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Penname: kinsano [ Contact]
Real name: Kristie
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Member Since: June 20, 2009
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Summary: Just a little pre-Breaking Dawn speculation on what Bella and Edward's wedding night and honeymoon would be like. Mature themes.
Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Jasper
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Word count: 6094
[Report This] Published: August 06, 2008 Updated: August 21, 2008
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: July 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: The Honeymoon
I liked your story...it was sweet and pretty true to character, which is what I look for in stories based on the Twiliight Saga. I don't personally care for the human Bella and Edward ones, since it's the supernatural aspect of the love story that so appeals to me. So I love that you kept it "real." So with all that being said, I have a question: Was this last time the first time Edward actually came? If not, then it really wasn't clear, even in his POV. If it was, then some thought during his POV about why he couldn't, would have been good to indicate the conflict. Let's face it, Edward without angst isn't Edward. And Bella could've noticed and had called him on it, adding to the conflict, and then that last scene was perfect for conflict resolution, whew! In short, it just wasn't clear in the sex scenes what was going on.
I hope you don't mind the constructive criticism--it's the unused English degree rearing it's useless and ugly head... What you did incredibly right was the naturalness of the dialogue and the descriptions of Edward's tenderness toward Bella. Giant Kudos for that because so many authors in the Twilighted universe miss that! Author's Response: Hi K: So, let me post these excerpts and then respond below:
Ch. 1: first sex scene:
She pressed herself against me and I struggled for the control I knew I had to have but wanted to forget. “Bella!” I nearly shouted as I responded to her body [releasing], kissing her roughly around her mouth as my body slowly began to relax.
Ch. 1: second sex scene
Then he growled against me and his grip tightened. My hands jerked in reaction to the pressure of his, and I saw in his eyes that he was fighting for control. I smiled to reassure him. I could feel the bruising already forming, but I couldn’t have cared less. He relaxed slowly and fell to my side, sliding a hand into my hair and planting soft kisses on me everywhere he could reach.
Ch. 2 sex scene:
He literally roared my name, thrust one final time in to me, and I felt the coolness of his release fill me up.
So, your observations are very interesting. He does come in all three cases, but what you're responding to is what was at that time my newness to writing scenes like these. Struggling to remain in character and in canon, in the first chapter I tried to be subtle in describing the mechanics of the act. But I agree with you that the end result is lack of clarity. So I don't mind the criticism at all, because I have definitely grown since this first effort at writing these.
Thanks for the review!!!
Summary: AU-AH. One shot. A chance encounter with a stranger leads to shared coffee and stretching exercises.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Word count: 6509
[Report This] Published: October 19, 2008 Updated: October 20, 2008
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: August 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: The Importance of a Good Stretch
Very Hot!!!
Summary: Alice brings Bella home for Thanksgiving break to forget about her ex. After some drunken clubbing with the fam, Edward and Bella have a one night stand. Hilarity and drama ensue. AU, AH. Rated NC-17 for language and sexual themes.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Angela, Bella, Ben, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Mike, Other Character, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 16 Completed: No
Word count: 47715
[Report This] Published: November 04, 2008 Updated: July 17, 2009
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: October 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Favorite Mistakes (S)
I liked this story very much...and the ending was just hot. I LOVE a dirty-talking Edward!!!
Summary: 
Bella challenges Edward's limits of self control by insisting that he build up his tolerance level to intimacy.
Set in the 6 week 'blank period' at the end of Eclipse / beginning of Breaking Dawn, between the battle, and the wedding. Bella and Edward expand and deepen their physical relationship in preparation for their impending marriage.
Categories: Eclipse Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: Yes
Word count: 70976
[Report This] Published: November 26, 2008 Updated: August 16, 2009
Reviewer: kinsano Signed 
Date: July 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Taboo
Hey, that worked...and rocked! That was one of the few things that bothered me with the Twilight saga--never mentioning her period and how it affected Edward, not to mention Jasper. I never found it believable that Bella never asked Edward if it bothered him because throughout the books she's so concerned and careful around him. I've really enjoyed your story so far. And this is the first time I've ever reviewed a story--not selfish, just self-conscious! Author's Response: thank you so much! i'm flattered that chpater brought you out of 'lurk' mode to leave a review! i'm so glad you liked how i handled that!! thank you! i agree re: the books and her preiods. i mean, a paper cut sent jasper into a frenzy, but a high school full of menstruating girls never did? PLEASE. i think SM could have handled it discreetly in the books without alienating any tweens.
