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Hello, I'm a 34 English Teacher / Psychologist. Married, no children however two extreamly spoiled and adored goldenretrievers. Moka and Maya are my babies, both girls around 8 human years both of them.
I live in the city of Puebla in Mexico. It is a colonial city near the volcanoes. I give English lessons to children and adults.
I love reading since I was a little girl I read almost anything within my reach. I enjoy reading historic novels and biographies but adore a good novel and mystery. I would love to write, but I'm not good yet. I begin something and then have no idea how to finish it. So I have tons of little stories and things that go through my head in the computer and notebooks. I hope to one day make something out of all of it.
I got hooked in Fan Fiction thanks to the Twilight series which I loved. I enjoy reviewing stories and try to think my reviews and make them nice.
About my Favorite things.- Reading of course, both in English and Spanish. Favorite Authors, in Spanish, Gabriel García Marquez, Angeles Mastretta, Paulo Cohelo. In English, in no particular order Stephenie Meyer, J.K. Rowling, Michel Crichton, Agatha Christie. These are the ones I can think of now.
I also love cooking and I'm good at it, at least that's what family and friends tell me.
I also enjoy sewing, needle point, cross stich and such.
That's it for now I think. I hope that the authors whose stories I review enjoy them I try to make them good. Since I don't feel I can write a story yet at least I can try and write good reviews.
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Summary: Edward Cullen is Big Man on Campus at his high school in Port Angeles. Bella Swan is a quiet, sarcastic, marches-to-the-beat-of-her-own-drummer girl at Forks High. A part-time job brings them together, and an unlikely friendship and surprising feelings develop. Neither is brave enough to do anything about it, however, and they part ways when Edward heads off to college. Their paths cross again after a year of no contact, and Edward is determined to not only rekindle their friendship, but to man up and actually do something about his ever-present feelings for Bella.
 Banner by the brilliant Anne Cullen
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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 24 Completed: No
Word count: 144739
[Report This] Published: April 02, 2009 Updated: October 08, 2009
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: April 16, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
For the first time in a long time it may seem Edward left Bella speachless!!!! I thought he wasn't going to dare do that, but he did. Where did he get the final courage boost? From Alice or Jasper?
It was luck to find Alice in the coffee shop, and she just decided to act on impulse, that was incredible.
I can't wait to see what will Bella say. Author's Response: He found the strength from withing! ;-) No, really! He just finally figured out that he'd screwed up and that he had to make it right because Bella's just too important for him to risk losing her again. He doesn't know yet if she'll ever be anything other than a friend, but he can't let her go again.
Glad you're enjoying! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: April 16, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
It was great to see them as if just a few days had gone by and not a year. I loved how comfortable they both are with each other. Now it's just up to who ever will dare say something, or for Jasper, Alice, Emmett or Rosalie to do so. Author's Response: The possibilities are pretty much endless, aren't they? ;-)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: April 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
So Jake still is hung up on Bella and it seems Bella is still kind of clueless about it. It was a great day. They both needed to find their rythm again. To see if they can still hang out and talk freely to each other. And be honest about it. Bella telling Jake who she was with. Of course it could seem as an overraction on Jacob's part, the shouting in the phone, but on one side Edward knows better, and on the other, Jake did overreact. Will Edward think about that later?
He told her about their first encounter, unfortunatelly the phone rang, perfect timing as usual. And if he had known who that was he probably would have done something to the phone.
So it's out in the open that she felt hurt. He has appologized. What's next? Author's Response: You'll just have to keep reading to see what happens next! ;-)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: April 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
So Bella is sure that there's absolutely no way Edward could find her attractive, or like her for more than just friendship. She is scared of loosing him if she is obvious about her crush. Does Edward think in the same way? Sometimes it seems that way but he is willing to take more chances and subtelly let her know what everyone else clearly sees.
What will Alice say to her? And how will Bella take it?
