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Penname: Queendel [Contact]
Real name: Denise
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A lover of vampires and good fanfiction.


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Thanks Roo, for the amazing banner! 

And more keep coming in!  Thanks to m81170 for this lovely piece of art:

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Here's another amazing pic that fits in with Dark Side of the Moon perfectly -thank you to JohannaL for ID'ing the author:  http://smirks-works.livejournal.com/ check out her (I assume) other manips - she's a genius!

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Updated November, 2009

This story is now COMPLETE!

Dark Side of the Moon is my version of New Moon from Edward’s point of view.  Witness how Edward agonized over leaving Bella, hunted for Victoria, faced the Volturi, and came to realize that with Bella was where he was meant to be. 

This tormented story has been a part of my life for about a year and a half – and what a ride it’s been!  Meant to be canon and in character, I hope you enjoy angsty Edward and his suffering during New Moon.  As unhappy as Bella was during this time, Edward suffered so much more (I think).  So be sure and crack open a fresh box of tissues before reading!

 Thank you to everyone for all the reviews, especially to those of you who reviewed each and every chapter!  Your support and loyalty have been the driving force to me getting this project finished – and I hope it’s lived up to all of your expectations.

Love you all,

blondieakarobin

PS.  As one last thank you, I’ve posted a formatted, printable copy of Dark Side of the Moon at http://bit.ly/2vLHMi, as will also post as an electronic version suitable for viewing on a kindle or MobiReader.  I’m also posting a ‘Director’s Cut’ that includes citations of all of Bella’s quotes from Twilight, research notes, and even funny comments from my betas in this version in the same directory.

blondie

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

Use of the dialog from the series is just for clarity - Stephenie Meyer owns all things twilight!  I'm making absolutely nothing from this work.


Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 24 Completed: Yes Word count: 163080
[Report This] Published: May 09, 2008 Updated: February 26, 2010


Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: May 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Verdict

Amazing fic. Filled with drama. Edward is so Edward!!!!
Update soon.

 
Summary: Post Eclipse. The story of Bella and Edward continues. Originally published on fanfic.net
Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: Yes Word count: 65705
[Report This] Published: May 11, 2008 Updated: May 11, 2008


Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: July 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 30: Outtake: No Live Animals

Interesting story with quite a bit of drama, angst and comedy ,,,Re Aro..

Glad that everything worked out.

 
Summary:

 

Bella Swan spent the first two years of her life in Forks developing a friendship with Jacob Black that finally turned into something more.  As she begins her senior year of high school, a new family moves to town and Bella slowly begins to question the path she thought her life would follow.  Sometimes there is a difference between what you think you need and what you never knew you wanted.  Takes place during the timeframe of New Moon and Eclipse.  J/B at first, but eventually E/B. 

 

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Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: No Word count: 170230
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2009


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 35: Kissed

Lovely update. It is good to see that Bella is beginging to heal and to slowly trust Edward again,  and that Edward is willing to compromise more and to be happy.

Update soon.

 
Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 35: Kissed

Lovely update. It is good to see that Bella is beginging to heal and to slowly trust Edward again,  and that Edward is willing to compromise more and to be happy.

Update soon.

 
Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 35: Kissed

Lovely update. It is good to see that Bella is beginging to heal and to slowly trust Edward again,  and that Edward is willing to compromise more and to be happy.

Update soon.

 
Don't Cry Out by LollirotXoX Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 69]
Summary: Then I smelt it. His scent, mixed with hers in the most horrible way. I had never felt an anger such as what exploded from me just then,and I had never run so fast in my existence. I reached the door I knew she was behind,fearing I was too late to save her.
Categories: Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, James, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: No Word count: 9972
[Report This] Published: July 17, 2008 Updated: July 29, 2008


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Haunted

Poignant and heartbreaking.
Update soon.

 
Summary:

Breaking Dawn; My version; What if Bella had made a different choice? Is Edward's nobility going to keep them apart for long? Is true love forever? First Fanfic; try it out, pretty pleasee? :D E&B.

 

Tested and True


Categories: Eclipse, Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Jacob, Jasper
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: Yes Word count: 14057
[Report This] Published: August 14, 2008 Updated: January 08, 2009


Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: January 16, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Both?

Poignant upate. I feel so sorry for Edward but could understand why he let Bella go to Jake as she loves Jacob too.  But is Bella thinking clearly, what will happen if Jake imprint someday, where would she be then?

 
North Star Rising by spaniard Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 216]
Summary:

NSR

Bella has set her sights on immortality, and finally, Edward has bent to her will. What could possibly go wrong as they plan for their own private eternity?

