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Penname: jonquilemm [ Contact]
Real name: janie
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Member Since: November 23, 2008
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Hello, there! My name's Janie, I'm 25 years old, and I just read all four books of the Twilight Saga in the space of a week, haha. Wonderful stuff, and I'm a longtime fandom hopper... thought I'd toss my hat in the Twilight ring!
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Summary:
Bella Swan spent the first two years of her life in Forks developing a friendship with Jacob Black that finally turned into something more. As she begins her senior year of high school, a new family moves to town and Bella slowly begins to question the path she thought her life would follow. Sometimes there is a difference between what you think you need and what you never knew you wanted. Takes place during the timeframe of New Moon and Eclipse. J/B at first, but eventually E/B.
Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: No
Word count: 170230
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Acquaintances
Sorta new around here, so this was the first time I'd seen your story about, and I appear to be about halfway done. It is way past my bedtime, and I don't care. This story is so full of awesome... and I laughed my ass off at your Emmett... and I lovelovelove your Bella, who is easily embarrassed and a little misanthropic and thinks she's not in Edward's league, but praise heaven is NOT a doormat. She's smart and funny and sarcastic and happy/unhappy, just like everyone else in the world, and it's great. I'll totes leave you another review when I finish the rest of this story, which will be somewhere in the vicinity of 3 am.
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Hallowed
Wow, I wasn't going to review again until the end, but had to after this chapter. I simply adore how real your story is. It's almost like this is what I wanted Twilight to be instead of what it was, which is saying a lot since I love the books. But there's something about the realism in your story that's just beautiful and heartbreaking. This chapter was such an ode to a relationship that's falling apart; not because something is wrong, but because something isn't quite right. And, god, so few people really get what that means, but you've painted it brilliantly here.
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 31: Relentless
Hey, wow. This is... wow. I'd totally leave you a more kick-ass review, but it's four in the morning. That's how much I loved it - I stayed up this late to finish the whoooole thing. Will wait with bated breath for more. :)
Summary: Bella is a witness in peril. Emmett Cullen is the deputy assigned to protect her. When the witness protection program proves unsafe, Emmett has Bella pose as his brother Edward's fiancée. ExB. AU/AH.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Emmett
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No
Word count: 138506
[Report This] Published: September 14, 2008 Updated: June 14, 2012
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: November 24, 2008
Title: Chapter 11: April 19 - April 26, 2008
This is a great story! You've got a knack for the characters' voices for sure, and I love the plotline. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: thanks :)
Summary: Edward's family hire Bella Swan to break the heartbreaker's heart in hopes to have him see the error of his womanizing ways. Bella realizes that they have a little too much in common and is having a little too much fun with this subject. EXB Lots of lemons later.
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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: Always Human , SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 43 Completed: Yes
Word count: 322353
[Report This] Published: October 21, 2008 Updated: September 13, 2011
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Serious Sunday
This is a great story! I particluarly enjoy the twist you've put on the situation with Bella's career, but now I'm nervous about what'll happen when Edward finds out, lol. Can't wait to read more! Author's Response: Be nervous, be very nervous. It's going to be an emotional roller coaster from here on out.
Summary: Edward is no stranger to new towns and new schools. In his seventeen years, he's been dragged all across the country by his parents, Peter and Liz Masen. With no siblings, no real friends, and no place to truly call "home," Edward gets used to living life as a solitary teenager--until he moves to Washington. There he meets the Cullens and their friends—a beautiful, brilliant group of people who are both rejected and revered by their classmates. Edward reluctantly finds himself growing to like these people more and more...and finds himself having friends and, for the first time, feeling like he belongs. But just when everything settles down, his world is torn apart by a long-kept secret and an ongoing betrayal that will leave him questioning everything he's ever known.
Drama/Humor/Mystery/Angst-lite
Rated R/M (for language and sexual innduendo)
This is not an Edward/Emmett slash story however, there is a lot of Edward & Emmett togetherness.
If you like Legacy, check out Legacy: Extra's & Outtakes for an extra Legacy fix.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 37 Completed: No
Word count: 218730
[Report This] Published: October 30, 2008 Updated: February 24, 2010
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: …My Life as I Knew It Was Over
Wow, wonderful story! You really covered all the bases here - funny, sexy, and intriguing. I can't wait to find out what's going on!
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Revelations 6:22:91
LOL keeping the hand down, because I actually guessed right - go me! Don't feel bad, though, it was a million times cooler on paper than it was in my head. Not that this is on paper. It's on a screen.
