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Act of Consecration by AJRimmer Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 93]
Summary:

 

It only takes a moment for something to become an obsession.
Nothing should come between soulmates, and Edward is prepared to do anything to prove it.

An AH, dark romance. Canon pairings. Loosely follows canon.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No Word count: 19234
[Report This] Published: February 08, 2009 Updated: March 02, 2009


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: It Runs Even Deeper

OK call me ignorant but I'm not that familiar with Faust.  *cringes*  Does this fic require homework? 

Edward totally has no concept on reading girls, apparently.  He's got some good guesses but... 

I'm so looking forward to the conversation with Alice!  I can just picture him cringing and Alice going full throttle on details. hehehe



Author's Response:

Haha. You don't need to know my lit references...but it might give you insight to where things are going? Maybe. The convo with Alice is going to be fun. And there's a teaser for chapter four on the thread in the forum. :D

 
Summary:

 

 

The Cullens and the Hales are rival families in Forks High School, and everyone knows it. Every student to pass through the doors has known to pick a family to side with, and stay loyal to that family. That is, until Isabella Swan arrives, and her decision becomes increasingly more important.

 

 

Huge thanks to m81170 for the awesome banner.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 38173
[Report This] Published: February 10, 2009 Updated: May 26, 2009


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

Interesting story!  Very different from other fanfic, and I've read quite a lot.  I wonder if any of the peons at the school has explained to Bella the rivalry between the two and whether Bella has figured out she's the next piece they're scrabbling over. 



Author's Response:

Thank-you. I'm glad to hear that it's different, it's always a worry that someone has done the same thing already. 

 

I think someone would have explained to her, it seems liked one the basics they'd cover. But I don't think she realizes how intense the feud us, or how important she is to their little games. 

 
Untimely by emamula Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 58]
Summary:

Edward comes to Bella's rescue in Port Angeles, but what happens when he shows up just a little late? He manages to protect her from her attackers, but his rage towards the men and his lust for Bella's spilt blood make him the real danger. How will they handle the consequence of a choice she didn't have a chance to make? AU starting in Twilight

Twilighted Supervisory Beta:  qjmom

Twilighted Validation Beta:  Twilightzoner

 

I don't own these characters. They belong to the all-powerful Stephenie Meyer. I just bring them out to play.


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: No Word count: 5871
[Report This] Published: February 10, 2009 Updated: May 05, 2009


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Different

I'm getting a little mixed up with book Twilight and movie Twilight, but I guess we're following book Twilight where Bella already knows what Edward is because of Jacob, right?  Which is good.  I rather like the idea of this, it's a good premise to start from.  I can't wait to see Bella as a newborn and Edward dealing with his guilt and all that.  I guess they'll have to move from Forks though.  Can't have someone seeing Bella, after all!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Culpable

Just found this story and I'm intrigued. I like the time frame because Bella knows but she's uncertain, and of course she hasn't acknowledged her feelings yet. Edward, on the other hand, if I remember right, has acknowledged his feelings to himself? I can't remember right now Midnight Sun. Anyway, I can't wait to see more!

 
V.D.A by alaskangirl Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 28]
Summary:

Bella, Lauren, Alice and Rose all find each other and become a family. Charlie loves his girls but is leading a double life. The world that they know is blown apart and secrets come out. The girls enter Charlie's world and the V.D.A is born.banner


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Lauren, Other Character, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Completed: No Word count: 11848
[Report This] Published: February 10, 2009 Updated: May 27, 2009


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Huh, this is a new twist!  I'm sorry you had to kill off Charlie though, he sounded like such an excellent guy!  I loved the fact he had adopted all the girls like that. 

Interesting storyline - I can't wait to see more, it sounds like it's going to be incredibly exciting.



Author's Response:

thank you for reading. i have wonderful plans for this and i am sorry i killed off charlie too but it will all come out eventually. thank you for your review!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Wow, lots of weird details.  Sounds like Charlie was a super-something.  I can't imagine Bella not wanting to find his killer though, that seems like the first thing she'd want is to find justice for his murder.

 



Author's Response:

there is a reason behind it and it will come out. thanks for reading.

 
A Favor by Kitty_Cullen Rated: R starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 194]
Summary:

I can't live without Edward.  Not now, not ever.  I've got a plan.  I'm just going to have to call in a few favors first.


Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella, Carlisle, Carmen, Edward, Eleazar, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Kate, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 24893
[Report This] Published: February 11, 2009 Updated: May 11, 2009


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Decision

So I like the idea of a proactive Bella.  Interesting!  I actually found your story on ff.net but because of whatever technical issues they're having I couldn't review.  Which also means I have read already all that you have posted over there!  *grin*  I like that you made Bella's power more interesting - the whole shield thing in BD was slightly disappointing to me in a way.  But I do wonder if Edward will still be unable to read Bella's mind now. 

 
Summary:

Bella has given up her whole life for those around her. What will she do, who will she be, where will she go with no one and nothing holding her back anymore? AH/AU, canon pairings eventually - NON-canon pairings initially.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: None
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes Word count: 134201
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2009 Updated: July 02, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Edward was a real gem taking care of Bella so well. I know a lot of guys who would have been too uncomfortable in that situation and left it up to Alice to take care of it. It looks like Bella is really dealing with her heartaches. I'm glad. I can't imagine how she must feel on a daily basis.

I'm glad that Edward isn't acting jealous of her experiences with Jasper and Tanya. Well, Jasper - I don't think many guys would get upset at the thought of girl on girl action. But still, he isn't going all caveman and that's exactly what she needs right now.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review; I am glad you enjoyed the chapter :)

Here is your promised teaser:

“Well, you two seem perfect together, the very little bit I've seen,” I said, emphasizing the last part.

“I know, we've just be shut in at his place. He has a great apartment. His parents have money, so they rent this beautiful place for him. He has a nice area setup to work on homework, and he's just the best kisser ever,” she sighed.

“I would beg to differ, but it's kinda gross to talk about the way your cousin kisses, I imagine.”

I flopped on the bed next to her, my body facing the opposite direction.

“You love him, Rose?”

“Oh yeah. Totally. Do you love Edward?”

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Well now I'm curious as to what is in Edward's past to make him appreciate Bella so much. Should have realized such perfection was forged in some sort of fire.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  Glad you liked the chapter. :)

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

The awkwardness of that day for Bella reached unparalelled heights. You gotta give props for doing it. I can't help but be curious as to what happened with Tanya and Kate's relationship now.

Edward losing his twin was sad and totally unexpected. Somehow I cannot imagine a female Edward. I know that's the last thing I should be thinking about but that was the first thing that popped into my head.

Thanks foe the update!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  I am glad you liked the chapter :) 

Tanya and Kate, in my head, are still together -- that was the real kicker, but I coudln't work it into the chapter anywhere!  Tanya didn't break up with Kate, she just knew it wasn't going to work long term.

hahah, female Edward.. well.. yeah, I think we'll find out more about her soon.  I hope so, anyways.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Oh baby, I'm so happy to see you back! I nearly panicked for a second because I was afraid the new chapter was going to be a note saying you were quitting the fandom or something, then I remembered this was Twilighted not ff.

The realities of being a med student-brutal. I couldn't do it, no way. I'm glad that Bella is accepting of it.

Thanks for coming back to us and writing!

Author's Response:

hahaha, your review cracked me up.  Even if I quit the fandom, I'd finish my stories.  That would just be so not right to leave people hanging. 

Thanks for the review, I'm so glad you've waited and are ready for more :) 

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I gotta admit, 69 has never been a favorite of mine.  I'm just too darn short for it to be anything but slightly awkward, no matter what.  But you have to at least try it, right?  I'm glad to see Bella being friends still with Tanya.  For some reason I like their dynamic. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

hehe, I love your confession.  You're right, you have to try before you can figure out what works, right? I didn't get the impression Bella was all that into it. Glad you appreciate Tanya's presence still.  Next chapter coming in a few. :)

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

This was a lovely chapter.  It was such a good combination of the sadness and continuing process of letting go and grieving for her family that she lost.  You really can't imagine what it's like to lose your parents until it happens, and that she lost both so close to each other is truly a tragedy.  I liked that Bella took the time to tell Edward what she appreciated about him, it's important to do things like that in a relationship.  The shower scene reminded me of Tanya, and I couldn't help but wonder if Edward still fantasizes about Bella with another woman.  Why is it that men don't seem to see sex between two women as really sex?  I mean, it doesn't seem like guys get jealous at the thought of their girlfriend being with another girl.  But of course thinking of their girlfriend with another guy brings out the greeneyed monster real quick. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Oooh, Sheeijan, you raise such a good point.  When I ran it by Edward in my head, he wanted to let you know that it's real to him, and he would never, ever share Bella. Maybe I'll have them talk about it at some point, because I'm sure other people are wondering, too. It made me giggle. Thanks for the review, glad you liked the chapter :)

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

I love the idea of their traveling together for the summer. It is a great thing to do, for one thing. And it also Means she won't feel alone if Edward were to go home. Even if she were to go with him, I don't think it would be the same.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! Glad you like that idea :)

 
Summary:

What would Twilight have been like if the roles were reversed?

