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Penname: Queendel [ Contact]
Real name: Denise
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A lover of vampires and good fanfiction.
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Summary: Junior Raymond Kulp, star pitcher of the Forks High baseball team, finds himself drawn to the new student much like everybody else. But since he has himself a girlfriend, he discreetly observes the Police Chief's daughter from afar. It is during this first year that he notices the developing relationship between Bella Swan and the mysterious Edward Cullen - and how this isn't the normal run of the mill relationship.
Come join Ray as he witnesses events throughout his junior and senior year that strike him as extraordinary, while he observes Bella Swan and the entire Cullen family.
This tale is canon
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Some of the reviews...
"This was so well written and so damn sweet. I don't know where you came up with the idea, but it was truly an excellent read." jessicasheehan
"Great story. You captured all the main points, was in line with canon and still introduce a wonderful plotline which I enjoyed through the eyes of Ray." Queendel
"I liked the way you ended this. I can see how seeing a relationship like Bella and Edward's and watching it as closely as Ray did would affect his life. I think that it is a believeable ending and am impressed with the way you carried it through. I think that this was a unique perspective on the story that we all know and love and you did it justice. Great Job!" Jen (javamomma0921)
"Um, wow. I loved this! Like you, I guess I've always wondered what Bella and Edward appeared to be from an outsider's perspective. You nailed it!" starry19
"I'm so glad you wrote this. Not only was it great, but it's one of my favorite angles to see characters we know from a stranger's POV. So I did a little happy dance in front of my computer (earning me a weird look from my dog) when I saw your story. Thanks!" TheCelticOne
"I absolutely love this story. And views of their relationship from afar. I'm always trying to look for stories like these and jumped to the opportunity of reading this one. Plus the length!? It was like an early Christmas present. You're writing is wonderful; especially how you weave your characters through it. And in the 3 chapters you have, you have more personality in all the characters than most people with 50 chapters!" Fleury's Apprentice
Categories: Twilight, New Moon, Eclipse, Breaking Dawn, Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Mike, Nessie, Other Character, Quil, Renesmee, Rosalie, Sam, Tyler
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Word count: 19019
[Report This] Published: February 05, 2010 Updated: February 21, 2010
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: February 21, 2010
Title: Chapter 3: Epilogue
Great story. You captured all the main points, was in line with canon and still introduce a wonderful plotline which I enjoyed through the eyes of Ray. Author's Response: Ah yes... and so another smile emerges. Thanks, Queendel - for I appreciate your praise. :-)
Summary: 
“Bella, I’m going to give you some privacy. I won’t go far, but I won’t listen either. I know you don’t want an audience, no matter which way you decide to go.”
Three years after his mysterious disappearance, Edward’s final words to Bella still haunt her every waking moment. For her parents, Bella tries to put the past behind her and start a new life but one phone call shatters her fragile new world. Bella must then choose between her new life and the potential heartache of her past.
All canon pairings. NO CHARACTER DEATH. This is an Edward and Bella story.
I'd like to thank ms_ambrosia for the awesome banner!
Categories: Eclipse, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 39 Completed: No
Word count: 161635
[Report This] Published: February 09, 2010 Updated: May 06, 2013
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: February 03, 2011
Title: Chapter 23: Loved Ones
Gripping update. I so want Oscar and his minions killed, brutally. I hope that Carlisle and Esme are safe. I am excited to see what Edward would evolve into - having both the genes of a vampire and werewolf could make for a superior, formidable and dangerous creature, and one that could read minds, the possibilities are endless.
And I don't think Bella is weak, she is pretty brave knowing all that is going on, and still being coherent. And was it safe for them to make love, without protection, in light of Edward's very interesting DNA makeup.
And how did Oscar get so near to Edward and Bella without being observed by those patrolling?
And how is Charlie taking everything?
