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Atlantic City by PhoenixRN Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 268]
Summary:

Bella and Japser have been best friends for years, and together fled a difficult home life.  For three years they have been making a living off the grid, rounding at casinos across the US and barely getting by.

Edward is a reluctant casino manager, living to please his father.  When he discovers that something sinister is going on behind the scenes of Volterra, he finds himself in danger.  When he meets Bella at a bar one night, he becomes completely captivated by her, but unwittingly draws her in to the danger he faces.  Now they both must fight for thier lives as they figure out what's really going on in Volterra.

Rated NC-17 for violence, language, and maybe a lemon or two...

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Jasper
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Series: None
Chapters: 32 Completed: Yes Word count: 113577
[Report This] Published: October 22, 2011 Updated: March 07, 2012


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Working on a Dream

Can't blame Bella for feeling upset about Alice.  In her mind, she does feel it's her fault Alice got moved.  If she hadn't yelled out the location then Alice would still be there.  If Emmett and Edward had taken out Demetri anyway then she could have told him quietly and maybe they could have saved her before she was moved.  Now Alice is locked somewhere in the dark and extremely frightened surrounded by mannequins. Appears she's slowly losing her sanity at this point.  Edward needs to reach police station to talk to possible informant, think it might be Chelsea and wants amnesty for her spouse Afton as well as for herself.  Since she's an accessory before/after the fact of the kidnapping of both Alice and Bella, murder of James, to name a few of the crimes just in Atlantic City and Nevada.  Definitely a Federal problem even a local DA won't be able to give them a break when the Feds take the whole thing over.  But hopefully she won't realize that soon enough until after the information of Alice's location is revealed.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  There's a lot of self-blame going around, that's for sure.  Good theory about Chelsea, and you're right that the feds would probably take over, which is something i've toyed with back and forth.  They're not involved just yet.  I'll post more soon.  Thank you so much!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 20, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Two Hearts

Glad to see Edward noticed that Aro was staring and ogling at Bella as if he knew her already.  He had plans for both Edward and Bella.  Neither one knows what they are, but both realize they aren't going to be good. Also figured out James must be a part of Aro since Felix deleted all records on James.  Since Aro was going to deal with Felix for his actions and he isn't fired for them.  Edward is suspicious of everything happening around them.  Having Emmett watch out for Rosalie while she's entertaining the Volturi brothers.  Especially after they way Aro was ogling Bella concerned for Rosalie's safety. Bella got pretty bold while lying in bed with Edward.  But she wouldn't let Edward return the favor.  Still innocent and nervous about the entire thing.  Talking about taking a trip to home town and then off for a seclued weekend with Edward.  Sounds absolutely divine.  Who wouldn't want to spend a long weekend with Edward?



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  Personally, I wouldn't be one to turn down a long weekend with Edward, just saying.  These two need time to connect without having to worry about what's going on back at Volterra.  Thank you so much!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Countin' on a Miracle

I have to admit I was really afraid to read these two chapters after Bella was kidnapped.  Didn't want to read how badly James had treated Bella. Edward not being able to rescue her this time. Afton was at least respectful towards her.  He didn't hurt her or really mistreat her in any way at all. James however was just a plain mean sick bastard.  Liked to torture people for his own ends, got off on the fear he inflicted on people, ate it up to see the horror and terror on their faces.  All before he beat them all into submission and used them for his sick sexual and personal pleasures.  Throwing Bella down the stairs so she would hit concrete to almost break her cheek.  Then slapping her after the fall because Bella wouldn't do what he wanted her do.  James was even warned by Afton that Bella was not to be hurt or touched at all.  Later when Aro arrived to take Bella to one of his casinos for better protection and lodging he had James shot in the back of the head by Afton.  It was too easy of a death for James.  Where was the torture for him?  To pay back all the terror and torture he inflicted on all his victims including Bella.  At least he is dead, Bella doesn't have to worry about James coming after her ever again.  Now being held prisoner in a hotel room with Alice.  Being provided food and clothing to survive with clean facilities instead of a bucket, but still a prisoner.  Aro wants Bella to work with him to sort out weaknesses of all the casinos on the strip so he can work those to have them easier targets for him to take over.  Wanting Bella to do her playing 21 as she did with Jasper.  Nothing available in their hotel room to help them escape. The room locks from the outside.  Aro said he wouldn't hurt and would leave Edward alone if Bella would work with him willingly.  Bella would have to tell Edward that she is working with Aro and that she doesn't want to be with Edward any more.  Can't see Edward believing that statement though. Alice should continue to tell Aro that she isn't dreaming, she can't remember them, or the images are still fuzzy and hazy. The information being fed to Aro shouldn't be the entire truth.  Misleading him so he can be caught with his hand in the proverbial cookie jar.

