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Summary:

Edward falls in love with Bella from a distance as they share the same route to work.  Bella can't help feeling attracted to Edward as well but, being a bit of a cynic when it comes to love, she dismisses him as an impossible fantasy.  She prefers the comfort and safety of the content, but passionless, relationship she has with Jake.  When Edward and Bella actually meet, however, she considers giving the impossible a chance. 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No Word count: 6747
[Report This] Published: November 27, 2009 Updated: May 01, 2010


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Bella is wondering if she has fallen for her crush Mr Perfect.  Only to find out he works with her boyfriend Jacob.  Small world.  Of course, she doesn't know Mr Perfect's name.  Jake had a date all planned for the evening.  After being Mr Avoid Me this morning.  Now he's proposing marriage to her.  Oh Oh what's gonna happen.  Bella has doubts about their relationship.  Who knows what she will say to the question.  will Jake get to unwrap her surprise package or will the evening blow up in both their faces.  Curious minds want to know.  I wouldn't want to be in Bella's shoes now for anything. 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Edward about killed himself for his daily glance at the beautiful Bella.  When she smiled at him going into her building it made Edward's day.  Tanya was wrong, Bella did smile at Edward. Tanya's after Lauren.  Does Lauren swing that way?  Or is Lauren Jacob's prework and overtime dalliance?  If Jacob heard Tanya mention the name Bella to Edward would not be too good for Edward at all.  Bella is not a common name for sure.

I personally would like to have chapters issued when written rather than putting on hiatus until the entire story is completed.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the wonderful review!  I'd prefer not to answer your questions and leave it a surprise, though ;)

And I will definately take your preference regarding updates into consideration. 

Thanks again, I really appreciate the time you've taken to review!

 
Summary:

A mosaic freely drawn from book and movie, wanders into AU as the story unfolds ... ....

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Showing is stronger than telling.  Forks was just like I remember it.  I felt the short little hairs on the back of my neck stand straight on end.  Cut your losses before they can become catastrophic.   “It’s not fair,” I say aloud.   The night wind swirls, lifting the fine surface powder from the tops of the snowdrifts, coating us in diamond dust.  

 


Then weave for us a garment of brightness

 

Moving to Forks, spending the last eighteen months of her childhood with a father she barely knew ... it seemed like a good idea at the time.

 

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A/N about the rating: The narrative in this story ranges between PG-13 (most of it) and R (occasional language and occasional non-graphic reference to mature themes). An isolated technicality in a late chapter has necessitated changing the rating from R to NC-17, however R is a much better measure of the farthest outer limit of what the reader will encounter in this tale.

 

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<3<3<3  and  @};-  @};-  @};-  to  DeliciousDreamer for this beautiful banner ~~

delicious dreamer's lovely banner for garment of brightness

I never in my wildest dreams thought that something I wrote would inspire someone to make something like this.   I am so touched.  THANK YOU DD!


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: No Word count: 59050
[Report This] Published: November 28, 2009 Updated: February 13, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Edward

First day of school is hard on anyone.  Especially in a small town and your father is the Chief of Police.  Very noticable when a new face is on campus.  Rumor mill runs rampart in small towns, especially when your dad talks about you coming.  Edward being down right rude stating she stinks.  Being that far away from her a normal human would have no idea or senses wouldn't work that far away.  So Edward must be a vampire in the story.  Surprised with the inside of her mouth bleeding that Edward didn't go nuts and take her right then and there.  Why would he humiliate her in front of the entire class?  Very ungentlemanly of him.  Bella just wants to pass by with no attention, but since small town and Edward's outburst that won't happen.  She'll be even more the center of attention at school.  Which will make her even more self conscious about herself.



Author's Response:

I love your "Spark Notes" to the text.  Very cool, and very to the point!

Yes, Edward certainly is a vampire.  Bella's thought ~ I would have given my life right then and there ~ little did she know how terribly terribly close she came to doing just that!

Poor Edward, he couldn't very well say "She smells so good I want to eat her alive!"  "Stinks" was perhaps the best he could come up with on such short notice.   He clumsily humiliated her.  She unknowingly tortured him.   Perhaps they were even after all ...

