Your donations help keep this site running,
thank you very much for the support!
Penname: romancaholic [Contact]
Real name: Carol Travers
Status: Member
Member Since: June 19, 2009
Website:
Beta-reader:

[Report This]
 
 
Reviews by romancaholic
 
A Kick in the Balls by mutt229 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 205]
Summary:

stories/67611/images/MyBannerMaker_Banner2.JPG

Bella is entering her senior year of college with her two best friends and roommates, Alice and Emmett. Her final year in college is going to be one for the recordbooks, as Bella and her crew invite two new roommates to share their house with them.

 

Rated M/NC-17 for adult themes and lemons. AH/OOC

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alec, Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Carlisle, Charlie, Claire, Edward, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Gianna, Heidi, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Kate, Lauren, Mike, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Tanya, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No Word count: 147307
[Report This] Published: November 09, 2009 Updated: August 22, 2011


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: At The End of The Day (born2speakmirth & shabbyapple)

Waking up in the arms of Edward early in the morning.  How many of us wish it was me to wake up with him?  I know I do.  Glad Bella pushed Edward to talk about why so possessive and why contact between them was halted.  Edward's story was so heartbreaking.  What a low life Heidi was, she couldn't have loved Edward and did what she did with his frat brother.  She just wanted Harvard education and having Edward on her arm.  So she would have status in society, marry a doctor, have long time wealth, Harvard grad, and gorgeous man as hers.  Nothing to do with any love feelings or never would have hurt him so deep.  How do you apologize for cheating with someone you don't even care about just to get into a university grad program.  Very scheming and controlling individual with set goals in life.  Anyone matching Edward's critera would have worked for her.  Bella understood how he felt and forgave him.  Her self talk about forgiving him too easily was there.  As she said he could have talked to her, but he admitted he never really let her in, just knew it would fail.  Edward set up their relationship to fail because he didn't trust any woman after Heidi.  Edward knew he had to prove himself to Bella, explain to her the truth.  Bella wanted to tell Edward of her past life, but was already getting too drained from the discussion of the possibility of their relationship of "us".  Bella's lawyer Alec showed up really liked Edward wanted him for a new boy toy.  Bella told both men I don't share.  As the day at her grandparents home progressed the weight of what she was doing weighed heavily on her emotions.  She found Edward in the music room.  Had him play Bella's Lullaby written by her mother. Edward realized didn't have an ending so he was planning on writing one.  He was able to play on the superior grand piano.  I wonder if Bella will have the piano(s) shipped to her home.  Bella had Edward play the lullaby over and over again.  Ever time he played it allowed her to let her grief and loss feelings out.  Inside of them hiding and being buried far below the surface, she allowed them out to experience them.  

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: I Got a Feeling

Bella has so much to deal with her memories, the house, the possessions, the money, publishing company, her feelings of being unlovable or unable to love, and if anyone had truly loved her.  With Edward was the turmoil of their budding relationship and the doubts and fears of failure and unacceptance.  With Edward, Jane, and Alec, Bella  went throughout her grandparents' house.  Making remarks about certain pieces and whether to keep or not.  She was given a box of things her mother had set aside for her.  In the box were items that surprised Bella.  Her mother's personal journals.  Her own words of excitement when Bella was born and that Bella was finally the purpose of her life.  It showed a side to Bella's childhood that made what was said and done only  1/2 truths and twisted truths as well.  She found a lullaby written by her mother that expressed her love for Bella.  Bella had Edward play it for her a number of times.  When she was ready to leave, Edward assured her he placed the lullably in her attache case.  He carried it for her.  The four of them went to dinner and talked about a lot of things.  Bella and Edward walked to the hotel.  They were learning more about the real person each of them were inside and the outside factors that have affected them.  Bella looking at Edward and telling him she doesn't want to mess up their relationship and Edward doesn't either.  The look on Bella's face told Edward that he was a very important part of her life.  Walking the streets of Manhatten kissing and cuddling all the way back to the hotel.  While getting ready for bed, Bella opened her cell phone to an array of messages.  The only truly urgent messages came from Angela.  She text her back.  It was regarding Tanya and her ploys to take over Bella's position on the soccer team.  Wonder if Alice is aware of it.  Bella was away on family business matters.  Tanya is using that to state Bella has no loyalty to the team to miss practices and shouldn't be allowed to lead the team as captain due to her lack of commitment to the team and their needs.  Hopefully the coach will see through these elements and await Bella's return for explanation.  Bella and Edward are lying in bed and Bella is angry at Tanya.  Wonder if sleep will be in Bella's future.  The early morning hours will have Bella and Edward flying home in a private jet.  The six hours Bella and Edward have been planning to be together just might be the only place Bella will be able to sleep.  She's wound up tight after the messages from Angela.  Just when Bella feels she has closed the door on a portion of her turmoil and darkness of her past new things to worry and concern herself spring forward.  Looks like both Edward and Bella plan on doing this relationship right, move slow.  Get to know each other and accept the true individual they both are with their strong points as well as their faults.  Both realize that neither of them are perfect.  Their past lives and events have affected them into the person they are today.  Looking forward to future chapters.  Can't wait to see what they do to Tanya and her games.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Not Ready to Make Nice (born2speakmirth & shabbyapple)

