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Real name: Carol Travers
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A mosaic freely drawn from book and movie, wanders into AU as the story unfolds ... ....


Showing is stronger than telling.  Forks was just like I remember it.  I felt the short little hairs on the back of my neck stand straight on end.  Cut your losses before they can become catastrophic.   “It’s not fair,” I say aloud.   The night wind swirls, lifting the fine surface powder from the tops of the snowdrifts, coating us in diamond dust.  


Then weave for us a garment of brightness


Moving to Forks, spending the last eighteen months of her childhood with a father she barely knew ... it seemed like a good idea at the time.




A/N about the rating: The narrative in this story ranges between PG-13 (most of it) and R (occasional language and occasional non-graphic reference to mature themes). An isolated technicality in a late chapter has necessitated changing the rating from R to NC-17, however R is a much better measure of the farthest outer limit of what the reader will encounter in this tale.




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delicious dreamer's lovely banner for garment of brightness

I never in my wildest dreams thought that something I wrote would inspire someone to make something like this.   I am so touched.  THANK YOU DD!

Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: No Word count: 59050
[Report This] Published: November 28, 2009 Updated: February 13, 2011

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Secrets and Lies

Bella's confusion and embarrassment causing her to hide underneath the covers.  Edward blocking his nose and mouth to prevent him from attacking Bella.  In his mind he wants to talk with her  and wants to learn all about her.  Her secrets, past experiences, hopes and dreams.  He knows he is still tempted with the siren call of her blood, but his logical mind wants more from her.  He wants to know her.  He already has deep feelings and he knows Bella has no intention of telling anyone he pushed the van away or that he had superhuman speed to reach her in time.  Bella just needs to know for her own peace of mind.  Rosalie is freaking of course.  Selfish to the core only thinking of herself.  Killing another human in her mind means nothing she justifies by saying she is saving the family.  But by killing Bella she will completely divide the family.  Edward wants Bella in his life and so does Alice.  As usual Jasper will fall into Alice's side if push comes to shove.  Even Carlisle has no desire for Bella to be eliminated.  Neither Rose or Carlisle thought of what would have happened if Bella had been squashed by the van and the actual scent of her blood flowing into the pavement.  The reaction of Edward along with Jasper who hasn't been a vegetarian as long as the others.  Edward is protecting Bella.  Even if the vote at home reflects that Bella's life needs to be taken to save the family from discovery, I truly believe Edward will be camped in her room.  He will fight whoever has the nerve to try and hurt her.  Edward just hasn't realized that he has the power to make the decision of whether Bella is more important to him as a person rather than as a meal.  It's just like the mountain sheep he didn't hunt.  He made the choice.  Based on his thoughts and his arguments to Rose and Carlisle, Edward has made his decision.  He wants Bella for himself.  Edward said it himself "She's MINE!!!!"  His interest is more than just a quick snack, but someone he wants to get to know personally.  Rose is such a hotheaded witch.

Author's Response:

Very good point about what would have happened if Bella's blood had actually been spilled in that parking lot. None of them has thought of this yet, each for his/her own reasons/preoccupations/limitations. I also really like your point about the parallel between the mountain sheep and Bella, and that in each case, he has a CHOICE. Nice! I wonder when all the blind spots will be swept away, and he will finally see what life has brought him in Bella ... ?

As always, thanks so much for your lovely review!

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Caliban

Edward is close to losing it.  His family is concerned about exposure.  Bella talks in her sleep, but she isn't staying at anyone's home.  Charlie rarely walks into her room while she's sleeping.  Bella promised not to tell anyone.  Carlisle has decided to wait with the decision of Bella.  His brothers are both upset with him because of physical threats and emotions.  He is still concerned and obsessed about Bella.  He needs her near for his peace.  He can't be far from her for too long. His need for her is growing stronger.  Bella is safe from his family this night, but he's worried about himself all the time.  I truly believe he's stronger than he gives himself credit for when it concerns Bella.  She is the only thing he really thinks about all the time.  He can't think of anyone or anything hurting her.  Protective to the point of distraction.  Protect her from illness, physical violence, and even ill thoughts.  Edward's anger is quick to flare when someone insults "HIS" Bella.