Happy Belated Birthday.  Sorry hubby was home sick.  No fun there are worst than the kids are when sick.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  I suppose James' death was a little too easy on him, but at least he's out of her life.  And misleading Aro will definitely be a means to survival for these two!  I really appreciate all the feedback you've given me on this story.  Thank you so much!!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 23, 2012 Title: Chapter 28: A Night with the Jersey Devil

Can't blame the women in Aro's life for finally walking out on him. After all the crap he's pulled, put them through, lies, manipulations, etc...Knew Chelsea and her husband were out based on family dinner, but I really thought she was the one talking with the cops. Very surprised it was Heidi, but she had great motivation.  Her own father had her husband killed. Pushed off an 8 story balcony.  Absolutely horrible. Aro has no scruples at all.  He would kill his own brothers and probably his daughters as well to keep himself covered.  Heidi told Edward where Alice was located and hoped they could find her before it was too late.  Wonder if Aro and Jane got to Alice before the SWAT team (took their bloody sweet time getting there)arrived to check the place.  Hoping Alice is fine and no slow killing poison or drugs in her system from Aro.  Actually I really hope Aro shows up and Alice is gone just to make him even more angrier.  Now in regards to punishment, hang him upside down by his ankles top to Stratosphere, while tied rope is being slowly burned by a lighted candle.  So when the rope burns through, Aro will drop from that point to crash head first "SPLAT." Just slowly watching the rope burn piece by piece, never knowing exactly when the final piece will go.  Everyone he has hurt just watching, taunting, and throwing rotten fruit/vegetables as well.  Or drawn and quartered and place his pieces on each corner of Atlantic City to teach any other upstart from attempting another hostile takeover.  When Atlantic City has learned their lesson take the parts to Vegas for the same lesson.  Or a Murder on the Oriental Express.  All the living victims of his crimes, each stab him and one of them will give him the fatal stab.  Painful and bleed to death. Or just put a gun to the back of his head and FIRE. End the world of his evil, but make sure you take the whole family down with him.  None of them are any good either.  His brothers Marcus and Caius.  Dominic ... Jane and Alec...., etc....



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  I think it was only a matter of time before Aro's family turned on him.  A lot of people thought it was Chelsea who was at the station, but I was hoping to blindside you- glad it was effective!  Aro is truly evil, that's for sure, especially for what he did to Heidi.  Slow killing poision and drugs for Alice... good idea, but I hadn't even considered it, so don't worry, that's not a factor!  Also love the idea of Aro showing up late to the party to find Alice missing- he'd go nuts!

By the way, your rope torture idea sounds like something straight out of Saw!  Love it!  Especially the rotten fruit and vegetables. Love all your ideas really!  He won't stand alone when his day of judgement comes, don't worry!  Thanks so much!! 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 09, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Trouble River

