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Summary:

On the left, Edward grimaces and says,

 

When Edward takes Bella into the forest after her disastrous birthday party in New Moon, Bella's reaction is nothing like he expected. Will this be the end of their love or will they find a new path to forever? A canon-based but very different AU approach to New Moon. Some OOC and OC.


Categories: New Moon Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 47 Completed: No Word count: 206889
[Report This] Published: February 01, 2012 Updated: July 03, 2014


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: September 04, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Just A Minute

The Alice conversation was a surprise.  Charlie, not so much.  I can picture him torturing Edward like that. Looking forward to the proposal



Author's Response:

Thanks! I thought Alice's talk would shock some people, but I hope it's obvious that she was just trying to help Edward as best she could. And yes, can't you totally see Charlie punking Edward like that?! Poor baby :)

(Sorry for the late reply... I just saw this batch of reviews today)

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: June 24, 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: The Harvest Ball

Wow.  Poor Brittaqny.  I hope her death was natural causes and not in ny way related to her friendship with Bella



Author's Response: Poor Brittany, indeed! This was the hardest chapter to write so far :( Thanks for reviewing!!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: December 15, 2013 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42: The Throne Room

Uh oh!  Poor Charlie.  He has been exposed to the secret.  I wonder if he will be a mate for K or T?

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 05, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Home Again

Very nice.  I think she made the right choice.



Author's Response:

Thanks! Me too :)

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: June 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Present, Past, Preparations

It just got VERY hot in here!  WOW!

 
Summary:

 

Written for the Twilight Canon Tour, New Moon Round.

Edward left Bella in the forest and she went catatonic.  Her parents got her to therapy and her therapist has told her she has to "write out her pain" to process it. Reluctant at first, Bella gradually finds strength and confidence in her online anonymity.

Until she realizes that, having crossed a line, she wasn't so anonymous after all.

Excerpt:

Did Edward ever look that happy with me?  Or did my blood always cause him so much pain?  He said he’d always love me...in a way. But it must not have been that way...  


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella
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Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 10056
[Report This] Published: February 08, 2012 Updated: February 10, 2012


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very interesting read.  Did they kill Renee?



Author's Response:

Good morning!

Thank you.

Yes, when Jane lunged at Renée, it was to kill her.  I just didn't want to paint it all out in a PG-13 story. Ew. 

Thanks for reading!

LJ

 
Summary:

Mary Alice Brandon awakens alone as a vampire. She is first taught by two nomads before her visions show her a way of life she would much prefer. Can she find the golden-eyed vampires of her visions on her own?

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Excerpt:

 

"Who are they?" she whispered as the vision let her go. Her recovered present-awareness had her stiffening – the other vampires were now all but touching her. Oddly, she felt no threat. They could answer her questions, she was sure. "They have gold eyes. Two of them. The third has red. Like ours," she added, confused. "Gold? Golden eyes?"

Charlotte met Peter's eyes. "We've met one of us with golden eyes. About ten years ago. Have you seen him? Was he your sire?"

Peter held up a hand. "No way in hell Carlisle Cullen would turn someone. And if he did, he wouldn't let her go rogue."

 


Categories: Pre-Twilight, AU Characters: Alice
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Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 3589
[Report This] Published: February 13, 2012 Updated: February 13, 2012


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very nice.  I supppose I'm hypocritical, but I enjoy the E/A pairing.  I generally can't stand the Bella / jasper ones



Author's Response:

Hello!

Aw, why hypocritical? I love a good non-canon pairing myself. The possibilities of Edward and Alice together have always kind of intrigued me. :)  Not everyone likes Bella and Jasper together. It's cool. I love that in the Twilight fandom, there is room for everyone. LOL

Thank you so much for reading! Glad you liked the story!

LJ

 
Summary:

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Edward is a veteran of World War I, who is all but confined to a hospital in England after a head injury erases any memory he had of his life before the battle at Passchendaele. When his doctor suggests that Edward accompany him and his wife on a trip to shore, he agrees just to get out and do something.

In Scarborough, he sees a woman on the beach who reminds him of someone he knew. Can Bella help Edward remember what he lost?

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 6993
[Report This] Published: February 14, 2012 Updated: March 06, 2012


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was very sweet

 
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After unexpectedly being given an antique desk and finding a letter written by Edward to his cousin over nine decades earlier in a hidden compartment, Bella, on a whim, decides to respond and starts them on a journey neither could have ever imagined. 

Perhaps there are some things we aren't meant to understand, just accept....

This story will eventually contain character death - NOT Edward or Bella.


Categories: Pre-Twilight, Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 50 Completed: Yes Word count: 419120
[Report This] Published: February 24, 2012 Updated: March 09, 2013


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: September 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Loved Bella's comment re Jess.

I REALLY want her to re read the letter to Mic before she scans it.  I then would love her to confront Edward & Carlisle asking "Okay guys, how is this possible  & why aren't your eyes green anymore?

