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After unexpectedly being given an antique desk and finding a letter written by Edward to his cousin over nine decades earlier in a hidden compartment, Bella, on a whim, decides to respond and starts them on a journey neither could have ever imagined. 

Perhaps there are some things we aren't meant to understand, just accept....

This story will eventually contain character death - NOT Edward or Bella.


Categories: Pre-Twilight, Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 50 Completed: Yes Word count: 419120
[Report This] Published: February 24, 2012 Updated: March 09, 2013


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: October 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Love it!  I was getting nervous when they were talking prom dresses.  I was afraid of yet another version of the attempted rape scene.

 

So Tanya knows that Bella knows.  Does Edward know that she knows yet?



Author's Response:

What attempted rape scene?  I haven't read all that many Twilight fan fics, I've read a lot more Harry Potter than Twilight, but none of the ones I've read have a rape scene.  Of course, if it was mentioned as a warning, I'd have skipped the story, so that's probably why.

Tanya, yes.  Edward, no.  Tanya is working very hard to keep her thoughts away from Bella knowing, and I would think Edward would tend to try to avoid his family's thoughts as much as possible to respect their privacy.  But don't worry, I don't keep it quiet for long.  There are only 15 chapters left, and too much more has to happen.  Very soon, the universe will stick it's nose into everything and force Edward's hand.  I've never really seen learning about vampires as the key goal of the story.  The story is about Edward and Bella's love story, not about his being a vampire.  It's a factor, of course, but very much secondary to their relationship growing and strenghtening.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: August 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Not what I had in mind for their firs meeting, but really cool.  Looking forward to Jake's reaction to the scent.



Author's Response:

Oh, Jacob's going to go practically feral!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: October 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

Loved it!  I definitely want more E & B time. I'm surprised that Tanya wasn't able tro convince Esem of appropriate proportions for snacks for 2



Author's Response:

Oh, you'll get your wish.  Will you *ever* get your wish!

That may have been a little bit of passive sabotage against Edward on Tanya's part.  She wants Bella to see that it's him.  Besides, I'm sure Esme would've been having fun--even if she was repulsed by what she was making--and who would have the heart to stop her?

The teaser for 33 is up on the forums page under Shameless Plugs!  Chapter 33 is still with my betas, but I'll get it into the validation queue as soon as I get it back.

Thanks for reviewing!

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Wow.  I wonder what Michael & Sue know about Bella.

Great story about your great aunt



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing!  Please forgive me for not responding sooner, I'm blonde you see...  And apparently at least partially blind...  Michael and Sue will be back eventually... as will other assorted 21st century Masens.  Here's a little sneak peak at chapter four to try to make up for being so horribly careless as to not respond to your review right away...

<br /> "I'm sorry, Mother, Father. My headache has worsened. I think I will say good night, if I may."

<br /> Worriedly, his mother rose from the table and came over to him. "Look at you. You're trembling. Dearest, why did you not say something sooner?"

<br /> Edward looked down at his hands; they were in fact shaking.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: July 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Great chapter.  When Paul says "it " is watching, is it Edward tailing the Swans to make sure they are safe?



Author's Response:

Well, it was someone watching to make sure someone was safe, but I'm not saying just who yet.

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 19, 2013 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

Great chapter.  I take it Leah imprinted on Mike?

Can't wait for the next one.

I do think Edward is being silly.  I am sure that Charlie will want Tanya to change him & if Charlie is changed he will want Bella to be too.



Author's Response:

The Leah and Mike storyline will be very minor.  I only mention them a handful of times.  But Mike will play a part in a scene that I think everyone will love.

