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Summary:

Bella, broken and hurting, has escaped to Phoenix to live with her father and start anew. Forks at one time was her home and safe haven. She lead a simple yet privileged life. She had a best friend and dated the star athlete of Forks High. She thought she was in love, until so many things went wrong. Now she is trying to survive in the aftermath and live a semi-normal life. But she is hiding so many secrets. How long until Bella's past catches up with her? AU/AH

 

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, James, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 31 Completed: Yes Word count: 136606
[Report This] Published: May 11, 2010 Updated: February 04, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Calumny

Charlie's emotions while listening to all the in depth statement of Bella.  No father should have to hear those things regarding their baby girl.  Being a cop himself the story isn't new, but adding the fact it's his daughter makes it even more intense.  Father's have that protective instinct of keeping their baby's safe.  I would imagine some anger at Renee for allowing it to occur as well as not believing Bella from the beginning.  Dealing with Tia's sarcastic remarks regarding her pregnancy being the reason she's charging Jimmy for rape to get back at him.  Talk about adding even more stress and hopelessness for Bella thinking oh no not again, having being ridiculing and denying the truth again.  Leaving to head back to Renee, Charlie remains in the vehicle to get his emotions and thoughts settle and review the new knowledge.  Having Bella enter the home alone only to have Jimmy in the house with no Renee.  Threatening remarks and behavior from him.  He expected that Bella would take him back and need him to survive.  Thank goodness Charlie arrived in time after Bella's refusal of Jimmy.  He was furious and starting to be violent.  Unsure why he wasn't arrested for breaking and entering.  Since Renee wasn't home to let him in, he used a hidden key.  Still he was there and unwanted.  Of course, Renee called him and then left for the store.  Leaving Bella unexpecting him and having her be off guard when facing the evilness and horrid memories he in flicks upon and within her.  I really hope when Renee is home Charlie will ream her a new one.  Jimmy was very upset when Charlie entered thinking Bella was talking with Edward.  The thought of competition for the unattainable Bella instantly rose his anger.  All Bella had to say to comfirm his questions about who Edward was, was I've moved on.  something he can't accept because she left him.  His ego is so huge he can't take that.  He feels his privilege enables him to get whatever he wants.  very glad that he had the sense to leave when Charlie was there.  Would have loved him to enter the house alone after Alice, Jasper, and Edward were there.  It didn't happen, but would love Jimmy to attempt another confrontation with Bella where he encounters the dynamic trio. Really still upset with the treatment of Bella by Renee. Like Bella is being overdramatic.  Looking forward for the next chapter.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Calculation

Sounds like Bella has found some allies in the Masen women.  Nessie being hurt by Jimmy also.  She was lucky he passed out drunk before he could rape her.  But she still has bruises on her face and the excuse was a mugging again.  Can't they get more original.  That's what's going to get him caught with all his lies.  One girlfriend or ex getting mugged while attending a party with him but two girls with similar injuries in similar situations both get mugged very suspicious.  Since all the witnesses Charlie had lined up to testify on Bella's behalf have all backed out.  Jimmy's dad must be applying pressure.  Which means if they can prove it he'll join his son in prison as well for multiple charges of concealing and losing evidence, intimidation of witnesses, perjury, obstruction of justice, etc...  Will be interesting to see.  Thank goodness Bree brought Bella the updates on gossip since she left Forks.  Wouldn't Bree be a good witness as well.  Her warning to Bella not to attend the party to begin with.  what did Bree know would happen there?  Was it a set up and Jimmy's crowd were all aware of it?  Looking forward to the next chapter for additional answers.



Author's Response:

Thanks for all your thoughts! As for Bree she didn't know of any specifics, but Jimmy had been trash talking Bella, and Bree as a friend didn't want Bella to put herself in any situation where he could act on his words. But you are right, Bree could be a good character witness. Thanks for R&R!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Culpability