The best laid plans…

The ripples of the destruction caused by James’s coven have not yet settled, and the Cullen’s are about to understand exactly how much one moment in time can alter their fragile piece of perfection.


Categories: Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Irina, Jacob, Jasper, Kate, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Completed: No Word count: 91120
[Report This] Published: September 13, 2008 Updated: August 29, 2011


Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: January 13, 2011 Title: Chapter 24: 24. Battlefield

This was exciting, had me reading on the edge of my seat. Eager for more. 

 
This Warm Rush by rydia Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 149]
Summary:

Edward never returned to Carlisle, his "rebellious years" stretching into decades. Bella is in Seattle, avoiding a dance and buying books. But she's a danger magnet, and ends up attracting something she never expected.


Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Completed: No Word count: 31630
[Report This] Published: September 16, 2008 Updated: July 14, 2009


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: June 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I love this dark and dangerous Edward.  He is a killer  yet he still wants to protect Bella even as he wants her blood.  Carlise reaction to seeing Edward with Bella was interesting.  Eager to see the reaction of the other  Cullens when  Edward, with perhaps Bella in tow, visits Esme and Carlise at his previous home.

Awesine fic. Update soon.

 
Summary:

Alice has a vision that leaves Edward stunned. Will he get what he has secretly wanted or will he think with his head and not his heart? And what happens when Bella finds out and becomes determined to have this particular vision become a reality?    


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Leah, Mike, Renee, Rosalie, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 35981
[Report This] Published: September 29, 2008 Updated: November 03, 2009


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: June 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Confessions

This was just lovely.  It was wonderful to see Edward sharing his family home with Bella, and to see them communicating about decisions that impacts on both of them.

Love it. Update very soon.

 
Anything and Everything by Jfly Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 45]
Summary: AU- Edward has been gone for months and finally returns to Forks to claim his true love.
Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 3307
[Report This] Published: October 10, 2008 Updated: October 10, 2008


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Anything and Everything

Hott and very erotic, passionate. I love this piece. I love how you protrayed this Edward and Bella.

Edward biting Bella as he made love to her was so sensuous, I think that it is the best way to be turned.

Thanks for sharing.

 
Farewell by starcrossdlover Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 932]
Summary:

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It's Bella's 18th birthday, and what does she want more than immortality? Her darling Edward's loving company—minus the clothing. To her surprise, Edward caves and when Bella gets some, she gets WAY more than she bargained for. Cue Edward's standard self-sacrificing departure, a snarky, homicidal Victoria with some powerful connections, and a new Bella who grows a belly and a backbone and goes on her own little hunting trip in Denali to find answers.

Farewell is a twisted tale where everything is not always as it seems. There is an underlying current of betrayal that may knock your socks off on one or two occasions. A FRIENDLY WARNING: This story is not full of fluffy bunnies and rainbows and unicorns. It has the tendency to be very dark, in both drama and humor, on some occasions. If you choose to read, well, welcome to the dark side lovelies...

Special thanks to randigiles for helping me straighten out my synopsis. You rock, babe!

 


Categories: AU Characters: Alec, Alice, Angela, Aro, Bella, Caius, Carlisle, Carmen, Charlie, Chelsea, Demetri, Edward, Eleazar, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Irina, Jane, Jasper, Jessica, Kate, Lauren, Marcus, Other Character, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Tanya, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 33 Completed: No Word count: 214439
[Report This] Published: October 11, 2008 Updated: January 13, 2011


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: August 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 26: Broken Promise

Great story, filled with so much angst, love and hope.

I am so mad at you that you let Emmett be killed and I  felt really sorry for Rose and I hope that she finds some peace, even if it is through the Volturi experiments.  I also hope she proves to be a threat to them, in the end.

Love the name Emmelie, guess that it is a combinaton of  Emmett and Rosalie names:)

Want to see Victoria brutally destroyed so badly that I can taste it.

Glad to see Bella a vampire and hope that she has awesome talents not only to protect her family but be able to totally eliminate Aro and the others with it.

Hope that Jacob and the wolves come on Board and help the Cullens in their fight against the Volturi when they get all the facts.

As for Caius (who I mostly despised), Aro and the rest of the Volturi, I am counting the updates until they meet their brutal end also, and that too, I can taste.

Update soon.



