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Hello, I'm a 34 English Teacher / Psychologist. Married, no children however two extreamly spoiled and adored goldenretrievers. Moka and Maya are my babies, both girls around 8 human years both of them.
I live in the city of Puebla in Mexico. It is a colonial city near the volcanoes. I give English lessons to children and adults.
I love reading since I was a little girl I read almost anything within my reach. I enjoy reading historic novels and biographies but adore a good novel and mystery. I would love to write, but I'm not good yet. I begin something and then have no idea how to finish it. So I have tons of little stories and things that go through my head in the computer and notebooks. I hope to one day make something out of all of it.
I got hooked in Fan Fiction thanks to the Twilight series which I loved. I enjoy reviewing stories and try to think my reviews and make them nice.
About my Favorite things.- Reading of course, both in English and Spanish. Favorite Authors, in Spanish, Gabriel García Marquez, Angeles Mastretta, Paulo Cohelo. In English, in no particular order Stephenie Meyer, J.K. Rowling, Michel Crichton, Agatha Christie. These are the ones I can think of now.
I also love cooking and I'm good at it, at least that's what family and friends tell me.
I also enjoy sewing, needle point, cross stich and such.
That's it for now I think. I hope that the authors whose stories I review enjoy them I try to make them good. Since I don't feel I can write a story yet at least I can try and write good reviews.
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Summary:
Playboy Edward Cullen owns the most notorious and prestigious strip joint in the whole of New York: Violet. When Edward's left one girl short, he begins his search for the next dancer. Who he meets on his search is not only the best dancer he has ever come across, but also a contender for his heart. Can someone finally tame this bad boy?
ExB Rated for drugs, language and sex from the very start.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Leah, Rosalie, Victoria
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: No
Word count: 69545
[Report This] Published: July 06, 2009 Updated: May 03, 2010
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: February 13, 2010
Title: Chapter 15: Screw Normal (Part 2)
I'm glad Bella forgot all and just went for him. She could have done it a bit earlier on the date, but even if it was at the end, I'm glad she is really going with the not normal side of their relationship.
Edward deserves an award, he was a true gentleman all night, it had to be a bit difficult but as he said, he is trying to be a better man for her. She saw it and felt good about it and had to give him something back for it.
How did the night end? What now? Can't wait to find out.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: February 22, 2010
Title: Chapter 16: Desperado Eduardo
He is a changing man, no doubt. It isn't easy and it wont' get easier in the near future. But the most important thing is that he is convinced of it, so it will work, with help of course. Bella and all his staff are probably going to do what ever they can to help him.
He is really sweet trying to do so much for her. She knows it and she has to appreciate all the effort. Lets hope they find a way to see each other a bit more so she can be there for him more.
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 07, 2010
Title: Chapter 17: Fix You
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They were sweet, so nervous and wanting to help each other. Bella is realizing how much Edward is doing, how hard he is trying to become a better guy, all just for her!!! So yes, she should compromise and give something back; like going to a fancy party, that isn't so difficult?
He is being a gentleman and it shows. When will they see each other again?
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: March 27, 2010
Title: Chapter 18: Friends With Benefits
Bella has never been in the spotlight before. Edward has. He knows how to handle himself, what to say and what to keep to himself. He is so used to it, he didn't consider Bella isn't. As for her, she was a bit paranoid, but it's understandable. He is saying one thing to her and another to the world. It has to be confusing.
About his night out. Are the guys correct? Should he not give everything up at once? Does he want to? Lot of things he has to consider, the difference now, is that for the first time someone else's opinion matters.
Summary:  

Bella had the perfect life. She was married to her longtime best friend, had a great job and a beautiful son…until a careless driver stole her happiness.
Edward was fulfilling his dreams. His residency was almost over, he had a gorgeous fiancé, and he was ready to move forward, starting a family…until a devastating break-up and a health scare in his family shake his foundation.
See, sometimes, life doesn’t go the way you want. Sometimes, things can happen that change the course you choose. And most of the time, it takes courage to walk down the new path.
What if that new path started with a tee ball team?
Big thanks to sigh-for-sigh for the banner!!
Play with me on the forum. I now have a thread in the Alternate Human thread.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Billy, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie, Seth, Tanya
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: No
Word count: 116372
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2009 Updated: October 05, 2010
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: November 25, 2009
Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 The Truth
Poor Peter, his day went from bad to worse, but it had to be that way. Sadly he was too leanient with Charlotte and she overstepped her boundaries, they are probably having a long hard talk. I hope they get pass this and soon. Peter seems to be a nice guy and a good friend.