Thanks for having Bella crash at Edward's, that will bring such nice dreams, at least for them. :) Author's Response: It's not so much that Bella doesn't think Edward could find her attractive - my Bella isn't as insecure about her looks as canon!Bella (but she's realistic). It's more that they've been friends for so long, she doesn't think he would be able to see her in any other light. Edward's got more confidence because... well, he's Edward, and he was God at his high school. So despite Bella taking him down a few notches during the friendship, he's still sure of himself with women, generally speaking. Bella's different than most girls he's known, though, which is why he can't quite figure out what to do.
I couldn't not have Bella crash at Edward's. It was just too perfectly contrived a situation. ;-)
Reviewer: mayams Signed   
Date: April 30, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
penguins and pink sequins, the best dream for Alice a probable nightmare for Bella. For Edward, confussion, doubt and ? Maybe if there had been morea talking heard he and us could have a better idea of his dreams, which apparently weren't that far from his.
So Alice is sure both of them like, with big "l" each other. Bella simply refuses to even consider the thought. I kind of see her pov, I would also be Edward's friend than nothing at all.
Lets hope Alice finds a loophole in her promise to Bella or someone else may lend a hand. Author's Response: Alice is an observant little imp, once she opens her eyes. She's desperately searching for a loophole and trying to convince me to let her meddle. ;-)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
So it seems "someone" was able to kind of get the hint without Alice braking her promise or spilling the beans. Lets hope the woo part of the plan may be really set in motion tonight. James may try again and Bella needs a hint, well more than a hint that "someone" is interested, not just anyone.
Poor Emmett he really never expected Rosalie's costume choice. At least he and the other guys learned a valuable lesson if you are letting her choose the costume at least choose together :)
I liked Bella and Edward's non couple costumes, they were great and the Chicago references too. So what will happen now? Can't wait to see what will the wooing involve. Author's Response: Alice is very sneaky that way. ;-) And let the woo-ing begin!
The next chapter should be up shortly, so keep an eye out for it. :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: May 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
There is a small situation in Operation WooBella, a small distraction named Felix who might want to move ahead of Edward. And Bella found him adorable! So Edward may try to speed up his game. Things got really close today, especially in the music room. Esme and Carlisle's comments seem to point on Edward sharing his affection for Bella with his parents. Or they just know their soon really well. I don't think Charlie will be able to see anything, although, Jake and Seth might, even Sue and Leah.
What to do with all that tension building inside them? They'll have to let it out and soon. Maybe not in Charlie's house in the middle of Thanksgiving but before going back to Seatle would be nice :) Author's Response: Oh yeah, Felix would totally give Edward a run for his money if he were, oh, about 12 years older. ;-)
Thanksgiving at the Swans' will be interesting indeed. I'm sure Edward will rein in his touchy-feely-ness a bit, simply because of being around Charlie, but he's not going to stop completely - which I suspect will raise a couple of eyebrows.
Thanks so much for reading! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: May 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
So in a way Jake is over Bella, but still wants to protect her and cares for her a lot. He spoke his mind to Edward and gave enough threats to back up his talk. Seth on the other hand is like the little brother who is nice, sweet and Bella just enjoys having him around, so did Edward. Unfortunatelly the same can't be said about Leah. I understand that she might feel awful because of her boyfriend but that's no reason to take it out on Bella. She is really bitter and apparently wants to fight just for the fight, especially with Bella. Bella was able to keep things kind of under control for a while, they later were getting pretty intense, which wasn't so terrible since Edward got to hug her.
And that brings us to the almos kiss, aarrrgggghhhhh I really want to kill Jacob for his timing, 15 seconds more, that was all they needed. Now Edward wants to back off a little. What will Bella think about that?
There is something more. Jacob told Edward how much it hurt Bella when he left. He said she really cares for him, will he realize that means what he wants? Or at least give some thought to it? Author's Response: Yeah, it was a bit of a glimpse into the dysfunctional extended family of Bella Swan. Only Renee and Phil showing up could've made things more interesting. ;-) We'll see Bella's take on everything in the next chapter, but I'll say this much: Bella's not stupid, and there are very few ways she could have possibly misinterpreted what almost happened.