Chelsea complaining about firing Aro's planted men per Edward's instructions to Aro.  Aro said do it to appease Edward.  Aro would hire them for something else.  Edward calling him to discuss firing Felix, Aro agreed to talk with him.  Cover up since Felix deleted from system information needed.  When Chelsea mentioned James killed Jasper, Aro was furious and planned a trip to Atlantic City.  I wouldn't want to be James when Aro arrived.  James isn't following orders correctly.  Aro wanted Bella and Jasper as a team.  Not split up.  Aro learns that Edward is somehow involved with Bella as well. Edward convinced Bella to join him at the bar downstairs his nightly ritual for a drink.  Emmett approached with information from cousin in police dept.  No car accidents as described by James.  Edward did attempt to stop Emmett from mentioning it that night.  Bella's stress and worry level is too much.   She passes out right there.  Now she doesn't have any clue if he is dead or how.  I think she knows Jasper is dead in her heart.  Just doesn't know how or why. When she figures it out fully that James wants her for himself then others can take turns if paid.  Edward won't let that happen to her.  Bella doesn't want to leave wine country. It is too pretty and sweet for him to reach for it.  Edward catches Bella prior to her fainting and will take her back to his suites.  Since Chelsea and her crew doesn't know where Bella is at is a good thing.  Hopefully the gossip mill at the casino isn't running rampart with curiosities regarding Edward and his female roommate.  Bella will only be safe if Aro doesn't find out where she is located.  Looking forward to new chapters.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  I'm loving your insight!  Hearing what Emmett had to say only solidified in Bella's mind the fact that Jasper is definitely dead... and trust me, Bella won't be hard to find with eyes and ears all over.  Thanks for reading!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: She's the One

Telling Edward the truth and the man isn't running from Bella. In fact he wants Bella to stay with him.   Bella feels safe with him in his suite. Anywhere else she is vulnerable to being taken by James.  Loved Emmett's apology with a giant teddy bear.  So sweet.  Very tender sweet kiss between Bella and Edward at the end of the chapter. Both wanting to get to know each other better, definitely a strong attraction on both sides.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  Of course I wouldn't have Edward run from Bella, they're too perfect for each other!  Emmett's teddy bear... well he is a big teddy bear so I thought it was approrpiate!  Glad you liked the kiss.  Thanks for reading!!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 18, 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Better Days

All the Volturi brothers are in Atlantic City with Edward.  Bella is out on a date at a magic show with a woman swallowing a python head. Gross.  I can understand why the men would find that attractive, but I think it's gross. Doesn't appear Aro, Caius, or Marcus recognize Bella as the girl they want that James has screwed up in delivering to them.  Or it could be a very good denial act. l find they creepy to say the least.  Caius is as bad as James but subtle about it.  At least Bella has Edward to keep him away for now.  Rose has Emmett as her protector too.  The lid is just about to blow on the casino's underground and underhandlings to Edward and his hired staff by him as to the corruption.  Hoping Edward figures it out before he is held partial responsibile for the corruption.  Don't want Edward to serve time since all these activities were occurring behind closed doors and without his knowledge.  The Volturi brothers were sure doing a smear campaign to frame Edward to the previous serial murders of the hookers.  Looking forward to furutre information on the Volturi clan and why they are all there now on the east coast.          

 

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  The Volturi are definitely creepers, Caius especially.  As far as the lid blowing off, we're not quite there yet.  There's a lot of story left to get to.  Edward is putting the peices together.  The smear campagin is an interesting theory, but not quite right.  More information is coming in the next few chapters.  Thank you so much for letting me know what you think!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 24, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: No Surrender

What an eye opener for Edward regarding family life in general.  He thought it was bad with Carlisle until he met Bella and Jasper's parents.  I have to say was surprised at how hostile Bella's parents had become even worse than before.  Accusing Bella of stealing her own identification, in order for her to claim her own identity back again.  She won't have to hide and be on cash only basis now.  Telling Jasper's dad off was good.  He deserved to be told about Jasper's death in anger since that's how he always treated his son with anger and violence.  He was lucky Bella didn't take a swing at him.  I was very surprised that Renee wasn't nicer that Bella had such a nice and good looking boyfriend in Edward Cullen.  At least she has finished with the apathetic parents and has started a new chapter in her life excluding them completely.  Leaving Renee and Charlie to deal with each other and their mutual misery together. Looking forward to the next chapter as to where Edward is taking Bella for the weekend.  Still hoping James and his cronies aren't going to ruin it for them.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  While Edward didn't have a model childhood, he's starting to realize things could be worse!  I felt like Bella needed to tell Jasper's dad off, and release some of the anger she was harboring.  I originally wrote this with Renee fawning over Edward, but I didn't like the flow, so I took it out.  It just didn't seem to fit.  James won't ruin their weekend.  He'll wait until they get home for that!  Thanks for reading!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 30, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Secret Garden

