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Penname: Gina2000 [ Contact]
Real name: Gina
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Member Since: March 01, 2009
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30-something, professional, married D.I.N.K in Southern California
I lack the creativity to write but I am very good at editing
LIKES: Dynamic characters who are not afraid to have an argument and are able to not hold a grudge afterwards. Characters who are able to find common ground that complement eachother.
DISLIKES: Wussy Bella, gratuitous smut with no plot, stories that focus too much on Edward's wealth or trustfund. Bizare trite coincidences (i.e. Edward and Bella both like to get up at 2 AM to eat cereal without milk -- oooh, I guess this was meant to be.) Cliche characters (Alice is a spaz who loves shopping so much that she has no regard for her friends' boundaries)
HALL OF FAME Favorites (in no particular order):
Innocent, Vigilent and Ordinary
The Office
Coming to Terms
Hiding in Plain Sight
Trust in Advertising
Irritable Grizzly Adams
Black and White -- too bad she pulled the story off the Net
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Summary:  Seven years have passed since Edward and Bella last saw each other. They grew up as children and even became good friends. Once they entered high school, Edward became distant and eventually severed all ties with her. Confused and hurt, Bella moved on with her life in Seattle.Through it all, Bella had her older brother Emmett to get past the estrangement. Now, with Edward's imminent return to Seattle to help out with his sister Alice's wedding, Bella can't help wondering what drove away her brother's best friend all those years ago.
Nominated for Best Novel-Incomplete at the Eddie and Bellie Awards.
http://www.thecatt.net/tw/Vote/aspx
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: Always Human , SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 36 Completed: Yes
Word count: 247400
[Report This] Published: July 14, 2008 Updated: February 28, 2010
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed  
Date: April 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: "I'd Rather Leave Than Suffer This"
This was one of the better drunk-Bella scenes that I have read, especially with her being a crazy dancing queen at the bar.
VERY CUTE.
I am really enjoying this story. Nice build up and I like how the characters in this story are not too extreme so that they are sterotyped caricatures of typical personalities. The charachters (Emmett, Jacob, Rosalie, and Alice) are believable and not too over-the-top like they have been portrayed in a lot of other fanic.
Well done. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. Cheers!
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: April 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 "Pictures"
My heart actually fluttered when he kissed her temple.
What an endearing exchange. Just lovely!
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: April 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: "Transformation"
Thanks for not making Alice too over-the-top of a shopping spaz. She's pushy but not insane.
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: April 09, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 14: Strong Enough: Part 1
UGH! Drama!!!! This is getting a bit ridiculous. Bella is being way to overdramatic. There were 5 sensible people at the cabin.
What is the problem? You love him, you know you will be with him. He loves you, you know he will be with you but you want to have this "space"
The story just took a turn for melodramatic and if Bella drags this out beyond finals. I'll lose all respect for the character you created for her.
Still reading and keeping my fingers crossed that she'll realize that she is just pissed and she is trying to hurt Edward and get him back for hurting her. She's going about it all wrong!!!
Summary:
Bella Swan spent the first two years of her life in Forks developing a friendship with Jacob Black that finally turned into something more. As she begins her senior year of high school, a new family moves to town and Bella slowly begins to question the path she thought her life would follow. Sometimes there is a difference between what you think you need and what you never knew you wanted. Takes place during the timeframe of New Moon and Eclipse. J/B at first, but eventually E/B.
Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: No
Word count: 170230
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2009
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: March 19, 2009
Title: Chapter 31: Relentless
I just read through your novella after hearing about it from various other authors and fans. I wasn't interested in reading it since it was NC-17. I am beyond bored with the stories on this website that see how quickly they can bend Bella into a pretzel and poke her. Yes so many stories seem that crass with insipid dialog and no character development, no passion, words of tension and angst but never taking the readers on the roller coaster of passion.
... but I.V.O. is quite different.
