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Coincidental Major by m7707 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 723]
Summary:

A tale about a hockey-playing boy who loves his girl. This is Edward's story from Major Misconduct.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 185715
[Report This] Published: January 25, 2011 Updated: July 05, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35: The Proposal - A Future-shot

Great to see where the characters have gone since high school and the incident with James.  Have gone far together.  Bella even changed her major and life goals through filing for financial aid for Dartmouth and Edward's determination and stubbornness expedited his recovery for hockey.  He graduated early with a degree in pre med to play pro hockey and when that's done he'll go back and finish medical school and become a doctor (Maybe.)  Bella finished her bachelor's degree and followed him to Detroit to finish her MBA.  Edward pushed himself to be there for the ceremony for her graduation and to celebrate with his beloved.  What a perfect way to propose in an empty hockey arena foggy like after his first game.  Where they danced and Bella told Edward she loved him for the first time.  Perfect place to re-enact that memory and add the re questioning of the proposal from the perfect proposal of the meadow of the day of the incident.  Edward's fear of needed to be absolutely perfect because afraid she would say no.  When all she said was ask me later I'll say yes.  His phasing was beautiful and her response was Yes.  Marvelous.  By not taking off their clothes completely in the parking they are mostly covered while making love on the hood of his car. Whoever would see that tape might get glimpses but wouldn't see everything.  Edward had a sixth sense that Bella conceived from their love making  and it was a boy.  Bella actually believed it and felt it too.  Edward is going to name the boy after the arena where he was conceived.  Sounds appropriate.  No one but them would be the wiser.  Joseph (Joe) is a good name.  It's my only son's name. There always seems to be a Joe in a crowd of boys.  I have loved this story when it started in Bella's POV and now that it's in Edward POV still great hearing from the other's POV of similar situations.  Edward really gave Paul the truth, Paul was just not accepting it.  He didn't stand a chance, but wouldn't believe it.

 
Rosebud by Arabella_ Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 304]
Summary:

Rosebud by Arabella_

 

Millionaire Edward Cullen fell quickly for small town Bella, and their dreamy romance soon led to wedding bells. But their relationship’s foundation is anything but sturdy.

When their new marriage is about to fall apart, Bella inexplicably goes missing. Edward is determined to search for her, but does Bella want to be found?

~*~

A time-jumping romance filled with love, heartache and intrigue. Rated for language and some sexuality.

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 29 Completed: No Word count: 44664
[Report This] Published: January 28, 2011 Updated: May 13, 2012


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 04, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Edward is just ready to give up too soon.  If it's hard or not going to plan it's time to break and take your losses.  Not even willing to ask her why she is crying at night or how can we fix "us."  Where did "we" go wrong?  What can "we" do to be happy again? None of that was discussed at all just this isn't working.  This is from a man who has never had a loving relationship in his life.  Doesn't know that it takes give/take with a lot of communication on both parts along with time invested and work from both parties. It's like Edward has broken every promise he ever made to Bella when he pursued her in Forks.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 14, 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Edward was attracted instantly to Bella's beauty, body, honesty, kindness, and her innocence.  When he attempted to reach Bella she refused him.  The feeling of rejection was something Edward had never in his life experienced until Bella.  So his initial goal was to have Bella as his since she has been the only unobtainable thing in his life.  So the feelings of the hunt to acquire Bella was his motivation.  Both appear to be shy with each other with conversation.  Coming from two different worlds Edward always rich and getting everything he ever wanted and Bella was just the daughter of the local police chief in a small town.  She was alone since her father's death.  Edward has people all around him as employees and family.  Both are basically alone.  Both want to connect.  When Edward called Bella to ask her out, she suggested something so simple and sweet.  Walking down the street to view all the holiday lights.  Enjoyable for Bella and something new for Edward.  Both trying for common ground to build their relationship on.  So far nothing but their mutual attraction to each other.  Why Edward wants out could be the excitement of the chase is gone since he has caught Bella.  Edward refusing a pre-nup from Bella and offering her half of everything he has is strange for such a short marriage.  Edward was surprised when Bella refused anything from him.  Edward must throw her meager growing up with all his money trying to give her everything.  All Bella wants is to be with Edward.  She doesn't want him to force anything on her.  Bella couldn't understand if they had a problem why he couldn't talk to her.  Now that she has left, Edward wants her back.  Is this a carryover of Bella not obtainable in his world?  He doesn't have everything he wants so since she's gone he needs to chase her and claim her again.  Edward needs to take time and figure out why he asked Bella to marry him in the beginning.  He needs to deal with his attraction and feelings towards her.  What caused their distancing -- his job, lack of commonality, attraction wasn't enough to last for him, or whatever lame excuse he derives?  Bella has feelings for him and if Edward wants to end their relationship she just wants to leave to protect herself from further pain.



