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Hello, I'm a 34 English Teacher / Psychologist. Married, no children however two extreamly spoiled and adored goldenretrievers. Moka and Maya are my babies, both girls around 8 human years both of them.


I live in the city of Puebla in Mexico. It is a colonial city near the volcanoes. I give English lessons to children and adults.


I love reading since I was a little girl I read almost anything within my reach. I enjoy reading historic novels and biographies but adore a good novel and mystery. I would love to write, but I'm not good yet. I begin something and then have no idea how to finish it. So I have tons of little stories and things that go through my head in the computer and notebooks. I hope to one day make something out of all of it.


I got hooked in Fan Fiction thanks to the Twilight series which I loved. I enjoy reviewing stories and try to think my reviews and make them nice.


About my Favorite things.- Reading of course, both in English and Spanish. Favorite Authors, in Spanish, Gabriel García Marquez, Angeles Mastretta, Paulo Cohelo. In English, in no particular order Stephenie Meyer, J.K. Rowling, Michel Crichton, Agatha Christie. These are the ones I can think of now.


I also love cooking and I'm good at it, at least that's what family and friends tell me.


I also enjoy sewing, needle point, cross stich and such.


That's it for now I think. I hope that the authors whose stories I review enjoy them I try to make them good. Since I don't feel I can write a story yet at least I can try and write good reviews.


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Reviews by mayams
 
Summary:

Edward Cullen is a hot, bad, gangsta fella who is a new kid in the Chicago underworld. But refusing to pay his respects to the big, ruling Godfather, his arrival is not welcomed. Bella is said Godfather’s estranged daughter who fled his father’s world in an attempt at a normal life.

Both men keep clashing and bumping heads, Edward’s power grows rapidly, men are tired of the old regime, and so a sort of gangster war ensues. Bella is caught in the mayhem when she becomes a prisoner in the hands of her father’s most hated enemy and rival. With Bella as a prisioner, Edward knows her father will have no choice but to do as he is told.

But does Edward have other motives to capture Bella?

**There is rape involved in one of the later chapters. If that topic offends you, please do not read** 

 

Thanks to the awesome Caius for my banner! I absolutely love it!


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: No Word count: 56590
[Report This] Published: June 06, 2009 Updated: June 14, 2010


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: June 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19- Atonement

Hola!!!! I was wondering where you went. I guess RL got in the way.

So far, Edward is pulling through, barely, but still there. It has to be an interesting display, such people in the waiting room of a hospital. But that's who they are, enemies, mostly. However, now  in a kind of truce. 

Will they be able to make it through this? Will Edward? What will he say when he finds out? Last chapter is the next one, can't wait.

Don't be a stranger...

 
Summary:

Edward and Bella are on their honeymoon, and they experiment with a new position. 


Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 3043
[Report This] Published: June 14, 2009 Updated: June 15, 2009


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: June 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

As unthinkable like this could seem to be, it was really good. Bella's lieing abilities and Edward's cautioness would have probably gotten in the way, but it's great to imagine they didn't and this could have really happened.

Both of them enjoyed it and it gave them new and different possibilites to explore. And if they go at night together to the store...

Really well written.

 
Summary:

******THIS IS A SERIES OF ALTERNATE POVS FROM THE STORY SHOW AND DON'T TELL. IN ORDER FOR THIS TO MAKE ANY SENSE, YOU MUST READ SHOW AND DON'T TELL FIRST!  http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=3995 EPOV moments from Show & Dont Tell

 

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Stephenie Meyer owns any Twilight characters and Twilight plot lines that may appear in this story.  The remainder is my original work.   No copying or reproduction of this work is permitted without my express written authorization. Copyright 2009 by Brits23.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: Yes Word count: 86153
[Report This] Published: June 16, 2009 Updated: January 16, 2010


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Paint and Promises

Tension rises, stress increases, and things get more complicated as Edward and Bella go down guilt trips that they at times deserve and at times not that much.

Edward is putting too much faith in Kate, in her helping him more than helping Tanya, and that is a risky thing to do and a tough place to be at.

And we keep saying soon, soon, but not soon enough.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Interrogations and Declarations

So, basically Edward has both Charlie and Jake's support and blessing for him and Bella, now he just needs to straighten out the rest of his life, piece of cake right? :( He will, he will, it just hasn't been as simple as he thought it would be...

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: The Emancipation of Edward Cullen

I'm really behind with this story, I'm shocked. So much has happened. To read it after a while isn't that bad, it helps to remember what went on and how things got to get the way they did.

Also to see Edward so in love and making so many plans for him and Bella it's endearing. Sadly seeing him making plans about Tanya that haven't been completed isn't too good. But they will, eventually they will.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: June 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Meeting Ms. Swan

He is really something and lost it completely with Bella, and somehow Masen is catching up to it.

