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I love Twilight! I have a couple of issues with the messages sent in the canon, but I still love the universe!
I've always enjoyed storytelling. Even as a child I'd create snippets of stories out of shows and books that fired my imagination. Now, I write my own stories as well as those same snippets.
I'm also an artist and sometime computer guru. The last more lucrative, by far, than the other.
Just a few observations, opinions, and facts:
I'll not shill for reviews. It's cheap. Surely the big white box at the bottom is reminder enough, and asking for reviews just betrays a lack of confidence as a writer, imo. Getting reviews is great! Asking for them ahead of time, not so great.
Just because a piece clears a spell checker doesn't necessarily mean everything is actually spelled correctly. Fan fiction is rife with really amusing sentences, all unintentionally written because the author relied on the spell checker just a tad too much and ended up using an incorrect word anyway.
Bridal style? Really? Surely, as word smiths we can do better than that. Using this short-hand is like fingernails on a blackboard to me. You've never heard of him cradling her in his arms as he sweeps her off her feet? One story combined the previous point and this and called it bridle style. Which made me briefly think of a s and m trip rather than a romantic gesture. Given the context of this particular mistake, I laughed quite hard. Obviously, our hero was about to make gentle, slow love to the fair damsel (in a bridle, apparently).
A moot point is often pointless, but never mute.
I'm wary that you'll weary of these little tidbits, so I'll stop here.
Can you find the words often confused in those last few sentences? Oh yes, one other note... Prompting for reader reactions in end notes is just... tacky. And reminds me of school texts. Yikes!
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Summary: Bella and Mike wed four years ago and their marriage hasn't exactly been the picture of bliss. A carefully guarded secret surfaces, destroying an already fragile Bella. Everything she knew was a lie, everything she wanted for her life, wiped out with the click of a mouse. An E x B story.
Warning: There is mention of past sexual assault, crappy childhoods, an even crappier marriage, and some very prevalent social issues (that I’m not going to mention here, because it would defeat the purpose of reading the story).
Banner thanks to Forthelongestday
Excerpt: I looked at the clock again, 5:44. Jesus Christ, did time stand still? Those fourteen minutes felt like fourteen hours. As the moments ticked by, my palms began to sweat and a nervous pressure mounted in my chest. It's not the end of the world Bella; just the end of your marriage...and everything you knew. God, how was I going to do this? People up and left their spouses on a daily basis and never looked back. Of course, how many of them were under these same circumstances, I wondered. How many women were faced with leaving the man they loved because he'd woven a lie so hurtful? When it finally surfaced, did it kill them?
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Mike, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 37 Completed: Yes
Word count: 171435
[Report This] Published: August 29, 2011 Updated: November 27, 2012
Reviewer: LunasInSilver Signed
Date: May 29, 2012
Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20: A Small Town Hate
While I'm unamused by the beat down, I'm enjoying the idea of Mike Newton being gay. heh
Am enjoying this story alot and looking forward to the next update! Author's Response: i wasn't oo happy with it either, and there was no way in hell I was going to write it in Mike's POV. Thanks for tossing a little love at this story.
~MissJanuary
Summary: 
Banner by the awesome angelgoddess1981! You rock babe!
Bella was left by Edward to clean up the ruins of her life after his betrayal. What happens when Edward finds out that not all was as it seems. What are the consequences of his sins and what will he do to get her back?
 
TwifanfictionRec's - Top 10 Favourite Fics - October 2012
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Leah, Rosalie, Seth
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 91 Completed: Yes
Word count: 421991
[Report This] Published: September 29, 2011 Updated: January 14, 2013
Reviewer: LunasInSilver Signed
Date: May 28, 2012
Title: Chapter 53: Father Knows Best
*whimper* much too short! Love this story.
Reviewer: LunasInSilver Signed
Date: May 25, 2012
Title: Chapter 51: Line in the Sand
Have to say its about time she swatted him back. Surely 15 years of wallowing is enough. Actions speak far louder than words, and its time he quit saying and started doing.
Reviewer: LunasInSilver Signed
Date: July 29, 2012
Title: Chapter 64: Meadow
Personally, my take on the K an R situation is that it has no bearing on really anything. This is fiction that is real life. I was not enthused or interested when I heard they were together and I really don't want to know what happened.
I will continue to enjoy the characters with those faces in love, falling in love, or out of love as fiction dictates. I hope my fellow writers also continue to enjoy weaving their stories regardless of real life.
This story has moved me to anger, frustration, tears, and laughter. Nothing could be a higher accomplishment for an author. Please do continue.
Summary: 
Emily invites Bella to spend the last day of Spring Break with her. Bella does not cliff dive, but instead, dives into her own psyche. Emily and Sam are making it work despite the fact Sam maimed Emily. Bella decides to be as persistant with Edward as Sam was with Emily. Now the pesky task of finding a Vampire in a haystack. Will Alice's vision be a help or hindrance? Will Jacob follow Bella? Can she afford all this travel on her measly college fund and Newton's paycheck?
Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No
Word count: 30532
[Report This] Published: March 25, 2012 Updated: May 20, 2012
Reviewer: LunasInSilver Signed
Date: May 20, 2012
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Redheaded Leeches
Seriously. Never liked Tanya. I do hope that Bella has enough self-esteem to realise what Tanya was doing.
And yeah, waiting on the next chapter is going to be torture! Excellent story! Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it! Fine tuning Chapter 7. It's harder for me to write in Edward's voice. This chapter is easier than Ch. 2, because he has people to converse with though. Ch.7 is titled "Forks and Crossroads". Bella's smart. She'll think it through.
Summary: 
School teacher Bella sends a care package and letter to Army sergeant Edward, who is stationed in Afghanistan. They begin a relationship through letters, phone calls, and video chats. There's love, there's language, and there's adult situations, plus a strong, independent Bella and the Edward we all know and love.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 175 Completed: Yes
Word count: 252603
[Report This] Published: June 03, 2012 Updated: October 06, 2012
Reviewer: LunasInSilver Signed
Date: July 30, 2012
Title: Chapter 129: Chapter 130: Edward
Please please PLEASE let us have the full schmeer on Emmett and Edward vs Mike! Definitely looking forward to teh grovel... and then Jasper shows up! HEH
*Gives pseudo-sarge puppy dog eyes and pout* (gotta use all the weaps possible GRIN)
Reviewer: LunasInSilver Signed
Date: July 20, 2012
Title: Chapter 103: Chapter 104: Edward
Uhhh wait. Temporary approval by Charlie? He's gonna discover a reason to disapprove? Wait what!? Author's Response: LOL No. We just meant that he won't give final approval until he actually MEETS Edward. :) That's all. :)
Summary:
Edward is a choral director, reeling from his recent divorce from his wife, Jessica. His world is filled with his daughter, Emma, his music and his job. Bella is an English teacher, running from her past and wary of love. ExB, AH, AU
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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: No
Word count: 103153
[Report This] Published: June 16, 2012 Updated: July 20, 2012
Reviewer: LunasInSilver Signed
Date: July 12, 2012
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
It would be far more fitting for Jessica to be declared unfit for some reason. While her death would release Emma, Edward, and Bella from the difficulties of dealing with her. Having Jessica loose all her access and have to LIVE with that is far more emotionally satisfying.
Then kill her. XD
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