Author's Response:

Poor Edward, he really does feel very protective of Bella ... and he doesn't even really realize it yet, still sees himself as a monster. I agree that he needs her to show him his true self. But he has to dare to get close enough first ... When, oh when?

Such a lovely review you write, as always. Thank you!

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Quasimodo

Charlie's sorrow about his little girl being hurt.  But his imagining the possibilities of how she could really look based on his experiences as a police officer.  Imagining his daughter bloody and broken like so many other parents' children he had been the first on the scene of an accident.  The depth of love he has for Bella is profound.  He needs to be there with her to protect her in anyway he can at this point.  Probably still has guilt for being away helping another force instead of looking after his little girl.  Edward reading his thoughts seeing Charlie's memories of the stages of his little girl.  Once Charlie is gone, Edward invades the Swan home to learn more about the woman he is obsessed with.  Seeing pictures of her growing up from little girl to now.  Once upon reaching Bella's room he looks at everything in her room.  Consuming her scent through his senses through her possessions.  Holding her pillow like it was her.  Smelling the scent as if he was cradled into Bella's neck.  The draw of her scent the craving for her blood, but above that his physical desire for her.  Wrapping himself into her quilt and rolling on the bed absorbing all of Bella into himself.  Once his desires got out of control, his guilt of stealing her innocent essence in the room, caused him to jump out of her window.  He had to make the room the same as he left it to hide his presence in the room.  Bella will sense him when she comes home.  His fragance will be among all her blankets and pillows.  Edward's desires for the woman are becoming stronger than his desires for her blood.  His body reacts to everything he learns about her, her scent, her things, the knowledge she kept the note he gave her with the medicines, and the deisre to keep her safe, protected, healthy, happy, and innocent.

Author's Response:

Little does Charlie know that in staying overnight with Bella he truly is keeping her safe. Even if Rosalie changes her mind and decides to disobey Carlisle, she can't do anything now, with Charlie in the room ....  

As always, you bring out all the touchstones in the chapter. Thank you so much for this. I love the images that you create in your review.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Grendel

Edward is frustrated with his life and the feelings he has for Bella.  Beating up the rocks along the cliffs of the sea.  Beating for his wants, needs, and desires for the girl whose blood/scent drive his wild.  His family was worried about him.  They want him to return to them.  Each send their thoughts to him to come to them.  His body is full of water and his weight has sent him to the bottom. Jasper sensed him by his torn emotions.  The family create a vampire chain to reach him at the bottom.  Together they pull him back to the surface to rejoin with them.  Edward needs to make a solid decision.  If he wants Bella in his life then he needs to approach her, befriend her, woo her, and love her until she is his.  Otherwise he needs to totally avoid her all together.  Leave and go somewhere far away to stop his tortured mind.  Bella has been hurt by his shortness, but she is touched and confused by his concern and kindness towards her now.

Author's Response:

You've saved the day with this lovely distillation of the chapter. Poor Edward, he is so overwhelmed by feelings that he interprets as depraved, that he hasn't really been able to realize what a treasure Bella could be in his life. What he is feeling actually is all about her soul, but it just smells like blood to him. Thank you SO much for reading and especially for your review!

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Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Ithaka

Carlisle's statements means that they must be united together against any foe, or in this case the outside real world. Stay together as a unit/opinions/family because if you don't it's better to be apart/divided/not family.  Rosalie wants to kill Bella because she knows Edward saved her from the van.  Edward doesn't want to kill her.  His feelings for her are deeping each and every day.  Physically he desires her more.  His scent is all throughout Bella's room and she does notice it.  Mostly within in bed quilt and pillow.  She is loving it.  Buring herself in his scent remembering his holding her in the hospital.  But she has discovered Edward's journal.  Which on some subconscious level Edward left the journal for Bella to see and learn the truth about him.  Actually she was thinking it was a journal from one of his ancestors that he found before becoming part of the CPS.  When she reads it, it might reflect other things.  It will be insightful of how he was when he was a young man in 1917/1918 before his transformation.  Edward telling his family he left his journal at Bella's in his mind he has sealed her doom.  It will go either way, the family as a unit will elect to kill her, leave, or accept Edward's love for Bella and embrace her into their family unit.  We'll just have to wait and see.

Author's Response:

Ah, united against the real world -- it seemed like a good idea at the time, but now I start to wonder ... !

