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Hello, I'm a 34 English Teacher / Psychologist. Married, no children however two extreamly spoiled and adored goldenretrievers. Moka and Maya are my babies, both girls around 8 human years both of them.


I live in the city of Puebla in Mexico. It is a colonial city near the volcanoes. I give English lessons to children and adults.


I love reading since I was a little girl I read almost anything within my reach. I enjoy reading historic novels and biographies but adore a good novel and mystery. I would love to write, but I'm not good yet. I begin something and then have no idea how to finish it. So I have tons of little stories and things that go through my head in the computer and notebooks. I hope to one day make something out of all of it.


I got hooked in Fan Fiction thanks to the Twilight series which I loved. I enjoy reviewing stories and try to think my reviews and make them nice.


About my Favorite things.- Reading of course, both in English and Spanish. Favorite Authors, in Spanish, Gabriel García Marquez, Angeles Mastretta, Paulo Cohelo. In English, in no particular order Stephenie Meyer, J.K. Rowling, Michel Crichton, Agatha Christie. These are the ones I can think of now.


I also love cooking and I'm good at it, at least that's what family and friends tell me.


I also enjoy sewing, needle point, cross stich and such.


That's it for now I think. I hope that the authors whose stories I review enjoy them I try to make them good. Since I don't feel I can write a story yet at least I can try and write good reviews.


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Reviews by mayams
 
Summary:

 

Bella meets Edward when he picks up his nephew from her Pre-K class and the sparks fly.  As their feelings for each other grow, Edward has a prior commitment that he is convinced must be seen through. A commitment that is effectively keeping them apart. Are there some complications that even the strongest hearts can't overcome? Can they resist the one thing they can't have--Each other?

To get to the prize, they'll have to survive the temptation of one another, in this emotional waiting game.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Kate, Rosalie, Sam, Tanya
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Series: None
Chapters: 27 Completed: Yes Word count: 124914
[Report This] Published: March 25, 2009 Updated: December 16, 2009


Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Masen giving Bella that daisy was simply adorable beyond words!!!! He is so amazing and smart, he went straight to the car and didn't bother Aunt Bella and Uncle E while they put the flower in water ;).

So... the tension between those two is near to be cut with a chainsaw. Edward has to move fast, really fast. Thankfully we know he is just about to do it. 

How much did Tanya see? Did she get a glimpse of Edward and Bella inside the theater? I just hope the brakeup happens before they get to Chukie Cheese, all the kids there don't deserve or need that show.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Finally!!!!! It took a while and Tanya didn't give up that easily of course. She had it coming, it came, she tried to denay it, but unfortunately for her, she decided do mess with the wrong member of that family, Masen. That was the last straw, not only for Edward but for everyone else. 

I don't know if I want to know what was said out in the parking lot, it must have been a little ugly and uncomfortable, but it's done and in the past.

They are worse than teenagers, and it's adorable, even going out to the car into the backseat. And they'll have to find some restrain still, Masen is over for the night and I don't think he is going to let either go.

Lets hope this was the last we saw of Tanya. She has to move on...

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: November 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

I just hope Edward got all the buttons from Carlisle's office. Not that he didn't consider what would happened once he left them there. But one thing is for him to find them and another one for "Spongebath Melissa" or the cleaning crew to do so. ;)

They made it, in so many ways, as friends, as lovers, as room-mates, as survivors, and they will keep on going for as long as their lives will be.

Carlisle had a great time making fun of Edward, and Bella just couldn't help joining in at times. But they had to wait, just to make sure everything was, is and will be as it should.

The epi is going to be great, no doubt. 

Thanks for a great story, it has been amazing. You said we still have to wait for the Epi, an EPOV, could there be any chance to hear from Masen again? His impression on Uncle E and his favorite teacher being together? Please?

Also the new story sounds really good, can't wait to read it. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review mayams! My favorite thing about hearing from you is that you always put thought into what you say...I really appreciate that. Thanks for the support, and I do hope you stick around for the new story.

 

P.S. Masen will be in the epi quite a bit :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Okay you let them do it, and yes it was extremely hot. That's an amazing lemon, with all the tension and foreplay surrounding it. It was just inches away from the perfect night. Just inches and a broken window. At least there's reason to have her if not commited at least handed a restraining order. 

