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Coincidental Major by m7707 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 723]
Summary:

A tale about a hockey-playing boy who loves his girl. This is Edward's story from Major Misconduct.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 185715
[Report This] Published: January 25, 2011 Updated: July 05, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 30, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Breakaway

Just love an insecure Edward.  from the description of him dressed up shirt,slacks,tie,and jersey talk about HOT!!!!!!!!!!! Drooling already.  Seeing Bella taking looks, then second and thirds, should have given him a clue.  Cute Alice grabbing his buns.  Surprised the heck out of him though.  Funny.  I'm sure Bella wanted to grab it as well.  Because she was sure checking it out.  Edward being persistent with Bella getting her to actually answer the questions and not be vague.  If she gave him a partial answer he would then ask another question to clarify.  Finally he got up the nerve to ask her out.  She said Yeah!!!!!  An excited and delighted Edward is so adorable.  He didn't walk to his next class, he floated there.  Taking her out for dessert/ice cream and lots more questions and spending quality alone time together.  Then the following day watching him play hockey and the party after.  Bella's going to be on his arm.  So happy for them both.  They both wanted it so bad and now it's starting

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 20, 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Spin-O-Rama

Edward is amazing on the ice.  Feeling the buzz with Bella in the arena, but concentrating on the game.  Bella was very stimulated by his masculine skating and defensive techniques in hockey play.  So when the game was over her face showed it and she couldn't stop looking at him from top to bottom.  Affected Edward, but didn't want to provide a show for the entire stadium audience.  Even in the car Bella and Edward couldn't contain their want and need of each other.  Jasper had to be a smart ass with his remarks.  I liked Edward's jealousy remark back to him.  Bella biting her finger talk about working Edward up even more than he already was; he's now close to explosion.  Can't wait for the party because Bella is going to get kissed and kissed properly.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Face Wash

Poor Edward.  Finally talked to his dad about wanting to go to the dance instead of hockey game and talking with scouts.  Shocked Carlisle.  Especially when he said wanted to attend the dance and wasn't sure if he was going.  What? Dad can't read between the lines. Then Esme started her investigation.  Edward didn't stand a chance against his mom and revealing information.  Mom was  pretty happy about his choice of girl when he told them Bella.  So was dad.  both parents think it's cute Edward's  so wound up about a girl to make him  nuts.  Then all those early morning practices.  Edward isn't getting enough rest.  No wonder he didn't ask the girl right.  He just asked if she was going?  Bella said no.  He didn't ask if she wanted to go with him.  That was his mistake.  Jasper made it clear to him.  Alice on the other hand really took after Bella and her response.  Both awkward about making a formal date.  Edward did do find when he invited the table to Crowley's party after the hockey game.  Hopefully Edward will re-ask Bella to the dance and specify will she go to the dance with him.  Might bring about another answer.  Especially if he assures her she won't trip, slip, fall, or break anything in his care.  Looking forward to the following chapter.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 25, 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32: Delay Of Game

Edward is in his medicine induced coma.  Dreaming of the last afternoon with Bella in the meadow for the good dreams. The bad dreams had Bella running from danger but from what Edward's mind has blocked what that was too much to handle.  He can hear noises outside his head, but would rather remain in his head dreaming or being in complete blackness away from all the pain. Mentally he is trying to force himself awake to find Bella, but the meds are too strong and keep pulling him under again.  The lights from the hospital bed and room are bright to him behind his eyelids.  He is probably unaware that Bella is by his side awaiting him to awaken.  So much pain with cracked ribs, concussion, etc...

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Dangler

Edward is just so cute.  Anticipation, excitement, tension, fear about his date with Bella.  Can't wait for it. Seeing Charlie and reading between the lines with his comments about Em and Rose.  Don't hurt my girl, don't go to far physically with her.  Bella still having doubts about herself.  Can't believe someone like Edward would be interested in her.  She's in for some serious surprises Edward doesn't just like like her, he loves her.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 17, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Shutdown

Communing with the ice in the arena with Bella.  Having Bella meet some of his hockey friends.  Finding out she is the only person he has ever brought with him.  Made Bella feel special. Felt really sorry for Edward and Bella another failed attempt at a kiss in the car with another set of headlights breaking up their third attempt at a kiss.  Blocked twice in the arena parking lot.  Before getting into the car to leave started to kiss her before the guys left from playing hockey.  The two of them can't seem to get a break.  Finally thinking he'll get a chance when he takes her home only to have Charlie peaking out the window.  Edward afraid of Charlie's gun and not being allowed to ever take Bella out again has to restrain himself.  Disappointing both Bella and Edward, but Edward did kiss her on the forehead and they do have tomorrow for another attempt at the party.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 22, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Apple

