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Penname: hotmama [ Contact]
Real name: Sheryl Debenham
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Member Since: May 05, 2009
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Summary: Edward seeks out the counsel of his father and brothers after agreeing to be with Bella after their wedding. What will Edward do with that advise and how will he and Bella prepare for their upcoming wedding night.
Thanks to Anne Cullen for this beautiful banner.
Categories: Post-Eclipse, Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 42 Completed: Yes
Word count: 132792
[Report This] Published: October 18, 2008 Updated: March 17, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed 
Date: May 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25
Love your story - it definitely fits perfectly within the Twilight canon. You should consider how you are going to let Bella know that they know about her "other" scent. Emment maybe? Of course, I don't think Bella would really care beyond a horrible blush, but I can imagine Edward's irritation/mortification. :) Author's Response: Thank you. :)
I do have it already laid out in my mind as to how Bella is going to figure out they could smell her.
Summary: 
Edward and the gang are college age and heading to Key West for summer jobs. Excitement, laughs and romance abound. Rated NC-17 for adult situations/lemonade. AH, some OOC moments, canon pairing. Give it a chance and enjoy!
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Other Character, Rosalie, Tyler
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 27 Completed: No
Word count: 122278
[Report This] Published: November 20, 2008 Updated: March 13, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: August 25, 2009
Title: Chapter 24: Compassion
3 rooms and 4 couples - hmmm. The math doesn't quite work out does it? Poor Bella and Edward - they are the definition of "cockblocked".
Summary: AU/Human, EPOV
While trying to run away from his future, Edward gets into a car accident. He is bruised, broken, and covered in bandages from head to toe. His disdain for the hospital staff extends to the woman who saved his life; a new nurse he won't even talk to, let alone look at.
Though when Edward finally does meet his savior, he feels an inexplicable pull towards her. Without the aid of his good looks, can he charm her? Is he sure he wants to charm her?
Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No
Word count: 40103
[Report This] Published: December 10, 2008 Updated: November 27, 2009
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: September 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Bandages
OK, I just have to say I sort of feel for Edward here (even though he is being an a$$). I was stuck on complete and total in-hospital bedrest for 5 weeks (while lying upside down - feet above head) while trying to stay pregnant with my kids. The whole bedpan thing is humiliating and would make anyone grumpy. Not an excuse to be a jerk - but damn I am feeling his pain.
Summary: 
Four weeks before her wedding to Edward, Bella is frustrated. She knows there's little-to-no chance of getting him to bend his rules and boundaries now, but there's no harm in fantasizing about what could happen later. So she begins compiling a list of things that she and Edward can do together once they're happily married. She's surprised to find she might be able to cross some things off earlier than she thought...
Story contains mature themes and is not intended for younger readers.
Thanks to Mandi, aka m81170, for the great banner!
Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Word count: 187877
[Report This] Published: December 28, 2008 Updated: March 18, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: May 13, 2009
Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: The Wedding
I loved this chapter - I have to admit I usually enjoy stories more when they follow the books as I am a stickler for canon, but it never made sense to me that they would be so far from medical help during their wedding night if Edward so was freaked out. I digress - I love your version of this story (and my husband loves that I love this story). I'm glad that you told the wedding night from EPOV as I really wanted in his head rather than hers during their wedding night. You really are an amazing writer.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Reviewer: hotmama Signed 
Date: May 31, 2009
Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: The Honeymoon
Great chapter. Loved your description of the feather pillow - Bella's delight in the feathers and Edward's ability to embrace what they are able to do instead of spiraling into self-loathing was wonderful. Also loved the cowgirl scene!
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: June 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Good-Byes
This was such a sweet chapter - I love Bella's scenes with Charlie and Jake. My favorite part was Edward's POV at the beginning and his new understanding of himself and his nature (very appropriate that he would finally be able to "play" vampire with Bella now). It was also sweet that he was finally able to let go of his self-flaggelation about hurting Bella and understand that beating himself up was so counterproductive.