Summary: 
Four weeks before her wedding to Edward, Bella is frustrated. She knows there's little-to-no chance of getting him to bend his rules and boundaries now, but there's no harm in fantasizing about what could happen later. So she begins compiling a list of things that she and Edward can do together once they're happily married. She's surprised to find she might be able to cross some things off earlier than she thought...
Story contains mature themes and is not intended for younger readers.
Thanks to Mandi, aka m81170, for the great banner!
Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Word count: 187877
[Report This] Published: December 28, 2008 Updated: March 18, 2010
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: July 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Slight Change of Plans
Extremely Hot!
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: July 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Teasing
It was fucking hot! The only thing is you should have had her tell Edward to taste it. (a human turnoff, maybe) talk about vampire candy!
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: July 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Good-Byes
I love your story and I can't wait for more! Hurry up, already!!!!
Summary:  
He's a young but jaded keyboard player writing lyrics for his band, Breaking Dawn, and she's a naive and frustrated poet looking to break out of her shell; their words collide on-line.
What happens when they meet in high school, unaware of their literary connection?
OOC, canon at heart.
Banner by FatApolloLove
Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 37 Completed: Yes
Word count: 146168
[Report This] Published: February 22, 2009 Updated: August 26, 2009
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: August 23, 2009
Title: Chapter 36: Curtain
I love your story!!!!!!
Summary: 
A Final Nominee @ 
Edward Masen was changed in the early nineteenth century (1817) by Carlisle Cullen in England. Later on, he separated himself from the Cullens and moved to Washington, USA.
Bella Swan’s parents die in an accident, and she has to move to the small, village-like homestead township of Forks Prairie with her uncle, Charles Swan. Fate brings her to Edward’s doorstep, and the dreaded monster rears its ugly head. Will she survive the monster?
THIS STORY IS ON A HIATUS TILL JULY 2010.
NOTE- This story is getting updated over at FF.net as well. You can visit there if want to - http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4900151/1/
Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 21 Completed: No
Word count: 119711
[Report This] Published: March 06, 2009 Updated: March 28, 2010
Reviewer: kinsano Signed 
Date: August 08, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
That was hot. Please hurry with the next chapter, I feel like I've waited forever for this!
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: September 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Ooooh, what's Edward gonna have to do to make up for his horrible sexual gaffe? Will Bella ever let him get close enough to try again? I eagerly await an update to see how you handle this one!! PS. How is Edward going to handle her period?
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: October 08, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
I really like this story... Author's Response: i have updated it at FF. My VB is off twilighted for some days, so it will take a lot of time for it to update here. You can visit the link for FF.net in the story summary.
-Devy
Summary:
As the time for Bella to join the Cullen family as a vampire draws near, Edward becomes convinced that allowing her to be changed would be a mistake. Out of options, he resorts to drastic measures to keep Bella human, and takes them both on a journey of discovery across five states, ultimately forcing Carlisle and the rest of the family to intervene. Alice, in the meanwhile, seems to have her own agenda concerning Edward and Bella.
Made it to the final round in the Summer 2009 Indie TwiFic Award in five categories. No cigar, however.
Categories: Eclipse, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes
Word count: 65947
[Report This] Published: May 29, 2009 Updated: August 05, 2009
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: August 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
OMG, I cannot believe that you wrote about a chair in the corner of the bathroom with a clawfoot tub in it and you didn't have a scene where Edward sits and watches Bella bathe!!! THAt would've ramped up the sexual tension and the romance factor (ie Edward runs the bath and uses candles and flowers. Author's Response: You knwo, when I read this review for the first time, I nearly smacked myself on the forehead. What the hell was I thinking?!? I may have to sneak a scene like that into the sequel.