Nice evening in the cabin.  Bella discovered her theory of not believing in love might not be true.  Took Edward's definition of love after Edward's declaration that he loved Bella and examined her feelings towards him.  Bella determined that she thinks she loves Edward.  Edward made love to Bella for her first time.  After she declared her feelings to Edward they made love in the sitting area in front of the fireplace.  Without any protection for their 2nd time. Wonder if they even realized it since they were so in the moment of celebrating their love for each other.  Edward's sister's one love would die before she ever met him.  Must be Jasper, right?  Great start for a wonderful relaxing weekend for just Bella and Edward to spend just for them together minus any problems left behind.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  Yes, Bella is finally coming around and realizing her feelings.  As far as the second time, there won't be a pregnancy in this story.  Lets just say I took a little creative license there.  Glad you picked up on the Alice/Jasper connection- I couldn't leave the story without putting that in!  It's nice that they have the weekend to themselves, because next chapter will go back to the drama.  Thanks for hanging with me!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Devils and Dust

James and his crew setting the bomb to cause a diversion knowing that would have Bella alone.  Sure with all the Aro eyes available, Felix was made aware that Edward left her with Emmett and Emmett went to security room.  Contacted James where she would be located.  Call came through her phone from James with idea of trade of her for Alice.  Even negotiated meeting place an old dance studio (nice touch). So plan a commotion, distract, take during the mayhem.  After bomb Emmett and Maggie left to handle the crowd and panic.  Left Bella in care of one security crew member.  Felix noticed Emmett gone and went to get Bella for James.  Knocked out her protector and took her.  Edward attended the meeting when he was introduced to the governor passed a note secretly in handshake.  Glad Denali picked up on keeping note secret.  Governor doesn't trust Aro at all.  So Angela had to leave because Cheney family was essentially run out of town.  Where does Aro think he is? In the Old West where the evil swindeler gets control of the whole town and runs whoever he wants out of town with just a word.  I don't think so, I think Edward will be the white hat lawman fast draw who will run Aro out of town and into Federal prison or a lethal injection. Too bad Edward didn't leave the meeting earlier prior to the mass exodus (panic) in order to save Bella.  He'll be so panicked and guilty that he left her alone to go along with Aro.  Emmett will be so upset he broke his promise to Edward to keep her safe.  I'm hoping one of Edward's people have seen what happened and will be able to report quickly in order for them to reach Bella and Alice in time to stop James for having his evil, cruel, dirty, scummy, murderous, sick hands from touching either woman.  Also I'm hoping Aro has no knowledge of James' plan to kidnap her during the meeting with the governor and Aro kills him like he killed Jasper.  Or even better like the dog (animal) he truly is.  In case you haven't guessed it yet, I hate James even more than Aro.  And I really hate Aro for cheating, lying, scheming, killing, etc....



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  James' crew (and Aro's) were behind the diversion, and glad you liked the nod to canon with the dance studio :).  Governor Denali will become an ally now, that's for sure.  I like your Aro/ old west analogy- it's not too far from the truth!  Edward will feel guilty about leaving Bella, but also will have a lot of anger at Emmett (however misdirected).  Emmett will find it hard to forgive himself.  As far as Aro's knowledge in the scheme... that's coming right up!  It's easy to hate James more than Aro, but they both kind of suck!!  Thanks for reading!!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Epilogue: Land of Hopes and Dreams

