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Summary: 
Four weeks before her wedding to Edward, Bella is frustrated. She knows there's little-to-no chance of getting him to bend his rules and boundaries now, but there's no harm in fantasizing about what could happen later. So she begins compiling a list of things that she and Edward can do together once they're happily married. She's surprised to find she might be able to cross some things off earlier than she thought...
Story contains mature themes and is not intended for younger readers.
Thanks to Mandi, aka m81170, for the great banner!
Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Word count: 187877
[Report This] Published: December 28, 2008 Updated: March 18, 2010
Reviewer: wahine Signed 
Date: September 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: The Book and the Change
I have been remiss in reviewing your wonderful story and for that I apologize. I couldn't let this chapter go without reviewing and saying how much I loved the idea of Bella writing the book for Edward to keep him grounded during her change. Her words and thoughts are simply beautiful. Bravo!
Summary:  
Alice and Jasper awake in the same hospital, scarred, broken, and searching for meaning. She gives him peace; he gives her joy. They are each other's hope.
AH/AU/OOC. Rated for graphic descriptions of wounds, language, and eventual sexual content.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Jasper
Challenges: Series: Eternal Hope: The Alice and Jasper Archive
Chapters: 23 Completed: No
Word count: 151997
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2009 Updated: January 20, 2010
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: August 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Keeping Silence
I stumbled upon this story the other day and I think it is brilliant. I love your characterization of Jasper in this chapter. He may not be a vampire empath a la Twilight, but you've been able to capture Jasper's essence, that of a tortured soul who tends to internalize his pain.
I can't wait to read the rest of this story. This story is utterly unique. It's not light, feel good touchy-feely stuff, but it is utterly gripping. I'm hooked.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: August 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Not Even Past
I love your Alice. As you did with Jasper, you have somehow been able to capture Alice's essential personality - her innocence and inherent goodness. I really felt her pain and loneliness, and my heart aches for her. Great, great chapter.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: August 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Protection
I am not worthy to review this chapter. It is brilliant. *You* are brilliant. Your writing is beautiful and has a lovely lyrical quality that grabs you by the heartstrings and won't let go. I feel the pain of Jasper and Alice as if it were my own. That is the mark of a great story and a talented writer.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: October 28, 2009
Title: Chapter 21: Forgetting Me, Remember Me
And just exactly what writing rut were you talking about? This chapter is wonderful, great, excellent...____________ (place your own superlative adjective here). I can't wait for more. Please update soon...I'm consumed with curiosity about Alice's past!
Summary: 
He's a young but jaded keyboard player writing lyrics for his band, Breaking Dawn, and she's a naive and frustrated poet looking to break out of her shell; their words collide on-line.
What happens when they meet in high school, unaware of their literary connection?
OOC, canon at heart.
Banner by FatApolloLove
Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 37 Completed: Yes
Word count: 146168
[Report This] Published: February 22, 2009 Updated: August 26, 2009
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: August 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Nocturnal Prelude
I have been remiss in reviewing your story and for that I apologize. I found ToV around two months ago and have been enjoying it immensely. Your prose is beautiful, poetic and lyrical. I'm sorry to see the story end. Could there be a possible sequel in the work? Please say yes.
Thank you for writing such a great story. I have been honored to read it.
Summary: 
When Charlie is diagnosed with cancer, Bella decides to move to Forks to help him through his treatment and recovery. What happens when the resentful son of the new cancer doctor meets up with the reason he was dragged to this small town? AH. E/B.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Renee
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes
Word count: 99780
[Report This] Published: March 20, 2009 Updated: December 27, 2009
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 06, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Let Me Ride
This chapter was hysterical...you gotta love Emmett! The bound booklet of Emmett's rules was a nice touch. I think Bella and Alice should get pink seatcovers for the jeep and see how Emmett reacts. :D
Update soon, please...I'm hooked! Author's Response: Unfortunately, the next few chapters are already written, but that would have been awesome! I was thinking that after I am done this story, I might have to do a one shot that is Emmett's Jeep Rule Book. :-)
Summary:
After Edward left Bella in New Moon, she continued to live the pieces of her life that lay intact. Her relationship with Jacob blossomed, she graduated Forks High, and then went on to experience her first year of college.