As for Tanya, she is a selfish person who has gotten her way far much more than she should. She thinks everything should spin around her and go according to what she wants, don't we all, at least once? But an adult realizes that life can't always be how we want it to be, and that we must work for the things we want and love, they just won't fall on our lap. Tanya didn't value what she had, her lose, Edward and Bella's win. It's never good to wish bad things for someone but in this case, what happened with Tanya made, in time, Edward's life perfect.
As for what Bella told Tanya, I'm glad she did, hopefully Marcus will be a good father to the baby, and Tanya might one day see things from a different better perspective. Author's Response: Peter really did have a bad day. He knows that he needs to deal with the situation now. Charlotte will face the consequences of her behavior. You'll hear a little about it later. Peter really is a good guy.
Tanya is very selfish and cruel. You nailed her character. Edward needed to see how she really was. Now he can move on and be happy.
Bella was so strong, for her and for Edward. Marcus will make sure the baby is well taken care of...and that Tanya is on a short leash.
Thank you so much!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: November 25, 2009
Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 Holiday Plans
I get that Peter is in a difficult position, between his friend and Charlotte and Tanya, but he has been kind of naive in thinking she wouldn't try to get to see him while he was in New York.
Bella and Edward going to New York was a great idea and I'm glad they decided to meet Peter and even Charlotte, who right now isn't in my favorite people list, but maybe more neutral ground would have been better.
We'll have to see how it goes. Author's Response: Peter was trying to avoid the problem, but it caught him in the middle. Charlotte will pay the price for her behavior. You'll hear just a little about that later.
New York was a good thing...even with Tanya showing up in the hallway. Just wait! ;)
Thank you!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: November 25, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 Family
Esme is such a great mom and grandmother, and she enjoys every second of it. For someone with such love, taking Seth as part of the family is no trouble and Seth being the amazing little boy he is makes things easier for everyone to see him and Bella as part of the family.
Letting go isn't easy, we say we are going to, but, taking that last leap is really hard and can need a little help. Esme did that for Bella. Sharing her past and her grief, she made Bella see that taking the chance is worht it; especially with someone like Edwrad.
True not everything will be perfect all the time, but having people that care around makes it easier. Author's Response: I really adore Esme. She is a great mother and grandmother. She loves her children fiercely. And, making Seth and Bella a part of the family is high on her list.
Seth fits right in with the Cullens. So does Bella.
Esme saw Bella's fears, and she helped her take another step forward. It is hard to take that leap of faith. She finally decided to do it! Edward is definitely worth it!
HEA's take work...for the rest of your life. :D
Thank you so much!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Tee Ball
The background has been set... Both their lives have been turned around unexpectedly but at different times and for different reasons. How are they each managing? We still have that to find out.
Meanwhile Emmett is nice to Bella and honestly wants to make her feel better. How will meeting Rosalie go? Author's Response: So glad you found my story! Yes, they are both broken right now. They both have some pretty serious issues to deal with. This story is all about coping and healing and moving forward, living again. I hope you'll enjoy it!
Emmett is truly the best big brother you could have - and he quickly adopts Bella as a little sister! You might find that Rose is a little different in my story. She has the things she wanted, she's happy.
Thank you for reading and especially for reviewing. I love to hear what people think as they read my story! :D
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Practice Makes Perfect
Kids inoccence can make awkward moments less awkward. They simply state facts as they are and not worry too much. Also they make friends easily, something that apparently Seth needs. His mom is still mourning and has closed herself, sadly she has closed her son too. Now that Seth has found a friend, both of them will have to start going out and hanging around people. Charlie seemed more than happy for the opportunity that baseball is giving both Bella and Seth.
Life is funny when you are a teenager and then a grownup, you could have had the biggest crush and never have done anything about it, or have hated someone and after time you see them again and wonder, now what? Author's Response: It's true, kids are amazing. The innocence is beautiful - and the honesty. Seth is open and honest, and is probably the glue that has held Bella together. I love to write about him! Charlie is great, too.