Update very soon. Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I`m glad to hear you say that Bella isn`t weak. I think that she`s being strong to hold up under the emotional stress that she is under. Also, Carlisle told her many bad things that could happen by being with Edward but Bella is willing to risk it. I can`t answer your questions, but you`ll find out the answers in the next few chapters.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: March 18, 2011
Title: Chapter 24: Battling Monsters
Dramatic and excitng update. The sex was great too!!!
Glad that Edward could hear thoughts again and it was credible the way he saw the walls and push them down, or build them back up, in order to hear or block. Like the way that Jasper helped Edward, and the fight was awesome. So, was the silver wolf Oscar or the yellow eyed? And why didn't the silver wolf want Edward hurt?
Edward seems to be changing, I want him to evolved into a mutant, part vamp, part wolf and stronger and more lethal and powerful than both, at least to his enemies.
Update soon. Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I`m feeling better, so it shouldn`t be such a long wait for the next chapter. Neither the silver or yellow-eyed wolf was Oscar because he can only turn on the full moon.
I really enjoyed writing the fight scene, so I`m glad that it turned out so well.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: April 09, 2013
Title: Chapter 38: Breaking Out
Exciting and riveting. Please update soon.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: February 12, 2012
Title: Chapter 30: The Exchange
Exciting update. I so want Edward to get well, for he and Bella to be reunited and for Carlise and Esme to get free, but firstly I want him to destroy all of the bad wolves, expecillay Oscar. Author's Response: Thanks. A big battle is coming that's for sure!
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: March 14, 2010
Title: Chapter 7: Patient Zero
Intriguing and amazing fic thus far.
The whole situation with Edward, his having influenza which killed him in 1918and being patient zero, the Cullens interaction and Jacob coming to assist has a unique plot line. I can understand how hearing he was in 2009 with thoughts of only 1918 could set him off, and Edward was always a bit hyper. It would have been interesting if he could still read minds.
Eager for more so please update soon.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: March 20, 2010
Title: Chapter 8: The Great Escape
Love this update. Exciting and suspenseful. Eager to know what happened to Edward.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: October 05, 2012
Title: Chapter 35: Breaking In
Riveting. Eager to know what Edward would do next. Update soon.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: January 15, 2011
Title: Chapter 22: The Message
Suspenseful update. I so want to know what is going to happen next. I want to see Oscar suffer for what he did to Edward, and then destroyed. Is Edward going to transform into a wolf also? Is he now a cross between a wolf and vampire - a new breed of supernatural creature - saw someting like that ina movie once where the creature had both genes and evolved into something powerful that was the best of both worlds. Update soon. Author's Response: Thanks for the review. The next chapter is in the works. I can't reveal what's going to happen to Edward next, but the full moon is only a few days away...
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: August 25, 2012
Title: Chapter 34: Closing In
Very exciting! Intersted to see what Edward is now; being both wolf and vamp, he should be the most dangerous and lethal of all of them now. Update soon.
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Thank you to Mkystich for the awesome banner!
Edward and Bella go to tell Charlie about their engagement when something happens that changes everything. Love is tested, friendships are torn, but how can Edward save Bella from someone they all trusted?
Categories: Eclipse Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: Yes
Word count: 88773
[Report This] Published: February 10, 2010 Updated: August 31, 2010
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: March 14, 2010
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5
Heartbreaking. I feel so much for Edward and Charlie.
Jacob is truly a monster in this - He is insane. I hope that he is found soon and that he has not hurt Bella too much. After this, the wolves cannaot called the vampires monsters!!!!
Author's Response: no they can not!!
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: April 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9
Edward's loving memories was a wonderful part of this update, and I am sure it pushed his agony about what was happening to his mate aside for a few moments.
I am glad that the Cullens and the wolves would be saving Bella soon. Jacob is horrid and I am hope that Edward do not kill him but make him want to die when he finish with him. Sam said that he wanted Jacob alive, nothing was said about what condition he should be in.
A dramatic fic filled with heartbreak but also hope and love.
Eager for next update.
Author's Response: it did, and im glad you enjoyed it. all questions will be answered in time!
