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Morning by Carson Dyle Rated: R starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 166]
Summary:

Morning finds Edward and Bella happy to live in each perfect moment. Surrounded by loving family and loyal allies. Their path to a bright future seems clear, but the darkest nights cast the longest shadows. What happens when the past refuses to die?


Categories: Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Nessie, Rosalie
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Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 246835
[Report This] Published: January 23, 2011 Updated: October 27, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 26, 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Jabberwocky

Bella's doing so well with interaction with the humans.  All the messages she got from fellow Forks residents were messages to Charlie.  I think candle lady has something for Charlie.  Trying to get information.  Wouldn't be surprised if she made an advance towards Charlie.  Finally revealed who the man in the post office was the biker in New Moon.  Trying to continue his horrible seductive techniques towards Bella only to have Edward arrive to let him know it won't happen.  That bike ride in Port Angeles was over a year ago.  She's now a married woman with a child and happy.  It was bad of Edward to not tell Bella when he was leaving first.  Being the last to know her husband is leaving in the morning for New York isn't right.  Can't wait for the continued confrontation between Edward and the biker.  I think it would have been cute for Bella to see the animal figurines and purchase everyone's favorite veggie diet choice. 



Author's Response:

The biker's not the only one who's going to have to deal with a pissed-off Edward. How's Bella going to react when her new husband's volatile temper comes out of hiding? Will she be intimidated? That first fight newlyweds inevitably have can set the tone for how they'll deal with future disagreements. Yes, maybe she should have taken a look at those animal figurines. Do you suppose Hummel makes a mountain lion?

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Insane

I can't blame Bella for worrying about Edward when he leaves for New York.  I don't think it's so cut and dry as he is telling her.  He's withholding information to hide the danger to himself.  Enjoyed the alone girl time between Bella & Nessie.  Having Ness spending time on the res with Jake.  Pretty smart little cookie.  Keeping Jake on his toes.  I liked the cure for the insanity.  I'll have to tell my husband about that one. The Weird family returning to their cottage for the night.  Such an adorable and loving family they are the 3 of them. 



Author's Response:

So glad you're enjoying the story. One of the things I was eager to explore in B&E's HEA was Edward's cautious evolution. Happiness has been foreign to him for so long that he's just now loosening up enough to enjoy the simple pleasures of being in love. Learning to tease and be teased in the safe environment Bella creates for him. You just know he'd be good at it.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 25: The Last Supper

Interesting development with Rupert killing Evelyn's father with a monkey wrench. Edward watching over the house for any odd behavior or occurances.  He dispatched the villain rather quickly.  Helped bring in her father from the porch and prevented Evelyn from checking out her father's facial expression of horror. He comforted her, but left quickly enough he hoped to lose the weapon and disfigure the real cause of death of Rupert.  Only the body and weapon were gone.  Curious, but Edward never did a search for where they went or who/what took them. He stayed in town to see if the trail would lead to him, but nothing was discovered regarding the murderer of Evelyn's father or the discovery of Rupert's body.  Evelyn just thought Rupert had left before the rumors her father had brought up could be proven true. He had to visit Evelyn before he left to learn what she had learned about her father's death. It was wonderful that he gave her the phonograph and records to help her play the piano. His decision to return to Carlisle and apologize was the right one.  Returning to a vegetarian diet was as well. Edward just couldn't believe that Carlisle and Esme would receive him home without a problem as if what he had done while he was away had never happened or didn't matter. So the entire New York years have been completed.



Author's Response:

"Rather quickly" . . . hmm.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Interplay I

