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Seducing Ms Swan by Rialle Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3032]
Summary:

 

AU Post-New Moon.

Bella never jumped, Alice never had her vision and Edward never came back. Six years later, Bella is struggling to make a new life for herself as a teacher in Rochester, New York. How will she fare when a very familiar student crops up in her classroom? Will she be able to remain professional, or will old ties get in the way?

Edward is convinced that getting Bella back is just a matter of 'persuasion', but Bella isn't prepared to be that cooperative. What's more, she's in the grip of a dark secret which threatens to prevent her from loving ever again.

Bella Swan is slipping under...

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Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes Word count: 124383
[Report This] Published: June 16, 2008 Updated: July 25, 2010


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: An Ending

Personally I appreciate what you're doing here. I like that Bella has finally grown some balls. I like that Edward gets to see what its like to be walked away from. I do hope they end up together but I think this is good for them in the long run. I think Bella needs some independance and I think Edward needs to pull his head out of his ass. Hes so sure of himself all the time. So sure he can do anything just cuz hes a vampire. I'm glad Bella isn't letting him get away with it that easy. Go you. Please update before I die from not knowing what happens next. Its been WAY too long since your last update and I had to re-read like 3 chapters just to get my berrings back. I'm not giving up on this story though no matter how long it takes you. I'd just like to read the next chapter before I go into labor (baby is due in March lol) :) I know I know real life takes priorities but who needs real life? Lol. Can't wait to read the rest!

 
Rebirth by Bellas Humanity Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 154]
Summary:

After Edward left her standing alone in the forest, Bella did not stay in Forks, but went to Florida with her mother. Now, five years later, a still heart-broken and pregnant Bella returns to Forks to face her past and discover new secrets. Can Bella decide which is more important: an eternity with Edward or raising her child?

New Moon is disregarded and Edward IS NOT THE FATHER!  

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Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jared, Jasper, Laurent, Leah, Quil, Rosalie, Sam, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: No Word count: 33677
[Report This] Published: October 24, 2008 Updated: June 02, 2010


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: November 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Nurseries and Revelations

Ok so I've just started reading this and I have a few questions about things that don't make any sense to me. Ok first - Charlies room is upstairs yeah? So how does he get to and from his room everyday if Bella can hardly get herself up the stairs? Was there an extra room added downstairs? Second - where did this "guest" room come from? I realize you just added it because you needed another room for a nursery but it never existed in the actual books. And third - Charlie had a stroke. That doesn't make him blind or retarded. Does he not realize that the Cullens have not changed at all? If he has why is he just ok with it? And if he hasn't whats his issue? Did the stroke do some damage we aren't aware of? I think thats all I was wondering about. I may come up with more but I think I'm done now lol

 

Other than those little things I love this story. I'm pregnant so a pregnant Bella interests me lol. Its an interesting concept. Its strange to me that shes not all that attached to her baby but I guess thats Bella. She never seems to react normally to situations lol.



Author's Response:

Haha it's okay to have questions. I think I can clear most of those things up. If something I say is inaccurate though, forgive me, I've written this over a significant period of time (over a year I think, I'm slow haha) so my memory may not be precise. But while Charlie is not able to move around very well, he lives downstairs on the couch in front of the television basically. Pregnant Bella is in no shape to help him up the stairs. And if you notices, I had them build a bathroom on the frst floor of the house so Charlie wouldn't have to use the stairs. But eventually he is able to get himself up and down the stairs after some recovery. Now, of course Charlie isn't blind or retarded, but it has only been five years so the physical differences of the Cullens would probably not be too significant if they were aging anyway. Charlie has no reason to think about that so it's not an issue that comes up. If it had been more than five years, however, I think we would have had a problem. Bella's appearance has not changed much except maybe looking skinnier (minus tummy). Anyway, the Cullens aren't spending more than a few fleeting moments with Charlie anyway so, again, it's not somehthing he would particularly notice. The stroke, honestly, was just a reason to get Bella back to Forks. I will touch a bit more on Charlie and Bella's relationship in the near future, but it is not something that is crucial to moving the plot forward. The dynamics with Charlie were not something I wanted to focus alot on. Also, since Bella left for Florida shortly after Edward left her, Charlie didn't see all the much of her depression and how the breakup affected Bella. He just knows her initial reaction and anything Renee might have told him. So therefore, he's not as angry as long as Bella is happier. (But if course that doesn't mean he likes or trusts Edward haha) It would be Renee who would freak out if she knew what was going on. (At the moment I don't have plans to bring her into the story. It depends on how far I take everything. We'll see)

And yes I cheated and added another room to the house. My excuse: none. It's fanfiction and I took a little liberty with it haha. Sorry if that threw you for a loop.

