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Broken by jarielynn Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 444]
Summary:

 

Three people, two brothers and one girl. The Cullen brothers both love the same girl, Bella Swan. Emmett is her high school sweetheart, He has loved her since he was sixteen years old. Edward is the man who helps her with her college pre-law classes. Edward finds himself falling for his brother's girl. Guilt, shame, and desire build within him. Sometime's when he looks at her he swears he sees it in her too. 

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Emmett
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Series: None
Chapters: 33 Completed: No Word count: 83035
[Report This] Published: May 29, 2010 Updated: March 19, 2012


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 31- February

Feeling  bad for Emmett, but he is wallowing in self pity.  His relationship with Bella has been over for quite a while now.  He needs to start trying to get over it. Taking Kate home and bedding her is a start.  Too bad he didn't notice the interest Rose has in him. Meeting Tom in the paint store and helping him with brushes/rollers/etc... will probably get to know Rose through him.  Bella and Edward have been apart for quite a while as well.  It was nice of Emmett to send her the tickets to New York.  He didn't have to send them. He could have cashed them in, cancelled the flights, exchanged them, etc.... Sounds like Angela and Bella are having a great time sightseeing.  Edward through text messaging going right along with them.   Like a trio visiting the city.  Bella's going to visit her mom for Spring Break and Edward's picking her up at the airport.  He's spending time with her at her mom's over spring break.  Interesting development there.  They'll be glad to see each other for sure.  Wonder how Renee will take the new relationship of Bella's with Edward Emmett's brother.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7 - Regrets

Was surprised to hear that Emmett felt Edward hated him.  Edward couldn't tell Emmett why he avoided him.  How do you tell your only brother the girl he's in love with, your attracted to an obsession over the same girl?  Wouldn't go over to well for sure.  Hopefully he'll have enough time before arrival to dinner to come up with some excuse or story.  Tension in his relationship prior to their separation and break up.  Too much conflict/tension at home needed to spend time to rebuild/work on their relationship.  anything but the truth.  Bella woke with the mother of all hangovers.  Physically miserable.  Emmett was so sweet to her.  Of course she didn't remember all the things that happened the previous night.  She did remember the boob question, but Angela had to remind her of her activities on the dance floor.  Bella being aggressively fondling Edward was a surprise for her and embarrassing as well.  She felt sorry for him, he must have been extremely embarrassed with his brother's girlfriend touching him.  Angela said no way, he looked like he was totally enjoying the whole experience.  Of course Edward enjoyed it, he has been obsessed with her for over 3 years.  If they were in contact more often he wouldn't be able to restrain himself from making advances towards her.  Angela advice about acting dumb, you don't remember due to liquor consumption, is the best way to handle it.  Edward isn't going to bring up, "Oh Bella was fondling me on the dance floor Em.  She gave me the hugest hard on."  Right like that would ever happen.  He's not going to say anything either, he doesn't want to hurt his brother at all.  He just have this overwhelming attraction for Bella, this pull towards her.  An inner magnet zoned on Bella only to fulfill his deepest longings for her.  Em wants Edward and Bella to become further acquainted since they are both people he loves very much.  Emmett suggesting a trip to New York with Bella hoping she'll change her mind about wanting to move there.  Emmett wants to stay in Seattle for college.  Closer to home and family.  Looking forward to the remainder of the evening with Edward, Emmett, and Bella.  Edward will be non-stopping drinking his beer.  Hoping Emmett doesn't become to demonstrative with Bella in front of Edward.  Would really break Edward's heart and state of mind.  Bella will have a hard time looking at him because she embarrassed by her brazen activities of the previous evening.  Should be very interesting to hear the different POV's regarding their thoughts during their dinner and evening together.  Looking forward to how the story will progress from her to reach the prologue where one man left/broke up with while Bella had just returned from sleeping with the other gentleman.  Bella caught in the middle between two great intelligent, physically fit, gloriously gorgeous, gentlemen, kind, and passionate.  It would be hard to choose between them.  Who wouldn't want to be there to choose either of them.  Bella just has to follow her heart to the right man for her. 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8 - Pizza with a Side of Deception

Edward having dinner with Bella and Emmett.  Edward having a hard time dealing with Bella and Emmett being affectionate with each other.  Makes him envious and jealous.  His feelings for Bella are getting deeper and deeper the more he gets to know her and learns about her.  The conversation went towards Bella and Emmett's spring break trip to New York City.  Edward had been there for a semester so he was recommending places they might want to see.  Emmett was bored, but Bella was enraptured with all the information.  Edward's feelings for Bella are getting out of his control.  It's harder and harder to hold himself away from her.  Emmett asked why he dropped out of the family's life.  Emmett thought maybe because of Vicki.  Edward flew with that excuse that it was because of Vicki wanting Edward all to herself.  Edward isn't going to be able to control himself much more.  His feelings are getting stronger for Bella the longer he is around her.  Also the guilt for lusting after his brother's girlfriend is eating him alive.  Edward is in so deep with his feelings for Bella.  I actually feel for his pain, but I also feel for Emmett and the pain of losing his love and the pain of betrayal from his girl and his brother which will be coming in the future. 



