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After unexpectedly being given an antique desk and finding a letter written by Edward to his cousin over nine decades earlier in a hidden compartment, Bella, on a whim, decides to respond and starts them on a journey neither could have ever imagined. 

Perhaps there are some things we aren't meant to understand, just accept....

This story will eventually contain character death - NOT Edward or Bella.


Categories: Pre-Twilight, Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 50 Completed: Yes Word count: 419120
[Report This] Published: February 24, 2012 Updated: March 09, 2013


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Wow.  Charlie & Tanya?  Edward (2009) must be relieved that she's turned her attention to someone else.

 

I love this story.



Author's Response:

Yes, I'm sure he must be.  I'm so glad you like my story!  Thank you for reviewing!  Chapter 5 is still with Project Team Beta, but I'll get it in to my Twilighted beta as soon as possible.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: July 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

That was so sad.  I loved the formatting while Bella was thinking about the flu.  I think it realy added to the emotions.

 

I can't wait to find out how much Vampward remembers about her.  I wonder if he & Carlisle retrieved the painting, photos and the letters.



Author's Response:

I thought the formating added to it, too.  It showed how her mind was racing, I thought.

Vampire Edward is coming up very soon, I promise!

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 01, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Wow!  I'd love to hear 2009 Edward's thoughts on settling in Forks.



Author's Response:

Oh, I can't tell you that...  It'd be giving too much away!  Thank you for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: December 23, 2012 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

Great chapter.  I'm glad Bella had it out with Jacob.  The funeral was very moving as well



Author's Response:

It alwasy bugged me in canon that Bella never stood up to Jake for Edward.  In my mind, Bella is just as protective of Edward as he is of her, maybe even moreso because she feels she let him down when he was human and the epidemic hit.  There was nothing she could do, and she can't stand feeling like there's nothing she can do now. 

Fortunately, I've still got both of my parents, so I didn't have any personal experience to draw from, but I really wanted to keep the funeral as realistic as possible. 

I'm glad you liked it, thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: September 13, 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

I really hope Bella sends copies & hangs on to the originals.  I also hope she re-reads ALL of them before she send s the copies off



Author's Response:

They will be copies.  She wouldn't part with the originals for anything.  I should've made that clear, but it will be in the next chapter.

Thanks for revieiwng!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Wow.  I guess Edward will be "dead" before Bella gets to Forks.  You know what I mena.



Author's Response:

Hmmmmmmm........  I will only say that there is a lot of story to go.

 

Thanks for revewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: October 29, 2012 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Great chapter.  I like that your Bella, unlike canon Bella, actually understands that there are valid reasons for Edward not getting carried away.  It always irritated me how insecure canon Bella was in edward's love for her.  I like that your Bella knows he is truly in love with her and doesn't doubt it.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: November 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Oh Edward!  Tanya summed it up nicely.  His reaction towards the cold was hysterical.  He really needs to chill out.  I'd love an out take of Carlisle's POV on reassuring Edward



Author's Response:

I don't go over Edward and Charlie's talk at all, just what Edward thinks in reflection.  I really think Edward has a lot of very real issues with his shame and his guilt over what he's done.  I think he's basically a very moral person, vampire or not, and the lives he took weigh very heavily on him, criminals or not.  Bella had the advantage over Edward, she learned the truth in private and had a chance to come to terms with it, plus she had already come to the realization that something was up on her own.  Edward had the truth thrust at him unexpectedly, with no warning at all and under horrible circumstances.  But don't worry, I don't keep him away too long, something is about to happen that will....  Oops, got a bit ahead of myself!  You'll just have to wait and see what happens next, but like I said, no New Mooning!

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: May 05, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Great chapter.  Still looking forward to Forks!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!  I'm having more and more people comment that they're looking forward to her trip to Forks, and I have to admit I'm starting to get nervous!  I hope it doesn't disappoint!  I'm stating to bite my nails! 

 

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 09, 2013 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

 Bella rocks!  i thought she had picked up a lighter.  A little unrealistic to think that clumsy Bella could sucessfuly jump on Y's back, but since the story is about vampires & werewolves realistic is a relative term.

