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What I Wished For by thimbles Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 290]
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Bella and Jacob married young, and their life together has been much more of a challenge than Bella had anticipated. She’s battling depression and he’s increasingly frustrated that his wife is no longer the same girl he married. Bella is able to find brief moments of peace and happiness in the music she surrounds herself with. She finds particular joy in the raw and powerful music of Edward Cullen, and when she takes the opportunity to see him perform live, the pair strike up an instant friendship.

As Edward and Bella become closer, it throws her struggles in her marriage to Jacob into sharp relief, and Bella begins to daydream about being romantically involved with Edward.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 168722
[Report This] Published: November 16, 2011 Updated: May 08, 2012


Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 8: August 2010 Part 3

I'm glad Rose and Bella hit it off.  I can't believe Jacob is so dismissive towards his wife.  i wonder if he only married her because he thinks her looks are sub par and no one would bother to steal her away from him



Author's Response: I think that's definitely what Jake would tell Bella, but it's definitely not the truth. It will take time, but Bella will eventually get more self-aware. Thanks for reading and reviewing! Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 17: June 7th, 2011

Grear eulogies.  I'm so glad Bella didn't read Billy's.  I love Sarah & Rebecca



Author's Response: Thank you. xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 25, 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Sept-Nov 2010: Another Unexpected EPOV

Great chapter.  I think Edward & Alice should go in together on a hit man.  Seriously, I was glad to hear Bella say that she has moments of clarity where she sees how hard she is working for his happiness.



Author's Response: Yeah, Bella needs a few more moments of clarity I think. Hopefully she can get some perspective soon. Thanks for the review xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 13: March - May 2011

Not that I really want a Jacob POV, but I wonder what he was thinking when he was stuffing pills in Bella's mouth.  Was he hoping for a fatal overdose that he could make look like a suicide?  I imagine it is preferable for his macho ego that his poor depressed wife kill herself than divorcre him



Author's Response: Yeah, I'm not going to write a JPOV, I think that would completely screw with my head. I don't even want to try to delve into that mind. We'll find out some more eventually, but is there ever a reason that makes sense of abuse? I'm not so sure. Thanks for the comments, I appreciate when reader's challenge me beyond the scope of the story :) Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 13, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 7: August 2010 Part 2

The way things seem to be shaping up with Edward & Jake, I think I am sorry that the prologue shows Jake dead and Bella taking blame.  I think I'd much rather see Bella divorce him.

 

Can't wait to see where you take this story



Author's Response: We've still got a long way to go in time before we reach the point that the prologue corresponds with. I hope you'll keep reading! Cheers, Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 7: August 2010 Part 2

Great chapter.  The reunion with Jake should be interesting



Author's Response: Thank you. I'm not excited about sending Bella back to Jake :(

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 15, 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 16: June 2011

Billy is unbelievable.  I suppose this means Bella will not go on tour with Edward?  I hope she continues with Dr Denali



Author's Response: This will definitely mess up their plan; the next chapter will explain all that a bit more. And definitely, Bella's going to need to continue to seek therapy, especially after all the craziness she's about to experience with the funeral. Thanks for the review. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 25: June - September 2013

Great proposal.  I saw it coming from the way you described his nerves.  I'm so happy for them.



Author's Response:

Thanks, I' glad you enjoyed it :)

 

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 27, 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 10: December 2010

Just rereading this.  I caught this time that apparently Bella had the sense to turn Jake down the first time he proposed.  Too bad she didn't go with her first instinct.  I wonder why she refused the first time and how he convinced her.



Author's Response: Yep, and Bella actually mentions this to Edward in Chapter 7 (Aug.2). I'm sure it will come up again ;) Shell x

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 05, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: August 2010: A Parenthetical EPOV

Cute



Author's Response: Thanks!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 14: May 2011

I love Charlie so much right now.  I'm so glad she filed for the order of protection.  I hope she can fast track the divorce.

