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Summary: 
One of the key events that creates the epic nature of the Edward/Bella love story is the moment that Bella’s scent first hits Edward, and Edward somehow resists.
But what if Edward’s self control had kicked in just a moment too late? What if his proximity to Bella once his conscience reawakened was just too much, and he couldn’t restrain himself. What if he bit her, and Bella had a new life forced on her, before she had any desire to live for an eternity?
Before she had experienced Forks High School, made friends, and re-connected with Jacob. Before she knew what Edward was. And most importantly, before they fell in love.
What would Twilight look like then?
This is the story of the seemingly insignificant moment that changed everything…
Categories: Twilight Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 24 Completed: No
Word count: 74511
[Report This] Published: December 17, 2009 Updated: October 16, 2011
Reviewer: Bart Signed 
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 4: Invitations
Good job in character development via the dialogue between Edward and Bella!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 2: Last Sight
Well written details of her transformation!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 2: Last Sight
Well written details of her transformation!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 2: Last Sight
Well written details of her transformation!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 5: Phenomenon
The awkwardness between them is sweet!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 10: Port Angeles
An interesting twist!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 9: Interrogations
Things are getting tense!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 8: Complications
Stupid move, Bella!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 7: Visitors
Your version of James makes my skin crawl in worry for Bella!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2011
Title: Chapter 6: Confessions
Loved the line about 20th Century romance!
[Report This] Published: December 17, 2009 Updated: January 11, 2010
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: January 06, 2010
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
How fun! I needed a smile today! Thanks! Author's Response: I'm so glad it made you smile!! Thanks for reading and commenting! :-)
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: January 06, 2010
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Perfect! Author's Response: Thank you so much!!!
Summary: Now Complete!
Bella’s blood was just too tempting to be ignored. In this version of Twilight, Edward takes Bella on a sadistic journey with his monstrous side. While Edward drags her around the world, barely keeping a step ahead of his frantic family, Bella battles the monster for possession of the gentler vampire inside her captor. EPOV.
Winner of the Faithful Shipper Awards for best Alternate Universe.
Winner of The Vampies, Twilight Vampfic Awards for Best Dark Vamp.
Winner of the Immortal Sin Awards for Best Darkward and Hottest Dark Vamp Fic!
Thank you Lace for the Banner!
“There was no other blood like this. Once she was gone, it would no longer be within my grasp. But if I stopped now, she would heal. Her body would make more. The blood would replenish. I could drink again. The promise of more – it was the only incentive that could have caused me to stop.”
Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: Yes
Word count: 249263
[Report This] Published: December 21, 2009 Updated: August 28, 2010
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 27, 2010
Title: Chapter 16: Placate and Punish
I really appreciated a lighter chapter and Edward having the opportunity to be "cute" and give Bella reason to enjoy his personality. Author's Response: Isn't he cute? When he's not eating people, that is? :) Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: January 04, 2010
Title: Chapter 4: Read and Bleed
This is such a haunting story! It lingers in the back of my mind!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: January 11, 2010
Title: Chapter 5: Touch and Take
Now I am going crazy from not knowing what is going on in Bella's mind! True, it is in Bella's character to put the needs of others before her own, but she seems too passive to me. Why isn't she trying to appeal to Edward more on his "good"days? Hopefully she is plotting a strategy to tame the monster.
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: January 14, 2010
Title: Chapter 6: Fight and Flight
How will Edward ever "forgive" himself for even considering such a plan? Can Bella ever understand and forgive him for endangering a small child? (Can I?)
Thanks for keeping the chapters coming at a rapid pace! Please, please don't make us wait too long for the next scene.
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: January 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 7: Calm and Control
Just wow!
A question for you. In the original book series, I think I remember that the bite from James sparkled in the sunlight. Are Bella's arms starting to look like she is cutting herself or does she carry sparkling reminders to Edward of the damage he has done.
Pleae don't let Bella turn into a "happy meal" too soon. I do appreciate her taking charge attitude, however.
Fantastic story! Thanks for sharing it with us! Author's Response: He never bites her, so venom doesn't become an issue. He always uses some other means of ripping her open. Ewww, that sounds evil.
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: January 23, 2010
Title: Chapter 8: Play and Pray
Please don't make us wait a whole week for Bella's response! Couldn't you just quit your job and write for us fulltime? Author's Response: Can you replace my current salary? I'm willing to deal!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: January 30, 2010
Title: Chapter 9: Greed and Need
What a confession and Bella didn't hear a word of it! I wonder what difference it would make if she had!
Not knowing what Bella is thinking adds so much to the drama and tension of this story!
Speaking of tension, do you know how hard it is to wait for a whole week for the next chapter? You have turned me into an addict waiting for her next fix!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: February 07, 2010
Title: Chapter 10: Know and Tell
So the plot thickens! Will Edward find himself protecting Bella alone on an island with no back-up?
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: February 14, 2010
Title: Chapter 11: Confront and Expose
Tension! Tension! Tension of every type! Incredible!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: February 28, 2010
Title: Chapter 12: Desire and Defend
Oh, my! Now what! This was an incredible chapter! Please don't make us wait another 2 weeks! Please!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 06, 2010
Title: Chapter 13: Regret and Redeem
Another "Oh, My God" chapter! My heart has been frantically racing through every word!
Now what? Please don't keep us waiting long! My nerves can't stand much more!
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 13, 2010
Title: Chapter 14: Coax and Confess
Again I ponder, how does Edward get out of this mess?
Reviewer: Bart Signed
Date: March 22, 2010
Title: Chapter 15: Beg and Barter
Wow! What a chapter ending! Incredible!
How many more chapters do we get? Hopefully the drama won't wrap with Samson anytime soo! Author's Response: I honestly have no idea... :) Thanks for the review!
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