I think Edward has very deep-seated issues, and it's expecting too much of him for him to just get over them.  He not only has his own feelings on the matter, but he's also had Rosalie's thoughts on the issue bombarding him for decades, and we all know how she feels.  Plus, he knows that Carlisle was alone for a very long time because he couldn't bear the thought of doing to someone else what was done to him-ending their life.  He's had nearly 100 years to build those issues, he's not going to be able to just change how he feels in a couple months.  Bella accepted how important marriage is to Edward, but that's a different situation.  She never felt like marrying Edward would destroy his soul.  Now, given enough time, who knows?  Maybe Edward could come to think differently, but who knows how much time they have?  (Oh.  Wait, I DO!  I KNOW! Teeheeheeeheeeee!!)

The teaser for chapter 47 is up on the forums page under Shameless Plugs-check it out!  Thanks for reviewing!

 
Summary:

Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him?  AH/OOC/18 and over please.  Banner made by SoapyMayhem FanFiction


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 324629
[Report This] Published: February 27, 2012 Updated: November 25, 2012


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: May 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: ABC Easy as 123

I'm always sad to read about a mean Alice.  Bella & Edward have the same issues with their moms leaving.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Sorry for the lateness in replying to the review, I spent last weekend in the hospital and all week recovering at home.  Alice will make some redemption, but it is much later in the story when that takes place.  Bella's true age will be revealed in Chapter 17.  Well in this chapter you were given the chance to know Edward a little better, in the next chapter you will get to know a tad bit more about the kids and the background story on them, but you will also learn more about Bella.  Alice and Jasper are still together, but Jasper does have issues with Alice and her behavior and he will continue to call her to the carpet on it.  Rose wants the world to revolve around her, and when she rages there will be all kinds of fun things going on.  More to come on their bad behaviors, lots more... Don’t everyone lynch Carlisle, he is just worried for the welfare of the children, and he will be a saving grace in Bella’s life because he is now the children’s doctor. Edward and Bella are both going to be learning form the other.  Edward doesn’t realize what Bella is teaching him yet, but he will figure it out.  Thanks again for having some faith in us, I know we can’t redeem him in everyone eyes and there are a few of you who are still very upset about his time at the club.  If you are still upset, I hope by the end of the story, you’re not dwelling on that, because the basis of the story is so much more than that.

Thanks so much.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

 

Chapter 11 teaser… Subject to changes during beta process.

“I am Seth Charles Swan.”

“Do you know your date of birth?” 

He nods his head. “December, 31st, 2003.” So that makes Seth seven years and almost nine months.

Carlisle looks to Bella. “Was he born in a hospital, or at home?”

She looks at Seth. “Hospital, mom had a few weeks left before they were supposed to be born. The police had come to tell her dad had died, and her water broke when she was shouting at them. Then the EMT people came, one of them was a lady and they took mom away to the hospital.”

Carlisle looks at Bella and nods. “Do you know how early?” Bella bites her lip and shakes her head. “After he came home, has he seen a doctor?”

Bella nods her head.  “I had to take them to see Aro’s doctor and he gave them all the immunization shots they needed.  Zafrina took them for me if I was at work at the hotel.  Zafrina is Aro’s mom and she promised that they would be okay and said that they needed those shots. She told me that they were very important for them to have so they stayed healthy.”

Carlisle looks at her. “Can you tell me who Aro is, or the doctor’s name?”

Bella frowns at him and then looks at me. It is clear she is confused as to why he doesn’t know who Aro is. “Zafrina lives next door to me, she very kind and looks after Seth and Leah when I am at work because you’re not supposed to leave them by themselves, that is very bad.  Aro is her son; he helped me get my jobs. They help me, but I know that I should have been there, but… I… have I done something bad?” She looks like she is getting upset, and at no point has she told him that I know Aro. I grip her hand and rub the top of it and give her a smile to thank her for keeping my secret.  I turn to look at Carlisle and tell him who she is speaking about.

“I know Aro and the doctor she is talking about. His name is Jason Jenks, I am sure you are familiar with him. I will give him a call to fax all the paperwork he has on them.” Carlisle looks at me nods his head, and gives me a clear look to say that he wants to know more about this. I stand up heading to the door.

“Okay, Leah can you tell me your full name?”  She smiles and nods her head.