I LOVE your spin on Twilight. The characters are more tasty. I like Renee much better-- Bella's late night call to her was a joy to read, Mike is not as annoying but we still get the point. It's been fun to hear about the stages of Ben and Ang's relationship. I absolutely gasped out loud when Edward caught Bella in the forest when she had been chasing after him. That was when I knew you really know how to spin a fantastic angst ridden story. Fantastic tension in this latest chapter in the park. I love how Edward finally man's up and give Bella a reason to abandon her tablemates. raa raa.
What a fun story. Thanks for inviting us all along for the ride.
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: March 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 32: Hypocrisy
Of all the stories on Twilighted.net, this is my absolute favorite. I love that the characters have flaws like regular people and the relationship is hard and takes a lot of work, like real relationship between a couple.
THIS CHAPTER WAS FABULOSO!!! Author's Response: Writing flawed characters is so much fun for me; glad you enjoy reading about them as well.
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: March 29, 2009
Title: Chapter 32: Hypocrisy
I really like how Renee is a much better Mom to Bella in your story. Even though Renee is a bit unconventional as a mother, she always delivers with gem of advice that Bella really needs from an adult. Thanks for not having Bella's parents emotionally abandon her your story.
I like the dig detailed build-up in the B & E relationship. The longer the fuse, the bigger the firework.
I can't wait. Author's Response: We've had 32 chapters of the slow burn of the fuse...hopefully, the firework will not disappoint after all this time. Love your review!
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: June 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 34: Tightrope
I still think this is the all-time best fanfic story posted - and I have read a LOT.
Your pacing of the story is realistic of a lasting relationship. You care enough about the characters to not have them rush the relationship just to appease the horny readers.
I laugh about the use of word "realistic" especially when referring to a love story in involving vampires and warewolves.
I absolutely adore your characters. I am sorry Bella didn't get to reach out to Renee. I really like the advice she has given Bella so far. But I imagine Bella's problems are uncharted territory for Renee for which she cannot draw upon her own life experience.
Well done again -- LOVED the chapters (thanks for the 2). I can't wait for more.
My very best to you and once again, Thank you!
Summary: Edward has made his name in the merger and acquisition business by using a key advantage: he can read people's minds. Reading people is a great talent to have, unless you can't turn it off. Then it is a lonely talent. What will Edward do when he meets a woman whose mind is closed to him? All the usual suspects will show up in this AH, AU fic, canon pairings.
--ON HIATUS UNTIL OCTOBER 2009--
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 12 Completed: No
Word count: 54803
[Report This] Published: July 24, 2008 Updated: September 11, 2008
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Dinner Drags On
Once again, another great start to a story. The chapter has drawn me in already. I like the characters. The dialog is smart and your writing in engaging.
Bella is a strong woman for not being manhandled by Edward and saying, "no." so forthright with his offer to go out again. Sounds like she has some issues that have damaged her a bit but she still has her diginity.
Looking forward to hearing more about them.
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: An Interlude with Alice
Cute name -- CLUB AMNESIA.
I like how Alice isn't too much of a spaz but still determined to get her way.
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Playdate
Well that was a 180 shift for Bella. Huh.... It seemed a bit forced.
I mean she is so damaged that she couldn't say thank you for the flowers and was so adamant about not dating and now she's dry humping a guy in a field?!?
Still reading....
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: It's all in the leading
That's it. You did it. I just added you to be the first writer on my Favorites list.
You don't give it away easy and the build up is the best part of most stories. I smiled when Bella had second thoughts. Fabulous!! Although --- with the Hiding in Plain Sight story, somehow you managed to hang on to that angst and chemistry.
Thanks for the fun.
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: May 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: A Rose by any other name
Still loving the banter between B&E
Summary: Bella is a witness in peril. Emmett Cullen is the deputy assigned to protect her. When the witness protection program proves unsafe, Emmett has Bella pose as his brother Edward's fiancée. ExB. AU/AH.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward, Emmett
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: No
Word count: 138506
[Report This] Published: September 14, 2008 Updated: June 14, 2012
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: June 07, 2009
Title: Chapter 17: June 7 - June 13, 2008
YAY!!! Welcome back!!
