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Penname: Daylen [Contact]
Real name: Daniel
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Member Since: March 01, 2009
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Mid-30s guy with an addiction for fan fiction presently, and a slew of unfinished writing in my file cabinet and computer that I never seem to manage to complete full stories. Plots and bits and pieces, sure, but start-to-finish stories still elude me.


Aside from that I'm always over-thinking things, have a science background but love my fiction books... and I guess I'm a twi-guy being here as much as I am lately :S (I own the series and The Host as well). Also a fan of David Eddings and Clive Cussler.


Just starting an Education degree that'll eventually send me out to Middle and Secondary schools to teach math and science (mostly biology, probably).


Oh and my friends just gave me an Edward doll from the Barbie range (he sparkles! lol they didn't realise it at the time either) My Twi-diction is kind of a running joke for them, but their nice enough about it :)


 


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Illusory by Jules Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 177]
Summary:

Bella's a workaholic editor with no time for herself.  Edward can't get over an incident from his time as a soldier.

When Bella is in an accident and slips into a coma, Edward rents her old apartment, only to find that her still living spirit is haunting him!

With both Edward and Bella hiding dark secrets from their pasts, can they ever figure out why Edward is the only one who sees her?

A comical and angsty EXB Crossover of "Just Like Heaven"

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Categories: AU-Human, Crossover Characters: Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 33222
[Report This] Published: May 12, 2009 Updated: September 19, 2009


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Allegory

Finally got around to reading the first few chapters here (I'm way too addicted to the fanfic around the place and have a to-do list a mile long :S)

I'm a sucker for rom-com's and "Just Like Heaven" is one of the sweeter ones out there and that I have here on my shelf at home :)

Alice in Jon Heder's role was great fun so far - there's so much potential for amusing conversations given that she seems to have heard Bella, if not actually seen her!

Jasper came across as a little too light on his feet or something in this chapter - but that was probably the impact of Alice being right next to him doing 'her thing' lol

I don't see Edward's reactions as taking things too readily - I was actually thinking that he's still just processing it all - I mean, how many times do you get told that the spirit you're seeing is somehow somewhere still alive? :)

Looking forward to more chapters... oh err... Jess as comic relief I guess is ok... although my real interest is in the regular couples.

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Caesura

Lovely chapter - Edward going through the supermarket apparently talking to himself while he shops was amusing. Maybe he should take one of those bluetooth earpiece things for phones with him? Although then he'll still have those moments where he would still appear to be looking AT someone to talk to them lol

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 15, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Cacophony

hmm this chapter felt like it was ending on a subtle cliffie to be honest...

Loved that Mike totally bought the "you're the guy" thing... though it felt odd that he then went on to say Edward was a nice guy and he was happy that Bella got that little bit of sunshine... I guess I'm too used to Mike being a douche :P

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Verisimilitude

Well firstly, I'm guessing the mechanic is Jacob :)

As for the touching briefly - I think they're both connected on a brain-wave level at the very least for him to be able to see her - and at that point in time he needed to touch her badly enough that all the right nerves sent the right signals between both of them :)

Tanya's a nurse at Edward's new job? That should be interesting... and Perhaps Bella's actually laying in one of the rooms there? That would be "provident" ;)



Author's Response:

Wow, very technical thinking!  I had to reread that a few times, jk!

I love your theory about the name "Provident Hospital"...to tell you the truth, as embarassing as it is, naming the hospital that was completely accidental.  I should lie and say I did it like that on purpose, but I'm not that witty!  Very good guesses!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Doppelganger

Woot! So glad about Bella being in the hospital! Sad to see Jacob leave the story like that. though I do support B&E pairings as long as E's not being a total deuche :)

 



Author's Response:

Ya, the way Jake died makes even me, the ultimate Jake hater, feel sad =(

Thanks for the comment!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 08, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Ticking Clock

so... the park or the hospital, I wonder? hmmm



Author's Response:

oo good!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: August 09, 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Juxtasposition

wow - it was a bit sudden - but I'm actually kind of relieved that you didn't drag out the lack of memories.

looking forward to Bella's PoV; and then how all the friends and family react hehe

 



Author's Response:

Yes, it was pretty sudden, but I hate dragging out the boring parts... And she doesn't consciously remember him, but her heart does.

I'll update soon! Thanks for reading!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: August 14, 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Aporia

haha yeah I don't envy Edward there trying to tell the story of how they met and fell in love... although Bella's already acknowledging the love she feels for Edward and FROM Edward. No one else will have a memory of them meeting before the accident so pretty much any story will sound crazy even if it was just that Edward had been sitting talking to her whilst she lay there :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: September 19, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Paradox

ahh Edward's so sweet :)

More than a little concerned about the upcoming "storm" that Edward's sensing :S

 



Author's Response:

hm, you'll see the 'storm' next chapter

 
Summary:

8 years.

8 years could mean a world's difference; a millenium's worth of time, names and faces; a generation apart.

Or 8 years could mean absolutely nothing at all.

AH, BxE (Romance comes when Bella is a little older.)

 

 Credits to readergoof for the awesome banner!


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Completed: No Word count: 30592
[Report This] Published: May 14, 2009 Updated: October 05, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: October 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: 16

ohh boy... is it wrong to be apprehensive about what Edward's planning for Bella's birthday? Just feels like whatever he tries to plan has a high risk of going horribly wrong... though that may be my current level of pessimism getting in the way. We'll see :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: 11

awww as much as it's still technically too early for B&E to be crossing this line, it's still sweet to read :)

I went to school with girls who weren't interested in any of the males in their year level because they had older boyfriends already - you couldn't compete with the whole money+car thing at 15 or 16.