Vanessa finally after seeing the actual pictures of Bella after her attack and rape decided to file charges.  Jimmy threatening things that he probably couldn't even cause to happen.  Threatening Nessie with trouble for her father and that she and her siblings would be taken from her family.  The fact that charges against Jimmy were filed in Forks and Port Angeles will prove pattern.  Jimmy's father is mayor of Forks, but not Port Angeles.  He can't threaten people to lose evidence or scare witnesses to silence.  Charlie told them that he had a witness come forward who saw Bella before and after the attack.  Also who took Bella to the hospital disproving the mugging claim.  Also the nurse who did the rape kit testimony that Bella was raped based on external and internal damage.  Evidence disappeared after evidence gathered.  Things looked good for Bella against Jimmy.  Bella and Edward decided to go for a walk since it has stopped raining.  They wanted to spend some alone time together.  Only jerk face showed up in his sports car and starts to threaten Edward. Edward standing up to Jimmy accusing him of the things he did to Bella.  Also that he would be getting what he truly deserved.  Jimmy's anger caused him to attack.  Edward and Bella both expected the strike against Edward, but his punch was aimed at Bella.  Hopefully the 911 call about being threatened by Jimmy and the call to Charlie will enable the police to arrive before too much pain and damage can occur.  Charlie will be uncontrollable if Jimmy strikes at Bella again.  Needless to say what Edward, Jasper, and especially Alice will do to Jimmy for his actions.  The young demon will be laid out for a good long time.  His actions of today will solidify Bella's accusations against Jimmy.  The boy is violent, possessive, controlling, arrogant, and cruel.  Looking forward to the future chapters.



Author's Response:

I love your reviews. When I need a recap for my chapters I always come back and read your reviews! ;) Thanks so much! I really really appreciate it!! xoxo

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 22, 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Culmination

Hard to believe Jimmy got away after punching Bella.  Dropping on the ground and hit her head.  Who does he think he is?  Edward made sure Jimmy came no where near her again.  Edward freaked when Bella was unconscious.  Afraid he was going to lose her.  Jimmy the coward running away with the sirens.  What a jerk.  Bella freaking out when the doctor touched her.  Edward yelling at Renee, the doctor while Charlie yelled at the nurses.  Great timing for the Forks finest PD to ask for a statement.  Sounded like Pete finally believed her, but not Tia.  Edward must have been exhausted getting up every 2 hours to wake Bella.  Then having banging on the front door.  At first I thought it would be Jimmy banging on the door.  Surprised it was Carlisle and Esme.  Both so upset didn't notice that both Bella and Edward's face were bruised.  Carlisle and Esme didn't get much sleep before it was Jimmy throwing beer bottles against the door.  Underage drinking Jimmy a crime.  But yelling for Bella.  Charlie called the police and was told to keep him there.  Bella is very strong to stand up to him.  Edward determined she wouldn't be hurt again.  police finally showed up and Pete read him his rights and when he ran Tia tackled him.  Is she finally coming on board that Jimmy is the villain in this melodrama.  Being past due date is horrid.  The feeling of the baby never coming at all. Being pregnant for the rest of your life.  I can feel for Bella. Edward panicked, but she knocked him out of it.  He stayed with Bella throughout the delivery.  A beautiful baby girl named Cara.  Unusual but very pretty.  Hoping in the epilogue we learn Jimmy's punishment or results of the trial among other things.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like tha name! I always love hearing your thoughts on all that happens! Thanks for reading and reviewing! xoxo

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Conclusions

Wonderful ending for Bella and Edward.  Edward treats Cara like his own.  Jimmy is imprisoned for rape/assault.  He didn't get enough time in my opinion for his crimes.  Especially since he had beat other girls.  Bella finally able to let herself hug men she is close to like her dad, Emmett, and Jasper.  Cara has the group all wrapped around her little finger.  They all love her.  Edward taking Bella on a special date.  Takes her back to Sedona where their first date started and never finished.  At sunset Edward proposed to Bella.  She accepted.  They will be a family.  After all the anguish and pain Bella endured and overcame she deserved to have a happily ever after.  One thing I was shocked about was that Renee showed up at the trial.  Even though she never contacted or talked with Bella after that.  Even in regards to her granddaughter's birth.  Charlie had and was always the parent who loved Bella and now his granddaughter Cara. 



Author's Response:

thanks so much!! ;) xoxo

 
Summary:

Bella Swan receives an invitation to the exclusive Evermore Experience, an in-depth immersion summer program where she plans to fully explore 19th century England, but fate has other plans for her once she arrives.