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: May 15, 2010
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14
This was a lovely update, although a bit heartbreaking at some parts but the humourous parts, starring Emmett, helped to lighten the story. I like the relationship that is developing between Charlie and Edward. Update soon. Author's Response: emmett is awesome isnt he?? lol
As promised.. Here's the summary for my new story Decode..
Bella Swan and Edward Cullen are best friends. Bella has been in love with Edward her entire life, while Edward has always looked at her like a little sister. After years of watching Edward and his womanizing ways, Bella decides its time to move on. But how will Edward take it when he realizes that Bella isn't the shy girl he use to know, and starts dating other guys?
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: August 11, 2010
Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21
Great story, filled with angst, drama, love, hope, forgiveness and growth and it has a wonderful conclusion. It was really nice for you to include the pack at the Wedding. I am glad that Charlie has someone, even if it is Tanya. At least she will now leave Edward alone. Great job. Author's Response: thank you soo much! you're awesome :) im really glad you liked my story
Summary: It's been twenty years since Edward left Bella in Forks. When he and the Cullens move to North Pole, Alaska, they meet someone who opens up his old wounds. Will Edward be willing to try at love again, or will he make the same mistake twice.
Categories: New Moon Characters: Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes
Word count: 161169
[Report This] Published: February 12, 2010 Updated: October 12, 2010
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: July 04, 2010
Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 Compromise
Intiguing story. Bella seems bitter that her daughter would be getting Edward - his love and perhaps immortality and she lost him. She must realise that Jane will soon be eighteen and would be able to do as she pleases. Bella runs the risk of alienating her daughter for life. She is behaving like Charlie and Jacob and should know better. Update soon.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: September 04, 2010
Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 Retaliation
Great update filled with drama and Edward. So Aaron is a werewolf also.
Wonder what "all knowing" Bella is going to say and do now that she put the tribe in danger because of her anger at Edward for loving Jane.
Eager for more soon.
Summary: An old, dilapidated hospital residing in the outskirts of Forks, Washington, sits untouched - other than being the occasional setting of a teenage party. Everyone knows the rumors, and it's because of those rumors rebellious teens are lured there. They want to be the first to spy the young man who supposedly lives inside its walls, the man who's either a ghost or crazed maniac that murders those courageous enough to enter the building.
No one has ever seen him, or at least no one that's ever lived to tell the tale. But it's all just rumors, right? Well, Bella Swan is about to find out.
Rated for subject matter and content. OOC. Canon pairings.
Gif made by the amazing RoseArcadia
Warning: There is mention of physical abuse in this story.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Aro, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Jessica, Marcus, Mike, Rosalie, Tyler
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: No
Word count: 89825
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2010 Updated: July 12, 2010
Reviewer: Queendel Signed 
Date: March 13, 2010
Title: Chapter 7: The Plan
Very intriguing. Eager to read more soon about Edward dire situation and how he came to be there. I like Marcus so far. Update very soon.
Summary: 
An unexpected discovery reveals that Edward lied when he left Bella. Now, Bella is determined to find a way to contact him, and in the process she learns more than she ever knew about Edward Cullen.
An Edward and Bella love story.
Thank you Mothlights for the fantastic banner!!
Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: Yes
Word count: 178682
[Report This] Published: February 17, 2010 Updated: November 12, 2010
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: August 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Yes!
this is wonderful. Update soon.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: July 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Dust Sheets and Drama Queens
I love this story. I think that it is wonderful. I like how you protray both Bella and Edward. There is so much growth in them - a new respect and understanding as the story progesses.
And Bella does not come off as a spoilt victim and Edward is not controlling or pathetic. Jacob and the tribe are also protrayed in a better light, with no hard bitterness just the normal "enemy" behaviour with a hint of acceptance. I love Callum and it was nice of him to help with Bella's quest. I understand Charlie's attitude towards Edward, and it seemed real, not forced or over the top.
Your plot is great and still remains true to cannon.