Enjoyed the epilogue with Edward and Bella owning a bar outside of Las Vegas by hours.  Frequent visits from Alice encouraging them to go off and make babies.  All her talking of future events would freak me out also.  Telling me details about a wedding, children, even offering to tell me how many they were going to have.  Definitely too much information for Edward and Bella to handle at this time.  They are just trying to continue to get to know each other.  As well as dealing with all the issues from what happened in Atlantic City.  Alice is just so cute.  Who wouldn't love her.  Bella should give up trying to teach Harry how to play blackjack.  He's never going to get it.  He's never watching how the cards are being played and estimating the odds of the next card coming. Maybe if he didn't drink so much he might have a better chance.  Of course if he didn't drink so much he wouldn't be their number one customer.  Delightfully happily ever after.  All the crooks are captured and held behind bars.  finally safe for the Cullens and Bella to live their lives.  Glad that the Cheneys were able to get their casinos back as well.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  Glad you're with me on Alice not divulging all.  Serisouly, she would drive me crazy with that!  Bella just can't help herself when it comes to Harry :).  Thanks so much for the feedback!

 
Summary:

What would you do if there was only one way to be with the love of your life?

 

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 9422
[Report This] Published: October 30, 2011 Updated: October 30, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Very macabe.  Very moving.  Very disturbing if I was Jacob to read that letter. The level of love and devotion between Bella and Edward was beautiful. Bella's life was never the same after that fateful car accident of Edward's. The fact that she even attempted to get married at all much less twice is saying something.  This letter definitely won't provide much comfort to Jacob when Bella is gone that's for certain.  Knowing you're only second best the entire time of your relationship. And the fact that you're second best to a ghostly dream of a man whose been dead for almost 2 decades.  You can't compete against that. 

 
Drinks After Work by Discordia Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 50]
Summary:

 

All Bella is looking for is a quick drink after a bad day at work, but when she runs into Edward Cullen--her high school crush--she decides to play a game with him. If she can keep herself from falling for him, she can walk away and leave him wanting more.  But Bella might find that losing the game is the best thing that ever happened to her...

Rated for lemons/language.

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 6740
[Report This] Published: November 02, 2011 Updated: November 12, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Drinks After Work

Little did either of them know they both crushed on each other in high school and neither had the nerve to make the first move then. Ten years later both really had nothing to lose to make the effort.  Only thing was they had a lot to lose to walk away once they found each other, good job of Edward to chase her down before he lost her for good.  The idea of calling Chief Swan for her number wasn't appealing, but would have been one of his options to locate her again. Edward wants the whole package not just sex. He wants the girl, relationship, etc.... Very enjoyable.



Author's Response:

Thanks for another lovely, thorough review!

Glad you enjoyed it!

Yeah...Edward pretty much would have tried everything to ahold of Bella, if he hadn't been able to chase her down!  ;)

Planning to do a quick 2-3 chapter continuation of this at some point!

 
Summary:

 

Bella has given up on love, choosing to be content with her quiet, albeit boring life. She never imagined how much that life would change when Edward Masen moved into the classroom across the hall.  Watch out world, there's a new nerd in town!

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: No Word count: 23733
[Report This] Published: November 06, 2011 Updated: October 02, 2013


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Character Displacement

Edward wanting to stay in Bella's class must be either he enjoys seeing her nervous and breaking things or he likes what he sees.  She convinced him to check out other teaching styles to get ideas to establish his own.  Instead he decides to critic Alice's teaching style.  Causes Alice to really lose it.  Puts her in tears.  Since she has received her PhD a lot earlier than he did I think it proves she might actually be smarter than Edward.  Loved when she beat him to the punchline about calling her Dr. Brandon instead of Mrs.  I would have loved to have seen his face.  Jaw dropping, surprise, eyebrow raising, etc.... Can't wait for the next chapter. His reaction should be golden.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 10, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Catalyst