Anyway... can't wait until the blood chapter (I have been dying for that! - ha!).
Also - BIG congrats on the Iowa workshop. Isn't that a big deal??? I bow down to you...
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: August 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: The Book and the Change
I don't hate you for the cliffie - it was a perfect place to stop the chapter. But please update soon! Argh.
The journal idea was brilliant. And heart-rending. And funny. Great writing.
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: August 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Alive and Awake
This chapter was perfect. I loved how she woke up and then "reconnected" with Edward - that was so passionate and sweet..
You said you were going to do one epilogue - please tell me it involves the blood Bella banked for Edward. I have been dying to see what she (i.e. YOU) decide to do with that. Please tell me it involves and epic lemon...
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: August 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Alive and Awake
This chapter was perfect. I loved how she woke up and then "reconnected" with Edward - that was so passionate and sweet.. You said you were going to do one epilogue - please tell me it involves the blood Bella banked for Edward. I have been dying to see what she (i.e. YOU) decide to do with that. Please tell me it involves and epic lemon...
Summary: 
After the Cullens leave Forks and make the move to New York, Carlisle fights to keep his family together as Edward's pain threatens to tear them apart. Ithaca is the story of a son's quest, a father's love, and the unique family struggling to stand behind them both...
This is the Cullens' New Moon.
Ithaca starts one month into the Cullens' time away from Bella, and will follow New Moon to its end. Carlisle and Edward narrate in alternating chapters. Follows all known canon.
Categories: New Moon Characters: Carlisle, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: Yes
Word count: 118422
[Report This] Published: February 19, 2009 Updated: December 07, 2009
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: May 30, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Spitfire
You are really a great writer. I am really enjoying this story (MUCH better than the other New Moon EPOVs out there). Are you sure you are not SM??? I am DYING to read CPOV when Jasper has to tell him that Edward took off to Italy and the resulting mess within the Cullen family. Those chapters cannot come soon enough... Author's Response: Thank you very, very much. I am absolutely sure I'm not SM--she created a fascinating character like Carlisle and then didn't think to USE him. *sigh* Oh well, more for me to do. :)
And the chapters of which you speak will be here sooner than you think--I'm starting to feel a little bit like I'm staring down the barrel of a gun in that regard!
Summary:  Scarred by events in her past, Bella relies heavily on her best friend and roommate, Jasper. When Jasper falls in love with a girl named Alice, Bella is excited for him but can’t help but wonder – where will she fit in? Her answer partially arrives in the form of Alice's older brother, Edward, but as their friendship grows, Bella comes to realize that she may be too broken to give Edward everything he needs. Canon pairings, AH/AU
This contains explicit content, elements which may be offensive to some, and dark themes. It is intended for a mature audience.
Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 27 Completed: No
Word count: 256064
[Report This] Published: February 21, 2009 Updated: March 09, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: August 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Of Popcorn and Tom Servo
NICE plug for the "best movie ever made" - Manos, the Hands of Fate. Best. Movie. Ever. :)
I am enjoying your story - although the suspence of what happened to Bella is killing me.
Summary: 
Edward, Bella and the gang are adults living in Seattle. Edward and Bella meet due to a klutzy accident in the restaurant where she works. Bella's ovaries love Edward and they voice their opinions quite often. There's an instant attraction between them, but Bella notices there's something that's troubling Edward.
Lovely banner made by famouslyso...because she rocks.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 40 Completed: Yes
Word count: 240878
[Report This] Published: March 16, 2009 Updated: October 03, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: August 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Magnetic Junk
OK, the alcoholism was surprising, but pretty unique in the world of fanfic. I loved Bella's response to his revelation - it was beautifully said/written.
Summary: 
All told from Edward's POV, The Acclimation Diaries, chronicles Edward’s struggles with learning to control himself and taking things one step at a time as he acclimates himself to Bella sexually in preparation of their impending wedding night. Can he keep his desire in check or will he snap?