 

Evermore Experience


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Completed: Yes Word count: 153999
[Report This] Published: May 13, 2010 Updated: August 12, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9: Resurrection

The confrontation between Lord Masen and James/Laurent on their walk back to the manor.  Upon entering the manor Victoria is holding Becca and threatening to kill her.  All James wants is Bella because she is so delicious.  Masen said no way.  Silently the rest of the Cullen family is in the manor.  James, Laurent, and Victoria are out numbered. Becca is saved by having Victoria torn apart.  She is burned in the fireplace.  Laurent mentioned to James that they were out numbered by the Cullens.  They escaped out the window. Alice left to go to Bella.  Alice planting seeds for marriage.  Bella thinking of both Edward and Lord Masen.  She is remembering the tingling when both men touched her.  Mentally running down pros and cons for each man.  Together they would be the perfect man.  Looks, personality, etc...  Of that's right they are the same person.  Only Bella doesn't know it.  Alice had mentioned she should leave Bella so she could spend the rest of her picnic with her fiance.  Bella said she didn't have one.  Masen arrived at that point and mentioned it would have been wrong to accept his invitation if Bella had a fiance.  Masen walked with Bella through the rose gardens.  Bella was expressing her thoughts and feelings of confusion and not belonging.  Masen assured her that she does belong.  Masen mentioned he had a proposal.  Bella jokingly mentioned marriage. Masen asked the question Would you marry me? Just out of curiousity. Becca overheard the conversation and dropped the afternoon tea.  Bella encouraged Masen to catch Becca before she mentioned the proposal to the entire staff.  Masen said and why would I do that.  Like he wants the staff to think Bella and himself are engaged.  The idea doesn't bother him in the least.  Since his actions are courting Bella.  Paying off her aunt's debts, invitation for a picnic at his estate, walking through beautiful gardens together.  He likes her finds her beautiful and intelligent.  Wants to know her better.  Some day Bella will realize the tingling feeling she feels when Masen and Edward touch her is the same sensation.  Eventually she'll know that Masen and Edward are the same.



Author's Response:

I should have you write my summaries!  =)

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10: Rumors and relations

Lord Masen is still playing cat and mouse with Bella.  He won't answer if the proposal was legitmate or not.  He won't tell Becca that it wasn't a proposal just a discussion.  So the staff think the Lord is engaged to Bella.  Servants talk to each other and the vendors they encounter with purchasing items to complete their jobs for the Lord.  Before you know it, the whole town would have heard of their engagement.  Will made Edward realize Bella is his singer and he needs to make a decision. Do you want Bella in your life? Which persona Lord Masen or Edward Cullen?  He needs to make a choice as to who will be romancing Bella.  Even Lord Masen said being the two entities with opposite emotions is getting hard for him.  The stress of always remaining in strict character form for whichever character he is portraying.  Bella comes right out and asks did he propose.  Before he could answer L showed up and led Bella away to the stables.  No answer.  L was showing Bella the horses and talking a mile a minute.  Finally Will took L to the opposite side of the stables after he caused the storm to arrive.  Will can control the weather what a great enhancement he received upon becoming a vampire.  L is frightened of storms so Will does his best to distract her.  Lord Masen and Bella talk more about Lord Masen rectifying the misunderstanding about their engagement.  He refused.  They argued and Bella ran off into the rain towards the house.  Will and L approached and Will reminded him of the choice.  Lord Masen started to run towards the house.  Will he remain Lord Masen or will he change into Edward Cullen to approach Bella inside the manor house?  Next chapter should give the answers.  Can't wait until it is released.



Author's Response:

Cat and mouse may not be completely accurate...more like, he can't make up his mind if he wants to attract or repulse her.  Frankly, it's giving Bella a headache!  He's made a decision & who meets Bella in the manor house will answer that...sort of.  He's still socially stunted, imho.  But then, so is L.  Thanks for the review!  I hope to have the next chapter ready end of this week, early next week.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22: A revelation comes

Bella is so stubborn.  Insisted on knowing what was going on.  Didn't put up with any of Edward's evasive tactics.  Carlisle realized Edward has met his match in determination.  Bella was taken to Will and L's cottage.  Her heart went out to Will in his grief over the loss of L.  She didn't understand why L was taken.  She did notice a major difference in Will.  He advised her once you meet your soul mate don't waste time because you don't know how much time you will have together.  Alice recommended Edward take her back to the manor house and talk with her.  Bella remembered a college course about "Cold Ones."  Based on her observations Edward fits into that catagory.  She told him he was a vampire after she admired his sparkling in the sun with prisms shining from his face.  Her emotions and stress has given her a headache.  Edward tucked her into bed to rest to alleviate it.  Alice was pleased it was spoken about with Bella.  Her visions are showing 1) Bella will stay and join their family 2) Once James and Bree are dealt with Bella will leave with the rest of the humans.  It all depends on too many outside factors that are unknown at this time.  Alice told Edward not to worry until L is rescued and James/Bree duo are taken care of permanently.  I think it's a trap to lure the vampires away so James can make a move on Bella to get even with Edward for Victoria's death.  But I'll wait and see.  Looking forward to additional chapters  of what happens next.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review!  I have completed my Autism 1 shot & am now working on the next chapter.  Hopefully, it won't be long!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 28, 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19: A window opens

