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What I Wished For by thimbles Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 290]
Summary:





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Bella and Jacob married young, and their life together has been much more of a challenge than Bella had anticipated. She’s battling depression and he’s increasingly frustrated that his wife is no longer the same girl he married. Bella is able to find brief moments of peace and happiness in the music she surrounds herself with. She finds particular joy in the raw and powerful music of Edward Cullen, and when she takes the opportunity to see him perform live, the pair strike up an instant friendship.

As Edward and Bella become closer, it throws her struggles in her marriage to Jacob into sharp relief, and Bella begins to daydream about being romantically involved with Edward.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 168722
[Report This] Published: November 15, 2011 Updated: May 08, 2012


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: March 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 24: October - December 2012

wow ..who knew our boy had that in him ....that was wonderful how her dad put that ass in his place defending her they all need to to know the extent of abuse she had to suffer ...so glad she got out and into a loving releationship



Author's Response:

It was very satisfying to write Bella's defense; it felt good to vindicate her publicly. And yes, she's in such a better place with sweet Edward now.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 8: August 2010 Part 3

my heart breaks for her having to endure his cave man like sexual advances.. just wish she had more time to vent her martial anxietys to rose ,,,,how much she is missing out on ....is there nothing jake is willing to do to make her feel good E has been nicer to her in their 3 meeting than her own husband ....but knowing what is to come of him ...i know where her guilt will come from



Author's Response: Thanks for the review! It's really lovely to hear people are investing in Bella as character. Cheers, Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: late June 2010

i feel like you followed me around the first 5 years of my horrible marriage ..never thin enough never smart enough never good enough for him according to his family ...my heart breaks for her .....



Author's Response: I'm really sorry to hear you've also endured this experience :( Thanks for reading and reviewing. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: March 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 21: March - April 2012

usually statements like that...so prolific in nature  would signal the end of the story I almost looked  for the words the end after I was done reading ...so please tell me that i  am wrong that you wont end it there ...there is so much more I want to read and see happen for them ....



Author's Response:

Definitely not the end! You don't think I'd end it without them making love, do you? I couldn't do that!

 

There will be 33 chapters. This is the 26th. Then I have at least two outtakes to write.

 

Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 18: June - August 2011

OMG i AM SO AFRAID TO READ WHAT SHE PUTS HER SELF THROUGH THAT PUT HER IN THE FRAME OF MIND HE FINDS HER IN ON HIS RE



Author's Response:

I guess you've seen what happens when Bella's left to her own devices - guilt, self-loathing and more guilt.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

 

Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 6: August 2010

i love that poem it was on an episode of beauty and the beast he wrote it to her on the page of a book ..makes me want to cry .....its tattoed around my wrist



Author's Response: Yeah? That's such an awesome tattoo! Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 5: late July - early August 2010

rpatz ...he he ....that was cute sneeking that in there like that ..



Author's Response: :o)

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4: July 2010

I love the way your building the foundiation to your story ...a controling spouce espically a husband can happen to even the brightest and self efficent girl it happens so slow you never see it coming ..we were to the point he controlled every movement of my life ...when he said bedtime and you didnt go he would turn the power to  the house off until you had no choice ....i took a new job and my coworkers saw what i had to endure ....the saved me in every way ...this is an amazing story



Author's Response: It makes my heart hurt to hear that so many reviewers can relate to Bella. You're right, there's something very hard to explain about toxic relationships and how they end up that way; patterns can creep in so slowly that you don't notice you're in a very bad place until much later. Thanks for reading and reviewing! Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 14: May 2011

I feel so proud of her...going to her dad tell her story..filing the papers ..calling rose ..but omg when Edward get a look at her face he will be like a guided missle ready to launch ..I will be holding my breath till the next chapter ... and you will have it ready some time today ...right ????