Poor Bella, yes, she is the center of attention, which is indeed the last thing she ever wanted.  Thank you for your review.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 29: The Ghost in the Wishing Well

Debate and Alice's visions at home regarding Bella have majority of the Cullens upset.  Esme wants to move to avoid hurting Bella.  Alice adores her already and wants her to be her friend.  Carlisle has no intention of hurting her.  He just wants Edward to retrieve his journal. Jasper had a passing thought of killing her making it look like a bear attack.  Horrid idea.  Alice very upset with that vision.  Rose and her nasty comments/thoughts about Edward's decision to save Bella from the van.  Maybe should have let the van hit her is her opinion.  But the blood from that crash would have caused all the vampires thirsty for the blood.  Edward climbed in her window.  He can't find the journal.  Even checked under her pillow trying to locate it.  Bella moved and the blanket lower revealing his journal tightly wrapped up by her arms close to her chest.  The journal is close to her heart.  Bella has a death grip on it.  Edward doesn't want to wake her so he's going to wait it out.  I guess hide while she has her human moments in the morning.  Edward already decided to protect her from anyone thinking of harming her.



Author's Response:

"Bella has a death grip on it." Omg that is the BEST line! I'm going to frame it!

As always, your summary sparkles. And you've laid out the balance of intention in the family: Carlisle, Esme, Alice and Edward all definitely want to protect Bella. I wonder if that makes her safe, now that a majority of the Cullens are on her side ...? Only time will tell.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.  <3

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Tell it to the Rain

New viewpoint to the travels for Bella to stay with her dad.  Also on the many moves Bella had to endure when she moved with Renee.  The pain of losing all her friends at Forks and the summers with Charlie.  Now she has finally gotten to Forks at her father's house.  Analyzing her old room and where she will go from here.  Crying in her room and suppressing her pain with the quilt in her mouth so no one can hear.



Author's Response:

Wow, NICE synopsis.  Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: More

Great Bella was the center of conversation at the start of lunch.  All the comments about her aroma displeasing Edward.  Then the conversation turned to the Cullens.  The fact they are foster children.  That they are dating each other.  Then claiming Edward is gay.  Right like we all believe that of him.  But his remark to Lauren would need an intelligent person to understand it.  Lauren being an airhead didn't realize he knew she wanted more than just a date.  She wanted to get laid.  Of course, Edward can read thoughts, that explains when he told Lauren she should respect herself more.  Wonder if Bella will have any additional classes with Edward in the afternoon.



Author's Response:

Lovely synopsis, as always.  I like this part best: 

<< Then claiming Edward is gay.  Right like we all believe that of him.   >>

:-)

<<  Wonder if Bella will have any additional classes with Edward in the afternoon.  >>

Like Bella, I guess we will all just have to wait and see ...

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Can't Get to Heaven

Poor Bella her first day at new high school didn't go well at all for her.  First embarrassment Edward saying she stinks.  Then all the conversation at lunch regarding the Cullen's relationships and Edward's rude remark.  Next came PE the horror of most high school students.  Especially for Bella being clumsy.  Trying to avoid hitting any balls towards anyone or running into them.  She heard someone yell watch out and she bangs into Mike and they roll over each other and the floor.  Jessica is mad because she likes Mike.  Then she made herself a promise to change her schedule to avoid Edward Cullen.  When she arrived at office, Edward was there trying to change his schedule.  He was unable to change his so Bella figured what chance had she to get hers changed.  If Mr Gorgeous can't get it done why would she be able to.  So driving home on the worst first day of school ever.  Having to sit next to Edward for the next 6 months. Oh boy, let the humiliation continue for poor Bella.



Author's Response:

I really enjoy reading your synopses!  "Mr. Gorgeous", and "the worst first day of school ever".  What could be worse?   Maybe one shouldn't ask ...  :P

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Yellow Cabinets

Bella getting the third degree from both parents.  How embarrassing of her mother talking about birth control.  It's her first day, she doesn't even know a lot of people yet.  Of course, her thoughts would flow to Edward when her mother questioned about good looking boys.  Edward is so above good looking, he's gorgeous, greek god, David carved in marble by Michelangleo, Mr Perfect. Now she's thinking about Edward and condoms.  Bella's mom is something else besides scatterbrained.  So Edward hunted and is now heading north to the snow.  Totally humiliated Bella at school and now he bails.  Looking forward to how Bella's days at school either improve or get worse for her.   