So I think I answered everything for you and if you have more questions or comments please feel more than free to voice them. This makes my writing better and makes me think about what I'm doing with my story (or fix mistakes haha) and congrats on being pregnant! I know Bella seems a bit detached but if you're only on Chapter 10 (from this review) then keep going. She gets a wake up call. She defnitely loves her baby and starts to get her priorities in order. And of course Bella is not normal haha but that's why we love her. =]

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: November 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Too Perfect to Last

Ok total change from the last chapters. I'm hoping for a quick update because now I'm like way too interested. Make it good! Love it.

 
Our New Life by KrysCullen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 227]
Summary:

When the Cullen's move to a new town to start over again, life isn't as perfect as they think. Bella struggles to control new, unwanted powers and Renesmee has to fend off hormonal human boys. Will life ever be the same again? (10 years post BD)  Warnings: Extreme sexual situations, sexual jokes and overall sensuality.

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Categories: Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renesmee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: No Word count: 28269
[Report This] Published: October 28, 2008 Updated: January 27, 2011


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: October 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Needs

Well its a well known fact that after men have sex they get hungry. Maybe thats the case here? :)

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: October 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Questions

Oooh and the story takes a turn! Very interesting. Maybe shes pregnant again lol. Jk but in the first few weeks of my pregnancy my husband called me a succubus. Crazy hormones :)

Wedding plans? Ooooh I love weddings! If you ever wanna dish about it to someone just as interested in it as you are I'm here! I know what its like to wanna talk about it ALL the time and have people get annoyed lol.

I'm starting to really like this story. Its not what I expected but thats not a bad thing. Its just caught me off guard a few times lol.

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Succubi

Yeah. I know the whole succubus thing is out there but I gotta say it... It sounds like shes pregnant lol. I'm telling you. If you've ever been pregnant before you know what I'm talking about. Just today I got EXTREMELY jealous of nothing. NOTHING. My husband is in Iraq and he was talking about some girl that tripped while she was walking past him on the FOB and I about lost it lol. So ridiculous. Hormones. I'm telling you. They're nuts. And last night I had a dream he left me for my bestfriend lol. The craziest things happen in a pregnant girls head. I know its impossible for a vampire to have a baby BUT I'm just saying lol. The symptoms seem the same :)

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Visitors

Yikes. Definitely yikes. I can't wait to see where you're going with this! I'll be patiently waiting for an update :)

 
Summary:

Edward Cullen made Bella Swan’s life a living hell from age ten to twelve. Finally fed up with the torment and teasing, she moved to Phoenix. Now she’s seventeen, beautiful, and has a new sense of confidence. When her mother sends her back to Forks for her senior year, she is determined to shake things up.

NC-17 for sexuality, underage drinking, and language. OOC, just to be safe. Some canon pairings, some absolutely the opposite.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Laurent, Mike, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: No Word count: 55461
[Report This] Published: October 28, 2008 Updated: August 21, 2009


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: October 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Five Years Ago to the Present

For some reason the text won't get bigger. I have HORRIBLE eyesight lately (I guess pregnancy does that to people sometimes) and I can't hardly see it, even with reading glasses.... So I'm having to copy and paste it into Microsoft Works. Really annoying. I haven't read any of this but I hope its worth it. I imagine it must be as its listed in the top 10 most favorite or something. I'll try to review regularly but can't promise that I'll remember since I'm not going to actually be reading it on this website. Just thought I'd let you know.

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Slow Dances and Awkward Glances

So far this is definitely worth the trouble of copying and pasting. So hilarious in all the right spots. Love it.

 
Summary:

It's been three long years since Edward left Bella, and things within The Cullen family have changed epically. After Edward's final stand off with Victoria, Emmett is left heartbroken and alone. A chance vision sends him back to Forks, and into the healing arms of the one person he never expected. Why fight with fate?

 

 New Moon AU - Bella/Emmett.

 


Categories: New Moon, Eclipse, AU Characters: Alec, Alice, Angela, Aro, Bella, Caius, Carlisle, Carmen, Charlie, Demetri, Edward, Eleazar, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Irina, Jacob, Jane, Jasper, Kate, Laurent, Leah, Marcus, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: Emmett Stories
Chapters: 23 Completed: No Word count: 64433
[Report This] Published: January 13, 2009 Updated: February 22, 2011


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Run

So I just read this whole story straight through. I love it. I have literally laughed and cried through this story. I think Edward and Ilene are a match made in hell but I mean that in the best way possible. I love that pairing its just so different.  I, personally, like the whole pregnancy thing. Maybe its because I'm pregnant lol but whatever the case I think its good. I don't however think baby should be named Renesmee. I think something different is in order. I can't wait to read more chapters! Update soon please!

