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Entwined by La_Tua_Cantante_83 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 524]
Summary:

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Six months ago, Edward Cullen left Forks, trying to escape the bloodlust that was sure to be his downfall. Now he's returned, only to find that he can never truly escape what the Fate's have destined for him. Together with the one whose fate is twisted with his, he must find a way to protect what matters most. Rated Mature. Vamp, AU.    


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: No Word count: 220424
[Report This] Published: February 28, 2010 Updated: November 18, 2012


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: So Sorry To Burst Your Bubble

Oh man, this was an intense chapter. As much as I hate that their first time was there, it Probably saved their lives.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: On Our Own Deserted Island, Let Us Be

Yeah, you suddenly threw in the whole gift thing at the end while we're still reeling over the sexing.  Totally wasn't paying attention.  I was so freaked out by the turn of events, it was all so sudden.  I imagine it was kind of like how Edward felt.  Going from suddenly being protected by Bella's shield, to finding out all that truth, to hearing her say the most important words, to consummating their bond... I loved that Bella was so obsessed with Edward too, that she felt the same bond as Edward. Loved that.  Before she confessed everything I was worried that the Volturi had propositioned her, or Alec had dazzled her or something.  I was theorizing all over the place.  Now things make so much more sense.  Now the question is, can Bella get them out of there without getting chased down.  They may have to stay away from the family for a while...

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Poisoned Peaches & Ballerina Daydreams

I get the feeling that Bella has been obsessing over Edward all the time he was gone. Perhaps that is even the reason for her dad's suggestion to go to the party? And her dreams of Edward-she's going to miss those. I love that artwork, beautiful. What an amazing coincidence that the artist had been to Volterra!

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! Isn't that AWESOME that the artist had been to Volterra. I just happened upon that info, seeing as how I had picked out the painting MONTHS ago, before I even began posting. It was exciting.

Thanks for your insightful comments!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Keeping Secrets, Telling Lies

I just found this story today and I am so happy I did. I love stories in which Bella gets turned quickly, be it by a Cullen or another vampire. I like seeing how she turns out. I gotta admit I never accepted Stephenie Meyer's explanation that just knowing and accepting things before being turned makes for a more stable vampire. That just makes no sense to me. I mean, the Volturi would have known that trick if that's the case. Anyway, I really like the story so far. Thanks for the hint about Bella's secret, I was afraid it was going to be something about Port Angeles and the gang of guys. Glad to know that's not it.

Thanks for writing and sharing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: Breaking Down, Broken Arrow

That.Was.Awesome. Has to be one of the best fight scenes I've ever read. If not the best. I can't think of any tha tops it off the top of my head, in fact. I was completely glued to it, usually I end up skim reading fight scenes when they don't hold my interest or get too bogged down in descriptions, or too confusing. This was intense and believable and easy to follow and did I mention intense? I loved that Bella got to rip demetri into shreds and even pull out his heart. I gotta admit I'm kind of curious as to what vampire insides look like. Hehe. Bella's gift is so ephemeral yet my lord, so powerful. Imagining what she can do in a hundred years or so, if she wanted. Felix has the right idea being afraid of her. In fact, I imagine the entire vampire world will be terrified of her once word gets out what she did, even temporarily. She'll be the figurative boogie monster for the monsters. Lol. So did Rosalie kill Jane? I wasn't completely sure on that one. Did she beat her to death? I'm ok with that.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: A Little Bit Like Ending

Now this may explain why Aro didn't recapture the two in Europe. If Marcus had gotten free of Chelsea somehow, that must have caused some chaos in Volturi. Wow that would have been a sight I'm sure. Bella's gift is so... Ephemeral. It's like trying to nail down jello. She must be half crazy with frustration with it. All these vampires there for them, it's kind of humbling.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Name the Time and the Place, Save the Date

God, you made me cry again.  Again, I tell you.  Must stop. The part that made me cry?  Carlisle's reaction to his son being home.  That's the kind of emotional response that I've always wanted to see with him in fics, never quite made it until now.  I love that fatherly love.

Alice never ceases to surprise us.  Marriage wasn't on my mind, but it makes sense in a way.  I loved her snarky, all knowing attitude in her text message.  "really?!"  Lord it over the lesser beings, Alice.  lol 

So, Garrett was their little follower!  That was a surprise.  Bella's gift is interesting, definitely.  I really like Garrett so far, I don't know why Edward seems so determined to not talk to the guy.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Snapshots

Edward's broodiness just knows no bounds, does it?  He has such a flair for the dramatic, too.  I kind of wanted to throw a burning torch into Emmett's lap for his idiotic comment about searching for a Bella.  Seriously, Em?  It's too bad Bella can't play dead or something, but that would be too much to ask for and also there'd be too many questions (and an autopsy).  They did such a good job destroying the evidence, it never occurred to anyone to save any of it to create a fake scene elsewhere, did it?  It's not like she can bleed or anything now to create a death scene, or even pull out a few hairs or something.  Poor Charlie.