Looked like Edward and Bella just couldn't get a break to be alone and steal a kiss.  Just as Edward was about to give her a kiss Bella's aunt showed up.  Quite liberally speaking about blocking.  Apologized for interrupting.  Good thing Edward stopped L before she said his full name (Masen).  wouldn't do him any good for Bella to know he is both a Cullen and a Masen.  Edward received permission to court Bella.  L left to give them some privacy and Alice stopped them from kissing.  She and Bella are roommates in Masen Manor.  Bella will be the nanny and teacher of Alec and Jane.  Sounds more like the job of a governess.  Bella and Alice are excited by the idea.  Rebecca approached Edward about dinner.  He said he was waiting for his dinner companion.  Rebecca suggested private dinner in music room.  Edward thought it was a great idea.  Table set with candles and food.  Just as Edward is sensually removing a glove from Bella's arm so she could eat someone rattled the door knob.  Great another interruption for them.  This time the couple wanted to come in and defile Edward's piano.  When they left due to the door being locked Edward explained about the piano comments.  Whispering them into Bella's ear advising they wanted to have sexual encounter with the woman prone of his piano.  Bella unknown to her whispered that it sounded like a good idea.  Bela is so lost in Edward.  No filter on what she is thinking.  Going downstars for dancing.  Sounds great.  Edward making moves on Bella.  Confusing due to the physical sensations she is experiencing with him.  Edward is fascinated by everything Bella.Bella is very interested in Edward.  Both have similar ideas and wants.  Looking forward to more of Edward and Bella time while he courts her.



Author's Response:

All of which sets up the next chapter....and Bella dancing.  Watch your toes!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13: Fallout

Bella still working at the Newtons' tutoring Alec and Jane.  She arrived and Mrs Stanley was quite forward I felt.  Asking Bella all those questions about being engaged to Lord Masen.  If she was going to marry him Stanley's behavior towards her was atrocious. Mrs Newton telling the children that Bella wouldn't be back and making them stay in the schoolroom all morning.  Still claiming the children are horrible.  I don't think so not with Bella.  Mrs Newton's accusations in front of the children was just horrid and nasty.  Calling her a trollop with a child with Lord Masen.  Rumors ran rampart throughout the town.  But the worst was Mike getting too friendly with her.  Putting his hands on her thigh and propositioning her physically as well as manipulalting her to get Lord Masen interested in his business dealings.  Thank goodness for Alice's arrival.  Gave a distraction for Bella to escape.  Alice kidnapping her to select material for a dress for Saturday's party for Lord Masen.  Afterwards Alice took Bella to her home for measurements.How will Newton feel with her leaving 2 hours earlier.  Edward showed up at the house annoyed with Alice.  when Bella confided to Alice about Mike's advances Edward didn't like it.  If I were Mike  I wouldn't put a move on Bella she has 2 powerful suitors neither wanting someone defiling her.  Sure Mike will be told by either Edward or Lord Masen to cease or pay consequences.  Looking forward to the next chapter.  Enjoy your family and have a Happy Thanksgiving Holiday with them.



Author's Response:

Apple didn't fall far from the tree with Mrs. Newton, did it?  Unfortunately, there are a lot of people like the Newton/Stanley clan.  Hope to have the next chapter to my validation beta by the end of today (Wednesday).  And thank you for the well wishes!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 26, 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23: Crashing walls

L is being held in a rock hut cold and damp.  Bree and James really don't care what happens to her do they?  I'm surprised Alice hasn't had a vision of L in her rock cage.  James wants L alive because he is only going to fight one vampire.  Bella and Edward discuss Edward being vampire as well as his entire family.  Questions asked and answered regarding being a vampire and himself.  They both admitted to being virgins and will experience their first time together.  The enchantment around Evermore is slipping and Bella has realized that she isn't of this world.  It's all fake.  Edward isn't real he's part of the mystery around Evermore.  She thinks what Edward told her wasn't true it was all staged for the event.  Edward trying to tell Bella it is all true.  Bella gets up and runs into the library (a favorite place for Bella -- books, books, and more books.) Only to have a surprise person walk into the library.  Edward had better move a little faster to save his Bella before James has his way with her in probably all ways.  Looking forward to the next chapter with the confrontation between Edward and James.  Should be very interesting and entertaining.  Kick his bum Edward.  Prove your love to Bella whether it's 1827 or 2010.  Your feelings towards her are the same.  She feels Edward hoodwinked her into losing her virginity as another notch on his belt.  Bella must not believe Edward's statement of being a virgin also.



