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Summary:

What do you do when the one you thought would love you forever up and leaves you? You move to Vegas of course!

It's 3 years after Edward left Bella. She's discovered a new life, and made new friends, but has never really gotten over Edward's abandonment.

When a chance encounter with Alice at a local Vegas night club brings the Cullens back full force into Bella's life, how will she react? Is there any hope for them to rekindle their friendships? More importantly, is there any chance that she and Edward can work through her distrust and his shame and guilt to get back their undying love, or does attention from a new love interest have Bella distracted?

Come on in to the world of Crooked Halo's and Ink Junkies, and find out!

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Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Lauren, Other Character, Renee, Rosalie, Tanya, Victoria
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Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: No Word count: 99051
[Report This] Published: November 19, 2009 Updated: December 19, 2013


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - Awakenings

Ana's reaction to the transition appeared to be calm along with the fire.  wondering what happened, why Bella had to leave, etc... Upon waking she knew Jake was the one talking with her and assuring her during the transition.  As well as speaking words of love.  Ana was very confused.  What surprised me as well as all the Cullens was that Ana couldn't stand the scent of human blood.  Very odd.  Jake saying that's my girl.  Another confused moment for her.  If the human blood in the cup reminded her of crap, then maybe seeing Bella with her deliciously smelling blood would be safe from Ana the newborn.  Her throat is raw and burning, but human blood isn't what will quench it for her.  So everyone heading out to hunt.  Whatever animals are in the area.  Jake will go as well.  Wonder if her appetite will be more like Jake's when he's a wolf and not be the blood, but the meat.  Only time will tell.  Definitely she's not acting as any other newborn the Cullens have ever been around.  Now in regards to what Edward can do to prove his love for Bella, that's a hard one.  She's pretty protective of herself not getting hurt again.  The fact that he was there to protect her against Robert.  He called Jake for help.  He took her to Forks to protect her from newborn Ana.  Knowing that between himself and the rest of the pack will protect her and Charlie from Victoria.  Wouldn't put it past Victoria to try and change Charlie so he'll be the one to destroy his own daughter.  That would be irony in itself.  Edward would be destroyed as well.  Charlie when he realized would be as well.  Victoria would be able to destroy 2 vampires who love Bella above their own lives.  Interesting.  Not that I want Charlie changed I don't.  But Victoria is not going to give up her goal to kill Bella (Edward's mate) to have her revenge against Edward for killing James.  Edward could try some romantic things with Bella.  It's the little things that prove you are in love with someone.  Not always the grand gestures convince someone of true feelings.  He's going to have to tell her the truth of why he left, he lied, and the depth of his feelings for her.  Hoping for lots of kissing and stuff.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 14, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - From The Ashes

Good chapter.  Edward and Bella closeness getting even better.  Glad Rosalie knocked Emmett in the head for his crude remarks.  Bella and Edward's alone time was good.  His story of the Phoenix and rebirth was closely related to their relationship especially with her eventually being changed into a vampire. Loved the idea of the tattoo and the correction of the quote to make it happy ending.  Edward's reaction was my absolute favorite to her tattoo and the chapter.  His excitement and lust from being shown it was the highlight of it.  The phoenix is a great legend.  A great new start, rebirth, renewal of things, a symbolism of those and many more.  Fits Edward and Bella to a tea.  Edward should have made an effort to find Bella a lot earlier than what actually happened by coincidence to him, but plan by Alice.



Author's Response:

I love the phoenix!! I couldn't think of anything more fitting for these two... so I'm really glad someone else did too!

Yeah Edward was a little slow on the uptake, and unfortunately for him, with the bad guys still out there... well, who knows what could happen next?  ;)

Thanks for reading and reviewing, it makes it all worth while!