Jillion times better. Am waiting on pins and needles for the next part! Hope Edward isn't too hard on his new fam...
Summary: "Doing what rich people do is easy."
Same old story, Twilight twist. St. Olaf's is a prestigious boarding school, dripping with money, sex, and social hierarchy. But there's really only one question you have to ask yourself: are you one of Them or one of The Elite?
Thanks to Patsy for the banner!
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 31 Completed: Yes
Word count: 149923
[Report This] Published: November 02, 2008 Updated: May 24, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: What happens to potential deferred?
Hot damn, you know how to cliffhang a gal, dont'cha? Really enjoying this story, can't wait to find out what's next!
Summary:
I stepped back to the table, and grasped her prone hand. It was already measurably cooler, defeating the swirling heat of her dying heart. The coolness subsumed the scar on her hand. I cringed inwardly. Ironically, where James had failed, I would succeed, leeching all heat from her bones...
What she'd begged me for, what I'd refused, was nevertheless happening.
Edward's point of view, beginning on page 351 of Breaking Dawn, from Renesmee's birth, currently up to Bella's arrival home from her first hunt.
Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renesmee, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 14 Completed: No
Word count: 38506
[Report This] Published: November 30, 2008 Updated: August 01, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Unveiling
Wonderful narration! I love reading canon events from other points of view, but I don't think I've ever read an Edward POV that I've so thoroughly believed in before. You really do have a gift for this! I love the subtle ways that the other characters' thoughts differ from each other, both modern and stamped with the character of their era. It's a very intelligent and thoughtful retelling of the story, I look forward to what's coming next! Author's Response: They all sound very different to me when I read the books, so I guess that's what is coming out. I'm happy it seems faithful to you!
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: March 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Plan C
Ahhh, I finally got a chance to catch up with this story! Sorry for the reviewing delay, but I encountered a slight problem with my reading. My life kept me away for long enough that when I read the latest chapter, it seemed jarring and out of place. Happily, now that I've gone back and re-read the whole lovely story (perfect way to spend an evening in, by the way!) it flows quite well. Don't know if I've mentioned this before, but Cutting of Cords is, hands down, the best alternate canon POV I've ever read, including Midnight Sun. Wonderful job, as usual, hope the weekend project lives on a little longer... :) Author's Response: I'm so relieved! Now someone else has read it for flow. I try, but it is a bit large by now. By the time I am finished, it is usually time to go to sleep and then I'm not sure I am seeing it clearly... Much less do I have time to continue to the next chapter. (Yes, I should probably just give that up.)
Summary: 
Bella has a chronic case of aquaphilia. Jacob attempts to dress her like an Indian. Emmett can’t keep his hands to himself, and oh, yeah, Edward loses the gentleman in him and plays the Peeping Tom. There's a guh-nome, too. Rated for dirty talk, liberated ladies, and oodles of bad behavior.
Note the NC-17 label. Just because the cover graphic is cute doesn't mean the story isn't kinky.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, James, Jasper, Renee
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 29 Completed: Yes
Word count: 74729
[Report This] Published: December 02, 2008 Updated: February 19, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: December 27, 2008
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: God+Pixie+Closet
Wow, this is such a great story! It's very dry and funny and sexy as hell. I love how you avoid the trap of saying too much, your economy of phrasing is incredibly refreshing. As always, can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Flamingo + Edward Out
... I kind of adore you. I have never, ever read a story, anywhere, in any fandom (and I've been around the fandom block), that dealt with philemaphobia. Four years ago when I first started dating my boyfriend, I frantically googled "intense aversion to kissing" in the hopes that I wasn't just abysmal at it and that he was telling the truth when he said it had nothing to do with me. Bless his heart, he tries for me, but it's a weird and sort of funny thing to get used to. We've been together for four years, and I've never kissed him with tongue... I may have forgotten how, lol. Didn't mean to make this into "true confessions" time, but just when I thought there was no way I could love this story more, you went and made it as odd as my life! :) Can't wait to read more. Author's Response: Ahhhh! Okay, so it's like -SPILL-ALL- time. So my boy (also of the last four years) was sort of like Edward in that he's really pretty but unbelievably shy--and he has weird taste in girls--like me. When he was 14?, he had a girl, who was like his best friend and whom he had zero attraction to, crawl into his lap and lay it on him for like five minutes of painful awkward weird slobberiness.