Author's Response:

No, James and Bree have no concern for L.  And do remember, with the sunshine, the Cullen's cannot easily get to L during daylight hours.  During the dark, James and Bree move around (as indicated by the 2 locations L had already been in).  As for Bella, she doesn't necessarily feel Edward lied about his status but rather that he lied about his feelings for her.  And just who is in the library is covered in the very beginning of the next chapter (which I hope to have up around April 8th)

 

Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 31: And on the third day

As always Bella and Edward dance to their own drummer.  Never want to be told what is appropriate time and place for them.  They want to pick place, time, and approach to make their dreams come true.  Waiting the three days and refusing to leave to hunt.  Nice gift from L and Will all wrapped up for Edward including a key and note.  With a nice thought that as soon as he ate lunch only had little while before Bella would be awake from her transformation.  Bella's control as a newborn is still beyond belief, it has to be because she was turned willingly and with full knowledge of what she was to become.  Thus keeping more of her humanity to the forefront than normal victim who are just attacked out of the blue with no thoughts and preparations.  Getting married to Edward to start their forever and ever.  Happily ever after are always my favorite endings to every story.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 10, 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 24: Winds of change

Divide and conquer is L's tactic towards her jailer Bree.  How Bree could think that a mated vampire will take another vampire is impossible?  James just lies to her right and left.  L saved Mrs Newton's life by rushing her out of the room quickly.  L knows that Alice has forseen where she was going to be located in order to place a change of clothing for her there.  So she knows the Cullens and friends will be coming for her soon.  But she feels if she can cause dissension in the ranks between Bree and James it will be easier for the Cullens to rescue her with the least lost of family.  Maggie being the vampire in the library yes I thought it was James.  I was glad it was Maggie to be the lie detector between Bella and Edward.  Bella thinking that the magic in Evermore would effect her emotional response as well as her memories.  When it was told to her that her personality and emotional are who she is in both realities.  Falling in love was strictly her emotions after meeting Edward.  Edward professed his love for her.  Bella finally believed Edward's words.  Edward was taking her to bed because it had been a long day for Bella.  Looking forward to the rescue of L and Bella and Edward reconciliation.



Author's Response:

James hasn't been the best creator/maker--he's intentionally not explained how things are in an attempt to control Bree.  Silly vampire.  I am so glad you enjoyed the chapter!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21: Here comes the sun

Have to love an excited and squealing Alice.  so happy Bella will be her sister.  Bella confused as to why she believes that.  The simple answer is that Edward requested to court her.  Strong interest in making the serious commitment to marriage.  Bella wanting to go to her aunt's shop to replace some of the things lost in the fire of their home.  Meeting at the door was quite a coincidence.  Nice picnic lunch and conversation with L.  I can understand why L was blushing over the red book.  Even more when Bella starting reading the book with Edward reading it out loud behind her.  Oh Oh.  Both are on the same page of course Bella is trying to not show it.  Wonderful experience in the foliage cave by the brook.  Stunning in my mind and so romantic.  Hearing the screaming/yelling broke their bliss.  I had a bad feeling just like L when Will left her alone to hunt. I knew something was going to happen to L.  I thought with the screaming and silence they had attacked her.  But Carlisle thoughts told us Will was yelling in agony over the loss of L.  Hoping the next chapter will be up soon.  Suspense over what happened to L and the Cullen clan retailiation will be.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  You are very right...and we'll look into what's going on with L in the next chapter (as well as 'the talk' between B&E)  Hope you enjoy!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8: De sooner de better