L.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Straws, Camels & Broken Backs

Surprise for Bella when the Cullens returned with Ana.  Jake spending partial time at home with Billy and the other with Ana.  Bella feeling left out, unwanted, replaced by Ana, invisible.  Talking with Carlisle made it even worse that he wouldn't change Bella until her and Edward's issues are resolved.  Even if they consider her part of the family still need to reconcile with Edward since she would be with him.  They are lifemates.  Bella expressed angry when the rest of the family returned.  Verbally attacking both Ana and Rosalie.  Demanding what she ever did to Rosalie to make her dislike her.  insulting Rosalie enough she wanted to go after Bella.  Emmett and Jazz stopped her and Edward returned to place himself between them and Bella.  Bella angrily expressed her feelings towards Edward and her desires to spend forever with him.  Edward still loves her and expressed how can you doubt he loves her.  He told her repeatedly that he loved her and wanted her, but once told her a lie and she believed the lie.  Didn't take into account how many times he expressed that Bella was his life.  Looks like they are going to have a heart to heart discussion about them and where their relationship will go from now.  Looking forward to the next chapter.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 12, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Control & Compromise

Missed the updates, so glad you're back.  Great discussions on both sides from Bella and Edward regarding their feelings about being together.  Regarding Bella's being changed into a vampire.  Finally realized they both love each other and want to spend eternity together.  At least true feelings are known and agreed to share a room and spend as much time together.  Quite a make out session in their meadow.

 
Angel by eglantine Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 30]
Summary:

 

Bella is a librarian who is in need of some money to pay off her college loans. When her best friend Alice finds out about an interview at the Chicago branch of Elite Model Management, she decides to give it a try. A Victoria's Secret story, with a Cinderella twist. But is Edward her Prince Charming? All human.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No Word count: 6174
[Report This] Published: November 22, 2009 Updated: December 23, 2009


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Wonderful start to a new unique story line.  Alice and her lovely visions and feelings setting a positive note to the interview for Bella.  Bella being totally amazed at being picked.  Being able to call one of Alice's idols by her first name Jennifer.  Boy will Alice be jealous?  You bet.  Then coming downstairs on a cloud and totally out of the real world.  Stepping off the curb only to hear a taxi cab horn and yelling for her to get out of the street.  To her dazed condition words weren't registering to her, she froze staring into space, and then she felt warm arms around her waist lifting her onto the sidewalk and out of danger.  Oh boy a hero, are there really such individuals now a days.  Our hero is handsome, tall, nice bod, and messy bronze colored hair--can only be one man Edward Cullen.  Our favorite male lead character.  Once he asked if she was okay then second, she faints in his arms.  Looking forward to the continuance of the story as to her photo shoot for Victoria Secrets and to the budding acquaintance and possibily friendship/love interest of Edward.

 
Summary:

Bella Swan has been through a lot this past year since the death of her best friend, Jacob Black. After meeting Edward Cullen she decides now is the time for new beginnings, a little heat and a lot of fun! Will she allow him into her heart or just her bedroom? Rated M for Edward Cullen.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
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Series: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: No Word count: 14608
[Report This] Published: November 24, 2009 Updated: April 22, 2010


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Cupid Shuffle

Diffferent beginning with Jake dying and Bella closing a lot of herself off for a time.  Is Edward the same guy she was dancing with when Jake punched him out?  Glad Bella finally felt able to go out on the town again.  To find Edward as bartender at their favorite nightclub.  what's the odds?  Now they each have a strong connection towards the other.  After a lovely evening of dancing and playing twister Edward and Bella have taken the first step to making the other person theirs.



Author's Response:

We are very much Team Edward, so naturally Jake had to make a quick exit. However. we understand his love for her and her love for him as her best friend. You will see that play out later. We are in the middle of writing chapter 19 as we speak. We are very appreciative of your support!

Thanks!

CB9 & IP

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: I Know You Want Me

I'm jealous not only does Bella get to soak in a large tub with bubble bath, she has Edward join her.  While she is dreaming about him he is there with her.  talk about erotic dream with whipped cream and other  toppings.  Something I am sure she will suggest doing in real time instead of just dreaming about it.  I can imagine Edward hearing Bella scream his name while sleeping that would just about turn anyone on.  Looks like their relationship has taken another step forward to enrich their connection.  Really nice lemon.



Author's Response:

We are very fond of this lemon....and yes erotic dream!! The lemons continue to get hotter with each chapter...get ready!!

Thank you for your support!!