Bella and Edward finally home from New York.  Bella's nightmare was horrible.  Just figured Tanya was ruining her soccer career and her life.  I am sure if Tanya sees Edward and knows Bella is going with him, she will make a play to take him away.  She thinks she is all that.  NOT!!!! Having Edward in her hot tub brought back some delicious memories, but having Tanya poke her head up from the water.  Yuck!!!  Walking in to the porch with Emmett blocking the door.  Glad he was so easy to forgive her.   The man thinks about nothing much but his stomach.  Bella and her talk with the coach went well.  Good old Alice and her revenge schemes.  Never fail, and when she gets it delivered by the gorgeous bronze haired god who can say no.  Bella included the other seniors on the team to go along with make Tanya a fool/whiner.  Let her whining make her into a crying whiner baby with no talent.  So the game will show her lack of being a team player.  Just a glory hound.  I think I would have dropped the enchilada's pan if I heard that wonderfully sensual voice behind me too.  Thank goodness she had enough wits to place on the table before it fell.  No one wants to kiss and tell to Alice.  Alice must be dying not having the up to date information on everyone.  After everything Bella has gone through especially over the weekend, why would James return into her life?  She doesn't need or want him for anything.  After all she has Edward who she's crazy about now.  Bella slam the door in his face.  Tell him to go away and die or something.  Bella doesn't need any more garbage to bring her down.  She is trying to put her life back together and find/discover how to live a normal life looking for love/companionship.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Bad Romance (born2speakmirth & shabbyapple)

What a shock for Bella to open the door to James standing there.  She does the normal Bella thing when mentally overloaded she faints and starts to fall to the ground.  James caught her. Emmett is furious that James had the nerve to come around.  So was Alice.  Rosalie is actually friends with James's new girlfriend, Victoria.  Emmett insisted James put her down on the couch.  Alice insisted they all step outside to talk.  Rose is confused why Emmett is so angry and Bella's reaction.  Bella finally came to with verbal urging from Edward.  Bella wanted retribution for what James had done to her.  She walked outside stepped in front of Emmett verifying where the thumb should be to make a fist to strike someone.  She punched James and knocked him to the ground.  Making Rose even more confused until Bella said he was her ex.  Eye contact gave Rose the information she needed and she requested James and Victoria (Torie) to leave.  She wanted to talk with Torie alone later.  Bella's hand was throbbing.  She went inside to get ice on it.  Edward checked out her hand, said it didn't appear to be broken.  He took bowl of ice cubes upstairs with Bella following him.  Edward wanted explanation of what went down outside.  She told him.  Edward became livid, if he had known prior James wouldn't have left the premises alive.  Yeah, brave and handsome Edward.  Everyone's knight in shining armor especially Bella's.  Always there to support her, protect her, and right all the wrongs done to his beloved.  Bella is enamored even more of Edward and can't find the words to express her feelings.  She locked all the doors, turned on the shower, and brought Edward into the bathroom with her.  What happened with them was sensually delightful and satisfying.  Looking forward to the 2nd act, where it's Edward's turn...

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: May 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Higher Love (born2speakmirth & shabbyapple)

Bella and Edward's joint shower was rewarding for both of them.  Both glowing with happiness afterwards.  Bella at practice the next day getting questioned to waive the 24 hour before game rule for Tanya on her 21st birthday.  Angela gave her a heads up to the question and convinced her it could work in their plan for Tanya. Tanya's not too bright about things.  Since she has all the things she thinks she wants like the position on the team and possibly taking over as captain.  Celebrating her birthday will cause huge hangovers and headaches.  Not only was Bella jazzed about the plan but Alice picked it up and extended it.  Adding two gorgeous men to help her really get Tanya hammered.  It worked, but poor Edward having to protect himself all night from molestation.  At least Alice got both men Edward and Jasper out safely from Tanya's clutches.  Edward went to sleep totally contented snuggled up next to Bella.  Hearing "I love you" falling from her lips.  Hoping she was directing those 3 little words to him.  Happy Bella and Edward are on the same page and working on their relationship.  Looking forward to Tanya making a complete fool of herself on the field in front of everyone during the exhibition game.  Then maybe the coach will have enough evidence that all her whining is just that whining.  She has no skills or ability to back up her claims against Bella and the team.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Give Me One Moment in Time (born2speakmirth & shabbyapple)

Sex legs all around for both Emmett and Bella.  Athletes must be in the same club -- strength equates to victory.  Bella's is on raw nerves.  On edge with Edward.  Bella and Edward have been skirting around their sexual tension between them.  Implications have been made back and forth by them.  Teasing, starting something never to completion, will it happen or will it not.  Bella implied before she left for the day of the game later.  Once game over Edward picked her up at the gym.  Tension thick between them.  Nothing said, but innuendo flying back and forth.  Confusion running high for Bella after the game strong hints towards yes, once leaving Padres Pizza distancing occurs.  What's up with Edward?  Already to go in the morning then crawling once they arrive home.  Bella is not sure if Edward would even be joining her to sleep much less anything else.  While Bella watches the building storm on the patio, he came behind her.  The storm and high tension building for both the weather and the couple.  Both are dealing with love emotions not just release. Edward asked "Be mine Bella"  awesome statement/question.  Bella responded "Yes" incredible time for both of them.  Bella with OCD insisting on a shower because of sweaty bodies.  Okay, the start of a marvelous evening.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: July 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Mini Chapter 22 (born2speakmirth & shabbyapple)

Not a great way to wake up bloodcurling scream from Alice.  Scare you and make you jump out of bed.  Only to find Alice upset because Edward was in the shower while she was using the facilities.  She walked in probably half asleep doing morning routine only to notice by either voice or height that it wasn't Bella but Edward.  Awkward.  Alice could have given him a towel, but she wanted to done and dressed.  Bella with a hickey.  I thought her punishment was harsh.  A red welt on his bum not fun.  You know Edward will get her back for that.  No hickeys until after soccer games completed.  Definitely an interesting morning in the house.  Alice probably woke everyone else in the house and the talk about Edward being in Bella and Alice's mutual bathroom.  Cat is out of the bag so to speak as to what happened between Bella and Edward the night before.  Not only the screaming, but also Bella's appearance.  Stubble burns on the cheeks.  It's fun getting them, but not trying to cover them the following morning.

