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Reviews by twilightgma1954
 
Summary:

Handsome yet arrogant Edward Masen's life intersects with Bella Swan when she takes a job as a waitress at the restaurant he dines at for lunch every Friday. He doesn't know how to love anything or anyone, and she isn't impressed by the things that usually have women falling at his feet.  He's got secrets and a temper - can Bella break down his walls?  She'll get her chance Fridays at noon...

 

 

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 31 Completed: Yes Word count: 236322
[Report This] Published: October 29, 2010 Updated: August 30, 2011


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: March 16, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16

but see he is even so cute when he is sick and here I wqs getting excited about her having morning sickness   guess not huh

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

and again that penny tip was just  too funny who would do that  600 pounds os pennies but at least she got her tip this time I was worried about her making ends meet after having to pay for his dry cleaning    and that rescue whoa  what will they do to torment each other next friday      wonderful story just to funny

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: August 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: EPOV Saturday at Six

well we all can agree that this was a major breakthough on the unfreezing of the heart of Edward Masen

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: March 28, 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17

I thought this was a new chapter but it was only Twilighted catching up ....reviewing this makes it easier to deal with all the pain she is in in the last updated being without him and his being seen with all the other women hurts just a little less ...seeing him go through the pain of Alec;s death  again ...I understand and accept why he had to distance himself from her life     but its cool that he left a man behind to watch her  .....we all know he still loves only her

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 14, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

always a funny part they have kept me in stitches since chapter 1   i am having the best time reading this

 
Summary:

 

Edward & Bella's life together couldn't have been more perfect: their courtship, marriage & the birth of their beautiful baby girl.

 

When tragedy strikes, can this family pull through?

 

Rated M for language, dark themes & adult situations.

 

AU/AH/BxE

**DISCLAIMER**

This story deals with real-life emotions and affects associated with depression; this includes some references to suicide and extreme emotional distress. Please read with caution and at your own discretion.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: Yes Word count: 82690
[Report This] Published: November 05, 2010 Updated: October 08, 2011


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: I Do It for Her

I am glad you are treating them as separate enities...most people just combine them like Ben and Jerry thet are two totaly different people 

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6: Crossing the Line

she can't see it can she ...he needs to be with her to be happy  sounds like she is still looking for a way to get out 

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7: Three Giant Leaps Back

this sounds so real.... just like standing in the door way listening  I kinda of want to slap her...

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8: Reliving the Nightmare

wow how did I not see that...this is so sad

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Memory Lane

after reading the last chapter I needed to go back  and re read knowing how broken  he is now how loosing her has effected his hold on reality i now read each chapter with  tears in my eyes hoping his memories and the love for his child will help heal him this is beautiful

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7: Three Giant Leaps Back

I am trapped like a deer in headlights..caught up in this like him with mouth agape not fully understanding how she could be gone without me really understanding why ...I have cryed thru all 9 chapters ....hoping he can be whole again somehow



Author's Response:

I know this is the second review for this chapter, but I hadn't been able to respond to them until now...my kids sometimes only give me enough time to do a quick update before they are getting into trouble. LoL.

Regarding the last review for this chapter, I am glad I was able to pull off a realistic conversation where the reader feels they're listening in and can see it really happening. It's not always easy to do that.

And, now that you know "the truth" as Edward does, it always makes me squee when readers go back and read the previous chapters and pick up on all the subtle clues that were left along the way like breadcrumbs. It takes a lot of planning and plotting to be able to pull it off and not have the reader figure it out before it's time...

I hope that the coming chapters during his recovery are all you hope them to be. I hope to update daily until this story is finished.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

xoxo,

AG1981

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8: Reliving the Nightmare

here is hoping you post soon I don't think I have any tears left to cry for him in his hour of truth I am afraid if he accepts the truth  that she  is gone and her presents has only be in his mind he will be broken beyond repair...and his baby needs him now more than ever ...but he is right you only get one love like that in a life time and to move on was so painful for him his broken spirt had to keep her at his side   will he ever be ready to let her go and move on from this pain and guilt...probally blames him self for not finding her in time not seeing how sad and alone she felt ....depression does kill it took her now its trying to take him



Author's Response:

Yes, I plan to update daily as long as the kidlets cooperate. I should be able to... Watch, i totally just jinxed myself ;-P

Your fear of him accepting her being gone and breaking him further isn't completely wrong. To experience love like that, only to lose it and feel responsible would be completely earth-shattering. Everything he thought he knew wasn't right. And now that he knows the truth and is starting to remember...well if he's not careful, it will consume him. He needs to be strong and remember that just because Bella's gone, he DOES have a reason to live. Nessie.

The chapters that follow this one are heart-wrenching as he remembers more and more about that day... so buy stock in your favourite tissue company ;-)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

xoxo,

AG1981

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9: When Dreams Become Real

Just please please dont make me cry any more...I thought at first if they gave him enough love he would snap out of it but I think he did the right thing placing himself some where he can't hurt himself or his daughter ....seems like  his dream of her is progressing to the point where he see the reality of her death....and blame ...omg ...he sat the pills there right in front of her he left her there because he was so angry ... if she was still alive even if only barely  and  he could not revive her ...he pressed her to have another baby...he made  her feel guilty for not being happy about it .....his guilt will feel eternal ...maybe a nurse at the hospital...can be friend him...patch up his broken soul with unconditional love and devotion ...( being a nurse I just had to say that ) I just hope your update is fast cause  my heart is breaking



Author's Response:

Well, I can't promise no more tears, but if I promise that SOON they will be happy ones, will that make it okay??