He is in a difficult situation. He found what he thought he would never find. He was willing to settle for what ever he could get, that's sad. But he is a good guy and a gentlemen and he has to act acordingly, now that is both wonderful and terrible.

It would be nice to see his POV from when he sees Bella again and all comes out.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: The Beginning of the Hypothetical End

I'm sure I will love so much to read Masen's pov. It will be great.

About this chapter, boy does he have it bad. But sadly in a way he does deserve it. He didn't do things right. In his defense, by the way he fell for her, clear and reasonable thinking wasn't up in the list.

Now he knows what he wants and doesn't want, needs and needs to get rid off. Easier said than done...

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: We're Going To The Zoo Zoo Zoo

It was a fun day. They all enjoyed it very much, the zoo,  the goats, the petting, the ants on a log, the nap, and of course the silly string, that part was really, really great.

It was amazing how well the three of them can get along with such ease. Too bad they can't have, yet, all the time they wish to have; especially uncle E and Aunt Bella.

What will the payback be? I hope we get to know. Of course after Masen's pov, I can't wait for that :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: The World According to Masen Whitlock

Masen is such a sweet kid. As many his age, so naive in something but so smart in others. Grownups have to be careful around the little man, he is really smart and trustworthy. It's amazing how many secrets he is keeping and not telling anyone about them.

It's understandable why everyone loves him, and maybe somehow let Jasper know, Masen knows he is cheating ;)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: So Close, Yet So Far Away

Mmmm, as much as we all probably want the non-sex sex. Esme-Carlisle should be interesting too. So it's up to you I think but waiting a little more won't hurt much, I think.

Well, Kate seems better here, and that I hope is true and will help Edward take care of all of these complicating situations.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Love and Loss

Edward was ranting so much, there's so much going through his head right now, poor guy, he got stabbed and he is still worrying about Bella. He is certain he will get through this, he knows he has too. And he will, this is just a big scare but everything will be fine.

It's great Carlisle got there and is in the hospital looking after him. Not everyone is as lucky as him to get and see Bella before going into surgery but it seems Carlisle knew he had to see her.

Now all he has to do is sleep, rest and get better.

 
Summary:

 

THIS STORY HAS BEEN PUT ON HIATUS. At least until september-october 2010. I am getting married in august and it's hard to plan a wedding and write at the same time. I applaud those who can do that. I am NOT giving up on this story and I WILL finish it. Eventually. Thanks for understanding.

After Edward left in New Moon, Bella changed. She changed everything about herself in hopes of forgetting him. She graduated and moved down to California. The one place she knew she would never see the Cullens. 4 years later, she is now known as Elle Swan, a successful interior designer. What happens when she is sent somewhere else for her job?

 

Thank you to heatherdawnc for the banner!

Favorite review so far:

Ahh... so good!! A perfect mix with fluff and reality, you're soo good at writing that I gets envious *envious sigh*.

Have I told you how good this story and idea really is. There are many different stories where Bella changes her personality drastically after Edward left. And of all those stories I have been reading I think you are the one that has captured Bella's personalty best. Many of the stories have changed Bella that much that if she wasn't namned Bella you shouldn't know it was her, but you, even if you see the big changes, you can find the Bella how she was shy, sweet and madly in love with Edward four years ago. With another words - I think you are the one that have captured Bellas character best.

 


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No Word count: 69614
[Report This] Published: June 17, 2009 Updated: December 27, 2009


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: November 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Sadly, it's true, it would be hard to make this last forever, but for a while... it will be great. If Elle wants to be with Edward she will eventually have to say good-bye to Cassie and disappear from her life. 

I hope they enjoy their time together. I never imagined Rob and Elle being such close and good friends. I wonder how Edward felt about that?

Nice way to bring a wolf into the story ;)



Author's Response:

That is a very good question my dear. We will have to see what Edward thinks about Elle's relationship with Rob. Hehe.

Thank you! You are the only one who has commented about the wolf picture. I appreciate that. Thank you so much for reviewing hun!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: November 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

They were all in it together, each one had an important role and something special to say to her. They all helped her get ready for the big moment, and it was perfect. In the garden, they were "alone" but still their loved ones close by to share the good news.

Now their efforts will have to focus on keeping Alice at bay.

I was wondering something, what about Charlie and Renee? What will they say about all this?



Author's Response:

You are right on track my dear, your question about Charlie and Renee will be answered in the next chapter! Thank you for the review!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

She really did change. That's great. But there are certain things that even when you change they don't, memories and certain reminders. How much in the inside has she changed? We are soon to find out.



