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Summary:

An unexpected discovery reveals that Edward lied when he left Bella.  Now, Bella is determined to find a way to contact him, and in the process she learns more than she ever knew about Edward Cullen.

An Edward and Bella love story.

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Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella
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Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: Yes Word count: 178682
[Report This] Published: February 17, 2010 Updated: November 12, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Epilogue: A Winter's Day (angelicwish)

It was absolutely a treat to see Edward being relaxed, playful, happy.  As in really and truly, bone deep contentment.  The scene where Bella told him about the frat party was awesome.  I could completely picture it in my head, Edward going from 0 to 11 on the Richter Scale while Bella blinks at him in innocent astonishment.  It was hilarious how she so blithely informed him of the party without a thought on how he'd react.  And Edward losing at cards!  And pouting!  lol  She totally will have to tell Emmett about it. 

The fight was a train wreck.  Painful to watch yet unable to stop.  I really liked seeing it though because it was nice to see them being imperfect. 

Thanks so much for the story!  I adore your writing and you have the best Bella/Edward emotional growth storylines.  Blood Lines is still my absolute #1 favorite story.



Author's Response:

Wow, thank you so much.

I'm glad you liked Edward's reaction to the frat party - I had fun writing that.  And yeah, I can just see him going off the deep end like that.  I guess Bella thought it was just an invitation, she'd said no, it was no biggy - but of course Edward sees it differently.  But she made him feel better in the end :)

Their fight was actually one of my favourite parts of this story.  I liked writing Edward's part when he walked away - Bella had to learn that he can't just be at her beck and call all the time, that he's allowed to get angry too.  I think my favourite bit was when he ran back to her - I really liked writing that little part.

Thanks for all your reviews.

Cheers!

 
Summary:

What if the vampire family that embraced Bella was not the Cullen's but the Denali's. After a series of tragic events, Bella is led to Denali. Despite the unpleasantness that leads to her joining their family, she eagerly accepts all the love and sense of sisterhood the Denali's offer her. Bella finds herself happier than she's ever been. But how long will that happiness last? What happens when the Cullen's come to meet the newest addition to the Denali coven?

 This story has been beta'ed by the lovely and wonderful Mommakat!!!

 

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AU/ OOC

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: Bella
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Series: None
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes Word count: 94495
[Report This] Published: February 17, 2010 Updated: June 27, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Wow, what a horrible way for Phil to die. Poor Bella, having to see that was sad. Especially afte her good for nothing mom left her like that. How utterly wrong.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

I know, I hated doing that to Phil. Thanks for the review!

 
Summary:

In an alternate universe that picks up where Edward left in New Moon, Isabella is existing contentedly on the other side of the world. She has been changed despite all of Edward's precautions but he hasn't a clue. When fate steps in and brings the Cullens to Isabella, the changes in her wreak havoc in their hearts and on the rest of the vampire world.

AU, canon couples, rated for future lemons.

 

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Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Liam, Maggie, Other Character, Rosalie, Siobhan
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Series: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: No Word count: 22806
[Report This] Published: February 20, 2010 Updated: June 15, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Power Struggles

I just found this story, really liking it so far!  I love the idea of a vengeful Bella who doesn't just go running into Edward's arms first chance she gets.  That's very important to me.  I also love the different coven, it's interesting!  I hope Edward gets his ass kicked.  *grin* 

Thanks for sharing with us, and I'm so sorry to hear about your iPhone.  I can't imagine mine going out, it's my Precious.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Hell Hath Not Seen Fury The Likes Of This Before

Well, I kind of wish Bella got to do more damage to Edward, because I'm mean like that. But seeing her be so unresponsive on the bed is probably fairly good torture in and of itself. I hate how she had to do that to Charlie, as a parent that would hurt. I totally understand the decision, and I don't know what else she could have done except maybe fake her own death to make it better marginally. At any rate, thanks for the update!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: A Pavlovian Response

WTF, those dogs are pissed. They are acting psychotic, and do they not notice there are other random vampires around? Are they so focused on the Cullens they can't see anyone else? It's Only the Cullens could possibly have bitten her?I guess I can understand in some ways, after all it was their fear in Forks all that time. But how irritating!