Alice is occupying Bella's daytime activities.  Keeping quiet unless Bella brings up the topics.  Wanting Bella to remember on her own per Carlisle's instruction.  Bella fishing for information regarding other family members of Alice's family besides the family members she has met and remembered.  Alice told her 3 more.  2 brothers and a niece.  Then Alice shows Bella a picture of her brothers hunting in Denali. She didn't focus on her husband's face at all.  It's like she doesn't even recognize him or recall anything about him.  Seeing Jasper she remembers her 18 year old birthday party when she cut her finger on an envelope.  Jasper attempting to attack her.  She freaked out.  Making Alice freak out and feel horrible for upsetting Bella.  Trying to calm Bella.  Bella trying to calm herself down to help Alice calm down and stop her guilt.  Bella needed alone time to deal with herself and memories.  She acted like she was asleep.  Covering her head with a pillow to block Alice and Carlisle's conversation.  While everyone was occupied Bella grabbed a book and read alll night.  Edward's on his way home.  He's tried to not think too much of Bella to concentrate on what he needed to accomplish in New York.  To get home as fast as possible.  Concerned he has missed some growth spurts of Reneesme. Missing his wife and daughter.  Walking through the airport and getting on the plane.  The woman of all ages are checking out the magnificent Edward not even caring the man has a wedding ring on his finger.  He has to fake sleeping to have the woman leave him alone.  All he's think about is his wife, remembering his honeymoon, his daughter, how much Jake has turned from a rival/enemy to a friend and future boyfriend/son-in-law to his daughter.  He's coming home to a wife who doesn't even remember him or know him or their daughter.  His daughter is spending time at the cabin with her grandfather Charlie and grandmother Esme.  Alice is clothes shopping on the internet. Bella is reading. She wants to stay and read.  Alice knows Edward is coming home.  She wants Bella gone.  finally after enough harassment Bella agrees to go to save her cactus from Phoenix.  Add to family greenhouse and buy appropriate light for adequate sunlight to maintain optimum growing conditions.

Still looking forward to how Edward will handle Bella not remembering him or their daughter.



Author's Response:

Very thorough recap, and particularly fun for me, since with all your attention to detail it shows you were led into a quite logical assumption that you may have to rethink in a chapter or two. Writers don't really know whether something they've set up will work until a reader lets them know. Thanks, romancaholic!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Mystery

Volturi gone. Life for the Cullens' contentment and busy with all hobbies.  The newlyweds' hobby is themselves.  Taking care of Reneesme.  The mystery of the Victorian dollhouse and the pieces of furniture appearing in random locations.  Edward and Bella have guessed it's Rosalie.  Could be.  Hard to choose because they all adore her and would do anything for her.  They all spoil her.  Bella learning more about the family's wealth including what's in their basement.  Not a typical basement more a vault for valuable art works, jewels, gold, etc....  I did enjoy Edward's art description for the swing painting.  Of course, some of the items he described were actually symbols for Renaissance painters.  Definitely fooled Bella completely with his analysis of the painting.  Can't blame her for being slightly angry with him.  Deliberating teasing her. Wonder who the guy in the DMV was who recognized Isabella Swan.  She couldn't place him.  Curious if he will play a part later in the story.  Also curious about the dress designing who is the dress for? Bella? or maybe Reneesme?  Adult line or children line.  Now they have to deal with art fraud.  One thing consistent is Edward and Bella's constant need for one another.  Looking forward to where the story will go from here.



Author's Response:

There are a surprising number of authors who conclude a synopsis of their stories with "I suck at summaries - but my story's great." You could probably start a lucrative business summarizing for them! You did a great job of including all the main points, including a red herring or two along with a very important clue that will figure later in the story. Seriously, there's nothing a writer appreciates more than someone who's obviously been paying attention. I hope I can hold yours as the story continues.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 12, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Mature

If Edward wasn't away was bad enough for Bella, then meeting someone who knew what the Cullens really are is worst.  Wants Bella to spend time with him.  Right buddy, she's married.  The fact that he is human and knows makes him in danger.  Wonder if his horrible cologne is hiding another scent.  What will the reaction be to the other Cullens when Bella informs them?  Will Jasper go after him, but how will they recover all his research documents?  Edward sure left at the wrong time. Bella really needs his counsel now.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Glitch

Wonder what made her mind go.  Was some chemical introduced into her system from the meeting with the stranger?  Or was the threat to the entire Cullen clan made all the memories of them scatter into puzzle pieces needing to be assembled?  She hasn't mentioned Edward once.  or Reneesme?  She doesn't remember she's married and a part of the Cullen family.  She doesn't remember exposure of being vampires is the threat made to the family in the woods.  She only remembers the beginning of their conversation.  Strange the fish and aquarium associated with Alice and the rest of her lost memories.  What will happen tomorrow morning when her daughter wants to see her mommy?  You won't be able to keep her away.  She's not a shopping maniac like Alice.  Surprised Edward hasn't called Bella to just say Hi I'm missing you and Reneesme.