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

*sigh* Yes, Edward does have a flair for the dramatic. Poor Emmett. He kind of came off as a doffus in this one, but he honestly thought Edward would have told her, because HE would have told his mate the whole situation. Full disclosure. But that's not how Edward operates.

And Bella DEFINITELY can't pretend to be dead. They will find a way to give some peace to Charlie. Don't worry.

Thanks so much for your comments!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Space-Time Continuum

Wow, Alice, couldn't you hold off calling for ONE.MORE.MINUTE?  I mean seriously?  Edward is just bound and determined to feel unworthy of Bella, while knowing Bella, she's probably thinking she's unworthy of someone as beautiful as Edward.  I hope Tanya doesn't turn out to be awful.  That's one thing that always puzzled me in fics.  I mean, in the books, there's nothing to indicate that Tanya was anything but nice, really.  She wasn't overtly pushy or sexual or anything, imo.  Yeah, she propositioned Edward, but who can blame her for that?  And it doesn't make sense to me that Edward would consider someone a friend if they were crass or stupid or overly bold with him.  Does that make sense?  I don't care if they are the only other vegetarian vampires on the planet, if their presence isn't something Edward enjoyed I don't think he'd bother being all friends with them.

Thanks for the update!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: You've Had A Taste, So Now Spit It Out

Well that is a very humbling realization, that if Bella had been alone she could have been better off than if Edward had gone with her. Huh. Interesting thought. But what Aro is doing, so many levels of wrong. He shouldn't be able to force others to stay and serve, surely if other vampires learn of this they would protest?

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 25, 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: When All Else Fails, Hold Your Breath

Between a rock and a hard place. There really is no choice, and I hated that for them. Poor Bella just can't catch a break. The Alec thing with his obsession with Jane is something I had thought myself, it just seemed creepy as hell. I privately called them the Incest Twins.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Pieces by Piece, Pieces of You

Wow, that was dark.  I've read a lot of dark stuff but this was right around the bottom of the barrel, where the weird icky gooky stuff resides that you don't want to touch.  Very realistic though.  Edward underestimated Aro completely, but at the same time there really was nothing he could have done.  Poor Bella.  I have to agree with you that it never made sense to me in canon that Bella came with this super control just because she happened to know about vampires before she was turned?  That makes no sense.  I can know that sugar is bad for me but it will still take damn good.  The question I have for them is, how much more can they withstand from Aro?  Because he's just going to up the ante and attack in some other fashion. 

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: A Fine Distinction Between the Welcome Wagon and the Meat Wagon

Poor Edward. He's really up against bad odds here, and he's trying so damn HARD. He was practically sweating he was trying so hard to protect Bella and get her out of there. I'm not sure why, but this chapter in particular really made me feel his utter devotion to her. Even comparing to other fanfics, this chapter just resonated with his singular focus and need to protect Bella no matter the cost to himself. It made me want to smooch him and order Bella to cuddle him to her boobs until he felt better.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: A Vision Is Worth A Thousand Bad Decisions

I love how Carlisle wanted to protect them from the Volturi. I always felt they weren't scary enough in the books. I loved in particular the way you worded how he had always shielded them from the Volturi, it felt so much more protective and proactive than the norm with regards to their patriarch.

They kissed! And now they're going in to the battle of wits for their lives...

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the review.

I'm happy that you pointed out the fact that Carlisle shielded them from it. I definitely imagined that he would have done that, while giving them just enough to protect them. They need the knowledge, but shielding your children can sometimes be a part of parenthood. 

I, too, wished the volturi were more frightening in the saga. I am glad I get to play with the more vile and evil natures of them.

Thanks a bunch!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Too Many Questions, Not Enough Time

Wow, I had no inkling of Alec being the roaming bad guy. Huh. Too coincidental indeed for him to be there while Bella went missing. But I'm wondering if maybe he was looking for James and company. Maybe they were supposed to get Bella...

Jacob sure is unforgiving. He's like a dog with a bone (heh) when it comes to who bit Bella.

