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Penname: Cullen Concession [ Contact]
Real name: Robin Parrish
Status: Member
Member Since: March 10, 2009
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Beta-reader: Yes
I adore Twilight Fan Fiction. I love to beta read.
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Summary: ...Immersion...
Suppose that vampires "imprint" based on smell and the connection is immediate and irresistible. What will happen when vampire Bella Swan meets her mate at Forks High?

Immersion: involvement in something that occupies all the time and energy available.
Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Ben, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
Word count: 37435
[Report This] Published: October 12, 2009 Updated: November 21, 2009
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: November 30, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Love it! Author's Response: Glad you are enjoying this, Cullen Concession!
Hope you enjoy the rest too!
Kathie
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
I like the way your soulmates work. It makes sense. Do you have horses? We used to raise Arabians. Author's Response: Glad it makes sense!
Yes, we have five...three full American Quarter horses...and our baby is half AQH and half arab...he's a doll!

He was born a year ago, on Father's Day...
Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
Kathie
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed  
Date: December 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
So light! I love it! Author's Response: Makes me happy to hear it!
Kathie
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
Loved the last sentence. I wonder what his parents would think of her. Author's Response: I'm thinking that his folks will LOVE her...LOL
Thanks for reading!
Kathie
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Perfect Teenage Limon!! Is it ok to mix those words?
YAY More Dragon Stones!!!! Author's Response: "Perfect Teenage Limon"...love that!
Sigh...DS has been in the lineup for a week...but it is Christmas...so maybe it will be validated soon...we can hope!
Thanks for reading IMMERSION!
Kathie
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Epilogue
Wonderful story! Author's Response: Thank you, Cullen Concession! Glad you enjoyed it!
There will be an outtake or two...and a couple more side shots...do check them out!
Kathie
Summary:  
2nd place as "Outstanding story" in the Shimmer Awards 2011
It is 1943 and WW II is devastating Europe. Edward Masen is a 23 years old American parachutist sent by the OSS on a secret mission, meant to help the partisans fighting the Nazis in Northern Italy. There he meets a girl concealing a terrible secret. They fall passionately in love and plan to marry as soon as Italy is liberated. However, while going back to the Allied lines and trying to reach Anzio, where the Anglo American forces are struggling to break through Germans’ opposition, Edward finds his nemesis, in the form of two Volturi warriors.
Edward is now a newborn vampire, fierce, desperate and bloodthirsty. Will he succumb forever to his inner monster or will he be able to recover at least some of his lost humanity? Will he see his love again and resist the urge to kill her?
My parents and relatives told me many times of the day when Rome was liberated, much earlier than Northern Italy, and how joyful they felt. It was June 4th, 1944.
The American troops entered our city passing through Via Casilina and Porta Maggiore. It was a triumph. People cheered, girls threw flowers, kids got rides in the Jeeps. Romans were free, after 20 years of dictatorship followed by Nazi occupation. It was as if a gray leaden cloak had been lifted and everybody could breathe again. I dedicate The Parachutist to those brave, smiling American boys.
Categories: Pre-Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Carlisle, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 33 Completed: Yes
Word count: 64920
[Report This] Published: October 14, 2009 Updated: March 31, 2010
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Lesson for a monster
Loved it! Now back to save Bella?!
Author's Response: Not yet, not yet. For the moment he thinks he represents the worst danger for Bella...
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 Change
Well written!
Author's Response: Thank you. Happy that you liked it
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 Traveling South
Here we go!
Author's Response: This was really a reviews tour the force. Never got so many in a row!
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 Lovers
i trust you! I know it will be every bit as good as what you have been writing!
Author's Response: Thanks again and again
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Her secret
Love the history you offer!
Author's Response: I am so happy. I am going out for a while, but if I find other reviews ,I'll answer later.
Adn thank you again.
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Music
Thanks for letting us get to know human Edward!
Author's Response: A lovely young man. ( If I was Isetta I would be totally in love as she is.) How will he react, in the stort and long term, when he becomes a "monster"?
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 Farm hand
Again another beautiful chapter. I love how you are setting up the love story!
Author's Response: It is a love story that will have to stand up to a tragic change, so it needs to be very strong!
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 The drop
Very interesting! Great story line!
Author's Response: Hi, I had not realized that you were on some previous chapter. Carlisle's story will come on chapter 12. Thank you for reviewing all chapters!
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Mission
Loved the scene Edward saw of Carlisle!
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Avoiding the casino
Your research is apparent can't wait to hear carlises story! Reviewing from phone please pardon typos!
Author's Response: Thank you again. Carlisle's story, not so different from Canon, will come in the next chapter, around midweek.
(Ha, I do typos even when I am on the computer, unless the spelling and language tool is on!)
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Operation Avalanche
Wonderful!
Author's Response: Thank you. Your review is short but very heart warming ! I'll try to keep it wonderful for all the following chapters.
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 Hunting the doctor
Wonderful way for Edward to find Carlisle! Sorry the reviews are short they are from my phone. Thank you for responding.
Author's Response: I would like so much to answer from a phone. I am totally clumsy with technology ... and thank you.
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed  
Date: December 15, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 A poacher
Wow! Edward is a beaver among his other talents! LOL. Very interesting. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Well done! Author's Response: Ha, beaver, funny. The next chapter will be interesting, I hope. The title is "Two poachers". During that period Castelporziano's forest was really full of intruders, human and non human. I had the good fortune to visit it in the '80s. One reason for its beauty is that, in general, people are not allowed in.
Thank you very much for your review.
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 19, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 Two poachers
Edward in a mirror...Fa La La La La!
Meryy Christmas to you. Author's Response: Thank you very much. I am exhausted though. I love Christmas but shopping for presents is killing me. I have too many relatives, ugh
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: December 27, 2009
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 Intermezzo
Awesome wonderful. One of my favorites. I love the research you put into this story! I love each time it is updated!
Author's Response: I'll submit before the end of the year. By the way, happy new year and thanks a lot
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: January 06, 2010
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 Repentance/Historical note
Loved following the logic of why he should no longer drink from humans.
Maybe to make it a little longer we could have felt how much he was tempted or how good it felt going done his throat. In contrast, the shortness makes me feel that the blood to him is more like a desert he isnt tempted that strongly by, which lets us know he has control over it. Does that make sense????
But honestly, I am astonished with each chapter, so I have no complaints. Author's Response: I tried to give the sense of what pleasure is for a vampire to drink human blood in preceding chapters. I did not want to repeat it, but still he says
...but human blood is so much more satisfying... it gives such a physical release … it gives such a power ...
So I thought it was enough. As a meal, poor Egon was just average, nothing to remember him particularly. This is part of the tragedy that makes Edward finally see how terrible his behaviour is.
With this chapter the second part of the story ends. In the next one Bella will be back, even if we don't see her yet
Thank you very much for R&R
Summary:

Kisses to sangrealfire for her beautiful banner!
Welcome to the city of Miami. Where the days are hot & the nights are even hotter. Beautiful beaches, beautiful bodies. Fake tans. Strong drinks. The hottest clubs. Fast cars, fast women. The city where money buys you everything. Where the divorce rate is high, silicone is a necessity & sex is a game. Let's Play.
Bella Swan 'Newton' is living in Miami. Her days are filled with her two best friends, sisters Alice and Cynthia Brandon, her boss Jake, and her pending divorce from her high school sweetheart Mike. After a one night stand with Miami playboy Edward Cullen, Bella is thrust into what Miami has to offer. The most beautiful clubs, luxurious dinners, and more money than she could ever image. There's only two problems. One, Edward is married. Two, he's Mike's lawyer. What happens when the best sex of your life comes from a man who is wanting to destroy you?
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Mike, Other Character, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No
Word count: 60361
[Report This] Published: October 16, 2009 Updated: February 03, 2011
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: March 25, 2010
Title: Chapter 4: Ch. 3 - Play
So So Sorry for your loss.
THe chapter was well worth the wait. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Summary: It's been 6 years and Edward hasn't returned. Bella is now living in Seattle as a homicide detective. The homicide rate has shot up in Seattle and when Bella's life is put on the line, she sees the person she was hoping she'd never see again. OOC.
Excerpt from Chapter 7: “I have to get out of here,” I said. I walked right past Edward but stopped when I felt something cold and hard grab my wrist. “Don’t touch me.” I said it in a way I was surprised how it came out. It came out in more of a plea. “Bella, please…let me explain…” Edward pleaded loosening his grip on my wrist. “No,” was all I said. I started to pull and realized my vision started to blur and I could feel a few tears fall. “Edward, please let me go!” “Edward. Let her go,” I heard Carlisle calmly say. Edward slowly, and somewhat reluctantly, let me go and I quickly turned around and opened the door. I ran out and down the steps of the porch.
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Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 14 Completed: Yes
Word count: 37717
[Report This] Published: October 28, 2009 Updated: December 02, 2009
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: November 23, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: I Don't Want to Want You
Absolutley want more!
Reviewer: Cullen Concession Signed
Date: November 21, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Promise (angelicwish)
You have a great story here. Hope RL gets easier soon!
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