Author's Response:

Yes, it's hard to come up with answers when you're not even sure what the problem is. But you know they're going to give it the old Cullen try!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 17, 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Theories

Abandoning Nessie with Emmett and then leaving for the entire evening.  At least she has realized that Nessie is her daughter.  She hasn't gotten the knowledge that Nessie was conceived in love.  She is thinking Edward charmed her out of her virginity.  thus being the beautiful demon.  Esme is furious along with the others.  Edward has the vampire trapped, supposedly.  I would imagine he could somehow escape from the vault eventually.  Nessie must be very upset about where her momma went.  At least Bella knows Nessie is hers and Edward's.  that's a little more knowledge.  Also probably that is the reason she's a vampire too.



Author's Response:

As the man says, "A little knowledge is a dangerous thing."

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 09, 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Pictures

Very much was a surprise as to who finally destroyed French and the reasoning behind they did it.  Yes his actions were done carelessly and would draw attention eventually if he continually used them for his own means.  It would lead back to him.  I liked the way Edward described how destroyed Martel's place was after Felix and Dimitri left it.  At least he got his answers as to who did the deed and where her fortune had gone.  Now I'm sure they'll be doing the same to French's assets as well.  Happy family reunion for everyone.  Nessie was so cute.  So happy her momma was back and okay.  Daddy broke the spell.  Just like a fairy tale.  I like how she handled Uncle Em with the kissing in the living room with Uncle Jasper backing her up.  Uncle Em needs to upgrade his literature reading to understand the rules on the prince saving the princess from an evil supernatural being.  A kiss is always required and needed. Looks like Bella has finally learned that Edward has always wanted her and has to withhold himself for her safety all this time.  Glad things are back to semi-normal. The talk will be something Bella doesn't want to hear, but she will need to and take it all in. It will be hard for Edward to admit because of his fear of her changing her views of him.  But Bella won't, nothing in his past will stop her love for him.  He already tried that in the beginning telling her, he hunted people, didn't matter. Was very happy with Jasper's weather report of "Purple." Also glad none of the Cullens will have the guilt of killing one of their own on their heads especially guilt ridden, Edward.  He's found happiness and contentment, doesn't need to be dropped back into the pit of desolation again about his sordid past.



Author's Response:

Glad you approved of French's fate. It would be perfectly understandable for Edward to kill him. I'm sure he'd get an intense - if brief - pleasure from ripping him to pieces, but I thought that even more he'd want to be there for Bella. Plus with Edward's tendency to self-blame, killing him might just make Edward feel more responsible for the whole circle of French's life as a vampire - from rebirth to death. He doesn't need that, because the truth is French was always an a**hole. Besides, he was a perfect target for Volturi justice, so if "reporting" him makes Aro and company feel the Cullens are being good little vampires, it's a win for everyone.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Lists

That Alice is a tryant and a slave driver to the Cullen men.  Leaving Bella by herself all day with her racy fantasies.  Only to find out Edward has been having them all day as well.  Make up sex for their earlier fight as well as the extended period of being separated from each other.  Edward leaving in the morning for New  York.  Wonder if Bella will ask him about her being an aggressive woman vs the woman of his time.  That seemed to bother her quite a bit.  I don't think Edward has a problem with her starting things.  They both seem to have quite an appetite.  Edward really did scare that biker away.  Bella could have dealt with him herself, but overprotective Edward had to step in and resolve it.  I'm surprised he didn't pull out their marriage license and shove the man with his bike into the next county.



Author's Response:

LOL. If Bella came down on him sufficiently and really got him to cool the overprotective bit, I can see Edward resorting to just that. Someone slights Bella, and it's all he can do not to tear them to pieces, but he's promised, so instead he pulls out the marriage license and shoves it in the offending party's face! I suspect this would only have to happen a few times to become so annoying to all involved that Bella would say, "Screw it - just rip his head off!"

