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Summary:

Summary: When I first caught her scent, I turned my wanting into hate. Later, as my cold yet sparkling hand touched her warm flesh, sunlight streamed through the trees making her skin glow as golden as the sun. Bella was an immortal. It was the day that secrets were spilled and lives changed forever. I had at last found a reason for my eternal life, someone who understood my pain.

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Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Billy, Carlisle, Carmen, Charlie, Claire, Edward, Eleazar, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Eric, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Laurent, Leah, Mike, Other Character, Phil, Quil, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Tyler, Victoria
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Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 38753
[Report This] Published: March 02, 2010 Updated: May 20, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Golden Eyes

I just found your story today, and I always enjoy stories in which Bella is something other. The possibilities just open up for all sorts of mayhem and changes to canon. I really like how you've changed things around where Bella's touch is somehow making Edward human? Well, we will see. I gotta admit, the mind boggles at what Bella would have to do to turn him completely human. *grin*. The idea doesn't bother me one bit, I'll tell you that much.

Author's Response:

I'm so happy to hear that you are enjoy the story so far. This story was one of my many what if's. There is a lot that we will learn about Bella as this story continues. To tell you any thing more would be to give it all away. I do hope you continue to read and review, but most importantly I hope you enjoy every minute of it.

Thank you for taking the time to leave a review.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Fighting Heaven by 2gsdip Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 19]
Summary:

 


"Move your hands, Jacob."

His black human eyes looked at me with confusion, his lips still mouthing the number's as he pushed Bella's heart.

"What's that?"

I smacked his hands away, there was no time for confusion or questions and if his hands were in the way when the syringe came down I was not stopping.


Edward's POV Right after the birth of Renesmee: Starts as Bella's Heart Stops beating.



Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 2242
[Report This] Published: March 21, 2010 Updated: March 24, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Fighting Heaven

I like this, I really absolutely hated not having Edward's POV on several things in BD.  I love how hard he fought for her.  The only part that I felt was jarring and kind of took me out of the "mood" of the story was when Edward said he felt and (kind of implied) heard her soul being ripped from heaven.  I just didn't like that part very much.  I would rather have seen it where he felt her soul coming back to him.  Then he could have gone on about having ripped her from her place in heaven to have her here by his side, etc.  Do you see what I mean?  It's one thing to have us accept and believe that Edward could feel her soul leaving his, and his heart trying to follow, but it's another altogether for us to have to accept that he felt her in heaven, if that makes sense?  Not sure.  It's kind of a fine point, I know.  I'm just that way.  :)

Thanks for writing!

 
Summary:

Edward always said that he didn’t want to damn Bella’s soul, but what if it was already damned?  Bella’s lived in Forks her whole life, and when the Cullens arrive, it’s a very different girl that they are faced with.


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No Word count: 7527
[Report This] Published: March 22, 2010 Updated: April 18, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: The Family with Golden Eyes

I really like the idea of a bad Bella who genuinely can't help it. I mean, she is the devil's offspring. I like that she can stand up to the vampires like that, apparently their intimidation tactics don't work on her. I wonder what kind of gifts she has? Obviously she's immortal, but what else I wonder? Interesting start, thanks for sharing.

Author's Response:

You will be seeing Bella's powers starting in chapter three.  She's just a wittle baby demon at the moment so even she isn't sure what all she's capable of yet.  I'm actually looking forward to exploring that side of her character and mapping out what exactly she can and cannot do.

 
Welcome Home by rash12 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 135]
Summary:

Bella Swan moves to Forks, Washington. About to start a new job as a teacher at the local high school, she rents an old house that’s surprisingly cheap but she’s about to find out it’s cheap for a reason.

Thanks to ZEE_21 for the banner!!!


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 15972
[Report This] Published: March 29, 2010 Updated: June 09, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

What an intriguing beginning, and how sad too.  So many hopes and dreams he had, all ruined because of money. 

Nice, start, nice hook to it.



Author's Response:

thanks so much!! :)

 
Beyond Repair by GreatEscape Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 956]
Summary:

EDITED, REVISED, AND IMPROVED!!!

Same great chapters, just better! Everything is the same except all the silly typos and mistakes have been corrected!