I'd like to hope that they're able to keep things under the radar for a few years, but it's doubtful :P even with probable support from Jasper and anyone else.

Looking forward to the bubble of happy times for now, though!!

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: 12

ahh poor Jasper; not sure if Rose "knowing" about B&E is going to be a good or a bad thing in the long run... hmm

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: May 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: 13

hehe Bella & Edward are slowly but surely stumbling through their feelings for each other :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: 14

ahh young love... just wanting to be sure of a kiss ;)

Nice to see Bella being more assertive. Wonder how the "date" will go?

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 24, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: 15

hmm Tanya actually seemed pretty nice about everything, is she accepting Bella's younger age though? Or trusting that she knows Edward won't cross the line too far?

I can't see how B&E are going to last two years though... they're almost climbing the walls as it is hehe

 
Broken by Wendyann Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1078]
Summary:

How does someone survive a trauma that changes everything? How does she find the will to live? Edward was too late to save Bella in Port Angeles. Can she save herself?

*Note: This story deals with the aftermath of rape. If you are sensitive to this topic, please do not read.*

Thank you so much to Loushane for the amazing banner!


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: No Word count: 104063
[Report This] Published: May 15, 2009 Updated: June 28, 2010


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: January 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Messages in Flowers

ah such a relief to see Bella figuring out the flowers finally, and even more than that she's got a response for Edward :)

It was also good to see Edward's realisation that the music therapy was just as cathartic for him as it was for Bella... after Jasper cleared some things up for him though :)

Looking forward to more when you get the chance :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: December 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Hopes for Bella

ohhhh!!!

Well the letters from each of the Cullen's were wonderful, but finishing right there for Bella and Edward?!

Can't wait to see if Bella panics or not! :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: December 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Traditions

hehe loved Emmett :)

It's nice to see Bella managing to gain some hope after what would've been a confusing moment for the empty box.

Now, of course, we're all wondering about the letters and what Edward's might be saying... and Bella's reaction to the phoenix, among other things :)

Looking forward to Christmas Day and more :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: December 28, 2009 Title: Chapter 23: Musical Therapy

whew that was quite intense for all parties I think.

I do wonder on the next conversation between Bella and Edward though, since they both had such heavy reaction to that session.

Looking forward to more :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: January 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 25: New Year

so many special moments through that chapter - it really is going to be a whole new start for Bella (hopefully)

I had to chuckle at Edward's reaction to the flower... I can just imagine him double-taking to the flower, Bella's room... then getting there and being torn between wanting to wake her and wanting to let her rest (especially since he'd notice that she seems more peaceful than ever before at that stage)

 

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: April 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Final Freedom

All I can say is good luck for the time being, it's got to be coming around :)

We'll be here when you're ready :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Final Freedom

wow err really didn't expect Bella to choose that strategy, I was thinking she'd go for a little more talking first.

I really hope Edward doesn't hold anything against Esme - I think she'll be doing that enough. Though I kind of like the idea of her telling Bella off at some point later for putting her in that position.

On the other side of things, Esme's really going to be Bella's "mother" through the venom at least ;)

It's certainly a slightly different strategy in trying to forget, I wonder what the Pack's response is going to be. Was Sam close enough to the house to "know" what happened?

I wonder too, if Bella had somehow kept her plan from Alice? Or did Alice know and decide it was the best of the available options at the time? That last doesn't seem "right" really... perhaps Sam being so close all the time kept that part of Bella's decisions obscure or unknown.

I'll keep an eye out for Damaged whenever you get around to it, sounds like there's much more important and happier things to be getting done in real life right now :) congrats, by the way!



Author's Response:

Very nice catch! Yes, Sam was close enough to see what happened and know it wasn't the Cullen's fault. And yes, I did have him creeping steadily closer to help obscure Alice's vision.

Hopefully Damaged will get started soon! I want to wait to start posting until I have at least a few chapters done already so if I need to take a break with the baby I can keep posting.

 
Serendipity by FanpireMama Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1215]
Summary:

Bella's life is turned upside down when her best friend's family moves away and her parents are killed in a car accident. What happens when Bella's life is again intertwined with the Cullen's?

 

Thanks to LoisBlue for the AMAZING banner!

Nominated for an Indie TwiFic Award in the category of: Most Romantic Moment !!!!

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Phil, Rosalie, Tanya
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Completed: Yes Word count: 85507
[Report This] Published: May 20, 2009 Updated: August 15, 2009


Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: June 30, 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Heart & Soul

aww so they've finally got to the point of revealing enough of their feelings for each other that they know they're reciprocated... it's just how soon they both allow themselves to feel worthy of the other.

Oh, and the somewhat "minor" matter of people like Jacob and Tanya, and time and space :S

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 05, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Jacob

whoa that was an intense chapter in the end! I'm not too fussed with Jacob being the bad guy for now, to be honest, but I do hope for an update soon because that blow had to leave a mark, and perhaps even a break given the strength the silly git would have put into it.

So instead of Bella flying to Alice etc, they'll be coming to her? Or at least Edward will show up?

I'm just relieved you had the police arrive before anything more could occur :)

 
Reviewer: Daylen Signed
Date: July 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Ecstacy

Loved the "in depth" conversation with Alice over the phone - although I am surprised that she didn't toss a yell at Edward during it :)

Edward's got to be exhausted enough to sleep through the night, surely? Or will having Bella next to him lead to a - er - more fragmented rest? hehe

 




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