 
Enough by Arabella_ Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 91]
Summary:

Edward left two months ago, and Bella has slipped deeper and deeper into darkness. Her extreme solution provides a closer look at the pair as we find out what happens to their plans of forever.

Rated for suicide themes and language.

 

Enough


Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 26468
[Report This] Published: February 25, 2010 Updated: January 18, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 18, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Ice

I really love how you address the damage that was done psychologically and physically when Edward left.  It's not just a quick surface treatment, the way a LOT of fics do, but a serious look at it.  I wish more fics would do this.  There's a lot of fics that I've read where it was really promising, with a great buildup and all that, but once the two of them came back together with all the lies revealed, it seems like Bella would just be, like 95% okay with just a few lingering issues, the major ones glossed over.  Of course the books do that too which is the biggest issue I have with them.  Anyway, I love that you weren't afraid to go there.



Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm glad that the angst doesn't feel tedious. I try to balance the difficulties with the love we all know is there. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Tangible

So I just found this story, and I must say that it has always confused me how few stories there are with Bella attempting suicide.  It seems such an obvious route to me, all things considered.  I mean yes, she did promise Edward to be safe, but what good are promises compared to the pain she was in? 

Can't wait to see how she handles things!



Author's Response:

I agree, though I think I can understand why. Meyer couldn't have gone this route in the actual books because it would have been a bad example to minors, whether this was her vision or not (which I doubt).

Regarding fanfiction:

For this one, dark story idea, I had maybe 10 fluffier Edward/Bella scenes floating around in my head. These kinds are rarer, and I knew I couldn't ignore it. But I think perhaps other writers might shy away from these fleeting, slightly uncomfortable thoughts, thus dwindling the pool of darker works. Not that I blame them; they often take more energy and might even depress the author.

Thanks for reading!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Angel

Wow, Edward's unhinged.  He's freaking me out a little bit.  Calling Alice a midget vampire made me laugh most inappropriately considering the circumstances.  I'm kind of glad that Bella's out of it right now and doesn't have to see Edward going all crazed-Norman-Bates on the house.  Wouldn't it be better if they setup some sort of likely scenario though, other than murder or suicide?  Like, she ran away or something?

Thanks for writing!



Author's Response:

Edward's intention was always to fake a runaway (which is why he was so OCD about cleaning), but his head is not in the right place so he forgot a few things. Not to mention his rash inclination toward fire at the end when he got desperate. That's why it's a good thing Alice showed up. She'll help him out with more than just the floor.

I'd never let poor Charlie be homeless.

Hope that clears things up.

Thanks for reading!

 

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Reality

Wow, Bella's bitter and sad.  I'll be interested to see her reaction to Edward's confession, I mean she went through hell because of his stupidity. 

Thanks for the update!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Consumed

It's pretty hard for me to feel any sympathy for Edward here.  He made his bed, now he has to lie in it.  Bella got changed while trying to commit suicide, fully believing that Edward did not love her.  It's not like Esme here, who woke up and fell in love with her mate immediately.  Bella believed she wasn't enough for Edward, that's not something that can be easily fixed.  So yeah, his fault.  Deal with it. 



Author's Response:

Yep, there really are no quick fixes. I feel sorry for Edward in general, but not much in this chapter. He's acting too childish.

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Entwined by La_Tua_Cantante_83 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 523]
Summary:

Entwined Banner

Six months ago, Edward Cullen left Forks, trying to escape the bloodlust that was sure to be his downfall. Now he's returned, only to find that he can never truly escape what the Fate's have destined for him. Together with the one whose fate is twisted with his, he must find a way to protect what matters most. Rated Mature. Vamp, AU.    


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: No Word count: 220424
[Report This] Published: February 28, 2010 Updated: November 18, 2012


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Rolling Burn, Eat Me Like A Forest Fire

I certainly don't blame Edward for getting a little turned on by his mate's show of aggression. In fact, anytime he wants to get turned on by it is fine by me. Poor Carlisle, it has to be agony to know where his son and daughter are and not be able to help them. It's rather akin to sending your kid off to face serial killer armed with a spork I think.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: October 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Run, Run As Fast As You Can...