 

Vampires should be less of a stretcxh than a desk that delivers letters through time



Author's Response:

I'm pretty sure the movie that line is from was Erin Brockovich, but I never saw the movie, and I couldn't find the quote online. I thought it fit the scenario perfectly. Even if Edward can't remember his human life, I think he is still very much a product of the era he lived in. Even though he's also lived through all the ensuing social changes, I think he is still very much an Edwardian era man. Could you just imagine his shock at his mate saying something like that? But like I said, he has lived through all the social changes of the 20th century, so I think that shock would be tempered.

The big Oh My God! scene is coming up in just a few more chapters, in the meantime, Edward and Bella's relationship grows and more coincidences creep up. I hope it will be enough to keep everyone entertained until the cat is let out of the bag.

A teaser for chapter 30 is up on the forums page under Shameless Plus.  Fair warning: Before you check it out, let me remind you--I'm evil.

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: July 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I guess they were close to finding the things Edward sent Bella & that's what roused her?  I can't wait until they find something connecting her to Edward.  I was kind of hoping that Tanya would have detected Edward's scent in her room from the lock of hair & letters.bb



Author's Response:

By the time Charlie arrived four weeks have passed since Edward's last letter, and all of his letters are in a closed desk drawer, so I don't think Tanya would be able to still detect his scent, which may be different as a vampire anyway.  You're exactly right, it will be explained better in the next chapter when Bella thinks back about the past four weeks, but she saw her father about to open the desk drawer were Edward's letters were.

I've been nominated for Fic of the Week on The Lemonade Stand!  Voting ends today, and I'm tied for second, so I'm typing from my knees begging for votes!  Please, please, please, vote for IrY for Fic of the Week!

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: May 25, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Ah There's the Edward we know, beating himself up for perceived lapses in self control

 

Interesting teaser.  I'm left wondering what would shock Edward more - the strapless brides maid dress or a hoodie & jeans?



Author's Response:

Exactly, I really wanted to show the vampire isn't all that different from the human.  He's just got A LOT more baggage!

As for Bella's picture... Edward is in for the shock of his life!

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: December 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

Bella really has to get over being upset that she's not Wonder Woman/

I like how the mind reading reveal went.  I also like that they rationally explained to Bella the real dangers of the wolves



Author's Response:

I don't think she sees herself as Wonder Woman in that she's not expecting to be able to fight or anything like that.  She just wants to be able to do *something* no matter how little that something might be, even if it's just delivering some clothing and trying to promote good will between the two sides.  I think her need to be able to protect Edward so much now is exacerbated because she feels she let him down when he was counting on her during the epidemic.

I'm glad you liked the way his mind reading came up.  Bella already knew Alice was psychic, so she would already have been open to the possibility of extra abilities, even if it was subconsciously.  Little comments he'd made before, like in the restaurant when he said the waitresses weren't thinking anything intelligent or when he said he didn't like the way boys thought about her, would've come back to her.  But there is still one little tidbit from his past--his recent past--that she doesn't know about, and there will be more discussions.  They've still got a lot to talk about.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: October 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

YES!  I'm expecting  Edward to show up shortly, or call, since I'm sure Alice knew once Bella made the decision to open her email.  I can picture Bella saying "Edward Anthony Masen Cullen, you have some explaining to do"

 

I also thought Bella thinking T was pregnant was funny.  As was Tanya's reaction to hearing Bella's remark



Author's Response:

I don't think Alice would've seen it. She doesn't see humans well, and she's never met the Masens, so I don't think she'd have seen Mic's decision to send Bella the picture. And Bella hasn't yet decided what to do about what she's learned, which really, as of this moment, is just that Edward is Edward, but now the how.

I'm so glad you liked it!  Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: August 30, 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Im sure detective Swan has noticed that all the adopted kids have the same eyes & skin tone.  I wonder if he remembers any Quiluette legends & if he will make the leap to Cold Ones.

 

I think Bella needs to re-read her letters, especially the 1st one she found where Edward tells Mic about Dr. Cullen.  I wonder if that will help B make the connection

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: August 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Wow.  I REALLY hope Bella sticks to her guns about nothing more with Jacob.  It helps, I suppose, that Charlei is with Tanya.  He probably won't view Jacob as good a match as he did in canon

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: August 26, 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

Wonderful chapter.

I understand why Billy & Jake were so freaked out when they got to the campsite, but I don't understand why Charlie was.

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: September 23, 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

A twid snaps, big animal in the shadows.  With protectors like these, she doesn't need enemies.

 

Loved Edward's thought on IVs.  Does he have a law degree in his background?  I wonder how long it will take Jake to figure it out



Author's Response:

Yes, actually, he does have a law degree.  Three of them, actually.  No idea about canon, but my Edward does, anyway. 

Not that I think for one second that Edward would've let the treaty stand in his way if Bella's life was on the line, but I loved that he was able to turn that technicality around on the pack.  What's the saying?  Necessity is the mother of invention.  I guess it's the mother of creative thinking too.