CB9 & IP

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: A Long December

Looks like Bella is going to make Edward work for it.  sounds like her week was busy with school and being with friends.  Alice and Jasper are so cute.  Everything they do is just so sweet and absolutely adorable.  So easy for them.  With Bella she's afraid of committment still not over Jake's death. Edward is really interested sent her a text after she left.  Now Bella decided towards the end of the week she wanted Edward and sent a most provocative text message  to Edward.  I bet he's there in 10 minutes.  He'll cut the time by speeding at warp speed to get there asap.  that poor boy doesn't know what he is in for -- Bella will totally surprise him and he'll be in shock with his mouth wide open and tongue dragging on the floor with steam coming out of his ears when he sees her.  Won't take long for any action to occur.



Author's Response:

Bella is always up to something! There is still a little chase going on...they have to prove themselves to each other. And yes, Bella is terrified of commitment after Jake dies. They weren't lovers...but when you lose someone so very close to you, it take time to heal and to love again. And maybe she is feeling a little guilty?

There is ALOT of action ahead in the upcoming chapters! We have 19 chapters posted and are working on 20 as we speak!

Thanks for your support!

CB9 & IP

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: I've Got A Feeling

I would say Bella had a great surprise for Edward.  He didn't disappoint Bella either.  The two of them are made for each other.  Working together like the final 2 pieces of the puzzle to completion.  Hoping Bella doesn't have a fit of guilt and remorse in the morning.  She and Edward are perfect for each other.



Author's Response:

So True! He completes her as she completes him.

Thanks for your support!

CB9 & IP

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: LoveSick

Edward having to leave Bella's side was almost unbearable.  His professor was an absolute jerk.  Edward should have reported Victoria and her stalkerish habits.  His life and any other male she decided she wanted and needed would be a lot safer and easier.  Edward left a very sweet note.  Bella is just running away from her deeper feelings and attraction to Edward.  Bella believed she could maintain their friendship to just sexual in nature.  It won't happen.  Their mutual attraction is deeper than just sex.  Alice is so cute while shopping.  Her budding relationship with Jasper is awesome.  The hotel room sounded marvelous.  Definitely living the other halves life.  All those delight extras.  I thought Edward's text was sweet to Bella.  There weren't any feelings in that note.  A friend can wish someone have a good time while away for the weekend.  Of course, Edward is beginning to have feelings towards Bella.  Currently he is confused as to what they would call their relationship.  He'll be in shock when he learns it is just for sex.

 
Summary:

Edward falls in love with Bella from a distance as they share the same route to work.  Bella can't help feeling attracted to Edward as well but, being a bit of a cynic when it comes to love, she dismisses him as an impossible fantasy.  She prefers the comfort and safety of the content, but passionless, relationship she has with Jake.  When Edward and Bella actually meet, however, she considers giving the impossible a chance. 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
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Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No Word count: 6747
[Report This] Published: November 28, 2009 Updated: May 01, 2010


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Love the premise of the story.  Both attracted to each other, both take the same path and same time to see the other each working day.  They both are obsessed with the other.  Bella is in a rut with her current boyfriend, Jake.  Things are stagnant now, no spark, no fire, no spontaneousness, but comfortable.  Bella is looking for the spark and fire they had 3 years ago.  Jake is taking her for granted.  Why is he going to work 30 minutes early and staying 30 minutes late?  For instance, today he could have used those 30 minutes and continued after Bella's morning shower.  With Bella and Edward today has been the closest they have been to each other.  Both highly aware of the others' presence.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the encouraging words!  And it's good to know that I'm getting my point across. =)

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Bella is wondering if she has fallen for her crush Mr Perfect.  Only to find out he works with her boyfriend Jacob.  Small world.  Of course, she doesn't know Mr Perfect's name.  Jake had a date all planned for the evening.  After being Mr Avoid Me this morning.  Now he's proposing marriage to her.  Oh Oh what's gonna happen.  Bella has doubts about their relationship.  Who knows what she will say to the question.  will Jake get to unwrap her surprise package or will the evening blow up in both their faces.  Curious minds want to know.  I wouldn't want to be in Bella's shoes now for anything. 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Edward about killed himself for his daily glance at the beautiful Bella.  When she smiled at him going into her building it made Edward's day.  Tanya was wrong, Bella did smile at Edward. Tanya's after Lauren.  Does Lauren swing that way?  Or is Lauren Jacob's prework and overtime dalliance?  If Jacob heard Tanya mention the name Bella to Edward would not be too good for Edward at all.  Bella is not a common name for sure.