Author's Response:

I think there will probably hurt all around on this one... Edward is getting in deeper with Bella that's for sure and it will get worse as he gets to know her. Both my boys have it bad I'm afraid. :( Thanks for your reviews, they still mean a lot to me.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 16, 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 26- Need

Both Bella and Edward were calling out to the other emotionally, spiritually, and physically.  Both of them were so lonely and hurting. Bella's decision to suffer the most  refused to call for comfort.  Bella just knew it was Edward on the phone.  She couldn't leave him feeling so desperate. She went to him.  Both knew if Bella reached Edward that was it.  No going back.  They needed and wanted each other for too long.  Pent up and repressed desire eventually will win out. Both have found solace and completeness in the other.  The outside world doesn't exist to them now.  It's just the two of them.  The difficulties and heartache will resurface once the real world is added back to the equation.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9- Boys, Pool, and Poker

Edward trying reach out towards Emmett away from the apartment.  Trying not to think about Bella.  But at times an innocent comment by Emmett would send Edward off into la la land of imagining everything Bella.  All he comments Em made regarding Victoria made Edward feel guilty at laying the blame at her feet why he abandoned his family for years.  I can't blame Edward for not wanting to tell his brother that he lusts after his high school sweetheart from the first time he met her.  Or the fact that it's getting stronger as the years have passed.  So when Emmett sees Edward off into another dimension his first thought is that Edward is still hurting from the break up with Victoria.  Em's answer to getting over a girl is to just bang the first good looking girl you meet.  Like his referring Edward to Tanya at the bar.  To have Edward stop being remote they played pool.  Edward beat Em.  Em surprised because he always won when they played.  Edward admitted he had always allowed Em to win because he was a whinny complaining cry baby when he lost.  My sister was the same way.  Hated to lose would even cheat to win.  Edward catered to Em's competitive nature.  He'd rather have Em think he beat him than listen to Em whine about being beaten in a competition.  Neither really knows the other very well at all.  Misreading expresses left and right.  Double meaning, deception to avoid further family conflict, hurt and betrayal feelings, etc... Emmett just wants to see his brother happy like he was before he left for college.  Emmett doesn't realize the distancing only occurred because Edward is trying to avoid his intense magnetic pull towards Bella.  Easier to deal without seeing Bella.  Even more avoiding seeing them affectionate with each other drives Edward over the edge into a fit of jealousy and envy against his brother.  Alice and his mom noticed Edward's attraction towards Bella and both told him to get over it.  Wonder if either of them still realize Edward has the pull towards Bella.  I have to admit I am looking for more Edward and Bella togetherness, but I can wait.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10 - Things You Aren't Meant to Hear

Bella arrived home late to a dark home with someone lying on the couch sleeping.  It turned out to be Edward.  He followed Bella into the kitchen for a sandwich.  He made him one when she asked him if he wanted one.  He made a comment about her bum out loud. Surprised Bella didn't know what to do.  Edward was embarrassed about actually saying that statement out loud.  But Bella decided to play it cool and ignore the comment.  Edward offered to help her with any of her law classes.  Bella tried to wake Emmett, but he slept through it.  Bella undressed went to bed.  Tried to sleep, but was thinking about Edward's comments to her.  The next morning Emmett decided to make love to Bella.  Edward out on the couch heard them.  Once the thumping of the bed against the wall, Edward had to leave and quick.  Actually he was angry, but he feels stupid falling for his brother's girl.  Edward just has feelings and desires toward her.  He can't explain it.  Emmett wanted  Bella to cut classes and stay in bed with him all day.  Bella said she couldn't had to go to class.  Also didn't Em have a class at the same time.  Emmett told her he quit the university.  Bella hadn't even noticed and it had been a couple weeks earlier.  Something is definitely not right in paradise.  Bella is wrapped up in her law classes, making time with Emmett isn't the first priority right now.  Emmett made the decision to cease his education giving him a lot of free time.  So he's lonely, but he didn't have to quit school.  Bella wants the education, she had dreams and goals she wants to achieve.  Emmett needs to make some for himself.  Emmett has missed their time together, but has been spending time with his brother.  Edward can't run from Bella again without hurting Emmett even more.  But being with Emmett puts him in a position to be near Bella which drives him crazy especially if Emmett and Bella decide to have relations.  the plot is thicking, something has to give.  Bella isn't the same as she was in Forks.  She has a lot of work with her degree.  Many groups working on projects and school work.  Emmett has just taken their common ground (school) out of the equation.  Emmett needs to decide what he plans to do.  Should be an interesting bumpy ride.