Thank goodness B&E didn't overthink the last part of this chapter. But since you left us hanging -- I fear something is going to stop their course this evening.
I look foward to more. Author's Response: thank you!
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: June 18, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: February 29, 2008
YEA!! You're back! But I guess you are busy again with the Bellie and Eddie awards for a while.
I look forward to the next chapter. I love this story -- lot of dimension!
I assume Bella will have to testify in person at some time? Was this just the pre-trial or was this IT? I sense more danger is coming their way and what about the people in town who belong to the secret society...scary!
I can't wait. Thanks for sharing your story with us.
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: January 30, 2011
Title: Chapter 22: September 4 - December 23, 2008
Just letting you know I keep checking back every few months to see if you finished the story or added a chapter. I care if you finish it and hope that you do.
Happy new year. May 2011 be good to you.
Cheers.
Summary: Stranded in a strange town by stormy weather, Bella is befriended by Edward, a gorgeous man with a mysterious past. While she’s immediately attracted to him, she quickly discovers that the rest of the town doesn’t share her affections for the bronze-haired one, so she sets out to prove to them, and to Edward, that he’s anything but a monster.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Elizabeth Masen, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Laurent, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 37 Completed: Yes
Word count: 108250
[Report This] Published: September 29, 2008 Updated: November 28, 2008
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: September 16, 2009
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 The Bank Job
Whaaaaaat?????????
Bella overhears James and his accomplice conspiring murder and Bella and Edward don't say anthing to the police?????
They just leave town for a vacation??? Author's Response: I'm not sure if I remember, cause I wrote this quite a while ago - but I'm pretty sure they called the chief, didn't they????
Summary: Edward Cullen made Bella Swan’s life a living hell from age ten to twelve. Finally fed up with the torment and teasing, she moved to Phoenix. Now she’s seventeen, beautiful, and has a new sense of confidence. When her mother sends her back to Forks for her senior year, she is determined to shake things up. 
NC-17 for sexuality, underage drinking, and language. OOC, just to be safe. Some canon pairings, some absolutely the opposite.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, James, Jasper, Jessica, Laurent, Mike, Rosalie
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: No
Word count: 55461
[Report This] Published: October 28, 2008 Updated: August 21, 2009
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: August 25, 2009
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Crimson and Gifts
Glad to see you back. This has been a fun story and I have missed it.
Summary: So, can men and women really be friends? Edward Masen thinks so, and he's determined to prove it to the new woman in his life. Edward Masen is a professor at the University of Oklahoma who is dedicated to his work and his family. His niece, little Lilly Whitlock, is a first grader with a particularly pretty teacher named Isabella Swan. Edward then struggles to keep his relationship with Isabella strictly on the friendship level, which proves to be difficult the more they get to know each other.
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 16 Completed: No
Word count: 66524
[Report This] Published: October 29, 2008 Updated: November 30, 2009
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: March 02, 2009
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 : Why Not?
This is a very sweet story and I have been enjoying it. I am confused why Bella is telling Angela that he is just a friend and nothing more. It's very apparent that she is interested in him beyond the boundaries of friendship. It is just an odd turn from the character's own description of her excitement and eagerness to see him.
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: June 19, 2009
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Firefly From Hell
I do love the innocense of this story. It is so refreshing.
It was so sweet when Bella tell Edward she wants to go to Italy on their honeymoon. She let her guard down on herself and I think she forgot about how protective she was about such things.
Nicely done. Thank you for sharing your Edward and Bella with us.
I am definitely nominating this story for the B&E Awards on thecatt(dot)net Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for the nom!
Bella is slowly but surely coming out of her shell, but it will take some time. Edward does have a way of making her forget though, doesn't he? :)
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: July 05, 2009
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Meet the Family (AO)
I still love the sweetness of this story. This chapter explained a lot of unanswered questions about why Bella was in denial that she liked Edward.So now we just have to wait for her to come out with her history about Jacob.
Also it was a big step for Edward to go over to Bella's house after the hospital, with no reason. He just wanted to see her. Neat and sweet!