Author's Response:

first, my apologies for taking so long to respond to your review. i read it on my phone after i received the email review alert and then i wasn't on twilighted until yesterday to respond.

now, thank you for your words...i expected your anger over emmett's death because that is the response i got from absolutely everyone, but i will repeat my trusty old line and say that i promise you it was for a reason. rose will find her peace in some ways, and she will fight like hell against the people who have, and will, hurt her.

emmalie is a combination of emmett and rosalie. it just seemed fitting, plus, i never really got into renesmee...not that i hated it...it just didn't fit here.

bella is gifted, and her gifts will come in handy in some important ways, once she learns how to use them properly. and trust me, she will be insanely angry at the volturi.

jacob and the wolves...we'll see what happens with them in the next few chapters, but i think you'll be happy about it. maybe.

and as for caius and aro and victoria...they will all have their day of reckoning. not right this very second, but trust me, it is coming...

i hope you will enjoy the updates and let me know your reactions to them. thank you again for the review! :)

 
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: August 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 26: Broken Promise

Hi, it is me again.  I just read some of the comments from the other reviewers.  And you know, yes, Edward appears cowardly, at times, and  let his fear rule him more than his love.  We made reference to the facat that he is  over a hundred years old, but we need to remember that despite his age on earth and his mind reading abilities, he is still an inexperienced, virginal and emotionally frozen  seventeen year old boy who was part of a victorian age and who despite, his beauty and many talents, have serious self esteem problems with regards to what he is and hatred of his being. 

We must also remember that he was turned at a time when he was suffering and he just lost both his loving parents, so those insecurities may be mixed up in his mind set. Also, although I am disappointed in him for  lying to Bella when he left, she was too quick to believe such lies, having huge self esteem problems. And, he did leave for the purest of reasons, out of love to protect her, even at his own pain.  Their biggest error as lovers is that they did not really listen to each other, and both of them let how their see themselves overshadow their love.  Both of these children were lonely and in finding what they both sought, grasp it too tightly and now we have the consequences.

So, most of the times when I read about Edward's behaviour, I remember that he is still a child that needs guidance, and as old as Carlisle is, his age is in his early 20s, he too is still a youth.  And finally, Bella, despite her love and feelings of rejection by Edward,  is also  responsible for her actions.

Well, thanks for reading my rant:)



Author's Response:

you are quite welcome for reading it. it is actually a type of message that i really enjoy, because it conveys so much passion and conviction for the way you feel about these characters and i love that. and, after reading your "rant", i can definitely appreciate where you are coming from and say that I agree with much of what you are saying. both edward and bella are young, and inexperienced, and scared and so desperately in love with each other, and sometimes, when all of these things get mixed together, they can result in foolish mistakes. all of the characters in this story...or most of them anyway...have made mistakes, and almost all of them can be attributed to love. but love is a powerful thing, and while it can certainly tear apart and destroy...it can also pick up the broken pieces and mend them to perfection. and that's kind of what this story is about when it is broken down into it's most basic messages: love is enduring, everlasting, and, no matter what path it leads us down, in the end, it will prevail.

thank you again for sharing this...any time you feel the need to let it out, i will happily listen.

 
Summary:

Set during New Moon.  Bella didn't jump.  But a vision from Alice sends the Cullens running back to Forks.  What if Bella wasn't the only one who fell apart when she lost the love of her life?  What if Edward couldn't handle being apart?  What if he fell?  How far could he fall?  Who committed the murders at the Swan residence and what happened to Charlie?  Just how bad can it get? 

Read and find out!

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Thanks to the amazingly talented Anne Cullen for the Banner.

 


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alec, Alice, Angela, Aro, Bella, Ben, Billy, Brady, Caius, Carlisle, Carmen, Charlie, Demetri, Edward, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Garrett, Jacob, Jane, Jasper, Jessica, Kate, Kim, Lauren, Laurent, Leah, Marcus, Mike, Other Character, Phil, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Tanya, Tyler, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: No Word count: 77631
[Report This] Published: October 15, 2008 Updated: March 03, 2010


Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: October 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - Charlie

A very interesting and exciting update. Sad how it happened but glad that Charlie would be there for Bella when she's also changed, and they wouldn't lose each other. That Victoria is evil and bitter to do such a thing - to try to manipulate a father, by turning him,  to kill his own daughter..  Eager to read the fight scene.  Update soon.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm glad you seem to be still liking the story.  And yes, Victoria is evil.  Plain evil.  This is just the twisted kind of thing I can see her doing; setting a father against a daughter.  I'm glad that so far, Charlie is able to figtht his baser instincts and try to protect Bella, the only way he can.

I hope the next chapter doesn't dissapoint.

 
Summary:

Alice was so focused on Bella when she came back to Forks that she didn't see Edward's decision to go to Italy. In fact, she didn't see anything until it was too late.

