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I was introduced to the world we all know and love by a former of student of mine a couple of months ago. How naive was I to believe that she was just a girl in love with her boyfriend Edward Cullen. Four books,  a movie, and countless fanfics later, I know exactly who Edward Cullen is. :)

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Waning Moon by YborJen Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 420]
Summary: Feature


The epic story of Carlisle Cullen began in 17th century England. Since the fateful night he was transformed into a vampire Carlisle has searched for two things: redemption in the eyes of God, and unconditional familial love. Follow Carlisle through the old and the new world as he meets friends and enemies on his journey toward his destiny as an inspiration to vampires everywhere. Carlisle and his family will discover, however, that love is eternal, but life is not.



Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.


Categories: Pre-Twilight, Twilight, New Moon, Eclipse, Breaking Dawn, Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Alec, Alice, Alistair, Amun, Aro, Bella, Ben, Billy, Bree, Caius, Carlisle, Carmen, Charles, Charlie, Charlotte, Chelsea, Demetri, Didyme, Edward, Edward Masen, Sr., Eleazar, Elizabeth Masen, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Garrett, Irina, Jacob, James, Jane, Jared, Jasper, Kachiri, Kate, Kebi, Laurent, Leah, Liam, Maggie, Makenna, Marcus, Quil, Renee, Renesmee, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Siobhan, Stefan, Tanya, Tia, Victoria, Vladimir, Zafrina
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: Yes Word count: 152115
[Report This] Published: August 16, 2009 Updated: January 15, 2010

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 ~ 1847

Wow. People back in the old days were so brave to just pick up and move. Look at  the doctor for instance. He was originally from Wisconsin or whatever. what made him just pack up his belongings and end up in Forks? It's not like now when we can text/call/fly anywhere.

Author's Response:

GOLD!  It's all about the GOLD!  Forks was a river settlement in the northwest, perfect for panning for gold.  There is an old fur trade in the area, but Forks grew significantly with the gold rush.  I think the doctor from Wisconsin was the younger son of his family and wanted to make a name for himself in a new place AND find a little gold.  He just never knew that something like the Russian Influenza outbreak of the 1860s would come his way.

And yes, I agree, I can't quite imagine going that far out with so many dangers and uncertainties.  I am a traveler and adventurous, but probably not THAT adventurous. ;)

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 ~ 1811

What was the purpose of the vampire that was negligently (is that a word?) killing those people? Was it to lead to te conversation between Carlisle and Sioban about changing people?

Author's Response:

Yes, mostly it was about the issue of desperation, loneliness and the fact that Carlisle is still a long way away from being capable of making new vampires no matter how desperate he is.  It was also about showing that Carlisle is connecting with vampires, he has compassion for them now, even vampires who are killers like Siobhan.  He is starting to have his positive influence on vampire society even though they haven't realized it yet. ;)

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ 1661

When I said your story was different from the usual, I meant that many of the sotries focus on Edward and Bella. You have chosen Carlisle to focus on.

I like your story because we get to see the journey from the beginning. I always knew that I disliked Carlisle's dad, but I really despise him in your story. You give so much depth to your much detail. I don't really have to imagine the situation since you do such a good job of describing it already. (Not that the other stories on Twilighted aren't good, most just don't

Author's Response:

Ahhh, now I see.  Yes, that surprises me that more people have not written about Carlisle, but then I suppose I am biased ;)

I'm an origin story person, so I am always writing about what happened to people along the way, explaining why they have become who they are.  So naturally, I begin at the VERY beginning.

Rev Cullen surprised me at how nasty he became.  He started as a simply overbearing extremist, but before I knew it I realized that there was more to him.  He is the worst kind of abuser, no remorse.

I'm so glad you are connecting to the characters and descriptions.  Let me know what you think of the rest!

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: December 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 ~ 1918

So Edward's teacher was Esme?

Also, according to this story, edward chose this life. Does that mean a lot of his self-hatred issues will be resolved?

Lastly, I see a lot of parallels with Carlisle and edward (the monster thing). Was that intentional?

Author's Response:

Yep! It was Esme!!
Edward didn't really "choose" this life, but he did consent and he did embrace it at first (in my story).  The self-hatred comes in much later after he starts to develop severe remorse for killing hundreds of humans.  He doesn't think that being a vampire makes you go to hell, it's the killing of people.  And he won't change Bella because he thinks that no one can be as faultless as Carlisle (who Edward believes will go to heaven) and that she will lose control like Edward did, kill someone and then lose her soul.
And this all feeds into the recurring "monster" theme.
Carlisle actually thinks that he is the original monster who created all of these vampires.  Edward disagrees, because he sees Carlisle's intentions, and finds Carlisle faultless, but considers himself a monster after he leaves and starts killing.  Which is the bigger monster?  A one who creates killers (Carlisle), or a killer who kills killers (Edward)?  Is either a monster?
Great questions! More coming soon!

