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Fuggiasco by kdc2239 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 669]
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Banner by Whatobession17

Edward, homeless since age twelve is used to the gritty, hard life. Now twenty, his main goal is to make it in the world, and off the streets. What happens when a girl who seems to be broken beyond repair becomes his new shadow?

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie
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Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes Word count: 149789
[Report This] Published: June 18, 2010 Updated: November 12, 2011


Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 The Only One

Please let this be a good experience for both of them!

 
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Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 Secrets

A sickening realilty too many run-aways face.  Powerful story!

 
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Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 I Was Broken

Beautiful last line!

 
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Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Flying High

Let this reunion be a good thing, please!

 
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Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 The World at Large

No! No! No!

 
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Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 Even So

Precious ending!

 
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Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 Sweet Talk

Edward is a wise, young man.

 
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Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 Shelter

Doctor Cullen is a pretty smart dude!  I will sleep better knowing that our favorite couple is in a safe place.

 
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Date: July 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 Ungodly Hour

I am wondering what the back story on Alice will be.

 
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Date: July 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 The Church of What's Happening Now

I appreciate your take on Alice. Strong character development in this chapter!

 
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Date: July 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 Sing It Out

Rose with braces.  Cool!

The Charlie chapter should be interesting!

 
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Date: July 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 Runaway

Dynamic chapter!

 
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Date: July 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 Are We Really Through

A perfect picnic!

 
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Date: July 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 Heart Attack

I feel the tension rise!  Yikes!  Something wicked this way comes, I fear!

 
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Date: July 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 Chop Suey

Please let him take Bella back to the shelter and call in the cavalry.

 
Parachute by KitsuShel Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1968]
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After finding a child abandoned on the streets of Seattle, Bella Swan raises him as her own. What happens to their lives when his biological family is finally found?

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Other Character
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Series: None
Chapters: 38 Completed: Yes Word count: 146076
[Report This] Published: June 20, 2010 Updated: February 03, 2011


Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 14, 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 35

Oh, no!  The story can't be over yet!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing! Over 1000 for this chapter alone between here and FFnet! You guys amaze me! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)

Parachute is up for three Walk of Fame Awards: Angst Goddess, Queen of Hearts and Story of the Year. It's up against some major big ones like University of Edward Masen, Master of the Universe and Emancipation Proclamation, so I don't hold any expectation other than getting squashed like a bug. I am also up for three writing awards as well: Rising Starlet, Hopelessly Devoted and Musical Maestro.

I would adore winning the Hopelessly Devoted award. It's for the one writer that you know you can always count on. I think I've proven to you guys over and over that I'm "hopelessly devoted" to you, with the weekly updates and review replies to each and every reviewer. If you head over there and end up feeling that another author up for the award deserves it more, please follow your heart and vote for them. I just ask you to please keep me in consideration. ^_^

That being said, here are your promised teasers! The first from the next chapter of Parachute and the second from Victoria POV that I've written for the Fandom Against Domestic Violence fundraiser. =)

♥ Shel ♥

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Parachute ~ Chapter 36 Teaser:

Bella stood, drenched head to toe, in the middle of her front lawn. Hot tears streamed down her face as the chilly rain pelted her skin. Her mouth was open slightly in shock, as she gazed down with wide eyes at the man she loved more than life itself. Edward's hopeful, joyous face grinned up at her from his stance on one knee. The ring held in his hand was a single brilliant diamond that was simple, yet elegant.

"Isabella Swan, I have been captivated by you since the moment I first laid eyes on you. That love only grew and expanded as I got to know you and saw first hand what a wonderful mother you are to our son. Forever could never be long enough for me, to feel like I've had long enough with you. Marry me?"

She covered her mouth and let out a sob, before throwing her arms around him and shouting, "Yes!"

They fell together, a mass a limbs and lips, their hearts beating both beating wildly. He pulled away slightly and pushed a lock of rain-saturated hair from her face.

"Let's go inside, please. I don't want you to catch a cold."

When they stood, his eyes were drawn to her white shirt, now completely plastered against her bare breasts, her nipples hard and straining against the fabric. His hand reached out to brush against her breast, causing her to become self conscious and cross her arms across her chest. She laughed lightly and nodded her head towards the house.

"Come on, let's get dry."

Edward let out a loud guffaw. "I'd rather keep you wet, love."

His hands wrapped around her waist and he pulled her back to his chest as they tumbled into the house. Sopping wet clothes soon littered the foyer floor and hands roamed greedily.

"Where is our bedroom?" he asked huskily, sweeping her into his arms.

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Victoria POV Outtake ~ "In the End" teaser:

I won't ever be remembered for my common sense. I know most of you hate me and I'm fine with that. I deserve it. I was a bad, bad girl. For those of you who don't know my story, I'll start at the beginning.