I personally would like to have chapters issued when written rather than putting on hiatus until the entire story is completed.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the wonderful review!  I'd prefer not to answer your questions and leave it a surprise, though ;)

And I will definately take your preference regarding updates into consideration. 

Thanks again, I really appreciate the time you've taken to review!

 
Summary:

A mosaic freely drawn from book and movie, wanders into AU as the story unfolds ... ....

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Showing is stronger than telling.  Forks was just like I remember it.  I felt the short little hairs on the back of my neck stand straight on end.  Cut your losses before they can become catastrophic.   “It’s not fair,” I say aloud.   The night wind swirls, lifting the fine surface powder from the tops of the snowdrifts, coating us in diamond dust.  

 


Then weave for us a garment of brightness

 

Moving to Forks, spending the last eighteen months of her childhood with a father she barely knew ... it seemed like a good idea at the time.

 

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A/N about the rating: The narrative in this story ranges between PG-13 (most of it) and R (occasional language and occasional non-graphic reference to mature themes). An isolated technicality in a late chapter has necessitated changing the rating from R to NC-17, however R is a much better measure of the farthest outer limit of what the reader will encounter in this tale.

 

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delicious dreamer's lovely banner for garment of brightness

I never in my wildest dreams thought that something I wrote would inspire someone to make something like this.   I am so touched.  THANK YOU DD!


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: No Word count: 59050
[Report This] Published: November 28, 2009 Updated: February 13, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Edward

First day of school is hard on anyone.  Especially in a small town and your father is the Chief of Police.  Very noticable when a new face is on campus.  Rumor mill runs rampart in small towns, especially when your dad talks about you coming.  Edward being down right rude stating she stinks.  Being that far away from her a normal human would have no idea or senses wouldn't work that far away.  So Edward must be a vampire in the story.  Surprised with the inside of her mouth bleeding that Edward didn't go nuts and take her right then and there.  Why would he humiliate her in front of the entire class?  Very ungentlemanly of him.  Bella just wants to pass by with no attention, but since small town and Edward's outburst that won't happen.  She'll be even more the center of attention at school.  Which will make her even more self conscious about herself.



Author's Response:

I love your "Spark Notes" to the text.  Very cool, and very to the point!

Yes, Edward certainly is a vampire.  Bella's thought ~ I would have given my life right then and there ~ little did she know how terribly terribly close she came to doing just that!

Poor Edward, he couldn't very well say "She smells so good I want to eat her alive!"  "Stinks" was perhaps the best he could come up with on such short notice.   He clumsily humiliated her.  She unknowingly tortured him.   Perhaps they were even after all ...

Poor Bella, yes, she is the center of attention, which is indeed the last thing she ever wanted.  Thank you for your review.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 29: The Ghost in the Wishing Well

Debate and Alice's visions at home regarding Bella have majority of the Cullens upset.  Esme wants to move to avoid hurting Bella.  Alice adores her already and wants her to be her friend.  Carlisle has no intention of hurting her.  He just wants Edward to retrieve his journal. Jasper had a passing thought of killing her making it look like a bear attack.  Horrid idea.  Alice very upset with that vision.  Rose and her nasty comments/thoughts about Edward's decision to save Bella from the van.  Maybe should have let the van hit her is her opinion.  But the blood from that crash would have caused all the vampires thirsty for the blood.  Edward climbed in her window.  He can't find the journal.  Even checked under her pillow trying to locate it.  Bella moved and the blanket lower revealing his journal tightly wrapped up by her arms close to her chest.  The journal is close to her heart.  Bella has a death grip on it.  Edward doesn't want to wake her so he's going to wait it out.  I guess hide while she has her human moments in the morning.  Edward already decided to protect her from anyone thinking of harming her.