Author's Response:

Emmett didn't totally quit... yet. (a little hint for you) He's only dropped one class.  Emmett has dreams, one to open his own shop- in Forks. Will school help him along to this goal? That is something he is trying to figure out.. After reading your review I realize I need to dedicate a chapter to our Emmett to see his thoughts and dreams, what he wants from Bella. Hmmm... maybe after the "library" chapter. What's the libray chapter? You'll see. :) Now I want to go off and write about Em but I need to get ready for work! Damn! LOL!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13 - Second Chances

Alice and Edward's lunch started out fine.  Until Alice brought up Bella their conversation was going just great.  Especially when she told him the look on his face was the same as it was 3 years ago.  Alice questioned if he was falling in love with Bella.  Edward told her I don't know her very well.  He's not falling in love, he's already fallen hard for her.  Alice mentioned that Emmett was talking about asking Bella to marry him.  Hurt Edward.  Bella still has a long way with school left for her.  She won't want to get married now, she has to finish college and then attend law school yet.  Emmett is starting the work force full time in mechanics.  Their goals are changing and drifting apart.  Edward did show up at the library for the next couple of days to help Bella with her paper.  He asked when she would get the results and she told him the following week.  I was surprised Edward could control himself around Bella while working in the library with her.  Bella called from Emmett's phone with the results her paper was an "A" which Edward predicted would be a great grade.  Emmett decided to have a get together.  Bella invited him to join them she owed him so much for all his help.  they would be joined by Alice and fiance Jasper.  Edward afraid won't be able to control himself under the watchful eye of his sister Alice.  Alice doesn't miss a thing.  will be an interesting evening especially when adding some serious drinking to the mix.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14 - Jealousy?

Very nice gift for Bella from Edward.  The fact that Emmett treated it so lightly only shows the gap between Bella and Emmett.  He's into mechanics working with his hands.  Bella is purely her mind.  They have little if anything in common at this time.  They have their history, but their life goals are drifting further apart.  Bella hugging Edward to say thanks had the jolt of electricity flow through her.  Edward has had that jolt for it seems forever to him.  He didn't hug her back because he was afraid he would take it too far.  Everyone went to dinner and then bowling.  Edward watching all the couples and being lonely and jealous.  He picks up a bimbo who has been giving him the eye.  The biggest surprise was Bella's reaction to said airhead.  Even though she had no right or reason to be upset about Edward approaching any woman, but especially one who wasn't anywhere close to his intellect.  She was jealous of her touching him.  When she wanted to leave, she expected Edward to leave with them.  When he didn't it upset her even more.  Bella is zoning out on conversations with Alice/Angela/and Emmett to pay attention to Edward and his future conquest.  Bella is growing up and away from Emmett and his simplistic lifestyle and goals.  Will be interesting to see how the next meeting between Bella and Edward will be.



Author's Response:

Glad to see you're still here. thanks for reviewing. Bella's feeling something, definetly jealousy. Maybe more? :) The next chapter is submitted and hopefully up soon. It's Emmett.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 22, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16- Tired

Bella acting jealous and angry at Edward.  I'm surprised Edward didn't put it together the reason why she asked him about sleeping with Jessica.  She was upset the night of her birthday celebration as well.  He should have noticed when he mentioned he had another date with her on the weekend Bella's reaction.  Not happy about it at all.  Bella isn't understanding her emotions either.  She knows it is being jealous, but why.  Just thinking about Edward with Jessica made her livid.  Edward's confused because Bella's with his brother Emmett.  Edward still has deep feelings/attraction towards Bella. Will be interesting to see how they get together.  As well as the trip to New York with Emmett.  I can't give you a reason why reviews are lesser. I guess we are all waiting until Bella and Edward get together since we can see the strong emotions between them.  Will we know why Edward looked so tired and distraught?