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 26, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Carlisle I

Carlisle has the right diagnosis for Bella.  The cost to her Cullen family is so great especially to Edward and Nessie that both have been totally forgotten by her.  Bella hasn't mentioned either of them.  She has remembered everyone else.  The fear of their discovery and exposure blocks out the threats from the meadow.  Wonder if when Edward arrives home at the end of the week she'll remember the threat to the Cullen of exposure of what they all are.  Charlie will enjoy having his granddaughter up at the cabin with him.  If Jacob joins his dad he will too.  Jake will make the trip as soon as he knows Nessie is up there.  He won't be able to stay away.  Esme will enjoy cooking with Sue.  Getting to learn the future other side of the family better.



Author's Response:

Well, we all tend to interpret things according to our own experiences. Carlisle is naturally looking for a medical answer since that's his area of expertise, but there are some variables in this situation that don't figure in humans. Are they important? And if so, which ones? There is one character who ultimately holds the key, though they may have to look very hard to find it. Could be Carlisle. Could be someone else.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Interplay II

Edward can't wait to get home to his wife and daughter.  Another plane to catch before reaching Seattle then the drive to Forks.  Alice has Bella over at Charlie's.  Cleaning out his cabinets and fridge.  Once old food thrown out, Alice goes shopping.  Leaves Bella in the car as a celebrity.  Bella still hasn't remembered Edward or Reneesme.  Once all the food is placed into the kitchen cabinets and fridge and freezer.  Alice tells Bella to go get the cactus to bring to its new home.  Bella had questioned her about her other brother the one she was coupled with.  Bella was sad that he was alone.  Alice hinted at that he wasn't any more.  Bella quessed that he was in a relationship now and that she was with him.  Alice thought she remembered something.  The only thing she remembered was the red robes in the streets of Volterra when she went to save Edward from himself.  Edward returning home knew something was wrong because everyone's thoughts were blocked. Was surprised Bella and Reneesme weren't there to greet him.  Especially Bella.  Then to hear that Bella's memories/mind has been mixed up for days and no one called to tell him.  He was angry,  Just what I expected.  Not telling a husband his wife has something wrong with her waiting until he returns isn't right.  Especially if Bella doesn't even remember her own child.  The baby she gave up her human life to have because she represented a child conceived in their love.  Edward and Jasper went upstairs to Reneesme  so she would be able to see her daddy when she awoke.  She awoke briefly and saw her daddy and was glad to see him.  She was worried about Mommy.  She hadn't seen her in a few days.  She enjoyed her time with Grandpa Charlie and the Queliete boys at the cabin.  Edward said he would fix it. Alice told her it was time to go home.  Bella didn't want to go her mind was all together, the pieces weren't there.  When she walked in Esme, Carlise, Rose, Emmett, and Alice were in the room with her. Jasper and Edward were heading in the room.  Bella grabbed the man and hugged him.  Since he didn't really hug him back knew she was hugging the wrong man.  The cresents on his chest and Alice's reaction proved it.  She was hugging Jasper thinking it was Edward.  When Edward entered from the dark, Bella's body did start to react.  What her mind didn't remember the body did it was familiar, normal, drawn and pulled towards him.  Waiting on bated breath whether seeing him will bring everything back including the conversation with the stranger in the meadow.



Author's Response:

Wow, you've written almost as much as I have! It's like Cliff notes in the US. Can't remember what they're called elsewhere.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 15, 2011 Title: Morning

Bella's mind disfunction is taking the magnetic pull as demonic and negative rather than physical/romantic.  This must be killing Edward to have Bella so repulsed and frightened of him.  When everyone is telling her he would die for her.  Which is true.  And that she would die for him.  She remembered the red robes on the drive with Alice didn't make the connection with her run in Volterra to save Edward.  All she is remembering is the negative.  Edward's hatred the first day.  his fantasy of her blood and killing the entire biology class.  Sucking out the venom to prevent her change in Phoenix.  None of their romance or their good times.  Their meadow, prom and dancing, their first kiss, their arguments, his marriage proposal, their wedding, their honeymoon, birth of their daughter, awakening as a vampire, spending time with their daughter, victory over the Volturi, etc... Charlie's going to question if she had a fight with her husband. Why she left her daughter? Bella's acting like Edward's the demon spawn and she'll feel like she had Rosemary's baby or something.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 20, 2011 Title: Morning

Duplicate chapter same as Chapter 13. Titled Demon.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 21, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Carlisle II

Carlisle trying to talk to Edward.  Edward dying inside and feeling all Bella's negative emotions and thoughts are correct.  that everything she said was true and he was worthy of any of the good things that have been fallen in his life.  Now that all the danger has gone and happiness should begin the other shoe has fallen and disaster and angsty will follow.  Edward would lose his happiness, love, and contentment with his wife Bella and possibly his daughter Reneesme.  I really feel for Edward for his pain to see Bella with fear and terror towards him.  Especially since she has never felt that way towards him before.  For the first time not seeing love coming from her eyes towards him.  Staying in the cottage with Nessie while Bella stays with the rest of the Cullens.



