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Penname: jordynnem [Contact]
Real name: jess
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Member Since: May 22, 2009
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Mother of two beautiful girls ... the oldest of whom wanted to read the Twilight series. Upon learning it was a vampire love story I told her I'd have to read it first. (not knowing at the time that the author was a mormon) Needless to say I was hooked and am now a closet Twi-hard. I am a professional automation control sales engineer and on the side a writer though I do not write fan fiction. I enjoy reading some of it. I've been married for 13 years to a wonderful man and my best friend.


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Seducing Ms Swan by Rialle Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3032]
Summary:

 

AU Post-New Moon.

Bella never jumped, Alice never had her vision and Edward never came back. Six years later, Bella is struggling to make a new life for herself as a teacher in Rochester, New York. How will she fare when a very familiar student crops up in her classroom? Will she be able to remain professional, or will old ties get in the way?

Edward is convinced that getting Bella back is just a matter of 'persuasion', but Bella isn't prepared to be that cooperative. What's more, she's in the grip of a dark secret which threatens to prevent her from loving ever again.

Bella Swan is slipping under...

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Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes Word count: 124383
[Report This] Published: June 16, 2008 Updated: July 25, 2010


Reviewer: jordynnem Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Control

Wow, that chapter was well worth the wait! Great flow, great writing and character development. Not at all OOC and the emotions of the characters were captured beautifully.

I'm sorry you've had a rough go of things as of late and truly hope that things are back on track for you. Chin up (as my grandfather always said)

 
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Date: October 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: An Ending

Good for Bella, Edward needs to understand that is flightyness and belief that he's so much wiser for so many reasons don't make him infallible. He can't toy with peoples emotions and then change his mind and make everything okay with a heart felt apology. Bella has a lot of issues to work through and I get that and in many ways she is right. It is bigger than just the two of them. She deserves the time she needs to work through all that has happened, so kudos to you my dear. The integrity of this story has been left in tact via this chapter alone.

 
Summary:

 

Bella Swan spent the first two years of her life in Forks developing a friendship with Jacob Black that finally turned into something more.  As she begins her senior year of high school, a new family moves to town and Bella slowly begins to question the path she thought her life would follow.  Sometimes there is a difference between what you think you need and what you never knew you wanted.  Takes place during the timeframe of New Moon and Eclipse.  J/B at first, but eventually E/B. 

 

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Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
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Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: No Word count: 170230
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2009


Reviewer: jordynnem Signed starstarstarstar
Date: September 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Acquaintances

Okay, you caught me. I've been reading and haven't reviewed. Actually I saved this story to my favorites months ago and hadn't gotten around to reading it. It's original and I'm enjoying it immensely. I try to leave a review at least every other chapter. Thanks for writing.

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: September 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Friends

Thank you for researching Laguna Beach, which I too loathe. LOL...great chapter.

 
Summary:

 

 

The day Bella went to the Cullens’ home for the first time.  Starting at Chapter 15 of Twilight from various Cullen perspectives.  This story is the behind the scenes look at the day Bella met the Cullens.  What did they think and what went on where Bella could not see them?  

 

 

Carlisle’s POV, Esme’s POV, Jasper’s POV and Emmett's.

 

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Categories: Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper
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Series: Missing Pages Series
Chapters: 5 Completed: No Word count: 17689
[Report This] Published: July 22, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2009


Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: July 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Quileutes - Emmett's POV

I think it makes more sense that Alice can't see the wolves. Also writing from that angle will allow you to create more intrigue and/or suspense. I enjoyed all 6 chapters. Thank you.

 
Summary:

When Jasper Whitlock and Alice Masen tied the knot, they hoped their own siblings would have the same happy ending. Jasper's sister, Isabella, was at the peak of her career, leaving very little time for love. Alice's brother, Edward, was in the process of moving thousands of miles in the name of business.

What happens when Jasper and Alice insist on accompanying Edward to Seattle while he finds his new base of operation, all while staying in Isabella's penthouse?

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Lauren, Renee, Rosalie
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Series: None
Chapters: 31 Completed: Yes Word count: 77087
[Report This] Published: August 05, 2008 Updated: July 04, 2009


Reviewer: jordynnem Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Jasper

I was reading WhenEdward Met Bella and loved it, so I thought I'd give this a read. Very sweet and the writing is great!