Author's Response:

Yep, he has some thinking to do!

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Edward is really a complex and untrusting man.  Never sure a woman is in to HIM or his $$$$.  Finds Bella who cares about him and wants to be with him.  His money doesn't really mean anything to her, it's nice don't get me wrong, but Bella loves the man. She has a simple lifestyle background, walking through town looking at Christmas lights for entertainment. Spending time with Edward is all she wants to do. Edward as much as he doesn't want to has decided he has to let her go, no attempt to suggest counseling, to sit down and talk about the distance between them, find out what she's thinking, try to cross the gulf, just give her freedom.  Then he wonders why she's gone.  Whether it's from kidnapping or she's just left him from the pain of his rejection with no explanation of where it all went wrong. Now he's back to drowning his sorrows and loneliness.  Staying away from Emmett so he doesn't know that he's back to drinking away his problems rather than facing and solving them.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Bella has gained some of "J"'s confidence enough to allow her into the kitchen alone to cook.  Along those lines would be to search for a weapon as well with the hopes of escape.  Also the idea of poisoning her kidnapper in order to enable her escape as well.  Good thinking Bella.  Let's hope you can do so in the next chapter.  Find something to incapacitate him to give you a chance to leave with the only working transportation "his" vehicle and go for help.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

Edward should search through any lead -- any name from his contacts could trigger a memory that might give him a clue as to who might hold a big enough grudge to kidnap Bella.  Or to where she might have gone.  Edward has been changing, he's realizing just how out of touch with people he really was.  Agreeing to have dinner with Alec without argument is a start.  Bella is just trying to hang on to her sanity with a crazy man.  She needs to prepare a plan and go with it.  Check out where his vehicle is and possible escape route.  Make sure she enables him completely and just start moving in one direction till she reaches civilization.  Anywhere to contact someone, anyone from home. Rose, Emmett, Edward, etc... Too bad no weapons like a big stick, or lead pipe to crack his skull open.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 04, 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

If Edward felt the awkwardness and shyness in the beginning and then after their marriage her acceptness of him.  Then his action caused her feelings of aloneness and rejection.  If Edward could feel her moving away why wasn't he reaching out for her?  Why was he just sitting there doing nothing?  Talk to her?  She was trying having a family and close friend birthday party for him.  Making the cake herself.  Making everything special. She kept making efforts to reach him, Edward was the one to shut down and close himself off.  Once he had her, she became a possession that didn't needed to be won.  She didn't need to be pursued any more because she belonged to Edward.  She didn't need attention already an object to be adored from afar.  A marriage is not a business acquisition once purchased is a done deal, it's something that has to be worked on daily, nurtured, cherished, discussed, compromised, give and take, companionship, etc...



Author's Response:

All very good points. Thanks for reviewing!

 

Arabella

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 23, 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Edward can't see in the master bedroom because of waking without Bella.  Strange her prize possession of Benny, a gift from her father, was one of the personal possessions she didn't take with her.  Wonder why?  To have Edward lay on it now and to remember the night they almost made love on her twin bed laying on it then.  Benny actually snuggled with Bella when Edward handed it to her.  He placed above them and then next snuggled to sleep.  Benny represents her innocence and sweetness.  Edward is missing her.  Still stumped why he would want a divorce if he has such strong feelings for Bella.



