Reviewer: jcara Signed
January 17, 2010
Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Not bad. I like the story line and the characters so far, but the use of the word "ohmigawd" makes me cringe something fierce. It makes me think of brain dead preppy girls. What is so hard about writing "Oh my God" properly? ohmigawd isn't even a word...Author's Response:
In another situation, I'd be annoyed. But, thank you (a lot) for the respective criticism. But, in case you haven't noticed, they are in high school. They'll prounouce kind of "brain dead preppy girl"-like, no matter how much crap they've gone through or how mature they are. But, anyway, thank you. I think I'll follow your advice, couldn't hurt, right?