However, when she arrives home for summer break, she's confronted by a revengeful Victoria and attacked. The werewolves arrive in time to fend off the crazed vampire, but at the price of Bella's life. Suddenly the existence she once desired becomes a reality, and Bella finds herself alone and fighting an internal battle of Good and Evil.
How will Bella react when the Cullen family are thrown back into her life after a two and a half year absence?
Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jared, Jasper, Leah, Quil, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Victoria
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 7 Completed: No
Word count: 30831
[Report This] Published: March 24, 2009 Updated: August 09, 2009
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Five
For the love of all that is holy, please update soon. Go listen to 'Eyes on Fire' a couple more thousand times, but please do not leave us in any more suspense!
BTW, love the story so far. :D
Summary:
Edward left Bella, forcing his family to stay away from her. Six years onwards, the Cullens are a mess without Bella and Emmett decides to get away from his angry, angst ridden family and let loose. What he finds in the meanest biker bar in Seatle will send shockwaves through his entire family.
All canon couples!
Categories: New Moon Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 38 Completed: Yes
Word count: 112765
[Report This] Published: April 07, 2009 Updated: December 04, 2009
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Dying Again
OMG, I am having so much fun reading this story. I love Izzy to death, and love the fact that she's badass but at times her vulnerability comes through. At first, I didn't read this story because I totally couldn't see Bella as a biker mama sort of character, but the way you've characterized Izzy, I can totally see her and believe that she is a natural extension of a Bella, shaped by the circumstances of her life. Major kudos to you.
This story could easily be dark, but I love how you provide comic relief throughout and lighten the mood. Love Emmett to death.
I would love to see Edward change as a result of seeing the new Bella, become more carefree, less inhibited and angst-ridden. I'm looking forward to future chapters and seeing how he deals with the new, not-so-fragile Izzy. Can't wait! Author's Response: Hey that is one of my best reviews so far. I'm glad you gave the fic a chance...it was extremely difficult pulling Izzy and Bella together so the charcter would be believable and you saying that I did that makes me all girly (I squealed...shoot me now,lol) I'm really not into the angsty fics so comedy is my natural reaction to it. Everyone seems to really enjoy my humour which is good because I'm told I have a strange sense of it!
Thanks!
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11:The Goddess+The Pixie+The Badass=Pure Evil!
I loved the bonding time with the three girls. Now it's time to get home and torture Edward by trying on some of the newly-bought lingerie in front of him. :D
Summary: 
It's been almost 5 years since that terrible day in the woods. Bella and Edward have both struggled with the devestating aftermath of their last conversation. Both have found solice in music, only in ways neither of them could have imagined. Can they find their way back to one another or is there just too much that time will not erase?
Categories: AU Characters: Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 31 Completed: No
Word count: 119923
[Report This] Published: April 09, 2009 Updated: April 06, 2010
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: April 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2-Where Exactly Are We?-AL revise by 4/20
Love the premise of this story! Can't wait for future chapters and the big meeting when Edward realizes that Bella is behind the voice of the songs that he loves so much. I guess Bella is his 'singer' in more ways than one, LOL.
I'm listening to Evanescence's Fallen CD as I write this and I can't believe how so many of the songs could have been written about Bella and Edward during their separation. It's as if the songs were written for New Moon, although the CD came first.