My mother married my father for his money and power. When she'd finally had enough, she left and took half of his net worth, including me. He never seemed to mind. He sent an obscenely large support check once a month, but it always felt like a buy-off. Once he re-married and began a family with his new wife, our interactions were even fewer. Who knows how I would have turned out if he had made more of an effort? He's just as much to blame for my upbringing as my mother is. He knew how she was, yet he still didn't lift a finger to keep me.

 
Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18

OK!  I am confused.  Do I trust Marcus or not? This is a very well written story!

 
Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19

Edward is adorable!

 
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Date: December 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20

Sweetness indeed! We need more sweetness in the world, so keep on writing!

 
Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 36

Sweet ending!  Thanks so much for such a beautiful tale!

 
Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 38: Epilogue

I loved the way you wrapped the story alluding to your  title! Looking forward to your next story!   Thanks, again, for the hours of enjoyment!



Author's Response:

Once again, I want to say thank you so much for all of the love and adoration that you guys have given to me and Parachute! People are going to get tired of hearing me say how much in awe I am of my readers and their giant hearts, but it's so very true! This story wouldn't have been nowhere near as good as it was nor had the kind of response that it had without my loyal and fuckawesome Verucas! (Heh, haven't heard that in awhile, have we?) I am prostrate at your feet. (Not to be confused with prostate, lol) I owe you all so very much!

The blogs have undergone some work over the past two weeks. KitsuShel.blogspot.com will now be used as a hub for everything that I write, with links to actual story blogs. Parachute's will remain up, just under a different name. Parachuteff.blogspot.com My next fic, Rabbit Heart's blog is up as well. There are a few pictures and teasers up there as well. =) RabbitHeartff.blogspot.com

Rabbit Heart will start posting this Friday, February 18th and will follow the same update/posting schedule as Parachute. The story has already been in the queue here for a couple of weeks, so we should be good to go! I hope that you guys decide to continue on that journey with me as well. =)

♥ Shel ♥

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Teaser from Rabbit Heart Chapter 1:

The streets were eerily empty as the girl stealthily slipped out of the Beverly Hills house, although one could quite easily exchange the term mansion in its stead. Her shoulders were hunched as she made sure her hood was firmly covering her blond hair, her back laden with only an over-stuffed backpack and a guitar case. She needed to escape quickly, unseen, and today was the best time to make that happen. It was just after eleven pm, on Christmas Eve and there was practically no movement on Santa Monica Boulevard. She traveled on foot for almost three miles before coming across a cab running on the desolate streets.

She quickly stowed her meager possessions in the backseat before climbing inside.

"The nearest Greyhound station, please," she requested as softly as she could, but still within the driver's hearing range.

The older man glanced at her in the rear view mirror. If he thought anything was off about the way she kept her face hidden, he made no mention of it.

"Heading home for the holiday, sweetie?"

"Something like that," she murmured, staring out of the window and watching the lights pass by. They reached their destination in just under fifteen minutes and she handed him a $50 bill.

 
Summary:

Bella is a first time drinker sitting in the bar where her three-year relationship was ended. Edward Cullen is a 109-year-old vampire who is suspected of being gay by his family when he is dragged to the same bar. Both feel an attraction to each other and act on it like normal people would. The product, however, is not so normal.

Scared and confused Bella has no choice but to accept the help only Edward and his family can offer. A B/E prego romance. Vamps. AU. Twilight, New Moon, and Eclipse never happened.

 (Banner by Abimaddevil17)

Excerpt:

Bella didn’t tell him to stop as he laid her down on the queen sized bed in the middle of the room. Bella didn’t move as he took off her clothes hesitantly, revealing her skin slowly. Nor did she stop him when he took off his. She didn’t stop to ask his name, or how old he was, or why she was so attracted to him.

And she certainly didn’t ask him to put on a condom.

 


Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Completed: No Word count: 17921
[Report This] Published: July 02, 2010 Updated: September 08, 2010


Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter One: A Party Song (The Walk of Shame)

Can't wait to see how Edward takes the news!

 
Summary:

There's a dusty old bookstore in Seattle where the proprietor keeps odd hours and knows the location of every book in his stock.  What surprises hide in its stacks?

 


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 48 Completed: Yes Word count: 122523
[Report This] Published: August 12, 2010 Updated: February 01, 2012


Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

Rats!  I love Rumi and I was all excited that there was a volume that I had missed!

Can't wait to see what happens next!



Author's Response:

You don't happen to know what book I can find that poem in, do you?  None of my Rumi books have it.

 
Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4

I hope we get to hear Edward"s reflections on Bella's hair!

Thanks for the book recommendation!

 
Reviewer: Bart Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

I am appreciating your literary tidbits as much as the story!  Thanks!

 




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