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - Stand By Me

I love this chapter! I like that Ilene is nice to Bella and can put Edward in his place and I LOVE that he lets her lol. I vote they get it on. I'm not a fan of Edward in this story. Hes a bit of a dousche. BUT Ilene deserves to get some :)

As for baby names. You may use mine if you'd like :) If its a boy James Adam and if its a girl Arianna Roslyn. I know they have NO significance to the book but it kind of annoyed me that she named Renesmee after all their parents. Cute name and all but I dont' know I guess I wanted something else out of BD.

If you don't like them don't feel bad. My husband isn't fond of the girls name we picked out so we're still sort of looking. I love the name Roslyn. I think its timeless.

Anyways, update soon! I love this story and I can't wait to see what happens next!

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - Stand By Me

Ok so I just read some of the reviews for this chapter. PLEASE I repeat PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE do NOT name the baby after Rosalie. OMG, I don't care how much everyone loved her. Would you name your baby after your boyfriend/future husbands EX WIFE? Seriously now. I know damn well I would NOT. I'm pregnant and if my husband EVER asked me to name our daughter Tiffany (his ex girlfriends name) I would beat the crap out of him. Literally beat him. Maybe its the hormones, maybe its the principle. Whatever the case NO pregnant woman would EVER even consider it. Just like I would never want to name our baby after an ex boyfriend. Just wrong.

My advice: Do something ORIGINAL. Something you love, something you think the characters would love. Something that fits with the rest of them. They all have such classic timeless beautiful names. So find a name that has been popular but not too popular for a long time. Something that in 100 years won't sound ridiculous.

Anyways, I guess I just have to trust your judgement. I know a lot of people suggested naming the baby after Rosalie (if its even a girl) but I don't think they've really thought about it. E_R please think about it. Please. Do you have kids? Would you want them named after your/your husbands ex? Probably not. Ok my rant is done.

 

I stopped eating my bagel to write all this lol I must really feel strongly :)

 
Summary:

Edward Cullen is an Army brat, who has his entire life planned out perfectly, and can't wait to get out of this utterly dull town of Forks, WA. But then a whirlwind in the form of Bella Swan enters his life and before long, he can't imagine his life without her. Will he sacrifice his chance at what could be a beautiful life with her? And is Bella willing to make that same sacrifice... AU/AH, possibly some OOC

Rated for situations and lemons later on...

 

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: Yes Word count: 121063
[Report This] Published: January 17, 2009 Updated: September 10, 2009


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: December 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - The Fairytale Life

So... Am I (as the reader) supposed to be pretending that Forks is a military town complete with an Army post and all? Or am I supposed to think Carlisle drives 4 hours one way to get to Fort Lewis everyday? Maybe its because I lived in Port Angeles my whole life only to marry into the Army that I even noticed and asked... I just wonder cuz in the beginning you said it was a town of only 3000 (which is true) and that there family trees don't fork much (also true bahahaha)... But if I was to assume you meant for me to believe there was an Army post there the population would be much higher. OR am I totally retarded and not getting that Carlisle is in the Reserves? In which case he'd only have to travel to Fort Lewis one weekend a month.... *sigh* Or am I looking way too into things?

I love this story by the way. I'm just crazy when it comes to details like this... I think its because I grew up in the area and know it like the back of my hand.

 
May It Be by LilyHale Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 154]
Summary:

Bella Swan is devistated after Edward leaves her in the woods.  After he leaves, she experiences some of the worst pain imaginable, but not all of it is from her broken heart.  80 years later, the Cullens return to Forks, Washington to begin fresh. But even Alice couldn't see what would turn the Cullens' peaceful world for a spin. AU for new characters and a completely new story line.


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: None
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 4777
[Report This] Published: January 28, 2009 Updated: November 29, 2009


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: November 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: High School and Chance Encounters

Just started reading this and I like it. BUT do you honestly think that in 50 years some junior in high school will have any knowledge of Pirates of the Caribbean? How many movies did you know when you were 17 from 50 years ago that you can recount the names of characters? Just saying...

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: November 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5:They All Fall Down (Shabbyapple)

Aw I was just getting really into it and realized there are no more posted chapters. I love updates and I know you love reviews so lets make a deal... You update really really fast and I'll review :) Sound good? I vote yes.



Author's Response:

Haha, sounds good to me ;)

I'll udate as fast as I can :)

 
Summary:

What if Bella hadn't moved her junior year with her father.  Instead she moved with her mother to Florida.  Upon visting her father before leaving for college she encounters two members of the Cullen Family.  Alice's vision tells her that Bella would change their lives forever. 