A companion story for my one-shot, “Show Me”
TAD Banner by: falconcranelove
Indie Banner by: AngstGoddess
Categories: Eclipse, Post-Eclipse, Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 21 Completed: Yes
Word count: 84817
[Report This] Published: March 19, 2009 Updated: September 19, 2009
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: June 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Painfully Slow
Love the shower surprise - didn't see that one "coming" (so sorry for the bad pun). Author's Response: LMAO!!! I so love a dirty little pun! *hee*
Thank you so much for reading, you rock hotmama!!!
*MWAH*MWAH*MWAH*MWAH*MWAH*
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: June 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Soixante-Neuf
Best chapter yet! Having Alice come home early from shopping was awesome... Author's Response: Thank you so much mama!! *MWAH*
Summary: "It wasn't long before I started to get anxious, so by the time I walked into the cafeteria, I immediately targeted lover-boy, sitting alone at the new table as I had predicted.
Can I talk to Bella now?? I thought toward him frantically, grinning ear to ear and almost shaking with excitement.
He looked up at me, weary. 'Keep out of it.'
Well, I wasn't going to have to wait much longer. Fine. Be stubborn. It's only a matter of time, I reminded him.
He sighed, as if to say 'Trust me, I know.'"
When change occurs in an immortal's life, it is irreversible and exciting. When you can predict these changes, it's even more intriguing. But when you can't change a future that might be fatally dangerous... then there's a problem.
Although her past is unknown, Alice Cullen's future is even brighter. Visions of a newcomer - Bella Swan - bring pain, joy, conflict, and even love to the Cullen family's reclusive, tight circle.
Told once by Bella herself, Alice's Twilight is a take on Stephenie Meyer's first YA novel - from our favorite sister psychic's point of view. Written by MissBella over at Twilighted.Net and read by many, Alice's Twilight is sure to satisfy any fan-pire's literature thirst.
This is Twilight, from Alice's point of view. It's NOT one-shot, finally. :) I decided to try something new. I've done Bella's POV, Nessie's POV ( story on the way) ... so now, why not try everybody's favorite sister psychic?
Seriously, you can look up Stephenie Meyer's Midnight Sun and see the exact dialogue. That's where I got the base... haha ;)
I do not own Twilight, but it does own me ;) Twilight and all characters featured in this story belong to Stephenie Meyer, who everyone loves and adores.
Take a look! Hope you like it.
Categories: Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlotte, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: Eternal Hope: The Alice and Jasper Archive
Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes
Word count: 52828
[Report This] Published: April 05, 2009 Updated: July 07, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: June 17, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: 6. Longing
Love this APOV. Her little fanatasies about shopping with Bella were hysterically funny!
Summary: Bella's elevator ride with a gorgeous stranger becomes charged when the lift breaks down. Things become more complicated when she discovers the stranger is her to-be boss, Edward Cullen.
Thanks to katmom for the great banner!
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: Always Human
Chapters: 16 Completed: Yes
Word count: 73337
[Report This] Published: April 16, 2009 Updated: January 01, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: September 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Great story - I am sorry I didn't review the other chapters but I was in a hurry to keep moving forward. I have to say I am enjoying the progression of their relationship - esp the lack of sort of silly drama/misunderstandings that are so frequent in fan fic. I am lookingforward to the next update - the James thing is kind of spooky. Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I'm happy that you're enjoying the story so far.
Yes, James is pretty creepy, I agree!
The next chapter will be up shortly!
Summary: 
In 2026, the Cullens realize that Aro desperately wants to possess Edward in order to use him in a barbaric experiment. Now, the Cullens must evade the Volturi while protecting one of their own as well as Aro's unwitting human pawn. 100% Canon.
Won Best Volturi at Round 2 of the Sparkle Awards!