Author's Response:

Yes it seems that the embarrassment never ends for poor Bella.   She can't even get away from it at home.   I promise to give her other things to think about though.   Scout's honor!  Thank you for your lovely synopsis and review.  Always a treat.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Bridge to Nowhere

Bella's nerves up in arms.  Dreading seeing Edward at school after his rudeness.  Only to find out his car wasn't in the parking lot, he wasn't at lunch, and he wasn't in Biology.  This happened for the rest of the week.  Bella was ready to give it to him, but he wasn't there.  She had no intention of asking anyone if they knew where he was.  The rest of the family was there, but not Edward.  At least Bella was making friends.  Angela asking advice about getting Eric to notice her.  Bella had learned the names of all the people at Jessica's table.  At least the gossip had changed to other topics than Edward Cullen or his siblings.  Thus taking the gossip of his insults from Bella.  Sounds like the rest of the week was a little less stressful.  Bella still concerned about Edward not being there a big black hole at her biology table. Bella appeared to have settled nicely into school.  Knowing the people around her and not having loud humiliating comments made about her from Edward.  Looking forward to Edward's return and the van incident.  since you said you were following the movie rather than the book.  Bella is getting into a nice routine no pressure. 



Author's Response:

Yes, indeed, Bella is in an Edward-free zone right now.  I wonder what she will do when that ... changes ... 

Thanks s much for the wonderful synopsis/review.   Always a pleasure!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Una Rama Oscura

Another day of school for Bella with Jessica hounding her about Edward.  Edward using minds to keep track of Bella and her whereabouts.  Also the questions she is being asked wants the answers.  Bella is being very quiet so Edward is getting frustrated.  Bella responded negatively to Jessica's question if she would go with Edward if he asked.  Bella thinking she isn't sure yes or no.  The guys are calling Edward gay.  She wonders if she should go out with him if he asks to stop the mean rumors.  Edward is anything but gay.  His feelings are leaning towards Bella.  A part of Edward is glad she would say no for her protection.  Edward has another part that he is a little disappointed that she would say no.  A part of him would love to date her and get to know her as a person better.  Learn things about her besides just her blood is his addicted drug.  She is his obsession.  Now after class Bella walking through the parking lot into the forest and hugging a tree.  Edward followed her into the forest.  Wonder what will happen now them being totally alone.  Interesting to see what will occur.



Author's Response:

I just love the way you word your summaries! 

... the questions she is being asked wants the answers ...

... Edward is anything but gay.  His feelings are leaning towards Bella ...

... Learn things about her besides just her blood is his addicted drug ...

*sigh*

Wonder what will happen now them being totally alone

Hee hee!  So do I!



Author's Response:

I just love the way you word your summaries! 

... the questions she is being asked wants the answers ...

... Edward is anything but gay.  His feelings are leaning towards Bella ...

... Learn things about her besides just her blood is his addicted drug ...

*sigh*

Wonder what will happen now them being totally alone

Hee hee!  So do I!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Harry Clearwater's Famous Fish Fry

Nice gathering over at the Swan's house for dinner.  Memories of the past and thanking for the red truck given to Bella.  Billy talking about salmon and looking at Bella as if his words have a double meaning.  Made Bella very uncomfortable what is Uncle Billy trying to tell her.  Then we have Sedna's story about losing her brother to the icekillers. Are they the cold ones?  Are Sedna Orca whales?  Or purely mystical?



Author's Response:

Thank you for such a lovely synopsis, not to mention pinpointing key clues to where this story is going.  Is Bella like the salmon?   Tanya and Edward (the cold ones) hunting seal up past the Arctic Circle.   Will he stay there up north in the dark?  Or will he, also, return ... ?  @};-

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Caught in the Undertow

Edward is still gone.  I'm heartbroken.  He's not back yet.  Just think if I feel this way, what Bella is feeling.  Talk about being more than just BLUE.  Every day empty parking lot, empty seat at the Cullen's table, and empty seat at her Biology table.  How much more can she stand not seeing Mr Hunk. The man with everything face, body, money, snazzy car, eventually a marvelous personality and a giant heart and love for Bella.  Too bad he only has eyes for her.  Bella actually misses him and wants more information.  Her new friends at lunch do nothing but talk so she learns more and more about the Cullens.  Bella also pries information from the town's best information gatherer.  Her father Charlie being Chief of Police always has all the information about everyone in town.

I'm looking forward to Edward's return.  Sounds like it will be next chapter from the teaser.  Thanks for that by the way. 



Author's Response:

I love your reviews.  You capture the entire chapter in a single paragraph, and go straight to the heart of the matter.

How much more can she stand not seeing Mr Hunk. The man with everything face, body, money, snazzy car, eventually a marvelous personality and a giant heart and love for Bella.  Too bad he only has eyes for her. Bella actually misses him and wants more information.

 

This is just great: 

Bella also pries information from the town's best information gatherer.  Her father Charlie being Chief of Police always has all the information about everyone in town.

 

Glad you liked the teaser.  Edward's return is ready for validation.  