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: May 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Definetely a redemption and a pretty good one. So waiting for Bella outside her door, being able to see her wearing a robe only, and yes panties, I think that could have made Edward's night. Still he got to tease her about getting her panties and her in his bed and then went out. They enjoyed themselves, relaxed for the following week and made some interesting bets. I wonder what will Edward want to ask when his time comes? I think he already had an idea of what to ask, at least until Bella's bet. Which was a ballsy move by the way.
So she got a purple teddy bear, a date, an upset Alice, a screaming and giggling Alice, what is she missing? Something more from Edward :)
Can't wait to see what you'll share next. Last days of school, home, Christmas, or you'll take us all the way until New Year's? Author's Response: Glad you're still enjoying! :) And all I'll say about the next chapter is that there are a few more chapters before we get to New Year's Eve.
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: June 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
Enjoy your vacation, rest a lot, so when you come back you are filled with energy to write more :)
I've never been a big fan of Tequila, even less with shots, after this chapter, my mind is reconsidering it. It was really sexy and fun. It's incredible how each one on their side has begun to lower the walls and flirt more openly with each other. They have got to a place so comfortable that they let thins slip sometimes. Things that both scare and surprise them both. Sadly even if the signals are being sent and recieved loud and clear there is still that barrier that neither has dared to cross. They know that the other one is happy with the advances but neither will say anything and things are still in limbo !!!!!! However as long as limbo includes dancing and bodyshots I don't think I mind staying ther just for a little longer. They will need to speak up or have someone do it for them. And soon please, the sexual tension is growing and it's getting hot around here.
Again, great chapter, enjoy your vacation. We'll be waiting :) Author's Response: Tequila's something I've never been brave enough to try. I've got a low enough alcohol tolerance level as it is, so I'm pretty sure Tequila would kill me. >.<
Glad you liked it! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: June 16, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
Clever thinking and quick ideas, Edward really out did himself with the "holy-mistletoe" confussion. Not that Bella minded much. In fact I think she really appreciated it. That was one, hot, sexy, loving kiss. I do hope the first of many to come.
So Bella went to the Cullen's for Christmas Eve and was warmly welcomed by everyone, especially Edward, Charlotte and Felix.
I loved that they kept tradition with the T-shirts but that both of them got the other something else. Something that showed they pay attention and care for each other.
To bad neither can read minds, if they only knew...
New Year's closer, and so is "the date" Author's Response: Yes, mind-reading would come in handy right about now, wouldn't it? Glad you liked the update! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: June 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Wow, wow, wow. That was really good. Edward had a great idea taking her ice-skating and got so lucky when they were left alone on the pond. Of course, it only got better, and better. He was affraid, and scared since Bella acted so normaly when he went to pick her up. But it probably was that she was as nervous as him. Good thing he decided to act on it.
Going to Java Jive and finding Jess and teasing her was also great. Bella didn't say much to Edward's confessions but she didn't need to, just by looking and her he knew.
Of course Chief Swan has to act his part and be a strict father, but Bella can handle him. So what's next? Can't wait to see how they'll greet each other the next time they meet? Author's Response: So glad you enjoyed! :)
And Bella will never stop being Charlie's little girl. How could he NOT get protective seeing her on the porch with Edward? ;-)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: July 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
They got the pull-out bed???? I thought their friends wanted things to move up a little. At least they have to share it ;).
It was a nice party, they all had a good time, it seems the others are still having a good time and our friends had a great time up stairs. It was really good, so sweet and erotic, I really thought they would let themselves go any moment. They do have lots of self-control. And they still haven't talked. The suspense is going to kill someone, if Alice and Rose don't force them to talk before that.
At least there will be more dates after this. What will Edward plan? Author's Response: Well, the other two couples are more established and more serious. There's no doubt there'll be sex behind those closed doors. Bella and Edward? Unlikely. So that's how it was decided. ;-)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: July 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
So another chapter in Bella and Edward's past, a sad one by the way. Edward was really into peer presure. I don't want to turn this into judgements, peer pressure in highschool can be a really big and tough thing to handle. Still he hurt her, and hurt her bad. Yes, she tried to act as if it was nothing; she didn't say much about how much it really hurt. Words aren't always necesary. But still usefull.