“Leah Sue Swan,” she smiles at him.

“Do you know your date of birth?”

“Yes, it is January 1st, 2004.”

“Ah, the twins have different birthdates, so that tells me that you Seth were born very late at night, and you Leah were born very early in the morning.  Am I correct?”

They nod their heads all together, and I smile.  

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: New Job

He is doing a good job of redeeming himself.  I hope Bella will start to trust him.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .” 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: First Sight

Well that was interesting.  I think Isabella has a crush on our professor.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: June 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: A Cowboy, a Princess, and a Butterfly

Don't know if Alice will learn, love Chas & Bella's grown up chocolate



Author's Response:

Many of you are wondering what he deal is with Edward and the talk of his lost son.  In chapter 5 there was a dream sequence that told a lot of what happened that fateful day when Edward found out Tanya was using him, to get his money.  She was not pregnant like she had told him, the problem is the night before they had unprotected sex, and she actually did give birth to his child.  Esme found out about it, but hid it from Edward trying to protect him.  Tanya and Edward junior later died in a fire.  There will be more to come on that, but it seems to be getting a lot of questions.  Now for Alice...She is clearly a not nice person in this fic, and to some she will partially redeem herself, but for some there is no redemption, her words and actions are far worse than any you have seen from Edward.  Siobhan is for the majority out of the picture, so she is of no major worry.  Uncle Harry is a very mean man, and there will be more to come about him.  We love our Aro he is one of the kindest and most loving men and we are proud to have written an Aro who is not only out of character, but also so very loveable.   Bella has come to trust Edward, and it shows.  A lot of you keep asking if she will sleep in the step-moms room, or if Edward will talk her into it...the answer to that is no.  The next few chapters have so much going on in them, I am sure that you will all have favorite parts.  We love hearing what your thoughts are so keep asking questions and we will answer what we can without ruining the plot. 

Thanks for Reading and Reviewing
Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 15 teaser...Subject to changes during BETA process...

It’s Saturday, and we are into the countdown to Thanksgiving.   Alice has called me numerous times, and left well over a hundred text messages and voice mails.  I have dealt with each and every one of them the same way. Without reading or listen to them, I just hit delete.

Esme found out during one of my talks with Carlisle about the stunt Alice pulled.  At first, I thought she would take Alice’s side, but was stunned when I found her on the phone giving Alice a piece of her mind.  Jasper has also said that he and Alice are talking, but not back to normal yet.  Jasper is really pissed at her.

Yesterday, Esme called me, and to my surprise, she asked me if I would still come over for Thanksgiving dinner.  She told me that she would understand if I did not want to come.  She said it was my choice, and she would still make my dinner if I wanted and bring it over to my home or Midnight Sun.  Not once did she try and force my hand.  After much thought, I said that I will be there.  I do enjoy spending time with the guys, even more so in the last few weeks.  I know they all were hoping for me to come, and I know I owe them a lot. I told them that I will join them and stay, as long as Alice and Rose keep their mouths shut. Esme, Carlisle, Emmett, and Jasper, have promised to keep them under control.

Things with Bella are still going really well. Too well, in fact.  She…fuck! Every time I see her, I want to hold her close.  It’s no longer just me having dirty thoughts about her, a lot of dirty thoughts about her, which I still am, but I also want to hug her, lie with her, make love to her, and that is really fucking scary for me, for lots of reasons.  I am worried, because I wonder if she could even cope in that type of a relationship. I have been a pussy about it, because I haven’t had the guts to ask Peter or Jasper what they think.  I know it’s because I am afraid they may say she couldn’t handle it, or I am not good enough for her.  I already know that I am not, but one can always hope for his own redemption.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 24, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Stalking

No guesses on what Edward did to get Kasi so mad.  I wonder how Aro knows Bella. Please don't tell e he tried to get her to work for him.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  There have been a few questions regarding Bella’s age.  Bella was 13 when she was left to care for her half sibling twins.  She was left to care for them by her step mom after her father’s death.  She obtained employment with the help of Aro who owns the building she lives in with her half siblings.  Her employment record is based on her fake ID that Sue her step-mom left her with.  More about Isabella’s back story will come out in the future chapters.  Edward is quite the monster in the next chapter, but he will see the error of his way.  Thanks for all the story love we are getting, and being a part of that.    Thank you, Kasi (&Nikky)


Chapter 5 teaser, subject to change during beta process.