You are so right that Edward's subconscious desire to be known to Bella has now created havoc for them both. We will just have to wait and see. 

Thank you so much for your lovely review and summary. Delicious as always!

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Consequences

Bella hasn't realized that Edward from 1917 is the Edward in her class.  In her mind she's picturing current Edward to the words she is reading.  We all know they are one and the same.  Edward left the journal in her room subconsciously, but maybe on purpose for her to learn about him.  Now in 6 days hasn't been able to find it or retrieve it.  Family quarrel about what to do with Bellal especially since Edward saved her from the van. Family is split with the majority on the side to leave her alive.  Jasper being the only true warrior among them must have thought her death would be the easiest solution since Alice saw her vision.  A vision which has Alice in disagreement with Jasper.  Jasper is hurt Alice would choose a human over him.  After she told him about the vision and her feelings towards Bella, Jasper would never do anything to Bella to hurt his Alice.  His exposed possible shame has him reeling in guilt and painful emotions.. So much he has to leave to set him mind straight. Alice is upset about his leaving and missing him.  Esme gave Edward great advice you have to live through the darkness (worst circumstances) to get to the light (spring -- his heart's desire.) Edward can't be apart from Bella under the excuse of retrieving his journal watching her reading it on her bed.  While he hides in the tree branches and leaves taking inventory of the skin exposed to his sight.  Taking them to memory and making assumptions on what she would feel like in his hands.  Gotta realize soon Edward your feelings towards her run deeper than your bloodlust for her blood, but actual lusting for the girl.  17 year old hormones are coming to the surface for Edward towards the only girl to have ever grabbed his attention.

Author's Response:

So sorry for the lateness of this review reply! No review notices are getting to my inbox for some reason. Ah but what a review this is. I love this:

While he hides in the tree branches and leaves taking inventory of the skin exposed to his sight.  Taking them to memory and making assumptions on what she would feel like in his hands. 

So sensuous .... :">

And I love your description of Jasper as the only true warrior.

There is more to come on all of these. Thank you so much for following every chapter like this!


Bella and Edward are "buddies" and while Bella wants more, Edward pulls away every time she tries to make things more official.  Then one evening, she meets a tall, dark, handsome man out in a club, and he promises her everything she always wanted.  Will Bella take it, even if it's not with the person she thought it would be with?  And what will Edward do when his friend is suddenly no longer available?



Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes Word count: 36646
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2009 Updated: February 11, 2010

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Ch 9: History Repeats...

I'm wondering if Tanya's baby is really Edward's.  Who knows she might have been knocked up before she lured him in.  So he could be the patsy.  Any woman running around with nothing under her skirt and blouse and attempts seduction she's looking for something.  Even if he found out after he and Bella were dating, granted he should have mentioned it. Or if it was to hard to tell her then let Bella go.  But this being f***ing Buddies isn't fair to Bella.  She's just being his sex tou whenever he wants it.  It's not a relationship.  If he truly had feelings he wouldn't mistreat her that way.  Hopefully she will tell Edward off more firmly and start dating Jake.  At least Jake treats her not a lady.  He treats her with respect and makes her laugh.  Edward is in such a dark place right now because of the Tanya situation he shouldn't be near anyone else.  In fact he should have 1) he should have trumped her threat by telling his folks 2) made her prove it was his 3) let her parents know how things happened.  Yes it might be embarrassing but then he would have admitted to the act, but not rape.  Definitely not rape, she threw herself at him.  But he didn't talk to anyone, took Tanya's word for it, and ruined his relationship with Bella.  Can't feel sorry for him, he did it all himself.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Ch 7: First Date