Edward's first encounter with Bella is 30,000 feet in the air on the way to Darthmouth.  With no means of escape will he be able to resist the temptation of her blood?  Or will he bring the whole plane down for a taste?

 

 

Flight of the Phoenix

 

  ~Edward's POV: Chapter 2

 

I closed my eyes to listen to the tones of voices around me. I heard at least one hundred passengers. It would be a massacre. Could I really justify destroying all the lives of everyone on this plane just to taste her blood?

 


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: No Word count: 71150
[Report This] Published: February 17, 2009 Updated: May 15, 2010


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: May 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Taking Flight

Finally an author that actually does some research. Not even SM did justice to Forks. I lived in the area my whole life (Port Angeles to be exact) and the way she talked about Forks and the surrounding areas sometimes made me wonder if she'd even googled. And hardly anyone on this site does any research. People talk about Seattle like its the town next door. Not even close. And they go on about malls and colleges and all types of things that don't even exist in Forks. Basically its one big trailer park. The hospital is tiny and their "ambulance" is a truck trailer that you attach to the back of a truck. Seriously. Thats it. But everyone makes it out to be this magical place. No. Its a crappy little town of nothing. The majority of people are white and if they're not white they're Native. There MIGHT be (BIG MIGHT) one family thats a different race but I doubt it. Anyways, I'm glad that you actually put some effort into making Forks sound realistic instead of something its not. Its one of my biggest pet peeves. It takes two seconds to google or bing or whatever search engine you use. Thank you for taking that time.

 
Moonshadow by diamondheart Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 642]
Summary:

What if Edward kept his promise and Bella never heard from the Cullens again?  Jacob was more than willing to console her, but would she have the sense to let him?

"You know what your problem is, Bells? You're in love - with the wrong thing. You think you're hung up on a guy who left you, but you're not. You're hung up on the idea of yourself as the heartbroken heroine."

Alternate ending to New Moon...just a nice love story, with monsters. Rated for certain chapters, at a sultry 108 degrees!

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Many thanks to Sassenach Wench for the stylish story banner!

~*~A finalist in The Indie TwiFic Awards Winter 2010: Best New Moon Complete & AU that knocks you off your feet! Thanks for all the love and support! ~*~

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Be sure to read the follow up fics '93 Million Miles' and 'Jacob's Ladder' posted here on Twilighted!

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Categories: New Moon, Eclipse, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: The Bella and Jacob Chronicles, The Moonshadow Continuum
Chapters: 20 Completed: Yes Word count: 76998
[Report This] Published: February 22, 2009 Updated: September 10, 2009


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Epilogue

This was an amazing story to read. I loved every word!



Author's Response:

Thanks, so glad it was a hit! <><3

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: December 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Easy as Breathing

I just re-read this chapter cuz I realized there were more parts to this story and I had to point something out...

In Port Angeles Bella Italia is LITERALLY next door to the movie theater. Like RIGHT next door. So I would hope they would walk no matter the weather. If you park in front of one you're automatically in front of the other. I lived there for 18 years lol funny that I didn't notice before.

Anyways, just thought I'd throw that out there.



Author's Response:

How funny! I haven't been in Port Angeles since I was a kid (won't go into how long ago that was!) Let's just call it 'literary license', ok? Hope you like the other visits to this AU...<><3

 
Summary:

Bella takes a vacation to Hilton Head Island in South Carolina to meet Alice's new boyfriend, Jasper. Rosalie and Emmett come along, too, just in case Bella didn't feel like enough of a fifth wheel. With Jasper's roommate out of town, Bella has his nice big bed all to herself. Until Edward comes home in the middle of the night...

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: Always Human , SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes Word count: 163211
[Report This] Published: March 01, 2009 Updated: December 21, 2011


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: December 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 Every Breath You Take

I love this chapter. The boys up in 80s gear air banding it up is hilarious and super romantic in an Emmett sort of way.

I also really like that you straight up say you could be wrong and that any inaccuracies are to be ignored. A lot of people just write whatever and expect the reader to ignore it. I am not the ignoring type. I don't see why if you're going to go through the trouble of writing a story you wouldn't want it to be as factual as possible. Makes no sense to me. Google takes like a second and a half.

Can't wait to read the next chapter! Happy new years :)

 
Prey by Eun Hye Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1201]
Summary:

Summary: AU. A powerful group of humans know of the existence of vampires and werewolves and strict rules are in place for the uneasy coexistence between the three kinds. Transforming humans without tacit permission is banned and all violators and victims are ordered destroyed. Bella was attacked when she was eight years old but miraculously survived. She returns to Forks during her junior year in high school and encounters the Olympic Coven. Against her will, she is drawn to Edward Cullen and into the dangerous world of shifting loyalties and deadly intrigue.

