Edward in ch 9 - I think.  (I've written this story twice, once in EPOV and once in BPOV and they're distinctly different.)

It's just Bella and Alice shopping, Rosalie is a bit annoyed with Bella - because she's Rosalie and is thus easily annoyed by Bella.

BTW - Edward = massively appreciative of the shopping trip.  ;-)

Thank you!

-Kat

 




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