Author's Response:

"Bella has a death grip on it." Omg that is the BEST line! I'm going to frame it!

As always, your summary sparkles. And you've laid out the balance of intention in the family: Carlisle, Esme, Alice and Edward all definitely want to protect Bella. I wonder if that makes her safe, now that a majority of the Cullens are on her side ...? Only time will tell.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.  <3

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Tell it to the Rain

New viewpoint to the travels for Bella to stay with her dad.  Also on the many moves Bella had to endure when she moved with Renee.  The pain of losing all her friends at Forks and the summers with Charlie.  Now she has finally gotten to Forks at her father's house.  Analyzing her old room and where she will go from here.  Crying in her room and suppressing her pain with the quilt in her mouth so no one can hear.



Author's Response:

Wow, NICE synopsis.  Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: More

Great Bella was the center of conversation at the start of lunch.  All the comments about her aroma displeasing Edward.  Then the conversation turned to the Cullens.  The fact they are foster children.  That they are dating each other.  Then claiming Edward is gay.  Right like we all believe that of him.  But his remark to Lauren would need an intelligent person to understand it.  Lauren being an airhead didn't realize he knew she wanted more than just a date.  She wanted to get laid.  Of course, Edward can read thoughts, that explains when he told Lauren she should respect herself more.  Wonder if Bella will have any additional classes with Edward in the afternoon.



Author's Response:

Lovely synopsis, as always.  I like this part best: 

<< Then claiming Edward is gay.  Right like we all believe that of him.   >>

:-)

<<  Wonder if Bella will have any additional classes with Edward in the afternoon.  >>

Like Bella, I guess we will all just have to wait and see ...

 

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Can't Get to Heaven

Poor Bella her first day at new high school didn't go well at all for her.  First embarrassment Edward saying she stinks.  Then all the conversation at lunch regarding the Cullen's relationships and Edward's rude remark.  Next came PE the horror of most high school students.  Especially for Bella being clumsy.  Trying to avoid hitting any balls towards anyone or running into them.  She heard someone yell watch out and she bangs into Mike and they roll over each other and the floor.  Jessica is mad because she likes Mike.  Then she made herself a promise to change her schedule to avoid Edward Cullen.  When she arrived at office, Edward was there trying to change his schedule.  He was unable to change his so Bella figured what chance had she to get hers changed.  If Mr Gorgeous can't get it done why would she be able to.  So driving home on the worst first day of school ever.  Having to sit next to Edward for the next 6 months. Oh boy, let the humiliation continue for poor Bella.



Author's Response:

I really enjoy reading your synopses!  "Mr. Gorgeous", and "the worst first day of school ever".  What could be worse?   Maybe one shouldn't ask ...  :P

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Yellow Cabinets

Bella getting the third degree from both parents.  How embarrassing of her mother talking about birth control.  It's her first day, she doesn't even know a lot of people yet.  Of course, her thoughts would flow to Edward when her mother questioned about good looking boys.  Edward is so above good looking, he's gorgeous, greek god, David carved in marble by Michelangleo, Mr Perfect. Now she's thinking about Edward and condoms.  Bella's mom is something else besides scatterbrained.  So Edward hunted and is now heading north to the snow.  Totally humiliated Bella at school and now he bails.  Looking forward to how Bella's days at school either improve or get worse for her.   



Author's Response:

Yes it seems that the embarrassment never ends for poor Bella.   She can't even get away from it at home.   I promise to give her other things to think about though.   Scout's honor!  Thank you for your lovely synopsis and review.  Always a treat.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Bridge to Nowhere

Bella's nerves up in arms.  Dreading seeing Edward at school after his rudeness.  Only to find out his car wasn't in the parking lot, he wasn't at lunch, and he wasn't in Biology.  This happened for the rest of the week.  Bella was ready to give it to him, but he wasn't there.  She had no intention of asking anyone if they knew where he was.  The rest of the family was there, but not Edward.  At least Bella was making friends.  Angela asking advice about getting Eric to notice her.  Bella had learned the names of all the people at Jessica's table.  At least the gossip had changed to other topics than Edward Cullen or his siblings.  Thus taking the gossip of his insults from Bella.  Sounds like the rest of the week was a little less stressful.  Bella still concerned about Edward not being there a big black hole at her biology table. Bella appeared to have settled nicely into school.  Knowing the people around her and not having loud humiliating comments made about her from Edward.  Looking forward to Edward's return and the van incident.  since you said you were following the movie rather than the book.  Bella is getting into a nice routine no pressure. 