Congratulations on your news.  Hoping the illness parts of the first trimester ease up a little for you.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: August 23, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Rosalie and her questions about screams the previous evening.  Bella trying to keep them secret.  Like you can keep those screams private.  The louder you were the more Edward liked it I'm sure.  So now you have Esme and Carlisle coming over for dinner thanks to Rosalie.  Bella has no idea what she is cooking.  She has them coming over at 7 and Rose has volunteered to help.  Which means Bella will be doing it all herself.  Then when she starts to freak she talks to Rosalie about boyfriend's parents coming to dinner.  Jealous Edward is upset about boyfriend since when.  Until he finds out the dinner guest parents are his own.  Oh I'm your boyfriend and smirks at her.  Edward's lucky she didn't smack him.  As if he didn't consider her his girlfriend especially after the things they had done the evening before.  Still funny about Alice and Edward in the bathroom together.  Bella just needs to relax and cook like she does all the time.  Everything will work out fine. 

Congrats on your second little one.

 
Summary:

A winner of the Canon Christmas Contest.  One-shot.  Bella has her first (and last) Christmas in Phoenix with Renee and her new husband, Phil, as she wrestles with the decision to leave and live with Charlie.  Little does she know that her decision effects more than just her immediate family.

Canon Christmas Contest Winner

Thank you to Readergoof for the lovely second banner!

 


Categories: Pre-Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Charlie, Edward, Phil, Renee
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 3534
[Report This] Published: November 13, 2009 Updated: November 13, 2009


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Unique idea that Bella would approach both her mother and father on Christmas with her desire to return to Forks.  Almost like giving each of them an additional present from her.  A present that would answer both of what their heart desired.  Charlie's desire to spend more time with and getting to know his daughter.  Renee's desire to be with her husband when he traveled on the road with his team.  It would appeal to her free spirit to be carefree and open to new adventures.  Even Bella without her knowledge, of course, would have her heart's desire fulfilled.  She received an even deeper understanding and love for her father during her time in Forks.  As well as meeting the man of her dreams.  Edward's experience was nothing out of the ordinary in his opinion.  Until Alice's vision which she deliberately hid from him.  Making it all the more of a surprise when Bella arrived in Forks and stole his heart.  Nice to have a prequel of where each Edward and Bella were mentally before the unexpected for both of them occurred.  Meeting their one and only one.



Author's Response:

Thank you! This is the most "canon" story I've written, and I'm happy it was so well-received.

xoxo Sarah

 
Summary:

It's almost senior year and Bella's got it all figured out. She's got a great boyfriend, amazing friends, and a bright future. But when her best friend returns home from vacation with news of a girlfriend, it sets in motion a chain of events which will have Bella doubting everything she thought she knew.

Rated NC17 for underage drinking and adult themes.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: No Word count: 29413
[Report This] Published: November 18, 2009 Updated: September 01, 2010


