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An avid reader of fantasy fanfiction in general.


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Summary:

Four years after Edward left Bella in the forest; Bella is finally moving forward with her life but it is someone from her past that helps her truly heal and obtain the future that she was always meant to have.


Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella, Jacob, Jasper
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Series: None
Chapters: 51 Completed: Yes Word count: 167857
[Report This] Published: June 11, 2008 Updated: August 14, 2009


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

Excellent writing and plot so far.

I would have never imagined a relationship between Bella and Jasper, even though Jasper was my second favorite Twilight guy, perhaps even the first.

I love reading about the honest relationship that Bella and Jasper share--if more couples had that relationship today, there would be a lot less divorces and such.  Another intriguing part of the book is Chapter 39, where I'm up to now.  I had wanted to know more about Gianna's motives in staying with the vampires while reading New Moon, and you were great at adding it in.  I love how Bella gets to see more of the ancient building, and the kind feelings that I sense from Felix.

Keep up the good work.  I hope to read more from you!

 
Summary:

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Bella went cliff diving, but it didn't turn out so well. She broke her back. A decade later, Edward reappears in her life on the same night she loses her best friend and husband to a freak accident. Now a graduate student in Women's Studies, Bella isn't thrilled to see him. But when the Cullens re-enter Bella's life, they bring change, hope, and a new joint project that will require all their expertises.

Also, you can find a SPANISH version here:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4829851/1/En_un_parpadeo

AND you can find images for various things like Esme's house, Edward's piano, Bella's wheelchair and Rose's car on my ff.net profile page:

http://www.fanfiction.net/~thatwritr

OR in my LJ gallery:

http://pics.livejournal.com/that_writr/gallery/000010z2

Special Update:

For personal reasons (a ridiculously full teaching schedule and being recently put in charge of a bi-annual local conference and ongoing project), I am no longer able to reply to reviews and questions. But that said, I wanted to give a BIG THANK YOU to EVERYBODY for the wonderful feedback and kind words that have been sent my way since the completion of this story in August 2009. I do still check my messages about once every 1-2 weeks and read *every* review. I just have too many to reply to anymore, but I didn’t want anyone to think I was ignoring her/him in particular, or didn’t appreciate readers taking time to leave a review. Writing this story was tons of fun and I’m thrilled readers seem to enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed the chance to write it. I can’t tell you how flattering that is!!! As I used to reply to all reviews, I feel a little badly about this decision, but work has been requiring virtually all of my time since the new (academic) year began.

Best to all of you in 2010 and beyond!

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 68 Completed: Yes Word count: 221619
[Report This] Published: September 11, 2008 Updated: August 26, 2009


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I like your style of writing, and I have not found even one mistake.  (:


Although in this chapter, a part in the middle-end was kind of long, so just skimmed/skipped over that because of my aching headache.


But I still read the part with Edward coming--when I saw Edward's name near the end, I scrolled back up a bit to see what I had missed.  xD



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I work really hard to be sure there are no typos in the story.  (I'm a former newspaper editor and now college speech teacher, so grammar is my "thing." Ha.)

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 27, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Ah, awesome!  I have to pack to go on vacation tomorrow, and I'm doing a horrible job as it's late and I have to wake up early tomorrow.

But this story is just so good!  If only I could take it along with me for the upcoming weeks. Heh.

Once again, amazing writing!  I'll read one more chapter . . .



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I'm glad you're liking it!  Have a good vacation!

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

Aw, the past two or three chapters have just tugged on my heart.  The love that Edward feels for Bella and such.

I came back from a vacation and now I'm back, still addicted to this story.

I'm actually past this chapter, but I just felt that I had to go back and post my little thought of these past few chapters.

Once again, thanks for your writing.  I love how you analyze the situations and question whether it's even slightly realistic or not. 



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm really glad you're enjoying it, and even are addicted to it!  I hope to have a couple of new chapters this week!

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

Hm, I have never thought about this topic that much.

Both roads have so many pros and then so many cons--a major decision.  I can't wait to see what Bella and Edward decide on together.

Thank you so much for all your great and careful writing, always written with research and/or much thought. (:



Author's Response:

Thank you!  And yes, several major decisions are being made!

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Aw, I loved this chapter.  It's the kind of "old-fashioned," sweet, perhaps sappy writing that I love, devoid of any hatred, foul language, and such.  It simply tugs on the heart.

Aw . . . (:



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm really glad that you liked it!

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 24, 2009 Title: Chapter 67: Chapter 67

Amazing fanfiction story!