Getting closer to actually coming right out and asking Bella, "Do you want to go on a date with me?"  Even if it's the lame dance or a movie in Port Angeles.  She gave you the look that she's interested and likes you too.  Make the move.  Do it.  You'll both feel better in the long run.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 12, 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Odd Man Rush

Thoroughly enjoyed the first 6 chapters in Edward's POV.  After reading the awesome Major Misconduct to come back and read the whole courtshipp between Edward and Bella from his opinion.  to learn how crazy he has been about Bella for so long.  Only to finally after hanging out in the group to finally getting the courage to ask her to Homecoming Dance.  After he had to ask Alice first if Bella liked him too.  sincerely looking forward to Edward as he further prepares to ask Bella for their first official date to the Homecoming Dance.  His reaction to playing in front of his beloved Bella in the first hockey game of the season.  They are two pieces of a puzzle just waiting to be connected to finish the introduction to their life together. 



Author's Response:

Thank you - so glad you're enjoying Edward's POV!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 27, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Sauce

Bella and Edward are just so cute.  They have been waiting for so long for the other to make a move that now the move has been made they are making up for lost time.  Nothing slow about making out for this couple.  Seems they both want more and more. Talk about sweating with Charlie showing up with foggy windows from making out with the Chief's daughter.  Only to have him pass the car to head to the front door of the Crowley's home.  Bella silently laughing making Edward thinking she's shaking in fear.  When Charlie passes them he's relieved, but knows they have to get out of there.  He uses the incline to move the car away from the house before starting the engine around the corner then parking on the next block for Alice and Jasper to rejoin them.  Bella called Alice to leave the house.  Alice can't figure how Edward and Bella got out of the house so fast before Charlie got there.  The shared glances  between Bella and Edward made Alice giggle and smile, but Jasper got crude and commented about the back seat.  The following day Edward needs to see Bella again.  Invites himself to go grocery shopping with Bella and helping her carrying them inside just to spend more time with her.  Heavy making out session again.  Edward is seriously losing control, doesn't want to move too quickly and scare Bella.  Seems Bella is quite eager all on her own.  She's moving just as quickly.  She's innocent though so maybe doesn't know where or how quickly things can move ahead.  But permission to kiss each other anytime.  Bella can kiss anywhere.  Interesting.  Let's see what happens at school tomorrow.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 14, 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: Filthy

Restraining orders that Edward isn't convinced will withstand James from stalking or approaching him or Bella.  Nervous about the scouts showing up at the evenings hockey game.  Edward's plans for college leaning towards Dartmouth wants Bella with him.  Already planning if she can't afford it using his money or his family's money to fund her education since she'll be a Cullen eventually anyway.  Bella went to the game and Esme sent her down to the locker room again to give Edward mouthpiece.  Bella loves his compression pants.  I must say I can't blame her.  Still picturing Edward in Spiderman pants and it's a nice view.  Can't think of anyone not drooling over that image.  Wondering how Bella will react with these plans on the following day.  Edward is up for some stubborn arguments from Bella that will last for days.  Regarding not accepting anything from him or his family.  If she can't afford it she'll go local, work her way through, etc....  Edward will have a long road ahead to convince her that his plan will work and is the best for their future.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 22, 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: Tilly

I HATE James whether it's from Bella's POV or Edward's POV.  He's nothing but a coward.  He needs people to lure Edward off the road to attack.  He only approached Bella when she was alone and vulnerable.  When facing Edward he either needed a gang of boys to back his cowardly ass up or he needed a piece of lead pipe as an equalizer.  He knew he couldn't win man on man.  He knew Edward would have wiped the floor with his ass fist on fist.  No he had to have a weapon or outnumber him.  James could only win a fight if he was fighting something weaker such as a woman.  I can't even think of an evil thing to call him, but a man he's NOT.  I'm glad Edward took the hockey stick and confined him physically into the ground with its sharp point to save his girl and himself with his last ounce of strength.  A braver young man saving his lady fair couldn't be better than Edward.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Flow

Completely adorable date sharing a brownie hot fudge sundae.  I can just picture a spoon dual protecting each others side of the sundae.  Too bad their first kiss was ruined by a car's headlight streaming in the front window.  But a promise of one soon.  Edward taking her to the arena to see his private ritual before each game is so cute.  He trusted her to keep it secret and understand him and support him.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 30, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Man Advantage