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Bella's summer without Edward was long and drawn out.  Granted she was dating Mike for a couple of the months, but not really serious with him.  If french kissing made her ill with Mike, he definitely wasn't the right one.  Bella upset with Edward not contacting her for awhile while his family was in the Hamptons.  Only to find out the reason was a girl Tanya.  Who currently goes to school in San Francisco.  Alice had planned a group birthday party for Bella.  All her friends even her best friend Edward was there.  Mike rode with Bella to the restaurant and sat next to her.  Edward was distracted throughout the entire evening.  Bella found out he was having problems with Tanya.  Tanya was miffed because he didn't call her for a couple of days.  Oh wow, long distance relationships are hard because real life sometimes causes delays, difficulties, problems, or in the case of high school students homework, projects, sporting events, friends, etc...  So she was ignoring Edward.  Her loss if she loses him.  Lauren, Jessica, and Angela all ask her about her relationship with Edward.  Bella states just friends.  Edward is there to support Bella through tough times and Bella is there to help Edward through his trying times as well.  Bella during all these events including her dream realizes she has feelings for Edward.  She thinks it is just a crush.  The Cullens have started a tradition of a Halloween party.  Bella picked up Mike and went to the party.  Mike is upset because Bella never supports him.  She never spends her available time with him always seems to be with the Cullens especially Edward.  He is very jealous of Edward and Bella's friendship.  Upon entering the home for the party, Mike takes the beer into the kitchen.  Bella was curious about Edward's costume he had been talking about was so good.  So she started to talk with him.  Dr. Acula with vampire teeth.  Really liked that--very funny.  Mike didn't see her at the front door with Alice and Jasper so spoke with one of their friends and the response where is Bella the answer where do you think she is.  Of course, that meant she was with Edward.  Mike pulled her away from Edward during their conversation and started a huge argument.  He broke up with Bella in front of all of their classmates using Edward as the reason and the way Bella looks at him when they talk.  She felt horrible.  She had made the decision to stay with Mike because Edward was already taken.  Bella leaves to go into the kitchen.  Alice comes in and talks with her.  Edward arrives ready to kill Mike for his actions.  Protective, angry when Bella is hurt, also when he learned they were dating slightly upset, possibly jealous.  Bella asks Edward to make her some drinks.  She gets drunk.  Two guys who don't know her start to teach her to drink shots.  Phase two was using her body to drink shots from.  Edward found them as they started the licking of salt on her neck/collarbone before the shot and taking the lime from her mouth/lips.  Edward punched the one taking the shot (again protective, jealous, worried because he couldn't see her) Edward kicked them both out.  Bella had danced with Jacob at the party and he promised to get her home.  Bella in disgrace again, embarrassed in front of Edward.  What must he be thinking? Bella wants fresh air.  They sit on the couch outside and start by holding hands.  Edward places his arm around her and she lays her head on his shoulder.  He lays his head on her head.  Very cozy.  A little more closeness than just best friends.  Bella assumed she went for the kiss to Edward by herself and he pushed her away in rejection.  Not.  Edward responded to the kiss and from the description appeared to meet her half way.  He broke the kiss for multiple reasons. 1) He had a girlfriend and he was being unfaithful 2) Bella was hurt because Mike humiliated her by breaking up in front of the entire class 3) Bella was drunk.  Didn't want to take advantage of her 4) Edward was confused.  The kiss caused him to have feelings for Bella he didn't understand.  Thus staying in his room all the following day thinking about the kiss.  The conversation in the library Bella was embarrassed and afraid of losing her best friend so she wanted to forget the kiss ever happened. she blamed the alcohol for the kiss.  Edward wasn't so ready to just dismiss the kiss.  He went along with it because he thought that was what Bella really wanted.  That it was a mistake caused by her need(comfort) for the actions of Mike, getting drunk, Aro and Caius, etc....  Mike turned Bella's normal lunch friends against her and Bella sat alone for lunch with Edward, Alice, and Jasper.  Lauren actually saw the kiss.  She said Bella attacked Edward and would keep it to herself.  Because to mention the kiss at school would be bad for Bella for kissing a guy everyone knows has a girlfriend somewhere else.  Tangled web when talking things out hasn't been done and brushing events, feelings, reactions, etc... under the rug only creates them to enlarge and overcome the parties involved.  Alice and Jasper realize that Bella cares for Edward.  Both think things will work out just fine.  Bella of course is in denial and doesn't think anything will work out.  She just doesn't want to lose her best friendship with Edward.

 
Summary:

What do you do when the one you thought would love you forever up and leaves you? You move to Vegas of course!

It's 3 years after Edward left Bella. She's discovered a new life, and made new friends, but has never really gotten over Edward's abandonment.

When a chance encounter with Alice at a local Vegas night club brings the Cullens back full force into Bella's life, how will she react? Is there any hope for them to rekindle their friendships? More importantly, is there any chance that she and Edward can work through her distrust and his shame and guilt to get back their undying love, or does attention from a new love interest have Bella distracted?

Come on in to the world of Crooked Halo's and Ink Junkies, and find out!

New Banner

 


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Lauren, Other Character, Renee, Rosalie, Tanya, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: No Word count: 99051
[Report This] Published: November 19, 2009 Updated: December 19, 2013


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: October 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Going Home