Author's Response:

Yep, Benny will be in the next chapter as well. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Bella leaving and not telling anyone where she was going has led her to not have anybody know where to look for her.  She left Edward over the pain of the divorce.  She doesn't want anything from him. She stopped to express her pain from the break-up.  (I believe) James has picked her up and has her in restraints.  Questioning why she was crying when he picked her up.  He thinks is just a lover's quarrel.  Doesn't kow that Edward is giving Bella her freedom to have some happiness.  Since he is so broken at this time. She's concerned about his getting destroyed by him showing up and give an extremely low blow remark to them.  Retailiation in anger by her captive wil only hurt Bella more in the long way.  Looking forward to future chapters.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 23, 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Bella being held hostage is keeping herself calm by remembering her happier times with Edward.  Even though she left him, memories of him and her and their first kiss in Forks helping her to forget her captivity and fear of never being found again.  I'm surprised that this crazy man hasn't contacted Edward for ransom or gloating over taking his wife.  Taking Bella to a house or cabin that hasn't been used in a long time to do what with her.  Just keep her tied up to the bed covered up.  What?  I guess the remaining chapters will be from Bella's POV to catch up with the chapters of what has been happening to Edward while she's been gone.  Looking forward to further pieces of the puzzle as it comes together.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Still don't understand why Edward wanted to end their relationship.  Both appear so happy together.  I like the project Bella is working on for the photos.  Focusing on that crooked grin is the best.  Waiting for the steps it took for Edward to want a divorce and for Bella to just vanish.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I can agree with Edward about Bella if she doesn't know what to call his body parts maybe she isn't ready for sex.  She is curious though since she's never seen them before either.  Amusement at her curiousity and frustration at being worked up with no moving no further than exploring touching. All these memories of her being with him and then having to wake up now with her gone.   Searching for one picture he had taken of her while he finds a folder with nothing but pictures of him.  He asks Sue the housekeeper to find it's the 365 project.  What?  Cataloguing their first year  together.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing!

Arabella

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 29, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Edward taking Benny the bear to Marcus his detective as evidence Bella might not have left their place willingly.  Marcus said couldn't use it to find Bella.  To Edward it makes him worry Bella isn't safe where she is currently and also that maybe Bella still loves him after everything that has happened between them.  Then to remember their trip to Nice.  Edward is very afraid of things he loves leaving him.  He can't deal with it or being left alone.  That's probably why he requested the divorce, he decided if he ended things it would be easier for him to deal with it.  It wouldn't be because someone he loved decided to leave him again.  So if he ends it first, then it's him walking away not the other way around.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 10, 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Edward's pain is anger towards his mother for dying. He's never dealt with her death.  He's held it close to him and turned it into drive to the heights.  Shutting off his emotions and expressing them. Something that Bella needs to survive.  He did them while they were courting, but it seemed once home they dried up and withered.  Edward still carrying around his mother's ring in his pocket.  Learning Bella left and intended to head to Forks to live until encountering someone.  That's scary.  Especially since the guy seems to know her.  She's unaware of him, but her face has been plastered all over the news with her courtship and marriage to Edward.  Does appear she has been taken after all.  Left the house voluntarily, but was taken while out of her vehicle. 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 12, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Edward is missing Bella.  He is lost without her.  Sue told him she spoke with the police.  She knows Edward loves Bella, but marriage takes more than love.  It takes work by both parties to keep the relationship going.  Edward appeared to just spoil her by giving her things, but what she wanted and needed was Edward to give of himself to her.



Author's Response:

Very true. Your last sentence made me have an "aww" moment. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Poor Edward a day late and a dollar short.  He waited too late to get his act together.  Once Bella exploded she had had enough of the avoidance of the issues and being alone.  Wherever she is I know she is missing Edward. 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

From both of their POV's they wanted to be together for always. They wanted their relationship to last forever.  Rosalie tried to talk Bella into waiting until she was older.  Bella's mind was made up this was the man for her. So this ring Edward wanted to give to her, why didn't  he give it to her?  Was he talked out of it by Rosalie? Did she say it had to be modern ring and larger/smaller than what he wanted to buy when she went shopping with him?  They married quickly because the physical aspects of their relationship couldn't progress any further until marriage occurred.  That was the rush element as to the wedding. Their problems occurred once they returned home and Edward started working again, he didn't know how to work the hours he was used to and fit in a wife too.  Bella was lonely, missing her husband, actually a workaholic widow, she tried to bridge the gap, felt the rift getting wider and wider.  Edward felt it too, but both were inexperienced with relationships on how to bring themselves back together.  Find a balance between work, home, couple, family, etc....