 

I;m interestred to see the Volturi.  In canon, they had a reason for sitting back & letting Victoria & co do as much damage to the Cullen's as possible.  I wonder why they ended up late to the party this time



Author's Response:

Team Swan Rocks!  I think Bella's clumsyness comes out most often when she's thinking about it.  When she doesnt' think about it and just acts, she's not nearly as clumsy.  Plus having gotten her arms around Edward at that point, Victoria would've been relatively stationary.  So Bella didn't have to try to jump on her back while she was moving around so fast she was just a blur to Bella's human eyes.  It's amazing what desperation can empower us to do.  I see Victoria in that situation as being incredulous and amused, not thinking for a second that a human could possibly be a threat.  But she'd have recognized Bella's scent because Edward would've been covered with it, and I think she'd have enjoyed knowing that Bella's being there would be tortorous for Edward.

The answer to your question will be in chapter 49.  (Not much room for it to be anywhere else, is there?)  It's vague, because I only wanted the reader to know what Edward and Bella knew, but I think if you're looking for it, you'll be able to get it.  Bella, of course, only gets what she sees.  Edward will be able to read their thoughts, but only what they're thinking at the moment--not necessarily what led up to that moment. 

Chapter 49 is in the validation queue--after that, there's just the epilogue!  Thanks for reviewing!

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: November 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Well I hope Edward comes back quickly.  I'm so glad the rest of the family is supporting Bella while Edward indulges in his angst fest



Author's Response:

I don't see him as *indulging* I see him more as genuinely distraught at the realization that Bella knows what he is.  I've always felt Edward carried an enormous amount of baggage that was never really dealt with in canon--from his rebelous years, for example.  So when they have their talk, they will try to deal with as much of it as possible. 

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: June 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I'm always happy to see this updated



Author's Response:

Sorry for the delay, my beta's been ill.  Hopefully she'll be feeling all better soon!  I'll get the next chapter into the validation queue and the teaser up on the forums page under Shameless Plugs today!  Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 13, 2013 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

Great chapter.  I LOVE that Edward got his memories back. 

 

So sorry that this is coming to a close

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 13, 2013 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44

Loved their datenight.  So glad Edward was open with her about his change.



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you like it!    It was one of my favorite chapters.

SO, SO, SO much better than prom!  Let's face it--Prom, a lot of hype, a lot of money, dead freaking boring.

I think it's very important that they really open up to each other and communicate--and that they take each other's feelings into consideration and respect that even if they don't agree, that doesn't make the other wrong.  I don't think they did enough of that in canon, so I really wanted them to have good talks.

Chapter 45 is in the validation queue already, so it should be up soon.

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: July 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Congratulations on the birth of your grandchild.

 

This was a sad chapter to read.  I imagine we've got a way to go yet to the bottom before things start looking up



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

We've pretty much hit bottom, but we're going to lay there licking our wounds for a little while before starting to climb back up.

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: October 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Love it!  I was getting nervous when they were talking prom dresses.  I was afraid of yet another version of the attempted rape scene.

 

So Tanya knows that Bella knows.  Does Edward know that she knows yet?



Author's Response:

What attempted rape scene?  I haven't read all that many Twilight fan fics, I've read a lot more Harry Potter than Twilight, but none of the ones I've read have a rape scene.  Of course, if it was mentioned as a warning, I'd have skipped the story, so that's probably why.

Tanya, yes.  Edward, no.  Tanya is working very hard to keep her thoughts away from Bella knowing, and I would think Edward would tend to try to avoid his family's thoughts as much as possible to respect their privacy.  But don't worry, I don't keep it quiet for long.  There are only 15 chapters left, and too much more has to happen.  Very soon, the universe will stick it's nose into everything and force Edward's hand.  I've never really seen learning about vampires as the key goal of the story.  The story is about Edward and Bella's love story, not about his being a vampire.  It's a factor, of course, but very much secondary to their relationship growing and strenghtening.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: August 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Not what I had in mind for their firs meeting, but really cool.  Looking forward to Jake's reaction to the scent.



Author's Response:

Oh, Jacob's going to go practically feral!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: October 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

Loved it!  I definitely want more E & B time. I'm surprised that Tanya wasn't able tro convince Esem of appropriate proportions for snacks for 2



Author's Response:

Oh, you'll get your wish.  Will you *ever* get your wish!

That may have been a little bit of passive sabotage against Edward on Tanya's part.  She wants Bella to see that it's him.  Besides, I'm sure Esme would've been having fun--even if she was repulsed by what she was making--and who would have the heart to stop her?

The teaser for 33 is up on the forums page under Shameless Plugs!  Chapter 33 is still with my betas, but I'll get it into the validation queue as soon as I get it back.

Thanks for reviewing!

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Wow.  I wonder what Michael & Sue know about Bella.