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 25, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Parsifal

Master Edward has returned to Forks.  Dreading to return to school and be tormented by the scent of her blood.  He left Alaska and Tanya's forward behavior.  Alice said things will be pretty sure Edward won't kill Bella.  He describes her as plain and ordinary with her shoulders hunched.  She does that not to be noticed, but in a small town anything new is a novelty.  The boys have suggestive and lustful thoughts towards Bella.  The girls don't really care about her.  The girls are just nice on the surface and uncaring inside.  Edward can smell her from the parking lot.  Nervous, doesn't want to have Esme and Carlisle ashamed of him.  Emmett what's his deal trying to convince Edward just take her and then bury her far away.  She'll be found in either months or not ever.  Emmett she is the chief of police's daughter.  Charlie would never stop searching for her alive or dead.  Eventually finding her and investigating how she got there and how she was murdered.  I think Edward needs to get a good look at Bella's face and hear her voice to realize she's not ordinary or plain.  Looking forward to meeting face to face either in cafeteria or biology table.



Author's Response:

Yes, in a way, Edward returning to school is really like walking into the lion's den -- where his better nature is the hapless victim, and his inner monster is the lion.   Nasty to have all that inside, I think.   I love your thoughts about Emmett's suggestion, and how Charlie would react to his daughter's disappearance:

Emmett what's his deal trying to convince Edward just take her and then bury her far away.  She'll be found in either months or not ever.  Emmett she is the chief of police's daughter.  Charlie would never stop searching for her alive or dead.  Eventually finding her and investigating how she got there and how she was murdered. 

And this is great, too:

I think Edward needs to get a good look at Bella's face and hear her voice to realize she's not ordinary or plain.  

He will, of course, all in good time.  The meeting is indeed next.  Hope you enjoy!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Hungry Eyes

Musical chairs a la biology.  Bella's regular table is being used by Tyler and another girl.  Edward is in the back row with the window open.  Bella directed to an open seat up front to lab partner with Lauren Mallory.  Bella  upset about the seating change.  She turns and sticks her tongue out at Edward.  funny, Edward deserves a lot worse for his actions.  Took a lot of guts for Bella to ask Lauren if she stinks.  Lauren said no Edward is just an asshole.  Okay speak your mind Lauren don't hold anything back now.  Edward still blaming Bella for everything.  Alice sending visions his way to stop him from massacring the entire biology class.  Alice sent them when he first met Bella and also now during class.  The visions of visits from Volturi among others.  Each worse than the others.  The most are the disappointed faces of Esme and Carlisle.  He must resist the temptation.  He is even now smelling her scent and hearing her pulse with blood rushing through her body.  He wants Bella, he needs Bella, and he still wants to hide the family's secret.  He resents Bella for moving to Forks from Phoenix.  She was sent to torture Edward and tempt him not to follow the path of vegetarian he was taught from Carlisle.  All of which are absurd, Bella is just living with  her dad and going to school like every other teenager in Forks.  Seems like he has controlled his reactions today.  Bella still finds Edward to be the most beautiful creature she has ever seen, but angry with the way he humiliates her.  The humiliation and embarrassment from the entire student body of the school by his actions and words.  Thank goodness for Alice and her visions.  Also for Edward's gift of mind reading to receive her visions when temptation strikes the hardest at Edward.



Author's Response:

Wow, you really make this chapter sound so exciting, and tense!  I especially love these comments:

Okay speak your mind Lauren don't hold anything back now.  

and 

He wants Bella, he needs Bella, and he still wants to hide the family's secret.  He resents Bella for moving to Forks from Phoenix.  She was sent to torture Edward and tempt him not to follow the path of vegetarian he was taught from Carlisle.  All of which are absurd, Bella is just living with  her dad and going to school like every other teenager in Forks. 

Lovely capture, as always.

Yes, if not for Edward's gift of mind reading, Bella would be dead long ago.   And Edward's life would be cursed even worse than it is at this moment ...

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Vol de Nuit

Alice is pretty smart.  If Edward can choose whether to kill the sheep waiting for them after their exhausting run from them, then he has the choice not to kill Bella.  Alice has had a vision of herself and Bella as close friends.  All Edward can think about is Bella, her scent, her blood flowing through her body, and imagining the taste of her blood flowing down his throat.  Edward will regret killing Bella for more than shame, disappointing Carlisle, Volturi, or any other logical reason.  He already has made the choice not to kill her.  He has the control not to drain Bella.  He has done it twice.  Yes the temptation is there and even assorted plots of how to either steal her or lure her away from everyone to take her.  As Alice said he has the choice and subconsciously he has taken the option of not taking or killing her.  Edward hasn't recognized any further reason he doesn't want to kill her.  Looking forward to further chapters.