Bella upset over Edward's behavior.  The reason might just be her attraction towards him is more than she voluntarily will allow herself to recognize and take to heart.  Since I believe Lord Masen is Edward in his romantic and kindness the attraction and electricity at his touch is what she'd feel if Edward would touch her and not act like a complete jerk.  Another vampire arrived to woo "L".  William Lawrence.  Quite a gentleman and very romantic with the words of flowers.  Very much into L.  The two adults agreed to chaperon Bella with her picnic with Lord Masen.  By chance she had a beautiful blue silk dress in her armoire with matching flats.  The coach picked them up on schedule.  The housekeeper Becca directed them to the yard where the luncheon would occur.  Under a huge tent.  The table set to the nines.  Totally gorgeous and full of food.  since the only two eating would be Bella and L.  Just as they were about to have the first course, two nomadic vampires arrived wanting to talk with Lord Masen.  It was only when James threw the hairpiece Lord Masen's housekeeper was wearing that he got up and spoke with the two men.  Laurent and James.  Those rogue vampires had drained that poor girl, Becca.  Evil demons.  Lord Masen had thrown the headpiece to Will who showed it to L.  Danger will be thrown into the mix of the experience for Bella.  She smells too delicious to be completely safe.  The Cullens will have to be on guard 24/7 over Bella.  I still so sad for Becca.  An innocent just getting college credit for her summer experience.  To just die by the hands and teeth of a vampire.



Author's Response:

Just remember....I rarely do what is expected.  That's your hint for the beginning of the next chapter.  What happened to Becca will more than likely be the teaser on the thread (probably appearing toward the end of the week).  Thanks for your review!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6: What the L?

Love the concept.  Bella living in the early 19th Century. Living the life of some of her favorite authors.  Looks like Bella's mind hasn't taken completely to the spell by L.  Bella still remembers things from the 21st Century.  Being a literature major reading, writing, and words are her life.  Edward Cullen I suspect is the Lord Masen.  The electrical current when she met Edward Cullen.  Lord Masen graciously greeting her at the Newtons.  I have to say Mike and Jessica Newton are quite a pair of loony tunes.  The children appear to be adorable and starving for knowledge and attention.  I don't understand why Jessica was saying the children were acting wild.  They were in the school room just reading books.  How is that noisy and running around? The late meeting in the inn with L and Bella insisting on going also.  L learning that her debts had been amassed by Edward's employer.  L not understanding why.  Payment arrangements.  Mr Jenks informed L that her debts had been paid.  She is free and clear from debt.  Then later came the punchline Lord Masen wanted a formal introduction to Bella Swan.  She was introduced at the Newtons' where he was very nice to Bella.  The man in the leather mask kissing her hand softly.  Bella helped a drunk Jessica to bed.  She went downstairs to inform Michael of his wife whereabouts.  She overheard Michael and a Frenchman talking about L's property was only property that still needed to be bought for the whole block.  Michael was going to use her debts to take her property as payment.  Leaving L no place to live.  Lord Masen acquired the debts to prevent Michael and I think Laurent's plans to fail.  Thus thwarting the man behind the block project.  Whoever Michael and Laurent work for at this time.  I did enjoy when L smelled the air and knew Edward was inside the house.  Frustrated him he left by the window.  Very funny.  Edward is interested in Bella so L accusations about running messages from Lord Masen was to spend more time with Bella.  Of course, his crabby attitude better change or Bella won't want to be with him.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  I'm glad you're enjoying my little story.  Jessica's reaction to the kids is partially her intoxicated state, partially her own quirks.  Poor kids, indeed!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7: Deliver de-letter

Bella still teaching Alec and Jane.  Alice planned on meeting Bella after her tutoring the children for tea at Esme's house.  Bella was surprised by the invitation and that her aunt was aware of it.  Edward rode down the street and dismounted very close to her.  She was startled and started to fall.  Edward caught her by her arms.  Appeared he didn't want to let her go.  A part of Bella didn't want him to let go.  The electrical current between them flowing still.  Alice placed an invitation to tea to Edward as a demand rather than a request.  He told Alice he needed to see Bella alone also.  They arrived and Alice is teasing Bella about liking her brother Edward.  Esme noticed Bella's reaction.  Yes Bella is interested in Edward.  She is comfortable with Lord Masen as well.  Alice and Esme are happy Bella has feelings for Edward.  They are encouraging her subtly.  When Edward joined them in the parlor for tea, his mother and sister stepped out of the room for him to relay his message.  He had two messages from Lord Masen.  One was an invitation written in his hand regaarding dinner and a ball.  The other we'll have to wait for the next chapter.  Bella impressed Lord Masen from the first time he saw her.   Masen is interested in Bella very much.  Paid in full Bella's aunt's debts with only a stipulation that Bella would be introduced to him properly.  Looking forward to the next chapter for the second message from Lord Masen.  I can't blame Bella for getting irritated with Edward.  He is going from cold to hot, then hot to cold.  Bella never knows what his mood will be next.  He is rather direct and rude in his statements towards Bella. 