Both Edward and Bella are internally miserable.  Bella is hiding behind a facade with her new friends in Vegas.  She moved after a brief vacation there with Jake.  She modified Edward's statement "it'll be like we never existed," into a tattoo.  She artistically designed it and went to have it applied to her back.  Ana was so impressed she hired her to design clients ideas for the tattoo inking specialist to apply to the clients.  She has a new group of friends she hangs out with.  She goes to clubs with them, but drinks herself into oblivion.  On one trip, Alice Cullen approaches Bella.  Her fear if Alice is in Vegas the entire family is there.  Especially Edward.  Bella can't let him hurt her again.  When he left her, in his mind to protect her, in Bella's mind because she wasn't enough for him.  Edward didn't want her.  She was only a temporary distraction.  Of course, we all knew Edward lied to her.  Now he was tricked into going to the club with his siblings to get a glimpse of Bella.  To help them reunite in their love and to reach their forever happiness.  Just at their first glance at each other in over 3 years Tanya's plants a huge kiss on Edward's lips.  Bella thought that was one of his distraction.  Edward has been trying to convince Bella that he does love her and only lied to protect her.  Bella's fear that he will leave her again.  Edward even offered to change her.  She thinks it's a ruse and then when she returns to him he will resin it.  Victoria returns now that Edward is back in Bella's world.  Victoria can have her revenge now on Edward by taking Bella his mate.  She arrives at Bella's apartment and Bella is gone.  She ransacks it.  Edward was with Bella when her roommate Ana called.  Edward followed Bella and knew it was Victoria.  He told/offered Bella and Ana to stay with them for protection.  Bella convinced Ana after much discussion.  Bella had agreed that when Ana wanted to leave she would go with her.  After staying with the Cullens, Bella and Ana moved in with their co-worker/friend Lala.  Edward and his brother on guard duty against Victoria.  Edward has also contacted Jake for further protection.  Ana's friend Robert has met Bella and is in love with her.  He has tried to ask her out, but she always refused.  She allowed Robert to drive her home when she first saw Alice.  Robert was worried so he stayed sleeping on the floor.  Bella kissed him and asked him to stay with her.  He held her and they both slept.  She kissed him again in the morning.  Said she would try, but wasn't going to guarantee because she was heartbroken.  She was at the club with him when she saw Edward.  When she left the Cullens he arrived at a pool party at Lala's with Lala's boyfriend, Jason.  Bella was trying to get her head together from Edward and his pleads to get back together.  Rob wanted another chance with Bella.  She had agreed.  Rob picked her up to jump the rocks into the pool.  Bella refused.  She sliced her leg.  Edward arrived angry and furious.  Her friends tried to get him to leave.  He offered to take her to Carlisle for stitches.  Once he saw how deep he knew she needed stitches.  Her friends asked how he knew, Bella knew he had two medical degrees, but not her friends.  She agreed and left.  Rob was angry that she left.  Carlisle sewed it up and she returned to Lala's.  On her way to her room she overheard her friends talking about her.  Rob was already considering Bella his girl.  He would be able to beat out Edward.  Everyone insulting Edward, but Ana made the comment she really believed Edward still loves Bella.  Bella was angry at them planning out her life and her feelings.  She told them off.  Rob was angry and went to a bar for several drinks.  He wanted a woman and Victoria was waiting by his car.  Several days after the meeting with Rob, Victoria arrives at Bella's work.  Bella's worried about her friends and the vampire.  She implies she has Rob, Bella worried he's dead or held prisoner.  She calls Edward to tell him Victoria arrived at work.  Edward on his way.  Bella convinces her friends stall Edward giving her time to locate Rob.  She went to his office, he wasn't there and hadn't been in days.  She ran into Jason who gave her his addresses.  Ana already thought to go see Rob at his home.  She left to check on Rob.  When she arrived at Rob's home in the Canyon she saw Victoria there.  She saw Rob went into the house and Victoria had changed him into a vampire.  Rob said she promised me Bella; Victoria said Bella will be coming, but Rob needed substance.  So he bit her repeatedly.  When Rob heard Bella's bike approach he had stopped draining Ana and left her to die.  Ana felt bad that she couldn't warn Bella.  When she saw Rob at first didn't notice he was a vampire until he held her in his arms.  Bella wanted to get away.  Rob was distracted by a noise and Bella moved.  Edward arrived when Jake came out in wolf form and attacked Rob.  Victoria didn't help she slipped away again.  Edward and Jake worked together and tore Rob apart.  Bella ran into the house and found Ana dying.  Edward said couldn't do anything but kill her or let her go through the change.  When Jake arrived he imprinted on Ana going into the fires of transformation to be a vampire.  Wolf and a vampire together.  Edward drove them all to the Cullens' home.  They placed Ana in a guest room.  She doesn't react like the other vampires during the change.  Jake stays with her.  Bella wants to be changed so Victoria can't get to her.  Carlisle, Rose, and Edward all refused can't have two newborns at the same time.  Bella can't be in the house she smells too delicious.  So Edward takes her back to the Cullens' house in Forks.  It's like Bella will be a prisoner for her own protection.  Because Victoria will be back.  Between Edward and the wolf pack the will keep her safe.  Jake will remain in Vegas with Cullens' and Ana.  The family will teach her the vegetarian way of life.  Looking forward to future chapters.

Sorry about all the illnesses, surgeries, and troubles you have had while writing your story.



Author's Response:

WOW!!! Just...WOW!

Thanks so much for the review and the well wishes. I'm working diligently on Chapter 14, and I'm so glad you're liking the story :)

Lonna (ecandme)

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - With or Without You

Edward totally lost with his Bella.  Thinking he didn't get the venom in her in time.  Bella dead never to make the transformation.  Jake again with the great idea to bring the brainstorm to the medical man, Carlisle.  Since Bella had received venom from James and Edward any downline could have created antibodies against them.  Since majority of the venom she received would be from those two strains her body would fight the illness (her body would regard it as such.)  Only Jasper and Alice's venom would be the mutant venom in her system.  Minor compared to the larger doses her body was already fighting.  She recovered and returned home still human.  What a surprise for Edward.  Bella is still human.  Is she still fragile or is she a little more sturdy now?  Nice twist in the story.  Edward will return to life again.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 23, 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - Worst Fears

Just when everything was going so well for our favorite magical couple Edward and Bella.  Back together, stronger than ever, loving tenderly, devoted to each other, committed.  Even Edward going with Bella to face Charlie to state his undying love for Bella.  Along with his promises of never leaving Bella ever again and being with and protecting her forever. Only to have Laurent arrive and ruin it entirely.  Laurent following orders to deliver Bella to Victoria.  We all knew Edward wouldn't allow that to happen while he still existed.  But Bella through her love for Edward noticed Edward falling in the fight cut herself open to distract Laurent.  Edward as usual overreacting as to the amount of distance Bella needed to be away from the fight shoved her away.  Instead of crashing into a table full of glass and cutting her up, she's tossed into the forest and lands on a upturned branch that impales her through her lung.  By the time Edward gets her back to Carlisle Bella has lost a lot of blood.  Carlisle keeps encouraging Edward to change her now.  Possibly Edward waited too long or the venom to the heart causing the heart to stop prior to all the venom being pumped throughout the body, it appears Bella has only been changed to be a beautiful corpse like Snow White.  Maybe a kiss from her true love would awaken her, just like the prince giving Snow White true love's first kiss.  Made me cry.  The rest of the Cullen family is hurting along with Edward.  Edward will never leave Forks ever again.  Jake will have her body laid in a cave where they cliff dive.  Wonder if Edward will remain in the cave with her.  Since we know he can't live without being with her.  Wonder what's wrong with Alice's visions.  Maybe Bella's change is different because she will have different abilities that are taking longer to develop within her vampiric change.  Or maybe as stated before she needs true love's kiss.  All I know I cried till the end of the chapter at the loss from all the Cullens loss, Jake's loss, Bella's human friends, and Bella's family Charlie and Renee.  Especially since she made the effort to visit Charlie prior to her pending change in the future.  Now with the change being (currently) unsuccessful -- Charlie will never see his daughter again due to the partial change of appearance.



