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Penname: sherylb [ Contact]
Real name: sheryl
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Member Since: March 17, 2009
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Summary:
We all believe that Edward and Bella are meant to be together...but what if there’s more to that than meets the eye?
What if there are forces at work that they don’t understand? How will they cope with events that have no discernable meaning?
This story starts out two weeks before Bella and Edward’s wedding. But, right away, things go wrong. They struggle with mishap after mishap, all the while wondering if they’re destined to be at the center of conflict and angst.
All the major characters of Twilight appear. Canon couples. Lemons in various chapters. This is a more realistic view of Edward and Bella’s relationship before the wedding. He certainly wouldn’t carry her off to a desert island alone, having never even touched her. They would have experimented a bit.
Eventually all characters get their Happily Ever After. I just drag them through hell before we get there. No characters die before their time.
And I’ve adhered to canon up until the story starts—Post Eclipse. After that, it diverges from SM’s version. So...no Renesmee. No pregnancy.
I’ve poured my heart and soul into this story. It took me over a year to complete. I thought about it constantly. For that hard work and diligence to form, grammar and style, I’d like just one tiny thing from you, the reader.
I’d like a review. If you love it, if you hate it, if you’re just indifferent and will never look at it again, I’d like to hear that. It’s not a lot to ask. So...I’ll say thanks in advance for the wonderful reviews you’ll leave after you read each chapter!
Maria
twilight gypsy
Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jared, Jasper, Paul, Quil, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Seth
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 45 Completed: Yes
Word count: 178339
[Report This] Published: October 01, 2009 Updated: November 28, 2010
Reviewer: sherylb Signed 
Date: October 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: A Hard Day's Night
OH, I do like me a sexy, dangerous Edward! More Please! Author's Response: Yes, there will be more! I like a sexy dangerous Edward too, and boy does he get dangerous...
Thank you for reviewing! The story was posted today and five hours later had 242 hits but only 4 reviews! I read alot of stories and usually review, but not always. After this, I will religiously review and do a better job at it! I will post the second chapter as soon as it gets back from the Beta group! Again, thank you for reading and for your review!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: October 26, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Human Touch
"The Edward that loved Bella, that would have sacrificed anything for her, including his own existence a thousand times over, was not here. Edward the vampire was in control now"...I know he is scary, but I kind of love the idea of wild, animalistic, vamp Eedward having his way with Bella!
Damn, Edward actually SCARED Bella!!!!!!! Author's Response: Yeah, he really does scare her! Just wait! Thank you so much for reading and for your review. Ch 3 should be back from the Betas later this week and will upload then. THANKS AGAIN!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: November 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: With a Little Help From My Friends
That was great...I'm so glad they had sex!!!! Author's Response: Thank you so much for your thoughtful review! It's about time, right?! Were you scared? Please respond back and tell me your favorite line from each chapter? Do I sound needy? I guess I am! I am having more fun than I did in college! For a 51 year old woman, that's saying something!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: November 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: With a Little Help From My Friends
Ok favorite lines, cause I can't narrow it down to just one:
"As I gazed at her perfect form, time held no meaning for me. There was no yesterday, there would be no tomorrow. Only the glorious now. Nothing but this woman existed for me—she was my perfect moment in time."
“Jesus Christ,” she panted quietly, her head hanging down, hands flat on the desk’s surface. “I don’t care if you hurt me. I don’t care if you kill me. Just fuck me!”
“I’m okay, Edward. Better than okay, really,” she interrupted. “I’m not a little girl. I know I’m playing with matches.” She bit her lip mischievously. “But I’m not afraid of getting burned."
"I have no regrets about our relationship, Edward. None. I am ready to give up my human life to be with you. Because I love you enough to want to spend every minute of every day of the rest of forever with you.” Author's Response: Thank you so much for responding! I love those lines too, especially "Jesus Christ...that one, I can just see her, bent over the desk...
How about favorite lines from ch 1 and 2?
THANKS AGAIN!
Wow, did I really write that stuff? Sometimes I think I'm channeling a real author (kind of like last night,when I started responding to reviews on ch 3, and I didn't know it had been validated. I was chaneling Rainman then, I guess).
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: November 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: A Hard Day's Night
favorite line from chapter 1:
"Her scent wafted out the dark window, beckoning me. My Bella was inside, waiting. After tonight, she would wait no longer..." Ooh La La!!!! Author's Response: You are so good to play along with me! Thank you so much! I love that line too. I imagined him outside, looking up at the open window, and imagining...Ooh La La indeed!
THANKS!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: November 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Human Touch
favorite lines from chapter 2:
"The idea of being intimate with Bella was at once thrilling and terrifying. I couldn’t forget that I had never been truly sexually excited. Not to the point of being anywhere close to a sexual union with another person. Not vampire. Not human. Not ever........Not until now."
“This will probably be my last menstrual cycle, Edward. It’s a royal pain in the butt, and I won’t miss it, but…there is something I want you to do, while I am still…human. And you have to do it now, because we won’t have the chance, ever again.”
"The Edward that loved Bella, that would have sacrificed anything for her, including his own existence a thousand times over, was not here. Edward the vampire was in control now…" Author's Response: I love you so much! I like the last one the best, 'cause it foretold a scary Edward, who I think is soooo sexy!
YOU ARE GREAT TO PLAY ALONG! THANK YOU!
Really.