My husband and I went back to a high school reunion and I was amazed that someone who had a crush on me (that I didn't know about until after I was married) still acted funny around me! It felt like being a teenager again! lol Some things change, and others never do! It's so strange. (But, I'm still just a teenager at heart. :D )
Thanks for your insightful reviews!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Reality Check
Edward finally got the chance to speak with Bella, thanks to Seth and his interest in cars. It's great to see him and Edward have another interest, besides baseball, in common.
So Bella is feeling things she thought would never come back to her, she's scared of course, but Angela told her the same thing she heard, she has to move on. So does Edward according to his sister and his friend.
Rosalie is so nice!!! A great mom, and very observant and funny. She didn't make Bella feel as bad as she thought she would.
Edward was happy that the friends that came to see Seth were old friends from school, however he had the chance to get closer to her and for some reason he didn't take it, why? Author's Response: Aren't those first conversations with someone you are interested in a little awkward. I loved including Seth to make it all a little easier. Seth doesn't hold back like Edward and Bella do.
Bella is starting to wake up from her long mourning period. She's coming back, opening up. They both need to move forward, but as you know, that isn't an easy thing to do.
I like this Rose, we'd be friends! lol
Edward walked away because he isn't confident about Bella yet. He's been hurt, and he's a little scared. Hope you like where chapter 4 goes!!
Thanks again!!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: August 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 Friendship and First Dates
It was a great first date. Seth helped things a lot. By spending the ride talking he made them feel comfortable with each other's presence, so they both had time to find the courage to start asking some of the questions they wanted to. It was a great idea to go somewhere that would seem familiar but also have no memories for Bella.
Seth is just excited to have a guy, besides his granddads around him. Someone who is willing to play with him and spend time with his mom as well. He is really, really clever, letting Edward help Bella crossing the log and then going back, taking her hand, so Edward could take the other.
I do hope there are more dates :) Author's Response: Thank you!
Yes, Seth is helping things along - without realizing it. He's so pure and honest. I love writing Seth!! And, finally, they are starting to talk to each other.
There are pictures of Rialto Beach on my thread on the forum. Come check them out and play with us there. ;)
Seth does like to have a male role model. He misses having a dad. He is a clever little guy!!
I hope you continued to read. Chapter 6 is hard, but Chapter 7 should make up for it a little!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: August 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Misunderstanding
That was a crapy Sunday for both of them. And as much as they could have helped one another, it would have been kind of strange to call. And then when Monday came by... things just got worse and simply because of a misunderstandingly fortunately Emmett and Rosalie were there and were able to help them both. Emmett, I'm sure, still wants to kick Edward's behind, even after hearing about Tanya. Maybe he'll forgive him after Bella tells him Edward went to her house to apologize.
She was dreaming about him... wow!!!!!!!!
How will the game be tomorrow?
I'm lucky I can read next chapter right after this review :) Author's Response: Yeah - it was a rough two days for them both. Thankfully, they turn to each other for comfort after a little push from Rose and Emmett. Emmett will forgive Edward - he knows the whole Tanya story.
Bella realizes things about her life through dreams. She sees Edward working his way into her heart.
Can't wait to hear what you think of the next chapter!!
Thanks!!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Alone Time
I got a little confuses, she wasn't pregnant was she?
Everyone seems really happy to see Bella and Edward "dating", and that's good. The grandparents of course were nice enough to take Seth fishing so Bella could have a proper date with Edward. Esme inviting her over to the cabin was also really nice. She wants to get to know Bella. She seems to be very happy with all of these things.
The date was good, even with Bella's little accident. The ending of the chapter was sad but necesary. We needed to know more about Bella's past, we had glimpses at the beginning of the story but there was more to it. It was necesary to get things out, yes, painful but necesary. Edward will have to open up soon too. Author's Response: Bella thought she was pregnant, but didn't get a chance to find out before the accident. If she was, she lost the baby. She didn't want to know. It was too painful.
The families both support them dating, which is great. They need a little push now and then. The cabin is important! Love Esme!!
I'm glad you enjoyed the date! Typical Bella, rolling her ankle. And, yes, Bella did need to have an opportunity to tell Edward everything. He needed to know what happened so that he could understand her sadness.
Thanks for your reviews!! It's been so fun reading them today! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: August 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 Cards and Confessions
What happened with Edward and Tanya has big. She made a decision a huge decision that can be argued in so many ways. It was very hard for Edward, not only the brake up but also dealing with Tanya's decisions. It was really hard for him to come clean but really necesary. That it was Tanya who made him do it, a surprise. A bigger one how great Bella reacted to all of it. And the text message she wrote was just amazing. It was the best prove she could give Edward of her desire to have something with him. Also telling him to talk with his mother was amazing too, it will help Edward a lot.