Great story about your great aunt



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing!  Please forgive me for not responding sooner, I'm blonde you see...  And apparently at least partially blind...  Michael and Sue will be back eventually... as will other assorted 21st century Masens.  Here's a little sneak peak at chapter four to try to make up for being so horribly careless as to not respond to your review right away...

<br /> "I'm sorry, Mother, Father. My headache has worsened. I think I will say good night, if I may."

<br /> Worriedly, his mother rose from the table and came over to him. "Look at you. You're trembling. Dearest, why did you not say something sooner?"

<br /> Edward looked down at his hands; they were in fact shaking.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: July 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Great chapter.  When Paul says "it " is watching, is it Edward tailing the Swans to make sure they are safe?



Author's Response:

Well, it was someone watching to make sure someone was safe, but I'm not saying just who yet.

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 19, 2013 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

Great chapter.  I take it Leah imprinted on Mike?

Can't wait for the next one.

I do think Edward is being silly.  I am sure that Charlie will want Tanya to change him & if Charlie is changed he will want Bella to be too.



Author's Response:

The Leah and Mike storyline will be very minor.  I only mention them a handful of times.  But Mike will play a part in a scene that I think everyone will love.

I think Edward has very deep-seated issues, and it's expecting too much of him for him to just get over them.  He not only has his own feelings on the matter, but he's also had Rosalie's thoughts on the issue bombarding him for decades, and we all know how she feels.  Plus, he knows that Carlisle was alone for a very long time because he couldn't bear the thought of doing to someone else what was done to him-ending their life.  He's had nearly 100 years to build those issues, he's not going to be able to just change how he feels in a couple months.  Bella accepted how important marriage is to Edward, but that's a different situation.  She never felt like marrying Edward would destroy his soul.  Now, given enough time, who knows?  Maybe Edward could come to think differently, but who knows how much time they have?  (Oh.  Wait, I DO!  I KNOW! Teeheeheeeheeeee!!)

The teaser for chapter 47 is up on the forums page under Shameless Plugs-check it out!  Thanks for reviewing!

 
Summary:

Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him?  AH/OOC/18 and over please.  Banner made by SoapyMayhem FanFiction


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 324629
[Report This] Published: February 27, 2012 Updated: November 25, 2012


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: May 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: ABC Easy as 123

I'm always sad to read about a mean Alice.  Bella & Edward have the same issues with their moms leaving.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Sorry for the lateness in replying to the review, I spent last weekend in the hospital and all week recovering at home.  Alice will make some redemption, but it is much later in the story when that takes place.  Bella's true age will be revealed in Chapter 17.  Well in this chapter you were given the chance to know Edward a little better, in the next chapter you will get to know a tad bit more about the kids and the background story on them, but you will also learn more about Bella.  Alice and Jasper are still together, but Jasper does have issues with Alice and her behavior and he will continue to call her to the carpet on it.  Rose wants the world to revolve around her, and when she rages there will be all kinds of fun things going on.  More to come on their bad behaviors, lots more... Don’t everyone lynch Carlisle, he is just worried for the welfare of the children, and he will be a saving grace in Bella’s life because he is now the children’s doctor. Edward and Bella are both going to be learning form the other.  Edward doesn’t realize what Bella is teaching him yet, but he will figure it out.  Thanks again for having some faith in us, I know we can’t redeem him in everyone eyes and there are a few of you who are still very upset about his time at the club.  If you are still upset, I hope by the end of the story, you’re not dwelling on that, because the basis of the story is so much more than that.

Thanks so much.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

 

Chapter 11 teaser… Subject to changes during beta process.

“I am Seth Charles Swan.”

“Do you know your date of birth?” 

He nods his head. “December, 31st, 2003.” So that makes Seth seven years and almost nine months.

Carlisle looks to Bella. “Was he born in a hospital, or at home?”

She looks at Seth. “Hospital, mom had a few weeks left before they were supposed to be born. The police had come to tell her dad had died, and her water broke when she was shouting at them. Then the EMT people came, one of them was a lady and they took mom away to the hospital.”

Carlisle looks at Bella and nods. “Do you know how early?” Bella bites her lip and shakes her head. “After he came home, has he seen a doctor?”

Bella nods her head.  “I had to take them to see Aro’s doctor and he gave them all the immunization shots they needed.  Zafrina took them for me if I was at work at the hotel.  Zafrina is Aro’s mom and she promised that they would be okay and said that they needed those shots. She told me that they were very important for them to have so they stayed healthy.”

Carlisle looks at her. “Can you tell me who Aro is, or the doctor’s name?”