Author's Response:

I can tell you that Edward won't be living in the cave with her, but he does want the option to "visit" her whenever he feels the need. Also since Victoria is so malicious, Bella's body will be protected... just in case she were to try and pull something out of cruelty to get back at Edward, now that she seemingly can't kill his mate to exact her revenge.

Things will definitely be getting interesting...

Thanks for reading and for the review!

L.  

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: November 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - Awakenings

Ana's reaction to the transition appeared to be calm along with the fire.  wondering what happened, why Bella had to leave, etc... Upon waking she knew Jake was the one talking with her and assuring her during the transition.  As well as speaking words of love.  Ana was very confused.  What surprised me as well as all the Cullens was that Ana couldn't stand the scent of human blood.  Very odd.  Jake saying that's my girl.  Another confused moment for her.  If the human blood in the cup reminded her of crap, then maybe seeing Bella with her deliciously smelling blood would be safe from Ana the newborn.  Her throat is raw and burning, but human blood isn't what will quench it for her.  So everyone heading out to hunt.  Whatever animals are in the area.  Jake will go as well.  Wonder if her appetite will be more like Jake's when he's a wolf and not be the blood, but the meat.  Only time will tell.  Definitely she's not acting as any other newborn the Cullens have ever been around.  Now in regards to what Edward can do to prove his love for Bella, that's a hard one.  She's pretty protective of herself not getting hurt again.  The fact that he was there to protect her against Robert.  He called Jake for help.  He took her to Forks to protect her from newborn Ana.  Knowing that between himself and the rest of the pack will protect her and Charlie from Victoria.  Wouldn't put it past Victoria to try and change Charlie so he'll be the one to destroy his own daughter.  That would be irony in itself.  Edward would be destroyed as well.  Charlie when he realized would be as well.  Victoria would be able to destroy 2 vampires who love Bella above their own lives.  Interesting.  Not that I want Charlie changed I don't.  But Victoria is not going to give up her goal to kill Bella (Edward's mate) to have her revenge against Edward for killing James.  Edward could try some romantic things with Bella.  It's the little things that prove you are in love with someone.  Not always the grand gestures convince someone of true feelings.  He's going to have to tell her the truth of why he left, he lied, and the depth of his feelings for her.  Hoping for lots of kissing and stuff.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: September 14, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - From The Ashes

Good chapter.  Edward and Bella closeness getting even better.  Glad Rosalie knocked Emmett in the head for his crude remarks.  Bella and Edward's alone time was good.  His story of the Phoenix and rebirth was closely related to their relationship especially with her eventually being changed into a vampire. Loved the idea of the tattoo and the correction of the quote to make it happy ending.  Edward's reaction was my absolute favorite to her tattoo and the chapter.  His excitement and lust from being shown it was the highlight of it.  The phoenix is a great legend.  A great new start, rebirth, renewal of things, a symbolism of those and many more.  Fits Edward and Bella to a tea.  Edward should have made an effort to find Bella a lot earlier than what actually happened by coincidence to him, but plan by Alice.



Author's Response:

I love the phoenix!! I couldn't think of anything more fitting for these two... so I'm really glad someone else did too!

Yeah Edward was a little slow on the uptake, and unfortunately for him, with the bad guys still out there... well, who knows what could happen next?  ;)

Thanks for reading and reviewing, it makes it all worth while!

L.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: February 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Straws, Camels & Broken Backs

Surprise for Bella when the Cullens returned with Ana.  Jake spending partial time at home with Billy and the other with Ana.  Bella feeling left out, unwanted, replaced by Ana, invisible.  Talking with Carlisle made it even worse that he wouldn't change Bella until her and Edward's issues are resolved.  Even if they consider her part of the family still need to reconcile with Edward since she would be with him.  They are lifemates.  Bella expressed angry when the rest of the family returned.  Verbally attacking both Ana and Rosalie.  Demanding what she ever did to Rosalie to make her dislike her.  insulting Rosalie enough she wanted to go after Bella.  Emmett and Jazz stopped her and Edward returned to place himself between them and Bella.  Bella angrily expressed her feelings towards Edward and her desires to spend forever with him.  Edward still loves her and expressed how can you doubt he loves her.  He told her repeatedly that he loved her and wanted her, but once told her a lie and she believed the lie.  Didn't take into account how many times he expressed that Bella was his life.  Looks like they are going to have a heart to heart discussion about them and where their relationship will go from now.  Looking forward to the next chapter.