Thanks for the idea! I can't believe I didn't think of that myself. I can be so unromantic somethimes.
Summary:
Playboy Edward Cullen owns the most notorious and prestigious strip joint in the whole of New York: Violet. When Edward's left one girl short, he begins his search for the next dancer. Who he meets on his search is not only the best dancer he has ever come across, but also a contender for his heart. Can someone finally tame this bad boy?
ExB Rated for drugs, language and sex from the very start.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Leah, Rosalie, Victoria
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: No
Word count: 69545
[Report This] Published: July 06, 2009 Updated: May 03, 2010
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: April 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 18: Friends With Benefits
I've really enjoyed your story so far! I feel very sorry for Bella, though--Oscar keeps getting cockblocked!
Summary:  Bella and Edward are all grown up and starting married life. Fluffy, lemony times.
Thanks to readergoof for the wicked awesome banner.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: No
Word count: 37674
[Report This] Published: July 13, 2009 Updated: December 03, 2009
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: August 08, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: I Feel Pretty
I like your story and the description of the "private" photos was very hot! Author's Response: Spanks a lot :)
Summary: 
With medical bills, school bills, not to mention rent, piling up, Bella looks for a way to dig herself out of debt. Rose tells her about a new business she’s gotten into. Bella tries her hand at the business, and ends up paired with Dr. Edward Cullen. But can she separate business and pleasure?
Here's a link to the thread. We'd love to hear your thoughts! http://www.twilighted.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=44&t=5822
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Eric, Jacob, Jasper, Mike, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: No
Word count: 43549
[Report This] Published: July 29, 2009 Updated: March 21, 2010
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: August 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
so far so good, I hope the scenes with Dr. Edward are super hot!
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: April 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12: A little German goes a long way
AAARRRRRGGG!!!!! I love this story and I swear to God this is the sweetest Edward I've ever read! Although, it is a little unusual/unrealistic, isn't it, that Isabella has only had to put out once?
Summary: A bad experience caused Bella to question her life's choices, but after a much needed break, Bella is back to searching for a new Dom, and possible sub. After a weekend party, could she have found both in the enigmatic Edward Masen?
Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Word count: 3298
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2010 Updated: February 28, 2010
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: April 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I liked it so far--bring on Edward!
Summary: Bella is dating James Cartwright. They’ve been together for years and the sex is lacking. Bella has never allowed herself to fall completely into her desires and always holds back, preventing her own pleasure and James’. In steps Dr. Edward Cullen, a sex therapist with a difference. He believes in active tactile approaches to therapy-the practice of sexual surrogacy. With his assistant Victoria at his side, and a little help from fellow patients Emmett and Rosalie, things are about to heat up in Bella’s cold world.The problem is, what happens when the doctor sees more in Bella that just a patient, and what happens when she finally finds her inner desires and it isn't her fiance whose hands she wants on her body?
There is to be no reproduction of this story as a whole or in part, without direct written permission from the author.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Angela, Aro, Bella, Ben, Caius, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, James, Kate, Lauren, Laurent, Rosalie, Victoria
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Word count: 9670
[Report This] Published: February 15, 2010 Updated: February 15, 2010
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: February 15, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1- Birthday Blues
So far it's good--I'm interested in seeing where you go with this. Author's Response: Thank you for your opinion. More will be seen from this story in the future.
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: November 29, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1- Birthday Blues
Please, please, PLEASE finish this story!!!!!
Summary: 
A continuation of Midnight Desire and ExB's, er, growth and explorations. The monster comes along on the journey, too!
Thank you to Anne for the amazing banner!
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Other Character
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No
Word count: 27846
[Report This] Published: February 28, 2010 Updated: January 30, 2011
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: April 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Very Hot!!!!
Reviewer: kinsano Signed
Date: April 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 2: Scene 2
Whew! What a wonderfully hot marathon! Edward Cullen can pat me down anytime! Thanks for writing one of my fantasies!!!
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