I feel myself wake with a jolt, and I sit straight up.  No longer gasping, but still struggling to calm down.  My breathing is hard and have cold sweat covering my whole body, fuck that was some dream.  I get up and walk into my bathroom; I turn on the water in the shower.  I let it warm a little before stepping into take a shower.  I close my eyes as look up letting the hot water hit my face.  I take some calming breaths trying to shake off this fucking dream.

Leaning my left arm against the wall to support myself, I tip my head down.  With my eyes closed I feel the hot soothing water cascade down my back.  Fuck this not working!  I still feel the effects the dream has had in the pit of my stomach.  I feel my heart starting to race; I open my eye look at seeing my hand shaking.  Knowing that the shower is not helping, I step out and look for the pills Dr. Hall gave me.  I take two of them and wash them down with some orange juice.  After sitting in a towel in my living room for an hour, with the medicine in my system I am now calm.  I go to my bedroom and get dressed, and head off to the college.

I head to Marcus’s office first to get the low down on what happened during my week absence.  After finding that I did not miss much, I set my class room up for my first class.

The day passes by in a blur, I look at my watch knowing that Bel. . . shit, no, Isabella will be coming in soon.  With that thought I pack up my things and leave my room.  As I walk out the main entrance, I see her coming toward the door.  From the corner of my eye I see her smile, as she steps aside to let me out.  I don’t return her smile, or look at her.  I walk out letting the door close behind me, and continue to walk away from her.

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Doctor, Mall, and Names

I'm glad he is taking care of her & she is letting him.  I want to know more about both of their pasts.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  There have been a few questions regarding Edward and why he is so tainted by women.  More of his back story is coming out, but between having a mother who was mentally ill, who subsequently abandoned him.  The one girl he gave his heart to was only using him for money.  One girl pretends to be his friend to gain access to his friend and for all accounts adoptive brother.  And don’t forget the person he looked to as a mother figure who lied to him and hid the truth of things from him.  When you put all of those things together, it is hard to trust and believe that there is honesty and truth in caring from a female.  I know lots of women who think men are worms because of this or that, which happened, so it should not be so hard to understand how Edward may have this view of women.  Next we have had an overabundance of questions regarding when Edward will find out Bella’s true age.  That will happen, but first we need to build a little more of their friendship together.   I know that many of you are not happy of his time going to Aro’s, but I assure that those times are coming to a close.  It is important we felt in the story and as the story goes to show how he is dealing with his own reactions to Bella.  There will only be a few more explicit scenes from the club, but WE PROMISE he stops going fairly soon.  This is a rather slow burn, but for this to be realistic, in any way, shape, or form it needs to be.  With that said we will not drag it out either.  You will continue to learn more about Edward and Bella, as well as a few of the other characters, but it is all going with the storyline.  There are some great chapters coming up, and for all of you who still have some hate or anger for Edward, I am sure that you soon will find that hate or anger directed in another place. 

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 10 Teaser…  Subject to changes during Beta Process.

Carlisle, Jasper, Emmett, and I, all meet up on Saturday for a workout and lunch. The topic moved to Bella, and Emmett was not happy that he was the only one that had not met her yet.  I, well we, explained that she did not like close contact with people and might say things out of the norm.  Of course, this all fell on deaf ears, because his only response was him promising to be on his best behavior. Now, we all love Emmett - most people do - but he is a large hulk of a man.  Emmett is six foot six and must be tipping the scales at close to three hundred pounds.  His biceps are the size of my thighs. He also has a quick mouth, and often says things without thinking. We tried to tell him this, but he didn’t get it.  We all knew that he would end up trying to hug her, or that she would end up saying something and then he would joke about it, but either way, she would end up hurt.  I just couldn’t allow that to happen, not even by one of my best friends.  He pouted the rest of the time we were together, even after Jasper and Carlisle both said she could not meet him yet.  I was a bit worried at the end of lunch when Emmett looked as if he was hatching an evil plan.