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: December 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 ~ 1921

This is an awesome chapter. Everything see,ed to be going really well and then bam...Edward is gone! The story is gettig so exciting now because we are finally getting characters we know and love. Esme was so sweet. I am happy that she is there for Carlisle.

Author's Response:

Things were good, but Edward was in a free fall for the last few years pretty much from Carlisle and Esme's wedding until he left.  Carlisle tried but could not really help Edward.  Esme and Edward talked more, and she knew where to find him when he disappeared after he killed the railroad boss, and she went without Carlisle to find him, but even she could not get inside Edwards head enough to fix him.
I'm really glad you are liking my interpretation of the characters you love!!  More to come.  I'll drop the next chapter in the queue this weekend, but my beta is on a break until Monday, so more coming soon!! ;)

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ 1661

I realy like how this story is so different from all the others out there. I am excited to read it from the beginning...where everything starts.

Author's Response:

I'm really glad you like it so far.  I have no idea what other stories look like, I started writing this in a bubble, and then purposefully stayed completely off the fanfic websites, because I didn't want to be influenced.  I can truly say any resemblance to other stories is TOTALLY unintentional.  Let me know what is different about this story, now I'm curious!

I hope you enjoy it.

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ 1671

How did the professor know what carlisle was from the very beginning. For all he knew, Carlisle could just be squemish around blood.

Author's Response:

A very good question.  All I can say is that Hawthorne is one of those people who is VERY VERY observant.  He picked up clues from the very beginning, odd behavior when they first met, and from the start of their relationship, not shaking hands, which over time culminated in how Carlisle reacted to blood being spilled.  Remember Carlisle doesn't need to breathe or move, his voice is mesmerizing, his eyes change color, he can move very quickly, and he NEVER changes (hair and nails don't grow).  The final clue of the BLOOD brought all of the clues into place, and a logical man like Hawthorne would know that the simplest explanation is usually correct.  Heck, it only took Bella a few months to figure out Edward, right?  People who notice and have analytical minds will not rest until anomalies are explained.  Which is definitely a problem for vampires living in the human world!  You will see as the story progresses, Bella and Hawthorne are not the only ones who are aware that vampires exist...

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: December 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 ~ 1863

It was pretty cool reading about the Civil War and Abraham Lincoln. It made it seem so much more real and recent. All the other chapters (to me) just kind of happen over a period of time somewhere far away. This one was the "ah" chapter. It tied me in to a time and location. Pretty cool. And yay! He met esme and she sounded delightful! Edward is coming up soon!

Author's Response:

Yay BellaS!  I'm glad you were able to connect to the history timeframe in this chapter!  I know it's hard to visualize things that you are not familiar with, and if you are like me, often I read a historic novel I have to go and look up things about the period.  Or I find that if I go back and re-read a story a few years after I first read it I have learned more without realizing it and I see parts more clearly than I did before.

I'm happy that you liked Esme, this was one of the first four scenes I wrote because I had a very specific idea of how I wanted their first meeting to be like, and the kind of impression I wanted her to make on him.

Edward is next!  Chapter 15 is in the queue.

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: December 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 ~ 1928

Were the names Violet and Addison a shout-out (intentional or otherwise) to Private Practice?

I thought it was pretty cool when Carlisle was able to difuse the situation with the mob. Do we know exactly what his power is yet? It has to do something that inflluences others.

Who knew people were hooked on "prescription" drugs then? I know during that time, lots of people were hooked on coke and heroin, but was it really that easy to get their hands on it? If she went to any other doctor, she probably would have gotten what she wanted being who she was.

Edward's back! I was wondering how he was going to find them. Rosalie's coming!

Author's Response:

LOL BellaS -- Is there a character called Violet Addison on Private Practice??  I have never seen that show, which is odd because I do like lawyer shows, but I just don't have much time for TV these days with school consuming ALL of my time.  It seems that I'm only capable of watching sitcoms when I have a moment to veg out -- it's quite sad. ;)

Regarding Carlisle's power -- I'd be happy to discuss what I think his power is on the forums -- I do show him using it a bit more in the book, but I never really put a label on it!

And yes, even then people were drug seeking from physicians.  Congress passed the first controlled substances laws back around 1911 I think, though the laws governing required prescriptions to attain drugs were a bit later.  Mrs. Hale simply wanted Carlisle to get some morphine from the hospital and hand it to her so she wouldn't have to go to a public pharmacy where people could see her.  And morphine was sort of the drug of choice for the upper class already at this point, though heroin was already flowing freely from China.

Edward is back, Rosalie's coming and one more in the next chapter!  Next chapter is in the queue...


Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: December 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 ~ 1933

I think its morbid that Carlisle was jealous of people dying, even though it makes perfect sense. I'm glad they have Rose and Emmett now...and that you brought Edward black. So why didn't edward just feed on animals instead of starving when he was alone and and feeling guilty. Was he feeling too guilty and couldn't feed? I can't wait for Alice and Jasper.

Author's Response:

LOL - I find most of vampire existence pretty morbid ;)  But I think find the idea of NOT being able to die just tragic, which is probably why it makes a little sense.

I'm glad Rose and Emmett came along too.  And Edward didn't feed on animals because he was punishing himself, almost purging before he dared to approach Carlisle again.  It was unnecessary, but that was where he was emotionally as he prepared to return home.  Poor Edward :(

Alice and Jasper are next!

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: December 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 ~ 1937

Violet and Addison are two separate characters on the tv show. the show is based on doctors in oceanside, ca. If you had to pick a medical drama (if you decide to venture out of the law genre), I would definitely go with Grey's Anatomy. It's not over the top like Private Practice is.

More importantly, yay! Alice and Jasper finally made it. I thought it was cute how they just waled up to the door and rang the door bell. I especially liked how Alice got Edward's room. I can't wait to see how Edward will react to Alice.

Author's Response:

LOL -- wow that goes to show how out of it I am with TV -- I thought Private Practice was a lawyer show too ;)  I was always more of a fan of Scrubs than Grey's Anatomy, but my sister always kept me up to date with story on that show!

More importantly, yay!  I'm so glad you liked Alice and Jasper.  But I'm afraid we're going to skip over Edward's reaction because it really is better if you just giggle imagining his expression when he finds his stuff in the garage :)

Instead we are moving ahead, and you might be able to guess to what time period... >:}

Next chapter is in the queue.

Unknown Beginnings by maired75 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 535]

Bella didn't make it to Edward in time in Voltera. After faking her death and moving in with the Cullen's, Bella shuts down and buries herself in her grief. Will the Cullen's be able to pull her out? When her feelings change for a certain Cullen, how will she handle it? Will she be able to pull herself out of the darkness or will the guilt tear her apart?

Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella, Jasper
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Completed: Yes Word count: 47131
[Report This] Published: September 03, 2009 Updated: November 21, 2009

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: December 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20: The Big Day

What a wonderful story! There were so many exciting parts, but I'm glad everything worked out in the end. Thanks for leting them find each other!




Bella wants Edward...the only problem is, he's a counselor at her summer camp. And although Bella has always been one of Edward's favorite campers, that's all she'll ever be to him...right? When Bella returns as a counselor, can she change his mind?

Rated NC-17 for a whole slew of badly behaved, promiscuous, and foul-mouthed characters.  Not your typical love story.  Don't say I didn't warn you.

Thanks to EvilAngel67 and CassieWH for their fab banners :)  ILY guys

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie, Seth
Series: Always Human
Chapters: 30 Completed: Yes Word count: 223215
[Report This] Published: September 24, 2009 Updated: November 10, 2010

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 Midnight Conversations

I so thought they were going to kiss! Nice save Edward!

As fot the shout-out to John Philips, his incest boner was way worst because it was his own daughter. Besides, Bella isn't really related to him, he just knew her when she was a pedophile would be the correct term (hehe).

I loved the whole Jasper/Edward scene. I have to vote against Jasper's accidental theory. It was a full-fledged, on-purpose salute to Bella!

New Moon in 2 hours (well, two days for me...)

Btw, did you go to USC? You seem to be very pro-Trojans. I might not be able to read you any more if you are...j/k...but I am a UC girl all the way. Not just UCLA...

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Failed Interventions

Just commenting on the response you had for my review:

Granted Black Knight is definitely not an indie flick, but Almost Famous won an Academy reward...really? Why is that? I personally didn't like it. I was just really over the whole drugs/Kate Hudson thing. Maybe I was too young to appreciate it at the time. I also didn't like Pulp Fiction. Is there something wrong with me? This is opening a can of worms I didn't necessarily want to address :)

What is the criteria for winning an Oscar? Is it just based on the writing? It's obviously not based on how much money it could make.

That's cool that you are a writer. It must be fun to do what you love, and probably stressful when you can't write or come up with any good ideas. Do you watch much tv? If so, have you ever watched Big Bang Theory? It is seriously the funniest tv shows on tv at the moment. Being a science geek is only an added perk.

Author's Response:

haha, oh man -- if we want to talk movies, this could be a long back and forth, haha.  almost famous won best screenplay, which means that it won for writing and both kate hudson and frances mcdormand were nominated for best supporting actress, plus the movie was nominated for best editing, too  -- there are soo many different criteria as to how you get nominated and then the members of the academy vote on which one they want to win (it's all people from the industry).  anyway, i loved it and fell in love with patrick fugit and billy crudup on the spot, but..that was definitely during my "i wanna be a rockstar" phase.

as for pulp fiction, tarantino is not for everyone, i will definitely say that.  i loved pulp fiction, but i hated both kill bills -- so, no...there's nothing wrong with you, i promise, haha.  but if you seriously want to talk movies, come down to the thread and we can just go on and on ;)

i watch wayyyyy too much TV, and i love the big bang theory despite the fact that i know nothing about science .. do you watch how i met your mother, too?  that's another favorite of mine!