Author's Response:

Actually, romancaholic, you said something in a previous review that disappeared before I had a chance to respond, something that was an important key to what's really happening wiith Bella. Without the "how" and "why," it's still a mystery, but what you observed was the true gist of her problem.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 30, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Moss

Bella is driving me nuts.  I can see why Alice is so frustrated.  She has memories and doesn't even bother listening when someone else tells her a different version.  So single minded and stubborn.  Almost to the point of Bella being self centered and superior.  Thinking she has Edward all figured out, she can see the real Edward, she's not under his evil spell, his family is delusional and making excuses for him, and only Bella is being rational and living with reality while the Cullens are being irrational and living in a dream world controlled by Edward.  Regarding Bella being thrown into the table and getting cut by glass she remembers Edward shoving her.  Doesn't remember why he did it.  Esme explaining overreaction of danger.  Bella does remember Jasper's attack on her birthday and has forgiven him.  She's not associating these two events to be at the same time.  Edward fighting his brother Jasper to save her life.  Pushing her out of his path so he could stop him from reaching her.  As  Esme explains it, Bella tunes out, stops listening, thinks she has all the answers, everyone else is wrong.  Sounds like typical teenage behavior to me.  Her reaction when she walked into the room without Edward the gapping hole made her feel lonely even more empty.  Too bad she's not thinking about maybe other feelings she isn't acknowledging.



Author's Response:

Bella's driving everyone nuts. But she really can't help it. Trust me.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Friendship

Meeting up with Jake didn't bring back very many memories at all.  Considering all that it could have sprung back to her mind.  Then seeing Nessie and then nothing.  Nothing but slight twinge of amazement of beautiful baby.  Idea of having children, longing, possible regret of not due to being a vampire, etc...  Later feeling of sensation in house, Bella not sure what it was.  It was Edward being in the house seeing Carlisle and Esme while Bella occupied upstairs with Rosalie and Alice with their desire creation blue dress.  I really was surprised Nessie didn't cause more memories to flood Bella's mind.  Finding the dollhouse furniture in the greenhouse didn't jog any memories either.  Wondering what will start to flood all the memories back into Bella's mind.



Author's Response:

Apparently nothing. If anything should have done it, it seems like it would have been Edward or Nessie. Then there's the possibility that they are the last two people on earth to bring back her positive memories. Okay, now I'm in danger of enjoying this torture stuff. Imma stop before I try to water-board my boss into giving me a raise. Thanks for commenting!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 12, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Carlisle III

Smart little girl Nessie.  Calling mommy Sleeping Beauty.  Need to find out who the evil sorcerer who cast the spell in order to figure out how to break it.  Will love's kiss break it/how to bring love back into Bella's mind.  Wonder about Reneesme is there, but not the adoration and unconditional love of her being Bella'a daughter.  Her selfless life sacrificing protecting love for Edward has been lost completely in the black hole of her mind.  Find how it was taken by what type of gift is the key to returning it.  The journals will help because without her mind 100% her shield won't work to block and shield the family from harm.



Author's Response:

Out of the mouths of babes. Let's hope it sets us on the right track to help Bella.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Gotham

Edward going over all that occurred while being away from Carlisle and Esme to figure out who might have had a vengence against him.  Who might have he have left in his path with a grievence so great that would want to destroy any happiness in his or his family's life.  Looks like this one vampire he disposed of nicely.  Can't be him.  His sire was only a boy of 12. Didn't sound like he sired anyone under him?  Looking forward to further thoughts from Edward.  He has always had extremely high admiration for Carlisle.  Those feelings have never waivered.



