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Penname: VictoriaCullen [Contact]
Real name: Vickie
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Member Since: March 14, 2009
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Nothin much to tell.  Wife.  Mom.  Daughter. Teacher. Students.  Closet Twilight fan fiction addict who might actually leave her husband if Carlisle were real and single--even though he's a bit old for me.  I try not to date guys over 250, but for him I'd make an exception.


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Reviews by VictoriaCullen
 
Summary:

Bella Swan, a young registered pharmacist from New Jersey, takes a job in the Forks, WA Regional Hospital, determined to start her life over.  She meets the handsome, brooding Edward Cullen, who also works in the hospital's pharmacy...but on the night shift, of course.

Will Edward be able to control his agonizing thirst for Bella's blood? How will the emotionally wounded Bella react to her increasing attraction to him? Can Jacob be effective as a minor, if consequential, character? And most important, can Serendipitous refrain from the gratuitous use of hokey questions to attract readers?

 

    Huge thanks to the talented and generous Anne Cullen for the banner!

 

 Canon pairings; the Cullens are still vampires.  Edward's and Bella's ages are advanced to their early-mid 20s, to give them more adult sensibilities.  Other than that, the story parallels "Twilight," with some new adventures in line with the characters' ages and situations.  The chapters alternate between Edward's and Bella's POV. While it's not a *funny* version of "Twilight," there are definite sparks of humor in it.

 


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: Yes Word count: 206646
[Report This] Published: March 16, 2009 Updated: December 01, 2010


Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: June 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Edward, Chapter 12

 I enjoy this story and I would enjoy a short sequel. :o)



Author's Response:

Thank you, Victoria!  That's exactly what I'm planning to do.  It will be short, but long enough to wrap up the next phase of their relationship. 

 

 
The Family Cullen by giselle Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 52]
Summary:

Written to coincide with the US release of the Twilight DVD, a short story to place one piece of the movie canon back into the written story of our favorite family:

It's the Cullens' first Christmas in Forks, and Carlisle surprises his family with the gift of some very unique jewelry. Later, he and Edward have a quiet talk about what the future holds.

 

A tender one-shot in Carlisle's voice. Merges and adheres to movie and book canon. Rated for Emmett's innuendo...


Categories: Pre-Twilight Characters: Alice, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 3794
[Report This] Published: March 20, 2009 Updated: March 22, 2009


Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: The Family Cullen - One Shot

Touching and beautifully written. I love the unique story and the obvious care you took with details.

Author's Response:

Thanks very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

 
Summary:

Diseased Affair

When Charlie is diagnosed with cancer, Bella decides to move to Forks to help him through his treatment and recovery. What happens when the resentful son of the new cancer doctor meets up with the reason he was dragged to this small town? AH. E/B.

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Renee
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 99780
[Report This] Published: March 20, 2009 Updated: December 27, 2009


Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Angry Chair

Great start! I'm looking forward to seeing more of this story.

Author's Response:

I feel it starts off a little shaky, but I just finished chapter 10, and am really proud of where it is.  Hopefully, my beta and I can get the chapters out to you in a regular fashion!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: April 01, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Clinical Trials

Very compelling beginning. I look forward to more.

Author's Response:

I know it is kind of slow so far, but there was a lot of set up to do.  Now we get to move into the good stuff.

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: April 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Reality Bites

Beautifully written. As a caretaker child, I found myself really able to relate to Bella's feelings.

Author's Response:

This is the first of the many chapters seeing the illness from a caretaker's perspective.  The unintentional hurt that can be caused by the one with the disease who is confused by a sudden loss of self-reliance.  The anxiety over what is going to happen next.  The fear of what may happen in the future.

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: April 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Missing Partner

Oh, man. Poor Bella, thinking she has to keep this all to herself. I hope she opens up to Edward soon--they'll both be happier.

Excellent chapter as always. Thanks for the effort you put into them.

Author's Response:

In the next two chapters, we will see a series of events that will force Bella's hand, so to speak.  Also, a heart-to-heart with Dr. Cullen aides her in realizing that she doesn't have to do this alone.  There are people around her that don't want to splay her and Charlie with pity, but truly just want to be their friends, and caring for each other is what friends do.

More soon!  Thanks so much for reading!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: April 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Making Amends

Another excellent chapter! I look forward to more quick updates. You're doing a super job.

Author's Response:

Thank-you for the praise and encouragement!  I would like to say I am one of those purist who writes for myself, but who am I kidding!  I love my readers/reviewers!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Save Room

I love this story, and I'm always glad for a sweet chapter like this. One tiny question--did Edward know Charlie before he shaved his head, and if so didn't he think anything about it? Just curious.