About what Charlie told Bella about the accident, it is sad, yes, but it's good now she is certain of it. Fortunately she still has the chance to have children in the future. Author's Response: That event was huge!! Talk about causing someone to doubt people and have serious trust issues! Edward protects - it's in his nature. This was a devastating failure for him. Thankfully, he is now willing to tell Bella what happened.
Tanya's texts were a good thing in a way. They made he open up. Honesty is a big deal!
Bella is getting stronger and stronger! I love a strong Bella!
Edward needed to talk to his mother. He's been avoiding it. There's more to that situation. Later...
Charlie did the right thing. And Bella handled it well!
Thank you so much for your review! I love when people see so much in my story!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 Playing with the Cullens
The rummy was great. Emmett is still probably upset that Bella won and that he wasn't able to "help" her. Everyone had a great time. Bella really fits in really well, and so does Seth. Speaking about Seth, it's amazing how much children really see into things, how much they realize and grown ups just forget they can be so clever. They see things with such ease, for Bryce the solution is simple, Edward can help. Will any of the kids tell someone else their thoughts?
It was really nice to see them fall asleep like that, I just hope they don't get too cold. Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed the game. I had a blast writing Emmett and his 'help'. I love his character more all the time.
The Cullens have already opened their arms to Bella and Seth - and they have been very receptive in return.
Ah, the kids. I wondered if anyone would comment on Seth's statement. You're the first!! Yes, kids are so clever. Things are so simple in their minds. They see a problem, they work out the simplest solution and don't look back. Bryce likes his idea...he's not afraid to share it...
Don't worry about them getting cold...they'll snuggle and keep each other warm!! lol
I really enjoy your reviews!! Thank you so much!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: September 08, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 In Memory of...
Tears and a little sadness are a necesary part of life sometimes. They make you apreciate the smiles more.
So it was Esme who covered them in the couch. She is a mother through and through and at this moment a very happy mom. All her children are fine, the one who wasn't is doing better. Yes, things won't be always fun and easy, especially in their situation, but with such a support group, they'll be able to get through it.
So now Emmett, Rose, and Edward know too about Seth and Bryce's plans. It's a tricky situation but it's good they know about the kids plans that way they can be "prepared" for what ever comes up in their heads.
I loved Jasmie's good-bye to Seth it was so cute!!!!
Edward going with them to the cementery and sharing with Seth his memories of Jacob was great. It will help Seth a lot to know he can talk about his father with the people he has close, especially with the one he wants to take such a big role in his life. It was also good for Bella to see Jacob will always be a part of their lives.
Billy wasn't as happy, which is understandable, especially at this date, and to see all three of them arriving together, it had to be tough. He wants the same things Jacob a constant in Seth's life. Fortunately he will find out he is and maybe that will warm him a little to Edward.
Bella got what she needed from this visit, the knowledge of Jacob's presence and the "sign" that she should be happy. Now she'll get to work on it ;) Author's Response: You are so right. Tears and sadness are part of being human. We really wouldn't understand how really great the best moments are if we didn't know the other side of the coin.
Esme is wonderful! She is like most mothers - her children and their happiness are her first priority. She sees things that the rest of the family doesn't see. She will support Edward and Bella. They all will!
Emmett and Rose are pulling for E&B. He's trying to help Edward to be aware of what he is getting into - and just how serious it is!
I love writing the kids!!! They are so much fun!
The cemetery scene was tough to write - but so necessary. You're right. Seth needs to know he can always talk to people about his dad. And Bella needed the support. She won't ever forget Jake, and that's how it should be.
Billy has more to say. He will, and soon. It will take him some time to allow Bella to move on. sigh
She knows now that Jake is always there, always a part of her life. She's getting stronger all the time!!
Thank you for your wonderful reviews!!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Moving On
So all the kids are trying to work together and making their guesses, which aren't so far away from reality. But this reality isn't what everyone would like it to be. Billy is having a very hard time, he has lost two very important people in his live and understandably he is affraid of getting separated from the ones he still has left. Bella is too clever and loves Jacob too much to let that happen. Of course, Bella saying it isn't the same as Billy believing it. It will take Billy longer than the rest to accept that Bella and Seth need to move on. It wouldn't be healty for them to stay in the past where not even Jacob is.
