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Penname: Ness429 [Contact]
Real name: Vanessa
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Member Since: June 02, 2009
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Married, thirty something,  mother of one. Currently have 2 main stories and a few one shots on fanfiction.net as Unoffical Cullen.


http://www.fanfiction.net/~unofficialcullen


 


 


 


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Reviews by Ness429
 
Summary:

Edward Cullen is the unofficial king of the Seattle Gay scene.  He'd had 'em all, ladies and gentlemen.  One night, all he wants to do is take the hot Jasper Whitlock home for some fun, fun, fun but fate has other plans.


Categories: AU-Human, Crossover Characters: Jasper
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 14809
[Report This] Published: April 06, 2009 Updated: November 27, 2009


Reviewer: Ness429 Signed
Date: November 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Opening Act

Hey Master,

Wow!  Thank goodness for the Greeks. I could actually visualize that lock of Jasper's hair getting sliced off. Now we got a gang of Vietnamese - should be interesting.

Ness



Author's Response:

These reviews of yours leave me tickled pink.  I've currently got the next chapter awaiting validation, but if you really feel like going ahead then I suggest you go to my fanfiction account. 

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1220273/Master_of_the_Boot

Ta

Master of the Boot

 
Reviewer: Ness429 Signed
Date: November 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: The Mad Scottish Priest

Holy Shit, this just gets better and better. I really liked reading this Anderson character.

Ness



Author's Response:

I'm glad that you like Anderson.  Originally he was a character from an anime I like but I changed him to make him human. 

Ta

Master of the Boot :)

 
Reviewer: Ness429 Signed
Date: November 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Good old Boys

Hey Master,

Wow! What an intense chapter. I really like the level of detail you place in your story. My heart was literally in my throat at the end of it. Also you have a true gift of phrasing - impotent rage, for example. Genius.

Ness



Author's Response:

Thank you once again.  If you heart is in your throat then I must be doing my job. 

I'm no genius, I just go wild.

Ta

Master of the boot

 
Reviewer: Ness429 Signed
Date: November 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: A night on the town

Hey Master,

Wow I went from cracking up over "boy in the pink shirt" dialogue to gulping that the danger. Very cool chapter.



Author's Response:

When I saw the number of reviews you left me, I jumped for joy.  This story began as a oneshot but it grew to become what you see now.  I'm very glad that you thought it was cool.  It means a great deal to me.

Ta

Master of the boot

 
Reviewer: Ness429 Signed
Date: December 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Car Chase City

Hi Master,

What an extremely entertaining chapter. I felt like I was right there, sandwiched between the Greeks. ;) I really like how even though you have a boat load of people running around, they each have distinct personalities and not just a blur of motion. I admire your detail. The car chase ruled!

I liked how Jasper asserted himself and gave Edward a much more enjoyable solution to his chronic screaming than a good slap.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Ness



Author's Response:

Thanks Ness :) 

I'm glad that I was able to transport you into the very thick of the fighitng.  I'm also happy that you like the characters.  A number of them are modelled after people I've met. 

I had a ton of fun writing that car chase.  I'm glad that you enjoyed it too.  My readers pleasure is also my own :D

Ta

Master of the Boot

 
Summary:

You've probably seen it before, Edward is the human and Bella is the vampire.  Well, you haven't seen it like this before.

Step in and have a look as Edward tries to survive his vampire girlfriend.  Oneshot. 


Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 5976
[Report This] Published: July 21, 2009 Updated: July 22, 2009


Reviewer: Ness429 Signed
Date: November 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Rainbow Zebra: An Ode to Vampire Bella

Hey Master,

I can't tell you how much I enjoyed this story. I loved the voice of it. I heart any writer who can deftly use pedantic and other such vocab in their stories because here in the US it's rare that people know what words like pedantic mean, let alone use them in a sentence. :)

Edward's snark was downright adorable to me. I loved the descriptions of the Cullens, esp. Emmett and Jasper. Had a good chuckle.

Great job with your version of Vamp Bella.

Ness



Author's Response:

Thank you ever so much. 

By nature I'm a very verboise individual prone to bombastic speeches, so I'm glad that I can make it work towards the advantage of my readers. 

Glad that you liked Edward's attitude, many people have liked my take on him.

Thanks Ness :)

Ta

 
Summary:

A demonic breed of vampire rule the night, but their numbers are dwindling. 

With huge bounties on their heads, a new class of hunter has emerged, Bounty Hunters. 

One vampire hunter is unlike all others, she is Renesmee, the cutest and most lovable vampire hunter in the entire frontier. 

Watch and be amazed as she fights for truth, justice and the American way in a world gone to darkness.   


Categories: Post-Breaking Dawn, AU, Crossover Characters: Renesmee
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No Word count: 16936
[Report This] Published: September 22, 2009 Updated: December 20, 2009


Reviewer: Ness429 Signed
Date: November 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi MTB,

You've done an excellent job with this. I normally don't read stories that center around Renesmee, but I really like how you wrote her here. Love your writing style/flow. The narrative and action were great. Looking forward to reading more.

Ness



Author's Response:

Hey Ness, 

I'm extremely pleased that you enjoyed this story and that you enjoyed my characterization of Nessie.  I look forward to reading your reviews as much as I look forward to reading your stories.

Ta

Master of the Boot





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