One of the best ones I've read.  I always admire the fact that you do some research before you write so that things aren't more ridiculously unbelievable than they already are with vampires.

Oh, and in this chapter, you wrote, "'I'll aks him,' Esme says now."
Did you really mean "aks," or was it a typo?  (I'm not sure if "aks" is some older way of writing "ask," but the meaning is obvious, so it isn't a big deal.)

Anyways, great writing.  I'm a bit upset that there won't be any more stories coming from you, but I'm also much more a reader than a writer, so I somewhat understand.  (:



Author's Response:

First, thank you!  I love reading fanfiction, but sometimes I do get a little frustrated when authors don't fact-check.  I think readers come in two types, those who really prefer fact-checked stuff, and those who don't really care, so I guess I fall into the first category!

Second, yes, that was just a typo, not a weird way of writing "ask"!  Thanks for noting it!

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 68: Chapter 68: Epilogue

Amazing story!

I love how you ended things off--it wasn't disappointing at all.

Martha in this story is one of my favorite characters.  She has so much faith and wisdom.  I wish there was a "Martha" in real life.  xP  I'm glad Edward has somewhat found himself, and that he's started to believe again--that communion part was really sweet.

Thanks again for the story; I loved every chapter.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you!  And there IS a Martha in real life!  She's actually based on a real person, who's a Baptist minister, in fact, and named Martha!  (But she's not the mother of my ex- ...)  She's fully a cool in RL as in this story.

 
Summary:

Bella is a witness in peril. Emmett Cullen is the deputy assigned to protect her. When the witness protection program proves unsafe, Emmett has Bella pose as his brother Edward's fiancée. ExB. AU/AH.

 

 

Hiding in Plain Sight

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Emmett
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No Word count: 138506
[Report This] Published: September 14, 2008 Updated: June 14, 2012


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: June 3 - June 6, 2008

Aw, I love that Edward and Bella are cuddling there--finally Bella raises the question out of the blue!

It was a nice chapter, just like every other chapter.  I'm eager to read more, so hopefully, you can update.  (:

 
Summary:

*An explanation for my recent behavior*

So... it's been a while.  I'M SO SORRY!  I started a new AU-H fic called Primary Colors and it has taken over my fic-writing life.  I know you're never supposed to do that.  It's not cool to start a new story when you already have one going, it's not fair and people hate it.  I'm sorry that I have no self-control, I'm sorry I left you hanging.

The good news is that I AM going to finish this story.  I'm not giving it up.  I have it mapped out in my head and it's going to happen.  I just can't seem to focus on it and my writing really, really, really, sucks when I try to force it.  Primary Colors is just pouring out right now, so I'm taking advantage of that.  I really am sorry.  I've been consumed with guilt over this.  I hope you won't hate me, and I hope you'll still be here when I come back.  If you delete this fic from your favorites list right now I'll completely understand.  Please accept this apology.  Thank you so much for reading, have an excellent twilight. :)

It's page 449 of New Moon.   Bella is running across the plaza in Italy.  She has to get to Edward before the clock chimes.  Before the Volturi do.  His life depends on it. 

fanficbanner2.jpg picture by Jaxidy

This time Bella stumbles and doesn't get there in time.  What will happen to Edward now?  Will Alice make it out of Volterra and keep her promise to Jasper?  Will Bella be able to survive, thinking she's failed... alone in Volterra?

Thanks to MrsC for the banner!


Categories: New Moon Characters: Alice, Aro, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Demetri, Edward, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 38464
[Report This] Published: September 16, 2008 Updated: May 10, 2009


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Hm . . . quite interesting.  I hope Demetri becomes one of the leaders or at least obtains a higher position.  And how Bella's blood sings for him.  I'm very curious about that as well.  Hopefully, you'll continue with the story soon when you have the time.  (:

 
Summary:

Set during New Moon.  Bella didn't jump.  But a vision from Alice sends the Cullens running back to Forks.  What if Bella wasn't the only one who fell apart when she lost the love of her life?  What if Edward couldn't handle being apart?  What if he fell?  How far could he fall?  Who committed the murders at the Swan residence and what happened to Charlie?  Just how bad can it get? 

Read and find out!

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Thanks to the amazingly talented Anne Cullen for the Banner.