Summary: Officer Edward is sent to check on Chief Swan's daughter while she's home visiting from college and seeing a creepy guy. He's nervous to see his true love again, but troubles arises as her date is not so nice, but Bella fights back. Lemon and fluff. One shot Only I do not own Twilight or song Gun Powder and Lead Thanks to kellyam for swift work on betaing this for me
Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Charlie, Edward, James
Challenges: Series: Song Based One Shots
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Word count: 3254
[Report This] Published: November 25, 2008 Updated: December 03, 2008
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: June 03, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Bella is F'd up!
She says she can't live without Edward but she brings home a guy she met in a bar?
She is assaulted by this guy and then she wants to get it on with Edward?
The sex scene between B&E was just sex. So I don't get why she is saying “I know what I want. I’ve tried denying it for the past few months but nothing has worked. I just couldn’t get you out of my mind. Edward, I love you. I don’t know what’s going to happen after tonight, but I know it won’t be without you.” I cupped her face in my hand looking into her depthless eyes and saw the emotion behind them, love.
B.S.
This story is a very immature emotionally and lacks intimacy on all levels.
Summary: 
A Breaking Dawn alternative story. Edward and Bella marry and go on a very romantic honeymoon. Complications interrupt and they return to Forks. Decisions must be made and the family has to move quickly. This story is an A/U from BD. There is no pregnancy and no more love triangle. It is about how Edward and Bella were meant to be together and then must stand together against all odds.
Canon Pairings. Lots of romantic lemons. AU because some story lines from Breaking Dawn were completely abandoned in place of ones that I like better! Rated NC-17 for the lemons and for possible future violence and occasional language when the characters get really stressed out and stuff!
Categories: Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Eleazar, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Leah, Mike, Other Character, Renee, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Tanya
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: Yes
Word count: 193651
[Report This] Published: December 05, 2008 Updated: May 09, 2009
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: March 20, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Purchases and Preparation
I am enjoying this story very much.
FEEDBACK: I had to laugh at the part where Alice purchased paper napkins, streamers and plastic utensils. I can't imagine anyone in their socio-economic class using paper or plastic. They would have the event catered with crystal glasses, Tiffany silverware,china placesettings.and instead of streamers they would have fresh flowers with silk & toule bunting to decorate.
Thanks for the sweet story so far. Cheers. Author's Response: Hi Gina! Thanks for the review! I thought about that too, regarding the paper and plastic, but that was not for the wedding, it is for something else. The wedding is quite elegant. The part that the paper and plastic are for comes later, but thanks for noticing that, because you are the only person who even noticed! (or said anything anyway!)
I hope that you continue to enjoy it and that I hear from you again! Thank you!
Summary: AU. Based off the events in the beginning of New Moon. Edward did not tell the truth when he left Bella in the woods five years ago. Struggling to make a life without him, Bella finds herself still alone in an entirely different forest. But what happens if they are accidentally reunited? What was the lie that Edward told? What will Bella do when she finds out? Rated NC-17 for language and sexual situations
Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: None
Challenges: Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: No
Word count: 119106
[Report This] Published: December 18, 2008 Updated: December 28, 2010
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: May 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 22: Shangri-La
Thank you for writing such a smart story with refreshing dialog, a vast vocabulary, and a unique and dynamic Edward and Bella (especially compared to the many insipid versions found on this website).
I appreciate the healing period Bella has gone through during the chapters. She didn't forgive Edward in one chapter. Both of them are growing as individuals and their reunion is more plausible (if a plausible reunion between a wolf researcher and her vampire ex-boyfriend is plausible...) They really have moved away from Bella needing to be rescued. If this relationship is going to work. She will be able to enter it as a whole person where Edward and her can complement eachother.
This is a far cry from other fan fic where Bella is an empty vessel that needs to beed filled and have Edward to "complete" her. Bleh!
Please keep writing and I will keep reading.
Warm regards!
Reviewer: Gina2000 Signed
Date: June 01, 2009
Title: Chapter 23: Intermission: Electrocution
W o W ! Quite a heavy chapter and good too!
I look forward to your next update.
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