Author's Response:

Yes, indeed, Bella is in an Edward-free zone right now.  I wonder what she will do when that ... changes ... 

Thanks s much for the wonderful synopsis/review.   Always a pleasure!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Una Rama Oscura

Another day of school for Bella with Jessica hounding her about Edward.  Edward using minds to keep track of Bella and her whereabouts.  Also the questions she is being asked wants the answers.  Bella is being very quiet so Edward is getting frustrated.  Bella responded negatively to Jessica's question if she would go with Edward if he asked.  Bella thinking she isn't sure yes or no.  The guys are calling Edward gay.  She wonders if she should go out with him if he asks to stop the mean rumors.  Edward is anything but gay.  His feelings are leaning towards Bella.  A part of Edward is glad she would say no for her protection.  Edward has another part that he is a little disappointed that she would say no.  A part of him would love to date her and get to know her as a person better.  Learn things about her besides just her blood is his addicted drug.  She is his obsession.  Now after class Bella walking through the parking lot into the forest and hugging a tree.  Edward followed her into the forest.  Wonder what will happen now them being totally alone.  Interesting to see what will occur.



Author's Response:

I just love the way you word your summaries! 

... the questions she is being asked wants the answers ...

... Edward is anything but gay.  His feelings are leaning towards Bella ...

... Learn things about her besides just her blood is his addicted drug ...

*sigh*

Wonder what will happen now them being totally alone

Hee hee!  So do I!



Author's Response:

I just love the way you word your summaries! 

... the questions she is being asked wants the answers ...

... Edward is anything but gay.  His feelings are leaning towards Bella ...

... Learn things about her besides just her blood is his addicted drug ...

*sigh*

Wonder what will happen now them being totally alone

Hee hee!  So do I!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Harry Clearwater's Famous Fish Fry

Nice gathering over at the Swan's house for dinner.  Memories of the past and thanking for the red truck given to Bella.  Billy talking about salmon and looking at Bella as if his words have a double meaning.  Made Bella very uncomfortable what is Uncle Billy trying to tell her.  Then we have Sedna's story about losing her brother to the icekillers. Are they the cold ones?  Are Sedna Orca whales?  Or purely mystical?



Author's Response:

Thank you for such a lovely synopsis, not to mention pinpointing key clues to where this story is going.  Is Bella like the salmon?   Tanya and Edward (the cold ones) hunting seal up past the Arctic Circle.   Will he stay there up north in the dark?  Or will he, also, return ... ?  @};-

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Caught in the Undertow

Edward is still gone.  I'm heartbroken.  He's not back yet.  Just think if I feel this way, what Bella is feeling.  Talk about being more than just BLUE.  Every day empty parking lot, empty seat at the Cullen's table, and empty seat at her Biology table.  How much more can she stand not seeing Mr Hunk. The man with everything face, body, money, snazzy car, eventually a marvelous personality and a giant heart and love for Bella.  Too bad he only has eyes for her.  Bella actually misses him and wants more information.  Her new friends at lunch do nothing but talk so she learns more and more about the Cullens.  Bella also pries information from the town's best information gatherer.  Her father Charlie being Chief of Police always has all the information about everyone in town.

I'm looking forward to Edward's return.  Sounds like it will be next chapter from the teaser.  Thanks for that by the way. 



Author's Response:

I love your reviews.  You capture the entire chapter in a single paragraph, and go straight to the heart of the matter.

How much more can she stand not seeing Mr Hunk. The man with everything face, body, money, snazzy car, eventually a marvelous personality and a giant heart and love for Bella.  Too bad he only has eyes for her. Bella actually misses him and wants more information.