 
Summary:

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At a pivotal moment in New Moon, a simple choice alters the course of Bella's future, and she is forced to endure several more weeks before Edward's eventual return to Forks.  Victoria, a pack of young werewolves, and the blossoming of an undeniable bond become the least of Bella's concerns as she undergoes her own supernatural transformation. It turns out vampires and werewolves aren’t the only things that go bump in the night.  Edward/Bella/Jacob

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Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jared, Jasper, Kim, Leah, Quil, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Victoria
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Series: None
Chapters: 33 Completed: Yes Word count: 145984
[Report This] Published: August 30, 2008 Updated: August 30, 2010


Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: July 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Forgiveness

I'd decided to give this story another chance when I saw that it had been update and I am now effectively intrigued with its unique story line. Please update soon; I'm definitely hooked.



Author's Response:

Yay for second chances!

I've already submitted the next chapter.

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Into the Woods

Okay - I can't be sure because you are just so clever, but I do believe you have hinted at what Bella actually is. I guess I'll just have to wait and see but ohhhhh the suspense may kill me.



Author's Response:

Hee, hee, hee.  There is a hint, a BIG one.  I thought it was kind of obvious when Bella started having reoccuring dreams about a WOMAN BEING BURNED AT THE STAKE.  But, you're right. I am awfully clever. ;) lol

 
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Date: September 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Constellations

I thought it was going to be Victoria lerking about, so you threw me for a loop with that one. Can't wait for your next update. Okay, I can wait, but only because I have to. I am so glad I gave this story a second chance!



Author's Response:

Don't worry, you weren't the only one who was expecting Victoria.  Glad that you've decided you can wait, and YAY for second chances!

Thank ya much!

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Returns

I thought it flowed nicely. There really wasn't too much insight into Edward's psyche, but I suppose it is a bit premature. Really I'm more anxious for Bella's abilities to manifest!!!! Don't leave us hangin' too long. I danced a jig when I saw this story was updated!



Author's Response:

Ooh, I love a good jig. :)

Yeah, we'll get some more Edward in a couple of chapters, and that's when I'll REALLY get put to the test.

Thank you for sticking with the story!

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Taking Sides

Oh yeah! I am all for the Leopold ending, I love any story that ends with a fat dog named Polly lol.

Wonderful chapter as always, I wait with baited breath for the Cullen show down. Let the drama begin!



Author's Response:

Great then you're just gonna love this story to pieces!

Cullen show down...it will be Clint-worthy (without the dieing). Thank you, hon!

 
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Date: January 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Agreement

Trekkies huh? I guess that's true. Some of us are just a little more open about our obsessions I suppose.

It's almost time. I am so excited!!! Oh yeah and great chapter of course.

 



Author's Response:

It upsets me that a lot people feel self conscious about their fandoms.  I myself am a little bit guilty of this.  Bringing up Twilight in my Interp and Argument class (which is specifically about fandoms) would probably garner more than a few eye rolls.  I really shouldn't care what people think, but...I guess that's human nature. (My brother on the other hand is an avid Star Wars fan and loud and proud.)  Do you like Star Trek?  I used to watch the Next Generation all the time when I was little, and I love the new movies.

Thank you! It's great to hear how much you enjoyed it.

 
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Date: February 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Ashes to Ashes

You gave Bella's soul to the devil? Well, I can honestly say that I haven't seen that done before.

 

Over all, I'd say this chapter came out really well.



Author's Response:

What!?! ME?  I am just the author!  A souless vessle the characters force their will upon! (Which I'll admit I don't put up much of a fight when it comes to Jake or Embry. ;P)

Yeah, sorry it took so long for this story to depart from the standard "what if? J/B in New Moon" model but things didn't progress as quickly as I'd planned. 

Thanks for the approval and feedback!

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 28: His Hand

I read this chapter a couple of days ago while on my lunch break and in my rush to get back to work; didn't have time to review. So I'm visiting this chapter again just to let you know how frickin' awesome the revelation was!! Wow...so worth the year long wait, that's for sure and I'm definitly looking forward to the conclusion. Does she stay with Jacob? Can she even be with Edward given her destiny and life's purpose? How ironic that she can no longer even become a vampire, nor does she need to apparantly. (though I do wonder what would happen if she were to be injected with venom in your world) Truly magnifiscent. I am so sticking with you on this one. I give it **** out of **** stars.



Author's Response:

Wow, I was so worried eveyone would think the Varius story was lame, but I'm getting a lot of positive feedback on it, so i'm quite pleased at the moment. My lips are sealed regarding the details of how things end, but I totally agree with the irony of Bella not being able to change now that Edward is back and (possibly?) willing.

