This story took me surprise. The notion of Edward having an illegitimate child from his human life, and what might be done with such a premise, sounded dreadful, to be honest. I'm glad I gave it a chance, though, because you've created an engaging, thoughtful tale with so much to offer.

Thank you.

This story is very tender and moving. I first read it about a week ago and was so pleased to see a new chapter tonight. More soon, please.

I just love your style. Your characters are well-drawn and engaging, which in turn sets up the progression and motivations so naturally. The flow of the story is organic and the dilemmas believable... all in all, just fantastic stuff! I'm really enjoying this.

You've got a good flow going on, and I like the concept of an "apology scene." I like the puddle/ocean bit. That kind of whimsy is so very Bella. Nice job!

I'm really loving this story. It's engaging, intriguing, and the moody atmosphere is effectively accomplished without embellishments. Exceptional characters and such highly intelligent dialogue... it's all here with bells on.

I'm especially enjoying the artful way Church and the "mystery" man talk about themselves with Bella, and am really curious to see how the relationships develop.

Also, when Church talks about the past, you manage to give him the voice of a true contemporary of the early 20th century, and I'm not referring to diction (although you handle that remarkably well, also). No, I'm talking about a much rarer thing- Church talks about the past without sounding like he's reading from a history book. He speaks as someone who was there, not bothering to inject a lot of period details into his narrative- a trap a lot of authors unfortunately fall into (including myself).

I mean, if you tell your future grandchildren about an eventful camping trip you take with the Cullens in 2010, are you going to say...

"Well, as I drove my Ford hybrid up to meet everyone at the campsite, my cell phone rang (cell towers had finally gone up in the national forest two years previous). My ringtone was that 2009's hit song from the Kings of Leon. It was Alice, and she warned me about a trooper up ahead that was going to see me on the phone and give me a ticket, since talking on a handheld phone while driving had been outlawed in 2008...?"

Probably not. You'd likely say, "Alice called me while I was driving to the campsite, warning me about a trooper up ahead that was going to ticket me for talking on a handheld while driving. Just as I was about to ask her why she'd fulfilled her own prophecy by calling me, the other line beeped. It was Jacob."

'Nuff of that. ;D Anyways- he speaks of the past naturally. Very cool.

I look forward to future chapters.

I have read a lot of fanfic, and while a few have truly touched me, none actually brought tears to my eyes. Not even the original SM series ever made me cry, come to think of it. But I just got through shedding tears as Carlisle passed away, dang you.

I'm now looking forward to reading Waning Moon in its entirety. I, too, have long been convinced that Carlisle was destined to turn the vampire world on its head. After the events of BD, I imagined quite a few vampires would be intrigued by what his way of life could mean to them. There was a definite shift in power on the horizon- power that he never asked for, never assumed...

That seems to be one of the running themes of his life- refusing power that other beings scramble to possess, even though it's handed to him at every turn, first as a human, then as a vampire.

Instead he ultimately chooses to govern only himself. Even his family didn't stay with him because he compelled them to, but because he set an example they admired and loved. His power wasn't gotten by taking it from others, but in others giving him their trust. And I also think he was destined to die before the other Cullens (though not due to surprise mortality, which I'm still sniffling over), with Edward and Bella taking up his mantle, along with the rest of his family.

I'm looking forward to seeing how his overall journey plays out in your book.

Fun! This has the potential to be a really good read. I'm a little bummed about the prospect of Carlisle being the doctor with the lab, but oh, well.

 I really enjoyed seeing Rosalie this way. Thank you for writing a lovely one-shot.

Definitely got a laugh out of me. Good job.

Good grief, how thoroughly demoralizing.

Aren't we glad it didn't really happen, and that Carlisle made the "right" choice all those years ago? Okay, yes, technically, none of Twilight really happened, but we all like to pretend.

It was poignant, melancholy, and very well done, giselle- perhaps a little too well done.

Poor Carlisle. :( And Emmett, Rose, Jasper... poor everyone.  Edward turning to dust...

*sniffle*

*heavy sigh*

Well, whenever I need to get into a bitter, gloomy mood, I'll make sure to re-visit this story.

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Hehehe.

Charlie as a vamp. You've got a really good take on what it might be like, and I'm really enjoying it so far.

Thanks for a good read.

I've really enjoyed the tone and mood of your narrative in this opening. The plot set-up is less kind to Renee than I normally like in a Twilight re-telling, but it feels authentic in this story, and that's what counts.

I particularly like how Bella comes across as she relates her background; she doesn't let unfair circumstances turn her into a victim, but her vulnerability is still intact because of her capacity to experience these things and recognize their impact on who she is.

The dream/prediction thing is a neat twist, and I look forward to seeing how you use it later.

*grumble*