Author's Response:

Edward did notice... he was looking for signs, but he doesn't believe what he sees... like he thinks all this is one sided. Maybe I can explain that better in the story. As for her birthday... well Edward was ignoring her for his own safety and sanity. I think everybody is waiting for Bella and Edward. But after 3 years with Emmett she can't just suddenly up and jump on someone else. That's not who she is. However we are getting into more Bella and Edward interaction and things wil be happening. Thank you for following me all this time. I really appreciate your reviews. :)  Oh-- Edward is emotionally drained and that is why he is tired. he mentioned being tired of all the things he was feeling. :)

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17- It Happened One Night

Strange place to meet someone you know the grocery store.  It was nice of Bella to ask Edward to dinner.  Too bad she couldn't cook anything.  Edward had to take care of her, the burnt food, the smoke, the smoke alarm to stop, and then cook something to eat.  Bella is beginning to notice the little things about Edward.  Even when they talked about blushing she admitted she blushed because he was older and very good looking.  She was deep down attracted to him.  The attraction is growing for Bella.  She's miserable when he isn't around.  Jealous knowing he is still dating Jessica.  Excited about Emmett taking her to New York, which he really isn't interested in at all.  The love of New York and its sites is Edward and Bella.  Emmett is doing it just to make Bella happy.  Edward is still very much hooked on Bella.  The more she learns about Edward the more things in common they share and teasing him about things they don't.  Should be an interesting evening now that Emmett is home after helping Mrs. Hale.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 22, 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18 - Closer and Farther Away

Bella and Edward has so much in common.  They have the same life plan, enjoy a lot of the same things, have fun, been starting to have coffee, dinner, movies, and socializing.  Since the afternoons/evenings at the library working on Bella's papers for Banner's class.  Also Edward has been walking Bella to class while carrying her books on Tuesdays.  They have been spending a lot of time together.  They both experience the electrical jolt between them whenever they touch.  Emmett and Bella are unintentional distancing apart from each other.  Their interests and goals in life are becoming further and further apart.  The only common ground Emmett and Bella have is their past in high school.  People change and ideals/goals change as they mature and decide which path in life they strive for themselves.  Their schedules are compatible with Emmett working long hours during the week and Saturday.  Bella's hours are long with classes, studying, spending time in the libraries.  Bella has been jealous of Edward dating Jessica.  Now she is having dreams about Edward.  Bella was starting to make love with Emmett, but remembering her dream and picturing it was Edward's green eyes not Emmett's blue.  Once she realized that she couldn't do it.  Bella's feeling guilty about mentally being attracted towards Edward, having fun with him.  Even Edward noticed the difference in her when they are alone vs. having Emmett join them. Then going to the Cullens' for Thanksgiving all sitting on the same side of the table with Bella in the middle.  The tension between all three of them was palpable.  Alice could sense it.  Knew that if Edward would continue to see Bella problems would occur.  Alice trying to defuse the tension takes Bella away to discuss her wedding plans.  Bella had fun being with Alice.  Seems Bella gets along very well with all the Cullens.  Emmett doesn't understand what is happening.  He has tried to bridge the gap between them. He's giving Bella time to get her thoughts together and hoping she will tell him what's bothering her.  It's a tough situation to love one brother when teenager and now fall in love with the other brother. Bella loves them both, but she's leaning towards Edward. Emmett and Bella don't even talk any more.  I feel for Emmett he has no idea of anything. 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21 - Breaking Point

Bella is sending mixed messages changing her behavior overnight. Sitting across the table in the library.  Rushing away early when they would spend the entire evening in the library and then coffee talking. The following day Edward would walk her to her next class talking when she just walked away from him and then didn't show up to the library at all.  He went the following day and she never showed up.  His heart was broken.  He couldn't figure out why her behavior was so different.  What did he do? He had wanted her for so long.  He finally had at least a part of her.  He knew he had her friendship and maybe even more. He kept rethinking all of his actions and things he said to her.  Unsure about Emmett's injury not like Em at all.  Thursday was determined to get an answer.  Bella again tried to avoid him.  When she said she hated him.  She was blaming him for her feelings changing from Em to Edward.  She's actually hating herself.  Her feelings have been gradually changing towards Edward for a long time now.  She just didn't want to acknowledge it.  Now her guilt has her hating herself and laying the hate and blame on Edward as well.  When Edward kissed her and fondled her in public she responded.  She stopped him because of Em.  She still cares for Em and doesn't want to hurt him.  She's in the middle of them.  She cares for both brothers.  She loved Em, but they have grown and changed.  Her needs and wants have changed.  Also her feelings and love have changed she loves Edward now.  She really loves both but differently.  Her desires are towards Edward.  She knows it will tear the family apart no matter which way she goes.  Edward has known that all along, but he can't hold the love he feels for Bella inside any longer.  It's a fine line they are walking.  That's why Bella's going home for the holidays with the Swans to avoid the Cullens and tension.  She's going to have to make her choice sooner or later.  She can't keep these men in a state of limbo.  Both men know that she has changing feelings towards them.  She needs to come clean and own up to her true feelings and cut one loose and claim one.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 09, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22 - Downward Spiral