Again, love your story. Please update soon...I can't stand the suspense! Author's Response: You just hit the nail on the head! This entire story was inspired from my own Evanescence playlist. When combined with my obsession with Twilight (or more specifically Edward)---the story was born. Keep listening to your CD. The music and it's lyrics are going to be a very big part in the near future. Thank you for taking the time to review. It means the world to me.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4-Thank God for Mini Bars
Another great chapter. My only criticism is that it's too short...can't you write at vampire speed?:)
I will never look at a popsicle the same...ever again. ;D
When will they meet up? The suspense is killing me! Author's Response: Trust me, if I could find a way to write at vampire speed, I would. I love that you're having fun with the story. It means the world to me that you took the time to read and review. BTW, can you imagine the mess that would actually make? I felt a little guilty about doing that to the housekeeping staff at the Waverly.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 11, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5-Paperweights
Oh, poor Bella! She lost both Edward and Charlie within a two-year period. No wonder she's so full of angst.
I love that Edward tried to locate her throughout the years. His buying of her house intact was a very nice touch.
My only criticism of this chapter is that is too short. Please update soon...I have an EverClear concert to attend. ;) Author's Response: So, does that make you an EverClear groupie? Thanks for the review. I love to hear what you guys have to say. Bless her heart, she had a tough couple of years. But you need the drama to create the whole tortured artist persona. Can't wait to see what you think of the next couple of chapters.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4-Thank God for Mini Bars
Would you update soon if I offered you a banana flavored popsicle? :D Author's Response: My boss looked at me like I was crazy at the belly laugh I let out when I read your review. Hugs and kisses for that. My beta has the next chap right now, so it should be soon.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5-Paperweights
Sorry to be so pushy, but I demand an update to this story, or you can kiss your supply of banana-flavored popsicles goodbye. ;D
Seriously, please, for the love of all that is holy, update soon! Author's Response: You are too funny. Update coming soon, I promise. Author's Response: You are too funny. Update coming soon, I promise.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 19, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6-Brunch and Elevator Ecstasy
I love that Bella can smell Edward and sense his presence, just as Edward sensed her presence the chapter before. These two are so attuned to each other, even after five long years.
Another great chapter. This story has gripped me from the beginning and I can't wait to see how everything plays out. Author's Response: What can I say, these two are tied to each other even after all the time apart. Thank you so much for your support and encouragement. I love it. Things are going to start snow-balling on us from here.
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: June 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7-Showers and Visions
Oh man, you just had to start the chapter off with an image of Edward beating off in the shower and that brought up images of abs-alicious Rob in the shower.
Thanks for the update. I can feel the momentum building up...can't wait for the concert!
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: February 25, 2010
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11-EverClear Revealed
I reviewed this story in ffn but thought I'd start reviewing here too because I'm not sure if this story will survive the witchhunt over at ffn and it's too good a story to leave unreviewed.
I love how you build up the suspense leading up to B&E's meeting. I love this spunky yet vulnerable Bella. I can't wait for these two to come face-to-face. This is one of my favorite stories...love your characterizations and dialogue. Great job!
Summary: AU version of the "New Moon" reunion scene. Bella is not quite as quick to accept Edward's explanation for his actions in leaving her.
Banner credit goes to addicttwilight2, who is the most awesome person on the planet!!
Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 14 Completed: Yes
Word count: 45075
[Report This] Published: April 18, 2009 Updated: June 30, 2009
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Sorrow
OMG, I love this chapter. You've captured all the things that I wish Edward would have said in New Moon. I love that you've made Bella a stronger character who wasn't so co-dependent on Edward. I love that you made Edward less godlike, more human, even down to his appearance. I love that Bella and Edward are on more equal footing here, and Edward is giving Bella the opportunity to make decisions regarding their relationship. Most of all, I love the wording Edward's beautiful apology...it captured and laid to rest all that I thought was wrong in their relationship. It was articulate, heartfelt and stirring. I don't know how Bella managed to stayed strong throughout Edward's speech...I would have been a blubbering mess. But I'm glad that Bella stayed strong and that Edward didn't force her to make a decision right then and there. For all his regrets, I think Edward can stand to wait a little longer, for it to sink in that Bella's not going to immediately come running back to him. (I hope she does eventually, though...LOL). Great, great job. Please update soon. Author's Response: Thank you so much for this amazing, amazing review! It makes me so very happy. Hope you continue reading and enjoying!!! x
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 21, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Saviour
OMG, please update soon. Cliffies like this are a form of cruel and unusual punishment.