I look at my watch, seeing that it’s almost nine-thirty, and I know that Bella is about to walk in.  I have set up the table with some of the supplies I need to help teach her, including alphabet cards.  Since she can already recognize some letters, I know teaching her the alphabet should be pretty simple.  I know the best thing for me to do, is to start at the beginning.  This means that the alphabet song we all loved as a kid, is first. I look to the door as it opens, and see Bella walking in.  She glances at me, and I can see in her eyes that she looks both excited and apprehensive.  I am sure she is a bit nervous about today, so I smile at her. We already decided that we would do an hour and a half on Tuesday mornings, and an hour and a half on Thursday afternoons.

“Bella, hang up your jacket and come over to the table.”  She nods her head and does what I ask. “We will begin with the alphabet.  There are twenty-six letters in the English alphabet; twenty-one are consonants, and five are vowels. I will show both the capital and lower case letters.  Are you ready?” She nods her head before putting her glasses on. She has them sitting at the edge of her nose, which will make her look over the top of them rather than through them. I push them back to sit on her nose correctly. “No looking over them, Bella,” I say, giving her a smile. 

 

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 15, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Warning Signs

I'm interested to see what he finds out next.



Author's Response:

Edward is a bit of a jerk isn’t he?  He also means well and does not want bad things to happen to people, hence why he would run after a purse snatching group of buttheads.  Edward’s health issues will be explained more in the next chapter, and I don’t want to give away too much, but suffice to say that Edward’s stress levels are not helping his issue.  Next chapter there will be a little ‘friendly’ interaction between Isabella and the good professor Masen.  Thanks for reading and reviewing. 

Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Chapter 3 teaser, subject to changes during the beta process…
Fuck my life! I have been here in a hospital room all night, on a heart monitor.  They made me turn off my cell phone.  I was in so much stress; I should have had them call Emmett last night.  I am sure that I am in hot water with them all, for not showing up.  I am waiting for the doctor to come in with my test results.  It felt that I was having a heart attack, or something.  I really hope that was not the case, I mean come on I am only twenty-eight.  I am an overall healthy man.  I exercise and don’t eat a lot of fattening foods.  I mean people my age don’t have heart attacks, do they?

“Good morning Mr. Masen, I am Doctor Hall,” he says holding out his hand for me.

“Good morning,” I say shaking his hand.

“Well I read over your case notes from last night and this morning, how are you feeling now?” his face is giving nothing away.

“I feel a lot better than I did last night, everything has returned to normal.”

He nods his head writing notes on my file in his hands.  “How long have you been getting suffering from heartburn?”  He looks at me questioningly.

“On and off for the past three four months,” I say letting out a breath before talking again, cutting off Dr. Hall.  “Look I don’t mean to be rude, but what happened to me last night?  Did I have a heart attack?  That is how it felt, can’t you just tell me?  I mean really let me know what was happening, and then I will answer all your questions?”

He put down my file and stops writing his notes, as he sits back in his chair.  “I am sorry Mr. Masen I tend to get ahead of myself.  Last night you suffered a rather harsh panic attack,” he says. 

All I am thinking is this guy is off his rocker.  I mean really where did he get his medical degree, Mickey Mouse Club House, or the bubble gum machine?

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: August 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: First Times

WOW!  Rose is unbelievable.