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 24, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Edward forgetting a date with his wife is pretty low. Just to have a business meeting to seal a deal.  His apology wasn't good enough or respectful of his wife's feelings and disappointment.  The fact he turned off his cell phone and he was gone from work.  Most married men call periodically throughout the day to their wives to check in on their day.  Remember plans made for special evenings.  He made her cry and then didn't know how to handle it or resolve it.  He had more compassion earlier when the smoke detector went off at home when she tried to fix breakfast.  He offered to take her to breakfast at IHOP to resolve her tears.  He talked to her, paid attention to her, listened to her, offered solution to resolve the situation to make her happy.  Not like later when he stood her up without adequate explanation of where he was, what he did, why he was unavailable by phone, etc....  I understand Edward has been on his own for a long time, but when you add someone else into your life common courtsey does come to play.  Check in, make sure both are on the same page, respect, manners, etc...  Seems Edward is all thoughtful before he marries Bella and then just a thoughtless jerk afterwards.  Once he got Bella he stopped trying to see her, be there for her, talk to her, etc....  She was already attained he didn't have to try any more.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Bella has traditions that Edward finds idiotic.  Like spreading weeds.  His misunderstanding of making wishes and dreaming isn't in his world.  Edward's world is of money and getting whatever you want when you want it.  Dreams are fulfilled instantly.  Weeds inperfection.  In Edward's world everything is perfect and in order.  Edward is missing Bella and determined to find her.  Even seeking advice from Rosalie about Bella's history.  Before Bella left she was very lonely in Edward's world with really nothing to do.  Sue was keeping the house, cooking, etc...  Even when she tried to contact her friends they had other things to do like working schedules.  Bella's problem with the aroma of cleaning products could be a clue to a condition.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Biggest mistake made by both Bella and Edward was no discussion.  When Rosalie taking Bella out for girl's night out, she should have gone.  Not giving into Edward.  So she went and danced with Rose for several hours.  She didn't have to drink.  She could have drunk soft drinks, coffee, tea, etc...  Edward worried about HIS bad press, HIS reputation, HIS marrying someone so young, etc....  Nothing about Bella and her quality of life.  Yes Rosalie or one of their friends or hers should have brought up the fact that Bella needed more quality time with him.  That she was lonely in the big house all by herself.  She didn't go places because she wanted to go places and spend the time with him.  Instead of all of them standing around and watching the train wreck coming and did nothing to try and prevent it coming.  Finally when in bed and she turned around not making an attempt to find out "What's wrong?"  "Hon, Have I done something to hurt you?  If I have I'm sorry."  It's cliche, but it's at least a start and an effort to reach out and connect with her.  Find out what's bothering her, why unhappy, why avoiding his touch, looking at him, etc... If you can't talk with good or bad you don't have anything at all.  It won't last.  A relationship has to be worked at during good and bad times by both parties.  Leaving it to itself will just leave it to die and blow in the wind.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I was really proud of Edward to understand a nap was the best for both of them after a long plane trip.  would be better for both later after sleep/rest.  If the mother was annoyed at the newlyweds then she shouldn't look and she should control her children.  They didn't need to throw their beach ball at them.  Edward and Bella were behind them, the water and sand were in front of them.  The motto was keep your attention to the beauty of the water, the horizon, and not the newlywed rich couple behind you.  The woman probably doesn't even remember her honeymoon or if she does her husband has forgotten and she is envious to the nth degree.  Crazy witch.  Find somewhere else.  Who was there first?  Whose kids threw the ball at them?  Who was watching them and taking care of them surely not their mother?  Too busy sunbathing or reading some smutty novel wishing it was her.  Okay I'm off my soapbox.  Now Edward and Bella can take their time free of sand, free of viewers, cool in a/c, comfort on mattress and sheets, etc...