So that made him even more shy about girls, and when we *finally* got together (I had to be rather persistant), I had my work cut out for me.
In my case it took like... six months. But I still get yelled at on occassion if I'm not *gradual* with the whole tongue thing. But I'm sort of a persistant little bitch about it... *sighs*
Anyway, Waterfall is a lot of parody, so Edward's problem will be unrealistically improved at a much faster pace, and also it just fit into cannon Edward's restraint so well.
But of course in real life, people have issues. Relationships are weird, screwed up games of compromise and oddity, and I'm sure your boy knows how very lucky he is to have found you.
XOXOXO Much love! Thanks for reviewing!
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Angel + Gnome
Ahahaha. Magnificent hilarity. "You are not a murderer!", LOL. Love it more and more each chapter.
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Angel + Devil
LOL Classic move. Missing your suspended boyfriend? Why not join him! Hahaha. I love your Bella. And her flower.
Summary: This will be a series of self-contained chapters chronicling Jasper's observations of Edward's emotional states throughout the series, with the first chapter being pre-Twilight. Alternatively titled "Observations of an Empath" - from Jasper's POV.
Categories: Pre-Twilight, Twilight Characters: Edward, Jasper
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Word count: 9403
[Report This] Published: December 22, 2008 Updated: January 14, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: January 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Oooh, this is lovely! I can't wait to see how you flesh this out - Jasper's the enigma of the series, and therefore my favorite, lol. Looking forward to more! Author's Response: Thank you! I wouldn't say Jasper is my favorite, but he grows on me more and more each day. On my first reading of the series (I'm a relative newbie) I liked him but I wasn't all that interested in his storyline. On my second time through, however, he just stood out that much more, and I realized that he really could offer some very unique insights into the other characters if only someone would ask him!
Summary: Bella Swan moves cross country to take a teaching job, trying to escape the man who broke her heart. Edward Cullen is the school's music teacher with secrets of his own. Bella and Edward find themselves thrown together trying to work through their issues and unexpected feelings for each other.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 40 Completed: Yes
Word count: 272412
[Report This] Published: January 01, 2009 Updated: June 26, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: February 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16
I have to admit, after your beginning author's notes I was a little apprehensive about reading this chapter... but I'm glad I did! LOL Also, I'm glad that apparently your bad moods aren't as detrimental to your characters as mine would be. I seriously was bracing myself for someone to die, possibly several someones. Maybe some ebola virus, I don't know. Disaster, catastrophe, and woe. I am most pleasantly surprised, and incredibly glad that you're still writing. Can't make things TOO easy on them, eh? I did want to note as well that I really liked the Jacob POV. I thought he might be thinking the way that he is, and I'm glad for it. Apparently nobody told poor Bella that boys are dense... especially teenage ones. It's good to see that Jacob is just another boy, no matter how she idealized him, and that he does love her in his way. Thanks again for a great chapter! Author's Response: LOL. I actually almost wrote the love scene that was supposed to come next, just to show what would have happened had I tried it. Edward would have been a little *cough* rough.
Summary: I ran into Rob Pattinson.
And I was wearing a shirt with his face on it.
When Aimee has a chance encounter with Rob Pattinson things go from bad to awful in seconds. Could it have to do with the fact that his face is displayed for the world to see on her chest? Possibly.
Categories: Other Characters: Robert Pattinson
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: No
Word count: 31324
[Report This] Published: January 13, 2009 Updated: March 12, 2010
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: February 17, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Want To Distract Me?
Great story! Can't wait to see how she distracts him... ;)
Summary: 
Being a teenage pariah is never easy, but for Edward Cullen it's especially difficult. Then again, anyone would find being a mind-reader at the age of seventeen a little more than challenging.
Once a simple high school burn-out, Edward had given up on love after a painful break up. He attempts to drown his pain in extensive drug use which eventually triggers his ability to hear the thoughts of others. Once Carlisle is made aware of Edward's hidden talent, he sends his son to a psyche ward where he is diagnosed with type 2 Bipolar disorder. During his stay, he befriends Alice Brandon and finds himself oddly drawn to her best friend Bella (who has a damaging secret of her own).
AU-Human/OOC/Canon Couples
Rated NC-17 for underage drinking, drug use, explicit language and sexual content.