 

This is just great: 

Bella also pries information from the town's best information gatherer.  Her father Charlie being Chief of Police always has all the information about everyone in town.

 

Glad you liked the teaser.  Edward's return is ready for validation.  

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Parsifal

Master Edward has returned to Forks.  Dreading to return to school and be tormented by the scent of her blood.  He left Alaska and Tanya's forward behavior.  Alice said things will be pretty sure Edward won't kill Bella.  He describes her as plain and ordinary with her shoulders hunched.  She does that not to be noticed, but in a small town anything new is a novelty.  The boys have suggestive and lustful thoughts towards Bella.  The girls don't really care about her.  The girls are just nice on the surface and uncaring inside.  Edward can smell her from the parking lot.  Nervous, doesn't want to have Esme and Carlisle ashamed of him.  Emmett what's his deal trying to convince Edward just take her and then bury her far away.  She'll be found in either months or not ever.  Emmett she is the chief of police's daughter.  Charlie would never stop searching for her alive or dead.  Eventually finding her and investigating how she got there and how she was murdered.  I think Edward needs to get a good look at Bella's face and hear her voice to realize she's not ordinary or plain.  Looking forward to meeting face to face either in cafeteria or biology table.



Author's Response:

Yes, in a way, Edward returning to school is really like walking into the lion's den -- where his better nature is the hapless victim, and his inner monster is the lion.   Nasty to have all that inside, I think.   I love your thoughts about Emmett's suggestion, and how Charlie would react to his daughter's disappearance:

Emmett what's his deal trying to convince Edward just take her and then bury her far away.  She'll be found in either months or not ever.  Emmett she is the chief of police's daughter.  Charlie would never stop searching for her alive or dead.  Eventually finding her and investigating how she got there and how she was murdered. 

And this is great, too:

I think Edward needs to get a good look at Bella's face and hear her voice to realize she's not ordinary or plain.  

He will, of course, all in good time.  The meeting is indeed next.  Hope you enjoy!

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Hungry Eyes

Musical chairs a la biology.  Bella's regular table is being used by Tyler and another girl.  Edward is in the back row with the window open.  Bella directed to an open seat up front to lab partner with Lauren Mallory.  Bella  upset about the seating change.  She turns and sticks her tongue out at Edward.  funny, Edward deserves a lot worse for his actions.  Took a lot of guts for Bella to ask Lauren if she stinks.  Lauren said no Edward is just an asshole.  Okay speak your mind Lauren don't hold anything back now.  Edward still blaming Bella for everything.  Alice sending visions his way to stop him from massacring the entire biology class.  Alice sent them when he first met Bella and also now during class.  The visions of visits from Volturi among others.  Each worse than the others.  The most are the disappointed faces of Esme and Carlisle.  He must resist the temptation.  He is even now smelling her scent and hearing her pulse with blood rushing through her body.  He wants Bella, he needs Bella, and he still wants to hide the family's secret.  He resents Bella for moving to Forks from Phoenix.  She was sent to torture Edward and tempt him not to follow the path of vegetarian he was taught from Carlisle.  All of which are absurd, Bella is just living with  her dad and going to school like every other teenager in Forks.  Seems like he has controlled his reactions today.  Bella still finds Edward to be the most beautiful creature she has ever seen, but angry with the way he humiliates her.  The humiliation and embarrassment from the entire student body of the school by his actions and words.  Thank goodness for Alice and her visions.  Also for Edward's gift of mind reading to receive her visions when temptation strikes the hardest at Edward.



Author's Response:

Wow, you really make this chapter sound so exciting, and tense!  I especially love these comments:

Okay speak your mind Lauren don't hold anything back now.  

and 

He wants Bella, he needs Bella, and he still wants to hide the family's secret.  He resents Bella for moving to Forks from Phoenix.  She was sent to torture Edward and tempt him not to follow the path of vegetarian he was taught from Carlisle.  All of which are absurd, Bella is just living with  her dad and going to school like every other teenager in Forks. 

Lovely capture, as always.

Yes, if not for Edward's gift of mind reading, Bella would be dead long ago.   And Edward's life would be cursed even worse than it is at this moment ...

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 




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