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Failed Interventions

I think that it's ironic that Emmett, who popped a woody for her like a week ago, is trying to scare edward off from Bella...I understand though, if edward is going to pull his usual crap, he should just stay away.

I agree with you about the book/movie. I thought the movie was great and very true to the book.

Do you really believe that secretary, donnie darko...all those movies are the top 5 movies of the 90s. It seems like you have a thing for indies, but those movies aren't very good. It's like "Lost in translation" I just don't get what the hype is all about. I think my faves would include Titanic and My Best Friend's Wedding. Ironically enough, I used to not be a chick flick kind of gal.

Author's Response:

haha, i don't believe those are the best movies of the past ten years - but, edward asked her what her favorites were.  and, those are bella's favorites.

i do love those movies, although they are defnitely not my favorites.  in fact, my favorites are wayyy too random to make a cohesive, sensical list.  however, i am a film school kid, through and through, and have developed an intense appreciation for indie films and people's passion projects.  i'm not a scarlet johannson fan, so lost in translation and i aren't necessary besties, but i REALLY love donnie darko and secretary and eternal sunshine.

however, i would argue vehemently that the dark knight and almost famous are not indie films--in fact, they are oscar winning blockbusters with huge fan bases, not just cult classics.  movies are really subjective, kidn of like music -- to each their own, i say.  but, i do think that the list is in accordance with bella's character in this story :)

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: October 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Vodka Lemonade

Welcome back! I was sad that there wasn't any reference to the bathroom here...maybe you can work it in later as a nod to your awesome other story. As for this one, I like it already! Update soon!

Author's Response:

thank you!  and thanks for continuing to support my stories :)  no bathroom reference, sorry, haha--but...maybe in the future...we'll see!

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: October 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Old Friends

I can't believe that Bella was getting felt up by emmett and almost hooked up with him. Thank goodness edward saved her. Now when will he get off his lazy butt and make a move on her?

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: November 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Unusual Reactions

I loved how pissed off edward was when everyone else was checking bella out, even though he was doing it himself...he is so into her. I though for sure emily was going to ruin everything and even though she chased bella away that night, it was still pretty funny. It was so funny when bella took off her slippers to give back to emily and then announced to emmett to get her to her dorm since she didn't have any shoes.

Author's Response:

hahah--boys are stupid, right?  and, yes, edward is being quite the hypocrite.  happy to hear your thoughts, as always!  thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: December 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 Awkward Auditions

So I am assuming that Bella and Eddie got the part?

Good luck with smut Monday!  Break a pen? know, like break a leg.

Oh yeah, I totally watch himym. That she is ridculously funny! This season especially. NPH is awesome, but my fave is jason segel. He's like how I imagine emmett to be. One of the episodes for The New Adventures of Old Christine actually had a shout out to himym. It was totally unexpected and really cute.

As for winning the oscars for best drama movie, what do they (the voters) look for? Just curious. With actors, are they just looking for how well the actor has transformed himself/herself for the role?



Spinsterhood bound Bella Swan has finally found the love of her life, Edward William Cullen. Both are committed to making their new-found relationship work, but exactly how much are they willing to give when certain situations threaten to tear them apart?


Meanwhile, playboy Edward James Masen has finally found hope within his pathetic love life when an old flame reappears. But how much is he really willing to sacrifice for his first love? And how much is his first love really over her troubled past?


Only time, trust and true love will tell. This simply is a story of four people who are trying to find and keep what everyone desires – their true love.


Banner made by our lover, Jennmc. You rock our socks.

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Renee, Rosalie, Tanya
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: No Word count: 20086
[Report This] Published: October 11, 2009 Updated: February 09, 2010

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: October 25, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One - Six Months Later

This story is so awesome. I just finished the original story today and low and behold, here is the sequel!

Volition by Rochelle Allison Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 424]
Summary: Feature


Belfast, Northern Ireland and the year is 1972. Bella's worried about her brother and his best friend, Edward, and their dangerous involvement in the Irish Republican Army. Is it really wise to fall in love with a rebel?

Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: Yes Word count: 139090
[Report This] Published: October 22, 2009 Updated: May 17, 2010

Reviewer: BellaS Signed
Date: October 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

Loved the story and the historical backdrop. Great job! You kept the essence of Edward and Bella without making it too Twilight and predictable.

Author's Response:

thanks ;) glad you enjoyed it.



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