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: June 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Control & Compromise

Missed the updates, so glad you're back.  Great discussions on both sides from Bella and Edward regarding their feelings about being together.  Regarding Bella's being changed into a vampire.  Finally realized they both love each other and want to spend eternity together.  At least true feelings are known and agreed to share a room and spend as much time together.  Quite a make out session in their meadow.

 
Angel by eglantine Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 30]
Summary:

 

Bella is a librarian who is in need of some money to pay off her college loans. When her best friend Alice finds out about an interview at the Chicago branch of Elite Model Management, she decides to give it a try. A Victoria's Secret story, with a Cinderella twist. But is Edward her Prince Charming? All human.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No Word count: 6174
[Report This] Published: November 22, 2009 Updated: December 22, 2009


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Wonderful start to a new unique story line.  Alice and her lovely visions and feelings setting a positive note to the interview for Bella.  Bella being totally amazed at being picked.  Being able to call one of Alice's idols by her first name Jennifer.  Boy will Alice be jealous?  You bet.  Then coming downstairs on a cloud and totally out of the real world.  Stepping off the curb only to hear a taxi cab horn and yelling for her to get out of the street.  To her dazed condition words weren't registering to her, she froze staring into space, and then she felt warm arms around her waist lifting her onto the sidewalk and out of danger.  Oh boy a hero, are there really such individuals now a days.  Our hero is handsome, tall, nice bod, and messy bronze colored hair--can only be one man Edward Cullen.  Our favorite male lead character.  Once he asked if she was okay then second, she faints in his arms.  Looking forward to the continuance of the story as to her photo shoot for Victoria Secrets and to the budding acquaintance and possibily friendship/love interest of Edward.

 
Summary:

Bella Swan has been through a lot this past year since the death of her best friend, Jacob Black. After meeting Edward Cullen she decides now is the time for new beginnings, a little heat and a lot of fun! Will she allow him into her heart or just her bedroom? Rated M for Edward Cullen.

cw

Thank you to SSVO75 for the above banner...you ROCK our SOCKS!!!

Thank you to Rachelle for the above banner...you are AMAZING!!!

And to Stacey- I love you for this!!! You are my Soul Sister!! LOVES!!

 

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: No Word count: 14608
[Report This] Published: November 23, 2009 Updated: April 22, 2010


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Cupid Shuffle

Diffferent beginning with Jake dying and Bella closing a lot of herself off for a time.  Is Edward the same guy she was dancing with when Jake punched him out?  Glad Bella finally felt able to go out on the town again.  To find Edward as bartender at their favorite nightclub.  what's the odds?  Now they each have a strong connection towards the other.  After a lovely evening of dancing and playing twister Edward and Bella have taken the first step to making the other person theirs.



Author's Response:

We are very much Team Edward, so naturally Jake had to make a quick exit. However. we understand his love for her and her love for him as her best friend. You will see that play out later. We are in the middle of writing chapter 19 as we speak. We are very appreciative of your support!

Thanks!

CB9 & IP

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: I Know You Want Me

I'm jealous not only does Bella get to soak in a large tub with bubble bath, she has Edward join her.  While she is dreaming about him he is there with her.  talk about erotic dream with whipped cream and other  toppings.  Something I am sure she will suggest doing in real time instead of just dreaming about it.  I can imagine Edward hearing Bella scream his name while sleeping that would just about turn anyone on.  Looks like their relationship has taken another step forward to enrich their connection.  Really nice lemon.



Author's Response:

We are very fond of this lemon....and yes erotic dream!! The lemons continue to get hotter with each chapter...get ready!!

Thank you for your support!!

CB9 & IP

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: A Long December

Looks like Bella is going to make Edward work for it.  sounds like her week was busy with school and being with friends.  Alice and Jasper are so cute.  Everything they do is just so sweet and absolutely adorable.  So easy for them.  With Bella she's afraid of committment still not over Jake's death. Edward is really interested sent her a text after she left.  Now Bella decided towards the end of the week she wanted Edward and sent a most provocative text message  to Edward.  I bet he's there in 10 minutes.  He'll cut the time by speeding at warp speed to get there asap.  that poor boy doesn't know what he is in for -- Bella will totally surprise him and he'll be in shock with his mouth wide open and tongue dragging on the floor with steam coming out of his ears when he sees her.  Won't take long for any action to occur.



Author's Response:

Bella is always up to something! There is still a little chase going on...they have to prove themselves to each other. And yes, Bella is terrified of commitment after Jake dies. They weren't lovers...but when you lose someone so very close to you, it take time to heal and to love again. And maybe she is feeling a little guilty?

There is ALOT of action ahead in the upcoming chapters! We have 19 chapters posted and are working on 20 as we speak!

Thanks for your support!

CB9 & IP

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: January 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: I've Got A Feeling

I would say Bella had a great surprise for Edward.  He didn't disappoint Bella either.  The two of them are made for each other.  Working together like the final 2 pieces of the puzzle to completion.  Hoping Bella doesn't have a fit of guilt and remorse in the morning.  She and Edward are perfect for each other.



Author's Response:

So True! He completes her as she completes him.

Thanks for your support!