Now, get to writing!
BTW, I'm still loving the story. I must be a glutton for punishment. ;D
Summary: This is an alternative ending to New Moon AU and slightly OOC, for Bella anyway. It starts when Rosalie calls Edward to tell him what Alice saw. Rosalie tells Edward that Bella jumped and that Alice went back to Forks to check on her. Edward decides to come back to find out what is going on. Also, Victoria does not make a newborn army in Seattle...but don't worry about that just yet ;)
  
WARNING: This is not a "Jacob is the devil" type of story. Even though it will end up with ExB, if you want to stab Jake, then you probably shouldn't read this fic 'cause I love him and I will not write him as a complete ass.
Disclaimer: Stephenie Meyer owns everything Twilight
Copyright infringment is not intended
Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob, Victoria
Challenges: Series: The Butterfly Effect
Chapters: 19 Completed: No
Word count: 64370
[Report This] Published: April 30, 2009 Updated: April 09, 2010
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 16, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: 80s Hair Metal = chicken soup for Bella's soul
A very promising start! I love the interaction between Bella and Alice.
Please, please give Bella more of a spine and don't let her fall into Edward's arms when he arrives. I want him to grovel and beg for forgiveness before she even considers taking him back. I have a feeling that Alice got Bella's truck because she foresaw the need for Bella to get away after seeing Edward. ;) Don't get me wrong, I love B&E, but I really think Bella forgave Edward too quickly in New Moon. Author's Response: Thanks for the review!!
No worries ;)
You and I see eye to eye...
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: May 17, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Family reunions...the gang's all here
The only way that I'll mutiny is if Bella takes Edward back without reservations and doesn't make him work for forgiveness first.
Great chapter...more, please :D Author's Response: Then it's you, me, and my beta/friend Kelly for the duration, lol!
Thank you!
Summary: 
"Have you ever had that intense physical attraction to someone you just met? Not even met, just seen? I have." AU. AH.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Jasper
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Word count: 23069
[Report This] Published: August 14, 2009 Updated: September 10, 2009
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: September 10, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: The New Hellion
I really liked it and I would like to see more! Please consider making this a full-blown story!
Summary: Bella is shocked when her sexy but standoffish lab partner, Edward, friends her on Facebook. Will her best friend, Alice, convince her to accept Edward’s friend request? Or, will she write it off as a prank of the conceited, spoiled rich kid she knows Edward to be?
Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes
Word count: 71379
[Report This] Published: August 26, 2009 Updated: April 23, 2011
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: December 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Lover You Should've Come Over
Reminds me of the ending to 'Say Anything'. I loved that movie...and I adore this story. Well done!
Summary: Bella and Edward are "buddies" and while Bella wants more, Edward pulls away every time she tries to make things more official. Then one evening, she meets a tall, dark, handsome man out in a club, and he promises her everything she always wanted. Will Bella take it, even if it's not with the person she thought it would be with? And what will Edward do when his friend is suddenly no longer available?
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes
Word count: 36646
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2009 Updated: February 11, 2010
Reviewer: wahine Signed
Date: December 14, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
I want to take Bella and Edward and slap both of them silly...Bella for being so co-dependent and Edward for using her just for booty calls.
I want Bella to grow some balls, stop being a doormat and give Edward a taste of his own medicine. Although I can't put all of the blame on Edward, since Bella agreed to the terms of their relationship. I want Edward to have a change of heart when he finds out that Bella is suddently unavailable for him and has moved on with someone else.
I hope Alice glams Bella up and shows her that she is worthy of better. Although I am at heart a B&E fan, if the dark, handsome guy (Jake?) treats Bella well, I wouldn't mind her being with him. I'm not liking this Edward at all, but I will wait till I read the backstory from the next chapter to pass judgment.
BTW, I love this story...very original. :D
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