I hope Masen stays asleep for what is sure to come now, and won't be pretty. Hopefully with her screams she woke up someone else who will be kind enough to call the police.

Enjoy your vacation, we will be here to see how conflicting night ends...

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: August 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Tanya's condition was underestimated, by herself and her sister. Edward saw something but didn't give it too much attention. NONE of this is his fault he was handling his own life trying to get away from her. He could have been more insistent with Kate, but in his defense depressed people can be very convincing.

I hope Masen doesn't get too scared with all that's happening right now, it's too much for a kid his age to deal with.

Everyone was confused, scared, angry and those feelings don't usually combine well for good results. Add Tanya's mental instability and you get something as terrible as this. Hopefully she didn't hurt him seriously and he will be fine. And her? She needs lots of professional help.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: September 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Tanya POV

Did you want us to feel sorry, pity, anger, understanding for Tanya? All of the above? She went through a lot and her biggest mistake, until tonight, was to love a man who didn't love her back. Seeing things from her side, at least at first, it's possible to understand her a bit. But when she begins to stop seeing reason and refussing to see the facts in front of her, that's when things go down for her. Yes it must be awful to realize that your dreams won't come true, as much as you want them they aren't meant for you. Sadly that's life. Tanya just refused to see reason and logic, she went inside her head and her own ideas and never stopped to see what others were saying or doing, especially Edward.

When she finally stops it's become late. Edward has to pull through, he will be okay, but Tanya... she has injured herself terrible from her actions tonight. A few moments of rage and a bottle of wine changed her life in probably unpleasant ways. Poor Tanya, the consequences of her actions are all on her. There's no one else to blame.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

It was great, had me laughing and crying, feeling sad and happy. It was a real roller coaster of emotions for everyone. 

Bella and Edward were being a little stubborn and reckless deciding to spend the night in the same bed, they needed it yes, but still it was risky.

I loved Bella wanting to keep Emmett's hoodie, referring to it as her comfort blanket. She really sees him as a big brother.

Renee's phone message was funny and sweet, she really is something special. And we get to meet her soon. Esme and her have become close, that's something I didn't see coming.

Yes, reality is always around the corner. They have to face Tanya and all that happened sooner rather than later. And it seems the time has come. What does Kate want to talk to them about? What will they do?

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: October 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I had written my review but lost it :(

So I have to go again. 

What Bella and Edward have gone through isn't easy to get over from. It takes time and usually needs lots of help from people around. They need to let it all go. Yes, it's part of their story but they shouldn't be marked by it. 

Kate was brave going to the hospital and ask for their help in getting Tanya into a hospital instead of jail. It takes a very strong person to say yes as easily as Bella did. Edward was having a harder time, but he will do anything for Bella and I think deep down he wouldn't want Tanya to suffer more.

Renee is funny, witty, sure of herself and easy to get along with. Both Esme and Carlisle liked her and Edward too. It's great Bella has her and Jacob with her now, she needs to move on and their love and support is going to help.

Masen was of course adorable, fighting with his mom about taking flowers to Edward. 

So, after Edward leaves the hospital they can "move on" after they talk, what does Edward want to talk about?

Sadly for us to find out, means the end is closer and that is sad :(



Author's Response:

Don't you hate it when you write a review and it deletes it? That's happened to me a few times when I've gone to submit a chapter and believe me, that is a pain in the ass, lol

I always love your reviews, mayams. Thank you for taking the time to give me your feedback. I really appreciate it. :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: October 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

It was a great chapter, with Renee and Sue getting along so well and probably teasing Charlie a lot, who deserved it a bit after what happened. Things between him and Edward are more than good now, and that's amazing.

Time to finally move on and start living. What they talked was very important. Sometimes we have to remember that there are people we don't get to see everyday but are really important and should not be forgotten. So them taking time to meet each other's friends and date is great. It won't be a conventional dating period, since they are already living together, but things haven't been conventional with these two.

You have shared with us an amazing story, and I'm certain the ending will be as great as the rest, so take your time to make it even better. ;)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 27: Epilogue

It was the perfect ending for this story. I loved it all!!!! Charlie and Sue getting married, and their little surprise. Masen being a ring bear and acting the part. The love every one has for Lily. 

Edward is going to school and is teaching too, he is doing something he loves and that allows him to share it. They are engaged and now up to a wedding sooner than they had planned, but the little secret that Jake and Alice figured out makes it all worth it.