BPOV


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes Word count: 6024
[Report This] Published: October 16, 2008 Updated: October 29, 2008


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Poignant and heartbreaking.  I hate that Edward died but in the end he had Bella, who followed him,  and their version of forever. I would have like to see more on how the Cullens dealt with his death, especially Carlisel and Rosalie.

Thanks for sharing. 



Author's Response:

You know what, I have a lot of people asking me to do an EPOV of this story. Maybe if I have time, I'll get more into that.

 
Summary:

Bella Swan is twenty-seven years old, newly single, and mom to an adorable Kindergarten student with a knack for accidents. On a typical, fall afternoon, she experiences the shock of her life during a casual conversation with her son. When an unexpected revelation leads to the most emotional reunion imaginable, how will Bella reconcile the path her life has taken with the past she never chose? Takes place nearly ten years post New Moon. Canon - AU. ExB


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: No Word count: 61197
[Report This] Published: October 19, 2008 Updated: November 27, 2011


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: June 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

 An absolutely lovely fic, 15 chapters of which I just completed reading.

I love this Edward and Bella.  They made mistakes, especially Edward, + but there are handling it with such love and maturity.  Edward is communicating and is so open and vulnerable.

And Chris is a beautiful and talented child - his acceptance and interaction with Edward is heartfelt and wonderful as well as with the other family members.  I love how peaceful you protray Jasper and how kind Rose is. Emmett is his normal self as well as the adorable Alice. Carlise and Esme are as usual the center stones of love, care and stability.

And it is not too far fetch for Chris to have Edward,s talent when you take into account the  the venom in her system  due to James' bite, and Edwards fluids mingling with hers as he sucked it out.

Looking forward to more soon. Love Chris talents.  And I thank Josh for leaving Bella and giving my Edward an opportunity to claim his beloved.

 
Summary:

New Moon AU: When we fall down, sometimes, its best to pick ourselves up and move on, however hard it may be. 2 years after Edward leaves, this is what Bella is doing as she begins college. Only problem is... why does that TA look so familiar? Can new bonds be forged, or will the fires of love be quenched?

 


Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 14 Completed: No Word count: 24911
[Report This] Published: October 23, 2008 Updated: June 26, 2009


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: June 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

 Poignant and lovely.   I love this story. Bella and Edward are so long suffering, and needlessly. I so want Victoria to die along with her newborn minions.  Looking forward to the fight.

Update very soon.           

 
Summary:

 

 

"In a moment’s time, I’d be his, entirely. The one thing I’d wanted more than anything itself. The pain, the pleasure- it was worth it knowing I’d be able to claim to be his…at long last.

 

"The silence in the room was deafening. The intimacy of this moment made the world hold its breath in anticipation. Time ceased to exist; the only fathomable concepts were Edward and me."

For all of us who read Breaking Dawn, closed the back cover and said; "Yeah...not what I expected..."

This is my version, my ending of the Twilight Saga. In short, it's purpose is to show how Edward and Bella meet the trials and tribulations of being newlyweds, Bella being a newborn as well as other things life has to offer. It's meant to highlight their love, devotion, the strengthening of their bond as well as how they grow together emotionally and physically.

Rated NC-17 for Mature themes, language and adult and sexual content.

WARNING: quite a few lemons here ;]

 

ON HIATUS!! LOOK FOR MY NEWEST WORK AND THE FOCUS OF MY ATTENTION, "Love Story" !!


Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Phil, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: The Beginning
Chapters: 20 Completed: No Word count: 132794
[Report This] Published: October 30, 2008 Updated: November 15, 2009


Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: May 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 15- Rapture

An Awesone fic.  Intense and dramatic and realistic.  I just read the entire 18 chapters in one go.

Edward is so complex and so in love with Bella, but I understand him and I like that regardless of what happens, Bella stays by her mate, even is she is angry and makes him suffer a bit.

The Cullen family are wonderful...I adore Alice and Emmett.  Sometimes they are a bit too hard on Edward.

The love making between the two was so real especially the fears.

I felt badly for  Edward when Bella recalled everyone after the change, except Edward but I love the hot outcome.

Update soon.

 
Legacy by Autumn Dreamer Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 962]
Summary:

Edward is no stranger to new towns and new schools. In his seventeen years, he's been dragged all across the country by his parents, Peter and Liz Masen. With no siblings, no real friends, and no place to truly call "home," Edward gets used to living life as a solitary teenager--until he moves to Washington. There he meets the Cullens and their friends—a beautiful, brilliant group of people who are both rejected and revered by their classmates. Edward reluctantly finds himself growing to like these people more and more...and finds himself having friends and, for the first time, feeling like he belongs. But just when everything settles down, his world is torn apart by a long-kept secret and an ongoing betrayal that will leave him questioning everything he's ever known.