Talk about surprising the campus of Forks High School with Edward and Bella dating with him carrying Bella over Edward's shoulder to her locker.  Kissing her at her locker before first period.  Sitting close in the cafeteria for lunch along with another long kiss.  Walking to class for Biology and Bella to gym with another kiss.  Rumors flying around school about them.  Edward and Bella still talking about their strong feelings.  Working on Biology Project on DNA sure helps when your dad's a doctor.   Lots of reference books available on DNA.  Bella spending an evening at the Cullens for dinner and working on their project.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Undressing

Bella moving their physical relationship further faster than Edward expected, but he sure wasn't complaining.  Bella wanted to move to another level that Edward wasn't prepared for which required a condom.  He had to tell about previous relationship and lies about pregnancy when he didn't touch her.  At least Edward knows Bella is ready to take the next step when they can find the time for a nice long alone period to make love slowing, devotely, cherishingly, and loving.  Looking forward to future chapters.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Rocked

I can't blame Edward for forgetting everything else excepting dancing and singing in the fog to "little willy" as the sweetest and fun memory with Bella.  As well as the strange and awkward way to say I love you to Bella after she said it first to him.  With his unique way of always inserting his foot awkwardly and weirdly into his mouth and spouting off topic things first to try and explain what he is really thinking and explaining his true feelings and emotions.  At least he has expressed them to her now.  He's felt them for so long for her and now he knows she feels the same for him.  I have to admit Bella blushing when she admitted seeing him on the TV during the game had him confused especially with the reaction of the rest of the student body.  He was confused and Bella kept getting redder.  Renee's remarks about the shot.  Edward's confusion kept getting deeper.  Until Bella tried to explain where the camera was aimed.  Then when it was a crotch shot.  He watched the game and saw the shot thinking of his grandmother.  Bella said Renee was impressed.  After awhile Edward and Bella started to laugh it was all him.  Too bad the rest of us didn't get a glance of that during the game. Can't wait for the day alone at Cullen home while Cullens away in Seattle for the afternoon and evening and Charlie working the day/afternoon and arriving home at midnight in time before everything turns into a pumpkin.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Hat Trick

Both Bella and Edward have been waiting for this day to come.  Having uninterrupted time to themselves.  No parents. No time constraints.  No practices. No center consoles. they have room, time, comfort, alone, etc..  Two kids in love with crazy hormones racing between them.  Who knew that all those gadgets, mags, pictures, toys, etc... would add to Bella's already magnified sexual desires toward Edward.  Edward being embarrassed and thought Bella would freak.  Bella reacts always differently than Edward expects, but always in his favor.  He is the luckiest guy in the world. Always the gentleman before losing his complete control after some heavy making out, he stops and thinks of Bella.  Thinking of Bella wants to make sure she's ready for this step.  Oh she's ready if he stops dire  consequences for him.  In 12 hours I would say they were in some complete bliss and loving cuddling.  Now once they done the deed, they are going to have a hard time keeping their hands off each other.  A lot more than before they did it.  They'll want to be together all the time now.  Looking forward to more Edward POV.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 14, 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Gong Show

Lovely Christmas day at the Cullens home.  Following a delightfully marvelous day time with Edward while folks away.  Emmett at dinner with his condom trick only backfired on him rather than Edward.  Mom took it out on Emmett not Edward.  Embarrassed both Bella and Edward though.  Rose made a joke about it to Bella making both Carlisle and Edward attempt to hide their laughter.  Great gift for Bella from Esme and Carlisle to give plane ticket to Bella so she can spend time with family in California watching Rose Bowl and New Year's Eve.  Surprised Edward wasn't jumping up and down when Esme had Charlie agreeing to having Bella spend the night at their house while he went to Port Angeles.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 18, 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Wrap Around

Making a plan, placing a bet, winning the bet, collecting the winnings make the night of dreams.  That was Edward's best Christmas ever so far.  Then to make sure Bella spent the remainder of the night in Edward's bed he went Caveman on her carrying her across the hall over his shoulder with even more plans on how to enjoy their first Christmas together.  What a man, Bella's lucky she has the best Christmas present and a present that just keeps giving all year long.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Changing On The Fly

Having a great time in LA.  Rose sure has Edward and Bella's back for some alone time.  Wonderful and pleasurable way to bring in the New Year alone in their hotel room before midnight.  Still joining the party for the midnight kiss with everyone else.  Bet Edward can't wait for Bella's promise of white panties/shirt and pep rally. Should be an interesting chapter in the future.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 25, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Chippy