I hope Harry gets caught soon



Author's Response:

Well after this chapter how will we ever get better?  I hope that you trust me when I say, it will!  Many of you want Aro to get his hands on Uncle Harry before the police do.  I will not say who gets to Uncle Harry first; because well that would just ruin the surprise, but I will say this... his capture is already written, so feel free to speculate.  There are some seriously some great chapters coming up, but Nikky says I need to warn you all that some of them are rather drama and angst filled.  There also may or may not be a few cliffhangers in the near future, oh heck who am I kidding the next two chapters are rather cliffy in nature.  The next chapter has a big surprise within and MOST of you may be very shocked.  Nikky, Jess, and a few others who have already read the chapter during BETA processing seem to think that the next chapter may generate a lot more reviews.  We may even get some from people who have not reviewed before now, because it is quite a twist.   There is your warning.  Nikky and I have been called diabolical for the plot twist that is coming, so we sure hope you all like it.  I will say this out of all the readers and reviewers we have, only one time has someone guessed a good portion of the plot and got it right.  We of course didn’t tell them, because well then they would know it would ruin the story telling process.   We had a few question about Sienna’s ability to place a phone call since she is deaf.  Deaf people can make phone calls using a Telecommunication Device for the Deaf (TDD).  Special telephone services have been developed to carry the TDD functionality even further. In certain countries there are systems in place so that a deaf person can communicate with a hearing person on an ordinary voice phone using a human relay operator. There are also "carry-over" services, enabling people who can hear but cannot speak ("hearing carry-over," a.k.a. "HCO"), or people who cannot hear but are able to speak ("voice carry-over," a.k.a. "VCO") to use the telephone.  Couple of questions came about Charlotte’s nick-name of Chas, in our story Charlotte was the youngest raised by her father among her several brothers and she was quite the tomboy growing up.  Char is a girlie name and therefore her brothers tagged her with Chas, because it is manlier.  Thanks for reading and reviewing our story, we are proud of it, and are grateful to our loyal readers.  If you have more questions or want to discuss some of the story line, feel free to join the group on Facebook you can find us by searching for: TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT FanFiction.  Kasi (&Nikky)

PS….Enduring His Cimmerian View is now POSTED... Please go read and review.

Chapter 25 Teaser:
“Pajama day is when you stay in your pajamas all day and eat lots of bad stuff, watch movies, and play games all day long.”  Seth and Leah nod their heads at me and Bella gives me a small half nod with her smile.  “Okay then, pajama day it is in our house.  I just need to make a few phone calls. Why don’t you all get your robes and slippers on, and I’ll meet you for breakfast as soon as I am done.”  Seth and Leah hug me before walking out of the bathroom to get their slippers and robes.

After they leave the room, I look to see Bella biting her lip, and I know she’s worrying about something.  “I’m sorry that she wet the bed. She’s never done that before.”

I walk to Bella, wrapping my arms around her. “Baby, its okay. She’s upset, and her body is reacting to that, so don’t worry about it.” I kiss her head and push her hair out of her face.  I hiss as I see the large bruises that go all the way up one side of her face.  “Baby, how are you feeling? Are you in pain?”

She shrugs her shoulders and tries to give me a smile.  “I’m not sure. I...”  She stops and rubs her head.  “I feel like I failed them.  He hurt Seth, and I should’ve been able to protect him better.  I’m upset that it was Uncle Harry that broke into our apartment the other time.  I don’t understand why he did that, or what he was looking for.  How could he do that to Seth and Leah?  I mean, I know that he doesn’t really like me much, but they’re his sister’s children.  I thought he would love them.” 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise (Content1)

Edward did very well.  I think I like Charlotte!  Why does Alice feel compelled to set Edward up?



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Alice is a very interfeering person, and neither her or Rose will be very redeeming in the near future.  We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Through His Eyes

Hmm.  I want details on what happened 5 years ago.  Bella is the cleaning lady, no?