Author's Response:

Yes, you will find out! In fact, by now, you probably already know! I'm glad you're liking the story, thank you for your reviews!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

It seems every one has improved on their acting skills. I'm sure that where ever Emmett is hiding he is laughing so hard the ground will begin to shake any moment.

I just hope Bella/Elle can keep it together for as long as it takes.



Author's Response:

Oh I don't doubt that Emmett is laughing his ass off. I think it's funny how Elle thinks she can fool vampires. But that's Elle, she's very confident with herself! Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Something tells me that they asked "especially" for a Ms. Elle Swan and won't take anyone else...

How far will Bella go to avoid them? How much can she take?

I liked the idea that she got a tatoo over her scar. I just wonder, what is the tatoo?



Author's Response:

If you haven't read on yet, the tattoo is described in the next chapter. You are on the right track, you're questions will be answered in the next couple chapters. Thank you for the review!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Things are going to well for the Cullens. Cassie gets sick, she gets to go alone, everyone acts as if nothing ever happened.

And she lets him just take her so easily and so easily believes him and agrees to see him. Is she under a spell? I don't understand her very well, but I do want to.



Author's Response:

She's agreeing to be friends with him again and take things slow, but keep in mind that she is very much guarding her heart. She's not Bella anymore so she doesn't want to make the same mistakes. You will see. Thank you for reviewing.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

It seems every one is being an adult here and really has moved on. And Cassie is enjoying making fun of her friend.

Thanks for telling us about the tatoo. It's nice.



Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm glad you like the tattoo. Yeah, Cassie and Elle have a fun relationship! Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

It was a fun night, candy throwing included. So Elle has a life. She had been able to live, really live and now... will she be able to keep it up? Will certain family let her?



Author's Response:

I love girls night! Cassie and Ell are so awesome! As for your questions...you'll just have to wait and see! Thanks for reviewing hun!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

So there is a long story in Bella's past. Once we never imagined it seems. And Cassie is all to willing to spill it all out. Of course, there is so much she doesn't know, can't know, and probably never find out.

Were her feelings hidden as Jasper told her? If they were then, now... I think they are out in the open.

How will that talk go?



Author's Response:

Were whos feelings hidden? Elle's? You'll just have to wait and see on the talk. Can you wait until monday? Thanks for reviewing hun!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Wow, Edward went straight for the kill, no pun intende, both at the begining and the end of the chapter. He is trying really, really hard for Elle to give him a chance. What has Alice seen? Will she give in?

Casie is really excited with all of the events of the last few days and has become team Edward, all the way. And with him able to read her mind, I wonder what else has he found?

So she did a good job with his room, and everyone else's.

Rosalie is being a big surprise, I wonder what more surprises are in store for us?



Author's Response:

Yeah, Edward is trying hard to get her back. He never thought that she would forgive him and she did so he's trying to see if they can start fresh and give it another chance. Will she give in? Well, I do believe in happy endings, but that doesn't mean it'll be a pleasant ride the whole way there.

I love Cassie. Edward's trying to play nice so he's not trying to read into her mind too much.

Rosalie, Rosalie, Rosalie. Hehe, she's a fun one. As for the surprises...you just gotta wait and see. Lame, I know. Thank you for the awesome review!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

That was an interesting game to say the least. At times I thought it was going to get worse and others I thought that the Cullens would know everything about each other by now.

And then... what about making Bella do that dare, and then that question? What did Edward think? and feel?

They need to talk, really talk...



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review! It's fun to see what my readers are thinking.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

What is she going to do? Her heart probably knows but is too scared to speak up. Her mind is struggling to come to an arrangement with her life now and what her life could finally be like.

Edward being so charming doesn't help much and I'm sure Alice tomorrow will be working extra hard to get her back to their lives.

The park was great, with the swinging and the merry-go-round. Edward was shocked with her paying for dinner, she is going to regret it as she said. What will Edward come up with for it?



Author's Response:

You are right on my dear! Everything you say is exactly what she's feeling. She is torn. Her mind says one things while her heart say something completely different! Thank you so much for the review!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Work achievements or personal achievements, which ones should Elle choose? Should she have to choose? All of her body, gut, hear, mind is going in different directions, wanting different things. And the girls around her have their own opinions about what Elle should do.

Too much... she needs a brake, or not?



Author's Response:

You are right on....she does need a break...but will she get one? Thanks for the review hun!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

That was the coward way to deal with things and everyone knows it, even Bella, she just doesn't want to accept it. The Cullens won't either, hopefully. 

What will they come up with to have her come back? Or will they go see her? Who will go talk to her fist? What will Edward do? I don't think he'll leave things like this. Lastly didn't Alice see Bella taking this decision? Or has she seen something else?



Author's Response:

Alice could have seen her do that but her mind was so scrambled that she wasn't even sure how or what she was gonna say until she did it. Thank you for the review hun!

 




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