Enjoying the premise of this story.  Even after 8 chapters still think Edward is a douche bag.  if he feels that way about her he needs to let her know instead of the way he is currently treating her.  Actually I am Team Edward, but the way he is in this story, Jake is a better man for her.  How can you have a relationship you think is not only comfortable but perfect and then become a jerk?  I mean Emmett was right he treats her like a woman with benefits.  He doesn't even treat her with respect.  Just get what he wants and then ignor her until she leaves until the following weekend with no conversation during the week.  That's wrong.  Bella is wrong for letting him treat her with so little respect.  Granted she has feelings with him, but she needs to truly examine how he treats her.  Jake has treated her with the ultmost respect and tenderness.  She has fun with him and the shock from their first touch and kiss means attraction is there for both of them.  She has Edward in the back of her mind always.  But he called her only once and left message.  She called him back said she was in the city with Alice for her birthday.  Why didn't he offer to join her in the city to spend some time?  Why hasn't he just text message her with a "I miss you" or "Wish you were here" or at least "Hi I am thinking of you".  By being so rigid and only calling once a week to spend the weekends together it's so inpersonal.  Bella feels rejection and unloved, which appears is not really how he feels about her.  Bella is worth than a weekend playmate, have fun, ignor her until she goes home to wait another week.  Douche Bag.  If Jake takes Bella away it would be no one else's fault by Edward.  Hoping to see Edward make an effort to win her back seriously to make a commitment.  Looking forward to seeing where the story leads Bella in her search for love and happiness.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Ch 8: Reflections and Surprises

What the heck is up with Edward?  text message from T Tanya.  Not only is Edward manipulating Bella with his words and actions.  He is also cheating on her and seeing Tanya on the side.  What an absolute jerk?  He has totally lost his morals.  Treating Bella as a common whore, just a body to release himself inside.  Actually Edward better change quickly or I'll change to Team Edward on this story. Alice made a point about comfortable can be nice instead of intensive.  Intensive if not nutured will burn itself out.  Right now Edward isn't nuturing anything just taking it when and where he wants it.  At least with comfortable it is a give and take situation.  More equal than being a self-centered horny man only calling to get his rocks off.  Crude but that is the way I am seeing Edward at this point.  He has no respect for anyone or anything.  Even with the chapter admitting he has feellings for Bella, I still don't see it.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Ch 10: Ready for More

Bella did the brave thing and told Edward it's over.  The way things were currently had to be finished it was tearing both of them to pieces.  Bella with pain of rejection, being used, and unloved.  Edward was pain of not truly being with her in a relationship plus the guilt of how he treated her every weekend.  As a weekend playmate not as Bella.  But Edward backed out because of Tanya and her pregnancy.  How can Edward fall for her teary act she only changed from being bitchy to weepy because Edward was leaving.  So to keep him she uses the water works and he like a lot of men melt when a woman cries.  Alice is concerned that Bella is jumping from heartache pain of Edward and then going to Jake on rebound.  But Bella wants to start living as a person, herself, not waiting for whatever time Edward can squeeze her into his schedule.  Bella hasn't dealt with pain from Edward yet.  Granted she ended it today on the phone, but later that evening or tomorrow she'll think about what she stopped.  Time spent with Edward.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Ch 11: New Spaces

Wow Edward at the end walking into the bar with Alice, Jasper, Bella, and Jake.  Bella told Edward had plans with a new friend.  I am proud of her to set limits with him as well as make the return of her house key at Bella's convenience not Edward's.  But what pain for both Bella and Edward to be in the same place at the same time.  Edward will be jealous and hurt because Bella is clearly on a date.  Bella will be torn by her feelings towards Edward, she still loves him.  Not the way he has been treating her lately.  She will also feel awkward being with Jake in the same room as Edward.  Jake is pretty sensitive he'll catch on quick that Edward is Bella's recent ex and be on the defensive side to maintain being with Bella.  Jasper and Alice will be along for the ride, quiet, awkward, uncomfortable, and tension.  Should be interesting the next chapter.  Looking forward to where the story will continue with Bella/Jake, Edward/Tanya/baby, Edward/Bella, etc...

