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Summary: Bella travels to Alaska to vacation in the cabin Alice loaned her. What happens when Bella finds out she is not the only person staying in the cabin? 
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Jacob, Jasper
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 29 Completed: Yes
Word count: 88293
[Report This] Published: November 28, 2008 Updated: January 01, 2010
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 19, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Coming Clean
Oh Bella, so silly. I can think of one couple who Edward certainly hopes/wants to play Twister again on that mat. *giggle* The bath was sweet, but Edward may have to come clean about the whole generator/clueless thing. I can't blame him for not wanting to call Jacob, but I think he'd feel even worse if he ends up having a frozen Bella on his hands.
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 18: Acceptance
Well, I guess as long as Bella doesn't have to wade through all of Edward's exes all the time, at least the experience has benefited Bella. I just hate it when the exes pop up at inconvenient times (from experience I know this), and throw themselves into the girl's face all smug-like. There's that look on their face of, "I know what your guy looks like naked and how good he is in bed.". I HATE that.
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Intimacy
Good grief, did Bella not watch any porn or anything when she was growing up?? The Internet's there for a reason, you know! *grin* Bella's quite the jaded one, isn't she? Hmm, Edward may have a bit of a battle to change her mind about love and its existence... Thanks for the new chapter!
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 22: Tongue Tied
Edward is such a moody guy. Honestly, it only makes sense he does what he does. What's that saying about psychiatrists needing help? *eyeroll* Oh and the whole thing about saying how he feels, I was shaking my head the entire time. Can we say delay tactics?
Summary: Edward manages to convince Bella to join him on Black Friday for a day full of shopping...fun? Watch and see how they get through the crowds, the sales, and the day.
Categories: AU, Crackfic Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Word count: 4546
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2008 Updated: December 01, 2008
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 08, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Black Friday Bella
*giggle* I saw some sex thing on HBO or Showtime many years ago, and I will never forget the plexiglass dildos they were talking about. How some of the best orgasms came from putting one in the freezer, another in hot water, and using the hot one first until you're close, then switch to the cold one. They swore up and down that it was explosive. Whenever I read vampEdward/humanBella sex fics a part of my brain always wonders...
I'm impressed that Bella was brave enough to enter the store. Her frustration must have short-circuited the embarrassed part of her brain.
Summary:
I stepped back to the table, and grasped her prone hand. It was already measurably cooler, defeating the swirling heat of her dying heart. The coolness subsumed the scar on her hand. I cringed inwardly. Ironically, where James had failed, I would succeed, leeching all heat from her bones...
What she'd begged me for, what I'd refused, was nevertheless happening.
Edward's point of view, beginning on page 351 of Breaking Dawn, from Renesmee's birth, currently up to Bella's arrival home from her first hunt.
Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renesmee, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 14 Completed: No
Word count: 38506
[Report This] Published: November 30, 2008 Updated: August 01, 2009
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: December 03, 2008
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Surfacing
I really enjoy reading this. One of my issues with BD has been the lack of Edward's viewpoint. I realize the reason behind SM's decision to write the way she did but it still disappointed me. So this is fun to read and much better than anything I can try to imagine or come up with. Personally, I would love for you t continue. Even though Edward's POV is more apparent in the later chapters, I still would love to see your interpretation of events such as when Bella wakes up, how controlled she is, the thoughts of the others as Edward hears them, etc. But especially when Bella hunts then runs away from the humans. I'd also love the moment when he is recounting the event to the family. It struck me how incredibly happy and proud he was, at that moment, to actually mock punch Jasper like that. But I'm being greedy and demanding, so I'll stop now. :-) Author's Response: I had the same feeling about Breaking Dawn. Like I said, I haven't ruled out more, but I wouldn't want to do it if most people aren't interested, or if I don't think I could pull it off/have something to contribute. I'm not looking to waste y'all's time. Your ideas help. :)
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: December 06, 2008
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: From the Dream
This was the part I was dying for, really. So yay! I enjoyed it - Edward's emotions (and those of his family) just didn't seem strong enough in BD, this shows what I wanted to see really.
Author's Response: Hooray for success! :)
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Sunrise
I absolutely adore your fic. Your delving into Edward's mindset during BD is just wonderful. I love how you explore his psyche so thoroughly yet convincingly. I fully believe everything you've written thus far, to me it feels exactly the way it should. The lack of Edward's POV during BD was practically criminal in my book, so this really helps mend one of the flaws with that book (I'm not a BD hater but I'm not thrilled with it. It was flawed imo). Anyway, thanks so much for writing this! Author's Response: Ah, glad it's payed off for you! I totally fiddle with details that nobody notices. It takes me a while for things to stop bothering me enough to be able to post... But I do hope it makes the story more immersive.