Hockey season for the year about over Edward dreading playing against Port Angeles because of James.  Past history with James, Edward along with other players found James beating a girl in an alley and stopped him.  James has resented and hated Edward ever since.  In addition, James is jealous that Edward is a better hockey player than he will ever be.  Edward is worried about James going after Bella to hurt him.  He knows he needs to tell Bella to warn her to make her be aware of him.  He just doesn't know how to do it.  Doesn't want to soil their relationship and love with James and his evilness and sickness.  It's better to be informed and prepared than surprised and vulnerable.  Most of the hockey game Edward and James aren't playing at the same time.  Towards the end of the game Edward heading for the opponent's net for a goal when James clobbers him with his hockey stick.  Knocking Edward's helmet off. Sending Edward to the ice cracking his head.  Finally having Edward lose his temper.  Edward started to pound of James.  Edward's coach sent him to the locker room where Carlisle examined Edward and recommended stitches.  Edward promised to go to the hospital to have stitches after the game over.  I'm sure Bella will want to go with Edward as support.  I can only imagine Bella being worried about Edward hitting the ice, but also join him in anger in wanting to plow James into the ice as well. 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 29, 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: Laying On The Lumber

Always loved the making love scene in the equipment room between Edward and Bella. Especially with Edward in only is compression pants.  Just thinking about them and Edward just does something to me every time I picture it.  No wonder Bella can't resist Edward like that.  They don't hide much at all.  Then to hear Edward tell her what he told Tanya how he felt about Bella to make her tear up.  It's so beautiful and romantic.  He always thinks he messes up, but he doesn't.  He expresses himself off at times, but the more explaining he does it is more sentimental and loving to sweep any woman off her feet.  It's no wonder she tears up any woman would with the magnitude of his emotions for her.  Especially since Bella feels the same depth of feelings.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Man On

Edward's reaction to James frightened Bella.  Bella's strong confident protector became an angry uncontrollable vibrating fighting machine. Edward was on the verge of losing all control and just exploding.  James was calling Bella names to have Edward lose his temper and push him over the edge.  Figuring Edward would go after James.  James would have the other two guys handle Edward and then he would go after Bella.  Edward knew he needed to maintain control to think of Bella's protection and safety first and foremost.  Edward knows what James can do to girls.  He's a sick bastard.  A mean, cruel, sadistic, vicious, and evil SOB who doesn't care about anyone but himself and doing things for his own sick pleasure and revenge.  As Edward said he's also a coward.  Doesn't approach Edward one on one always has a crowd.  Never fight fairs or on even ground.  I can understand why Edward doesn't want to tell Bella tonight about why to be careful after the events in the parking lot,  He does need to tell her the entire story so Bella can understand what James is capable of and prepare her for what could happen.  He did tell her tell him or her dad if she sees James in Forks near her again.  Charlie will put a stop to it immediately.  No one messes with his baby girl.  Definitely a stupid move on anyone's part to try and hurt Bella.  I can understand why Carlisle is so concerned for both Edward and Bella with James and his stunts. James is crazy.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 04, 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Roughing

I remember reading this chapter in Bella's POV and the terror and disgust she felt with James touching her and talking to her.  The tears and fears she felt at the threats he said and implied.  to hear Edward's fears of what Bella could have been going through or what might have happened.  His checking to make sure she was okay.  His relief and gratefulness of Newton calling him right away with the information about James being by the truck.  Also about Bella being so upset in her truck.  Broke his tradition about communing with the ice before a game.  Making sure Charlie was going to get in as much trouble for not telling Bella about James as he was when they finally told Bella all about James and his crime.  It was funny how Bella could hurt herself while trying to give her boyfriend pleasure.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 09, 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Dive

Edward is always so short sighted when making plans. Bella realized once James realized Edward's feelings which were written on his face in the arena parking lot he would never stop stalking Bella to get to Edward.  She would be safer with Edward and her father with her.  Charlie getting a restraining order against James in both Forks and Port Angeles is smart, but won't stop James from his wicked and evil assualt plans.  He is smart and sadistic as well as vengeful. Bella learning about the why James hates Edward so much explained both parking lots incidents in a nut shell.  It made her so much more proud and in love with the compassion of her boyfriend Edward.  That he would take the initiative to save that poor girl and save her life.  Edward is a very special man.  Glad Bella told him what for and called him out.  Edward couldn't stay away from Bella it would make them both zombies easy targets, easy preys for James and his games.  I literally hate James now and later in the story even more.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 16, 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29: Sniper

Edward quite a planner with a pile of lists.  A list for everything.  A picnic to discuss their future after graduation and beyond.  Should be an interesting evening.  Along with Bella and Edward having moments of purely sexual pleasure between them.  Edward is in for some strong arguments.  Probably arguments and counters he hasn't prepared himself for earlier.

 




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