Bella frowns at him and then looks at me. It is clear she is confused as to why he doesn’t know who Aro is. “Zafrina lives next door to me, she very kind and looks after Seth and Leah when I am at work because you’re not supposed to leave them by themselves, that is very bad.  Aro is her son; he helped me get my jobs. They help me, but I know that I should have been there, but… I… have I done something bad?” She looks like she is getting upset, and at no point has she told him that I know Aro. I grip her hand and rub the top of it and give her a smile to thank her for keeping my secret.  I turn to look at Carlisle and tell him who she is speaking about.

“I know Aro and the doctor she is talking about. His name is Jason Jenks, I am sure you are familiar with him. I will give him a call to fax all the paperwork he has on them.” Carlisle looks at me nods his head, and gives me a clear look to say that he wants to know more about this. I stand up heading to the door.

“Okay, Leah can you tell me your full name?”  She smiles and nods her head.

“Leah Sue Swan,” she smiles at him.

“Do you know your date of birth?”

“Yes, it is January 1st, 2004.”

“Ah, the twins have different birthdates, so that tells me that you Seth were born very late at night, and you Leah were born very early in the morning.  Am I correct?”

They nod their heads all together, and I smile.  

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: New Job

He is doing a good job of redeeming himself.  I hope Bella will start to trust him.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .” 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: First Sight

Well that was interesting.  I think Isabella has a crush on our professor.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: June 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: A Cowboy, a Princess, and a Butterfly

Don't know if Alice will learn, love Chas & Bella's grown up chocolate



Author's Response:

Many of you are wondering what he deal is with Edward and the talk of his lost son.  In chapter 5 there was a dream sequence that told a lot of what happened that fateful day when Edward found out Tanya was using him, to get his money.  She was not pregnant like she had told him, the problem is the night before they had unprotected sex, and she actually did give birth to his child.  Esme found out about it, but hid it from Edward trying to protect him.  Tanya and Edward junior later died in a fire.  There will be more to come on that, but it seems to be getting a lot of questions.  Now for Alice...She is clearly a not nice person in this fic, and to some she will partially redeem herself, but for some there is no redemption, her words and actions are far worse than any you have seen from Edward.  Siobhan is for the majority out of the picture, so she is of no major worry.  Uncle Harry is a very mean man, and there will be more to come about him.  We love our Aro he is one of the kindest and most loving men and we are proud to have written an Aro who is not only out of character, but also so very loveable.   Bella has come to trust Edward, and it shows.  A lot of you keep asking if she will sleep in the step-moms room, or if Edward will talk her into it...the answer to that is no.  The next few chapters have so much going on in them, I am sure that you will all have favorite parts.  We love hearing what your thoughts are so keep asking questions and we will answer what we can without ruining the plot. 

Thanks for Reading and Reviewing
Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 15 teaser...Subject to changes during BETA process...

It’s Saturday, and we are into the countdown to Thanksgiving.   Alice has called me numerous times, and left well over a hundred text messages and voice mails.  I have dealt with each and every one of them the same way. Without reading or listen to them, I just hit delete.

Esme found out during one of my talks with Carlisle about the stunt Alice pulled.  At first, I thought she would take Alice’s side, but was stunned when I found her on the phone giving Alice a piece of her mind.  Jasper has also said that he and Alice are talking, but not back to normal yet.  Jasper is really pissed at her.

Yesterday, Esme called me, and to my surprise, she asked me if I would still come over for Thanksgiving dinner.  She told me that she would understand if I did not want to come.  She said it was my choice, and she would still make my dinner if I wanted and bring it over to my home or Midnight Sun.  Not once did she try and force my hand.  After much thought, I said that I will be there.  I do enjoy spending time with the guys, even more so in the last few weeks.  I know they all were hoping for me to come, and I know I owe them a lot. I told them that I will join them and stay, as long as Alice and Rose keep their mouths shut. Esme, Carlisle, Emmett, and Jasper, have promised to keep them under control.

Things with Bella are still going really well. Too well, in fact.  She…fuck! Every time I see her, I want to hold her close.  It’s no longer just me having dirty thoughts about her, a lot of dirty thoughts about her, which I still am, but I also want to hug her, lie with her, make love to her, and that is really fucking scary for me, for lots of reasons.  I am worried, because I wonder if she could even cope in that type of a relationship. I have been a pussy about it, because I haven’t had the guts to ask Peter or Jasper what they think.  I know it’s because I am afraid they may say she couldn’t handle it, or I am not good enough for her.  I already know that I am not, but one can always hope for his own redemption.

 




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