 


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alec, Alice, Angela, Aro, Bella, Ben, Billy, Brady, Caius, Carlisle, Carmen, Charlie, Demetri, Edward, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Garrett, Jacob, Jane, Jasper, Jessica, Kate, Kim, Lauren, Laurent, Leah, Marcus, Mike, Other Character, Phil, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Tanya, Tyler, Victoria
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Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: No Word count: 77631
[Report This] Published: October 15, 2008 Updated: March 03, 2010


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: March 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Friends

Nice story so far.  I hope Edward and Bella stay as friends/siblings, although most readers would probably disagree with me.  Being best friends or siblings is usually a more honest and open relationship, for one, and it would make your story end differently than others which include them together as a couple or not together, away from each other.  I have not yet read one where they keep a relationship, but as best friends to go to for support.  There's more reasons, but I won't go into them.

So far, so good.  I hope to read more of your writing.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review, I appreciate the time you have taken to review this.  And I agree with you on your comments, although I can't say if that is what will happen here.... I hope you keep reading and enjoy it.

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: March 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 Crest

Finally Bella gives him what I hope was a wake-up call.  To tell him how he had left her, and the importance of Jake being in her life.  Even I had wanted to slap him, heh.  (Although I don't want the disagreements to end on a bad note for their relationship.)

Not bad.  I hope to read more.



Author's Response:

I have a feeling they have a deep and meaningful and more importantly HONEST conversation to come.  Both were wrong, both made mistakes and now they have realised that neither one is perfect they just might have a chance to work on this.

As always, thanks for reviewing you rock!

PS: I hope you do continue to read :)

 
Summary:

Bella Swan is twenty-seven years old, newly single, and mom to an adorable Kindergarten student with a knack for accidents. On a typical, fall afternoon, she experiences the shock of her life during a casual conversation with her son. When an unexpected revelation leads to the most emotional reunion imaginable, how will Bella reconcile the path her life has taken with the past she never chose? Takes place nearly ten years post New Moon. Canon - AU. ExB


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: No Word count: 61197
[Report This] Published: October 19, 2008 Updated: November 27, 2011


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 20, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aw, I love the sweet love in this chapter with Chris and Jasper, Alice, and Edward.  How a child can make everything seem so right is amazing.  ^.^  So far, I think Chapter 13 has been my favorite chapter!  Keep it up--I'd love to see Edward assume role as a father for Chris.

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

That was an amazing chapter, oozing the love that Chris brings into the Cullen family, and how everyone is so attached to him.

And I absolutely love the way that Edward and Bella are becoming more trustful towards each other, and how Edward is loving again with that type of fatherly concern for Chris.

This chapter was so sweet.  Once again, nice job done.  I can't wait to read the next part.

 
Summary:

Edward Cullen made Bella Swan’s life a living hell from age ten to twelve. Finally fed up with the torment and teasing, she moved to Phoenix. Now she’s seventeen, beautiful, and has a new sense of confidence. When her mother sends her back to Forks for her senior year, she is determined to shake things up.

NC-17 for sexuality, underage drinking, and language. OOC, just to be safe. Some canon pairings, some absolutely the opposite.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Laurent, Mike, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: No Word count: 55461
[Report This] Published: October 28, 2008 Updated: August 21, 2009


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Crimson and Gifts

Hm . . . interesting story.  You're great at forming the characters and the emotional relationships between them.

In the beginning of the story, when I read about Edward, I absolutely never believed that he could ever reform.  He was simply a conceited jerk in my mind who firmly believed that everything revolved around him.  Now, I'm seeing another side of him.  It's hard for my brain to wrap the idea of the transition around my head, so I'll just take your explanation: that there's layers to a person--there just happens to be a lot more layers on Edward.

I thoroughly enjoyed your writing . . . please update?  (:

 
Summary:

 

What if Bella had left Edward in New Moon rather than the other way around?  

Bella has left Edward, thinking it was the right thing to do for him and his family.  Now she is back in Phoenix, but what happens when Victoria enters the scene determined to seek out revenge for James' death in the worst of ways?

 

thank you Anne Cullen for the beautiful banner!!!


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Jacob, James, Jasper, Laurent, Other Character, Phil, Renee, Rosalie, Tanya, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No Word count: 34420
[Report This] Published: October 31, 2008 Updated: April 01, 2009


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Alice

Very nice storyline--I like how things are switched so that Bella was the one who left Edward, heh.

I'll have to say that I'm very pleased with Alice being in this chapter to protect Bella.

I like the story so far, and I'm eager for more.  Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

thank you very much!  Let's just hope she's able to protect her!  Thanks again!

 
Summary:

FeatureTime travel really isn't everything it's cracked up to be... 

Written for the Official Twilighted Challenge: Girl Power, Ghouls, & Gorgeous Guys ORIGINAL FICTION Contest

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Categories: ORIGINAL FICTION Characters: None
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes Word count: 9385
[Report This] Published: November 03, 2008 Updated: November 03, 2008


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Part Three

That was amazing!  You're a great writer.