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Ch 12: New Places

I can say Garrett said it all -- Edward messed up his own life not his betrayal to families with Tanya, but not giving Bella a chance to either say goodbye or stand by him and support him through it.  Now he has seen her dating a good looking guy can't keep his mind in the game of pool with Garrett.  Bella can't handle Edward being at the bar.  The only reason Bella approached Edward was to show him I am on a date now, and then proceeded to drink shots to get drunk.  Played the game at the bar so Edward could see her there with Jake.  Bella wanted Edward to see what he was missing without her.  Of course, we all know Edward is quite aware of what he is missing and how miserable he is about it.  Then Bella wanted to go home and to her bed.  Not necessarily with Jake.  It wasn't decided until Alice dragged her into the bathroom to talk to her.  Her temper flared and then her mind was made up.  But along the way, the love she felt for Edward wouldn't allow her body to go through with it.  Her conscience said no it's not right.  Jake got angry, which in a way could be appropriate because she did play a lot to make Edward jealous if she is honest which she does realize.  But then again a girl always has the right to say "No.  We are moving too fast."  A guy needs to realize that just because you go so far, it's always the woman's decision before the finale whether it will be completed or not.  The fact he showed her the anger only rather than be understanding dropped many points on his behalf.  Now she feels miserable again.  She has no Edward and no rebound guy Jake around any more.  Jake won't see her until Edward is out of her life, her mind, and her heart.  I don't see that happening any time soon.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13: It all comes crashing down...

Alice finally got Bella to semi calm down into a least a functioning mode.  Then who comes knocking on her window Saturday night.  A drunken Greek god, gorgeous beyond belief.  He starts babbling about being in love with her.  Wants marriage, children, forever.  She's confused.  Makes Edward sleep on the couch.  Next morning Edward's in the shower and what rotten luck Tanya the witch and a half text messages his cell phone.  Bella picks it up and reads the message.  Her first question to Edward who is Tanya?  Then he tells her the story.  She becomes livid because she felt he should have approached her before they broke up.  Now she cannot stand the sight of him.  She feels he should have told her.  Now after all the pain she has to sort through all of this new information.  After using her for so long.  Now to know he actually was still in love with her with the way he treated her.  I wish Bella luck.  Tanya is a she-whore.  Used Edward and is faking it is his.  Probably some scum boyfriend of hers refused to own up and to save face is blackmailing Edward.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14: Apologies

Well at least Bella and Jake were able to talk regarding the situation the previous week.  Granted she did use him to make Edward jealous, but she really did like him.  She made the choice to seduce Jake, but couldn't go through with it.  For his and her sake.  Jake was just mad to get there and have to stop and being used to make Edward jealous.  But at least he realized he was at some fault in the situation.  He knew she had an ex and it didn't end pretty.  It would be hard to run into an ex while on a date with a new guy and vica versa.  Edward leaving when she asked him and then text messaging her all morning.  Wow that's intense and annoying when you're trying to sort out your own thoughts to have someone telling you I'm here and I'm not leaving until we talk.  Then when she is ready to talk he has to leave because numbskull witch is in the hospital.  Claiming something is wrong with the baby.  I think the only thing wrong with her is HER.  Tanya is freaking nuts.  Why didn't Edward ask her to go along with him?  If he wants to include her and answer any of her questions and get back together, shouldn't he be starting with her accompanying him now.  Showing the crazy Tanya he loves someone else.  That eventually Edward will not be available for her every beck and call.  Not saying if the child is his, that he won't support it or be a major part of the child's life, but it won't involve him being involved with Tanya.  He wants a life with Bella.  Bella would be an excellent stepmom.  Besides Tanya doesn't leave me with warm and fuzzy feelings of being a good or loving mother.  Tanya is just too self absorbed and I still have doubts the child is Edward's.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 25, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15: The Future Beckons

All the pain both Edward and Bella have endured all because of a selfish ho and her lies.  Edward and Bella would have continued as they had in the beginning as well as get closer together.  All these months of being apart for no reason.  How the hell could Tanya do that?  What gives her the right to make other people's life miserable? I knew it.  Now Bella and Edward have to discuss things.  The issue for the break-up doesn't even exist.  It was all a lie to Edward.  In Edward's turmoil over being responsible for his actions and the love of his life, how senseless the whole pain issue to both Edward and Bella.  All because of someone, Tanya, inability to deal with her own mistakes.  Even if Marcus said he never wanted to see her again, she had no right to drag Edward into this whole ordeal.  Especially by using the blackmail card of telling both sets of parents he attacked her against her will.  Right?  Dressed like a ho with no panties, she was attacked.  Truly hoping for an excellent communication session for Edward and Bella.  Forgiveness and acceptance.  Would love to see Bella reem Tanya and tell her what a snank and dishonest witch she was. Still steaming about Tanya and her lies, even though it was in the back of my mind.  It still makes me angry.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Ch 16: Happily Ever After?