It has been a great story, thanks for sharing it with us.

 
The Trip Home by MsKathy Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 621]
Summary:

When Bella takes a long overdue trip back to Forks, an unexpected detour helps her find her way home. AU/AH ExBxJ M for adult themes and lemons. This is a story about a poly(amorous) trio. This means that there are sometimes moments where they all three have sex, sometimes BxJ, sometimes ExB, and sometimes ExJ.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Jasper
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 40 Completed: Yes Word count: 217268
[Report This] Published: March 31, 2009 Updated: January 20, 2010


Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Delayed and canceled flights usually make people angry, but for these three it was a perfect Christmas gift it seems.

There was something strange in how easy they got into teasing and foreplay... it will be an interesting night.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.  I agree, they fell into things quickly, but sometimes that's what happens.  Add in a little alcohol and people seem to lose a lot of inhibitions.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

That was intense, so much Bella actually passed out.

Still she agreed to it very fast, why? It seemed extreamly simple for her to get into it with the guys but at the same time she seems to be new to this kind of activities. There must be something that made her comply that way.

Will they get to talk? It will be necesary.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.  I'm glad you're thinking about her motivations, but I'll be honest; I'm not sure I dipped into what made her so eager to agree.  I'm not sure there's an actual reason, other than her attraction to these two, the alochol and her loneliness.

Will they talk?  Oh, you betcha :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Wow, I want guys like that, they cook, clean the house, work-out and do laundry... Too bad they are already taken and spoken for.

That was an interesting meal, especially dessert, I do hope they got to do some cleaning before they left, otherwise coming back home won't be so nice.

So both guys are taken with Bella and want to see her at least in Forks. They both agree we just need to find out what she thinks. Luckily for them they probably have a few hours on the plane to talk... maybe even join the flyhigh club ;)



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! :)  I am pretty sure they cleaned up before they left.. just didn't want to bore everyone with those details.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

It was really nice of Jasper to change their sits to Business to spend the flight with Bella, and of course they needed to talk. They still have lots more to talk about, but that may wait for their "date" since texting has taken a very different course.

So Charlie is still over protective of Bella, and Bella doesn't want to share much with him. He is the chief of police so of course it comes with the territory. And if he found out what Bella was really doing in Chicago while waiting for the plane... Who knows what Chief Swan would pull off.

So, going back to the texting, will they go get a room? or move the date forward? Or find a simple reason to run into each other in town?



Author's Response:

Thanks again for the reviews, mayams.  I love all of your questions!  They are mostly all answered in the next chapters, but it makes me smile and shuffle my feet that you're still engrossed in the story and curious about these three.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I like the changing in POV to get a better understanding on what each one is feeling and thinking. The boys fell really hard and deep for her, probably because as happy as they are with what they have, they were missing something, someone who knew them in the past and wants to know them now. Bella somehow fit the part to perfection.

And about Bella, we know less of her than the others, so we'll have to wait and find out more. Somehow she has found something that she didn't know was missing.

So off to the date...



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review - I love reading your thoughts and feedback on these three :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I love stories with long chapters. And chapters where there are lots of things to think about, so yeah this past two chapters have been amazing for me :)

So Bella is in the same page as the guys, there is a connection there that no one has been able to explain, but they all realize is there. How or why is not important, what matters is that they all want to understand and figure it out more. That is great for them, to want what the other wants, that's lucky.

The guys have their way of communicating, even without words and it seems Bella is starting to get into it too. And they all want not only the physical part of the relationship, they want more, they want the friendship, comraderie, and closeness.

Then of course there is Esme... a mother usually knows even before her children do. So of course she suspected something with her boys. Of course Bella's behavior had to throw her off balance about her suspisions. I  don't think she had considered that she could be more shocked than her original thoughts, but she was.

How will things go from now? Will Bella meet Esme? Or the guys Charlie?



Author's Response:

I really love how deep you're getting into this story - thank you for these in-depth reviews and analysis :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

As fun as all these has been for them, Bella's crying has a lot of meaning. They will have to say good-bye sooner rather than later and it will be hard for all of them. However they really do want to make the best out of their days left.

What will the new year bring tonight?