Author's Response:

You know, I think you understand Alice's little ploy better than Edward does, or any of the others for that matter.   You also seem to see into Edward's mind very clearly, as well.  I always look forward to your reviews that encapsulate the entire chapter so well.  Thank you so much for posting!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Dance of the Hours

By Edward avoiding Bella at all costs, he is actually harming himself even more.  Getting used to her scent by being inundated by it.  The more he stays away the stronger and more desirable the scent is to him.  He is obsessed with Bella.  1) He can't read her thoughts. 2) Her scent drives him crazy with desire and thrist. 3) He follows her ever move through the minds of their classmates. Watching her all day long through the minds of students.  Watching her face during her blushes to hiding her face behind her hair 4) Edward so in tune with fellow students' mind literally forgetting to pay attention to the road he's driving and almost crashes. (not that any of them would be hurt, just his Volvo) 5) His concern for her personally has already started, concerned about her safety from himself, concern that she might be upset/hurt curled into a ball by her locker. So with concern comes feelings/emotions towards Bella.  He knows her complete routine, which path in school she'll take to depart and arrive at her classes.  6) Doesn't like other boys and their fantasies about Bella in their minds.  He thinks she is pretty and amazed that the boys don't consider her to be really pretty.  Edward does, he is attracted to her more than just another meal.  Teenage boy is still within himself.  He can judge beauty for himself.

Some day Edward will get it all together.  For a vampire he really is slow in thinking when it concerns his feelings and thoughts.  Edward the situation between himself and Bella are not just black and white, they are mostly grey.  Both are very attracted physically to the other one.



Author's Response:
Ah, once again you hit all the high points, and cut right to the heart of the matter all at the same time!  Thank you!

Teenage boy is still within himself. 
This comment means the most to me.   I have wanted so much for that aspect of Edward's character to shine through, and it is the aspect that I have felt the least confidence about in my portrayal.   To me, it is central that he is forever 17.   And a 17-year-old from the beginning of the 20th Century -- the generation that was decimated by the Great War, and also the Spanish Influenza.   Yes he has lived for 90 years since then, and certainly he has been deeply affected by his experiences, many of them (the mind-reading, and his 'vigilante years' especially being destructive of innocence.   But, in my mind, he is still 17, and I actually see that as the crux of much of his character:  the tension between his emotional age, and all the life that he has lived.   Dear me, I see that I am going on and on about this.  Anyway, thank you so much for every part of your review!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: In Grandmother's House

Bella's little escape during lunch into the forest while raining has made her quite ill.  She caught a chill and now is really sick with a temperature of 102.  Edward followed her into the woods probably causing the dream about the deer/mountain lion embrace which woke her up.  Making all the noise in the bathroom looking for medication to help make her feel better.  Charlie was woken up and found her something to alleviate the fever.  Charlie mentioned Deputy Dave would drop off medication and something for Bella to eat.  When she checked downstairs didn't find Deputy Dave's care package, but one from Edward.  Confusing for Bella very understandable why she checked every detail regarding the remedy he provided.  Bella has no reason to accept Edward to make a gesture like being concerned about her health.  The tea she brewed did help her a lot.  She ate very little during the day.  Really not very hungry and the thought of cooking was just so exhausting.  Deputy Dave dropped off additional medicines and hot soup for Bella.  She even thought of Charlie to save half for him.  How thoughtful of Bella, here she is so ill can hardly walk up and down the stairs, making sure Charlie has something to eat.  Instead of being concerned with herself to make sure she has nourishment and plenty of fluid throughout her sickness.  

Edward followed Bella into the woods.  Saw her return to school after lunch.  Blue lipped and soaked.  Great means to getting ill.  Since she wasn't at school, he made her a paper flower with instructions on how to brew Chinese tea to help with her cold/flu.  Edward's feelings of protecting and caretaking of Bella are becoming stronger.  If he didn't care for her, he wouldn't have taken the time to bring over something to help her.  He would have just left her alone.  Since he knew all the symptoms, was it because he checked her over in her room or just listening to her breathing while she rested?  He listed each one she had as if he examined her.  90 years of experience and multiple medical degrees.  Truly enjoyed his last remarks regarding taking care of herself and avoiding walking in the rain without eating.  Wanting Bella healthy and safe.  Who would have thought based on his behavior when he first met her?  Gave Bella something to think for sure about Edward.  Thought his gesture was an apology for his horrible treatment of her at school.  A sign of his deeping feelings for Bella.  Wonder if he will ever express his feelings/thoughts/emotions to Bella directly.  Beautiful paper design intricate and delicate just for the beautiful and delicate girl he secretly adores.