More, please, and soon!

Author's Response:

You know...I actually considered that, but so many men are shaving their heads these days...I wouldn't think to question it. MHO.

Thanks for reading!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: April 23, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Karma Police

I have more than one story favorited, but your story is the one that makes me squeal when I see it's been updated. You're doing a fabulous job with it--I'm unconditionally and irrevocably in love with it. ;o)

Author's Response:

I am happy I can cause a grown woman to squeal!  I know what you mean about seeing that a favorite has updated!  I was having an especially crappy evening last night, and then I got an update of "The Office", and I was sad no longer.  :-)

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: April 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Ain't No Sunshine

I'm reviewing, so start typing! I did the happy dance this morning when I saw an update. This chapter was just what I needed today. I love happy! Your writing is very concise without leaving out detail, so you get a lot in your chapters, and I appreciate that. I've read some FFs that spend three chapters telling the reader that Bella has brown hair. I love that you're descriptive but not wordy.

Author's Response:

I know what you mean about those stories that can get over descriptive.  My eyes start to glaze over a bit, and I start scanning instead of reading.  I am happy you think I have a nice balance between detail and action!  I am also glad I made you happy, because your continuous support of my stories has made me happy!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: April 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Colorful

Nah, it's not a lame chapter at all. It moves the plot forward and sets up the next action. As always, I appreciate your quick updates.

Author's Response:

Updates are all due to master beta texbelle.  All praise her glory!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: May 02, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Are You Ready For Some Football?

What a fun. happy chapter. I'm so glad to see Bella getting to be a regular teenager; I was almost wishing she'd lose her bet with Charlie so she'd have to relax and be a kid for a weekend.

I always look forward to your updates andam never disappointed.

Author's Response:

Oh don't you worry about Bella getting a chance to be a kid for a weekend.  Emmett is very bitter about losing, and don't think he won't throw her under the Alice bus.  

I am glad you are enjoying the story!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: May 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: No Woman, No Cry

I love every chapter you write. This really is very, very good!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!!!  I am happy you are enjoying this!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: May 11, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Just A Friend

God bless the family of Daddy's Little Cannibal.

Author's Response:

Absolutely.  It hurts my heart even more to find out that she was a twin.  I have twin brother-in-laws, and I can't imagine what it would be like for one to lose the other.  There is a special bond there.

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: May 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Lay Down Sally

Awww. I'm ready for more, but I'm so pleased with the way you are building the electricity between B & E.

Author's Response:

Edward has made the shift now, emotionally.  Now we just need Bella to get there.  I won't keep you guys stringing along forever!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: May 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Blame It on My Youth

Excellent chapter!  It's cool to see Sue and Charlie start to connect, and I'm really glad Leah is nice.  Good work.

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: May 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: These Are The Days

Dang that Alice!  I was sure we were going to get that kiss at the airport. 

I just love this story and wait impatiently for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

I couldn't let them have their first kiss at the airport, and then have Bella dash off to catch a plane!  You guys have waited this long, that I want it to be special.

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: June 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Falling Slowly

Another great chapter.  You make your characters come to life so well. 

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: June 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Lover Lay Down

Oh, I love a great first kiss--and that one was wonderful.  Have a safe and restful holiday!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: June 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Absolute Beginners

Such a sweet chapter.  Great job!!

Oh, a big LOL on catching Charlie and Sue. ;o)

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: July 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Disarm

First of all, I am sorry for the loss of your step-dad.  I hope you and your family will find comfort in happy memories of him.

I always enjoy reading this story.  Even though Charlie's illness has the potential to make the story depressing, it never is.  I also love the fact that you portray Edward and Bella as real teenagers with believable reactions and emotions.

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 23: Lightning Crashes

Yay! Charlie made it through the surgery.  Lovely chapter.

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: July 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 24: You Don't Have To Be Strong

I love that your Edward is so caring toward Bella.  Another wonderful chapter!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: August 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 25: Christmas Time Is Here

 I love your Charlie! Only he would bring Renee there for Bella. 

I missed your chapters, but RL does have a way of rearing its ugly head from time to time.



Author's Response:

I was hoping Renee was a nice surprise for everyone. I also had to give Bella and Charlie the best Christmas they could have in a hospital room. :-) Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen Signed
Date: August 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 26: I'll Be Home For Christmas

Your Christmas with the Cullens et al did make me tear up.  It was very sweet. 



Author's Response:

I was listening to the Charlie Brown Christmas Soundtrack while I wrote this. I also have the sudden urge to bake! I will stick with the seasonal zucchini bread for now.

The beginning of this story was so tumultuous, that I thought we could all use a chapter like this in which we can take a deep breath and relax.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 




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