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: October 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Finding this chapter up so soon was like waking up on Christmas morning!

Thank you.  I hope you don't have Bella dance around this too much.

I wonder if the Volturi know about the Quilluete web site?  People seem to get the vampire thing rather quickly from that.



Author's Response:

I should've put a bow on it!

I think, as someone who has had to keep a secret from the people she loves, Bella understands that sometimes it's necessary.  Personally, I see the *how* as secondary to the fact that they're together, which has always been the goal of my story--to bring them together.   Bella has her Edward now, which is all she ever wanted--her two Edwards were only ever just the one delivered back to her.  The next couple chapters will be their relationship progressing without reality barging in on them, but when it does force Edward's hand, it'll be a doozy!

I don't know if the Volturi know about the Quileute website; I never thought about it.  If I had to guess, I'd say no.  I can't picture Aro surfing the web.  Although with all the thoughts he must've read while feeding off humans, he'd certainly know about the internet, but I can't see him seeing it as a threat.  The werewolves he knows of wouldn't have a website.

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Looking forward to seeing Edward's next letter



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing!  You won't have to wait long.  I have chapter four back from Project Team Beta, and as soon as I get through their comments and corrections, I can submit it for validation here. 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 02, 2013 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

Nice chapter. I preferhow your B & E relate to each other & communicate with each other over SM's.

 

I have to laugh at Edward's cooking.  I'm wondering, & I wonder if Bella is too, if Edward used utensils to prepare the prom night dinner?



Author's Response:

Yes, although I didn't write the scene, I'm sure Edward would've just used his hands to prepare the prom night dinner.  Otherwise, it'd be like use using tongs to take an Oreo out of the tray, wouldn't it? 

I really thought it was very important that they communicate openly, but having a number of smaller conversations felt much more normal than one long one, so they're scattered here and there.

Chapter 48 is in the validation queue, and it's a doosey!  Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: August 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

What is Carlisle waiting for?  He's put it together, why not tell Edward?



Author's Response:

Ive had several people ask that.  He will, but it's not that easy.  Telling your son that his mate is a different species and that even though she is only 17, you knew her 91 years ago isn't something you can just blurt out.  I wrote my Edward will all of canon Edward's hang ups, souless monster etc., and Carlisle knows him well enough to foresee the issues Edward is likely to have with a his mate being human.  He just wants time to plan what to say.  Just because Carlisle suspects/knows that Edward loved Bella when he was human and clearly still has feelings for her even if he can't remember her, he has no idea how Bella felt about Edward - for all he knows, it could have just been friendship.  He has no way of knowing if she returned his feeling then, or how she would feel about him now that he's no longer human  And I think there'd likely be some self doubt; its a pretty incredible theory, and Carlisle has no proof.  He doesn't have the letters.  He knows where they are, or at least where they should be, but that would be an awfully big invasion of Edward's privacy to go looking for them, even if it was with good intenions. 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: July 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Wow.  I wonder that Carlisle never mentioned his precog friend in Pheonix.

 

What a great chapter.  Poor Bella



Author's Response:

It will be explained a little in chapters to come that Edward does not like being reminded of the human life he cannot remember.  As far as Carlisle knows, the Bella he mentioned lived in 1918.  He has no idea that Bella was from a different time, he just thinks she was a human girl living in 1918 who was, like you said, precognizant. 

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 25, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I'm glad Bella wrote to him.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like it!  Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: May 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Hmm  Can't wait to see what Edward will show them



Author's Response:

Oh, I think you can probably guess....

Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: December 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

I'm sorry to see Renee & Phil go, even though it will be easier for Bella & Charlie to change.

 

Looking forward to Bella's reaction to the mind reading.  Does Charlie already know all the Cullen's extra skills?

 

I hope that Edward will tell Bella about Emily's injury & that she will listen.  Maybe if she & Charlie go together & she doesn't allow herself to be alone with Jacob it will turn out all right.



Author's Response:

It was hard to write, but I knew all along I was going to kill them both, and I knew how and when.  The way they basically just let Renee hanging in canon never sat right with me; I wanted a clean break. I liked (maybe not the right word!) the irony that with the threat of the vampire army coming to destroy them, it was a common car accident that took people Bella loved.  Sort of a flashback to the Mason's maid, Nellie's, brother.  He survived the war for over a year only to fall to the flu.  Also, I really wanted both Edward and Bella to have to experience something the other had gone through.  Even though Edward can't remember his father, he knows he died very suddenly.

I would think that yes, Charlie already knows all about the extra skills.  Although I didn't write it into the story, I'm sure he and Tanya would've had very nearly the same talks that Bella and Edward will be having.  I didn't include them because I wanted to keep the focus on Edward and Bella.  This is their story.

The teaser for the next chapter is up on the forums page, and it pertains to exactly the scene you mention.  I don't want to give too much away, but I will tell you that that was one of my favorite scenes to write.

Thanks for reviewing!

 




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