In high school Bella and Emmett had a lot in common.  Went to the same school, similar friends, same grade, both revolved around sports, etc... First love for both of them.  Emmett hasn't changed still has same goals, same wants to a degree, just dropped out of school and now working full time.  He wants to settle down and eventually have a family.  Bella on the other hand, has changed drastically from the girl she was in high school.  Her world has opened up, she wants to travel, broaden her horizons, see museums, very career minded geared on further education -- attorney.  Bella is gearing herself to finish up bachelor's than being accepted into a law school to complete law degree/bar exam, etc... Still has a long way to go before she's ready to settle down.  She wants to expand her mind in all ways.  She's not completely content in what was the status quo in high school, she's not that Bella any more, she has new layers, new interests, new goals, new desires, new dreams, etc...  They are new avenues to explore and expand. Emmett doesn't want to change he's happy and content where he's at now.  She still loves and cares for him, but she isn't IN love with him.  All the time she has spent with Edward studying "law" common issue with career choice, common interest in music, activities, events, etc... A lot of the same interest in areas want to expand and explore into as well.  She didn't want to, but with all the time she has spent with him getting to know him she has fallen IN love with Edward.  Bella loves the Cullen family, Esme, Carlisle, and Alice.  She has no intention of wanting to break up the family by coming in between brothers.  But now she knows that Edward returns her feelings.  Bella is being "Torn Between Two Lovers."  An old song of the '80's.  "Loving them both is breaking all the rules." Edward knows about Emmett, but Emmett has no idea about Edward at all.  When he finds out it's going to really shatter him to the core.  It will break the family wide open.  Alice saw it when Edward first saw Bella at the family dinner when they were in high school.  She noticed it the last family dinner.  Alice has noticed how Edward looks at Bella and how Emmett looks at Bella.  She has also noticed how Bella has acted towards both brothers trying not to notice Edward and be semi attentive to Emmett which usually makes him awkward and quiet throughout the entire time.  Bella's a powder key ready to blow at any minute.  Now when she went home crying uncontrollably and Emmett noticed marks on her neck, swollen lips he jumps to conclusion Bella has been distancing herself from him for another guy so his angry just notched up again.  Wait until he learns it's Edward.



Author's Response:

Your reviews are always so inciteful (?) and right on. I love reading them. I am glad you stuck around and waited all this time for an update. I would have been extremely sad to lose you as a reader.

thank you.

 

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 23, 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23- The Truth

Everyone is hurting now.  Emmett, Edward, and Bella. Emmett's feelings of betrayal by Bella of cheating and lies. Edward feelings of longing since first day he met her.  He had tried to avoid her, but couldn't stay away. When he finally decided to make a play knowing she had feelings for him. Edward did make his move and Bella did eventually stop him and left to return to Emmett.  Thus rejecting Edward and hurting him even more.  Bella hurting with her feelings for Edward.  She has fallen in love with him.  She still cares for Emmett and when he's in pain she feels it twofold. She feels his pain and her guilt for causing his pain. She won't reveal the name of the other man she can't it would destroy the brothers. She's in the middle.  She really can't have one without the other brother hurting and causing a rift in the Cullen family.  Another guilt and pain Bella is carrying around on her shoulders.  She tried to reach Edward after she was kicked out of her apartment by Emmett, but he didn't answer his phone.  She called Angela for help.  Angela and Ben took her in for her to think and get out of the cold. Edward returned her call, but only could leave a message.  Bella called him later that evening.  Asked him to come over so they could talk.  Wonder what they will talk about.  Wonder what Edward's reaction will be.  I'm sure he'll be angry about Emmett throwing her out in the cold. Wonder what Emmett will be doing with Bella's things. How will Emmett deal when he realizes the other man in love with Bella is his brother Edward? It'll kill him.  Edward knows about Emmett of course, but Emmett has no idea about Edward.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 27- Betrayed