Good start to the story.  Bella as head of science department at the school is nice and sweet.  Alice is Alice bouncing off the walls as usual.  Carlisle head of the school.  Edward Masen is a nerd galore. He is also a stuffed shirt insisting on being called Dr Masen not Edward.  Kinda rude since Bella is the head of the department and over him in the science department.  Looking forward to future chapters.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 20, 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Dominance Hierarchy

Dr Masen is really obnoxious to Bella.  Thinking he is equal or actually above her.  Taking over her classroom as if he was in charge.  Can't blame Bella for being upset with him.  He sure is acting like a pain in the bum.  Really thinks he's all that and more.  Now Alice and Jasper want to play matchmaker with Bella after work, can only imagine the worst person it would be, would be Edward.  Bella already can't stand being around him now, to be set up for an evening with him would be the most horrid thing to happen to her already horrendous day.  Just the way Alice was acting when Bella mentioned Edward (Dr Masen) and her day with him so far led me to think it was Edward.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Fixed Action Pattern

Bella might have laid the anger on a little thick, but it had been building all week.  He is interested in her.  Making sure he sees her first thing in the morning and she's the last person he sees on Friday afternoon.  Asked her for her phone number like a shy teenage boy talking to his first girl.  Actually being civil and nice walking Bella to her car and this obsession about being called Dr Masen rather than just Edward.  It's annoying even to the reader.  What's his problem?  So what you got your PhD. You worked for it, got it, goody goody for you.  There are others on staff that have theirs too.  They don't cram it down everyone's throats all day long.  His bringing it up was Bella's last straw and she let him have it all.  All the complaints all week from his associates, her frustrations, etc...  Talking about his failures because no one will be there to support him was probably a little too far.  At least I'm hoping she brought Edward down a peg or two from his high horse.  He's just like everyone else.  A teacher in the school, educating the children, providing the best information, knowledge, skills, etc... to understand the subject being taught.  Looking forward to Edward's reaction to her angry statements.  Wonder if he will call her over the weekend and apologize for his behavior.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 17, 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Coevolution

Edward needed to be told the truth, his father's social teachers taught him wrong.  People are not his underlings even if he is higher educated than the rest or smarter.  He is the same level as others.  Bella telling him the truth made him realize what the real world is all about.  Something Edward needed to learn to survive in a working environment.  If his dad is so wealthy why does he have to work at all now.  If his father was so old, isn't he dead by now?  Isn't he taking care of his mother? Kate probably got pregnant to get away from her father and his oppressive behavior.  How she could leave her little brother all alone though wasn't right especially not telling him she was going.  Even if she told him in a letter by his bed.  The fact that she never contacted him again wonder if she really left or was gotten rid of by foul means. Telling someone exactly what you think and feel does hurt you more than the person being yelled at if you're the sensitive nice person like Bella.  It makes you feel horrible about yourself.  It doesn't give you the satisfaction you think it would telling someone off.  It did work with Edward, it made him think and realize what he was doing.  He now knows he has to take it down.  It'll make a lot better work environment now once he apologizes to his co-workers.  He has been trying to call Bella all Saturday (the unknown number), but she wouldn't answer it. Now they both have given the other their apologies and will go from there.  At least Edward will let people call him by his first name. Maybe Bella won't have to mention to Carlisle now that she and Edward have resolved the discussion.

 
Summary:

These are outtakes--missing scenes or alternate POVs--from Stolen Dreams and are not in any particular order. You should probably read the main story to understand these.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No Word count: 4420
[Report This] Published: December 23, 2011 Updated: December 23, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 24, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: When Edward Met Bella--Again