Okay, so this is actually one of the little facts that I've determined but might not get a direct explaination in the story: the venom acts as a healing salve for witches. That's why Bella's bite wound healed so quickly. Again, not sure if that tidbit will make it in.

Thank you for your perseverence!

 
Summary:

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Bella went cliff diving, but it didn't turn out so well. She broke her back. A decade later, Edward reappears in her life on the same night she loses her best friend and husband to a freak accident. Now a graduate student in Women's Studies, Bella isn't thrilled to see him. But when the Cullens re-enter Bella's life, they bring change, hope, and a new joint project that will require all their expertises.

Also, you can find a SPANISH version here:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4829851/1/En_un_parpadeo

AND you can find images for various things like Esme's house, Edward's piano, Bella's wheelchair and Rose's car on my ff.net profile page:

http://www.fanfiction.net/~thatwritr

OR in my LJ gallery:

http://pics.livejournal.com/that_writr/gallery/000010z2

Special Update:

For personal reasons (a ridiculously full teaching schedule and being recently put in charge of a bi-annual local conference and ongoing project), I am no longer able to reply to reviews and questions. But that said, I wanted to give a BIG THANK YOU to EVERYBODY for the wonderful feedback and kind words that have been sent my way since the completion of this story in August 2009. I do still check my messages about once every 1-2 weeks and read *every* review. I just have too many to reply to anymore, but I didn’t want anyone to think I was ignoring her/him in particular, or didn’t appreciate readers taking time to leave a review. Writing this story was tons of fun and I’m thrilled readers seem to enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed the chance to write it. I can’t tell you how flattering that is!!! As I used to reply to all reviews, I feel a little badly about this decision, but work has been requiring virtually all of my time since the new (academic) year began.

Best to all of you in 2010 and beyond!

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie
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Series: None
Chapters: 68 Completed: Yes Word count: 221619
[Report This] Published: September 11, 2008 Updated: August 26, 2009


Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: July 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54

hmmm..... intriguing



Author's Response:

I hope you like the rest!

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55

Oh wow - finally some action!
Thank you....I have to assume its Brady? (Can't remember his name) Anyway, I'm excited for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

The identity of the kidnapper will be made certain in ... about four more parts. :-)  There are lots of theories initially.

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

I think the smaller parts will work  better for the conclusion. It's well written and an exciting action sequence. I kind of suspected Alice not being able to see for that reason and its very clever. Can't wait for more!

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58

That chapter was great, but this time I found the cliff hanger a little more torturous. Well torture is a strong word, but you get the jist. I think I understand what the loop hole is going to be....but we'll just see.

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59

This story is incredible. I'll admit I was skeptical at first, but am in complete awe of the originality you've written. I hope Charlie's ego won't stand in the way of Bella's rescue.

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60

Bella's point of view was written incredibly well. I appreciate that you didn't sugar coat anything. It felt real and certainly feasible. You left her intelligence in tact and her fear realistic. Great scene.



Author's Response:

Thanks.  Bella in the books seemed to keep a pretty level head in a crisis, so I tried to maintain that.  But I DID want her to be frightened, because she would be.

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60

Oh - I know I already reviewed, but as an after thought. I was wondering why no one has picked Hannah's brain? Just a thought.



Author's Response:

Hannah's been asleep; the women at the shelter didn't find anything out till morning.  They also doubt she'd know anything about where Brady has her right now.  However ... hold that thought.

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61

Nope, not a bad place to pause at all. You can certainly see how much like Charlie Bella is by the content of this scene. I love your version of Rosalie, she's really come into her own even if it did take her the better part of a century. There is actually plenty more praise and commentary that can be given over this scene, but I'll leave that to the others who review. Take care.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  And yes, I think Rose (like Edward) has finally really GROWN UP.

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed
Date: August 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 62

Wow - I can't believe I missed that, totally didn't see it coming.



Author's Response:

I'm glad I surprised a few people!

 
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Date: August 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 64: Chapter 64

Wow - you are an amazing writer with the ability to make the reader feel as though they are write there with the characters. Emotionally jarring!!

 
Reviewer: jordynnem Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 65: Chapter 65

I thought she'd comment on Jacob's stench...Lol. That chapter was awesome! Wow, just wow! I absolutley love the way you've written Charlie, he's one of my favorites.

 




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