Author's Response:

And I think Edward's aware of his own intense emotions and sees Carlisle as the objective judge of what went on back then. For that reason, he'll attempt to give as balanced a view as he can of what life was like for him and hope that Carlisle might catch something he's too involved to see.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 30, 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Kindred Spirits

Edward has sure run into a diverse group of vampires from rampart murdering machine vampires who just loved the kill to sick vampire who love to lie about their power and how they were changed.  To vampires who were changed for love and just wanted to blend into society as normal middle class citizens.  Leaving behind casualities of an orphan toddler boy terrified at what he observed his mother experiencing at the hands of a madman.  Very different types of immortals.  I liked the way the word "never" comes back to bite Edward in the ass in the end.  There are two words that should not be used in the English language because fate will come and throw them in your face.  The words are "always" and "never".  The next vampire is a woman.  You know the old adage a woman scorned -- revenge is what they crave the most -- taking what you treasure the most is what they'll separate from you to make you suffer.  So we'll have to see what's coming next and hear from Carlisle what he thinks of these memories and thoughts.



Author's Response:

Too true about "always" and "never." And I suspect this woman will be trouble. We'll have to see what kind. :)

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Martel

His encounter with Martel would be taken as a woman scorned by rejection.  She wanted him awfully bad and he not only refused he up and left in a hurry.  He never wanted to be in her company ever again.  Her attitude went against his whole internal moral being.  I know he considered himself a monster, but he had his rules.  Only the scum of the earth the murderers and rapists of the world, the men who prey on the weak of humanity were his  victims.  He was saving the weak from the evil.  Like a Robin Hood of humanity.  Taking evil and saving the innocent unable to protect themselves.  Unlike Martel who used people for sex and money and took them as fodder.  She chose the rich hoping they were stupid or easy to charm away into her lair where she spun her web of deceit and danger around them.  Before she took everything away from them their money, their blood, their life.  Pretty cold individual indeed.  She only wanted money, didn't know what she wanted it for just wanted it considered it her right since her family was murdered and she was changed poor.  She felt this life owed her everything she wouldn't have had married to a farmer in the midwest.  It's a good thing she didn't know Edward was filthy rich in his own right.  Had literally money to burn.  Edward didn't flaunt it like she did with all her diamonds and jewels.  He lived modestly in residence, he had fine clothes because he like them, he spent his time going to the theater, opera, museums, galllery, etc... throughout New York.  He was gathering knowledge and culture rather than wealth, blood, fear, terror, horror, and torment.  He ate when he needed to and only from the depraved.  Martel only knew him by his last name when he was human.  Didn't know his first name, didn't know where in the Midwest (large area in the country) he came from, didn't know where he resided in the city, his hunting methods, his beliefs and thoughts.  Edward had been smart only giving minimal information and having her divulge all of hers.  So for her to track him down under Masen would be extremely hard since he normally goes by Cullen.  Martel like Edward wasn't sure whether Masen was first or last name or even a name made up to use.  So she could be a very good suspect for evil revenge to take away the one woman he loved and who loved him since he never would love her physically.  Wonder how many more vampires he had met while on his single road before his redeemption to return to Carlisle and Esme.  Looking forward to the following chapter.



Author's Response:

It's funny. I was just having a discussion with another FF author today about how once a story leaves your hands, it becomes as much the reader's as the writer's. That can be shocking at first - when someone sees entirely different things in the writing than you intended. It's also kind of cool. Everyone brings to it their own experiences and preferences and way of looking at the world. That's why it's nice to have a reviewer like you, who spells out what they're seeing in it, and in this case it coincides with what was meant. As long as somebody takes things the way they were intended, then it's fun to see how differently some others may view them, and you don't have to feel like you failed at what you set out to do.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Stalker

Martel sure doesn't know how to take "NO" for an answer.  She kept pursuing Edward and chasing him down every opportunity she had.  So much so that he was angry enough at her to finally want to kill her.  That anger also was fueled by the fact that she kidnapped a child and drugged her.  Edward feared Martel overdrugged her.  But once she arrived at the hospital she was proclaimed fine and returned to her family.  Edward knew he had to cover up Martel tracks to hide the evidence of vampires.  When he located her after destroying the evidence of the child in Martel's home, he found her with two of the Volturi Guard.  She defiantly claimed to be alone.  She didn't know any other immortal in the city.  Edward watched as she was beheaded and then burned into ashes.  Thus making him very much aware that the Volturi did exist and punishment of breaking the laws of exposure of vampires to humans and their world is a death sentence.  So definitely not a woman scorned as the culprit for revenge against Edward by wiping out Bella's love and happiness towards Edward.