Wow, so much self loathing from Edward.  But yeah, I really like the idea of them rejoining the family.  I can't imagine how angry Aro must be right now, he's probably frothing at the mouth.  Not attractive at all, the mental image.  So yeah, I don't think he's going to be very pleasant with Carlisle-in all likelihood, he would have sent for them immediately.  At least, that's my theory.  He has to know that family is a huge Achilles heel for Edward and Bella.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: How Easily the Wind Carries Our Ashes Away

Oi, I'm so glad that you're back from hiatus!  I had to go back and reread a couple of chapters, but all in all it was pretty seamless to get back into the flavor of this fic.  I like how strong Bella is.  She totally made sense in her speech, too.  Rosalie's anger and self hatred makes a lot more sense here in this fic imo, than in a lot of others.  Even though you didn't add more to the story or anything, you do a better job explaining it and her reasons than I think SM did herself.  I'm trying to figure out how the werewolves knew she was murdered, what gave it away?  It almost seems like they are gifted themselves in some way. 

Thanks so much for writing again!  Great to have you back!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: One Last Breathless Moment of Waiting

Very intense! For some reason the mental image I had of Bella running at the wolves yelling no, included her saying "Heel! Sit!". Lol

Jacob is leader, where is Sam? Got a bad feeling...

Author's Response:

LOL! Thanks for the review. Now that you've said that, I can't stop thinking, "No! Bad dogs!" hehehe....

Sam's still there. Don't worry. You'll see him briefly in the next chapter. Which, incidently, will be up soon. =)

Thank you again for reading!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: So Sorry To Burst Your Bubble

Oh man, this was an intense chapter. As much as I hate that their first time was there, it Probably saved their lives.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: On Our Own Deserted Island, Let Us Be

Yeah, you suddenly threw in the whole gift thing at the end while we're still reeling over the sexing.  Totally wasn't paying attention.  I was so freaked out by the turn of events, it was all so sudden.  I imagine it was kind of like how Edward felt.  Going from suddenly being protected by Bella's shield, to finding out all that truth, to hearing her say the most important words, to consummating their bond... I loved that Bella was so obsessed with Edward too, that she felt the same bond as Edward. Loved that.  Before she confessed everything I was worried that the Volturi had propositioned her, or Alec had dazzled her or something.  I was theorizing all over the place.  Now things make so much more sense.  Now the question is, can Bella get them out of there without getting chased down.  They may have to stay away from the family for a while...

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Poisoned Peaches & Ballerina Daydreams

I get the feeling that Bella has been obsessing over Edward all the time he was gone. Perhaps that is even the reason for her dad's suggestion to go to the party? And her dreams of Edward-she's going to miss those. I love that artwork, beautiful. What an amazing coincidence that the artist had been to Volterra!

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! Isn't that AWESOME that the artist had been to Volterra. I just happened upon that info, seeing as how I had picked out the painting MONTHS ago, before I even began posting. It was exciting.

Thanks for your insightful comments!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Keeping Secrets, Telling Lies

I just found this story today and I am so happy I did. I love stories in which Bella gets turned quickly, be it by a Cullen or another vampire. I like seeing how she turns out. I gotta admit I never accepted Stephenie Meyer's explanation that just knowing and accepting things before being turned makes for a more stable vampire. That just makes no sense to me. I mean, the Volturi would have known that trick if that's the case. Anyway, I really like the story so far. Thanks for the hint about Bella's secret, I was afraid it was going to be something about Port Angeles and the gang of guys. Glad to know that's not it.