My heart does go out to Emmett. He's going to be hurt no matter what happens. Bella is heading towards another path which Emmett isn't following. Doesn't matter whether she's in love with someone else or not. They both want different things in life now. Their goals have changed, their dreams are not the same, and there is really no common ground or room to compromise. The fact that the man Bella fell in love with is Edward does hit Emmett with a double whammy. Bella's plan was to avoid both men. Have them both live their own lives without her in it. Bella would rather be miserable than to destroy the Cullen family dynamic. The reason Edward and Bella are together now is because Bella is hurting so much from Emmett's remarks of earlier. In a lot of ways it was Emmett who threw them together constantly. Edward tried very hard to avoid going after Emmett's girl. Living with a girl he had no deep feelings for, his feelings were for Bella from the moment he saw her at his parents. I still think it's awful that Alice is laying all the blame on Bella being the destroyer of the family. She's in the middle. Caring and loving both men only being in love with Edward. Will be interesting to see where Emmett's anger and hurt feelings will take him.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 28- The Bubble

Bella and Edward were in such a state of bliss for an entire day.  Nothing could make it go wrong.  Finally succumbing to the love they share for each other, until it is destroyed by someone at the door.  Who would have thought Esme would arrive at the apartment to talk with Edward.  Bella upon seeing Esme brought back the guilt she had felt about breaking up with Emmett because she had deep feeling for Edward as well as caring feelings for Emmett.  She didn't want to hurt either Edward or Emmett or cause problems in the Cullen family.  After the fight with Emmett, she was upset and when Edward called her she gave into her feelings.  Now her guilt is double-fold since she has given into her feelings.  Especially since Esme now knows.  Of course, Bella doesn't know that the entire Cullen clan already knew about the breakup and the reason.  Esme knew from the first family dinner.  I was proud of Edward for standing up for his feelings about Bella to his mother.  He has just as much rights to his loving feelings about Bella as Emmett does.  He can't help it if he fell for her instantly.  He tried to stay away and forget her.  It just didn't happen.  His feelings got stronger when she came back into his life.  They have more common interests and goals in life.  Emmett and Bella had more differences than common now then in high school.  Growing more apart daily.  More arguing, Emmett quitting school, getting permanent job as mechanic, working long hours, not understanding her grades, etc...  Bella running again from Edward. Both will have their hearts bleeding everywhere. Bella will be wallowing in her guilt again about ruining the family bond in the Cullen household.  Edward will just miss Bella.  Trying to build his relationship with Emmett will be hard for Edward.  Emmett will blame Edward for stealing Bella when it really wasn't that way at all.  Emmett brought Edward into the loop to help Bella with her grades as well as out with the two of them.  Edward did attempt to stay away to respect Emmett and his girlfriend's relationship.  Edward better expect a few head punches along the way from Emmett in the near future.

 
Metro Mornings by ebc2010 Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 89]
Summary:


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Bella Swan works in Washington DC as the deputy communications director for Carlisle Cullen, senator from Washington State. Bella is assigned to a special project, which apparently involves Carlisle’s arrogant son, Edward. In working with Edward, Bella learns to see through appearances in a world where nothing is as it seems and trust a virtual stranger with her life.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, James, Jessica, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 20940
[Report This] Published: June 03, 2010 Updated: June 25, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Sounds like Bella and Edward's reaction at the meeting with Victoria has made an enemy of her.  Not happy to lose Edward from her unit while he is protecting Bella who doesn't mean anything to Victoria.  Just someone politically in trouble for snooping into things she shouldn't be into.  Not a good impression, but both Edward and Bella found her attitude and lack of authority since Edward's assignment was authorized above her head without her prior knowledge.  She's been added to the chain as a after thought.  Now neither knows what the rest of their day is going to be like.  looking forward to the next chapters.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