Drama/Humor/Mystery/Angst-lite
Rated R/M (for language and sexual innduendo)

This is not an Edward/Emmett slash story however, there is a lot of Edward & Emmett togetherness.

If you like Legacy, check out Legacy: Extra's & Outtakes for an extra Legacy fix.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 37 Completed: No Word count: 218730
[Report This] Published: October 30, 2008 Updated: February 24, 2010


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: September 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 29: Betrayal

Very emotional update.  Carlisle mum was an evil bitch and I hope that she pays for what she did. Hope that due to this new information that Peter is dealt with in a less harsh way, infact he may have saved Edward's life.Like the early bonding between Carlisle and Edward.  

What Esme did was very wrong, disrespectful to Edward and insensitive.  I know that Edward is hurting and is reacting  irrationally, but I cannot fault him for leaving and I understand why he would do so.

Update soon.   

 
Reviewer: Queendel Signed
Date: October 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 34: A Round of Apologies

   Really nice update. Great to see Charlie being nice to Edward and wonderful that Edward and Esme are tying to be closer to each other.

Update soon.

 
If I Sing... by kaimelar Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 40]
Summary:

Bella Cullen has been waiting over a century to find the happiness and love that her family shares. When the blood of a dying boy sings to her, can she find the strength to turn him without draining him dry? And if she does, can they overcome the hurdles, both human and immortal, that separate them from the greatest love they've ever known?


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: No Word count: 4517
[Report This] Published: November 24, 2008 Updated: March 26, 2009


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Really nice fic which I enjoyed a lot.  I like this plot where Bella was the vampire who changed Edward.  Eager to read more.

 
Cloven by McQueen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 381]
Summary:

Bella never thought things would get this way. It had never crossed her mind. The hurt and betrayal from all parties stung like constant bee stings, but something more important is at stake.

 

**Rated for violence and rape and takes place between New Moon and Eclipse.**


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: Yes Word count: 39771
[Report This] Published: November 24, 2008 Updated: July 29, 2009


Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: The Aftermath of Bliss

 Great update.  Wonderful to see Edward and Bella wed and that Charlie is aware that he now has a new son-in-law.

Hate that Jasper and Bella got into an accident.  I have a bad feeling that Jacob, and/or the other wolves are responsible for the accident.  I don't want Bella or Edward  to suffer if baby Cullen dies,  but if Jacob's baby die, and Bella lives, that will be fine by me, especially if Jacob is responsible for causing the accident.

Update soon.

 
Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Tears

A really nice fic.  Jacob is so horrid and his behaviour is arrogant and quite distasteful. I hope that Jacob gets what is coming to him, in spades. as he pays dearly for  raping Bella.


I love how Edward and the Cullens, even Rose, is caring, supporting and helping her as she endures what happened to her.

Charlie's behaviour was disappointing and his invitation to Billy and Jacob too lunch hurtful and disrespectful to Bella.  I hope that he realises his insensitivity to his daughter soon.  It was great to see how Jasper got her out of that situation.

It is wonderful that Edward and Bella are now married and will soon have a daughter. 

Update soon.

 
Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Crash

Poignant update.  Jacob is a pathetic, vile, monstrous creature.

What he  did was cowardly, brutal and downright inhuman.  He deserves whatever deadly, torturous  punishment the Cullens boys have for him - to kill his own child and its mother because of his anger and the fact that he lost her to Edward is an abominable action.  It would be great if Bella could also get her revenge for he deliberately hurt her and killed her only child.

It is sad that the baby died and that Edward and Bella would be hurting but, perhaps, it is for the best.

It would be interesting to know what Charlie and Billie think about their precious Jacob horrid actions.

Update soon.

 
Reviewer: Queendel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Heart in His Hand

Brutal update.  I am glad to see the back of Jacob in this story - he seemed to have been suffering from some type of insanity and showed no remorse for what he did to Bella.  

I don't think that he suffered much after all that he did to Bella, a lot more could have been done to him to show him the error of his ways before he died, but I guess I can accept that he is dead and let him rest in peace.  I felt some pity for him in the end, but he deserved what he got.  Paul suffered the most, but then the women took care of him!!!

I hope that Bella don't despair too much and blame herself for Jacob's end.  Even if Edward and his brothers wanted to kill him, he stalked  them and initiated the attack first, with two members of his pack , effectively breaking the treaty.  In the end, the Cullens just defended themselves.

Update soon.  Hope you get more than the 300 reviews.

 




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