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing and beign the first review that Nikky and I received here at Twilighted.  There is a lot of information yet to come, but you will learn it all with Edward.  This story is told in his pov, because it is his cimemrian view.  Bella is the cleaning lady.  You will learn a lot about both of them over several chapters, all while the story unfolds.  There will be about 30-35 chapters when the whole story is told, you will know all of Bella's back story much before that, same with Edward.  Be prepared to dislike, or even be angry at Edward around chapter 5.  However chapter 6 is his turning point, especially concerning Isabella.   Here is the teaser you were promised for chapter 2, which is subject to change at validation.  Thanks again, for reading and reviewing.  Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 2 teaser:

I am in my office grading papers when the cleaning girl comes, she doesn’t notice me as she continues to clean.  She comes near me, still not noticing me, and as she goes to move my chair she yelps and realizes that I am sitting in it.  She stares at me in surprise.

“Professor Masen, I am. . .” she stops placing her hand on her head.  I watch as she closes her eyes and takes a deep breath.  “Professor, I am sorry.  I did not know that you were here.  I can just go, I am sorry,” she says picking up her things and leaving quickly. I shake my head and continue to mark my last page.

I leave my office, noticing that the cleaning girl is now doing the classroom; she looks up at me and turns red.  She mouths the word ‘sorry’ again before going back to her work.  As I put on my jacket, I hear a bang and the cleaning girl yelps again, but this time in pain.  I look over to her to see that she has tried to use the socket that has been broken and needs to be fixed.

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Wow.  Edward has really been jumping to conclusions regarding Bella.  I'm glad of the way he took care of Gina.  I' also glad to see that Aro is protective of Bella.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: June 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Confessions

Loved the outcome.

 

My condolences about your Mother,  I lost mine earlier this year, so I know a little of what you must be going through



Author's Response:

WOW...the responses are so awesome that Nikky and I are both giddy.  There haven’t been many questions asked, so I am going to answer a few non questions I noticed.  Bella was never kidnapped by Sue and Charlie.  Charlie Swan is Bella’s biological father, and Bella was sent to live with him after her mother died of cancer.  Aro honestly never knew of Bella’s real age, he had suspicions that she was not raised correctly and was acting younger than the 18 he thought her to be, because of the inept social skills.  Zafrina did not know either, but again had those same social skill thoughts that her son had.  We in no way were bashing DCFS or DHS or any other social workers, by saying that the kids would be taken by the state.  If anyone had turned Sue in for abandoning the kids the almost 6 years ago now she has been gone, the kids would have become wards of the state, because at 13 no state official or judge would have deemed Bella capable of fully caring for 2 yr old twins alone.  Just want to say that we both believe that it takes a special kind of person to be a social worker, and we both give those of you who are in the field of social work a round of applause because the things you have to see and or deal with can’t always be fun.  I have to say that the wonderful response to this story is more than either Nikky or myself could have hoped for, and we owe that all to you the readers.  THANK YOU!  If there is any questions or discussions you would like to have or read about past discussions, feel free to join us at TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction on Facebook.  Thank you for your kind words of our loss, and I am sorry for your own loss as well.  Kasi (& Nikky)

Teaser for Chapter 19: The Legal Side of Things.  Subjected to changes during beta process.

I dropped Bella of at Seth and Leah’s school. Before leaving her, I told her I would pick her up from the college when she got off.  It was so fucking hard to leave her; I just wanted to stay with her forever.  I knew the minute she was away from me, my old doubts would come back.  I knew that I had to talk with Jasper about her upbringing.  It’s that thought that makes me leave, even though I want to wait with her, take them home and stay with them. I am really at a loss for what I should do.  What can I do?  What do I do?  How do I help her?  How can someone so pure and good, come from people so evil?  The questions are killing me, but I know one thing for certain: if that bitch doesn’t stay the fuck away on her own, I will make her.  That sorry excuse of a parent will never get her hands on my Bella, Seth, or Leah again.  I will protect them with my very last breath, and deplete every cent I have, if need be.

I sit at my piano and just start playing.  I let the music guide me, keeping Bella in my thoughts as a play.  I let out all the feelings I have been denying myself. I haven’t been at it long before I find myself playing ‘Angel Eyes’ by The Jeff Healey Band, and I begin to sing along with my playing.