wonderful Christmas present.  Just loved Edward here, so vulnerable and miserable without Bella.  Needing her, but afraid to approach her and be completely rejected.  chance meeting in a grocery store.  Nice touch, safe place, and then nice intimate dinner.  Both fell back into their old rhythm.  Picked up after 10 years without even a hiccup. Just what happened and explanation of pain of loss.  they both had the same feelings of loss of son and loved one.  Edward's father behind the sudden move on family's part.  We know he had it planned for  quite a while, had his ducks all lined up to leave at that time.  Forbidding Edward from even calling her was pretty cruel on both his parents' part.  Wonder who intercepted the letter from Edward.  Why it never reached Bella especially since Edward mailed the letter himself.  It had to be held at Bella's parents end.  Stopping any further contact between them. Both sets of parents were trying to keep them apart after the loss of their son and each other.  Can't see how they could be so cruel especially knowing how serious they were about each other.  Just glad they are back together and found Ryan.  Visiting and being in his life for now is better than thinking he is dead.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked it. The letter is still sitting in the USPS dead letter office. It never made it that far for unknown reasons. Charlie had nothing to do with keeping them apart. 

 

Thanks!

 
Summary:

Okay, so my Friday morning started off just like every other fricking day; verbal editing, hallway hookers, dirty looks, and humiliation. Pretty typical. What wasn’t quite planned for was the rather public break-up … or the walk through the meadow that followed. Did not see that coming!

trippin'

Amazing banner thanks to: Enchanted-mind


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Lauren, Paul
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 3826
[Report This] Published: January 13, 2012 Updated: January 21, 2012


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Trippin' Through the Daisies

For a first one shot, it was very good. It just took Bella a little while to figure things out in regards to Edward. Now that she has I think it will make a whole lot of difference in her life. Definitely won't solve her problems with the Laurens and Kates on campus, it will only make it worst. At least she'll have Edward and be the envy of Forks High.



Author's Response:

One shots are fun aren't they. I went on a one shot binge not long ago, so many good little stories. I think I'll do it again soon. Thanks for reading, hon.

~Jen

 
Rm w/a Vu by AngelGoddess1981 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1434]
Summary:

 

Bella, a struggling student at Arizona State, returns to her dorm room one afternoon to find her boyfriend in bed with her roommate. Unable to look at either of them, she moves out of her dorm, seeking refuge at her parents' place until she can find another room to move to.

 

Since it’s halfway through the semester, there are no other rooms available, so she takes to the classifieds. Just how good is the view being advertised? 

 

AH - Bella/Edward

Romance/Humor

 

Rated NC-17 for language, adult situations, and later, lemons . . . because this is fanfiction after all.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 39 Completed: Yes Word count: 229683
[Report This] Published: February 12, 2012 Updated: June 18, 2013


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 15, 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24. A Christmas Miracle

Separate girl/boy nights out.  Only problem girls joined boys during conversation where Edward was talking about his performance in the rodeo.  Bella heard partial conversation. So she thinks it's all her problem for his poor performance. She's walking away. Going to break both their hearts. I don't think Edward has realized that Bella has expressed that she loves Edward.  Definitely won't improve his performance in the wild card with Bella not around.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 25, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7. Let the Interrogation Commence

Edward protecting Bella's honor and defending himself from Jake.  Knew it.  Jake was the jerk and threw the first punch. Very curious what Edward said to make Charlie relax and become comfortable with him near his daughter.  He was very excited about the Cardinal tickets that's for sure.  Still think Rosalie isn't girlfriend, but a work associate.  In regards to the people telling you homes aren't made of wood here in AZ that is false.  Homes are made of wood (frames.) covered in stucco. Some homes are brick, but not many any more.  Maybe 40 years ago, but not recently.  And recently a lot  more basement homes especially with the higher price homes. Based on the fact Edward has a desert facing yard.  His home is probably a custom made home rather than set building planned community with set choices/options. Just continue on your original premise and the hell with everyone else opinion.  I've lived in AZ over 40 years and have seen the Phoenix Metro grow from a majority farming community into a huge metropolitian city.  Lots of Homes, Apartments, Stores, etc... being built with cement flooring (to avoid termites)  As long as the wood isn't in the dirt, but in cement termites aren't a problem, that's why most homes are framed and built in wood here.  Some were brick way back when, some recent ones are built that way now too.  Majority are wood covered in stucco as I said before.



