Reviewer: lislar Signed
July 12, 2009
Chapter 18: June 14 - June 20, 2008
That was so great! I wish that I could see how this is going to end. I must be a pessimist because I just can't imagine how it is going to work out. But I desparately want it to work out! I can't wait for the next update!!!! Thank you for the great story. I really do like your Edward.
Just a thought that keeps flitting through my mind:
One of the things that I really loved about Twilight is that even though Edward and Bella are opposites and from different worlds, Edward's love for Bella equalizes them. I loved this aspect of the story - despite their economic differences, their age differences, their upbringing, their basic biology, they are soul mates, and equal in love.
In your story the tension seems to come from the inequality. Bella is not only poorer, less sophisticated, and less experienced, but she is literally indebted to Edward for all her shelter, food, and ultimate protection. At first, I was very uncomfortable with this unbalance. It is a typical situation for a story - the women are almost always at the mercy of the strong, handsome man that they pine over.
However, when this scenerio works out and the man realizes his woman's value - it is irresistibly satisfying. I am so happy that it is working out this way in your story.
Oh - I am so sorry for the rambling - I absolutely should be paying attention to my own life and my family. But I so much would rather be reading your story. Thanks again for the great story - I so can't wait for the next chapter! Author's Response:
I, too, want it to work out. I'm glad you like Edward.
Yes, this is a typical set-up for a story... I picked it for just that reason. But yes, I am very aware of the imbalances between them-- and I am a firm believer of lovers being equals.
Thanks so much for your thoughtful review.