I feel for both Edward and Bella.  Their lives  have been full of pain, hurt, confusion, angst, deceit, lies, uncertainty, and anger.  All of these emotions and I'm sure others never had to happen to them.  All caused by a lying witch trying to latch onto someone to legitimize her unborn child.  What she did was inhumane to Edward.  She used him and lied to him.  Edward tried to protect Bella from the pain of the situation and his guilt over his actions.  How do you tell your current girlfriend you're going to be a father with another woman?  Not an easy conversation, any time at all, even if the sexual activity was before you met your girlfriend.  A lot of women would find that situation extremely hard to endure.  But in the case of Edward and Bella the separation and disjointed time being together taught Bella to be more herself.  To assert and talk about her needs, wants, desires.  Not to agree and bend to Edward's wishes, dreams, desires, etc... That a relationship is two people working together to strive for common goals and to succeed in those goals.  To be together physically, emotionally, and spiritually.  Honesty and forthrightness to trials in life, in people, in places, in jobs, and in relationships.  To approach and talk about problems, disagreements, wants, needs, desires, dreams, financial decisions, and goals.  Where do they want to go together? How will they get there? With disagreements talk them out come to a decision whether you choose one party's idea over the other, compromise, or agree to disagree.  Deep feelings of anger towards character Tanya who intervened and hurt other lives without even caring.  No consideration she was just selfish.  Happy that Bella and Edward will talk about where they were the mistakes in their previous relationship, discuss solutions to mistakes and problems.  Learn from them and establish a firmer foundation to their relationship.  Sorrow for Edward's loss and grief of not being a father.  Even if it was never his, he believed for 4 months he would be a father.  He was excited about it and looking forward to holding the baby.  Those expectations and dreams had the rug dragged out from under him.  One minute I'm going to be a father, have a child, miracle, joy, etc... Then told it's not yours it was all a lie, nothing, meaningless pain.  Glad Bella wants to help ease his pain and be their to comfort him through those tough times while they establish a new and stronger relationship on equal participation, equal input, equal status, etc...  Looking forward to as many chapters as you want to this story of love, betrayal, jealousy, anger, hurt, pain, and hopefully eventually happiness and joy.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Ch 17: Moving Forward

Bella is taking things slowly with Edward this time.  Edward has told Bella he loves her at least 3 times a day.  He is calling her every day and they are talking and confiding in each other more than ever before.  Sharing stories of their youth, their inner secrets, desires, dreams, and thoughts.  Their relationship is getting closer and stronger.  Bella hasn't made love to Edward yet.  He did mention that he would wait for her to be ready, but wanted it on record he was ready any time she was ready.  At first Bella made him leave to sleep at this apartment.  Then they were sleeping together and snuggling.  She woke up one morning after snuggling with him all night to finally realize that Bella loved Edward.  She left to jog and came back to apartment to shower.  Edward awoke and heard the shower.  When Bella left the shower she encountered Edward and placed her arms around him. Edward kissed her and told Bella he loved her.  Bella responded with she loved him also.  Edward questioned does thing mean and she said yes.  Bella led Edward into her bedroom where they made love to each other.  Very tender, sensual, and sweet.  The two are in their own little world with their relationship and their feelings stronger than before Tanya and her games.  Looking forward to the epilogue and completion of this story.

White Houses by Crittab Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 144]

When Edward and Bella meet at university they both feel an instant attraction to one another. What is keeping Bella from letting Edward in? Can he help her overcome her dark past and find real happiness with him? 

Rated NC17 for eventual lemons. AU, AH, E/B, J/A, R/Em.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 38618
[Report This] Published: December 05, 2009 Updated: May 16, 2010