Yes, it was his guilt that caused her to manifest, and we will see just how it happened in the coming chapters as he regains those memories. The road to recovery isn't always smooth, so buckle up and hold on tight...

There is someone who will befriend him and help his family realize that there is only one thing in the entire world that will make him see that this life is truly one worth living.

Update will be tomorrow morning. I promise :-)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

xoxo,

AG1981

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10: Breakthrough

thanks again for the daily dose of fresh tears...being a nurse I know the guilt of finding someone trying to revive them working so hard to bring them back with  no responce his guilt is 10 fold he gave her the meds he left her alone and he couln not bring her back...

I know he needs her  but my heart will brek when she stop appearing to him I hope he is strong enough to be with out her ....I hope her spirt has the strength to finally let him move on



Author's Response:

Your reviews tickle me :-D I am so glad you are able to relate to some of the deeper emotions in this story. Wait...maybe that's sad... IDK... I'm just glad that, even though this story is tragic, that you seem to be enjoying it :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

xoxo,

AG1981

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11: With Pain Comes Healing

well thankfully  all the new imformation was able to way lay  the tears tonight   I am so glad he is getting better 



Author's Response:

I'm glad you were able to get a bit of a break from the crying :) Stock up on those tissues, though. You might need them...

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

xoxo,

AG1981

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 09, 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12: Letting Go

I have spent countless hour in the last few weeks just trying to get through each chapter without sobbing looks like i failed again can;t seem to keep the tears at bay again   I ha dno idea she was gone this breaks my heart for the amount pf pain they are all in



Author's Response:

Yeah, sorry. Not exactly a light-hearted fic. Eeek... I am glad you're enjoying it even if it's totally heartbreaking

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

xoxo,

AG1981

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 12, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13: Homecoming

I just reallly wanted to thank you for this wonderful story even if i did spend several days crying my heart out I thought itn was beautiful and will always remember this ... but more you say oh bring it on



Author's Response:

LOL! Well, you're welcome. Sometimes crying can be quite therapeutic for the soul...okay, maybe not THIS much crying. I think crying this often could actually get someone institutionalized :-P

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

xoxo,

AG1981

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Outtake 1: The Honeymoon: Our First Time

my first reaction to when ever you update is to  grap the Klenex...and  I have learned never to open a new chapter at the office cause i ball like a baby but this was nice them happy and its nice to know she was happy at some point ..thank you for this



Author's Response:

Ha! I've been told that most people instinctually reach for the tissues before they open up a chapter for this story. Weird :-P

I'm so happy you liked seeing her happy! It was important to show (through her eyes) that she wasn't always a mess.

Thanks for your continued love of this story!

xoxo,

AG1981

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 20, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Outtake 2: The Pregnancy: Breathless

this was another example of  the pure beauty of the the love they shared I think it was not just him that could not le her go but her spirt also that needed to hold on to the memoery of his total devotion   good for me I made it through a whole chapter without crying

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: February 20, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Memory Lane

I pride myself in being one of the all time great mystery solvers I was so caught up in the detaits of the pain they were both in and the pure hell she was putting him and nessie in through her neglect that I did not see the truth of her death I was so ashamed of my self i called my daughter and read her the discovey chapter where he had his breakdoen and we both crying for a half hour over the phone   you are good we both had no clue

 
Summary:

Edward broke Bella's heart the night she came home, wanting to share the happiest news of their lives. She leaves but stays in the marriage for appearances sake. After years apart Bella has decided that she finally wants to move on.

What will Edward do when he realizes that Bella intends to end their marriage? Fight for her? Or Set her free?

 


Categories: Twilight, AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 33 Completed: No Word count: 234348
[Report This] Published: November 06, 2010 Updated: December 27, 2012


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: June 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: You've Made Your Bed...

no one ever take into account just how much greif the father of a lost child could be in its always thee poor mother ....the father has to be strong and help the greeving mother

but we have a greiving father here  on our hands she has had 4 years to deal with this he is just freshly wounded

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: June 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Whispering Truths and Facing Inevitability

this is where I say she better tell him or I will   wait what forgive him for what ????????

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: June 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Desperate Devotion

its not that we doubt you but this waiting for the other shoe to drop is giving me an ulcer 

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: June 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Difficult Dialogue & Unexpected Nightmares

well damm that was one hell of a chapter ending   .....but what did she see was it a game our friend Tayna was playing huring them both beyond repair and who else knows about her baby and what exactly did  happen to it  he really  needs to know to understand the pain she was in finding him with her loosing their child  ....he really does seem sincere when he says he wants them to work this out   ....but why did he stay away was uncle keeping him at bay  

 
Reviewer: twilightgma1954 Signed
Date: June 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Nostalgic Nightmares

so maybe some one set it up for her to see a naked girl ...wow somebody really must hate her but what ever the reason they have already taken away everthing she held close to her heart and they seem to still want a pound of flesh from her still   cant wait to click next ...but you know a little tiny bit of E/B loving would help ease all this angst

 




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