2nd place in the 1st round Sparkle Awards for Best Post-Breaking Dawn (http://thesparkleawards.yolasite.com/ )
Made it to the Last Round of the Indie Twific awards for:
Best Canon WIP, Best Original Character WIP
Twilighted Beta: myimm0rtal (current) and Admittedly Obsessed (through Ch. 18)
Banner by edward-bella, ebhg. She is a treasure!
Categories: Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 29 Completed: Yes
Word count: 112625
[Report This] Published: April 27, 2009 Updated: December 15, 2009
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: June 17, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5. First Maneuver
This is really good - I love how you started the story out from Josh' POV. It is always interesting to see the Cullen's from the outsider perspective. As a sucker for the 'happily ever after' stories - I do wish you had some more stolen happy moments of Bella/Edward to help us all through the tension :) Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I appreciate the "endorsement" on Josh's POV. The Cullens *are* more interesting when contrasted with a human. Ch. 6 is really heavy on the E x B "fluff," so I hope you can catch that when it comes up!
Summary: Edward is an underground fighter using the ring as an outlet for his pentup rage. Bella is a college dropout running from her complicated past. Their paths collide when Edward is beaten and left for dead. Rated M for LEMONS. CANON PAIRINGS. AH. OCC.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 21 Completed: No
Word count: 155821
[Report This] Published: May 04, 2009 Updated: October 31, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: September 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: I Know/Down And Out
OK, I really like your story. Really like it (I despise boxing/fighting so I was more than pleasantly surprised - good job). Are you planning on having Edward/mom reunion at some point? Is King out of the picture now? or will he return?
Also, as an FYI (b/c I am an anal-retentive medicinal chemist), it is highly unlikely Mike could have put enough of any drug in water to knock Edward on his ass that quickly w/o him tasting it in the water. Most drugs are incredibly bitter (try chomping on an Advil or Tylenol - nasty) and many have terrible solubility in water (not to mention the binders used to make the pills don't generally dissolve enough to be clear). So anyway, Edward's water would have tasted like crap and would have been cloudy - if you ever change anything just change water to a sport drink (that might mask the taste and turbidity). [I really don't mean to sound like a pompous ass - but damn that has been bugging me for days! And since I am fairly certain you have probably not been involved in drugging someone illicitly, there is no way you would know this - so please don't be offended]
Summary: 
Bella Swan applies for the job of PA to the rude, arrogant Hollywood film star Edward Cullen.
Can Bella keep her feelings for her boss in check so she can do her job?
A/H, OOC, luscious and graphic lemons and bad language.
A million and one thank yous to Rachel1313 for the spectacular banner! You are my hero, bb!!
Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 52 Completed: No
Word count: 473901
[Report This] Published: May 26, 2009 Updated: March 28, 2011
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: September 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Ugly Duckling
Thank you for doing an epov - he really is all over the place in this story. If he likes her, he needs to "man up" and do something about it!
Summary: 
*Banner by time_lights over at Livejournal*
After receiving an invitation to write the biography of the severely reclusive author Ethan Church, Bella develops a reluctant obsession with his novels and by extension him. When she accepts his offer, the old, dying man she's presented with and the young, too perfect man she comes across on the nearly empty estate have her convinced she's missing some very important parts of the story.
Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: Yes
Word count: 36732
[Report This] Published: May 26, 2009 Updated: May 13, 2010
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: August 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Obsession
The whole conversation about WWII was interesting... I hope he talks more about that in the next chapter. This story is so spooky and unsettling - you are very good at setting tone & mood. Author's Response: There will be more about the war in the next chapter.
Thank you :)
Summary: Emmett has teased Edward and Bella about their quiet sex life and framkly they have had enough. What do they young couple do to get Emmett to cringe and run screaming for the hills?
Bella is a vampire...Nessie does not exist.