I bet doughnuts that Bella is going to end up running at the Volturi too, just like she did with the dogs...

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, and for the theories!

A lot of people are really hating on Jake, right now, and rightfully so. I think he's showing just how immature he is. Though, it's got to be pretty difficult seeing the girl of your dreams and best friend turn into your enemy.

Bella? Run head-first into danger? hmmm... =)

 

Thanks again!

 
RPGs by Twilightzoner Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 94]
Summary:

 

A continuation of Midnight Desire and ExB's, er, growth and explorations.  The monster comes along on the journey, too!

Thank you to Anne for the amazing banner! 

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Other Character
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No Word count: 22400
[Report This] Published: February 28, 2010 Updated: January 30, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Scene 2

Now see, this makes me so happy!  I love that you're back and His Horniness (aka the monster) is back too!  I LOVE the idea of role playing to spice things up.  I think that it would really help both of them with certain inhibitions.  Edward really gets off on the whole domination thing, but surprise - he liked being a sexual object used for pleasure too.  The thing about the guys in the bookstore was hilarious, he totally doesn't see how utterly pot/kettle/black that was.  In fact, there's quite a bit of room for some RPG fun there.  I wonder if he could persuade Bella to let him into the stockroom for some one on one time.  He needs to claim her as his woman, right?  I can just picture it now - coming into the store, then cumming in her pussy... it's like peeing on her leg, except much better.  I can imagine the smirk on his face as he leaves her all flustered with that just-been-fucked look, the smell of sex on her, and the slowly dawning realization of what he's just done and why.  And of course Bella should have her turn/revenge...

Look what you've done, my imagination is going wild!  *grin*

Thanks for writing dear!  I have no idea why you were nervous about posting that first chapter.  It was sublime!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

My goodness, Edward definitely has a primal side to him. He was very much in touch with his monster there. I wonder if Bella ever brags about Edward's skills to anyone? I know she's shy about things like that, but I can't imagine not wanting to dish about how awesome he is. I mean, five times in one night, heck in one session?

Thanks for the update!

 
Coatl by Chelle Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 7]
Summary:

Vampires and werewolves are not the only legends to be found in the world.  The Cullen Boys are about to learn that the hard way.


Categories: Twilight Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No Word count: 7361
[Report This] Published: February 28, 2010 Updated: April 01, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I just found this story and it's fantastic! I love stories in which Bella is something other, and this has to be the most unusual other that I've seen. I love the attention to detail. I'm not familiar with coatl lore, so it is fascinating thus far. I'm quite indignant for Bella's sake at her treatment at the vampires' hands, even though there was no malicious intent. I really hope she gets her feathers back too. Did it hurt when Edward pulled them out, I wonder? Will she reveal herself to them? Surely her scent will give her away? I hope she gives them all an earful for treating her like some Disney ride. That's just not kosher. Thanks so much for sharing your story, really liking it so far!

 
Summary:

Summary: When I first caught her scent, I turned my wanting into hate. Later, as my cold yet sparkling hand touched her warm flesh, sunlight streamed through the trees making her skin glow as golden as the sun. Bella was an immortal. It was the day that secrets were spilled and lives changed forever. I had at last found a reason for my eternal life, someone who understood my pain.

Twilight, banner, New Moon, Eclipse, Bella and Edward


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Billy, Carlisle, Carmen, Charlie, Claire, Edward, Eleazar, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Eric, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Laurent, Leah, Mike, Other Character, Phil, Quil, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Tyler, Victoria
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Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 38753
[Report This] Published: March 02, 2010 Updated: May 20, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Golden Eyes

I just found your story today, and I always enjoy stories in which Bella is something other. The possibilities just open up for all sorts of mayhem and changes to canon. I really like how you've changed things around where Bella's touch is somehow making Edward human? Well, we will see. I gotta admit, the mind boggles at what Bella would have to do to turn him completely human. *grin*. The idea doesn't bother me one bit, I'll tell you that much.

Author's Response:

I'm so happy to hear that you are enjoy the story so far. This story was one of my many what if's. There is a lot that we will learn about Bella as this story continues. To tell you any thing more would be to give it all away. I do hope you continue to read and review, but most importantly I hope you enjoy every minute of it.

Thank you for taking the time to leave a review.

TaintedDarkInuShemeeko

 
Fighting Heaven by 2gsdip Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 19]
Summary:

 


"Move your hands, Jacob."

His black human eyes looked at me with confusion, his lips still mouthing the number's as he pushed Bella's heart.

"What's that?"

I smacked his hands away, there was no time for confusion or questions and if his hands were in the way when the syringe came down I was not stopping.