Author's Response:

Since he knew all the symptoms, was it because he checked her over in her room or just listening to her breathing while she rested? 

...

Wonder if he will ever express his feelings/thoughts/emotions to Bella directly.

The chapters to come will hopefully answer these ...

In the mean time, thank you for such a bravura summary!  You make me want to read the chapter all over again, even though I know what is in it.

Beautiful paper design intricate and delicate just for the beautiful and delicate girl he secretly adores.

*Sigh*   That is perfect.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Dumb Barter

Bella drawing on the paper she folded into a coin.  Inside of her vines and flowers are two words.  Thank you.  Expressing her gratitude for the medicines that cured her.  Edward obsessed about her scent.  Inhaling deeply until no longer purely her scent.  Frustrated he tears it up and throws over the cliff.  By inhaling her scent it should help him become accustomed to her scent to control his bloodlust as well as 17 year old lust.  Even if he doesn't want to admit it.  Edward's plan to hunt and then watch over Bella during the night.  The family is worried he'll go too far.  Seems the rest of the family is right behind him in wanting Bella's blood.  Wonder if he'll attempt a small whiff tonight.



Author's Response:

:-)

Ah, me, poor Edward, just floatin' down dat river in Egypt ... de-Nile.

What will he do in her bedroom tonight ...?  Will he indeed attempt a small whiff ...?

The next chapter tells all.

Thank you for your review!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: The Owl Called Her Name

I can imagine why the owl likes him so much.  Lots of prey for the owl to swoop down on them for his evening meal.  Edward watching Bella from his branch in the tree.  Edward hears Bella say his name in her sleep.  Arrows in his heart turn to flowers Edward has finally acknowledged his feelings regarding Bella.  She's not his prey, but the girl he is has deep feelings for her.  He already has protectiveness and now tenderness as well.  All from hearing his name upon her lips while sleeping.



Author's Response:

Ah, this is lovely!  May I use your synopsis as the recap to put before my next chapter?   I think it would be cool, and help with continuity if I have a hard time updating quickly.  Let me know if it is ok.   Thanks!

Sincerely

mkch

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Morning

Bella awakens from a strange dream about fish with constant changing.  Her day went from strange to bizarre to tragic.  Bella followed her normal routine of getting ready for school. A day she is dreading to go to school since she gave Edward that note.  Bella regretted it, but what is done is done.  She headed down the stairs noticed the coffee brewed in the pot.  She called a greeting to her dad.  No response from dad at all, Bella panicked and searched the entire house for her father.  Bella checked outside her dad's cruiser was still there.  Bella began to worry about her dad.  She ran outside looking for him only to have him pull up into the driveway with her truck.  Charlie told Bella he put chains on her tires due to the weather conditions.  What a thoughtful and sweet dad, right?  Bella finally relaxed and breakfast with her dad.  Charlie left for his day and told Bella he was helping with an bizarre investigation in another area.  He told her he would be late getting home.  Bella wasn't uneasy about her day, but this added additional stress on her.  Bella drove to school.  She saw Edward standing by his car and he was scowling.  Once she parked, she noticed Edward was scowling at her.  She just doesn't understand him at all.  She was searching in her backpack when she heard the squeal of tires.  Bella looked up to see Tyler's van skidding towards her.  Bella looked at Edward saw his mouth open staring at her.  The next moment she was being held protectively by someone.  She saw it was Edward and he was moving the van away from them.  Bella was enjoying being held in his arm and his body close.  Bella wanted Edward to stay there forever holding her.  Edward left her and jumped over the truck.  Everyone in the parking lot was yelling, "call  911" and chaos ensued.  Tyler leaned out his window to tell Bella he was sorry.  As if that could solve what happened.  Bella knew she was going to die when the van started to skid towards her.  Instead Edward was there instantaneous and miraculously the van never reached her. 



Author's Response:

Such a lovely summary!  Thank you so much.  ~~  "call  911" and chaos ensued  ~~

So true!   And the trouble has only just begun ...

