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Tutor by Mentalistecbm Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 180]
Summary:

The Cullens move to a new school, in a new state, with new students. Edward is… pretty much a nerd. Dweeb, Geek, Turd, Loser. Whatever you wanna call him. Bella isn’t. She already goes to Forks High. Well-known, actually. Not your average Nerdy Edward/Slutty Bella fanfic. Originality is all over, babe. So read.

 Thank you to ebonyy and PosionousGarden! (: original two inside. this one is just to perfect.

 

 

 

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Billy, Carlisle, Charlie, Demetri, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Leah, Mike, Rosalie, Tyler
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Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 46201
[Report This] Published: November 12, 2009 Updated: May 04, 2010


Reviewer: jcara Signed
Date: January 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Not bad. I like the story line and the characters so far, but the use of the word "ohmigawd" makes me cringe something fierce. It makes me think of brain dead preppy girls. What is so hard about writing "Oh my God" properly? ohmigawd isn't even a word...



Author's Response:

In another situation, I'd be annoyed. But, thank you (a lot) for the respective criticism. But, in case you haven't noticed, they are in high school. They'll prounouce kind of "brain dead preppy girl"-like, no matter how much crap they've gone through or how mature they are. But, anyway, thank you. I think I'll follow your advice, couldn't hurt, right?





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