Author's Response:

You got it! 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11: Two of a kind

Edward playing the piano has enticed Bella's attention.  The start over introduction where Edward was charming and a gentleman.  Listening to Bella's concerns over the NOT engagement.  Edward going to correct the situation.  Of course, he's both people.  He thinks of her all the time.  Edward and Bella enjoyed their conversation and Edward wants to have it occur again.  Edward going to be calling for Bella at L's house.  Interesting.  Looking forward to future chapters.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Chapter 12 has already gone to my validation beta & will be up on FF tomorrow if you're impatient!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12: Can we talk? : L's story

Just hearing L's story it's so sad.  How her aunt exploited her because she was a hybrid vampire.  Now that she has found love with Will she's even more adorable.  Bella was confused on her way home from the manor.  Edward was so sweet.  While Lord Masen had romantic letter writing and words, he also could be arrogant.  While she realized Edward could be sensitive and caring while at the same could be arrogant and insulting also.  Confusion of the heart.  Edward's music playing showed his inner passion of life.  When Bella and L returned home, Bella had a beautiful nightgown in her wardrobe.  Very ornate compared to what she remembered when she left earlier in the day.  L brought her up hot tea and a hot water bottle for her cramps.  Not fun to have calendar difficulties especially when the men (or the one man) courting you is a vampire.  Definitely a conflict of interest and unwanted distraction to risk your life.  L spoke with Alice, Will, Emmett, and Edward.  Bella is actually a distant neice of hers from her aunt Mary Frances (the name of my godmother) too bad she isn't as kind and loving as my godmother.  Exploiting her neice at county fairs as a freak show.  Making her feel less than a normal woman.  I can truly understand why her son left her and why she isn't buried anywhere for anyone to pay their respects towards her.  She didn't deserve the respect from anyone since she didn't respect others.  Emmett was excited that Bella was actually related to him.  The game for this time period was due to L wanting to meet her neice.  Alice's visions of Bella and Edward just cemented that Edward would have to be there.  Feelings are deep seated between them now.  Bella is confused which man she is more attracted towards.  L and Edward take a walk away from the house while the others go hunt.  She relays her story and wants to know which gentleman will court her neice.  He's not sure.  She'll find out that he's both, definitely will feel betrayed, but in the end will realize she has the best of both of them.  It's like being with two suitors at the same time.  Looking forward to the future chapters as the courting continues between the entities of the same man.  Talk about confusing to remember who he is at what contact with Bella.  Keeping the entities separated and distinct.  Enjoying the romance and love affair of Will and L, it's great that she has finally found love after all these years and found her mate as well.



Author's Response:

She's had a rough life, that's for sure.  But now she has the Cullens & Will, so she's going to be okay.  As for Bella...she's got a lot of courting coming to her.  Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14: Romance in the air

Looks like someone talked to the Newtons and Mrs Stanley regarding their treatment of Bella.  Avoiding her completely or running in the opposite direction to get away from her.  Arriving home to see Edward's horse at their front door.  Having afternoon tea to court Bella.  The women drinking tea while the men drinking blood.  Poor Bella faints on the spot.  No one knows what's going on until Alice calls to tell them she faints at blood.  Edward comforting her while laying on the floor.  As he was leaving he kissed her.  Yeah what a first kiss.  Reading Lord Masen's letter has Bella in turmoil.  She makes a pro/con chart for each man.  She's being courted by two men.  Both have good/bad qualities.  Interesting considering they are both the same person.  Of course, she doesn't know it.  Makes it very funny.  Edward being teased by Alice regarding his lame proposal as Lord Masen she's hoping for something better from Edward.  Hilarious.  Now Will has proposed to L and she has accepted.  The wedding if for that evening.  Leaving Bella alone in the house with Edward watching over her against James and his troop.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  The next chapter has a bit of the wedding, a bit of romance, and a bit of....trouble.  Hope you'll enjoy it!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15: Dreams and nightmares, pt.1