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: After

Thank goodness for Edward and his vampiric powers.  Otherwise Bella would be flat as a pancake.  Instead she is in the hospital emergency room on a gunery waiting to be examined.  Tyler was hurt more than Bella. Edward protected her body with his. My thoughts and emotions are with Charlie.  He leaves Bella in the morning with brand new tires to handle the weather.  He tells her he'll be late he's heading to another city's investigation to help with animal attack.  He would be home late.  Can you imagine what he thought and felt when he was radioed by his station in Forks that Bella was in the hospital after Tyler's van slammed into her truck.  Not having the particulars of her condition only that paramedics arrived and she was alive.  When Dr Cullen came to examine her I think Charlie felt a little better.  Carlisle wants to keep Bella in the hospital overnight just to make sure no concussion or other serious injuries.  Bella sure hates hospitals.  Carlisle promised if everything okay in the morning Bella could go to school.  Bella announced to both Carlisle and Charlie that Edward saved her from the vehicle crash.  Wondering if Edward will be spending the night in the hospital watching over her to make sure she's okay.  The man can't deny he has feelings of protectiveness and affection for Bella now.  Almost exposed his whole family to what they are by his actions.  Speed to get by her side, using his body as shield, stopping the van and then pushing it away from Bella.  Bella will sure have more questions for Edward now.  How can you say I stink, then provide Chinese herbs medicines to cure her, and now risk his life to save hers.  His actions don't add up to Bella.  Very Confusing.



Author's Response:

Oh, yes, I would definitely say that Edward is very confused!  Thanks so much for saying how scared Charlie was until he could see Bella with his own eyes.   

Can you imagine what he thought and felt when he was radioed by his station in Forks that Bella was in the hospital after Tyler's van slammed into her truck.  Not having the particulars of her condition only that paramedics arrived and she was alive. 

That is it exactly!

Still ok for me to borrow from your reviews for the recaps?   They really help me a lot!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 23: The Loony Bin

Bella has been admitted into the hospital.  She was totally bored.  Her dad left with all her clothes and arrived with her backpack with her school books.  The nurses have been coming in to check her vitals periodically.  The nurses know that Bella was in for only observation.  Nothing really wrong, but maybe a few scrapes and knock in the head from the accident.  They were more worried about their other patients on the floor.  Bella's dad was working so for the most part of the day she has been alone.  Bored out her mind, attempting to decide homework or watch TV.  She was pondering the facts of life, destiny, and robbing death.  She felt for the guard, her father left that morning to help investigate his death and his family.  Wondering how and why was she able to defeat death from the van while the security guard met his fate leaving behind a family.  In Bella's boredom decided didn't want to do school work or TV opted for a nap.  When she awoke wanted to know if anyone from school visited her or not.  She heard a knock on her door and Edward asked to come in.  Edward even being at her door confused her again.  He entered upon seeing her nod.  He came into her room. An actual closed room environment with just the two of them.  Edward asked how was Bella doing? He still covered his mouth and nose limiting his intake of Bella's aroma and the call of her blood.  Stranger still Bella got out of bed and walked towards him.  They were face to face discussing how he got to her in time and how he stopped the van.  Edward's response was he was standing right next to her.  Right!!! He wanted further explanation on how he did it.  Bella responded you pushed the van away with one hand.  Edward told her no one would believe her and they would leave her in the loony bin section of the hospital.  The fact he stared right into her eyes trying to influence her mind to believe his stories and failing.  Bella's lack of fear approaching him to whisper argue the issues.  Bella was confused with his attitude based on their conversation and wanted to know why he saved her wouldn't it have been better if he just let the van crush her.  Edward was shocked.  What????  Bella's opinions based on his first day excuse of she stinks.  Why would he care what happened to her.  Why would he bring her medication to help when she was sick.  Finally why would he save her from the van when she repulses him.  She walked back to bed with her blanket wrapped around her and covered her face under the blanket.  Bella wanted Edward to stay in the room sitting at the foot of her bed watching over her.  With her head covered she could live in her fantasy world.  Both have feelings for the other.  Edward has been learning to control his bloodlust and desire for Bella to actually visit her and not kill her.  Edward's feelings were deeper than just concern.  Bella has become a very important aspect of his life.  He cannot live without her near him.



Author's Response:

Ah, life, destiny and robbing death. What a perfect summary of what Twilight is about. You have a way with words. Thank you so much for reading and enjoying, and leaving such lovely synopses.  <3 @};-