She was backing away from me, her face white, eyes wide, back towards her door…as if she could get there before I could…I can kill you before you take a breath to scream, Bella… That is my favorite!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: January 08, 2010
Title: Chapter 11: When You're Alone
But know this, Edward Cullen. I have to be able to trust you, and if I can’t do that, then we are through.”....OMG!! Edward must be freaking out!!!!!!! Author's Response: I have had incredibly mixed reviews on this chapter. I had readers who were really angry with me for Bella being mad at Edward because it was her fault that he bit her in the first place, and then all the way to the other end of the spectrum with readers like you, and everything in between. So I could tell other authors, if you want to get reviews, just write a controversial chapter!
i think it is important to remember that Bella did offer him the blood, and that he probably would not have bitten her otherwise. I think the irony of the chapter is that she is busy patting herself on the back for understanding his condition and in the same breath mad at him for exerting that condition.
I think it is plain that she is upset and may feel let down that her 'perfect' Edward is not quite so perfect after all.
Ch 12 about half done.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Maria
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: January 20, 2010
Title: Chapter 12: Bring on the Wonder
I think a little bit of the venom is slowly working on her leg.
I'm glad they made love again, and that Bella realized her mistake and apologized to Edward for blaming him when she pushed him too far. She really showed her immaturity with that ultimatum. Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing and for the awesome rating of 5 stars!
About Bella, you are very perceptive... !
Maria
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 03, 2010
Title: Chapter 14: Behind the Wall of Sleep
Is there a way they could move the wedding up? Make up something about a mix up with the caterer, the flowers, cake, etc. where they goofed and overbooked? I know it's a bit lame, but they're gonna be grasping at straws anyway, and Charlie would be clueless about these things... Author's Response: I'm thinking it is just about impossible, no matter how much money you throw at it, to move a wedding like the one planned up. I think we willl find out in the next couple of chapters what the deal will be, though. Thanks for playing along!
Maria
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 08, 2010
Title: Chapter 15: Wicked Game
“I would have gone through the motions of a real life, would have physically moved on. But in my heart, I would have remained at that window for the rest of my life, waiting for the only person who ever touched my heart.”....so sad, but I'm glad that she finally REALLY told him...
Wow, I guest the venom is making her horny Author's Response: I like those lines as well. I imagined that must be how she felt, like she would be waiting at a figurtive window for the rest of her life for her only love to return to her.
Thank you so much for the very generous review of 5 stars! I really appreciate it!
Yeah, the venom is in her in small amounts, working a particular brand of magic no one can figure out...
Maria
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 08, 2010
Title: Chapter 15: Wicked Game
I would like Edward to change Bella in the meadow, while making love to her, and then carry her back to his room afterwards. If they can wait until Bella can see Charlie again, that would be best -if they can wait that long.. Author's Response: That was my idea as well. How great would that be? But, hmmm. we need more conflict. (I know, have we not had enough conflict?) That may end up what happens, but lots of stuff have to happen before that!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Maria
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 11, 2010
Title: Chapter 16: The Dangerous Type
Well, I HOPE she can hang on for tow more days.. Love the Sexin' Author's Response: Thank you so much for your great review of 5 stars! WHHOOPPEE!
Maria
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: March 07, 2010
Title: Chapter 19: Do You Want to Know a Secret
Whoaaaa. Bella has balls! (well, not really) Author's Response: Thanks for the 5 stars and for continuing to read and review!
maria
Summary: AU/AH. What would have happened if there had been no supernatural forces at work in Forks? Bella Swan moves to the tiny Washington town to live with her father. There she meets Edward Cullen and they fall in love. Their relationship is cut short when Edward moves from Forks, but he is leaving behind more than he knows... Will they ever see each other again?
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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: Yes
Word count: 167647
[Report This] Published: October 04, 2009 Updated: March 22, 2010
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 08, 2010
Title: Chapter 16: 16 - Pink or Blue
So sad for poor Bella that they can't find any of the Cullens
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 10, 2010
Title: Chapter 17: 17 - Showers and Dancing
“I’m not sure, but I think I might be in labor.”.....OH NO!!!!!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 12, 2010
Title: Chapter 18: 18 - New Beginnings
When is edward coming back?
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 15, 2010
Title: Chapter 19: 19 - New Experienced and Old Friends
OMG!!!! It is either Alice...or Edward......
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 16, 2010
Title: Chapter 20: 20 - Confrontations and Explanations
None of that mattered, of course.....Because none of them were her.
I can't wait for Edward to see Bella.....and Lily......
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 21: 21 - Revelations
I can't belive he just left like that...
I am glad that he wants to be in his daughter's life, but hope that he'll want to rekindle things with Bella, although that will take a lot....
“Never mind.” She pulled away. “You have some serious sucking up to do.”...Isn't that the truth!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 23, 2010
Title: Chapter 22: 22 - 21 Guns
“I have more photos, if you want to see,” Bella said from behind me, and I turned around. “I’d like that.”...Well, it's a start!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 25, 2010
Title: Chapter 23: 23 - First Meeting
“She wants to know if she can call you dad?”...I felt a knot in my throat and had to swallow a few times before I was able to answer...“Of course you can.”...So sweet!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: February 26, 2010
Title: Chapter 24: 24 - Meet the Cullens
“Do you mind if I carry her upstairs?” he asked, a look of such longing on his face that I neither could nor wanted to deny him......SO SO SO SWEET!!
I DO hope you have an HEA planned for Edward, Bella and Lily.
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: March 01, 2010
Title: Chapter 25: 25 - Surprise!
I'm glad Angela is gonna help! They need it!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: March 08, 2010
Title: Chapter 26: 26 - An Early Christmas Present
“I love you,” he whispered against my lips. “So much. I never stopped.”... OMG!!!!! I AM SO HAPPY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thankyou!
Reviewer: sherylb Signed
Date: March 12, 2010
Title: Chapter 27: 27 - The Morning After
I'm glad they're messing with Alice and Angela!
SO glad they're moving in together!.....bunk beds..LOL
" When I had unpacked everything, I stared at the three toothbrushes in the glass in the bathroom, and realized that I was finally home.'....so sweet!
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