Categories: AU, AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Jasper
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 9 Completed: No
Word count: 56548
[Report This] Published: February 05, 2009 Updated: April 10, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: February 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Party Favors
Oooh, I like this! LOL Even though the most likely outcome of Edward's extracurricular activities would be more along the lines of death than hearing thoughts... that's what fanfiction is for, right? It's unbelievable, but somehow I believe in it, your writing style really grabs me. By the by, I don't hate the Tanya, or the lack of Alice and Bella. I like it when authors take their time bringing elements into a story, otherwise it just ends up being information overload and the plot of the story tends to suffer. I'm off to read the next part!
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: February 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Family
Excellent, I like the way you're fleshing this out. It's pretty much right on track with how I imagined it might go... they're teenagers! Of course they think it's the coolest thing ever. And of course they haven't thought through all the ramifications of it or what people might say or do if they found out. One teensy little problem with the chapter... LOL and it really is teeny. The term you're looking for, when someone hogs a joint, is "bogarting." So named, I'm pretty sure, for the actor, Humphrey Bogart... not entirely sure why, but yeah.
Summary: Edward Masen has just moved to the rainy town of Forks, thinking that his life is over...that is until he meets the incredible, yet troubled Bella Swan and her friends. A story about finding yourself and the ones you grow to love where you never thought you could. Some OOCness...
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No
Word count: 26805
[Report This] Published: February 16, 2009 Updated: November 08, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: March 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
I really like this! Can't wait to find out everyone's dirty little secrets, lol.
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: March 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
I like this story a lot, it has a wonderfully sweet tone to it despite the angst so clearly lurking beneath the surface. I can't wait until they all trust each other! Though if I had one wish, it'd be for the trust to not be rushed. I like the way you've paced it.
Okay, if I had one wish it would be for several million dollars, who am I kidding. But still.
Summary:  
He's a young but jaded keyboard player writing lyrics for his band, Breaking Dawn, and she's a naive and frustrated poet looking to break out of her shell; their words collide on-line.
What happens when they meet in high school, unaware of their literary connection?
OOC, canon at heart.
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Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 37 Completed: Yes
Word count: 146168
[Report This] Published: February 22, 2009 Updated: August 26, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: March 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Opening Lines
1) This story wins. I've only read a couple that incorporate lyrics/poetry in which said lyrics/poetry are actually good. Yours are better than good.
2) How long ago did you have a betta named Max? I once knew a girl who had a betta named Max, it was about ten years ago. I'm having one of those moments.
3) Best thing anyone's ever said about my eyes (they're hazel): "I love your eyes, it's like they used to be green, but all the hot coffee you drink made them warmer."
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: March 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Visuals
Agh, more yummy lyrics!! I find myself wishing that this story would go on forever, just to read more of your poetry. :) PS: I like my coffee regular, with half a cream and half a sugar.
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: March 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Type set
That's a good rule those Cullens have, there. My band once recorded a set list run-through when we were all drunk. Not one of us has had more than a light beer before a performance since. This is probably very weird of me, but I think that Ordinary_Girl and Debussy_88's epistolary interaction is just as hot as dear Edward and Bella's physical interaction. My favorite anatomical euphemism... if I'm feeling silly, it's johnson. Otherwise, it's pussy.
Summary: When a virgin is kidnapped in the jungles of Isle Esme, a daring anthropologist rushes in to the rescue. But will they be able to escape the island before falling victim to the predators, natives, and pirates? AH EdwardxBella
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 21 Completed: Yes
Word count: 34386
[Report This] Published: March 03, 2009 Updated: April 23, 2009
Reviewer: jonquilemm Signed
Date: March 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Wow, I just read the first four chapters and let me just say that you have a fabulous imagination! I love the "surprise" role-reversal, though you pretty much had me going until you asked for theories at the end of chapter 2, lol. Still, even with the tip-off that all was perhaps not as it appeared, that was a very skillful bit of writing. Makes me wonder if, since you claim no expertise in anthropology, if you do have some in gender studies or some form of communacations concentration.. or, ha, if you just know what most readers of Twilight fanfiction come to expect - the "if somebody's in distress, it must be Bella" syndrome. But honestly, you captured the spirit of what the majority of the Western world would consider masculine and feminine voices and attributed them to the opposite gender. Although, without any other guideposts, the youth and fear in Edward's voice and conversely the age and competence in Bella's do mirror what most would expect from a feminine and masculine stereotype, respectively. Sorry, I'm rambling, but I could talk about this crap forever! Great job, and I'll look for the next installment.
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