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 23, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Edward working so many hours and leaving Bella alone.  His work appears to be more important than his wife and plans they have made together.  Edward knows Bella isn't happy and nothing he is doing is making her happy.  Of course not, he's trying to just give her things instead of giving her of himself.  Bella wants to spend time with the man she loves and the man who claims to love her.  Edward doesn't understand that concept of giving of himself.  He is used to buying whatever he wants and getting whatever he wants. Once he has gotten it doesn't know what to do to maintain it.  All his woman before it just took flashing expensive jewelry at them to make up for lack of time or shower them with expensive trips, clothes, etc... those women were happy.  Bella is from a small town with a whole different attitude.  She didn't get together with Edward for his money and what she could get from him.  She fell in love with him.  Bella married Edward to be with him.  So when Edward buys her something it's just giving her something to offset his guilt for disappointing or hurting her.  Bella would rather have him come to her and talk about it.  Communication is their worst trait on both sides.  Alec offering those tickets to the carnival was exactly what Edward needed to make Bella happy.  Spending time with Bella doing something together.  Something fun, something to enjoy, laugh, ride the rides, play the games, etc...  It appears it was a little too late to make the difference in their crumbling relationship of a marriage.



Author's Response:

Thanks for always leaving long reviews :)

Arabella

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 27, 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Edward is suffering so much pain at her leaving. He had Bella he just didn't know how to keep it together.  Once the chase, honeymoon, was over and real life returned; he had no idea of how to meld the two together.  To keep the love spark alive as a couple and be Edward the businessman as well.  He lost Edward the sweet, the lover, the nice guy, the considerate guy and returned to the man who was absorbed into the daily workings of his business and the rest of the world took a back burner instead of the other way around.  The business should be important, but not his whole existence.  His family, his wife should always be his first concern above the business especially her happiness.  He really needed to learn to talk with her about difficult topics and ask her how she really feels about things.  Talk problems/differences out and try to compromise instead of his way or her way making one or the other miserable.  Compromising can be a win win situation for both of them.  The fact that he isn't drowning himself with liquor is a good sign that he is trying to change.  He doesn't want to just drown himself into nothing.  Even if he wants the pain and despair to go away.  The memories of her haunt him all the time.  The joyful memories of finding her and falling in love with her.  The times of being with her and finally making her his bride and wife.  Even the sorrowful ones of seeing before his eyes the marriage and their loving relationship crumbling before his eyes with him having no skills on how to repair, fix, stop, or correct the falling stones of their relationships.  His pain is heartwrenching.  He still loves Bella so much.  From her opinions earlier she still loves him also, but the pain of being alone and feelings of rejection were too much for Bella to bear as well.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

It's nice hearing a little of Bella's memories of their past together.  Her thoughts and feelings as well.  Especially her thoughts as she is exiting the house for the last time trying to keep herself together in order to drive wherever she is going. Trying to maintain what little of herself remained in tact. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for letting me know that you liked the chapter!

Arabella

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

It's amazing how fast a great thing could end up in rubble. Both parties are miserable after the break up.  Bella was when driving away.  Who knows what happened after she stopped?  No commentary from her after stopping.  Edward is a nervous wreck.  Thinking of any avenue to check.  Angry ex-girlfriends could do things so he went to visit Victoria (Tori).  Edward's reaction is that she was innocent of what he was set to accuse her of kidnapping Bella.  Doesn't mean she still isn't part of what might have happened.  Edward lied to Bella about no girlfriends since 2nd grade.  Appears he had others he didn't mention.  Probably has a lot of ex's by the side of the road, all jealousy that Bella was the one who got him to the altar.  Edward is running out of ideas of where or who to check next. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! Edward had a lot of hook-ups, but he didn't call any of the girls his girlfriend. Tori was the one who seemed to fall the hardest for him, regardless. So he doesn't think he lied, but he was also afraid to share the gory details.

Arabella

 




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