I'm immensely glad that you let her meet Jack again, or I would be devastated.

I wish there was a story telling more about the relationship between Izzy and Jack, but then again, that would probably ruin this perfect ending that raises so many options for their future.

 
Unwanted by bloodredlust Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1577]
Summary:

Edward couldn't bear to watch his beloved Bella being torn apart from the inside by his baby… so how might things have turned out for our favourite couple if he had taken the steps to ensure Bella’s survival, rather than let his spawn kill her. Very dark, Angsty little 'what if' story.

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A HUGE thankyou to Emerald-Rosalie for the amazing banner.  I love it!


Categories: Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: Yes Word count: 85602
[Report This] Published: December 29, 2008 Updated: September 15, 2009


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 21, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Surprise

Very interesting story.  Edward has such a twisted way of thinking. I think he deserves a big scolding from someone. 


I can't wait to read the next chapter! 



Author's Response:

Lol... thankyou.  Oh, it'll happen, I promise you. :)  Thanks for R and R. :) Bec

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 29, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Confrontation

Ah, argh, cliff hanger!

A few chapters before this, I thougth that the story was close to ending--I had no idea how there could be more to the story.  But here this is, opening up completely new possibilities--you're awesome for being able to do that.

Once again, a great chapter--I can't wait til I read the next one.



Author's Response:

Thankyou Pastel... the next chapter has been submitted... should be approved soon.  Thanks for liking it.  :)

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 13, 2009 Title: Chapter 24: Discovery

Wow, I don't know how you manage to constantly spurt out these amazing chapters.  xD


The chapter seemed all joyous, but then the last sentence left an ominous foreboding.  The troubles this time seem a lot more exciting (and scary), because the Cullens haven't seen it displayed in Renesmee.

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 25: Divine

Aw, this chapter was so sweet.  I felt so bad for Edward carrying all that guilt, especially because I now realize that he knows his mistakes.  Ah, I can't wait till the next amazing chapter--thanks again for writing these awesome chapters.  (:

 
Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstar
Date: July 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 29: Alterations

Eh, I didn't really like this last chapter. Perhaps a bit too rushed and just put out there.

Don't worry, I did enjoy the previous chapters.

 
Summary:

PhotobucketThe idea for this fanfiction story came from my one main critique of Meyer's novels: that Bella and Edward's relationship lacks conflict.  Sounds crazy, right?  But think about it.  They experience small quibbles and spats, all of which are resolved on the very next page!  Yes, their love is enduring.  But even the most magical relationships need a little real conflict and angst to make them magical yet believable!  So I picked this up from New Moon.  In the book, Bella forgives Edward way too easily when they reunite, in my opinion.  So I wanted to give her character a new and interesting chance to stand her ground on her own turf.  Edward NEVER returned to Forks in this story; instead, it picks up three years later.  Bella is in college, participating in an environmental work-study program in Maine.  And...well, you'll see!


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: No Word count: 30848
[Report This] Published: January 09, 2009 Updated: April 13, 2009


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstar
Date: March 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Little Berry Lightbulbs

Not that much happening in this chapter.  Interesting idea with the berry.  I hope to read more.

 
Summary:

I ran into Rob Pattinson.

And I was wearing a shirt with his face on it.

When Aimee has a chance encounter with Rob Pattinson things go from bad to awful in seconds.  Could it have to do with the fact that his face is displayed for the world to see on her chest?  Possibly.


Categories: Other Characters: Robert Pattinson
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: No Word count: 31324
[Report This] Published: January 13, 2009 Updated: March 12, 2010


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarstar
Date: March 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Interesting story.  I'm glad that the narrator of the story isn't obsessed about Robert Pattinson for his acting of Edward Cullen.  I almost thought that there would be some Twilight references, and I started cringing, but I'm glad that it was avoided.  I'm interesting in reading more.  (:

 
A Favor by Kitty_Cullen Rated: R starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 194]
Summary:

I can't live without Edward.  Not now, not ever.  I've got a plan.  I'm just going to have to call in a few favors first.


Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella, Carlisle, Carmen, Edward, Eleazar, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Kate, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 24893
[Report This] Published: February 11, 2009 Updated: May 11, 2009


Reviewer: pastel Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 16, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Hearts on Fire

Not bad.  I'm curious to know how the Cullen family deal with Bella's transformation, even she even transforms or not.  Hope this review brings you to continue writing more here.  Thanks.

 




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