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Really glad that Alice got a hold of Bella and has been forcing the envelope for Bella to talk with Edward.  The atmosphere in the house is more relaxed with everyone comfortable being around each other.  Leave it to Alice to get involved in planning the block party and then delegating tasks among her house members.  Leaving the long drive to Edward and Bella so they were alone to talk more.  At least Bella was able to loosen up with Edward and communicate with him.  Even laugh.  Edward is falling hard for Bella.  Of course, Bella has already fallen for Edward.  That's why she is so scared and awkward around him.  She finds him attractive.  Being Bella when Edward flirts with her it makes her feel uncomfortable so she closes up.  Was glad when Edward showed up to save Bella from greasy haired guy.  Was it Mike or James?  Trying to convince Bella to go to his house.  Then Edward pretended to be her boyfriend to chase the guy away.  The party sounds like it is pretty wild.  Loud music, large crowd, bar-b-que faire (hamburgers and hot dogs) and teenagers just hanging out talking to each other.  What kind of prizes did Edward and Bella pick out for the block party?  Looking forward to the next chapter for some of the answers.  Hoping Bella relaxes a lot more around Edward.  Will Edward make a move on Bella?  Or will he wait a while to make sure she's okay with it?  We all know he wants to kiss her.  She wants to kiss him as well.  Staring at his lips.  Well who wouldn't stare at his lips.  He's gorgeous. 

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Angela is astute as usual.  Edward thought he was hiding his emotions from Angela, but she knew all along what was going on with him.  She even gave him great advice on her front stoop.  Edward with renewed confidence came home went right to Bella and said no matter what she told him, his feelings towards her would not change.  Bella was feeling miserable when Edward went out on his date.  Alice told her to go for it.  Alice said she needed to tell Edward and give him a chance to make up his own mind.  Just because Tyler wasn't man enough to accept what happened before, doesn't mean that Edward would do the same thing.  Edward's unique and his feelings for Bella were strong.  She needed to just open up and let someone inside to help deal with her pain.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Love the townhouse blocks for college freshman.  Jake eing the house parent is a new idea.  Bella being friendly with everyone but Edward definitely noticable.  Edward noticed and can't understand what he had done to make Bella upset or offended.  Alice told him to just keep trying.  The roommates are all getting along only tension is Bella's being quiet and running from any conversation initiated by Edward.  Edward just wants to get to know her.   Whatever happened to Bella in Forks sure has her head messed up.  She can be familiar with Emmett and Jasper because she doesn't have romantic feelings towards them.  Edward she has those feelings and is afraid to let him in where he can actually hurt her.  Glad Alice gave her the lecture.  She was actually throwing the boy a loop.  Edward analyzes everything all lthe time, now with her he is over doing the self analyzation.  Now Edward knows that Bella is smart, witty, and beautiful.  He enjoys her giggles and laughs.  Also he adores her blushes.  Looking forward to where this little conversation will lead Bella and Edward.  the other couples are moving towards each other just fine.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 25, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Bella had a wonderful day with Edward running errands for the block party.  Then even being with him at the party.  He went to get food for both of them.  Then Bella started to panic.  Something in her past has her very leery about men in general.  She had her body language warding off boys/men.  Of course, Mike didn't read the signs very well.  When you have your arms wrapped tightly around your body it means don't bother me.  Don't come near me, I don't want company.  Mike came over figuring he could take her to his room and become more acquainted.  Bella even spoke to him rudely.  Mike still continued to pursue.  Edward returned with their food plates and based on Bella's facial expressions knew something was up.  Especially when she came to stand really close to him.  Edward knew something was up.  Mike became afraid of Edward standing tall and looking at him.  Oh I didn't know she had a boyfriend.   Again based on Bella's facial expression he acted like her boyfriend.  Placed his arm around her tightly.  Mike left.  Bella withdrew from Edward quickly.  Alice and Jasper finished with serving the dinner.  The party thinned out and White 4 residents returned to their house.  Emmett and his wonderful idea about truth and drinking game.  Question to Bella was regarding sexual escapades.  Bella refused to answer.  Then the question was reduced to virgin yes/no.  Bella said no, Alice said yes.  So something happened to Bella sexually to make her uneasy, frightened, leery, uncomfortable around guys.  Either she was forced into some type of activity or like Emmett said if it just touched or tip doesn't count.  But what Alice said, whatever happened didn't count.  Which sounds like an attack (rape).  Edward is intrigued regarding Bella being angry and yelling at Alice as well as the issue of Bella's virginity.  Looking forward to future chapters to solve the mystery of Bella's uneasiness and fear around men.  Her leeriness of being away from home and her comfort zone.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I would say it was a nice chapter.  Bella finally kissed Edward and Edward was happy to respond.  I am jealous.  Wish it was me.  Both staying in the dorm avoiding the 2nd block party with homework.  Edward 5000 word essay, who has to write an essay that large.  Thank goodness I was an accounting major was never required to write something like that at all.  Bella studying Spanish can be tough.  Both take a break at the same time.  Edward flirting and his smirk, who can resist that grin/smirk.  They almost got caught by Alice and Rose.  Why would they come back to the dorm?  Last time they were the ones who stayed out the longest.  Now Bella is locked in her room.  I have a feeling Edward will encounter Bella taking major steps backwards from the friendship progress they have made.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Edward was stunned from Bella kissing him in the kitchen.  He reacted after the shock wore off.  But when Rosalie and Alice came home Bella made a dash to her room and slammed the door.  Edward was stumped couldn't figure out what was going on with Bella.  Not wanting to discuss with the other girls, he too retreated to his room and slammed the door.  Using his intellect he tried to find an answer to Bella's reaction.  Of course, Edward doesn't have enough information to truly figure out her response especially since she kissed him first.  Bella freaked out when Alice and Rosalie came in the front door because all her barriers were down.  She was vulnerable to Edward.  Afraid of being hurt by Edward due to prior occurrences in her life.  She had been avoiding seeing him to talk about it.  Kinda of a coward.  Bella didn't want to talk about it afraid if when they talked she would give him information about her past.  The information would then have Edward rejecting her.  Edward didn't believe in not discussing a problem or situation.  He tried multiple times to contact her.  Finally Edward approached her outside her class.  Bella tried to avoid him again.  Then when Edward questioned her the only answer she would give was Yes the kiss meant something.  She wouldn't elaborate on it though.  Angela a girl from Edward's class asked her to go see a band playing in a club. Edward asked Bella if he was busy.  She said no.  He decided to go not to hurt Angela's feelings.  Now Bella is upset and finally talked to Alice.  What right does Bella have to be hurt? None.  She threw him away with both hands.  Yes Edward is crazy about her and has been since the first day he met her.  She herself is crazy about him. But this fear of what occurred in her past, she believed Edward wouldn't be able to handle it.  Some things in the past are just that in the past.  Edward himself has a past.  Things happen to everyone, it's how the person handles what happened and learned from the experience will enable the person to be stronger and better. Life's lessons some are easy and some are difficult, horrific, frightening, degrading, and sad to name a few.  But with each experience helps create the person you are and only you can make yourself what you want to become.  If Bella wants Edward she better open up and move forward.    