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Edward, Emmett and Jasper Swan are humans living in Forks with their dad, Charlie and they all work at the police station under their father.

Bella, Rosalie and Alice Cullen are vampires, sent to Forks by their vampire parents, Carlisle and Esme, as punishment.

Banner by Anne Cullen

 


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: Yes Word count: 65420
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2009 Updated: January 15, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Game On (v)

Just found this story - what a fun read it's been!  Not all angsty, just pure fun and a different take on the whole Twilight world.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you found me and are liking my work!

Thank you for reading!!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 26, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Liquor and Lovin'

Uh, whoops?  Durn, I hope Rosalie didn't take too much blood!  But I'm guessing not, since she didn't taste that much of it it seems.  I can't wait to see if the others mess up too.  *grin*  I loved the line about Bella causing Edward brain damage from running around in his head, that was cute!



Author's Response:

LOL!  Yeah, whoops is right.  Thank you for reading, Sheeijan!!

 
Insomnia by demeterloves2 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 608]
Summary:



Alice Cullen has been having visions involving her brother, Edward, and his soul mate for the last five years and yet he refuses to believe her. Her last vision brings the Cullen's to Forks, Washington and Alice knows that the girl in her vision is there.

Bella Swan has been plagued with strange dreams and nightmares for the last five years, causing her to develop a small case of insomnia. She has grown tired of her friends and her boyfriend. She views her life as boring. Then the Cullen's arrive.

Edward wants Bella more than life itself. At first it was just her blood but now it is so much more. He knows he should leave but his family won't allow it. He wants to believe Alice when she tells him he won't hurt Bella, but the monster inside him says differently.

A HUGE thanks to psvtiger for the banner...You're freaking amazing and I mean it when I say that I'm your biggest fan for life, girl!! :HUGS:


Categories: Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Irina, Jasper, Jessica, Mike, Other Character, Renee, Rosalie, Tyler
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: No Word count: 108753
[Report This] Published: February 15, 2009 Updated: July 06, 2009


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You know, I honestly think this is the first story I've ever seen that has Bella with a boyfriend that wasn't James or Jacob or Laurent?  I'm a little floored by that realization.  *grin* 

Anyway, the insomnia is an interesting twist.  That will add a new dimension if Edward decides to try to sneak into Bella's room at night!



Author's Response:

I just couldn't resist! I wanted something that would make it different and mine :)

I look forward to having fun with the insomnia for sure ;) lol

Thank you so much for reading!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Well Edward got to let his protective side come out and play and it was all legit.  Alex of course needed to be cast to the wayside, and Trudy - well, I have strong feelings about a girl who would do that to her own friend. 

I liked your singer thing, that was a different twist!



Author's Response:

I just had to let the real Edward out to play ;) lol. Alex was a necessity at first because I had to have the twist...I'm still thinking about how I'm going to handle him on Monday morning when Bella has to face him...:)

I loved the word 'singer' and just couldn't resist.

Thanks for reading!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Edward just fights so hard, it's sad but honestly I do quite see his point.  I know people are so dismissive of Edward's fear of hurting Bella, but I don't see it that way.  Just like Bella has self-esteem issues, Edward has issues too and his is that he does truly see himself as a monster. 

Thank you for the update!  Alice popping out from behind the tree like that actually startled me, but still it was good.



Author's Response:

I have always loved Edward. He's been alone for a VERY long time, so he has to get used to the fact that there's even someone who exists that would want him, let alone that someone being human! He's got a lot to handle and I completely respect that. I hope I'm writing him well. I do like him the most :) lol

Alice was thrown in there because she saw Edward walking away from Bella and I just couldn't have that. Plus, she and Edward have a connection that I enjoy. I really love her character and that she is his voice of reason most of the time ;) lol

Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

It is nice how easily Bella took the news.  I liked that.  I like the banter and all that, especially when Bella flicked his ear.  That's got to annoying as all getout when Edward and Alice have their little private conversations!  That would drive me up the wall.



Author's Response:

LOL! I had to throw the flicking thing in because I just know I couldn't sit there watching those two communicate with each other like that all the freaking time! :) I flick my husband all time, too, so I couldn't resist ;) lol

Thank you!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Well, they are in high school so a bit of fun never hurts anyone!  Besides, I love the idea of Edward publicly "claiming" Bella as his girlfriend.  It's so caveman and utterly unworthy of my feminist side but there it is. 