Edward's POV Right after the birth of Renesmee: Starts as Bella's Heart Stops beating.



Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 2242
[Report This] Published: March 21, 2010 Updated: March 23, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Fighting Heaven

I like this, I really absolutely hated not having Edward's POV on several things in BD.  I love how hard he fought for her.  The only part that I felt was jarring and kind of took me out of the "mood" of the story was when Edward said he felt and (kind of implied) heard her soul being ripped from heaven.  I just didn't like that part very much.  I would rather have seen it where he felt her soul coming back to him.  Then he could have gone on about having ripped her from her place in heaven to have her here by his side, etc.  Do you see what I mean?  It's one thing to have us accept and believe that Edward could feel her soul leaving his, and his heart trying to follow, but it's another altogether for us to have to accept that he felt her in heaven, if that makes sense?  Not sure.  It's kind of a fine point, I know.  I'm just that way.  :)

Thanks for writing!

 
Summary:

Edward always said that he didn’t want to damn Bella’s soul, but what if it was already damned?  Bella’s lived in Forks her whole life, and when the Cullens arrive, it’s a very different girl that they are faced with.


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No Word count: 7527
[Report This] Published: March 22, 2010 Updated: April 18, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: The Family with Golden Eyes

I really like the idea of a bad Bella who genuinely can't help it. I mean, she is the devil's offspring. I like that she can stand up to the vampires like that, apparently their intimidation tactics don't work on her. I wonder what kind of gifts she has? Obviously she's immortal, but what else I wonder? Interesting start, thanks for sharing.

Author's Response:

You will be seeing Bella's powers starting in chapter three.  She's just a wittle baby demon at the moment so even she isn't sure what all she's capable of yet.  I'm actually looking forward to exploring that side of her character and mapping out what exactly she can and cannot do.

 
Welcome Home by rash12 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 135]
Summary:

Bella Swan moves to Forks, Washington. About to start a new job as a teacher at the local high school, she rents an old house that’s surprisingly cheap but she’s about to find out it’s cheap for a reason.

Thanks to ZEE_21 for the banner!!!


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 15972
[Report This] Published: March 29, 2010 Updated: June 09, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

What an intriguing beginning, and how sad too.  So many hopes and dreams he had, all ruined because of money. 

Nice, start, nice hook to it.



Author's Response:

thanks so much!! :)

 
Beyond Repair by GreatEscape Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 957]
Summary:

EDITED, REVISED, AND IMPROVED!!!

Same great chapters, just better! Everything is the same except all the silly typos and mistakes have been corrected!

When the Volturi arrived in Texas to put a stop to the warring vampire armies, Bella was only able to escape with her life by the skin of her teeth. Her search for a better life was not successful. When the Cullens find her many years later alone and seemingly unconscious can they help her to find the peace she once sought or is she damaged beyond repair?

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Big Thanks to vampireyouth for the banner!

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And thanks to the lovely Delicious Dreamer for this one!

AU

Mentions of dark themes and violence.


Categories: AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 41 Completed: Yes Word count: 159056
[Report This] Published: April 04, 2010 Updated: December 26, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Just found this story, and it's intriguing to see such a hardened Bella.  So different from the norm, and this is definitely a Bella that doesn't seem interested in changing anytime soon.  I like that!  I also love that you made Rosalie the person she seems to be the most friendly with, even if it is somewhat calculated.  You've really turned the typical cliches on their heads.

Thanks for sharing!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I really enjoy taking everybody out of their normal character so I'm glad you like it what I've done.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Bella's gift is cool.  I really like how hardened and cynical she is, it's so refreshing to see her this OOC and not changing rapidly from it from the magical influence of the Cullens.  She must have been very important to the wars with her gift though.  I like how you made it that all vampires have a gift, just that some are more subtle than others.  That totally makes sense.

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I know what you mean! I love stories when either Bella or Edward are fucked up but hate when all of sudden they get all happy and cured two days after meeting one another. That is definitely not how things work. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

This is going to sound so weird but I actually really liked seeing them argue. It was refreshing. I loved that Rosalie and Bella are close, too. I liked the explanation too. With s few simple sentences you suddenly made Rosalie make sense to me. I've never liked her but I admit I never understood her either.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I'm glad that I could make you understand Rosalie, in this story at least. She'll have a bigger role in my story and I don't know how well that would work out if everyone still hated her. I don't think it's weird at all that you liked the arguing. I enjoyed writing so it's reall good that you liked reading it!

 




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