When the Volturi arrived in Texas to put a stop to the warring vampire armies, Bella was only able to escape with her life by the skin of her teeth. Her search for a better life was not successful. When the Cullens find her many years later alone and seemingly unconscious can they help her to find the peace she once sought or is she damaged beyond repair?

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And thanks to the lovely Delicious Dreamer for this one!

AU

Mentions of dark themes and violence.


Categories: AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 41 Completed: Yes Word count: 159056
[Report This] Published: April 04, 2010 Updated: December 26, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Just found this story, and it's intriguing to see such a hardened Bella.  So different from the norm, and this is definitely a Bella that doesn't seem interested in changing anytime soon.  I like that!  I also love that you made Rosalie the person she seems to be the most friendly with, even if it is somewhat calculated.  You've really turned the typical cliches on their heads.

Thanks for sharing!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I really enjoy taking everybody out of their normal character so I'm glad you like it what I've done.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Bella's gift is cool.  I really like how hardened and cynical she is, it's so refreshing to see her this OOC and not changing rapidly from it from the magical influence of the Cullens.  She must have been very important to the wars with her gift though.  I like how you made it that all vampires have a gift, just that some are more subtle than others.  That totally makes sense.

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I know what you mean! I love stories when either Bella or Edward are fucked up but hate when all of sudden they get all happy and cured two days after meeting one another. That is definitely not how things work. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

This is going to sound so weird but I actually really liked seeing them argue. It was refreshing. I loved that Rosalie and Bella are close, too. I liked the explanation too. With s few simple sentences you suddenly made Rosalie make sense to me. I've never liked her but I admit I never understood her either.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I'm glad that I could make you understand Rosalie, in this story at least. She'll have a bigger role in my story and I don't know how well that would work out if everyone still hated her. I don't think it's weird at all that you liked the arguing. I enjoyed writing so it's reall good that you liked reading it!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Oh, this made me sad and excited at the same time.  I thought Bella was schizo, the way her brain was going back and forth like that.  Didn't know what to think.  So she stood Mike up, right?  Well, better stood up than drained. 



Author's Response:

Lol Bella is definitely not schizo! And yea she stood up old Newton but some of my other readers were all for him being drained. Lol thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Yeah, I'm confused and I was afraid I was just forgetting important pieces of the story.  Thanks for the AN.  Now I know it's not me at fault, it's YOU!  *grin* 

I love how Rosalie helped out Edward like that.  She's really blossoming now that there is a need for her.  I really like that a lot.  I always felt that in the books, it was a shame there was no outlet for the love she had the potential of giving to those who need it.  Not talking about Emmett, she has more of a caretaker love, like Esme, but different too. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Lol it is me! Bella will keep reveal bits and pieces of her life throughout the story until everything is out in the open. Hopefully I can pull that off, well. Rosalie was always one of my favorite characters in the book and I felt like we should have gotten more from her, so I made that happen here. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Wait, was it supposed to end there with "Alice thought."?  That was weird. 

Poor Bella, she feels hideous with all the scars.  I feel bad for her too.  Women are very much tied to their physical appearance, after all.  Sad but true.  I am curious as to what Carlisle thinks of her?  We've kind of heard from all the "children", and Esme, but Carlisle's been very quiet.  And absent.  Her talent is very useful for Edward, no doubt about that.  It seems like it would be extremely useful for Jasper too, in overwhelming situations.  Of course he'd probably freak. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I don't what happened with the end of the chapter. I just went back and edited it because I definitely didn't put those last few lines in there. Yea Bella has big issues with scars, especially now since she's in a house with three other women who are basically flawless. I'll admit that we won't get a lot of Carlisle in this story but he will make an appearance within the next few chapters. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