Girl, you're looking, fine tonight,

and every guy has got you in his sights.

What you're doing, with a clown like me,

is surely one of life's little, mysteries

 

So tonight I'll ask the stars above,

"How did I ever win your love?"

What did I do?

What did I say,

to turn your angel eyes my way?

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: October 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30: The Faith Within

Glad they got Sue!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  I am very sorry for the lateness of getting this review reply to you.  I always write them out and Nikky sends them to everyone on FFN and I send them out to everyone on TWCS and Twilighted.  With the move, I am without internet, so needless to say we got a bit of a delay.  We are hoping that the delay will not cause an issue in the normal posting, however we may run late getting chapters 33, 34 and 35 posted.  This has put me behind by more than a week, so I hope you all are understanding in regards to the situation.  The reviews have been wonderful, and Nikky tells me that there haven’t been a lot of questions.  The next chapter will be loved and hated, but trust in the fact that Jane has a plan for Sue.  Thanks for being such loyal readers, we love and appreciate every wonderful review and comment you all leave us.  HUGS!  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Teaser for 32 subject to changes during beta process

“What do you want Pet?” Sue sneers out.

Bella look at her, and I nod my head in encouragement.  “I want to know why?  Why you didn’t love them?”

Sue shakes her head.  “That’s easy, because they were meant to be mine and Charlie’s, but instead they had to come out being HIS.  Every time I looked at them, all I saw was that stupid fucker.”

Bella looks at her shaking her head.  “Well I was Charlie’s child and you didn’t love me.”

Sue laughs sarcastically, and she shows her teeth as she makes a face.  “NO, you are right about that.  I don’t love you, I never have and I never will.  I wanted something that was mine and Charlie’s, I deserved that.  What I didn’t deserve was for your whore of a mother to intentionally get pregnant to try and steal my man from me.”

I chuckle out loud at Sue’s delusional attitude, and Sue growls at me.

“There are only two people I love in this world that is Charlie and Harry and you took both away from me,” Sue says caustically as she turns her glare at Bella.

“I want to know what you were planning to do with Seth, and the baby that belonged to Tanya, what was your plans?”

Sue laughs at Bella’s question in her evil sarcastic way.  “You really want to know?  Well I’ll tell you,” she says with a now huge happy smile.


 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Very good chapter.  I'm glad Edward offered her a job.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 
Summary:

Bella’s lonely after her high school friends leave to attend University while Bella is stuck in Community College taking care of Charlie.  She decides to join a dating site to make some new friends.  Will she get more then she bargained for?


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Completed: No Word count: 2122
[Report This] Published: February 29, 2012 Updated: March 20, 2012


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1

I wish she had thought of corresponding with james by email instead of giving out her phone #

 
The Silver Lining by kimpy0464 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 195]
Summary:

The Silver Lining

 

Divorced Bella meets widowed Edward one afternoon in a Laundromat, and an instant attraction results. When you meet your soulmate after your spouse dies, do you allow yourself fall in love again?


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: Yes Word count: 92171
[Report This] Published: March 04, 2012 Updated: August 21, 2013


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Good chapter.  I wonder how their kids will react.



Author's Response:

The kids will react, trust. Just not yet. :)

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

OK!  Can't wait for officer Leah to interrogate the good Dr



Author's Response:

She's definitely going to interrogate him. *giggles*

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Poor Edward!  I hope his mistaken text doesn't scar him for life!!



Author's Response:

Scar him for life? Naw. But it will definitely scar him at least for a while. Bella is magic, though, and I bet she can get his mind onto other... things. *wink*

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Uh Oh.  I get the feeling Leah & Seth won't be as agreeable as Alice



Author's Response:

Reserve judgment for a chapter or two... all will be revealed. It's not that they're anti-Edward, they're just protective. You'll see. :)

Thank you so much for reading.

 




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