A few chapters back you mentioned that Bella was friendly with Rachel but Rebecca never seemed to approve of her relationship with Jake.  I wonder if her disapproval stemmed from her thinking Bella isn't good enough for Jake or her knowing that Jake isn't good enough for Bella?



Author's Response: I love observant readers! We'll hear more from Rebecca and Sarah eventually x

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 01, 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Edward: September 2013

Great chapter.  Loved Edward's reference to "pixie spawn".  Bella & Katie are going to have a great time making the dress.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much; I'm so glad you liked it.

 

Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 26, 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 10: December 2010

Great chapter.  Good for Bella that she got the implant.  I'm glad I suppose that they made it through dinner without any casualties.

I really hope Bella gets the guts to leave Jake.  I wonder if he feels any jealousy now?



Author's Response: One small step in the right direction for Bella, let's hope she can keep moving forward, yeah? Thanks for reading and reviewing. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 06, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 5: late July - early August 2010

She really needs to leave jake.  Embry was so sweet.  Can't wait for E & B to talk



Author's Response: Thanks for the review. E&B's conversation will be up soon - hope you enjoy it!

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 6: August 2010

Great conversation.  Can we get rid of Jake now?



Author's Response: Lol, from the outside we see the need to dump his nasty arse, but Bella will need some time. She needs, perhaps, to make a good male friend who treats her with respect and care, so she can contrast it with her marriage, which is supposed to be a deeper relationship, yeah? Thanks for reading and reviewing! Shell x

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 01, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 12: Feb - March 2011

WOW!  Great chapter. I'm glad Eleaza gave her the questions.



Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Hopefully it was the challenge she needed to see things with a bit more clarity .... Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 13, 2012 Title: Chapter 18: May 2011: More from Edward

Excellent chapter



Author's Response: Thank you xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 13: March - May 2011

YES!!! I'm so glad she left him!  I am so proud of her!

I'm eager to learn what happens next.



Author's Response: Thank you for your support of Bella - I'm so blown away by the love people have for her. Next chapter's in the queue, I couldn't leave you all hanging too long xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 11: Jan - Feb 2011

I can appreciate how difficult this must have been to write.  I don't understand where Jacob is coming from.  If he learned this behavior from Billy it's no wonder Jacob's mom left.



Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'd guess with Jacob it's at least partly learned behaviour; which of course, never excuses it. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 19: August 2011- March 2012

ARGH!!! That was so hard to read!  Tanya needs to be slapped.



Author's Response:

I'm sorry! Edward's back next chapter - does that help?

And Tanya ... let's just say I have plans for her ;)

 

Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 27, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Just rereading the prologue.  Someone, & I don't know if it should be Edward needs to tell Bella her wishes aren't that powerful.. After all, how many times did she wish Jake would treat her differently and none of those came true.



Author's Response:

Great point. Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: February 27, 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 18: June - August 2011

Good chapter.  I'm glad B is continuing to see Dr Denali.  I hope she continues over the next 6 months



Author's Response:

She will; I'm not going to compromise her like that, it would feel wrong.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

 

Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: March 13, 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 22: May - June 2012

Very nice



Author's Response:

Thank you xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: January 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4: July 2010

Jake didn't seem to comment on the piercing.  I'd love to see an outing with Alice, Jasper, Jake & Izzy.


That said, I can't wait to meet Edward



Author's Response: Yes, you'd think he'd have something to say about it, right? And you're right, the dynamic between Izzy and Jake when there is an audience will be important. I'm excited for Edward to make an appearance also, next chapter is about halfway done. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!! Shell xx

 
Reviewer: Gelsamina Signed
Date: April 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Epilogue: May 2016

This is such a wonderful story.  So sad it has come to an end.  I suppose I'm a little interested in what became of Billy after Charlie's talk with Jared.



Author's Response:

Aww, thank you. The way I see it, he's a bitter, lonely old man who has lost the respect of his family and the whole community. Sadly, some people are too hardened to admit their wrongs and seek forgiveness :(

I appreciate your reviews, so much.

 

Shell xx

 




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