Bella and Edward both were cowards in high school and just found out about how long they have been in love with the other one. They have lots of time to try to get back. I do hope they do start right away. Author's Response: You're right, they were both cowards, and they're both to blame for... pretty much everything they went through back then. But now's the time for them to fix things. :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: July 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
Edward is right you know? If this was hot, when they really get to it it's going to be ... smoking hot and a little more ;)
Alice and Rose... do they have a bet with the guys on when Bella and Edward are going to... ? That's an explanation for their early visit and insistence.
Will they go by again? Or the guys? Or are the four of them going to leave Bella and Edward alone to see where they get to?
Can't wait... Author's Response: They may kill each other when they actually get into bed. ;-)
Nope, no bet. Alice and Rose are just... Alice and Rose. They've watched Edward and Bella dance around each other for long enough, and they want them to just get down to business.
Glad you're enjoying! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 31, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
So Bella had a not so good experience in the past, which made her in part, be how she is now. It was sad to know she had gone through something like that. Edward being the amazing guy he is, and yes being almost at his limit, had to find out what was making Bella step back everytime. Once he knew he offered to take things at her pace, something that really surprised her and gave the small push that was so needed for both of them.
Edward may complain a little, but just a little by their sleeping arrangements, if asked if he would move... I think we all know his answer. ;) Author's Response: I think most of us can claim at least one less-than-stellar romantic experience in our pasts, so it only makes sense that Bella could have. And yes, Edward is wonderful for her, and he'll fix her. **nods** Glad you're still enjoying! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
Thinking, in college is good as Emmett pointed out, but thinking too much tends to make things complicated and risk them.
Bella is going down that path too fast for her and everyone else. She is thinking too much into things she wasn't supposed to see and hear and to those she is, and to those that aren't said at the moment. Not a good idea.
Lets hope she shares her fears with Alice or someone so they can let some sense into her convoulted mind. Author's Response: Who would Bella be if she didn't complicate things? ;-)
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
True... so true... who would she be if not?
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: August 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
Yes, much better indeed. It's amazing how difficult it is for girls to be open about certain things, we tend to hide in our own minds and dwell there. Yes, guys don't like that, but hey! it's hard not to go there.
Edward was really lucky that Emmett had a clue of what was going on with Bella, it was part of the whole thing but a very important part for Bella, for Edward is was really nothing, and yet partially the root of the problem.
How will Edward be able to help Bella with all of her insecurities? He might need the aide of his friends. Whom I'm sure will gladly help them out. They just all need to figure out how to get pass all of Bella's fears and insecurities. I hope the weekend activities will help both of them. At least to release some tension ;) Author's Response: We really are bad that way, aren't we? God, poor men, trying to figure us out. ;-)
Edward doesn't have a plan yet, but he may just have to go slow and steady, get her to trust him gradually. Not sure, though, he may have a surprise or two in store for us.
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: August 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
Bella went through a terrible ordeal in this chapter. However she wasn't alone for it. Not only were her friends there; but Edward proved, without I'm sure no idea, that he is there to stay. He is risking so much, for her, that's how big and strong his love for her is. And his father didn't disapprove of his actions aparently. He was there, helping as much as he could.
All Bella needed was there, Edward and then the assurance that Charlie will be okay. That was great. All her friends also not leaving the hospital for the night. That's a support group anyone would love to have around.
Charlie was also happy to see Edward there with Bella. I think he was guessing even before all this that there is something there.
About Jake and Leah... things looked personal and comfy, which is good. Who and when will confirm it? Author's Response: I think the only way Carlisle would've disapproved would have been if Edward HADN'T show up to take care of Bella.
Jake and Leah... yeah. That pairing always amuses me. Not sure when it'll be confirmed, but possibly in the next chapter... even if it's an indirect confirmation.
As always, thanks so much! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: August 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
The feeling of realizing you are exactly where you need to, have to and and want to be must be amazing, Edward has to be one of the happiest people right now, Bella is close behind him. She is surrounded by caring friends, a loving boyfriend and her father is going to pull through the accident. That has to be an incredible sensation.