Thank you for the update!



Author's Response:

I had to make him go all Caveman on her because I know that's so what I would want if I were there! :D lol.

You're so welcome and thank YOU for reviewing! :)

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Bella's much nicer to Edward about keeping secrets than I would have been.  I'd be majorly angry.  I couldn't be with someone who was deliberately keeping information about myself like that.  I don't blame Alice because she's just trying to keep the balance with them all. 

The eraser room was excellent!  Just the two of them acting like regular teenagers.  It was nice to see.

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I know that it seems like Bella's being too nice, but think about how everyone is always ganging up on Edward. Hell, she lost it when he left. I think it's about time they all matured a bit and just loved each other. Bella knows that Edward loves her, which means she knows that he's going to tell her. Her faith and love overrides anger ;) lol. I was always annoyed with Edward getting yelled at all the time. That's why I having him snapping back a bit...just a bit ;) lol. 

I'm so glad you enjoyed the Esme/Edward moment. I love her so much :)

I am so psyched that you like the Eraser Room. The whole regular teenage lust was exactly what I wanted to come out ;) lol

Thank you! And you are most welcome :0)

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

So something other than PMS is going on with Bella?  It's all very strange.  I still want to beat Edward upside the head for keeping things from Bella that deal with Bella.  It's just wrong in my book.  I understand his reasons, but it still doesn't make it any more right or less wrong. 

The whole fire thing was interesting!  Wow, Bella's powerful as a human or whatever she is.

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Yes, something other than PMS is fueling all this. However, the PMS is amplifying something! (GASP).

I know, I know...Edward can be SO frustrating with his overprotective BS. However, I love him very much and this makes for good writing! :D LOL. I do agree with you that keeping this from her is not great. Chapter 17 is going to show us WHY ;) lol.

I am really looking forward to the fire stuff. I think it's so much fun and my ideas are proving to work well. I hope I don't disappoint! :)

You're most welcome and I hope to update again soon! Thank you!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

I was wondering if Bella may accidentally set something on fire!  It made sense considering she's now dreaming of Edward's past without the hypnotherapy.  I can't understand why Edward wasn't worried about that.  They have no idea why she's able to do what she does so they shouldn't expect limits like it being only during the therapy for it to happen.  *shakes head*  The thing is, this was part of the reason why I was so irritated with Edward keeping the secrets because there was high potential of Bella causing serious harm to herself or to someone else.  She could have killed Charlie or herself in a house fire, worst case scenario. 

Anyway, I think the secrets are going to have to come to an end now.  I'm surprised Bella called Edward first though.  I don't think it would have occurred to me to call him first!



Author's Response:

I definitely knew that I wanted Bella to find out this way, by accidentally setting something on fire...So Bella ;) LOL. I suppose that's why my Edward just couldn't express that concern. 

You are so right...Most of the secrets just need to come out. That's why Chapter 18 is going to take me for freaking ever. I want to get this right. I say most because, well, we still have a hypnosis session with Irina to go through and I want it to be INTENSE, if you get my meaning. So not EVERYTHING is going to be mentioned right away. Bella needs to get through a few things. Besides...I like torturing everyone :D LOL. 

Thank you!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Wow. Okay, so a checkmark goes in the box for "Do you have a scary power that freaks out even vampires?". The first thing that popped into my head is that line from the book by Edward that says something about him thinking Bella was his own personal demon come to torment him? Is that what she is? But more than just that, I think.

Anyway, it's just incredibly intriguing. I am so glad to have the secrets out in the open though. Well, for the most part they're out. This is probably not appropriate but I can't help but be just a little tickled at how utterly wigged out the Cullens are with Bella's powers. Stupid of me, I know.

Thanks so much for the super awesome long update!

Author's Response:

HAHA...Yeah, the prize goes to Bella for the scary powers! :D hehe. Nice that you remembered that quote! I, of course, will confirm nothing ;) lol. I know you want to wait, right? :D lol. There is so much more to Bella, for sure, because...well, she's BELLA! :D lol. There's always more :D lol

I was happy to get those secrets out of the bag because it was killing me. There are so many more things that need to be revealed, though :D lol. Bella's part is coming up, though. I couldn't drag it out anymore because of the way Chapter 19 is going to have to end.

OMG...I'm so glad you like the wigged-outness of it all!!! :D lol. I had to make the Cullen's this way...too fun! :D lol So I'm so with you on that :D hehe

Thank YOU for reviewing!!

 

 




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