Categories: Post-Eclipse, AU Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Word count: 2179
[Report This] Published: June 06, 2009 Updated: June 08, 2009
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: June 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Funny! I love stories when Emmett's pranks backfire on him.
Summary: 
A special thanks to NaughtySparkle for the banner!
HE'S SMIRKY. SHE'S SNARKY. AND THEY'RE FLOATING DOWN THE RIVER OF DeNIAL TOGETHER!
Edward Cullen is a well-known director for an independent film company, Masen Masterworks. He is filming his latest project in the town of Forks, Washington. Bella Swan is a baker for her best friend Alice at Alice's Wonderland Cafe and Mad Tea Party, also located in Forks. Desiderata is latin for “desired things or something that is needed, wanted.” This story is meant to represent that state of feeling for both Bella and Edward. What happens when their pig-headed stubbornness gets in the way of true love and happiness? Based upon the Desiderata of Happiness by Max Ehrmann and Pride and Prejudice by Jane Austen.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Elizabeth Masen, Emmett, Esme, James, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 29 Completed: Yes
Word count: 151974
[Report This] Published: June 13, 2009 Updated: November 26, 2009
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: September 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14: STRANGE THINGS ARE AFOOT AT THE CIRCLE-K
Completely didn't see the Renee in town thing coming. That was a bombshell. Oh, thank god the next chapter is up! Author's Response: Isn't that the best thing about reading a story that has been in progress for a while--you don't have to sit and wait for what will happen next? It's like a Christmas and birthday present rolled up in one!! Author's Response: Isn't that the best thing about reading a story that has been in progress for a while--you don't have to sit and wait for what will happen next? It's like a Christmas and birthday present rolled up in one!!
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: September 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15: DOWN THE RABBIT HOLE
I am loving Bella little Eff-off to her mom. Nice.
Is Bella going to realize what Edward said to her before her mom interrupted? That was pretty intense - did it register? Thank god for updates. Author's Response: Bella is all 21st century goodness--she has no qualms with exercising her assertiveness with Renee, and thank god for that.
I'm not even going to comment on whether or not Edward's comments registered, because I know you already read that chappie!!
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: September 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13: STORMY WEATHER
God, that chapter was all over the place! (in a good way). Their little notebook switch fakaroo was classic. The movie quotes were fabulous - how long did it take you to get all of those together? The ending was heardbreaking - Edward just can't keep from putting his foot in his mouth can he? Author's Response: When I first read, "all over the the place," my response was, "shit!" Then I realized that was a good thing, and I got all happy again!!
The movie quote thing did take a long time, but I already had most of the ones I wanted to use--it wa more crafting the flow of the quotes that was a challenge than anything. I LOVED writing it, though!
Reviewer: hotmama Signed
Date: September 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12: IT'S RAINING MEN
"whorendous"? "Masterwerks" - I am laughing my butt off.
I love the switching of the notebooks - brilliant. I cannot wait for Edward's mortification (it is about time he had a turn!).
Oh, funny story my husband just told me (re: your AN about Viagra a chapter or 2 ago). [He works as a chemist for a pharmaceutical company so this isn't as pervy as it sounds]. He was finishing up a meeting with his boss and was on his way out the door when bossman yells "Hey, can you order me some Viagra?" Of course, everyone in the hallway heard. My husband was just stunned for a moment while everyone else is staring. Ha! [I must say the Viagra was obstenciously for use in a study - and supposedly not for personal use]. Author's Response: Okay, I 'fess up to hating when things are misspelled on signs, etc. Pet peeve. I'm delighted that you found it funny. My sister is an 8th grade English teacher, so we are always taking snapshots of misspellings. She has me trained.
I'm also glad you enjoyed the great notebook switcheroo. That was fun to write.
Your Viagra story made me snort--yes, snort. We actually give viagra to kids at work, because it is great for patients who have pulmonary hypertension. It just seems so wrong to be giving it to babies, but it is a wonder drug, in more ways than one, apparently.
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