Thanks for writing and sharing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: Breaking Down, Broken Arrow

That.Was.Awesome. Has to be one of the best fight scenes I've ever read. If not the best. I can't think of any tha tops it off the top of my head, in fact. I was completely glued to it, usually I end up skim reading fight scenes when they don't hold my interest or get too bogged down in descriptions, or too confusing. This was intense and believable and easy to follow and did I mention intense? I loved that Bella got to rip demetri into shreds and even pull out his heart. I gotta admit I'm kind of curious as to what vampire insides look like. Hehe. Bella's gift is so ephemeral yet my lord, so powerful. Imagining what she can do in a hundred years or so, if she wanted. Felix has the right idea being afraid of her. In fact, I imagine the entire vampire world will be terrified of her once word gets out what she did, even temporarily. She'll be the figurative boogie monster for the monsters. Lol. So did Rosalie kill Jane? I wasn't completely sure on that one. Did she beat her to death? I'm ok with that.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: A Little Bit Like Ending

Now this may explain why Aro didn't recapture the two in Europe. If Marcus had gotten free of Chelsea somehow, that must have caused some chaos in Volturi. Wow that would have been a sight I'm sure. Bella's gift is so... Ephemeral. It's like trying to nail down jello. She must be half crazy with frustration with it. All these vampires there for them, it's kind of humbling.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Name the Time and the Place, Save the Date

God, you made me cry again.  Again, I tell you.  Must stop. The part that made me cry?  Carlisle's reaction to his son being home.  That's the kind of emotional response that I've always wanted to see with him in fics, never quite made it until now.  I love that fatherly love.

Alice never ceases to surprise us.  Marriage wasn't on my mind, but it makes sense in a way.  I loved her snarky, all knowing attitude in her text message.  "really?!"  Lord it over the lesser beings, Alice.  lol 

So, Garrett was their little follower!  That was a surprise.  Bella's gift is interesting, definitely.  I really like Garrett so far, I don't know why Edward seems so determined to not talk to the guy.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Snapshots

Edward's broodiness just knows no bounds, does it?  He has such a flair for the dramatic, too.  I kind of wanted to throw a burning torch into Emmett's lap for his idiotic comment about searching for a Bella.  Seriously, Em?  It's too bad Bella can't play dead or something, but that would be too much to ask for and also there'd be too many questions (and an autopsy).  They did such a good job destroying the evidence, it never occurred to anyone to save any of it to create a fake scene elsewhere, did it?  It's not like she can bleed or anything now to create a death scene, or even pull out a few hairs or something.  Poor Charlie.

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

*sigh* Yes, Edward does have a flair for the dramatic. Poor Emmett. He kind of came off as a doffus in this one, but he honestly thought Edward would have told her, because HE would have told his mate the whole situation. Full disclosure. But that's not how Edward operates.

And Bella DEFINITELY can't pretend to be dead. They will find a way to give some peace to Charlie. Don't worry.

Thanks so much for your comments!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Space-Time Continuum

Wow, Alice, couldn't you hold off calling for ONE.MORE.MINUTE?  I mean seriously?  Edward is just bound and determined to feel unworthy of Bella, while knowing Bella, she's probably thinking she's unworthy of someone as beautiful as Edward.  I hope Tanya doesn't turn out to be awful.  That's one thing that always puzzled me in fics.  I mean, in the books, there's nothing to indicate that Tanya was anything but nice, really.  She wasn't overtly pushy or sexual or anything, imo.  Yeah, she propositioned Edward, but who can blame her for that?  And it doesn't make sense to me that Edward would consider someone a friend if they were crass or stupid or overly bold with him.  Does that make sense?  I don't care if they are the only other vegetarian vampires on the planet, if their presence isn't something Edward enjoyed I don't think he'd bother being all friends with them.

Thanks for the update!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: You've Had A Taste, So Now Spit It Out

Well that is a very humbling realization, that if Bella had been alone she could have been better off than if Edward had gone with her. Huh. Interesting thought. But what Aro is doing, so many levels of wrong. He shouldn't be able to force others to stay and serve, surely if other vampires learn of this they would protest?

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 25, 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: When All Else Fails, Hold Your Breath

Between a rock and a hard place. There really is no choice, and I hated that for them. Poor Bella just can't catch a break. The Alec thing with his obsession with Jane is something I had thought myself, it just seemed creepy as hell. I privately called them the Incest Twins.

 




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