New story plotline.  Enjoying it immensely.  Bella living with Alice, Rose, and Jessica.  With Emmett visiting and staying with Rose frequently.  Only to learn that Emmett is a close friend to Edward.  Definitely small world between them.  Edward's brother is Jasper and he lost a sister to possibly sex trafficking.  Bella lives with an Alice.  Strange.  Alice living with Bella confused.  If standard canon applies Alice will fall for Jasper.  But if that happens she can't be Jasper or Edward's sister since the connection between the two of them would never succeed.  Causing pain in a regularly normal happily ever after.  Bella working for Carlisle who was her doctor.  Seeing her many injuries over the years.  The bond with Bella and the Cullen family is strongly established.  Edward not following what his father expected in the line of profession causing a rift between their relationship.  Guess this is why Bella doesn't know what Edward looks like or even not knowing him at all.  I can understand the questions about Edward all of a sudden living with Bella.  Her roommates would be curious and question Bella all the time about where she was hiding him all this time.  Why after all the years they had been together they never heard about him.  So Bella staying at Edward's was the logical solution since she refused to have a safe house.  But if she wanted her roommates to believe she was on vacation for awhile living above Emmett isn't the way to keep up that farce.  Emmett is sure to see Bella around the place.  Whatever Emmett knows you know Rose will soon know also.  Also Bella is dependable, a planner, not a spur of the moment type of individual so when she will mention to her roommates a surprise vacation at the last minute.  Questions will be asked Bella will be floundering for answers.  Plus she never did call her roommates to let them know she wouldn't be home either.  So when she does talk with them, which I'm surprised that none of them called Bella during the evening, their suspicions will already be raised at her strange and unusual behavior.  Looking forward to additional chapters to see where the story will lead. About the alternate ending would like to have it available to read.  But I'm truly hoping for a very happily ever after ending.

 
From The Ashes by RowanMoon Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 149]
Summary:

Lady with brown hair and long dress, head thrown back. Surrounded by fire

 

 

~Sequel to supernatural AU Broken Doll.~  

MUST READ BROKEN DOLL IN ORDER FOR SEQUEL'S MYTHOLOGY  TO BE UNDERSTOOD

 

Bella rises from the ashes of battle against The Volturi in The Great War as the Three that become One; Powerful witch of the Striga line, a blood descendant of Taha Aki the great Pricolici Shifter, and now, newborn vampire with Edward's venom coursing through her veins.

As our heroine celebrates her family's victory and her marriage to her imprinted mate, an unexpected guest shows up at the wedding who is bent on revenge and making Bella suffer in the worst way imaginable.  

Join Bella as she races against time across continents to save a loved one and fulfill a destiny that she was never prepared for. 

 

 

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: None
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: Yes Word count: 90330
[Report This] Published: June 08, 2010 Updated: September 03, 2014


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Since the change, Bella is about her Edward.  Can't really blame her I think I would be of the same mine too.  He's incredibly delicious to be alone.



Author's Response:

Hey Carol!  Bella is all about Edward - but pretty soon I will have some action thrown their way so it is best that they enjoy the down time while they have it!  Thanks for reviewing and reading!

xo

RowanMoon

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Definitely getting interesting.  Only two of them left.  Eleazar sold from Sulpicia.  Getting it to Amun.  All to help the Golden Eyed Queen, Bella.  Now Amun has transferred into Ra.  Interesting development.   Lots of strong power will be flying around soon among the three of them.  Going to get very interesting.  Will Eleazar be sent to Bella to make her aware of RA and Sulpicia (The Forsaken) with warning and more information on how to overcome the evilness power.



Author's Response:

Thanks Carol!  I'm turning up the heat and action and quite excited to be doing so.  I've been writing a few hours every morning in an effort to finish this story before spring.  

Eleazar - when I first drafted the story, I wasn't going to feature him very much.  In fact, I'm still on the fence as to how much play he is going to get in the story, but I have a feeling he may just convince me of his usefulness. As a footnote, I also wasn't going to feature Ra beyond chapter 5!  He had other plans, obviously! 

With my renewed fervor in putting the story together I have completely scrapped my original plans, to take it in a completely different and very exciting direction. I have done my homework in egyptian lore and have figured out a way to bastardize it just enough to make it fit with Broken Doll and the twiverse.  LOL!  

I hope you enjoy the rest Carol.  Your reviews, as always are a highlight of my post-posting bliss.  ;)

Mistress Moon

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 04, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Edward and Bella finally have their first day together with the family at Denali.  Assigned the eagle nest room.  Edward cannot wait any longer to be with Bella.  The man is beyond control with his lust.  Doesn't take much to have Bella join him.  Spending romantic time with him in the romantic fantasy 4 poster bed.  I didn't like Irina's reaction to Jake and Leah. I thought it was rude.  Especially since Bella has parts of them, vampires, and witch within her.  So it's like she is insulting Bella as well.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Pays to be single for a century with nothing to do at night but read everything that you can get your hands on. As a vampire whatever you read stays with you forever.  So when Bella tells Edward what happened with the boat on the river.  Edward remembers studying his ancient history myths/legends and together with the clues given by the mythical god on the boat and the legends were able to piece together at least who and how the creature was created and defeated. Stripped into two entities, one good goddess, the other evil.  The forsaken the evil portion that will be the force she will need to destroy.  Not so easy in her mind.  Edward convinced her she's got back up whenever she needs them.  Cullen family, the wolves, all the vampires freed from the Volturi reign, magic of the witches within herself, all supernatural of the time.  Pretty amazing.  I think Bella and Edward will be giving Emmett and Rosalie some competition in the constantly needing to be together department.  Seems to be all both Edward and Bella are thinking about even as they plan on dressing after a night full of lovemaking to go hunting.  Bella teasing him and promising favors while hunting with her husband.  Oh boy more fun for the two of them.