Author's Response: just about to upload it, so it'll be ready as soon as it gets validated :)

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 26, 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 10: December 2010

hell ...i am surprised he didn't hit her over the hrad with his club and drag her to his cave ...and she stays with him why ...and a baby wil only serve to make her depression 10 times worse



Author's Response: Absolutely. Don't worry, no babies on the horizon. I can't do that to Bella ... or the baby. This Jacob as a Dad? Hell no! Thanks for the review. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 01, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 12: Feb - March 2011

I know abuse.... i lived abuse for 7 long years I could say yes to more than half of those  qiestions  that first strike ,,,,the i am so sorry I will never do that again....that is where it starts   at least she let one person in ....then it leads to you desrve  it ......to you make me hit you   ....make her tell alice better yet rose  cause she will make sure that edward knows ...she needs a safe harbor for the storm that is moving in on her life



Author's Response: I'm so sorry that you've experienced abuse, it is never, ever deserved, and it is never, ever your fault. Don't worry, I won't allow Bella to remain in the situation for much longer. Thank you for reviewing. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 24, 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 9: October - November 2010

having been right whare whe is the pain your in just having to get up and dressed in the mornings ...so glad she finally told someone what that ass of a husband is really like ...i hope his interst in her will help her seek help closer to home



Author's Response: Yep, it's a big step to actually admit those feelings, isn't it?! Thanks for the review. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 13: March - May 2011

well at least she got away ..some wifes are not so lucky...some  find their only escape is a perment one... death... and if this was an example of his ability to react to her not being compliant to his demands her death would be only a matter of time .....bless her new friends ....i hope she has to sence to stop soon and tell someone what happened and to meet her so she can be safe befor that medication can kick and and she kils herself driving  for safety



Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and your words are so sad but true. To put your mind at ease, it's nearly impossible to overdose on the medication Bella's taking, but this will all be discussed in the next chapter - which is already in the queue! Thanks for reading. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 11: Jan - Feb 2011

i realy wish she could realize that no matter what he has no right to hit her and tell edward or her doctor that its happened some times the power they recieve from striking that first blow becomes impowering and gives them a sense on control and that feeling can take ove your life   tell someone even alice or rose  just tell someone



Author's Response: That's a really good point, and something I hadn't considered. The fact she immediately becomes obedient once he slaps her; it's completely imaginable that Jacob would enjoy that feeling of power ... I'll have to take that into account. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 19: August 2011- March 2012

THE LONELY NIGHTS ...THE LACK OF SLEEEP ..THE DREAMS THAT COME LIKE EVIL PIXIES IN THE NIGHT STEALING HER CONFIDANCE AWAY MAKING HER FEEL LIKE THE NOTHING JACOB ALWAYS CLAIMED SHE WAS ......AND NO ONE SEE SHE IS FALLING INTO THE DARK PIT THAT IS DEPRESSION ....NOT HER PARENTS OR BEST FRIENDS ...LIKE SHE IS WALKING INTO A DARK CAVE FURTHER AND FURTHER AWAY FROM THE LIGHT ...WE WILL NEED SOME ONE WITH A BRIGHT

LIGHT TO GO AND FIND HER AND BRING HER BACK WHERE ITS LIGHT AND SHE KNOWS WHAT BEING LOVED FEELS LIKE



Author's Response:

"WE WILL NEED SOME ONE WITH A BRIGHT LIGHT TO GO AND FIND HER AND BRING HER BACK WHERE ITS LIGHT"

 

This is what Edward promised her in the first song he wrote for her; he returns next chapter. Will he be able to help her up from rock-bottom?

 

Thanks for the review. Shell xx

 

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: March 13, 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 22: May - June 2012

well you should be really proud of your self that was a beautiful chapter loving and sexy with out being crude ...love making at its finest



Author's Response:

Thanks so much. I'll never, ever be able to write graphically, and I really wanted the emotions of their first time to be the focus.

 

Shell xx

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: March 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 25: March 2012: Over to Edward

I dont know wheather to laugh or cry at that ....but i really want to see if he can do it again please please please .....i think everybody remembers their first O ..poor girl give her another



Author's Response:

Hehe, oh there'll be more where that came from ...

Thanks for the review.