They need to be careful but they also need to take risks and leaps to be able to live life. It won't always be easy or simple but neither is life. Author's Response: Kids are more insightful that we give them credit for!
Sadly, Bella's strength is scaring Billy. He is so afraid of losing more of his family. He needed to let her know that he was worried. It will eventually work, he just needs to come to terms with her dating. Bella has every intention of keeping Jake very alive in Seth's memory. She'll do everything she can to teach him about his dad.
It will take time for Billy to grasp what is happening and understand that it will be okay.
That's the hardest part of life, knowing when to take a chance so that you won't lose an awesome opportunity. You said it all!!!
Thank you so much for your wonderful review!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: September 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 Art on the Town
It was tough but it had to happen I agree.
I never imagined it would be Edward who would be so scared of moving on. Yes what happened to him with Tanya was terrible and had to leave a big mark. But for him to think he might never want a relationship again, has me wanting to go hunt Tanya down. Taking some emotions out of it. He is being honest with Bella. But his honesty is coming a little later than it should. Seth has already formed an attachment to him and so has Bella.
Billy was being cautious of course and it's more than understandable. And in Billy's favor he is being open about it. When Seth told him about Edward, he realized he shouldn't worry of Seth forgetting who he is and where he comes from. He just wants Seth and Bella to be happy.
It was really good that Edward went to talk with Emmett instead of bottling all his fears and emotions inside. And it seems the little space they placed between them made Edward realize that risks can be worth the doubt of taking them.
It was a little sad, yes, but I think this has been one of your best chapters yet!!! Author's Response: It really did have to happen. They needed to communicate better, and this is the beginning of that kind of communication.
Edward is prone to overreaction and to thinking in absolutes. If he's been hurt before, he won't let it happen again. His thinking will change, it's just taking some time.
They have all formed attachments to each other. He is just as attached to them as they are to him - as he started to see.
Billy - he is someone who speaks his mind. Seth is helping him to see the good in Edward. Yay for Seth! He is starting to realize that Bella and Seth can be happy with someone new in their lives. Of course, he's still being careful!
Emmett is a great older brother - we'll see that a little bit later on...
Life is all about taking risks.
Wow! Thank you! I'm so glad this chapter worked for you!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 A Slight Change of Plans
Loosing Mrs. Fredericks is painful for Edward and a shock he wasn't expecting. But somehow it was better for them not to have gone to the cabin, at least now. Edward needs to be with someone and Bella knows the pain of loosing someone you love. Edward never imagined he would get so close to a patient. It's going to be a rough night, but a really good one for them, it will bring them together. Bella's comfort will be more than enough for Edward to see why a relationship isn't such a bad thing and how much he needs it.
Bella wasn't so sure about going to the cabin so the change of plans isn't so terrible for her. We'll have to see. And yes, the promise of two chapters does help ;D Author's Response: You are so right. Edward was worried, but he never imagined that he's lose Mrs. Fredricks. Now, he has to deal with a lot of feelings that he's been pushing down. Bella is the right person to help him deal.
It will be a good night. I think you're on to something! ;)
They were both a little uncertain going into the trip. Now, it's make or break time for them.
Edward will talk to her...soon!!
Thank you!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: October 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 Comfort
Taking chances and risking some pain, it sounds so easy but it takes a lot of courage and effort to really go along with it. Edward was scared, frightened of the "what if's" in a relationship with Bella. Bella also is somewhat scared, but she has been there and knows it's worth it. Edward did to.
Yes there's a chance that things won't always go fine, there's a chance for pain and sorrow. But as Bella said, thinking about not taking the chance would hurt so much more.
Author's Response: You are so right. It isn't easy to give your heart when it's been broken before. It does take a lot of courage. They both took a leap of faith in this chapter.
They still have some issues to face. But, at least they'll be doing it together.
Thank you!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: October 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 Time Together
It was... it began, sweet, sexy, funny. Then surprises started to pop. Teasing siblings and unwanted messages. Tanya... it's not even worth to figure how she is doing. Sadly it does influence the story. Edward felt odd, in a way empty realizing the date Tanya sent her message. Bella... she was surprised, upset with seeing how much it affected Edward. It can't be easy to be in either's situation. I liked that Edward asked how Bella did after Jake, missing him, thinking about him. That they can share such types of experiences, says a lot of the great future their relationship holds for them.