I missed a chapter, so I'm just now caught up.  Edward better realize the uphill battle he's got.  It's really a shame that he didn't hear what Bella said to her victim.  It would have cleared up a lot for him, I think.  However, we've got the blind leading the blind here.  Edward doesn't believe he has a soul, and he thinks he's a monster too.  So how can he possibly convince Bella that she doesn't deserve to feel guilt and all that for herself?  Especially when she wants to be punished for her sins?  It's really piquing my curiosity, her supposed mate.  I am beginning to wonder if she was brainwashed into believing he is her mate in some form or fashion.  I also think that Esme has been a bigger help for her than I had realized.  Rosalie seems to have stepped down from her role with Bella, surprisingly.  I thought they would become even closer, but it seems not.  It's nice to see Edward fighting for Bella, doing what he can to help her and get closer to her. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I debated for a long time on whether or not Edward should have heard what Bella said or not. Obviously I went with not but decided to let the readers know. Edward will eventually find out what she says later on in a conversation between them. Convincing Bella she doesn't deserve to feel guilt will be very hard and more than just Edward will be involved. Rosalie makes a return in the next chapter and she definitely hasn't taken a step back from Bella. I wanted the relationship between Bella and Esme to grow because Esme will be just as important in healing Bella as Rosalie, maybe even more important. Bella finds it easier to be around Esme because she doesn't feel threatened by her in any way. Bella is easy around Rosalie because she knows if need be can manipulate Rosalie to her own advantage and their peronalities are very similiar. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Surely Lucas brainwashed Bella, because everything he did was so twisted up it's just... wow.  Poor Bella.  I'm sure Edward must have overheard all that, it must have been so difficult for him.  Rosalie and Bella have so much in common in this fic, it's just sad. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Yes, Bella had quite a time with Lucas unfortunately. Yes Edward heard everything and we'll hear a little bit from him in the next chapter. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I'm glad that Bella finds Edward's gift to be a good thing.  That really shows how comfortable she is with him.  Poor Edward, that was just torture for him to have to see what she went through.  This is really horrific, what Lucas persuaded her to do. The more I think about it...

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

It was really awful for Edward to have to see what Bella went through, through her memories and I wasn't going to make him at first but in the end I decided it would give him some better understanding. And make for good angst ;) Yea, Lucas was a very evil man. smh. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I'm so glad to see Bella go hunting with Edward!  The events afterwards was sad, I'm glad that she spoke with Rosalie about it.  It's heartbreaking what her brain has been conditioned to, because of all the abuse and brainwashing. This must be difficult for Rosalie, too, dealing with this.  It may also help in some weird way though, because as awful as Rosalie's experience was, it's still not as bad as Bella's.  It kind of puts things into perspective, you know?  Not trying to minimize what Rosalie went through or anything, but there's always something worse.

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I wanted Bella and Rosalie to be able to help each other. Rosalie could help Bella cope and as you said Bella could put things in perspective for Rose.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Just a small mistake-Edward kissed her forehead, not her cheek earlier.

So why do they have to go home now when their guests won't arrive until tomorrow? Does Edward have to clean his room or something? Lol

I wonder what happened to Bree? It sounds like she genuinely tried her best to protect Bella.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

*hides face in embarrassment* Going to fix that right now! Thanks for pointing it out to me! And yes that's exactly why Edward had to go home. Esme wants her house more than perfect when her guests arrive lol. There's also a little story of what happened to Bree back in chapter nine. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

So I'm thinking Bella knows Laurent?  And not in a good way.  Hopefully Edward doesn't stop Bella in a stupid way that upsets her and makes her run. Bella's story about her dad made me want to cry.  That was just awful.  No wonder she had so many hangups with needing to be loved by that horrible "mate".

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Yep. Bella's father is the source of most all her issues. As for Edward, the next chapter will be up soon and we'll see how he handles the situation! Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I had forgotten all about that conversation with Rosalie. Well, I don't think Bella is going to just forgive and forget. I'd like Laurent to explain to the Denalis what he had done. See how they feel about their newest member. Oh, I know Bella isn't an innocent but I don't think she deserved whatever they did.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

I figured a lot of people would forget especially after reading of the reviews for the chapter before and that's why I added in that little bit so that people could remember. We'll learn all about Bella's past with Laurent in the next chapter. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
The Blizzard by she_viking Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1402]
Summary:

Bella is walking home during a blizzard and stumbles upon a homeless man on the ground. Despite her better judgment she decides to save him from the cold, and the night turns into something she never expected. Rated NC-17 for language and lemony stuff.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 127182
[Report This] Published: April 07, 2010 Updated: June 22, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I wasn't sure what to expect when I started reading this, but this really took me unawares.  Much more moving and realistic than I had thought it would be.  I loved the inner monologue because that was so what I would have been thinking.  Edward managed to win me over without a word, too.  Obviously he's suffering from something (PTSD?), I wonder what happened to his wife? 