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 04, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Unveiling
First I loved the line about Alice - the flea carrying the circus. Very appropriate, and a good mental image. The only thing I find kind of jarring is the way Edward keeps vacillating between being stunned over Bella's lack of typical newborn behavior and the anticipation of the bet. It kind of seems like he wouldn't be expecting her to want sex right now (as typically newborns only want blood) and also based on BD he was surprised at her desire later on (during the hunt after she ran away from the humans). But maybe I'm misinterpreting the whole bet thing? I have to admit I probably could have paid more attention to that part.
Also, I'm kind of curious what the others were thinking during all this? Carlisle, Emmett and Esme are so lacking in this significant chapter in BD, it drove me crazy. I guess I can understand their silence in that they didn't want to overwhelm her, but still. It was just weird to me.
I'm so happy you posted another chapter so soon! I'm ecstatic, really. I just love seeing Edward's POV and seeing his naughty, looser side! Author's Response: I'd been undecided whether the others' thoughts would make the chapter too disjointed... I added them back in. Please let me know if this is better.
You did interpret the bet correctly.
On p446 in Eclipse, where Bella is suspecting she will be like Bree, Edward tries to tell her that she will still be herself underneath, which will be apparent again once the rabid thirst fades. He's betting on this being soonish, or he wouldn't be able to join the bet. What is making his hamster fall off the wheel is the idea that she seems to have skipped that phase entirely; she's interested even before her first hunt -- he hadn't imagined that she would be herself quite so soon. The idea makes him a little hyper!
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Falling to Fly
Edward is in for so many surprises, one after another, this night. I really enjoy it. It's kind of due, you know? Edward is such a know-it-all in the books (albeit a beautifu one) that I really get a bit of satisfaction to see him be surprised by Bella. Everything he thinks he knows about newborns is thrown out the window with her and I just found a strange sense of justice with it.
Anyway, thanks for the new chapter. I enjoyed listening in on Edward's thoughts. And knowing a bit more on what the other family members were thinking too! Author's Response: I thought the same thing... But oddly, the more I read it, the more I started to see all the mistakes, all the things he didn't anticipate or get right. What a contrast the facts are with how he talks! And then I started to read it as more of a joke, a front on his part... Somehow flawed Edward is much more endearing and relatable. Much more hot, haha!
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: First Hunt
I giggled like an idiot with this - "Aaaaaaaah hehehehe wooooo!". *snorts* I love in particular the inclusion of Jacob here, totally unexpected but it made sense. It explains how Edward didn't notice the human scent because he was distracted. I did want to seriously hurt Rosalie though, it incensed me so much. I mean GOD! as a mother that just makes me want to set her on fire. Stealing a child should be punishable by fire as far as I'm concerned.
Edward's internal monologue gets funnier and funnier. hehehe He seriously needed Bella in his life to lighten him up. His inability to guess her next move or thought keeps him from being all angsty and emo. *grin*
Thanks so much for the chapter, and for keeping it all together! This and the scene with the other Cullens and meeting Renesmee were my two most anticipated, I think. Author's Response: That's good, because I giggled when I wrote it. :D It seems like Edward is stuck sometimes on the things he can't control; Bella knows awesome when she sees it!
Rosalie does ask for it sometimes. How Carlisle could have ever thought her a match for Edward... I shake my head. But what I find interesting about her is how she has some parallels with Leah, who is something of a prickly-yet-sympathetic character. I wonder if Stephenie did that intentionally or if it's just me.
Anyhow... The next chapter that I just queued flashes back to the rest of Edward's meeting with Renesmee, so you'll find out why he didn't send her away if they all were so worried about Bella's breakfast. (Well, my version of the explanation, anyways. It struck me as a bit uncharacteristically dumb for Edward to not have anticipated that, and he frequently doesn't explain things to Bella, so it's one of the things that I folded into this story — something that he knows the reason for, but she doesn't.)
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: February 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: The Smallest Problem
Wow, this never occurred to me either. I'm a little boggled on this chapter, the idea that Jacob was trying to get Nessie to La Push really bothers me. I'm so glad that Edward didn't take that offer. I'm not surprised with Rosalie's idea of taking off, it fits with her. Poor Edward has such issues now, the whole guilt thing is going to be at a whole new level with him. Not that he shouldn't but he'll have to resolve those at some point. I'm a little surprised that Esme didn't have more input when it comes to this conversation though, I can't imagine her wanting Nessie in La Push any more than Rose would.