Wonder how much dye beer it would take to knock her out now and what would take her out completely current day?  Got to be something really big to knock out something that nasty and evil.



Author's Response:

Carol!  Thank you so much for yet another fantastic review.  

I'm thinking it would take a lotta liquor to knock out The Eye Of Ra - current day?  Hopefully Bella!  :)  Right now I am 6 pages in for Chapter 10 with a few more to go.  It's coming along really nicely.  It centers around Eleazar!

Until next time!

xo

Kari

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Amun Ra continues telling Eleazar the story of his daughters and what happens between them. Very interesting story of how Sulpicia joins with the Volturi brothers with the captured Djinn (Benji.) While Hathor cried and swam to the island all alone.  Only to find that Sulpicia had arrived to confront her father Amun Ra in an effort to regain the stolen Djinn. Amun Ra gave the bottle back to Eleazar and sent him on his way to Isabella.  More information for Bella to absorb and deal with getting ready to defeat the evil one, Sulpicia.  Also interesting origin of vampires, that they were established not as demons, but as mercy for the evil one's destructive nature.  Might make Edward feel differently about his vampiric roots and understand that Carlisle and his way of life has honored the mercy granted by Hathor on the original vampires.



Author's Response:

Hey Carol!  Thanks so much for the review of the chapter.  I'm really glad you enjoyed the backstories I developed for the creation of the vampires and how it ties in with the legend of the Eye of Ra.  Next chapter we finally get back to Edward and Bella!  Blessings to you dear heart.

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I truly felt for Santiago having to face Sulpicia with with information her army was totally destroyed.  She appears to be an evil witch like Wicked Witch of the East & West from Wizard of Oz where Glinda the witch from the North was a good witch.  Bella is currently in the process of becoming the Golden Eyed Queen.  3 mythical beings in one. (Witch, Shape Shifters, Vampire).  Vegetarian Vampire.  The information that Eleazar was the one who changed Bella's ancestor and that Alec provided Bella the Scriptures.  Sulpicia speaking an ancient forgotten language built up the fire and stepped into it and disappeared.  Like being transported from her chambers to wherever she wanted to be.  Hopefully the couple within the iceberg has been cracked and Bella has completed her transformation.  Also that she is learning how to be a vegetarian vampire.  Sounds like Bella in her new identity is vulnerable until she locates the Source and how to use it.  In order for her to be able to protect herself and her family.  Too bad Sulpicia can't just let well enough alone.  She has the power to create another Guard of power to control vampires.  Her biggest mistake will be attempting to take over the Cullen Clan again.  Maybe they don't realize her existence or the type of mythical creature she is, but Bella is a fast learner when it comes to her powers.  She has great teacher spirits.  She'll be trained upon finding the Source and understanding the power of being Golden Eyed Queen.  Looking forward to further chapters developing Bella's powers and the evil tormentor creature's plan for dominance over the vampires.



Author's Response:

Thanks Carol!  I'm pleased to see you are getting all I'm laying down for the storyline and such.  Thanks for reading and reviewing so thoroughly!

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Don't you hate cryptic messages.  Giving Isabella only limited information.  Making her think on her own as things occur.  It's going to be tough to protect her family from her powers.  At least he gave her something to help when she's around Alice.  So whoever or whatever was on the boat is to blame for the Forsaken.  The evil half of his monster now it falls to Bella to keep it from the Source (Creation).  With little or no information.  What a douche bag?  Giving little to nothing of guidance to proceed.  At least her time has completed of her transformation and he sent her back.  She'll awaken with Mr Gorgeous Edward next to her.  Looking forward to it.



Author's Response:

Bella did get the shaft as far as information goes, but that was more than I expected to give her actually, because I didn't want to reveal too much of plotline itself so the god had to feign "I'm not supposed to interfere or tell you this but..."

I did leave sneaky little clues that give an idea on WHO the god is  - for instance the name of the yacht she was on.  But that is all I'm gonna give ya!!

Thanks for the review Carol.

xo

Mistress Moon

 

 




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