 

 

 

Thanks to JO (Cullenitis) for the AWESOME banner!

Thanks to another JO (sleepyjo at ffnet) for reading and editing the first 13(!) chapters.

Please direct your thanks to her for saving you from the whiplash that is born from my confused tenses and wonky grammar.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: Yes Word count: 73297
[Report This] Published: March 15, 2009 Updated: January 10, 2010


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstar
Date: October 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 23: Preparations

Holy Hannah I finally read through the whole thing. Its taken me forever because I got super busy right after starting it and didn't have time to read it for like a week! And then things just keep coming up every time I sit down to read lol. Its weird. I love it and I hate it. Edward really creeps me out and Bella is... Well, she just seems like Bella to me. But the Cullens seem hard somehow. Especially Edward oh my. Hes like a robot or something unfeeling. And even when he does feel her emotions as if they're his own he still doesn't stop being a jerk. He stresses me out lol. I feel like its not even interest that keeps me reading more like need. I NEED to know what happens. I NEED to know if he changes into someone better. Its so strange lol. Update soon. As now I'm caught up and can actually appreciate an update lol.



Author's Response:

teaser at the thread.:D

 
Summary:

Alice and Bella are in high school, and to celebrate the commencement of their junior year, Alice is throwing an end of the year party. After much begging, she gets Bella to attend. Unfortunately, someone spiked the drinks, and Bella gets drunk. She ends up being seduced by a beautiful bronze haired boy, who she can't remember ever seeing before. A couple weeks later, her mother, Esme, announces that she's remarrying. Bella's going to have a new stepbrother. This stepbrother is none other than the handsome stranger she fell in love with at Alice's party. And to top it off, she discovers that she's pregnant...  

Rated NC-17 for teenage drinking-nothing explicit

Thank you to TaintedDarkInuShemeeko for the awesome banner!!!!!


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Nessie, Other Character, Renesmee, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 44596
[Report This] Published: March 30, 2009 Updated: July 19, 2010


Reviewer: mrs_n Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Love

Great chapter. Much more realistic than some of the previous ones. I'm hoping Bella will let Edward step up and be a man. She seems to let him dote on her a little more in this chapter. Good stuff.

 

The only other thing I have to say is....

You can't hear a babys heartbeat through a stethascope until about 25+ weeks. Bella would be able to hear it through an ultrasound (sound and picture) or a fetal dopler (sound but no picture).

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: November 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Revelation

When you're a child you don't get to make decisions like keeping a pregnancy from your parents. Bella is a child. She should have gone to her parents first thing. Since she didn't its good someone else did. Although, in real life the parents wouldn't have pretended they didn't know for so long.

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: November 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: California

I read a comment saying you didn't know what the kill pill was. "Kill pill" is a disgusting term used to refer to mifepristone or Mifeprex also known as the "abortion pill." Its given to women in order to abort the baby when the woman is not past 9 weeks pregnant. Its called a medical abortion (meaning no surgery is involved).

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: November 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Confusion

I watched so many girls in high school do the same thing Rose is doing. Wanna know where those girls are now? On welfare, living with their parents, or in some trashy trailor park with their baby daddy, either jobless living off that government cheese or working 2-3 jobs just to pay rent. None of them have gone to college or gotten a real job (working as a gas station attendant or cook at mcdonalds doesn't count as real). I can't even think of one that graduated high school. Having a baby isn't something you do because you're bored or lonely or having relationship issues. Having a baby is something you do because you love someone so much that you want to add someone to that relationship to share in that love. I'm currently pregnant and I'll tell you its not glamorous and half the time it isn't even fun and if I was doing this for any other reason besides the right ones I'd be so done about now. I can't imagine this being an accident cuz that would just be the icing on the crappy cake. But because this is a planned pregnancy with an amazing husband its all so worth it. I wish girls would realize that babies take more time and effort and love than a teenager can give them alone while going to high school and working. Hell, I'm married and an adult with no school or work obligations and I'm worried about there being enough hours in a day to give all the care and love my baby will need.

 
Reviewer: mrs_n Signed
Date: November 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Secret

3 months? Omg. That is NOT even close to enough time to plan a wedding. Mine was planned in 6 months and that was with the help of a very talented coordinater and my mother who is a wedding planning genius. Usually people take a year to plan their wedding. Even a small wedding takes lots of time because you have to book everything so far in advance! And dresses take forever because of alterations and what not.

 




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