This was a very interesting chapter. Just as a suggestion, but I think it would have flowed better to have it earlier (before Bella wakes up), to build up the tension as to how she would react when waking (not that we don't know, but to tiein the family's reaction). Does that make sense? I'm kind of wondering if you thought of this chapter after you had already written the previous ones though? Anyway, you really gave some food for thought here! Author's Response: Esme does have a little to say, just not in this half of the chapter. It was becoming very long, so I broke it in two. The second half is up now.
I had planned this a while ago. There were a few reasons why I put it here and not earlier. The linear structure was beginning to bore me, as was "writing between the lines." But I also thought it would change the focus of the earlier chapters, which I wanted to be on Edward and Bella, not him and Renesmee, as there was going to be a lot of father-daughter focus later. So that's the spot that I came up with. I am going to go back and put a little more space in, though. Hopefully that will make the transition a little less jarring for people. (In my head there is a flash of fast-forward leaves into light, but that does not really translate into writing, so...)
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Plan C
Thank God, I was worried that you were leaving it there at the previous chapter! This helps a lot. I really am loving Jasper for his vote to keep Renesmee there. Man, they all must have been so boggled when Bella didn't react the way they thought she would. I bet Rose was a little unhappy about it too, she no longer had the excuse she thought she had.
I'm glad that Edward didn't go all super-protective. It kind of surprised me, now that I think about it, that he didn't take Renesmee away immediately. I'm glad he didn't, but it is kind of surprising. I'm glad that Bella has no clue about all this when she woke up. That would have been horrible for her, I think. Author's Response: I thought it deserved an explanation, too. After all, what did he want to do when Bella was first in danger? And this time, Bella never sees him do a thing. But it didn't make sense that he just wouldn't care at all... So this was my way of working out one of those things that just snarls into fierce curiosity in my brain every time I read it!
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 30, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Gabriel
I am so glad to see this chapter! And fluff! How lovely to see it, I loved it. I was amused how Edward misread Bella a little bit when talking about Renesmee. It's nice to see that, there should be some mystery after all in a relationship. I am really looking forward to when the family finally realizes that Bella is unlike any other newborn ever. Especially Rosalie, because I'm still holding a grudge against her for her thoughts.
It will be exciting to see Edward's reaction when Bella and Jacob have their first and second confrontations. The first because that should lay Edward's hidden fears to rest, and the second because I imagine how much enjoyment Edward will get from Bella yelling at Jacob. I know I did.
Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: I'm looking forward to that myself. And oh so sloooooowly, I am getting there! (Meanwhile, I will occasionally chuckle to myself, and the S.O. will continue to think I am a loon.)
Summary: 
Jasper cannot handle Edward and Bella's overpowering emotions anymore. When Edward and Alice go hunting, Jasper decides to teach Bella how to satisfy her needs. But what will he learn in the process? Nominated for two Eddie/Bellie Awards. Winner of the Twi-Fi Award for Best Non Canon Couple.
Categories: AU, Other Characters: Bella, Jasper
Challenges: Series: The Lessons Saga
Chapters: 24 Completed: Yes
Word count: 59555
[Report This] Published: December 01, 2008 Updated: January 09, 2009
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: December 06, 2008
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: The Card Game
I feel bad for Alice, she's really the innocent party here and getting hurt because of everything. Edward's going to have a meltdown when he finds out, and I guess we'll find out who the better fighter is about 2 seconds after he figures out what's been going on, huh? Are you ever going to cover why Emmett randomly dropped in on Bella, or was that just a plot device? If it was a plot device, no worries, I'm fine with that, but I was just wondering if there was some ulterior, mysterious reason that will crop up. It's been bugging me for some reason. Anyway, fun story to read. I happen to enjoy the idea of Bella/Jasper, especially the way you presented it.
Summary: A Breaking Dawn Missing Moment - At the wedding reception, Bella and Jacob discussed her honeymoon plans. At the same time, Edward dances with Tanya...and the same subject arises. Rated R for Tanya's...experience. This one-shot parallels pages 61-66 in Breaking Dawn. In Edward's voice.
Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Edward, Tanya
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Word count: 2314
[Report This] Published: December 01, 2008 Updated: December 01, 2008
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: December 01, 2008
Title: Chapter 1: With Great Restraint
This was excellent! I did wonder when reading the books where Edward was during Bella's dance with Jacob. It seemed odd to me that he was far enough away for Jacob to start freaking like that with her. But it makes perfect sense that he would have been distracted with Tanya and with trying to figure out if he could be with Bella without hurting her. Of course Tanya had to throw out one last proposition to Edward, didn't she? *eyeroll*
Author's Response: Yay, you caught that! You know Tanya... always the helpful friend... 8-) But we'd all offer to help him out, wouldn't we? thanks for reading and reviewing! blondie
Summary: What would of happened if Edward had never made it to the ballet studio in time, and what if James never had any intention of killing Bella at all. He had something worse in mind. Something that Edward had continuously fought against.