Alice telling Edward about Bella in school was good. She didn't do it to be mean, just to let him know another side of how he has affected Bella's life for so long. Of course he had to feel bad, and he should. He had been thinking mostly about him and about Bella and him, not Bella on her own and how things outside their little bubble in the coffee shop.
I so want a shower in Edward's shower, with him of course. That was... just so steamy, hot, sexy and nice... a girl can dream right? ;)
congratulations on the awards, and good luck!! Author's Response: Bella's a very lucky girl, really. So many people love her, and she's finally figuring that out. And glad you liked my first foray into the world of shower smut! :D
As always, thank you SO much! :)
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: September 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
Imperfectly PERFECT, with them it couldn't have been any other way. Yes it might have been good that everything went perfect, but that's not them. They need to jump the hoops, that's what makes them so special and unique. Even when things have been planned and set, something might come and shift things not a little but a lot, and still they manage to make it perfect.
It was adorable, Bella getting burned, Edward taking care of her, helping with his thank you dinner. Then the cheesecake incident. It had to be a guy to worry more about it than himself. It is hilarious and of course Bella had to just laugh and speak out when she didn't intend to do so. And it worked.
Just as they both worked perfectly together, not that there were any doubts about it. And I think the lack of electricity made it even better and more romantic. And of course, there's no better way to end up such a romantic evening than with dessert in bed.
So Bella did it, she took that final step she had been so afraid of. Now, they just have to enjoy each other and get to know themselves better. If that's even possible. Author's Response: Why would that night, of all nights, go smoothly when nothing else has, right? ;-) So glad it didn't disappoint, though. Thank you!
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: October 08, 2009
Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24
The end is coming soon :(, that's life...
Morning was truly great for both of them. The perfect way to wake up every morning from now on, both I'm sure are hoping.
They just fit so well together. Edward wants her near, he isn't ready to ask her to move in and it is rather soon, but if the girls find an apartment in the same building that would be really great.
Edward's flashback was important. We knew from the start they never said good-bye but we really didn't know why, now we do. And it wasn't very nice of Edward but I see his reasoning behind it. He never knew at that moment, there was no getting away from Bella ;) Author's Response: I know, I'm sad about the end being so near, too. :(
Edward pulled another douche move when he left - but at least now you have a better understanding of why he did it, what he was thinking. He was still in the wrong, big time, but you can kind of see his flawed logic. ;-)
As always, thank you so much for reviewing!
Summary: Edward Cullen is a vampire living alone, away from the rest of the Cullens, with nothing but his music to fill the emptiness of his lonely heart.
Little does he know that his quiet seclusion will never be the same again when the shy, beautiful Bella Swan comes into his life. Quiet but inquisitive, Bella is more than curious about Edward and his strange habits.
Little does she know that his secret could threaten her very life.
Will Edward be able to control his appetite for her blood and satisfy his yearning for this enchanting young woman?
Categories: AU Characters: Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 9 Completed: No
Word count: 34559
[Report This] Published: April 03, 2009 Updated: August 14, 2009
Reviewer: mayams Signed    
Date: April 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I liked it. I really did.
Following Ms. Meyer's bases you are weaving your own story in a very different form which caught my interest.
Edward can't be alone even in his head so he has to get away from others to really know what solitude is. He needs it, every one needs alone time every once in a while. But that is not all that lead him away. He knows he is missing something important in his life but has no idea if he will ever find it. That must be something hard to deal with.
So he goes in his own in search of him? and sense besides his music when he is faced with something not only new but different and misterious to him. What could have been only curiosity is mixed with something else he can't understand.
I'm reaally eager to see how the story develops... Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Wow! You were really paying attention. Keep reading. It's nice to know I have your attention. Thank you so much!
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: May 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
When things seemed to look better all fell apart and Bella lost her job. Okay she didn't love it, but she needed it. With the job went her chance of seeing more of Edward. Apparently he seemed interested in her as well, went after her and comforted her. Things seemed to brighten up when he offered her a job. So she would have an income and the chance of getting to know him more. Sadly his fears and insecurites got the better of him and he didn't show up. Did he leave Forks? Or just decided to stay out of town? Poor Bella again with no job but at least the will to find Edward.
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