Author's Response:

Well, obviously you could see this chapter! Yes, it looks like we lost a very likely suspect - someone likely to carry a grudge for a century. Keep searching, Edward. We're counting on you.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 24, 2011 Title: Chapter 22: The Unicorn in Captivity

Edward by letting the monster lead him allows the monster to rational all the killing as justified.  The person deserved it.  He has lost all interest in the arts, expanding his mind, his learning, discovering new ideals and knowledge. He is get sloppy like a newborn.  Also careless leaving bodies around and not paying attention to minds around him in the bloodlust and enjoyment of the kill.  The cop approached him way to close before Edward was aware of him.  The cop took him to the ER thinking he probably has (TB) or something with bleeding lungs. Never thinking Edward was a vampire.  Another woman thought him an albino.  Good explanation but the hair was wrong.  Why he didn't just take that explanation and just say he didn't know the dye, he used different barbers each time?  I'll never know.  Dying his hair would have let him off the hook quickly and got rid of the woman and helped her friend's daughter blend in a little better.  He didn't drain that man in the alley when the cop came up on him.  Could he have been changed without Edward knowing? Interesting.  Saving himself for marriage is his mantra throughout his life that's for sure until he meets Bella.  Scared Vera being covered in blood after killing those 4 rapists and brutal bullies.  Whether they blindfolded her or not whose to say whether they would or would not have murdered her or not depending on how rough they got with her throughout the night.  Or how sick and preverted they were.  We'll never know Edward killed them all.  Edward actions are too open and too noticeable.  He's being irrational not careful at all.  He's being like the woman with the furs who went after rich men.  Very possibly will draw attention back to Italy with strongest pimp and dark angel.  Who knows what else is getting to them.  He needs to think, be rational, start to plan, learn his control.



Author's Response:

Astute analysis, as always! By the time we encounter Edward in Twilight, his control is formidible. Like most things, he's taken it to an extreme so we get the sense he's allowed himself little pleasure until Bella throws him off balance. What could make him cultivate such a rigid hold on himself? Maybe a lesson learned - from a time when despair made him reckless.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 22, 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Carlisle IV

Evelyn's boyfriend was changed into a vampire.  He has continued to run his painting scams.  Edward will approach with a plan to outsmart the con men.  Reneesme thinks it's a game to be with Momma and have daddy break the evil spell like in most fairy tales. At least she'll be able to spend time with Bella.  She's missed her so much.  Looking forward to the plan of Edward to catch French and solve Bella's memory loss problem.



Author's Response:

Unfortunately, on the rare occasion when Edward makes a mistake, it turns out to be a doozy! While he attempts to correct it, let's hope he's right about the wisdom of turning Renesmee over to Bella.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 29, 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Guest

I can't believe Bella.  Thinking that Nessie is Rose and Emmett's stolen child from murdered parents that the two of them killed for their daughter.  Nessie has wanted to spend her time with Bella the most not Rose and Emmett.  Nessie wanted Bella to read the story Sleeping Beauty.  It was Bella she was wanted to introduce all her toys in her room and show the affection to each.  And to have Bella make up her own affection touch for each of them for Nessie to duplicate as well.  Bella even thought of Nessie's eyes looking like hers but more sparkly.  I'm surprised she didn't notice the tell tale copper tone of her hair.  Looking just like Edward's hair color.  Their is no denying her heritage is a combination between Bella and Edward.  It sure isn't clicking in her mind to remember Nessie at all. Her mind has come up with some criminal scheme where Rose and Emmett have kidnapped Nessie and killed her parents to keep her.  Bizarre.  Now she's cornered Alice for answers all because Carlisle had to work a double shift due to ill staff members.



Author's Response:

Seems like Bella's her own worst enemy when it comes to getting at the truth, but the poor thing's trying. At least Nessie appears to be having a good time.

 




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