 

Shell xx

 
Save Tonight by ahommel Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 44]
Summary:

Bella and Edward

Banner created by: ahommel (me)

 

AU - It's been nine months since Edward fled the woods in Forks, fled from her for her. Each day his willpower crumbles a little more, feeling the insistent pull to return to her side. Upon returning, Edward is unable to locate Bella ... she's not with her friends, not at home, not even at the Cullen home. Upon finding the shell that once was Bella, Edward feels his heart ache for the pain he has caused her. Promising himself that she will not see him, he steals one kiss from her. The night explodes into a passionate reunion leaving both significantly changed. Will Edward convince Bella that it was all a dream? Has she really gone crazy, pushed herself to the limit?


Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 13361
[Report This] Published: December 03, 2011 Updated: July 10, 2013


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: August 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Breathless

well    .......we all know he was not far he would never leave her alon in the forest .....so he is probally is heart sick   afterher break down    camt wait to his pov



Author's Response:

We will see EPOV in Chapter Six. I dislike rehashing things from different POVs so it won't be reviewing what has already occured. Of course, if anyone wants an out take from a particular chapter, just let me know.

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: December 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Everything

I like your direction  until your next update ...cant wait to see how she reacts when she opens her eyes and realizes she is not dreaming 



Author's Response:

Well, this is Bella we're talking about .... I don't think it'll be TOO easy for her to accept she's NOT dreaming. But don't worry, I won't draw it out too long. ;-)

 
Summary:

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Bella didn't like surprises. Her life was safe, predictable and she knew what to expect.... until fate brought her breast cancer and everything changed. This is not a tragedy; it's a story about love and hope because that's what life is all about.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 29 Completed: Yes Word count: 62697
[Report This] Published: January 02, 2012 Updated: July 02, 2012


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One. Now.

I SURE WANT TO BE IN ON THAT CONVERSATION HE HE FINALLY EXPLAINS TO HER WHY HE DID THAT WITH AOTHER WOMAN ...



Author's Response:

It should be interesting....

Thanks for eading and reviewing. 

Judy

xoxoxo

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter Seven. Then.

YOU NEVER REALIZE JUST HOW MUCH YOUR FRIENDS AND FAMIY LOVE YOU UNTIL YOUR FACING THE WORST DAYS OF YOUR LIFE ...MY COWORKERS ALL BOUGHT SHOES WITH PINK RIBBONS AND A FIGHT CANCER SHIRT ...WE ALL WENT ON THE CANCER WALK TOGETHER ...WE ALL WORE THE SAME BRACELET...I HAD TO TRAVEL  TO SEE A OBGYN ONOCOLOGIST BUT HE BECAME LIKE A BROTHER TO ME ...I REMEMBER ASKING HIM BEFORE OR THAT DAY ...NOT TO LET ME DIE ....HE SAID  I PROMISE...HE KEPT HIS PROMISE ......I JUST HOPE SHE LETS THE FAMILY IN SO THEY CAN BE AN EXTENDED SUPPORT SYSTEM FOR HER ...SHE WILL NEED ALL THE SUPPORT SHE CAN GET ....I JUST HOPE e HAS HAD TIME TO PUT HIS SELF TOGETHER TO BE  ABLE TO BE A ROCK FOR HER THIS TIME



Author's Response:

That support you speak of from friends and family is everything, isn't it?  I'm glad things are good with you.

Thank you for your review and for reading!!

Judy

xoxoxo

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter Twelve. Then.

I am hoping i am on th right track with who ended up being her loving husband ...if i am wrong i will be really unhappy ...so when will he make a move he alresady has charlie seal of approval and mine of course  lol



Author's Response:

Oh, I would never make you unhappy!

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Judy

xoxoxo

 

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: March 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter Twenty Seven. Now.

that was amazingly perfect .....i was only hoping they could end this tale with a new begining .....



Author's Response:

I'm glad you are happy!!  It wasn't a perfect ending, but life is never perfect.  It was a happy ending though. 

Thank you so much for reading and your reviews.  I really appreciate it.

Judy

xoxoxo

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: March 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter Twenty Three. Now.

my helper was the elipictal machine ..they help regain my rom ...after a few brake downs



Author's Response:

Everyone has to find their own way, right?

Thank you for reading!!

Judy

xoxoxo

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: January 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two. Now.

see I found the hidden key  ....I just wasn't looking hard enough



Author's Response:

Sometimes you just have to keep looking!

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Judy

xoxoxo

 




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