Categories: Twilight Characters: Bella, Edward, James, Victoria
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: No
Word count: 5517
[Report This] Published: December 01, 2008 Updated: February 14, 2009
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Whoa, James took her? What in the world? I just assumed he would leave her in the ballet studio for Edward to find as she's changing. What about the brokn mirror, did he clean that up? Are they at the right ballet studio?! *scratches head*
Intriguing, I can't wait to see how Bella reacts when she's done changing. Hopefully she'll remember enough to kick James' ass.
Summary: AU Human fic. Bella is a freshman in college, trying to muddle her way through, when she meets some special people. (Edward/Bella)
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Jacob, Mike
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: No
Word count: 103480
[Report This] Published: December 02, 2008 Updated: January 12, 2011
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: December 31, 2008
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Just found this story and couldn't help sitting down and reading it all in one gulp. What fun! Not sure why Edward is so hell-bent on waiting (especially if he's not a virgin), but that's okay. The buildup is nice.
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
I am just kicking myself for not thinking of this song earlier and mentioning it. It is SO PERFECT for Bella, it's ridiculous. It's "Feelin' Love" by Paula Cole, kind of bluesy and very steamy, erotic and suggestive as hell. It's on the "City of Angels" soundtrack, and here's a part of the lyrics:
You make me feel like a candy apple
Red and horny
You make me feel like I wanna be a dumb blonde
In a centerfold, the girl next door
And I would open the door and
I'd be all wet
With my tits soaking through this tiny little t-shirt
That I'm wearing
And you would open the door and tie
Me up to the bed
Here's a link to a youtube (it's got pics of Gerard Butler and the song's playing. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kLU88XmNzJY
Summary: Bella Swan has been a vampire for almost 100 years, and she has an extraordinary gift-one which opens the world to her yet makes her feel all the more lonely, even among her own kind. When she starts over again in the small town of Forks and discovers another coven living there-a coven who also survives on the bloods of animals, can another lonely vampire-a vampire named Edward whose ability doesn't work on her and vice versa-change her life?
Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: No
Word count: 4765
[Report This] Published: December 04, 2008 Updated: August 02, 2009
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: December 08, 2008
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
It's a intriguing start, but it's too short! But it's definitely tantalizing. I'm a big fan of fics where Bella is already a vampire when meeting Edward, because it's always interesting to me the change in dynamics this causes for Edward (not having to be all angsty about her being a human and all).
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: December 08, 2008
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1
Yay, I was hoping you would update today. I've been watching like a hawk. So now we know a little tiny itsy bitsy glimpse of what Bella's power is. Kind of. Sounds absolutely fascinating. I can't wait for Edward and Bella to actually speak to each other instead of staring from afar and with confusion. *giggle* I bet to outsiders this must look either really, really romantic or really, really psychotic. I LOVE that Bella has a motorcycle. Love those things and they are so sexy. Anyway, I hope you update again soon... thanks!
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: December 09, 2008
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2
I am ecstatic for a new chapter! Yay! I love that Bella joined the Cullens for lunch. I bet that set the school buzzing, how effortlessly she joined them. I found it interesting that you made it so Bella doesn't quite fit in either with the humans, different from any other fic that I've seen where Bella's a vamp also. I'm guessing a lot about her power but I'm going to wait to see it spelled out. *grin*
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 (vjgm)
Hey, welcome back! I'm sorry to hear that the hiatus killed your plans thus far for the story. I enjoyed the premise and I like knowing what her gift is. I had no idea but I always love hearing new ones. This one fits better than a lot that I've read.
I'm afraid I have no ideas or suggestions for the story, I'm not creative like that. But thanks for the update!
Summary:
 What if the wolf pack hadn't interrupted Laurent before he bit Bella? This is the story of Bella being changed despite Edward leaving her to prevent it from happening.
Rated for later chapters. Just like in New Moon, Edward will make an appearance eventually!
Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Laurent, Quil, Rosalie, Sam, Victoria
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: Yes
Word count: 71429
[Report This] Published: December 09, 2008 Updated: November 24, 2009
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Waiting
Ugh, Edward could run faster to Forks than that stupid random flight. Poor Bella, at least she's got Alice to comfort her now. Not that Jacob was doing a bad job or anything, not to knock what he was doing for her. But the smell and all...
Thanks for the update! Author's Response: Yes, those flights were a killer!
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: January 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Decisions
I did a quick read because my son is tearing apart my bathroom right now the only way a 2 year old can, but I'm so intrigued! I can't wait to see where you take this! Author's Response: Thanks! Stay tuned--chapter three has been submitted!
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