Eager for more soon. Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying the story, thank you for letting me know :) I'm working on chapter 12 now...Bella is helping Alice unpack.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: August 03, 2010
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Presents
I really love this. Both Edward and Bella accepts their errors and are working out their challenges in a mature way. I love happy Edwards and a Bella who has high self-esteem and not being a victim. Cullum is great as a new addition. want some more lemons.
Update soon.
Summary: What if the vampire family that embraced Bella was not the Cullen's but the Denali's. After a series of tragic events, Bella is led to Denali. Despite the unpleasantness that leads to her joining their family, she eagerly accepts all the love and sense of sisterhood the Denali's offer her. Bella finds herself happier than she's ever been. But how long will that happiness last? What happens when the Cullen's come to meet the newest addition to the Denali coven?
This story has been beta'ed by the lovely and wonderful Mommakat!!!
Big thanks to vampireyouth for my awesome banner!
And thanks to jkane180 for my second awesome banner!
AU/ OOC
Categories: AU Characters: Bella
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes
Word count: 94495
[Report This] Published: February 17, 2010 Updated: June 27, 2010
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: April 06, 2010
Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
Interesting story. I feel sorry for Edward in pinning after Bella. Tanya is a vamp scorned, and blocking her sister because she knows that Edward is interested in her.
Bella is a fool and just let her stubborn pride and poor sense of judgement make her kill her human friend. I hope that Edward don't blame himself for her muderous action. Update soon. Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
Summary: As punishment for his reckless ways, Edward's parents send him from his home in Chicago to live with his uncle in Forks where he meets the breathtaking, mysterious Bella Cullen.
Categories: Twilight Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No
Word count: 15768
[Report This] Published: February 17, 2010 Updated: August 26, 2010
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: March 31, 2010
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: He Lays in the Reins
Very nice. I like this story and Edward is a riot. Update soon.
Summary: When Bella has a tragic accident, it turns her entire world upsidedown and forces Edward to come to terms with her change sooner than he'd hoped. As Bella says goodbye to friends and family, the Cullens are faced with coming up with a plan to get Bella out of the hospital without drawing unwanted suspicion on their family. Not to mention they have to talk the Quileutes into allowing an exception to the decades old treaty. On top of everything else, Victoria threatens to turn the hospital in Seattle into a killing ground. Can the vampires and the wolves come to an agreement before the Volturi descend on the Olympic pennisula?
Categories: Eclipse, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Victoria
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: Yes
Word count: 60739
[Report This] Published: February 21, 2010 Updated: October 21, 2010
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: April 08, 2010
Title: Chapter 3: Token of Love
Heartbreaking yet hopeful. Glad to see that Charlie is more accepting of Edward. I hope that the wolves, especially Sam and Jacob, are compassionate for Bella's sake and don't make a big noise and mess about Bella becoming a Cullen.
Update very soon. Author's Response: Yes, Charlie is beginning to come around but he still has a long way to go. As for the wolves, I'm still trying to figure out their reaction. They don't talk to me like Edward and Bella do. LOL. thank you for the review!
Summary: When Bella moves to Forks she finds herself not only as Edward's singer, but as Jasper's as well. As their relationships develop secrets from the past begin to be revealed.
A B/J/E fic.
Thanks to the amazing ms_ambrosia for the banner.
Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jasper
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No
Word count: 69021
[Report This] Published: March 01, 2010 Updated: December 23, 2011
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: July 26, 2010
Title: Chapter 7: Bad Romance
Very interesting. I like this very much. I hope that Edward resists both Bella and Jasper and I want Jasper to hurt for hurting my Edward. Update soon.
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: August 09, 2010
Title: Chapter 8: War Of Nerves
Interesting fic. Edward's family are too much sometimes. I don't think that Edward was rude for asking Bella the question that Emmett asked. And they brought her to their table knowing full well that Edward disapproved - they were invading his space not the other way around. He has the right tobe comfortable and his rights also need to be respected. Whether he meant it or not he told Jasper that he did not want Bella as a mate.
If I was Edward, I would have been polite to her and then leave the table and refuse to eat with them if she was there.
Update soon.
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