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Secrets and Lies

Bella's confusion and embarrassment causing her to hide underneath the covers.  Edward blocking his nose and mouth to prevent him from attacking Bella.  In his mind he wants to talk with her  and wants to learn all about her.  Her secrets, past experiences, hopes and dreams.  He knows he is still tempted with the siren call of her blood, but his logical mind wants more from her.  He wants to know her.  He already has deep feelings and he knows Bella has no intention of telling anyone he pushed the van away or that he had superhuman speed to reach her in time.  Bella just needs to know for her own peace of mind.  Rosalie is freaking of course.  Selfish to the core only thinking of herself.  Killing another human in her mind means nothing she justifies by saying she is saving the family.  But by killing Bella she will completely divide the family.  Edward wants Bella in his life and so does Alice.  As usual Jasper will fall into Alice's side if push comes to shove.  Even Carlisle has no desire for Bella to be eliminated.  Neither Rose or Carlisle thought of what would have happened if Bella had been squashed by the van and the actual scent of her blood flowing into the pavement.  The reaction of Edward along with Jasper who hasn't been a vegetarian as long as the others.  Edward is protecting Bella.  Even if the vote at home reflects that Bella's life needs to be taken to save the family from discovery, I truly believe Edward will be camped in her room.  He will fight whoever has the nerve to try and hurt her.  Edward just hasn't realized that he has the power to make the decision of whether Bella is more important to him as a person rather than as a meal.  It's just like the mountain sheep he didn't hunt.  He made the choice.  Based on his thoughts and his arguments to Rose and Carlisle, Edward has made his decision.  He wants Bella for himself.  Edward said it himself "She's MINE!!!!"  His interest is more than just a quick snack, but someone he wants to get to know personally.  Rose is such a hotheaded witch.



Author's Response:

Very good point about what would have happened if Bella's blood had actually been spilled in that parking lot. None of them has thought of this yet, each for his/her own reasons/preoccupations/limitations. I also really like your point about the parallel between the mountain sheep and Bella, and that in each case, he has a CHOICE. Nice! I wonder when all the blind spots will be swept away, and he will finally see what life has brought him in Bella ... ?

As always, thanks so much for your lovely review!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Caliban

Edward is close to losing it.  His family is concerned about exposure.  Bella talks in her sleep, but she isn't staying at anyone's home.  Charlie rarely walks into her room while she's sleeping.  Bella promised not to tell anyone.  Carlisle has decided to wait with the decision of Bella.  His brothers are both upset with him because of physical threats and emotions.  He is still concerned and obsessed about Bella.  He needs her near for his peace.  He can't be far from her for too long. His need for her is growing stronger.  Bella is safe from his family this night, but he's worried about himself all the time.  I truly believe he's stronger than he gives himself credit for when it concerns Bella.  She is the only thing he really thinks about all the time.  He can't think of anyone or anything hurting her.  Protective to the point of distraction.  Protect her from illness, physical violence, and even ill thoughts.  Edward's anger is quick to flare when someone insults "HIS" Bella.



Author's Response:

Poor Edward, he really does feel very protective of Bella ... and he doesn't even really realize it yet, still sees himself as a monster. I agree that he needs her to show him his true self. But he has to dare to get close enough first ... When, oh when?

Such a lovely review you write, as always. Thank you!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Quasimodo

Charlie's sorrow about his little girl being hurt.  But his imagining the possibilities of how she could really look based on his experiences as a police officer.  Imagining his daughter bloody and broken like so many other parents' children he had been the first on the scene of an accident.  The depth of love he has for Bella is profound.  He needs to be there with her to protect her in anyway he can at this point.  Probably still has guilt for being away helping another force instead of looking after his little girl.  Edward reading his thoughts seeing Charlie's memories of the stages of his little girl.  Once Charlie is gone, Edward invades the Swan home to learn more about the woman he is obsessed with.  Seeing pictures of her growing up from little girl to now.  Once upon reaching Bella's room he looks at everything in her room.  Consuming her scent through his senses through her possessions.  Holding her pillow like it was her.  Smelling the scent as if he was cradled into Bella's neck.  The draw of her scent the craving for her blood, but above that his physical desire for her.  Wrapping himself into her quilt and rolling on the bed absorbing all of Bella into himself.  Once his desires got out of control, his guilt of stealing her innocent essence in the room, caused him to jump out of her window.  He had to make the room the same as he left it to hide his presence in the room.  Bella will sense him when she comes home.  His fragance will be among all her blankets and pillows.  Edward's desires for the woman are becoming stronger than his desires for her blood.  His body reacts to everything he learns about her, her scent, her things, the knowledge she kept the note he gave her with the medicines, and the deisre to keep her safe, protected, healthy, happy, and innocent.



Author's Response:

Little does Charlie know that in staying overnight with Bella he truly is keeping her safe. Even if Rosalie changes her mind and decides to disobey Carlisle, she can't do anything now, with Charlie in the room ....  

As always, you bring out all the touchstones in the chapter. Thank you so much for this. I love the images that you create in your review.

 




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