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

The chapter came across just fine.  It explained why Bella was afraid to get close to another guy.  Also explained why she wasn't sure how to answer the question earlier in the story.  Technically she is still a virgin.  Alice is correct what happened to her doesn't count as a sexual encounter.  It was a sick person gettng his jolly.  Having to drug her to do it. Pretty low, what a low life.  Only got 5 years, doesn't seem enough time, since Bella was a minor and James was an adult.  I am also surprised that Charlie won't be at the parole hearing to make sure the man stays behind bars for his full term.  As a victim or family member of a victim your personal opinion and feelings are taken into count.  Bella being afraid to feel because of Lucas is understandable to a point, but it's been 4 years.  Bella has to heal sometime.  There are nice guys out there just like Lucas.  Men who won't want to leave at a drop of a hat.  Edward has reassured her that he is in for the long haul.  He's not going anywhere.  Trying to convince Bella not to let James destroy her life.  Which is really what Bella is doing.  Granted hurting from the loss of Lucas, but closing herself up is only her way of protecting herself from new experiences and new people.  James was just an asshole.  Bella has to mentally prepare herself to take a chance again.  Edward wasn't disgusted over what happened, if anything anger towards James for hurting Bella.  Sadness that Bella had to endure such mental pain.  Looking forward to Bella's reaction from what Edward's response was regarding her story.

Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

It was wonderful for Bella to write done her thoughts, feelings, and emotions regarding the discussion with Edward.  Where she stated the differences between Edward and James.  Her realization that Edward isn't like other guys.  He is kind, tender, loving, gentle, loyal, trustworthy, and longevity.  He has been there and even though she has rejected and backed off multiple times he has always come back to her.  Now really curious what is in the notes she wrote for Edward.  Would she have given him the pages she wrote after their talk?  Or would she state he trusts him and go from there?  Looking forward to finding out the answers.  Both do want to be together in all ways spiritually, emotionally, and physically.



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