I like that fact that "L" has a mind of her own.  She won't be pushed around by Alice in her constant party planning phase.  She made it clear she was only marrying Will once and not over and over again like the rest of the Cullens.  Very determined that since only doing it once wanted Bella to attend the ceremony.  Emmett was sent to get her.  Very small family only wedding.  Bella returned home sleeping while Edward watched.  Bella dreaming about him.  Looks like her shield was lifted there for a bit.  Edward caught glimpse of having a picnic.  Appeared her dream went from lunch on a blanket to more romantic activities.  Edward read over her list of pro and cons for both Lord Masen and Edward Cullen.  Enabled Edward to get a better view of her inner thoughts regarding the two roles he is playing.  Looking forward to the second half of this chapter.  Will he take to heart her list and enhance one persona's pros list and enact more con behavior in the other persona?  Can't wait to read it.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Yes, L had enough of being told how to do and while she may relive the honeymoon, she doesn't plan to get married over and over.  Not her style.  Hope to get the next part to my v-beta Monday sometime.  =)

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16: Dreams and nightmares, pt.2

Lots of action and intrigue in this chapter.  Mrs Stanley and Mr Newton planting evidence of a crime done by Bella to force them to sell the house.  If you ask me I think Mrs. Stanley got what she deserved trying to accuse Bella of stealing.  what will Mr Newton do now?  With the fire everything will be burnt.  The gold will be there, but what impact for Bella now.  I'm sure Edward would do a serious smackdown on him for setting Bella up.  But then again they wanted the property so the fire could have been one of James's people.  Knowing that L would not sell the house under any circumstances especially with her husband Will moving in with them.  So does Bree work for James Hunter?  Or was she just a nomad vampire who arrived on the scene?  But her question to Mrs Stanley regarding friend of Bella or L.  Wonder if Bree was sent to hurt Bella?  It wouldn't be smart to attempt to hurt Bella, Edward would be all over Bree and whoever requested her to arrive.  Emmett arriving to at least save some of Bella's possessions.  Also her hope chest started by L. Bella testy about the stationery being paid for by Lord Masen.  Bella's pride of people helping her and her refusal of charity.  Edward took the bag anyway.  Real tragedy about the house.  If Mike or James was behind the house being burnt for their property scheme heads will roll.  Staying with Alice was probably a good idea since the cottage with newlyweds wouldn't be something I would like either.  Too much noise all the times.  Alice was cute wanting all the dirt about what was going on between her brother and Bella.  Kinda funny that everything Bella was whispering Edward could hear her downstairs.  Swoon worthy I am sure swelled Edward's head immensely.  Make him more cocky as if he's not cocky enough now.  Looking forward to the ball.  I'll bet Bella will be the prettiest to Lord Masen/Edward there.  Wonder if James will kidnap her for his own means.  The plot does thicken.



Author's Response:

Mr. Newton will continue to try to get L's property but that will be a while.  More on Bree later in the story, too.  First, we have a ball to attend to and some fluff time.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17: Get me to the ball on time

I have to say I enjoyed Bella's dream.  Too bad it was a dream.  Was looking forward to more.  Alice figured the type of dream by Bella's sounds.  Alice got her ready for the ball.  Carriage ride over to Lord Masen's Mansion.  Teasing from Alice towards Bella.  Esme giving Bella advice about gathering information/knowledge to determine her final decision.  Looking forward to the ball with both men (Lord Masen/Edward) pursuing Bella.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I had hoped to write more but it just didn't happen.  "More" will happen.  It just takes a bit of time.  =)

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Introduction

If the story isn't updated until the first of the year.  Have a wonderful holiday season for you and your family.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  May the new year bring you and yours much peace and joy!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18: When a door closes

Bella's decision of which gentleman she wants to be with was causing her some stress.  Concerned about approaching Lord Masen to tell him she doesn't want to be courted by him.  Her heart belongs to another (Edward.)  Funny since Lord Masen and Edward are the same person.  At the ball Lord Masen was being performed by another.  Taking the children away from Mike Newton was a smart idea.  Since the only attention Alec and Jane receive as positive is through Bella.  Bella definitely was angry with Lord Masen assuming she would move into his home and continue to take care of the children as well as tutor them.  Bella would have liked to have been consulted as to her preferences regarding this matter.  Being called into a locked study with Edward, Mike Newton, Lord Masen and her escort her Uncle Will.  Edward escorting Bella to dinner leaving all the decisions made between Lord Masen and Will.  Bella advised Lord Masen her dance card was filled very subtle way to tell Lord Masen she wasn't interested in dancing, being in his company, etc...  Looking forward for part 2 of the ball.  Also what reaction Mike Newton will have in regards to Bella.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm aiming at about 10 days for the next update.  Part of Mike's reaction will be there (I think).

 




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