Thanks for writing and sharing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

I've fallen behind bigtime on this story because I forgot to put it on alert, and I should have reviewed every chapter. But I simply couldn't help myself and my need to find out what happened next. So I'll try to leave an extra long review. I knew that Bella would go looking for Edward rgardless of the danger. I may be slightly in love with Angela. She's all sorts of amazing. I love that you didn't have Alice or Rosalie be the bff here. Although your slight reference to a college roomate obsessed with dressing her was hilarious. Edward's past sounds so sad. He doesn't have the temperament for being a soldier. He can't let go of the horrors he sees, he broods too much and he's too much of a thinker. He's not a follower.

I am so glad that he's okay for the most part. Mike as an unexpected and most unwelcome intruder. Gross. Can't believe he thought he could just come back to her like that. I'm so glad Edward isn't brooding about all that they're doing to take care of him. He's the type to not accept help easily.

Thanks for the story! Either you already have this written or you are the fastest writer ever.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Such a strange contradiction Edward is! A former soldier, yet a pacifist. I had kind of expected him to be more bitter than that. I wonder what he plans on doing after he leaves? He seems perfectly normal except for his inability to talk.

Thanks for the update!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I think we all need a hug.  Oh Edward!  Come back!  I don't think Bella would mind the current version of Edward, don't you see you're both? 

This explained a lot of what's going on with Edward.  I mean, yes people who are handicapped can have a typical life with jobs and such, but that's not all that is wrong here.  I'm dying to know if he has any family - parents, sisters/brothers... I wonder if Bella can look for them since she knows his name and has the dogtag?  I thought that with dogtags, they put serial numbers for identification?  I have no idea to be honest.

I'm glad he took the picture.  I must admit I'm worried that Bella's going to go looking for Edward in the worst neighborhoods now and get herself into trouble. 

Thanks for the update!

 
Daybreak by kay0913 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 591]
Summary:

Bella Swan thought everything that she has dealt with was real, that she lived in a town where the supernatural exists. One day she wakes up, only to find out that the reality she had belonged to was nothing more than one big elaborate dream.

 

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A huge thanks to ms. ambrosia for the awesome banner, and to Rose Arcadia for the amazing blinkie. 


Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: No Word count: 72280
[Report This] Published: April 08, 2010 Updated: October 01, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15 - Interrogations

I just read this story from the beginning. And it's definitely different from what I was expecting. I like how Bella was differentiating between the two Edwards because that makes sense to me. Of course he would fight it tooth and nail! But, would Renesmee be born? Because I'm thinking of the chances of the same egg and sperm joining-but hey, this is your story and what with it being the whole dream world and all, it would work too if Renesmee comes into being.

Thanks for sharing with us!

Author's Response:

Part of the plot is Bella's power to somehow know what's going on before she's told and in a way see the future, like her dreams in Breaking Dawn. So, it could be that Renesmee might still happen, but then again, I'm not sure if she'll make an appearance or not.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16 - Target

Man, the mood they're in they better find someone to kill. Maybe they'll be happier afterwards. I get the feeling it's going to get fubared though, have they forgotten how Bella's dream is coming true? Of course Edward's reaction to the details is over the top. I expect the Guardian car at any moment now. *grin*.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

LOL, I was just researching their cars last night. Don't worry, they'll find someone.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17 - The Hunt

I should have known Rosalie couldn't let it rest! Man, talk about scheming. The fight with the nomads went well at least. Still don't really trust Laurent, but we will see I guess. But I trust Rosalie will at least keep Bella safe for the most part. She may see a side of vampires she hasn't yet, but physically I imagine she'll be fine. Edward's gonna freak on her though. Heh.

Author's Response:

You can bet on that. Edward will be livid. Rosalie has good intentions though.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: October 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19 - Temper

Well I didn't see that coming! It's like some kneejerk reaction for Edward to run. But all this has to be kind of overwhelming for him. I can see both of their pov.

Author's Response:

Thank you. Yes, he is completely overwhelmed by it all.

 




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