CB9 & IP

 
Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: April 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: LoveSick

Edward having to leave Bella's side was almost unbearable.  His professor was an absolute jerk.  Edward should have reported Victoria and her stalkerish habits.  His life and any other male she decided she wanted and needed would be a lot safer and easier.  Edward left a very sweet note.  Bella is just running away from her deeper feelings and attraction to Edward.  Bella believed she could maintain their friendship to just sexual in nature.  It won't happen.  Their mutual attraction is deeper than just sex.  Alice is so cute while shopping.  Her budding relationship with Jasper is awesome.  The hotel room sounded marvelous.  Definitely living the other halves life.  All those delight extras.  I thought Edward's text was sweet to Bella.  There weren't any feelings in that note.  A friend can wish someone have a good time while away for the weekend.  Of course, Edward is beginning to have feelings towards Bella.  Currently he is confused as to what they would call their relationship.  He'll be in shock when he learns it is just for sex.

 
Summary:


Edward Cullen is drawn in many ways to new girl, Bella Swan. Can he do what is needed when his family's survival is put at risk? Will Bella walk away from their encounter unscathed?

 

Better Question: Will Edward?

 

Rated M for lemons & language.


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes Word count: 70870
[Report This] Published: November 23, 2009 Updated: January 17, 2012


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: March 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Epilogue: Family

Lots of twist and turns in the story to change from the original Twilight Saga.  Enjoyed the fact that Edward and Bella were able to connect prior to Bella being changed.  Edward's desires of the flesh overcame the bloodlust at first, but swiftly changed into bloodlust.  I'm surprised he didn't hear Bella's faint heartbeat before he jumped out of the window like Carlisle.  Was upset with Jasper amping up her anger at Edward and having her destroy walls, piano, and glass wall of the Cullen home.  Not that Edward didn't deserve some torture or punishment, but to destroy Esme's home wasn't cool.  Funny to think Emmett flying through the glass wall to the backyard.  Serves him right trying to get in the middle of a feuding couple.  I would imagine if someone tried to get between him and Rosalie during a fight they would probably receive similar treatment.  It's called butting in where you're not wanted or needed.  Appears Mike was stalking Bella a little since his scent was at Bella's house when she was with Edward.  It was sad that Bella killed Mike.  Granted he did have foul and dirty thoughts about them together, but it didn't deserve for him to die for them.  Edward killing Sam as a wolf caused even more problems.  The hardest to deal with was when Bella was fighting with Jake, her best friend.  Hurting him so badly that Carlisle had to rebreak so many bones to get them to heal correctly.  Was glad that they were able to regain part of their friendship back in the end. I must also note that Tanya was one lucky vampire that Bella didn't split her apart with the way she was hanging on Edward when she first approached him.  Hugging him, taking his arm, leaning her head on his shoulder, etc...  Especially her being a newborn.  Tanya's lucky her head is still attached to her shoulders.  Deep cut when Tanya realized that Edward had actually slept with Bella before she was changed.  Loved when Edward just dropped his conversation with the strawberry blonde bombshell as soon as Bella asked him if they could talk.  Immediately took Bella's hand and led her to the house, said goodbye to Tanya and catch up later, but never glanced in her direction while saying it.  Kept his eyes on his beloved Bella.  Bella did some serious kicking bums when the Volturi came to call.  Not only did she stop Jane from hurting her Edward and his family, she beheaded Jane and took on Felix by herself.  Pulled his head off as well.  Super terrific when Aro's mind leaked out the truth of Marcus' mate's death.  When Marcus learned that Aro killed his own sister to keep Marcus in Volterra to fight against the Romanians.  Awesome Marcus' reaction.  The man came alive again.  Marcus took over power of the Volturi.  The ending suprised me of Bella changing Charlie to save him from the cancer. Bella just couldn't lose her dad.  The consequences though of biting another human probably voids the new treaty again.  So more trouble between Cullens and the tribe.  Whether Jake will understand is another thing.  Since Jake has grown up with Charlie in his life, he's like an uncle or second father to him. Really enjoyed it.  Have to say my favorite part was Bella with her hands around Jane's throat and pulling her head.  I loved the two bowling balls colliding comment.  Cute and funny.  Of course, I adored the love scenes between Bella and Edward too.  Well I'm off to the updates on Rm w/Vw.  Talk with you soon.

 
Summary:

Edward falls in love with Bella from a distance as they share the same route to work.  Bella can't help feeling attracted to Edward as well but, being a bit of a cynic when it comes to love, she dismisses him as an impossible fantasy.  She prefers the comfort and safety of the content, but passionless, relationship she has with Jake.  When Edward and Bella actually meet, however, she considers giving the impossible a chance. 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No Word count: 6747
[Report This] Published: November 27, 2009 Updated: May 01, 2010


Reviewer: romancaholic Signed
Date: December 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Love the premise of the story.  Both attracted to each other, both take the same path and same time to see the other each working day.  They both are obsessed with the other.  Bella is in a rut with her current boyfriend, Jake.  Things are stagnant now, no spark, no fire, no spontaneousness, but comfortable.  Bella is looking for the spark and fire they had 3 years ago.  Jake is taking her for granted.  Why is he going to work 30 minutes early and staying 30 minutes late?  For instance, today he could have used those 30 minutes and continued after Bella's morning shower.  With Bella and Edward today has been the closest they have been to each other.  Both highly aware of the others' presence.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the encouraging words!  And it's good to know that I'm getting my point across. =)

 




Share/Save/Bookmark


© 2008, 2009 Twilighted Enterprises, LLC. All Rights Reserved.
Unauthorized duplication is a violation of applicable laws.
Privacy Policy | Terms of Service

All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the intellectual property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of Stephenie Meyer. No copyright infringement is intended.