Author's Response:

Thanks, again, for the review.  They are indeed going to have to separate!  Wonder what will happen then??  :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Yep, good-byes were hard. But Bella did begin to look into moving to Chicago for the next semester, still a semester is a long time.

Jasper and Edward have each other to comfort and luckily Bella has Angela as her friend, someone who will be there to hold her hand through all the sadness that will probably fill Bella's life, at least for the next few days while routine settles in.

Angela surspised Bella and us with her question. I wonder what will happen tomorrow over wine night? ;)



Author's Response:

Love this review - you're right, a semester feels like forever, when you're longing for someone (or two someones) from afar.

Wine night next!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

So they are trying to go back into their routines... it will be easier for the guys than for Bella, but she will handle it. She is strong and she does have Angela, who by the way, completely shocked the guys with how okay she is with all of these.

So the plans for spring-brake are on the move. The guys told Bella that they are more than well-off so they can take the time and use the money to spend time with her. That is amazing.

Sadly it seems something isn't as good. Who is following Bella? What is going to happen now?



Author's Response:

You called out one of the plot points I am always disappointed in myself with - that I gave the boys money.  It certainly makes life much easier for all three of them. Thanks for the reviews, comments and feedback.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Being a tourist and a tourist guide can be exahusting. And all the sight-seeing has been taking the toll on them, more on Bella apparently.

So looking back, you gave us quite the scare at the end of last chapter, I really thought something bad would happen to Bella, good thing it was just a scare and that Tyler was there to help her and plan things so she never walks home alone again.

Angela a soccer fan, and one of her heroes is sleeping at her place. If Ben is also a fan he must be as excited as she is. Well maybe not that much. However he handled the E/J situation very easily, that is great for Bella and the guys, gives them certain confidence they loose sometimes.



Author's Response:

Thanks, again.  My co-author wrote the Angela/Ben fan storyline and I really loved it.

Yep, Bella gave us a little scare at the end of the last chapter, but she's just fine!  :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thanks for replying to each review.

I noticed the story is several chapters ahead in ff. Do you mind if I switch there to keep reading? As you have noticed, I'm hooked ;) and really can't wait to see what will happen with these three. Over there I'm registered as momams.

Again thanks for an amazing story :)



Author's Response:

Absolutely switch :) I always feel bad that it's so much more behind here, but I am trying to catch up, I promise!

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Why would you be dissapointed in giving the guys money? Yes, I agree now a days people tend to give money more value than it should. But I don't think that's the case here. Here it's simply something that they have. They don't brag about it and for them it's simply means to an end, in this case some time with their girl :). I think that if they were spending way too much in sending expensive gifts every other day, just an example, maybe then money could be an issue. Or is there something I haven't found out yet?

Thanks again for answering every review, it's very kind of you.

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: July 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thanks, Yes, it's a little slower here, but I realize it's how it is. With some stories I don't mind the waiting, with others, i can't wait ;).

Again thanks for all the answers. I know I might be looking a little obnoxious and even stalky by now ;) Sorry about that. But, you're story is that good :)

 
Summary:

Edward Cullen is Big Man on Campus at his high school in Port Angeles. Bella Swan is a quiet, sarcastic, marches-to-the-beat-of-her-own-drummer girl at Forks High. A part-time job brings them together, and an unlikely friendship and surprising feelings develop. Neither is brave enough to do anything about it, however, and they part ways when Edward heads off to college. Their paths cross again after a year of no contact, and Edward is determined to not only rekindle their friendship, but to man up and actually do something about his ever-present feelings for Bella.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
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Series: None
Chapters: 24 Completed: No Word count: 144739
[Report This] Published: April 02, 2009 Updated: October 08, 2009


Reviewer: mayams Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Just found your story, congratulations in daring to write and writing so well. it's a nice turn. Edward back home not in shame but doing what he really wanted and with the support of his parents. But life can't be perfect and it seems a ghost from his past will torture him.



Author's Response:

I don't know how I missed this. Sorry! :(

Thank you so much for the kind words! I'm very glad you're enjoying it. :)

 
Reviewer: mayams Signed
Date: April 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Bella sure gave Edward a piece of her mind. And it hit way closer than she imagined it would. But apparently it was good, at least then. Now, things aren't as easy as then. Bella has feelings she can write but doesn't want to share and it seems Alice may be on to something. Will she tell or let Bella find on her own?

 




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