Breakfast in just a blanket.... that should be sexy... Author's Response: Just like in life, unexpected things happen. But, they are dealing with them together, which is good.
Teasing siblings are fun, at least. Tanya, on the other hand, is not! She is a very selfish person. sigh
Bella was caught off guard, but thankfully Edward explained. They are talking, which is so important.
Breakfast in a blanket...sounds like a good title for a story! lol
Thank you so much!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: October 20, 2009
Title: Running Home
Can we all cheer for Esme? She is just great, she did warn him she would say things he might not have wanted but needed to hear. And yes, Edward didn't do that bad. He was smart enough to call his mother for help and he stayed outside her house. And I can't forget Seth who knew what his mom needed, called him and asked him to come back.
Billy wasn't wrong, but he wasn't right either, he is just a father who lost a son and who is still grieving, so his actions are understandable, but not good. Bella is in a difficult position and she just needed reassurance that she isn't making a mistake and risking her son's happiness. Sadly Edward didn't see this and unconsciously said the wrong words at the wrong time in the wrong place.
Hopefully this fight will make them both realize they need to open up even more and say all that is in their minds. As for Seth, he is smart and realizes his mom needs Edward and he does too.
As for Billy, sadly he has to work this out himself, it won't be easy but life doesn't usually is...
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: October 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 A Time for Everything
Really what a great present, his niece coming into the world on his birthday. And all the family will be there to receive her.
As for Bella and Billy's talk, it was meant to happen and it's good it was sooner rather than later. Letting someone go is never easy and Billy has to have let go his wife and son. The idea of not having Seth and Bella close, had to scare him and make him act as he did. But Rachel was there to tell her father he wasn't being nice and it worked.
As for the funeral, Mrs. Fredericks knew the things she was making for Edward would be used sooner than he ever thought, sadly she won't be there, but will be in their minds. It was a great gesture from her and from her husband. Author's Response: Perfect time for Alice to have her baby. :D How nice that the entire family is there.
Bella really needed to talk to Billy. There is a lot at stake. He's definitely not a bad person. He made a mistake. She forgave him - and was candid and honest with him. Smart woman! Rachel was important, too.
Mrs. Fredricks was a very smart woman. She saw Edward run to Bella's side in the ER. She knew... ;) And, Mr. Fredricks is a generous and caring man!
Thank you!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: November 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 New
He said it!!!!!!! And not just the I love you, his need for her and Seth, that was amazing.
Yes introducing her to Peter was also very important too. It's a clear sign of how happy he is now with things and life.
Jasmine's comment on the boy and girl cousins, really got to Bella, did anyone else get it? There can't be much more proof of what Bella and Seth mean to the Cullens.
Rose's idea of another room was also an excellent birthday present! Author's Response: Yes!! He did say it! He finally realizes how much he needs them. He's still scared, but it's looking up!
Edward held off with Peter because of Tanya. He didn't want to pass on any information too soon. But, he knew how important it was to Bella, so he told him.
Glad you caught Jasmine's comment. :D The kids just accept the relationship. Too bad adults don't move forward as quickly as the kids are.
Rose completely rocks!!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: December 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 Take Me Out to the Ball Game
Leave it to an excited kid to jump on a chair at Yankee stadium and need stitches for it. I'm not a kid I might find myself in the same situation ;) And how adorable was it when he said he was going to miss the rest of the game? A fan to the bone.
All of the guys went into doctor mood ASAP, that had to make Bella feel better, three doctors taking care of her son, and her. Peter was very nice with her and even as much as he is going to miss his friend, and things at home are tough because of this, he is happy for them and sees Edward will be where Bella and Seth are.
So twenty stitches, he is proud of himself, why? it sounds cool to say you got so many. Also he is even happier for the fact that Edward wants to be his dad. That was so sweet. Kids have a unique perception of things and we should follow their lead from time to time. Good thing they are doing so with Seth now. Author's Response: Exactly! Kids feel unbreakable! He really is a fan. Edward will have to take him back, don't you think? lol
The guys jumped right in there. Thank goodness. Bella doesn't do well with blood. Peter really is a good guy. He just allowed something to happen that shouldn't have, and he's sorry. He really is happy for Edward.
Boys like to have war stories, don't they? He loved Edward, and he really does want to have a family with a mom and a dad.
Kids do see things differently than adults. The innocence is endearing.
Thank you so much!
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