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter thoroughly! I hope you continue to enjoy it ;)

Thanks for reading & reviewing! Here's your teaser for tomorrow's update:

 

Feeling refreshed, I make my way out of my room and down the stairs. When I reach the landing, I can hear Edward’s voice coming from the kitchen. I momentarily assume he’s on the phone again . . . until I hear a melodious female laugh.

While earlier I was mostly curious to see the woman, I’m feeling kind of bummed out now.

The closer I get to the kitchen, the more I can hear of their conversation. They seem to have a really close relationship, and I start to feel like I might be intruding if I go in there and interrupt them. My stomach rudely insists I keep moving forward, though.

“No! Are you serious?” the woman says with a giggle. 

As I round the corner, I catch sight of her on one of the island stools, looking at Edward as he stirs something on the stovetop. Even though I can only see a portion of her facial profile, I can tell I was exactly right about her being gorgeous. She’s got creamy white and flawless skin, and her perfect blonde hair hangs loose down her back, grazing the waist of her jeans. Even though she’s seated, I can tell she’s got the perfect hourglass figure, further cementing my earlier theory of rock star sex.

Edward chuckles, not turning to look at her, and I continue to go unnoticed. “I swear on my life, Rose. It’s unlike anything I’ve ever experienced. I really can’t explain it; you’ll just have to take my word for it.”

She shakes her head, the ends of her soft-looking hair flowing from the movement. “Well, if that’s the case, then good for you. You know I only want what’s best for you.”

That’s when he turns to offer her a smile, but before he locks eyes with her, he finds me standing in the doorway. “Hey,” he says, sounding surprised. “I didn’t hear you come downstairs.”

 

xoxo,

AG1981

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21. A Whole New Level of Awkward

Adored the sex toy party.  Bella's embarrassment especially with her dad at the door.  Quick wit trying to lie to the man about stopping by for a lunch date.  Dad's arent' dumb, he just let her get away with it, didn't want to think about his baby and Edward (or any other guy) doing things together. I'm glad Bella's mom was so open about it because mine sure wasn't.  It was a taboo subject in the household.  Even after I got married it wasn't something to be discussed. Running up to Edward in the game room slightly undressed.  All I can think is Edward is up there playing video games with Emmett.  I just have a feeling Bella's going to be very embarrassed at her over zealousness.  Looking forward to the next chapter though.  Also can't wait for Edward's reaction to all the goodies she purchased.  Glad the party was shop and take home.  I thought most of them you ordered the items and have to wait for shipment/delivery. Just love how excited Bella was about going home to Edward with her black bag.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 18, 2013 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36. Nurture vs. Nature

Loved this chapter, adjusting to a baby in the house is always tough. Bella is getting into her maternal groove. Talk about adorable Edward holding his baby. Loved the fact Masen hates his feet covered.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 23, 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17. Offside

The best thing in the world is an email update from this story. It brings a smile to my face and a song in my heart.  Only problem is my mac took a drive and I need to wait for one of the members to return home to use one of their laptops to read it.  Stayed up late reading this tidbit.  You were right about you're not being responsible for torn/destroyed clothing.  Edward was a man on fire.  Convinced Bella even further that Jacob didn't know what the heck he was doing in the physical intimacy department.  I don't think it's only Bella/Edward who can't wait for the next chapter, the readers are in total agreement for these two.  Feelings/emotions/desires rising in heightening degrees on both of their parts.  Edward's already shown Bella how much she has to learn of the pleasure of lovemaking from all stages.  Bella will be in for quite a mindblowing experience once she's made love with Edward.  He's already proven that by his actions up-to-date with Bella. Tender, gentle, passionate, and lovingly caresses bringing Bella higher than she has ever known.  Everyone should have an Edward at home to make a woman feel so desired and precious.  Looking forward to the next chapter, the paintball day and Bella and Edward together again. 

Also thanks for the mental mindblowing burst, I was having a particularly bad day, erased the blahs and put a major smile on my face.  Really enjoy their bantering back and forth, love each text and dialogue between them.

 




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